The Clans of Earth (Battletech/Mechwarrior X Mass Effect)

[HeliosStyx]

Yeah, have Nihlus survived would be nice. A coma, and only woke up after Saren gaslighting the main Council members with his own testimony would be a blow to Saren career.

That, or he pull a Turian SERE and use his own list of contacts to send his evidence to counter Saren BS when he send the evidence to both Salarian and Turian Councilor, and notify of them he's shadowing Saren trail, thus can't be there and can't continuously online to break cover. And maybe have a meeting point with Shepard and a Turian fleet sent to support Saren hunt.

 

[DevilfishR606]

To be clear:

I can speak for no one other than myself, but... I don't dislike this story. At all. I like it. That's *why* I criticise it. I want to see your writing grow, so offering advice/criticism is something I do to make a good idea into an even better story. If I disliked it, or thought it sucked, I'd drop it and move on. Same goes for your other work that I've read. I am still eager to see Arano's Raven continue.