Beware uncharted lands, for there be spoilers afoot!
This may seem like it's overdue, but based on a comment I recently received elsewhere, apparently the fact that there will be spoilers to both the Neon Genesis Evangelion anime and the events of various games in the Persona Series (including but not limited to Persona 3, Persona 3 Portable, Persona 4, and Persona 5) wasn't made clear just by how the plot has unveiled.

So I'm placing a sticky post for this message: if you have not watched the original Evangelion anime, or if you have not played the Persona games — especially P3, P4, P5, and their updated re-releases — then take note that this story contains spoilers to all of them. Read at your own risk.

/that should do it
//right?
///right??
 
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8/22 - Morning

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Ren Amamiya was quietly nudged awake. "...five more minutes..." he muttered, gripping the bed covers tightly.

"Yeah, no."

Ren irritably opened his eyes, glaring at Ryuji. "Seriously old-timer, you couldn't let me sleep a bit more? I'm a growing boy."

Sakamoto rolled his eyes. "You were more withdrawn than usual after we finally got back to the van yesterday."

"What, am I not allowed to be in shock after what happened to the capital, much less the government?"

(Yesterday, when he had heard the news about Governor Shido becoming the new President of the Prefectural Confederation — at least, on a provisional basis until the election on the new constitution was held — he had felt a horrifying sense of deja vu.)​

Ryuji snorted. "Don't insult me kid. Just the way you talked to Kurosawa-san during his interrogation shows that you have issues with authority in general...but that's not accounting for the fact that Katsuragi was contacted by Sae Niijima yesterday. You know, because it didn't take long for word to spread that it was the Evangelion-users who stopped Strega pulling an Atlanta and simultaneously putting an end to that damn fog. And if the Evangelion-users are around, high chances are that the kids she's a custodian for are around. And she had a very interesting story about a guy in black who saved her in the Metaverse...along with a talking blue bear, but I don't much care about that right now." With a severe stink eye (that fit Ryuji so, so well), he added, "oh, and she said that he used a handgun, and a dagger, and wore a black-and-white domino mask..."

"Could've be anyone," he tiredly murmured.

"Yeah. I'm sure." Lightly thumping Ren over the head with the tip of his cane, he said, "Look, I'm not here to give you the third degree or anything...and it's not like I'd out you to the others. Not without them asking me questions about why I'm hiding it, because I don't know why the eff I am." With grumpy emphasis, he added, "Besides, you rescued Niijima-san from the sounds of it, and that's nothing to get on your case about...but if you were in the city when the fog lifted, you must have seen some nasty shit."

"...I can neither confirm nor deny."

"Fine, keep playing the hardass. But you're allowed to be bothered, you know? Kids your age...shouldn't have to deal with any of this. But that's a luxury we can't afford, it seems." Hobbling away, he added, "Just keep that in mind, got it? You don't have to be Mr. Mystery Man about everything." With his piece said, Ryuji closed the door to the hotel room behind him.

"...if only you knew," Ren whispered, lying back down with a tired sigh. "If only..."

He wanted to reach back for the memories of nicer times, where the struggles and trials of a life long past — for however harrowing they had been in his 'youth', relatively speaking — seemed so much lighter and less consequential...

(You don't have that luxury, though...)

Eventually, he got up to face the day.

xxxx

Mayumi Yamagishi blinked. "...where am I...?"

"You're in a hotel in Fujimi." Mayumi slowly rose from the bed she was in, staring towards the voice's source; Misato Katsuragi was sitting on the couch, quietly combing her hair with distracted motions. "You've been out of it since yesterday."

"...oh." Trace memories began to return, of battle amidst the fog, and frenzied thoughts to help Ikari-san and Ayanami-san contain the MAGI...the MAGI! "Did...did we save Tokyo-2...?" Had it all been a vain...?

Misato's lips flattened into a grim expression; the sight made Mayumi's heart quiver. "You kids did stop Strega's plan from unfolding the way they wanted...you contained the explosion and dispelled that crazy fog." Before she could express surprise (and just a bit of joy), the woman immediately punctured her elation, a proverbial needle popping a balloon. "But the city...well, it was kind of a lost cause well before we arrived."

"...oh." Mayumi wasn't sure what to feel...or how to feel. "But...did we do good? Did we at least save anyone...?"

"The people who were still alive by the time the fog went away can certainly be counted. But...don't beat yourself up. It was a messed up situation."

"...and Kurosawa-san...?" Misato's face said it all. "...he didn't make it, did he...?"

"We'll talk about it more when we debrief. But after you kids get some breakfast." Misato glanced away slightly, looking at someone else. "...that includes you, Mana-chan."

Mayumi turned to her right; Mana was sitting quietly on the bed, looking defeated in a way that she could not recall if her life depended on it. "Mana-san...what happened...?"

"We're hoping you can tell us," asked Misato, looking rather solemn yet...almost motherly, in the sense of someone who wanted to but didn't quite know how. (At least, that's the impression she got...) "We'll get some breakfast and then we can talk about what happened after that punk Minazuki split us up. Sound good?"

"...fine," murmured Mana, almost mulishly. It was a regression of attitude to how standoffish she had been at the beginning of the summer vacation...except it originated from a different place, now. Not from suspicion...but from pain?

Mana-san...what happened...?

Suddenly, a silhouette of static faded into existence near the door to the room; it quickly solidified into a very familiar blunette. "Ah. You are awake," Rei Ayanami quietly said, sipping from a steaming cup that smelled of coffee.

Misato shot Rei a curious gaze. "You left last night before everyone turned in. What gives?"

"I have been completing Ghost subjugation and dispersal missions. There was a severe spike in the wake of yesterday's...events."

"...and you've been at it all night?!"

"I am used to working extended hours...besides, I made a brief stop in Nishiawakura to obtain a drink from Sojiro Sakura." Separating her words with a punctual sip, she casually added, "his mochas are exceptionally invigorating," as though it were a light observation of the weather.

The surrealty was apparently too much for the woman. "...yeah. Sure." Sighing, Misato finally rose up, looking at Mana and Mayumi with a commanding look. "You two should get dressed. After breakfast...we'll talk about yesterday."

Yesterday, thought Mayumi as she slowly extracted herself from the bed. What all happened yesterday...? She would soon find out, regardless.
 
Wagers on how Shido's reign will go.

Sae: He will only last a year.
Akechi: He will only last until the end of the year.
Ren: He will only last a month.

The total wagers: 30000 yen.
 
8/22 - Morning to Late Morning
Breakfast was a relatively sedated affair.

(The hotel's owner marvelled at the elaborate axe and shield that Mana was hauling on her back. "Oh my, they look so realistic! Are you into cosplay?" Everyone looked rather flummoxed by Yukiko Amagi's innocently incorrect take. The hotel staff, realizing that Mana's weapons were all-too-real, managed to distract the owner with the arrival of new guests.)​

Well, for the most part.


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Once they finished, they walked out back; the Amagi Resort Hotel had an indoor pool and an outdoor onsen, as well as an elaborate walking trail through the forest behind the hotel. Situated as it was on the western slopes of the Akaishi Mountains, the trees were largely comprised of larches, cedars, and red pines, with an occasional cypress; however, amidst an open space was a small orchard of Fuji apple trees, bearing signs that they belonged to the hotel. The walking trail looped in and around the orchard, bearing decorative statues of Japanese mythological figures and young kimono-clad women wielding paper fans. It was pleasant to the senses...which was oddly fitting, given the subject matter being discussed.

Finally, they found a spot where two benches carved from cedar sat relatively close together; Shinji, Toji, and Kensuke sat on one, whilst Rei, Mana, and Mayumi sat on the other. Ryuji and Misato were facing them, standing, whilst Ren was casually leaning against a cobblestone retaining wall, its gray surface tinged with moss and age. "So...where do we start?" asked Aida.

"How about we start with when we split up?" offered Ryuji. "Amamiya; you were sent back outside of the fog before we went in." (Technically true, inwardly mused Ren.) "Anything you want to comment on?"

"Not really," he said. "Once the fog vanished, lots of people began streaming towards Tokyo-2 like lives depended on it. It was like a switch being thrown."

"Makes sense..." Misato took this opportunity to ask questions. "Shinji-kun; you and Yamagishi-chan accompanied Kurosawa-san. Ayanami-san gave us some details...but could you corroborate what happened before she arrived?"

Shinji and Mayumi nodded, and proceed to explain about their march towards Camp Matsumoto; the sight of all the military fatalities; and the assistance of a strange little fox when it came to entering the MAGI chamber.

(When Mayumi and Shinji mentioned the apron-clad fox, everyone missed how Ayanami went still from recognition.)

Upon entering the chamber; they had encountered Sahaquiel, an Angel that had manifested as a great eye.

("An eye, you say?" remarked Sakamoto with a frown. "And it mentioned a thrall?")

(Mayumi nodded. "Yes." Furrowing her lips with concentration, she cited its words from memory: "His designs aim to increase the devastation amongst you Lilim...once this matter is settled, I shall return to him, to witness his malice once more...that's what the Angel said.")

(No one missed the growing scowl on the older man's face. "Is that so? Well, that changes things...I'll explain when we get to my part.")

They had then been interrupted by Takaya Sakaki and Jin Shirato of Strega...only to be interrupted again by the Reaper.

("It focused on us instead of the Angel and Strega," murmured Shinji.)

("...feh. What bad luck," growled Misato.)

Describing the battle had been...interesting, recalling how Mayumi's thoughts had helped them stay ahead of the Reaper's attacks, with Shinji's Persona tanking most of the blows while Kurosawa took his shots. It had been going relatively well...until it hadn't.

("The Reaper drained Ikari-san of energy," explained Mayumi. "Were it not for Ayanami-san's arrival...it would have ended poorly.")

Of course, Kurosawa's sacrifice had been mentioned...because how could it not?

"So after all the crap he gave us, he pulled a hero move, huh?" Ren looked somewhat...conflicted. "...good for him, I guess."

"He was only trying to perform his duty," said Rei, solemnly glancing at Amamiya. "That his duty led him into conflict with us was...an accident of fate."

"...if he hadn't prevented the Reaper from following us, we might not have been able to muster the focus needed to contain the MAGI's explosion," observed Mayumi, lightly dabbing at her eye with a tissue; some parts of her eyes still bore that unnervingly red color from burst blood vessels. "Did...did they find his body?"

"Yeah," said Sakamoto with a nod. "He'll be posthumously honored by what's left of the Paranormal and Supernatural Countermeasure Office...though with all the bodies, I don't know if the Governor of Nagano's gonna offer him an official funeral or simply stick him into a mass grave with all of the other bodies that go unclaimed." Sighing loudly, the man remarked, "It sucks."

It does, bitterly thought Shinji, thinking back to who Hirofumi Kurosawa had been and what he had stood for. If nothing else, Shinji couldn't categorically claim that the man had ever hated them for the powers they possessed. (Was that enough?) "...I'm tired of funerals," he admitted.

"You and everyone else," grumbled Toji.

"The events after Kurosawa's sacrifice are largely as I described yesterday," interrupted Rei, hands folded into her lap. "With Yamagishi-san's guidance, Ikari-san and I used our Personas and our Evangelions to redirect the explosion of the Tokyo-2 MAGI. They collapsed unconscious afterwards."

"And that's when you established contact with us over the phone," finished Misato. "Guess that means it's my turn: as far as I'm concerned, I got jumped by Sho Minazuki and ended up fighting him until the fog disappeared."

"That asshole appeared?!" griped Toji.

"If he's with Strega, it only stands to reason," murmured Kensuke.

"But what I don't know is what happened with you," said Misato, turning her attention towards Kirishima. "...Mana-chan. I didn't find you again until the fog disappeared...and when I did, you were crying your eyes out. And you looked like the shit had been kicked out of you."

Shinji couldn't help but acknowledge Misato's point; the brusque girl still bore bruises from yesterday, even in spite of the enhanced healing that AIGIS and LABRYS afforded her. What happened...?

Leaning down, hands on her knees, the woman adopted a softer tone. "...you can tell us, you know? It's...it's okay to not to be strong all the time-"

"You're wrong," bitterly snapped Mana, showing a level of vitriol that Shinji hadn't seen since the first time he had ever fought her. "If I had been stronger, they wouldn't be where they are now...it's my fault..."

"What do you mean by that?" asked Sakamoto.

Mana briefly brushed fingers over the broad sides of her axe and shield, lips curled into a complicated grimace. Finally, after long moments of interminable silence, she said, "...I saw my brothers. Musashi-niisan and Keita-niisan. They had Personas...and they were each bonded with an Angel." Ignorant (or perhaps uncaring) of the growing looks of alarm on everyone's faces, she soberly added, "they're with Strega, now..."
 
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Right now, the only advantage of there being no Government is that Musashi and Keita can't be unilaterally declared enemies of humanity.
 
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8/22 - Late Morning to Midday

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Shinji's eyes widened at the revelation, but he was far from the one most shocked; Mayumi impulsively covered her mouth with her hands, while Misato went still, as if stricken by a spear. "What...?" the woman muttered, stepping closer towards Mana. "Your brothers...?!"

"Yeah."

"They attacked you?!"

"...only after I struck first," she growled, clenching at her own hair. "I saw that they were infested with the Angels, and I just got so angry..."

"...why would that be enough to make you angry?" wondered Sakamoto, glancing over at Mayumi with a measured eye.

"Whaddya mean, sensei?" asked Toji with confusion.

"Well, you've all been through a pretty big deal with Yamagishi-san here," he observed, gesturing in the bespectacled girl's direction with his cane. "What with the whole 'being infected by an Angel' and all with Armisael."

"...what are you getting at?" asked Misato with a frown, which was mirrored by Mana.

Shrugging, the man observed, "Despite everything that happened, you went through hell and back to save her...and I don't recall you ever expressing anger at her. And from my understanding...your brothers were your only family for years. I don't think you'd be the first to strike...not unless they did something, or said something, to get under your skin."

"...I don't know what you're talking about," growled Mana.

"Maybe you don't. But I know what the look of someone who's been betrayed looks like." Sakamoto's expression was sympathetic, compassionate. "What did they tell you before you attacked?"

Mana surged to her feet — eliciting a stern look from Rei and a frightened "eep!" from Mayumi — and snarled, "What does it matter?! They're my brothers, and I still have to save them, and I won't let anyone-!"

"Mana-chan." Misato's voice snuffed out her impulsive anger as fingers would the flame of a candle. "...what did they tell you?"

Mana looked at Misato as someone unsure of their standing in the world, having lost their purpose and trying desperately to keep hold of it. Finally, however, the young girl relented. "...Takaya Sakaki was the one who found them, after they escaped from Tokita's facility...and now they want revenge against all of humanity."

"...do you think they willingly joined Strega, then?" asked Ren.

Mana didn't answer immediately; she glanced briefly at LABRYS and AIGIS before gazing dejectedly at her knees. "...how would I know? I thought I was protecting them from the worst of what Tokita did...but it wasn't enough...I wasn't good enough..."

It was in the face of such dejection that Mayumi impulsively embraced Mayumi from behind, while even Ayanami(?!) placed an empathetic hand on her shoulder. (Why did Ayanami look so stoic, even when performing such a gesture...?) In the face of this, Shinji could only wonder at the self-recrimination Mana was feeling at the moment.

The Beast laughed in his face.

"And who would be more of an expert at self-criticism than
you? You never cease to find a chance to tear yourself down..."

It leaned down, staring at him eye-to-eye.

"...when you'd prefer to destroy yourself than unleash your wrath, is it any surprise...?"

Ryuji, for his part, didn't look pleased in the least by this turn of events; Ren shot the older man a strange look before remarking, "Somehow...I get the feeling you're not just talking about Jin Shirato."

"...guess that serves as a segue to what me and the two half-pints got up to," Sakamoto admitted, turning towards Kensuke and Toji as he began explaining what they had gone through. "We made our way to the headquarters of the A.T. Task Force, and we slowly fought our way up the floors."

Kensuke, seemingly eager to turn the conversation away from the awkward emotions that Mana had been proverbially leaking, commented, "Yeah, it was pretty grueling!"

"We eventually made it to the Commissioner's office...and when we got there, the man himself had an old TV set busted over his head." Kicking at the ground with his good leg, Sakamoto added, "That's when we found Morooka's secretary hiding in a supply closet. And...he showed us a video tape."

"...a video tape?" Shinji said with a blink.

"A video tape that the perp made Mishima record. A perp who's known by the title of the Smiling Traitor...because he was a former A.T. Agent. Went by the name of Tohru Adachi. And apparently...thanks to a 'patron' with what looked a gigantic eye, he caused the fog to appear in the first place."

"Gigantic eye?" repeated Mayumi, looking away from Mana. "You mean...do you mean Sahaquiel?"

"It sure looked like the same Angel that you described from the MAGI Chamber underneath Camp Matsumoto."

At that moment, Shinji gained a spot of clarity, understanding why Sakamoto had been so upset earlier. "...that's why you were so interested in what the Angel said," murmured Shinji. "It was a connection to this 'Adachi'..."

"Yeah, as though we didn't have enough problems on our plate; now we have to add a serial murderer with Angelic powers on top of all the other nutjobs with Angelic powers," griped Sakamoto. "I honestly don't know if it's a good thing or a bad thing that Adachi's apparently gone AWOL from the rest of Strega, because he came off as a bit of a loose cannon."

(Meanwhile, over three hundred kilometers away, Adachi suddenly sneezed. "Aw, crap...people must be talkin' about me...guess I'd better make sure they have plenty to talk about..." Hands stuffed into his pockets, he continued on his way...)

The teenagers all looked among each other, wondering what to make of the idea that a former A.T. Agent — a serial murderer with a tie to the Angels, at that! — had been responsible for the deadly fog that had turned Japanese society upside down overnight. Amidst this quiet, Ren calmly asked "...so what now?"

"What 'now' indeed," muttered Sakamoto.

Misato, looking one last time at Mana's form (occasionally shuddering from an anguished cry that wanted to escape, yet nonetheless muffled by the girl's sheer stubbornness), interjected with, "What I can say is that too much has happened for us to be on the road any longer. We have no idea how the political situation is going to shake down...so right now, I think it's imperative we get you all back to Tokyo-3."

It was a strangely paradoxical idea to consider, especially in light everything that had happened over the past three weeks; yesterday's harrowing events had served as a foreboding yet simultaneously anticlimactic end to a road trip that had taken everyone to places and events they had never anticipated. "So...we're going back to Hakone?" asked Shinji.

Misato nodded sternly, with a sad yet half-hearted smile. "Sorry kid. Your summer vacation's over."
 
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This Japan confuses me.

Tohru Adachi would be an open-and-shut "yeah, this guy gets his neck stretched" case in modern Japan.

What led to them not doing that?
 
This Japan confuses me.

Tohru Adachi would be an open-and-shut "yeah, this guy gets his neck stretched" case in modern Japan.

What led to them not doing that?
Well, since he was likely a prolific A.T. Agent who betrayed his country by being a serial killer, and the japanese government didn't want any word of an A.T. Agent going rogue leaking out to the public, they likely decided it would be a good idea to quietly imprison him in a remote and secret location. Why did they not kill him right away is anyone's guess. Perhaps they thought him too valuable of an asset to kill. His persona is powerful, no?
 
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This Japan confuses me.

Tohru Adachi would be an open-and-shut "yeah, this guy gets his neck stretched" case in modern Japan.

What led to them not doing that?

Well, since he was likely a prolific A.T. Agent who betrayed his country by being a serial killer, and the japanese government didn't want any word of an A.T. Agent going rogue leaking out to the public they likely decided it would be a good idea to quietly imprison him in a remote and secret location. Why did they not kill him right away is anyone's guess. Perhaps they thought him too valuable of an asset to kill. His persona is powerful, no?

Without going into too much detail at the moment, don't forget he's bound to Sahaquiel. That provides certain...boons, so to speak.

/plus, there's the matter of said sentences taking time
//consider the RL example of Shoko Asahara
///sentenced to death in 2004
////appeals continue until 2011
/////and he still isn't executed until 2018
//////or Koichi Shoji (sentenced in 2007, executed in 2019), or Yasutoshi Kamata (who was on death row for 17 years before being executed in 2016)
 
plus, there's the matter of said sentences taking time
Japan is incredibly socially conservative.

A basically post-apocalyptic Japan being slow to execute serial killers seems weird.

(All of this may be coloured by a profound emotional fatigue with the whole narrative. Like, I was completely numb to Mana's torment in Tokyo-2. I just want to skip to the ending at this point, because there's a point where torturing the shaggy dog feels gratuitous and I think you may be well past it.)
 
I do kinda agree? The misery and trauma button mashing is starting to feel alittle gratuitous… And Asuka hasn't even arrived yet for god's sake
 
Japan is incredibly socially conservative.

A basically post-apocalyptic Japan being slow to execute serial killers seems weird.

(All of this may be coloured by a profound emotional fatigue with the whole narrative. Like, I was completely numb to Mana's torment in Tokyo-2. I just want to skip to the ending at this point, because there's a point where torturing the shaggy dog feels gratuitous and I think you may be well past it.)
I do kinda agree? The misery and trauma button mashing is starting to feel alittle gratuitous… And Asuka hasn't even arrived yet for god's sake

(Low-key I did not expect the summer vacation to be taking as long as it has; going by FFNet's word count, there have been 343,117 words written since the road trip began on July 31, 2015, out of 806,109 total...and that's not counting the Story Thus Far and Yu's Sidestory bits. That's well over 40% of the fic length thus far.)

It probably didn't help that the return of Mana's brothers in the narrative came so shortly after we'd just had Junpei and Ken's funerals, but what's written has been written, alas.

Once Hakone Academy starts back up, everything should be getting back on a tighter pace.
 
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8/22 - Midday to Afternoon
Shinji reacted to Misato's proclamation with a strange detachment; just like that, a trip that had taken them all over Japan was going to end. It had accounted for little over three weeks of his life, and yet so much had happened. "...it feels like it just started...and yet not."

Misato snorted. "Yeah, this has been a busy month for you, hasn't it?"

"Not exactly what I bargained for, that's for sure," remarked Ryuji, who somehow sported a grin on his face. Whether it was bitter or honest, Shinji couldn't tell. "But that's life, I guess..."

"Are we heading back immediately?" asked Kensuke.

"We'd like you kids to start heading back soon...but Sakamoto-san and I have to make a brief stop back in Nishiawakura."

Misato's comment elicited surprised blinks from all of them, even Mana. "Why?" asked Toji.

"My bike/My car," answered both adults simultaneously. Sakamoto elaborated on behalf of both of them. "Well, we're just gonna quickly step back through the Metaverse to Okayama Prefecture. Not like we can just leave our stuff sitting on Sakura-san's property."

"I guess that makes sense," said Shinji. "Are you going to leave now?"

"We might as well. Given the governmental reorganization that's going to be happening now with this whole 'Council of 47' thing that the governors cooked up, it might result in changes to how the Anti-Terror Task Force and Cognitive Freelancers are utilized," explained Misato, looking one last time towards Mana. "...will you all look out for each other?"

"We will," promised Kensuke, readily speaking on behalf of Team Statherós.

Misato turned towards Rei. "I know you've been out all night...but will you stick with them for a while? I don't trust Strega or Adachi to not make another move."

"I will," remarked Rei, who didn't let her tiredness show.

Ryuji, meanwhile, looked at Ren. "Amamiya-san, would you get them back to Tokyo-3 as soon as you can? You've definitely shown yourself to be pretty reliable."

(Ren, unbeknownst to everyone else, stifled his laugh at Ryuji's loaded meaning.) Amamiya calmly replied, "I can do that."

The two adults nodded, advising them all to be safe and to contact them if an emergency arose. "We should be arriving back in Tokyo-3 by tomorrow...I imagine there'll be a big debrief at NERV, but we'll cross that bridge when we get there." With those words said, both thumbed their distinctive badges and began the process of phasing into the Metaverse.

Once the two were gone, Ren sighed. "Well...I guess we should go ahead and get our things."

The older teenager took the lead, and the younger six quietly followed, all wondering to some degree or another as to what awaited them in the near future...

xxxx


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Time passed; within the orderly chaos of the Metaverse, Seiten Taisei quietly soared through the sky. Upon his cloudy vessel, Misato sat at the forefront, arms crossed. Ryuji stood, hanging onto the big monkey's leg.

The hour or so that the Monkey King had spent sailing through the sky, the two adults had spent that time trying to mutually destress from the utter chaos of the past week: shooting the breeze, and stuff like that.

That, more than anything else, had been the motive for them to get away from the kids for even so short a time: to talk in a more unvarnished way than they were otherwise comfortable with.

xx

"...where do you think Adachi got an old CRT television from?" asked Misato.

"Metaverse trickery? How should I know?"

xx

"Do you think Mana's brothers are going to end up on anyone else's radars?" wondered Ryuji.

Misato thought long and hard about that one. "...if those two end up fighting other people and leave any survivors, they'll become wanted men like Takaya or Shirato or Minazuki. But until then...I'll do what I can to help Mana-chan."

Ryuji hummed noncommittally.

xx

"-but seriously, there was a Shiba Inu with wings who helped with the defense of the CPC?"

"Yeah. Was albino, wore an orange sweater-vest; it was kind of crazy." Ryuji looked curiously at Misato. "Why?"

"...because I met a winged Shiba Inu once, when I was busted out of Shiro Tokita's facility. It accompanied Mister P's Persona."

Ryuji blinked. "That a fact? Well...it's like he keeps popping up, helping out here and there..."

"...I really hope so." Misato sighed irritably, clutching at the 'solid' cloud underneath her. "With everything that's been going on, my investigation into him keeps being pushed back..."

xx

As they neared Nishiawakura, Misato finally asked a question she had been wondering for some time. "Sakamoto-san...do you regret signing up for this mission?"

Ryuji snorted. "Don't pull that shit, Katsuragi."

"I'm serious," she stressed, looking over her shoulder at the Freelancer. "Even if you took on Suzuhara as an apprentice, you didn't have to agree to be a chaperone for this road trip of theirs-"

"The 'what if' game doesn't help anyone," he insisted, tapping his gun-cane with emphasis. "I'd be lying if I said I didn't regret it just a little, because they weren't just my old teammates...they were my friends. But if we hadn't come along, what would have happened on the ferry? The kids might have been in Tokyo-2 when that whole mess went down...or maybe when Minako showed up, it might have been you or one of the other kids who died. 'If if if.' Too many things would have been different to know for sure...so why bother?" Tapping at his heart with his fist, he added, "they got their funeral; they got their badass sendoff...and I've got a ton of good memories. Can't ask for anything else."

Misato frowned, unsatisfied by that answer. (Only because you have too many regrets of your own.) "...I envy you, Sakamoto-san."

"Eh, ain't much of me to envy. I mean, you can beat me in a sprint, for one."

Misato snorted at the bit of dark humor. "That's not what I mean..." Alas, the conversation trailed off there, as Nishiawakura's cognitive double came into sight; setting down on a familiar hill (where the cognition of a statue in the shape of a Porsche 356 sat), they both shifted back into the real world; the sight of the DeLorean sitting alongside the Alpine Renault and Yamaha Royal Star initiated another wave of melancholy. "It's a shame; that's a sweet ride," remarked Misato.

"I still can't believe their wives were okay with it being left to me," Ryuji murmured with a grimace. "Still haven't figured out what to do with it..." His voice trailed off with uncertainty.

"Sakamoto-san?"

Ryuji suddenly looked back toward the ryokan, frowning. "...hey. Katsuragi. Any idea why there would be yellow fog around Sakura-san's house?"

"Yellow fog?" Misato looked over her shoulder, gazing at the traditional dwelling; sure enough, the front doors were open, from which hazy vapor colored mustard and goldenrod could be seen. "...that's odd," she wondered aloud.

(Inwardly, their minds were screaming.)

(You MUST remember!)

"...we should check it out," said Ryuji with a frown, hobbling up the hill with purpose.

"...yeah," agreed Misato, even as she subconsciously prepared for battle. The two quietly proceeded, looking around with concern; the felines that called this place home were absent, hiding within the bushes and trees bordering the property. "I don't like this."

"Me neither." Ryuji and Misato both stood in front of the doorway, gazing at the thick cloud of fog. With one last shared glance, they stepped through-

(The immediate sensations of what had happened in Tokyo-2 immediately came roaring back.)

(More cognitive manipulation; you know that this could only mean-!)

-and were ready for a fight when they crossed the threshold, nonetheless expecting to witness another tragedy.

Instead, they saw Tohru Adachi, sitting in an easy chair...and eating curry.

Sojiro Sakura — with arms bound, legs tied, and mouth gagged by cloth — sat in an easy chair across from him. Despite his obvious discomfort, the old man looked unharmed.

"...the eff?!" exclaimed Ryuji.

"Ah, was wondering when someone would show up." Adachi looked at them with a smarmy grin. "Can you believe this guy? Not only a great cup of coffee, but he makes some pretty sweet curry, too!"

Misato, having manifested her A.T. Agent attire the moment she entered the fog, whipped out her pistol and fired.

Instead of an A.T. Field flashing to block the bullet — as the two halfway expected — Adachi's head briefly splattered into strands of saffron mist; as his face slowly reformed, his right eye flashed with multiple colors. "Yeah...turns out when you're bonded with an Angel, you're a bit more difficult than usual to kill...and I should know: the government certainly tried their damnedest before handing me back to the Task Force to lock away in their little prison."
 
So after a little bit of thought from yesterday's constructive criticisms (which I sincerely thank @grommile and @Lone Courier 6 for), I wanted to at least enunciate my thought process with the recent direction of the plot.

Spoilers for events up through 8/21/2015!

- The summer vacation was supposed to be a time of discovery for the main party (as currently constructed), as it's had a bunch of low points and high points for them.

- Shinji Ikari is admittedly a more melancholic and introverted character than the other Persona protagonists, which means he ruminates and pontificates on events, his own thoughts, and especially his own motivations more than others...which is especially noticeable during dark times.

- Given that the party members are 13/14 years of age, I don't think it's unreasonable for events involving death and destruction (especially when they're witnesses to the same) to have lingering effects on them for a time.

- It's definitely a side effect of how chunky the story is (though I try not to have any 'filler' of sorts, I swear), but let's not forget that the following events have occurred within the past eight days for the main characters:

8/14: The Battle against Armisael, where Mayumi gains her Persona and becomes free of the Angel.
8/15: The big debrief with Kurosawa, where Mayumi finds out she's now an orphan, everyone has to wrestle with Kurosawa's comments regarding their actions on the Ai Ferry, and Keita/Musashi begin the process of binding with Leliel/Iruel.
8/16: The 'test of strength' against Mister P, followed by the main party entering the Velvet Room and learning about the nature of the world. (Midway through this 'day', we had a near three-week interval while I wrote Yu's Sidestory, which was 50K+ words by itself).
8/17: Brief break with the Emporium, where Yusuke, Kanji, Chidori, and the managers Keisuke and Kyoka give pep talks (of a sort) to various characters.
8/18: Minako appears, whales on everyone, kills Ken and Junpei, then yeets herself away to chase Phanuel. The kids don't take it well, for the most part.
8/19: The wake for Ken and Junpei (insert numerous details about how wakes and funerals occur in Japan, because communicating it over text is more cumbersome than doing so visually). We have a brief interlude involving Asuka and Mari in Nevada.
8/20: Brief interlude involving Rei and Gendo and then Rei and Hikari, before we conclude Ken and Junpei's funerals.
8/21: The main party heads to Tokyo-2, expecting to get interviewed/interrogated by the government regarding recent events. Instead, it's the Fog of Desolation, with fights against Strega and the Reaper (and Kurosawa pulls a Last Stand moment to give Shinji, Rei, and Mayumi time to stop the MAGI's explosion from killing more people).

It hasn't been that long for them. But for us (the writer/readers), all of this has occurred over the course of November 16, 2021 through March 15, 2022...and because of my writing style (and my attempts at trying to portray the events of SPE as though it were a Persona game in its own right), that's been 207,388 words of prose/dialogue over eight days and one Sidestory worth of plot per FFNet. Without Yu's Sidestory, it's down to 155,197 words. For just eight days.

So I definitely understand and empathize with those who feel like we've been ruminating on particular subject(s) for way too long...because you've read the equivalent of two commercial young adult novels over the past four months. Or, counting Yu's Sidestory, two commercial fantasy/sci-fi novels.

But it hasn't been long for the characters at all.

The defense rests, your honors.

/an editor would probably trim so much of this fic, lul
//alas, this is not a commercial product
 
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I can see what you're doing, and I'm here til the end, but I will admit you have a tendency for continuously making the stakes higher and higher and higher until it gets ridiculous and alittle hard to care as things get worse and worse especially with so little time in between time to adjust, the last 8 days in a persona game could have easily been 2 or 3 months of dungeons, hell throwing Mayumi/Armisael and Tokyo two together like that *and* the bomb that everything is a cognitive world and nothing anyone has done beside shinji actually matters… De-Escalating and lightening up feels like it'd be a mistake, it feels like some bombs were dropped way too early because now I can't empathize with Misato's 'protect the children' thing at all, and tbh even that was starting to get gratuitous before hand, more so now.

Not to mention that I get it's an Eva cross, ergo Shinji's the protag, but god, I feel like even with your pretty good writing, he's a bad Wild Card compared to his Senpais, which i guess is sorta the point? Maybe? I dunno, pacing is tricky.

Ryuji and Akira's povs have probably been the best thing to have happened in the last 8 days imo because they're enjoyable to read and make the gut and nut punch barrage barey bearable as everyone bends over backwards to protect shinji who continues to wallow in "Oh woe is my terrible power" and "I could have done better " …Actually that may be why some things feel grating, Shinji doesn't really feel like the Protagonist despite being the Main POV character, he's too passive, everyone else is playing 3 dimensional chess around him and their plans and machinations are far more interesting than him.

I'd rather be following Akira, Pen-Pen or Asuka right now because they at least have some confidence in themselves, they're doing things with some spirit.

This last one is just a gripe but after the Destiny cross I'm really tired of hundreds of timelines Rei, all it has done is kinda make her a cryptic plot device that has a borderline homura tier love for Shinji because somehow he's the only one that deserves to choose the fate of humanity.(that may be some of the burnout talking though.)
 
This last one is just a gripe but after the Destiny cross I'm really tired of hundreds of timelines Rei, all it has done is kinda make her a cryptic plot device that has a borderline homura tier love for Shinji because somehow he's the only one that deserves to choose the fate of humanity.(that may be some of the burnout talking though.)
I agree with you on the Shinji choosing humanity's fate part. What the hell was she even thinking when she just put that much responsibility on a mentally broken young boy who just witnessed his friend get torn apart? I get that she was sheltered her whole life by Gendo, but you'd think she'd have gotten a few pointers about how human minds work, with the many books she reads, by then.
 
Yeah...The Weakness of Shinji Ikari as a Protagonist in this fic is doubled by his passivity and doubt, especially when you have the Super-Emo Minato, the Giga-chad Yu, and the Swagmaster Akira in the background, and we all get that feeling that if they had Evas or hell if even one of them had an Eva? This would be a shorter story, Shinji feels upstaged by much better characters in a universe that is prediposed to literally revolve around him.(which I low key dislike)
 
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(This is all good stuff. I try to make sure I don't lose sight if the forest for the trees...and sometimes the weeds.)

I agree with you on the Shinji choosing humanity's fate part. What the hell was she even thinking when she just put that much responsibility on a mentally broken young boy who just witnessed his friend get torn apart? I get that she was sheltered her whole life by Gendo, but you'd think she'd have gotten a few pointers about how human minds work, with the many books she reads, by then.

...we are talking about canon Rei, right?

The one whose first incarnation was choked to death at the age of 4 in 2010 and then used to ensoul Unit-00?

The one whose second incarnation was aged up by a decade from 2010 to 2015, and intentionally raised in isolation from human society? Who only had Gendo Ikari and a jealous Ritsuko Akagi (by and large) for company in that timespan?

The one whose third incarnation lost much of the personal development that the second had attained?

The one who was raised with the sole expectation of dying for Gendo Ikari's scenario?

I think the question isn't "why did she give the power to Shinji"; it's "if she chose to reject Gendo in EoE, who would she have given the power to other than Shinji?"

@Lone Courier 6

Commenting on your observations in no particular order:

- I can unequivocally say that SPE!Rei is not yandere for Shinji like GONG!Rei was. Her motivations are categorically different.

- It feels kind of weird and somewhat pleasing (strangely) to see that much of what made people complain about Shinji as a protagonist in NGE still holds for Shinji as a protagonist in SPE. It makes me think I'm being faithful to the canonical character. XD

But that's also a big difference between Minato/Yu/Ren and Shinji in that the former (in terms of the games) start out as largely blank slates; their personality is informed by the player's dialogue choices. Shinji doesn't have that luxury.

/that they have personalities in animated materials is besides the point, as those came later

- The curse of having literal NG+ characters hanging around when your new protag is starting out fresh. :V

Shinji: I'd like to see you deal with having Gendo for a father.

Minato/Yu/Ren: Hard pass on that.

- Narratively speaking, Tokyo-2 is honestly kind of small potatoes after Second Impact...and practically nothing compared to the canonical Third Impact (that's already happened in-story). It's admittedly a struggle to juggle with that sense of pacing, especially when you could have someone (like Adachi *wink*) just say "eh, what's one life compared to another in the grand scheme of things?"

"But what about those sacrificed by the Usurper?"

Adachi: Well, sucks to be them. :V

- I choose to take comfort in the fact that we're around the halfway point of the narrative now, and so there's plenty of time left for Shinji to grow into his own. *crosses fingers with regards to executing well*

/given how long it's been
//it's worthwhile to remember
///that it's only been about 2.5 months since the plot began at the start of 'the game', so to speak
 
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