Okay kiddos, I've started 1.7, which will be the final chapter of the arc. Don't know how long it's going to be, but it has been the hardest one to write so far. Lots of butterflies from stuff that wasn't in the outline before I started getting actual story down. One of my self imposed constraints in this fic is to try to keep it relatively loose and improvisational as I go, while still hitting the story beats and scenes that are most important to me personally and to the vision I have for the story. This has led to some significant divergence from where my outline says I ought to be already.

Which is fine, but it means this chapter isn't coming as easily as previous ones have.

I promised it on Friday, and it will be posted before I wake up on Saturday morning.

I have a really sweet interlude lined up after that, featuring a worm character we haven't seen in this fic yet, and another gruesome death.

And after that I'm probably going to need a little bit to recover and get ready to write the next arc.

If I let the muse ride me too hard I might founder.

Fair warning.
 
I get a lot of Sheogorath, the Daedric Prince of Madness, vibes from this Taylor. I'm still waiting for her to say, "I'm so happy I could just tear out your intestines and strangle you with them!"
 
I get a lot of Sheogorath, the Daedric Prince of Madness, vibes from this Taylor. I'm still waiting for her to say, "I'm so happy I could just tear out your intestines and strangle you with them!"
I didn't mean for him to be in the mix, but you know Shaggy, he never lets not being invited stop him from following a whim.
 
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Bet he knows not to mess with her after saying oh shit in another timeline.
Oh man, this just gave me the best idea for a Coil interlude. Seriously, you aren't going to want to miss this one. I'm giddy.

Hmm. Unfortunately plot demands that this interlude not happen for a while.

I promise it will be worth the wait.
 
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Ew.
contessa interrlewd?
Contessa sex squicks me out. Her constant use of her power means that Fortuna never really grew up. Which means she's a little girl in a grown-up body being sorta gangraped by her partner and an interdimensional space whale.

At least in my head canon. And by extension in this fic.

Probably.

Worm has a lot of fridge horror.
 
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Contessa sex squicks me out. Her constant use of her power means that Fortuna never really grew up. Which means she's a little girl in a grown-up body being sorta gangraped by her partner and an interdimensional space whale.

There's not as much Fortuna left in there as one might like, nor was there as much room for Fortuna to grow as there ought to have been. Awful lot of PtV filling the space.

Worm has a lot of fridge horror.

Yes. Yes, it does. This is why it's best to fill one's fridge too full of rum, spiced rum cake, and moar rum to have room for horror to sneak up on you.
 
I get a lot of Sheogorath, the Daedric Prince of Madness, vibes from this Taylor. I'm still waiting for her to say, "I'm so happy I could just tear out your intestines and strangle you with them!"

Haven't you ever had that feeling?

All that power and she's still a little bitch who'd rather let a couple rabid animals dictate her life and cause her to drop out of school rather than kill her tormentors and make it look like the ABB or one of the other gangs did it.

Or the trolling has only just begun, and school simply matters insufficiently. And of course there's this:

"Madison, do you smell something?" I stood still in my tracks. Seeing her hadn't been a shock. I'd expected something like this. But this was something I could never have planned for.

Blood and milk and rose petals.

Bwahahaha! "It's for your own good, Taylor!" Yep, Emma wants Baron Taytay to be a predator. Taylor's completely mindblown by the twisted "love" here, and the longing for times gone by threw her for a loop. Don't try to manipulate Baron Taytay by her heartstrings, Emma. It might hurt a bit.

And which contains several more deaths.

Also probably not Taylor's fault.

I'll just leave these here.

 
Alrighty then! You all ready? The big climax! The big fight scene! The first on-screen deaths of the whole shebang! The big reveal!

Well, maybe more like the small reveal.

Or really the medium sized but increasingly blatant pile of hints.

Whatever! Time for 1.7!
 
Bourbon Street 1.7
Samedi

Bourbon Street 1.7



Interlude: Danny

Danny was furious.

His day had started out so well. Taylor had opened up just a little at breakfast. It had felt, for a moment, like he had his daughter back.

His drive to work was pleasant. He hit every green light. His favorite song was on the radio. He was in the first good mood he could even remember.

His mood took its first hit when he arrived at his office and found that some asshole had unloaded forty boxes of documents there, stacked up in piles five high. He hefted one of the them, then put it back.

He should have known his luck wouldn't last.

Things got worse when he checked his messages.

The merchants had attacked one of his most promising work-sites. Three of his guys were in the hospital with broken bones. The bosses at the work-site had decided that this attack was a bridge too far, and had decided to relocate. Danny couldn't get anywhere with the Mayor on freeing up some more police over-time to protect the location, which was the only lever he had to try to move the bosses from their decision.

And now some of the gangers were out on the sidewalk, throwing empties at the DWU office.

"I hope those assholes die in a fire." Danny's muttered curse was barely loud enough for him to hear over the sound of breaking glass and shouted laughter. Danny tried to put it out of his mind and go back to work.

Another crash resounded up and down the street.

His temper was running wild, and he didn't really want to try to rein it in.

But he knew there was nothing he could do. He was stuck. He was stuck, and they were outside trashing the DWU. Trashing his life's work. Things just getting worse and worse.

Maybe the ABB would show up and drive them off. They had been making inroads in the docks for weeks. Ever since the gang had gained that tinker.

Danny didn't have that kind of luck.

The explosion stole his breath.

When he could comprehend what was happening around him again, he stared unbelieving at the smoldering pile of paperwork that had saved his life. The area between the stacks of boxes and his side of the office was relatively intact. Everything else was on fire.

He stumbled through the twisted, burning wreckage. It felt like days, though it couldn't have been more than a few moments.

The merchant scum who had been defacing his workplace were scattered around the street, the pieces large enough to be recognizable charred and bloody.

What the fuck.

Either something very bad was happening, or something both very bad and very weird was happening.

Is it just here or is it everywhere? Was it aimed at him? Was it aimed at Taylor through him?

Was his daughter lying in pieces somewhere, ashes floating off her burst skin and lifting into the sky like faerie candles?

Danny ran.

- - -

I ran.

The bus driver got there before I did. Of course she did, she was a lot closer to the accident, after all.

If it was an accident. Who trips in front of a moving bus? Okay, lots of people probably do. But I had never met one. Was it the kind of thing that happened but nobody talked about? Like when Taylor fell on that cookie cutter when she was eight and had a bruise shaped like a Christmas angel on her butt for a month?

Wait a second. Something about that train of thought was fuckin weird.

Whatever.

It wasn't until I actually reached Greg that I realized I had no idea what to do. I didn't know first aid. I wasn't a doctor or an EMT or a sexy nurse that it turns out is secretly slipping extra large doses of medication into her patient's IV bags and then rifling through their stuff at night, using the cash she found there to party with her scumbag boyfriend who treated her like shit, but she put up with him anyway because he knew just what buttons to push to make her feel oh so very good and she was pretty sure she wouldn't be able to find anyone better than him in this fucked up city or at least that's what he told her sometimes when he was in a bad mood and she didn't want to put out and she was starting to think he was right even if he was probably cheating on her with her sister Cindy. The bitch.

What the fuck could I do to help?

- - -

The ambulance arrived and took Greg away. They were doing chest compressions and pushing a rescue breathing mask thing against his mouth, pumping away at the bellows rhythmically. It was a nice, steady beat.

The medic had asked me if I saw what happened, but I said I didn't, I just heard the screeching brakes.

I left before the cops could arrive. Or the PRT. Or the super-powered assassination squad that Piggot had hired to hunt me down if I went crazier than usual and started giving my classmates Glasgow grins.

With all those people around, it took me a while to find someplace private enough to duck away and pop back to the street.

- - -

This wasn't good.

I was obviously getting worse. The difference between the two Taylors, the calm, in-control Taylor I was here on the street, and the chaotic, disordered, manic mess that I had become out there was becoming a lot sharper.

It was ironic, really. I triggered because I was isolated. I had been intentionally isolated by Emma and the bitches. And now my power was going to isolate me forever. I would be too crazy to have friends, let alone lovers. And I would be sane enough to be lonely, at least in here.

I was so excited when I discovered how cool my power was. It felt like turning a corner, like I would be able to finally crawl out of this bottomless pit of rotting used tampons I had been living in since Mom died.

And now, right as I was at the lip, now even my power was prying my fingers loose and kicking me in the teeth.

I didn't dare to use them for the things I really wanted to. I couldn't use them to fix things. To fix myself. All they were good for was breaking things down, destroying friendships, destroying sleep, destroying people.

I had super-intimidation when all I wanted was to not feel so fucking alone all the time.

Something that felt like a headache passed across my whole body.

"Taylor?" Carob chips. And Insulin.

Gross.
 
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Author's Note:

So. I'm actually pretty damn pleased by how this came out. At least the Taylor part. The Danny part was okay. But with him it's more about setting him up for the next part of the story, whereas Taylor is getting to the good stuff right now.

So, uh, tell me what you think! Unless you're a jerk. Then lie to me to boost my ego!

Peace, Kiddos!
 
It seems that QA, or whatever has deemed to give Taylor powers here, decides that now is the PERFECT time to be HALPING! Taylor wants a friend in her private space? Well, who was she last thinking about? Greg! Greg is now Taylor's friend in her private space! Clearly its logic is impeccable.
 
Fantastic setup.

Assuming I'm reading it right she collects anyone who dies near her as a loa, and everyone else is going to absolutely lose their mind when it turns out the increasingly crazy cape running around the city is gathering and using anyone who dies around her.
 
It seems that QA, or whatever has deemed to give Taylor powers here, decides that now is the PERFECT time to be HALPING! Taylor wants a friend in her private space? Well, who was she last thinking about? Greg! Greg is now Taylor's friend in her private space! Clearly its logic is impeccable.


Okay, so, look. Elephant in the room.

Everyone hates Greg.

Greg is designed to be hated. He's the snivelly little shit that everyone picks on, and even the really nice kids don't defend because seriously, fuck that guy.

There was a kid like that in my high school. His name was Michael. I've thought about him a few times over the years since. I didn't like him either. I didn't hate him, but he was a skinny little douchebag Chinese kid who would laugh at you like an asian stereotype. Like Mickey Rooney with his big buck-teeth.

And now as a Grown Up (TM) I know that it was fucked up that we treated him like a little turd. Even if that's because he acted like a little turd.

We didn't shove him in a locker or beat him up or even really bully him.

What we did was ignore him or make fun of him behind his back.

Michael deserves his moment in the sun. However brief.

So does Greg.

Edit: And also, fuck it. This might be one of the most important things I've written since I started this whole story, and I'm gonna threadmark it even though it isn't strictly speaking part of the storyline. Because I want more people to read this. Because I'm proud of writing this.

Edit 2: And fuck it once again. I really don't want to spoil the flow of the story with what was essentially a mini-self-therapy interlude. So I'm de-threadmarking this. But I'm still proud of it. And you should still read it.

Which you will only know if you've already read it. Hmm.
 
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It seems that QA, or whatever has deemed to give Taylor powers here, decides that now is the PERFECT time to be HALPING! Taylor wants a friend in her private space? Well, who was she last thinking about? Greg! Greg is now Taylor's friend in her private space! Clearly its logic is impeccable.
The problem here is that a god is possibly involved , it could in fact just be QA it could be the actual god jacking QA or empowering Taylor... :confused:
 
...I disagree.

If a person is a bad person then they deserve fuckall. If Greg was like, a good and/or earnest but just cripplingly awkward guy or something like that... you know, that he wasnt actually a shit deep down (as we know he is from canon), then i would agree. But Greg Verder would just use his moment in the sun to try and grope someone, or get into the pants of a low self-esteem girl, or just be more obnoxious in general.

But seriously, fuck Greg with a ten foot cattle prod.
 
Like when Taylor fell on that cookie cutter when she was eight and had a bruise shaped like a Christmas angel on her butt for a month?

Referring to yourself in the third person. This is how it starts, people.

I wasn't a doctor or an EMT or a sexy nurse that it turns out is secretly slipping extra large doses of medication into her patient's IV bags and then rifling through their stuff at night, using the cash she found there to party with her scumbag boyfriend who treated her like shit, but she put up with him anyway because he knew just what buttons to push to make her feel oh so very good and she was pretty sure she wouldn't be able to find anyone better than him in this fucked up city or at least that's what he told her sometimes when he was in a bad mood and she didn't want to put out and she was starting to think he was right even if he was probably cheating on her with her sister Cindy. The bitch.

Samedi put far too much thought into that backstory. And yet clearly it needs more.
 
...I disagree.

If a person is a bad person then they deserve fuckall. If Greg was like, a good and/or earnest but just cripplingly awkward guy or something like that... you know, that he wasnt actually a shit deep down (as we know he is from canon), then i would agree. But Greg Verder would just use his moment in the sun to try and grope someone, or get into the pants of a low self-esteem girl, or just be more obnoxious in general.

But seriously, fuck Greg with a ten foot cattle prod.

If we're going to do him the courtesy of pretending in our heads that he's a real person and not a bunch of letters strung together by a real person, which courtesy we extend to every other character in every piece of fiction ever written, we have to at least try to look at things through his eyes.

There's something called the Fundamental Attribution Error. It says that when we look at our own actions, even if they're bad, we explain them by invoking the factors that brought us to the point of action. I sped because I was late for work, officer, and there's a really important meeting and everyone is counting on me.

When we see other people engaging in the same actions, we attribute their behavior to personality flaws. That fucking maniac! Nearly ran me over!

I'm not saying there aren't good and bad people. Better and worse adjusted. More and less in control.

Now, I know, this is a fictional character, and by the magic of omniscient narration we get to cheat and look inside his head and see the scumbag the author decided he ought to be.

But if we really follow that line of thought, we end up back at a long string of letters and punctuation.

And what the fuck is the point of that?

And that's my two cents. End of rant.

Thanks for your indulgence, everyone.
 
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@SquirrelZombie I have only one request, and you have no reason to grant it but... can you make it so Greg can still somehow post on PHO, and no one believes him when he says he's inside a parahuman schoolmate's interdimensional life-street? Pretty please? :D
 
Referring to yourself in the third person. This is how it starts, people.



Samedi put far too much thought into that backstory. And yet clearly it needs more.
Amusingly enough, that whole rant just sort of flew out of my keyboard. It took about a minute and a half to write the whole thing. It just kept spewing on out of there.

Hmm.

Fuckin weird.
 
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