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Our Shining Savior (Celestial Forge/Worm)
- Thread starter happynslappy
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you don't like it that's fine, stop reading! No ones forcing you to read it.
Guys if you don't like that this story isn't just a power wank of a Forger fine go read the ones that are. Happynslappy said as much it will be slower and more personal than a lot of forgers. Yes it takes time and it may seem like coil is going on forever however Coil has been helped by the highest PRT directors and cauldron for their insane post Zion experiment in BB to see who comes out on top. He is a multi hundred millionaire maybe hidden billionaire with his criminal enterprise. He as access to director level information before becoming a director with his splitting of timelines and has influences in all the local gangs of BB. Now he is director of PRT ENE with all that power entails which is a lot. He had Sophia put in his black ops PRT setup to take out Taylor, yes he has a directive from Cauldron itself to get all of Taylor's healing packs and other equipment to make endbringer fight less costly however this is Calvert who needs to be in control of everything locally and get Taylor under his thumb and possible drugged up to serve his every need. Coil doesn't know that Taylor can see both timelines that he pulls and it tripping him up. Calvert is a psychopath and a sociopath will to kill anyone and burn everyone if he loses. Taylor isn't a out of character person that knows wormverse she is in universe trying to figure out who it is that is coil. It probably getting close to end game for Calvert because of this latest attack/killing of Taylor.
Oh and thank you Happynslappy for the chapter update. Don't let the jerks get you down. You write well and give interesting character dialogue. Can't wait for next update.
Oh and thank you Happynslappy for the chapter update. Don't let the jerks get you down. You write well and give interesting character dialogue. Can't wait for next update.
- Location
- Australia
Can I recommend this article on how to criticize constructively instead? It was written by professionals and it's even possible that somebody might have paid them for the privilege of letting us read it for free!
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No one is saying to make it a power wank, people are just getting sick of the 3rd straight month of split timelines and pages of story that never happened because timeline drops.
The problem of it 'dragging on' is more that it's over multiple updates, where it's constant build up, along with the time between updates.
It's something that will likely read differently once the arc is completely done. Though perhaps still a bit off, given the repetitiveness of 'Coil does timeline shenanigans', as has been noted, and the fact that it's separated into several chapters.
It thus reads like everything is waiting for a perk to roll that will help solve things, regardless of if that's actually the plan or not. Really, the 'able to see the other timeline' fits that quite well. And given the more and more blatant 'Calvert is at least connected to Coil' hints, Coil just be having issues soon enough. He's already been shown appearing 'off', based on what he's said to Taylor, without anyone knowing of the other timelines. If nothing else, I imagine other members of the PRT/Protectorate made a note of it, even if it wasn't quite enough to trigger Master/Stranger protocols. It's at least a worrying sign to antagonize Taylor given the Birdcage mess. Calvert being perceived to making the same mistakes as he had Piggot take the blame for. That he had intentionally set going.
It's something that will likely read differently once the arc is completely done. Though perhaps still a bit off, given the repetitiveness of 'Coil does timeline shenanigans', as has been noted, and the fact that it's separated into several chapters.
It thus reads like everything is waiting for a perk to roll that will help solve things, regardless of if that's actually the plan or not. Really, the 'able to see the other timeline' fits that quite well. And given the more and more blatant 'Calvert is at least connected to Coil' hints, Coil just be having issues soon enough. He's already been shown appearing 'off', based on what he's said to Taylor, without anyone knowing of the other timelines. If nothing else, I imagine other members of the PRT/Protectorate made a note of it, even if it wasn't quite enough to trigger Master/Stranger protocols. It's at least a worrying sign to antagonize Taylor given the Birdcage mess. Calvert being perceived to making the same mistakes as he had Piggot take the blame for. That he had intentionally set going.
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- leiden (NL)
I agree that the cancelled timelines seem a bit repetitive at this time. However, I trust the author will reveal that they have a purpose in his own time and when we look back we will think it makes perfect sense.
Iori_Angel
Kitten lover
Probably, at least Taylor isn't throwing technobabble at us...
Chapter 63: Even More Trauma
- Location
- usa
I dial the number as soon as I can find my phone. I will not allow this choice bullshit to stand.
"Armsmaster here."
"You're awake?"
"Of course. I take many tinkertech stimulants-"
"That's great, but not actually important right now. I heard Shadow Stalker was back in town, and I was worried she might come after me. Are you able to tell me anything that would keep me safe from her?" He chuckles. He fucking chuckles.
"I can assure you Taylor, nobody would be stupid enough to bring her back into town. The blowback alone-"
"Then it really doesn't matter what you tell me about her, now does it! Now how the fuck do I get her off my back!" My roommate stirs from her bedroll.
"Why are you yelling Taylor? Its way too late for this."
"Where did you hear Sophia was in town?"
"The neighborhood fucking watch!" I take a moment to take a breath. "I apologize for my outburst, but you have to understand. I need to be able to defend myself against her." Cheating bitch just phases through all my holds.
"I think I see what's going on here." I doubt it, but whatever gets you on my side. "I personally think nobody would be stupid enough to transfer Sophia back into the same state as you," As she punches me in the face in the other timeline. "but personal trauma isn't nearly so reasonable. If she gets within striking distance I suggest you use a tazer, or other electric weapon. It will short out her power, and render her tangible. Was that all?"
"Yes."
"Then I have an invitation to extend to you. Come Thursday there will be a fundraising event where we're unveiling a new Ward." Oh my God, this is not the time for that.
"Text me the details for that later, I gotta go!" I hang up and throw my phone into the covers. Motherfucking son of a bitch!! That doesn't help me at all! I already sent Aisha away for help, and I don't have any tazers in my room! I could've made a rune for that, but like a dumbass I thought my current one would be all I ever needed.
"Are you okay Taylor?" I turn to Aisha. I woke up with my blood pumping and yelling earlier.
"I'm fine, Coil is just trying to pull some bullshit." She looks at me skeptically.
"If you say so." My arm twitches in phantom pain as Sophia bends it the wrong way. God this fucking sucks.
Then I feel my throat get cut ragged and I start breathing heavily. Oh Jesus, this is not a good feeling. I try struggling in the other timeline, but obviously that fucking psychopath Hess has practice killing people. My strength flags real quickly as I bleed out on the floor.
"Taylor!? Taylor its fine, I'm here! Taylor?!" I pay attention to my other self. I'm hyperventilating in the fetal position on my bed. What I can see of Aisha through my blurry eyes and blankets isn't pretty. I think she's panicking. Ha ha!
"Jesus fuck Taylor, talk to me!! What the hell did he do?!" I try reaching out to her only for my arm to curl in on itself harder. Oh God, that's a cramp.
"I-I didn't- I couldn't-" I'm hyperventilating again. shit shit shit! "I c-c-can't-"
"Oh Jesus. Taylor, I'm coming in. You obviously need a fucking hug right about now." She crawls into bed with me to be the big spoon. Not doing a very good job of it considering our size difference, but she has good hugging arms.
A couple minutes later and I think I'm up for talking again. It helps I can't feel myself slipping away anymore on the other end. Or maybe it doesn't, who knows.
"I can't t-tell what timeline is real Aisha. The b-bitch killed me, and I can't tell which timeline is real." I take a shuddering breath, and she hugs me harder.
For my part I'm stuck in this position for a while. I'm hyper aware of the blood rushing through my veins, and the tension in my limbs. I hate it. I hate it so much. Just about the only silver lining here is that I stopped hyperventilating, and that's mostly because I started breathing into my blankets. Then the other timeline closes, and I silently cry in relief.
In the morning, I'm grumpily making breakfast. I set the table for all the parahumans and Dad. When everybody is here and set down I make my announcement.
"We have a problem."
"Oh?" Asks Dad. "What is this problem?"
"The problem is Coil. He needs to die." Canary immediately takes her food and leaves. Everybody lets her.
"Okay hun, I know what the Nazis did to spark that reaction." Says Dad. "What did Coil do." My hand tightens around my fork. I don't look away.
"I don't wanna talk about it."
"That's horseshit Taylor." From Amy. "We should go to the PRT-"
"Birdcage." I interrupt. She rolls her eyes.
"Oh please, you can't use that as an excuse to stay away from them forever. Director Calvert isn't Piggot. He's put alot of effort into cleaning house."
"And yet he's shown an astounding ability to manipulate the PRT and Protectorate regardless in his alternate timelines. If I go to them with what I know, he will know what I do within the day." I just about move on before I do a double take. "How do you know about this?"
"A few PRT troopers who's lives I saved invited me to their group chats. They never uninvited me after New Wave imploded." I nod, ignoring Amy's sour face.
"That's all well and good but how are you actually going to accomplish this?" Chimes in Marquis. "I was under the impression you were already trying to locate the slippery bastard." I frown.
"We're backtracing his mercenaries-"
"And if he's half as good as he seems to think he is, that will never work. The hell are you doing screwing around for? You know the general area of the end result. Work that angle instead." I see Sherrel nodding her agreement.
"I'm not becoming a villain over one tenacious asshole. I have too much riding on my legal ventures. Amy too."
"So does he need to die, or are you committed to your spotless reputation? Look, I'm not saying you need to drag him from the PRT offices to execute him in the street after having a climactic battle with the entirety of the Protectorate. But very clearly something's changed, and he needs to die, yes?"
I'm about to reply when a wave of dizziness takes hold. I grip the table tightly, as it seems The Forge has seen fit to give me something big. In both senses of the word. That can wait, though.
"Sorry about that. Yes, he needs to die. I have no idea how I'm going to accomplish that. It was kind of the point of bringing it up here, yeah? Get a big brainstorming session going on."
"Well if we can't kill him, we can at least annoy him." Everybody starts and looks at Aisha.
"Who the fuck are you?" Asks Sherrel.
"Our stranger, she's supposed to be here. What do you mean?"
"I finally got through to my idiot brother last night before your little episode." My eye twitches.
"You know you could just not say things like that you know." She shrugs.
"But where would the fun be in that? Anyways, back to what we were talking about. My idiot brother."
"Yes?"
"He works for Coil which makes him an idiot, but that's not what we're here for. Up until last night, he thought I was in Coil's pedo basement or something. Threats to my life was what was keeping him in line. I managed to prove I was me with some recent pictures, and I set up a meeting for today."
"Was his account being monitored?"
"The fuck? How the hell am I supposed to know that? All I know is that it was his personal account, and not his 'looking up porn' account."
"And the actual meeting?"
"At the mall around noon."
"Awesome. One less cape for him to work with then, assuming that goes well. If you'll excuse me, I need to go check on my locker room." I leave my breakfast for the vultures to pick clean. I can always make more.
Hurrying my way into the locker room, I can immediately see a new vault door in the distance. I wave to the on duty Dockworkers and approach it. Looks to be red and black exclusively. Shaped like a screwed up yin-yang symbol with a solid red background, and three little black pips. When I touched it I instantly knew how to open it. Rotate the black pips. I also found out how hilariously deadly this thing is to touch for literally anybody but me. That's going to be such a pain in the ass to Aisha proof.
Inside were scrolls. Like, a truly ludicrous amount of scrolls.
AN: ha ha ha ha! I appreciate the faith you all have in me that I have a plan, but I don't. I was under the impression the format of the story wouldn't allow it. I just go with whatever seems cool at the time.
Uchiha Jutsu Archive (Generic Naruto Fanfiction) (400CP)
The Uchiha really were quite shameless in their day, always going around copying everybody else's lifetimes of hard work just by using their special eyes. Well, at least you get to benefit from that. Somehow you've obtained a copy of the complete Uchiha Jutsu Archive, everything that several generations of dedicated intellectual property thieves could copy from every other ninja village, clan and small ninja child in the Elemental Nations. Pretty much any and every technique, seal, chemical formula, pill/cookie recipe or random dance routine that that one Uchiha liked can be found in here. Any knowledge that wasn't limited to literally just one person, family, or bloodline or was based purely on sealless chakra manipulation (such as the Rasengan) and thus uncopyable by the Sharingan is in the archive, all of them laid out in such a clear and concise format that any half-competent ninja could teach himself just by reading the scroll. This archive will update with a complete set of spells, fighting styles, etc, etc. from any setting that you have visited and will visit in the future. Provided it could be generously called public, or even semi-private, knowledge it will be in here. Only the most super-secret, utterly private techniques are missing; after all, even the best copyright pirates can't get everything. This place is comprehensively warded against thievery, somewhat ironically, and it would take a team of top-tier infiltration specialists to even attempt to breach it. Of course its best defense is that, at least at jump start, no one knows you have it. Post jump you can have this become a warehouse attachment.
"Armsmaster here."
"You're awake?"
"Of course. I take many tinkertech stimulants-"
"That's great, but not actually important right now. I heard Shadow Stalker was back in town, and I was worried she might come after me. Are you able to tell me anything that would keep me safe from her?" He chuckles. He fucking chuckles.
"I can assure you Taylor, nobody would be stupid enough to bring her back into town. The blowback alone-"
"Then it really doesn't matter what you tell me about her, now does it! Now how the fuck do I get her off my back!" My roommate stirs from her bedroll.
"Why are you yelling Taylor? Its way too late for this."
"Where did you hear Sophia was in town?"
"The neighborhood fucking watch!" I take a moment to take a breath. "I apologize for my outburst, but you have to understand. I need to be able to defend myself against her." Cheating bitch just phases through all my holds.
"I think I see what's going on here." I doubt it, but whatever gets you on my side. "I personally think nobody would be stupid enough to transfer Sophia back into the same state as you," As she punches me in the face in the other timeline. "but personal trauma isn't nearly so reasonable. If she gets within striking distance I suggest you use a tazer, or other electric weapon. It will short out her power, and render her tangible. Was that all?"
"Yes."
"Then I have an invitation to extend to you. Come Thursday there will be a fundraising event where we're unveiling a new Ward." Oh my God, this is not the time for that.
"Text me the details for that later, I gotta go!" I hang up and throw my phone into the covers. Motherfucking son of a bitch!! That doesn't help me at all! I already sent Aisha away for help, and I don't have any tazers in my room! I could've made a rune for that, but like a dumbass I thought my current one would be all I ever needed.
"Are you okay Taylor?" I turn to Aisha. I woke up with my blood pumping and yelling earlier.
"I'm fine, Coil is just trying to pull some bullshit." She looks at me skeptically.
"If you say so." My arm twitches in phantom pain as Sophia bends it the wrong way. God this fucking sucks.
Then I feel my throat get cut ragged and I start breathing heavily. Oh Jesus, this is not a good feeling. I try struggling in the other timeline, but obviously that fucking psychopath Hess has practice killing people. My strength flags real quickly as I bleed out on the floor.
"Taylor!? Taylor its fine, I'm here! Taylor?!" I pay attention to my other self. I'm hyperventilating in the fetal position on my bed. What I can see of Aisha through my blurry eyes and blankets isn't pretty. I think she's panicking. Ha ha!
"Jesus fuck Taylor, talk to me!! What the hell did he do?!" I try reaching out to her only for my arm to curl in on itself harder. Oh God, that's a cramp.
"I-I didn't- I couldn't-" I'm hyperventilating again. shit shit shit! "I c-c-can't-"
"Oh Jesus. Taylor, I'm coming in. You obviously need a fucking hug right about now." She crawls into bed with me to be the big spoon. Not doing a very good job of it considering our size difference, but she has good hugging arms.
A couple minutes later and I think I'm up for talking again. It helps I can't feel myself slipping away anymore on the other end. Or maybe it doesn't, who knows.
"I can't t-tell what timeline is real Aisha. The b-bitch killed me, and I can't tell which timeline is real." I take a shuddering breath, and she hugs me harder.
For my part I'm stuck in this position for a while. I'm hyper aware of the blood rushing through my veins, and the tension in my limbs. I hate it. I hate it so much. Just about the only silver lining here is that I stopped hyperventilating, and that's mostly because I started breathing into my blankets. Then the other timeline closes, and I silently cry in relief.
In the morning, I'm grumpily making breakfast. I set the table for all the parahumans and Dad. When everybody is here and set down I make my announcement.
"We have a problem."
"Oh?" Asks Dad. "What is this problem?"
"The problem is Coil. He needs to die." Canary immediately takes her food and leaves. Everybody lets her.
"Okay hun, I know what the Nazis did to spark that reaction." Says Dad. "What did Coil do." My hand tightens around my fork. I don't look away.
"I don't wanna talk about it."
"That's horseshit Taylor." From Amy. "We should go to the PRT-"
"Birdcage." I interrupt. She rolls her eyes.
"Oh please, you can't use that as an excuse to stay away from them forever. Director Calvert isn't Piggot. He's put alot of effort into cleaning house."
"And yet he's shown an astounding ability to manipulate the PRT and Protectorate regardless in his alternate timelines. If I go to them with what I know, he will know what I do within the day." I just about move on before I do a double take. "How do you know about this?"
"A few PRT troopers who's lives I saved invited me to their group chats. They never uninvited me after New Wave imploded." I nod, ignoring Amy's sour face.
"That's all well and good but how are you actually going to accomplish this?" Chimes in Marquis. "I was under the impression you were already trying to locate the slippery bastard." I frown.
"We're backtracing his mercenaries-"
"And if he's half as good as he seems to think he is, that will never work. The hell are you doing screwing around for? You know the general area of the end result. Work that angle instead." I see Sherrel nodding her agreement.
"I'm not becoming a villain over one tenacious asshole. I have too much riding on my legal ventures. Amy too."
"So does he need to die, or are you committed to your spotless reputation? Look, I'm not saying you need to drag him from the PRT offices to execute him in the street after having a climactic battle with the entirety of the Protectorate. But very clearly something's changed, and he needs to die, yes?"
I'm about to reply when a wave of dizziness takes hold. I grip the table tightly, as it seems The Forge has seen fit to give me something big. In both senses of the word. That can wait, though.
"Sorry about that. Yes, he needs to die. I have no idea how I'm going to accomplish that. It was kind of the point of bringing it up here, yeah? Get a big brainstorming session going on."
"Well if we can't kill him, we can at least annoy him." Everybody starts and looks at Aisha.
"Who the fuck are you?" Asks Sherrel.
"Our stranger, she's supposed to be here. What do you mean?"
"I finally got through to my idiot brother last night before your little episode." My eye twitches.
"You know you could just not say things like that you know." She shrugs.
"But where would the fun be in that? Anyways, back to what we were talking about. My idiot brother."
"Yes?"
"He works for Coil which makes him an idiot, but that's not what we're here for. Up until last night, he thought I was in Coil's pedo basement or something. Threats to my life was what was keeping him in line. I managed to prove I was me with some recent pictures, and I set up a meeting for today."
"Was his account being monitored?"
"The fuck? How the hell am I supposed to know that? All I know is that it was his personal account, and not his 'looking up porn' account."
"And the actual meeting?"
"At the mall around noon."
"Awesome. One less cape for him to work with then, assuming that goes well. If you'll excuse me, I need to go check on my locker room." I leave my breakfast for the vultures to pick clean. I can always make more.
Hurrying my way into the locker room, I can immediately see a new vault door in the distance. I wave to the on duty Dockworkers and approach it. Looks to be red and black exclusively. Shaped like a screwed up yin-yang symbol with a solid red background, and three little black pips. When I touched it I instantly knew how to open it. Rotate the black pips. I also found out how hilariously deadly this thing is to touch for literally anybody but me. That's going to be such a pain in the ass to Aisha proof.
Inside were scrolls. Like, a truly ludicrous amount of scrolls.
AN: ha ha ha ha! I appreciate the faith you all have in me that I have a plan, but I don't. I was under the impression the format of the story wouldn't allow it. I just go with whatever seems cool at the time.
Uchiha Jutsu Archive (Generic Naruto Fanfiction) (400CP)
The Uchiha really were quite shameless in their day, always going around copying everybody else's lifetimes of hard work just by using their special eyes. Well, at least you get to benefit from that. Somehow you've obtained a copy of the complete Uchiha Jutsu Archive, everything that several generations of dedicated intellectual property thieves could copy from every other ninja village, clan and small ninja child in the Elemental Nations. Pretty much any and every technique, seal, chemical formula, pill/cookie recipe or random dance routine that that one Uchiha liked can be found in here. Any knowledge that wasn't limited to literally just one person, family, or bloodline or was based purely on sealless chakra manipulation (such as the Rasengan) and thus uncopyable by the Sharingan is in the archive, all of them laid out in such a clear and concise format that any half-competent ninja could teach himself just by reading the scroll. This archive will update with a complete set of spells, fighting styles, etc, etc. from any setting that you have visited and will visit in the future. Provided it could be generously called public, or even semi-private, knowledge it will be in here. Only the most super-secret, utterly private techniques are missing; after all, even the best copyright pirates can't get everything. This place is comprehensively warded against thievery, somewhat ironically, and it would take a team of top-tier infiltration specialists to even attempt to breach it. Of course its best defense is that, at least at jump start, no one knows you have it. Post jump you can have this become a warehouse attachment.
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MaimakteriAnn
(Verified Sleepy)
- Location
- Enormous And Round Terran Homeworld
- Pronouns
- She/Her/Dr
Oooh. you got the uchiharchive? Tasty. Definitely kill coil though. Marquis even warned you.
Being Taylor is suffering. Check. C'mon Taylor put the puzzle pieces together. Sophia blabbed so much! Also I'm immensely disappointed in Armsmaster. He should have Taylor's concern seriously.
I have no idea what the scroll thing is, but hopefully it's a good one!
Rule of cool is the way to go, for sure.
I have no idea what the scroll thing is, but hopefully it's a good one!
Rule of cool is the way to go, for sure.
YuffieK
(Verified Ninja Princess)
It's the Uchiha Archives, and presumably access to the Sharingan as well. A 600 CP value ability because of just how overly broken those eyes are.
Granted, it could've been THESE eyes, which are even crazier...
the naruto filler goateyes. Wich would also be the better fit for the forge.
Ability to manipulate iron to the degree you actually get hemokinesis, and basically all the uschia bullshit. think it was slightly worse at mindfuckery, but you get ferro and hemo kinesis instead, so... yeah.
- Location
- usa
It's the Uchiha Archives, and presumably access to the Sharingan as well. A 600 CP value ability because of just how overly broken those eyes are.
Granted, it could've been THESE eyes, which are even crazier...
Lol, what? Guys, why would I let her get such ridiculous bullshit for free? She's gotta roll those biological samples first.
So I'm wondering how you are going to handle the self updating feature of the archive? It's supposed to give you techniques from any world you have or will visit so it'll be a nightmare to manage, though it could also just be reduced to being "technique ex macina" due to just how possibly massive it would be and its non-digital nature.
- Location
- RS,brasil
Ok, so what do we have?
Fireballs, improbably good shuriken trowing, walking on water
possibly a summoning contract with the eagles? Or maybe cats?
Ironically, if she ever rolls palico companion it will retroactively make them into being one of those cat-nin that made stuff for the uchiha
it presumably also applies to other stuff that ninja could do, but we have never seen, like lock picking, falsifying documents and such
you want to give her a lot of power without making her too OP gust give her Madaras war fan, the one that can reflect attacks
its a very awkward shield to use, it's too heavy for her to carry, it only protects you from most parahuman attacks and only from one direction
its about the most overpowered thing that you can add immediately from the uchiha archive
also going to have all sorts of neat additions, like a shit ton of poisons, and how to make chakra metal
if you want to make the archives less powerful, just say she doesn't have an affinity for fire and that cuts the number of jutsu she can learn by a third
Fireballs, improbably good shuriken trowing, walking on water
possibly a summoning contract with the eagles? Or maybe cats?
Ironically, if she ever rolls palico companion it will retroactively make them into being one of those cat-nin that made stuff for the uchiha
it presumably also applies to other stuff that ninja could do, but we have never seen, like lock picking, falsifying documents and such
you want to give her a lot of power without making her too OP gust give her Madaras war fan, the one that can reflect attacks
its a very awkward shield to use, it's too heavy for her to carry, it only protects you from most parahuman attacks and only from one direction
its about the most overpowered thing that you can add immediately from the uchiha archive
also going to have all sorts of neat additions, like a shit ton of poisons, and how to make chakra metal
if you want to make the archives less powerful, just say she doesn't have an affinity for fire and that cuts the number of jutsu she can learn by a third
- Location
- RS,brasil
she rolls servo skulls, if there is one thing the fuckers can handle is tedious library work of improbable quantities in a horrible format
- Location
- usa
Yes, her mundane supply problems are over. Now if only she had mundane building perks.
*looks at dice meaningfully*