Our Shining Savior (Celestial Forge/Worm)
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I mean it could be worse Taylor, it could be the Tower and it's Floating Island, which could have appeared floating above the bay...
hmm. wonder if Solomon had access to the grand servant summoning spell probably the only place left standing that the spell would just be laying around.
also Solomon's rings received from GOD should be there.
also Solomon's rings received from GOD should be there.
Chapter 70: Translation
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- usa
So after throwing up and dry heaving for about ten minutes straight, I've come up with some rules. Rule one: don't look at the sky outside of my workshop. Rule two: if you must disregard rule one bring a puke bucket. That's it.
Onto more interesting things, like how my locker room has changed because of this. Through the front door is a bare cathedral, yet all the surfaces here are elaborately carved with images and murals of these things with way too many eyes and wings. Did I steal this from a Simmurgh cult? There's a central platform on the back wall with a disturbingly demonic looking bronze platform sized just about right for human sacrifice, brilliantly glowing white from the top. Going over to look at it through the glare, I see it comes from some really overheated circuitry on the top. It all converges on the most brilliantly glowing ring I've ever seen. Definitely tinkertech then, and definitely never touching it. Stupid thing seared my eyes like the sun, geez.
From here there are three doors on the back wall, one on either side of the raised platform, and one right behind the altar. The one behind the altar has a force field over a flimsy looking curtain, the one stage left has another massive library, this one three stories high and tightly packed, and the last one leads to a corner of my normal workshop. My workshop also changed itself around a bit. The vault, along with it's safety walls somehow thank god, moved into the corner, and the actual vault part turned into an L shape separating the culty cathedral from the rest of my workshop. The vault door, and the hallway I used to get here are on opposite sides of the workshop, the smithy and cloth workshop between the two, the entrance to the garage just in front of the connecting hallway on what's now the back wall, where my summoned doors pop up on the wall inbetween the two, and the psychic chair room thing in the opposite corner. Wouldn't know any of that if the temporary barricade Sherrel set up between the garage and the rest of this place wasn't so effective. Stupid wooden barricade.
"Why!"
*CHOP*
"Did she have to!"
*CHOP*
"Make it out of!"
*STAB*
"Wood!"
*CHOP*
"Cause it was cheap."
"Holy shit!!" As my sword clatters to the ground. Behind me is Sherrel. I look suspiciously over to the wall where the doors usually appear, nothing, before looking back to her. "How did you even get over here? The doorway here is still blocked."
"Oh, the unused garage stalls suddenly opened up looking out into the embodiment of motion sickness. After you hung up on me I was throwing up for a while, then followed the outside wall to the other entrance. The Fallen are gonna be so pissed at you, you know that, right?"
"Yeah yeah, I know. Nothing I can do about it now though. Can you help get this blockage out?" She looks it over.
"I could from the other side if you hadn't already chopped up the wedge. As it is I don't have any cutting tools." I roll my eyes.
"Then could you go outside and start taking pictures of all the chickenscratch outside? I'd like a translation as soon as possible. I need to know what we're dealing with here." She grimaces.
"Okay boss." And she leaves.
I manage to chop through the barricade soon enough. The thing only took ten minutes to destroy. It was a tiny bit tricky closing up those open bays, but I managed. Just a curved sheet of aluminum about a centimeter thick. A couple minutes after that Sherrel met me back inside and we used her open bay door to get back to the realspace workshop. I then went to Dad's office. Marquis was there with him.
"Hey there Dad. So how would I get some Arabic translated?" They both shift to look at me.
"Well kiddo, I suppose that you would call up the local university, see if they have any linguistics experts with some free time. What have you got?" I walk over to his side of the table to show him the pictures on my phone. They were looking at some spreadsheets.
"Thats not Arabic." Interjects Marquis. "Thats Hebrew." I look over to him.
"How could you possibly know that?"
"I was hosting some Mossad hunter killer units back in the day-"
"And what is Mossad?"
"Jewish intelligence." I nod. "They thought some SS survivors may have been holing up with the Empire. They weren't, but it was fun as hell watching intelligence officers lead a street gang by the nose. Learned a few tricks myself from them. Long story short, that's Hebrew and not Arabic."
"Thanks for that. Guess I have some phone calls to make then." As I wave goodbye.
One shower, a cumulative two hours on the phone, and one e-mail later I'm looking at my inbox in mild bemusement.
AN: So it's been a while. A few things happened to delay me. First of all I got back into POE and tried to get a toon up to level 100 for Sanctum league. Didn't work. Then my apartment flooded.
as a consequence of this the two halves of this chappy were written months apart. Hopefully quality and length goes back up as I get back into the swing of things
Onto more interesting things, like how my locker room has changed because of this. Through the front door is a bare cathedral, yet all the surfaces here are elaborately carved with images and murals of these things with way too many eyes and wings. Did I steal this from a Simmurgh cult? There's a central platform on the back wall with a disturbingly demonic looking bronze platform sized just about right for human sacrifice, brilliantly glowing white from the top. Going over to look at it through the glare, I see it comes from some really overheated circuitry on the top. It all converges on the most brilliantly glowing ring I've ever seen. Definitely tinkertech then, and definitely never touching it. Stupid thing seared my eyes like the sun, geez.
From here there are three doors on the back wall, one on either side of the raised platform, and one right behind the altar. The one behind the altar has a force field over a flimsy looking curtain, the one stage left has another massive library, this one three stories high and tightly packed, and the last one leads to a corner of my normal workshop. My workshop also changed itself around a bit. The vault, along with it's safety walls somehow thank god, moved into the corner, and the actual vault part turned into an L shape separating the culty cathedral from the rest of my workshop. The vault door, and the hallway I used to get here are on opposite sides of the workshop, the smithy and cloth workshop between the two, the entrance to the garage just in front of the connecting hallway on what's now the back wall, where my summoned doors pop up on the wall inbetween the two, and the psychic chair room thing in the opposite corner. Wouldn't know any of that if the temporary barricade Sherrel set up between the garage and the rest of this place wasn't so effective. Stupid wooden barricade.
"Why!"
*CHOP*
"Did she have to!"
*CHOP*
"Make it out of!"
*STAB*
"Wood!"
*CHOP*
"Cause it was cheap."
"Holy shit!!" As my sword clatters to the ground. Behind me is Sherrel. I look suspiciously over to the wall where the doors usually appear, nothing, before looking back to her. "How did you even get over here? The doorway here is still blocked."
"Oh, the unused garage stalls suddenly opened up looking out into the embodiment of motion sickness. After you hung up on me I was throwing up for a while, then followed the outside wall to the other entrance. The Fallen are gonna be so pissed at you, you know that, right?"
"Yeah yeah, I know. Nothing I can do about it now though. Can you help get this blockage out?" She looks it over.
"I could from the other side if you hadn't already chopped up the wedge. As it is I don't have any cutting tools." I roll my eyes.
"Then could you go outside and start taking pictures of all the chickenscratch outside? I'd like a translation as soon as possible. I need to know what we're dealing with here." She grimaces.
"Okay boss." And she leaves.
I manage to chop through the barricade soon enough. The thing only took ten minutes to destroy. It was a tiny bit tricky closing up those open bays, but I managed. Just a curved sheet of aluminum about a centimeter thick. A couple minutes after that Sherrel met me back inside and we used her open bay door to get back to the realspace workshop. I then went to Dad's office. Marquis was there with him.
"Hey there Dad. So how would I get some Arabic translated?" They both shift to look at me.
"Well kiddo, I suppose that you would call up the local university, see if they have any linguistics experts with some free time. What have you got?" I walk over to his side of the table to show him the pictures on my phone. They were looking at some spreadsheets.
"Thats not Arabic." Interjects Marquis. "Thats Hebrew." I look over to him.
"How could you possibly know that?"
"I was hosting some Mossad hunter killer units back in the day-"
"And what is Mossad?"
"Jewish intelligence." I nod. "They thought some SS survivors may have been holing up with the Empire. They weren't, but it was fun as hell watching intelligence officers lead a street gang by the nose. Learned a few tricks myself from them. Long story short, that's Hebrew and not Arabic."
"Thanks for that. Guess I have some phone calls to make then." As I wave goodbye.
One shower, a cumulative two hours on the phone, and one e-mail later I'm looking at my inbox in mild bemusement.
Dear miss Hebert
While your mockup was amusing, we at Brockton State University do not tolerate forgeries such as yours. With all due respect, take your scams elsewhere.
AN: So it's been a while. A few things happened to delay me. First of all I got back into POE and tried to get a toon up to level 100 for Sanctum league. Didn't work. Then my apartment flooded.
as a consequence of this the two halves of this chappy were written months apart. Hopefully quality and length goes back up as I get back into the swing of things
TriviaFreak
Time of reluctance.
That's a real hell of a cliffhanger to leave us on. Now I'm interested in seeing what that Hebrew says. Or is it Aramaic?
She sent them a picture of a jumpchain item. Many jumpchain items make zero sense if taken literally, especially if you disregard possibilities like time travel and alternate universes. Which uni staff dealing with walk-ins probably do.
It would be particularly batshit because it was a Nasuverse item. Things in Fate and such aren't internally consistent much less with any logical world. Even worse because it was Solomon's temple. No wonder it got laughed out. It must have been taking about magic and god's and shit. It's completely unsurprising that they thought Taylor was fucking with them.
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Looking at the informational thread mark, that Hebrew stuff is the Temple of Solomon from Fate, aka the guy who made Nasuverse/Fate's magic system. So super powerful and complex magical research facility, but all the notes are in a language Taylor doesn't know.
How the heck will Taylor use the temple? She's busy enough working on chakra stuff. I hope she recruits someone from the university on this. It would be funny to meet one of her mother's colleagues. Better yet if it's someone that Annette didn't respect at all, like some professor who believed ancient civilizations had contact with extra terrestrials. (fyi, Nasuverse has a bunch of aliens).
How the heck will Taylor use the temple? She's busy enough working on chakra stuff. I hope she recruits someone from the university on this. It would be funny to meet one of her mother's colleagues. Better yet if it's someone that Annette didn't respect at all, like some professor who believed ancient civilizations had contact with extra terrestrials. (fyi, Nasuverse has a bunch of aliens).
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- United States
I don't remember if she gets anything from the Personal Reality Constellation, but if she does I can't wait until she gets Village. It's gonna be real wild...
Also, good job not touching that Ring Taylor, as I doubt you would have liked the Consequences...
Also, good job not touching that Ring Taylor, as I doubt you would have liked the Consequences...
Personal Reality Constellation was something added specifically for BCF, and I don't see any mention of additional constellations being added in the rules, so I don't think Village can get rolled.
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- Planet Earth
Feel free to skip this, I just needed to rant a bit about some frustrations I was having while reading this story.
This story can be real frustrating at times... I mean, there have been a LOT of times where the MC has just made very, very, bad decisions. For reasons that don't really add up.
Is there a reason the MC can't just make some things out of clay, then use the stone to change them piece by piece to the materials she wants them to be. Then enchant them? Wouldn't that be faster than meticulous forging when it comes to some of the things she makes?
Is there a reason the MC did not just use the stone to turn her "brig/cage" into something like a door to escape, or something weak she could break through? Or why she did not do the same to the transport helicopter?
Why would they think her staying in the Birdcage for longer would be a good idea? her capture was illegal, illegal imprisonment is illegal, and no one, beyond Coil, would have tried to imprison her again. All the arguments they used when fighting the Merchants, the Nazi's, or buying up land would equally apply to the PRT in this situation.
Not sure why this seems to be trying to cartoonishly inflate Coil and the PRT's abilities and willingness to "cross the line" and make enemies. I can get Coil, what with him not realizing she remembers the alt timelines. But the PRT in a lot of these instances going along with his plans just feels weird.
Still not sure why Contessa is okay with Coil pulling all of this now, when she was upset with him before...
Im a little confused about the MC's inability to figure out how to deal with Shadow Stalker... With her connections and abilities it should be childs play to figure out her weakness. From asking others, to investigating it herself. Either by hacking into the PRT, buying the info(since everything prior to Coil's rise to authority had just about been leaked/sold), or by setting up some kind of internet trawlers to hunt down the info she needs. Heck, just hacking into the juvie facility to see how they contained her would have worked.
Aside from that. Her seeming complete lack of security is painful to read at times. What with her giving away keys, leaving her Warehouse open almost all the time, giving away her creations(for almost no reasons/sense beyond that she can), and not checking in one where they are...(I know it has already been resolved that the stolen stuff "disappeared")
Lastly, I just frankly don't get how Coil(or anyone) would think he could get away with stealing the MC's chemical formulas, that she is trying to patent and has told/shown a LOT of people already.
At this point it just feels like the struggles/situations the MC is dealing with are all very contrived and forced just to set up this conflict, a conflict that should have been over in a handful of chapters with none of this Drama.
I genuinely can't understand why she would still work with the PRT and has not attacked them in any way. OR why she is talking to Armsmaster, keeps telling him things, and has not done anything to block/interfere with surveillance of her Warehouse or the Docks.
Is there a reason the MC can't just make some things out of clay, then use the stone to change them piece by piece to the materials she wants them to be. Then enchant them? Wouldn't that be faster than meticulous forging when it comes to some of the things she makes?
Is there a reason the MC did not just use the stone to turn her "brig/cage" into something like a door to escape, or something weak she could break through? Or why she did not do the same to the transport helicopter?
Why would they think her staying in the Birdcage for longer would be a good idea? her capture was illegal, illegal imprisonment is illegal, and no one, beyond Coil, would have tried to imprison her again. All the arguments they used when fighting the Merchants, the Nazi's, or buying up land would equally apply to the PRT in this situation.
Not sure why this seems to be trying to cartoonishly inflate Coil and the PRT's abilities and willingness to "cross the line" and make enemies. I can get Coil, what with him not realizing she remembers the alt timelines. But the PRT in a lot of these instances going along with his plans just feels weird.
Still not sure why Contessa is okay with Coil pulling all of this now, when she was upset with him before...
Im a little confused about the MC's inability to figure out how to deal with Shadow Stalker... With her connections and abilities it should be childs play to figure out her weakness. From asking others, to investigating it herself. Either by hacking into the PRT, buying the info(since everything prior to Coil's rise to authority had just about been leaked/sold), or by setting up some kind of internet trawlers to hunt down the info she needs. Heck, just hacking into the juvie facility to see how they contained her would have worked.
Aside from that. Her seeming complete lack of security is painful to read at times. What with her giving away keys, leaving her Warehouse open almost all the time, giving away her creations(for almost no reasons/sense beyond that she can), and not checking in one where they are...(I know it has already been resolved that the stolen stuff "disappeared")
Lastly, I just frankly don't get how Coil(or anyone) would think he could get away with stealing the MC's chemical formulas, that she is trying to patent and has told/shown a LOT of people already.
At this point it just feels like the struggles/situations the MC is dealing with are all very contrived and forced just to set up this conflict, a conflict that should have been over in a handful of chapters with none of this Drama.
I genuinely can't understand why she would still work with the PRT and has not attacked them in any way. OR why she is talking to Armsmaster, keeps telling him things, and has not done anything to block/interfere with surveillance of her Warehouse or the Docks.
OerstedMagicMan
Casual LoR Enjoyer
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- Indonesia
Eh, In a chaotic multiverse, this did happen.
I'm only grateful that this CF fic still gets update.
I'm only grateful that this CF fic still gets update.
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- He/His/Him
Yeah, a bit frustrating to read a CF user that doesn't really KNOW what they have and what they're doing; it was novel for like, the time until she got the Uchiha Library and from there just became a sad amount of wasted potential.
I mean, it's still obviously pretty great, and making a fic different is what makes this one stand out from the other fics(Also the fact that apart from the OG BCF, most others have veeery sporadic update schedules compared to this one), but it's the NOT KNOWING that irks me.
Hell, I'm actually not sure, but does she even believe in her powers exactly being OOC? Like, i know most other CF users are either from here so they immediately know what's up, or they have some memories of some sort backing up their observations like Joe does, but maybe it's TaylorMade Stubbornness/Blindness™ or maybe she just never got the first few proper perks that would've expanded her worldview, but it's kinda sad to see her still putting everything in an Earth Bet/Powers point of view.
Not sure, but does she know if ANY of her powers are magic?
It makes sense due to whatever confirmation bias-ish thing(yeah I don't remember the exact terms, bite me🤷🏽♂️) covers trying to fit anything you experience into your worldview instead of immediately thinking outside the box, but I would've thought proof of another CULTURE in both the Uchiha Library and Solomon's Temple would've had at the very least had her thinking. Though it's not helping that she got a very useless uni to handle her matter concerning the Hebrew.
I mean, it's still obviously pretty great, and making a fic different is what makes this one stand out from the other fics(Also the fact that apart from the OG BCF, most others have veeery sporadic update schedules compared to this one), but it's the NOT KNOWING that irks me.
Hell, I'm actually not sure, but does she even believe in her powers exactly being OOC? Like, i know most other CF users are either from here so they immediately know what's up, or they have some memories of some sort backing up their observations like Joe does, but maybe it's TaylorMade Stubbornness/Blindness™ or maybe she just never got the first few proper perks that would've expanded her worldview, but it's kinda sad to see her still putting everything in an Earth Bet/Powers point of view.
Not sure, but does she know if ANY of her powers are magic?
It makes sense due to whatever confirmation bias-ish thing(yeah I don't remember the exact terms, bite me🤷🏽♂️) covers trying to fit anything you experience into your worldview instead of immediately thinking outside the box, but I would've thought proof of another CULTURE in both the Uchiha Library and Solomon's Temple would've had at the very least had her thinking. Though it's not helping that she got a very useless uni to handle her matter concerning the Hebrew.
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Here's the thing though, to the uninitiated powers look like magic. Also it's possible that this is just QA breaking free of it's restrictions not an ocp.
I'm only on page 4 so far, but I call BS on coil not kidnaping her when danny was thrown in jail and cps became involved. I mean all he had too do was kidnap her and what it would look like too the outside world is obviously Taylor running away and never being seen again. Then again she wasn't very noteworthy at the time and he might have lost intrest
I wasn't talking about the attack by E88, I made that comment before reading that part, I was talking about how coil didn't kidnap her as soon as he got too know that danny was in the hospital and somehow not acted before taylor even heard about what happened. If he was actually interested in getting taylor this would be way easier and less suspiscious then dinahs canon situation since he had nothing too do with it an it makes sense for taylor to dissapear to avoid cps
That doesn't matter though because
this line alone makes this fic one of the top 5 worm fics in the fandom. the rest of the fic could make the infamous my immortal HP fanfic read like Lord of the rings and this fic would still be top 10 thank you for having a straight Taylor
edit seriously don't mind my grump the longer I read the better this fic gets, the characterization and interplay between different characters are good I like every single voice in this so far and the way they bounce of each other feels so alive
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ok that's literally an anti coil perk lol he's extra double screwed now since taylor will remembber every split timeline
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Can I get a name for that other fic?