Kantai Collection: The Greatest Generation

landcollector · Apr 20, 2016

@Lancer Fire
Maybe have a PM tab to Whiskey open and copypaste the corrections as you spot them?

Whiskey Golf · Apr 20, 2016

Lancer Fire said:
Fix to 'your' mission.

I do better picking them up as I read along. Yes, causes multiple posts, but I do better pointing out when they stick out instead of trying to gather them all in bulk.

Yes, but that scattershot approach is a bit scattershot when I want to get back home and make corrections.

Generic_Generica said:
Huh.

I didn't know you wrote kancolle fanfic Whiskey. Or- Oh wait.

...

I need to go through this thread, don't I.

I also do writing for @Sheo Darren 's Eternity.

Whiskey Golf · Apr 20, 2016

landcollector said:
@Lancer Fire
Maybe have a PM tab to Whiskey open and copypaste the corrections as you spot them?

That'd work quite well, and would probably be less distracting to the other readers. It would also be significantly more efficient for me to be able to look at one thing.

Lancer Fire · Apr 20, 2016

Whiskey Golf said:
That'd work quite well, and would probably be less distracting to the other readers. It would also be significantly more efficient for me to be able to look at one thing.

Can't really happen. Consider this a generous one-time act of kindness. I'm not gonna be sticking around here much longer. Without delving into detail, I'm not coming to this site or this story again.

Castle_Bravo · Apr 20, 2016

Sakuya's Butler said:
True. Its situational. At the same time this is a mere Commander addressing someone that is at least a Vice Admiral. So at least a four rank difference, to say nothing of the Flag mounted on his desk. Foreign officer or not, one word from him to the Pentagon and Yvonne could very likely be hauling ass back across the Pacific and find herself in front of a very irate USN Admiral & diplomatic attache. Well, if Yvonne wasnt who she actually is.

And Japan can be real touchy about when formalities are to be obeyed without any deviations from them, while at other times you can throw formalities right out the proverbial window at the drop of a hat.

As for the gate guard? Situational. They both effectively had time to do it, plus he DID salute her which generally means she's required by regs to return it. If he hadn't saluted, probably she wouldn't have bothered about the formalities either.

If Yvonne is indoors, she wouldn't salute anyone. Navy doesn't salute indoors.

obssesednuker · Apr 21, 2016

Castle_Bravo said:
If Yvonne is indoors, she wouldn't solute anyone. Navy doesn't solute indoors.

If you had just made that typo once, I probably wouldn't have been bothered enough to even point it out but the fact you typed "solute" twice made my eye twitch.

Genolution · Apr 21, 2016

Plus, solute is a noun. Yvonne is solvating.

obssesednuker · Apr 21, 2016

Genolution said:
Plus, solute is a noun. Yvonne is solvating.

She's in the process of dissolving in some sort of liquid? :???:

Genolution · Apr 21, 2016

No, that would be "being solvated". The intermolecular/lattice forces of whatever is suspended in Yvonne (probably ice cream) are being overcome by her solvent molecules's polar protic attractions and so the solute nuclei are being surrounded by Yvonne molecules.

obssesednuker · Apr 21, 2016

Genolution said:
No, that would be "being solvated". The intermolecular/lattice forces of whatever is suspended in Yvonne (probably ice cream) are being overcome by her solvent molecules's polar protic attractions and so the solute nuclei are being surrounded by Yvonne molecules.

That... sounds like it could be used in a rather lewd way.

Genolution · Apr 21, 2016

Something something Yamaprise.

The process of a Yamato ion being solvated by a pack of Big E molecules is highly exothermic.

We best hope that the addition of Musashi does not result in it precipitating out; thankfully, we can add in Dakota and Kongou ligands so as to form stability complexes that keep the Yamato solvated.

Whiskey Golf · Apr 21, 2016

... yeah see this is why I dropped chemistry and went for English Literature

Genolution · Apr 21, 2016

Whiskey Golf said:
... yeah see this is why I dropped chemistry and went for English Literature

DERIVE A QUALITATIVE MOLECULAR ORBITAL BONDING MODEL FOR DIMERIZED BORANE THAT EXPLAINS ITS STRUCTURE AND BOND ORDER!
If I did that correctly, I just triggered flashbacks right now.

Kiriel · Apr 21, 2016

Genolution said:
DERIVE A QUALITATIVE MOLECULAR ORBITAL BONDING MODEL FOR DIMERIZED BORANE THAT EXPLAINS ITS STRUCTURE AND BOND ORDER!
If I did that correctly, I just triggered flashbacks right now.

And this is the reason why I decided to study Psychology; Lewds are much easier to understand.

Dalek Ix · Apr 22, 2016

Genolution said:
DERIVE A QUALITATIVE MOLECULAR ORBITAL BONDING MODEL FOR DIMERIZED BORANE THAT EXPLAINS ITS STRUCTURE AND BOND ORDER!
If I did that correctly, I just triggered flashbacks right now.

I SHALL HURT YOU.

Tiroth · Apr 22, 2016

I probably shouldn't be laughing quite as much as I am now. xD

(For the record, I did study chemistry)

Whiskey Golf · Apr 22, 2016

Genolution said:
DERIVE A QUALITATIVE MOLECULAR ORBITAL BONDING MODEL FOR DIMERIZED BORANE THAT EXPLAINS ITS STRUCTURE AND BOND ORDER!
If I did that correctly, I just triggered flashbacks right now.

I see words in English but they mean nothing to me.

(Also I studied chemisty in Malay. Al-kimia, the arabic word from which we get alchemy, is actually Chemistry.)

Genolution · Apr 22, 2016

I was just physically assaulted by a lab report and exam; I must spread the suffering. The Yamaprise jokes are a bonus.

Kiyone4ever · Apr 22, 2016

We command officers should know better than to turn to scientists for solutions...

gS49 · Apr 22, 2016

obssesednuker said:
That... sounds like it could be used in a rather lewd way.

I have observed that on SV (and on that other forum), ANYTHING can be used in a lewd way.

This post will probably be used lewdly by someone(s), just on principle.

Pensive Rumination · Apr 22, 2016

Whiskey Golf said:
"Word gets around very quickly on this base. I never would have thought of that. You have a way with Kanmusu. That's more than I can say for some of our officers," the Admiral commented.

Whiskey Golf said:
"It's a pity you're with the United States Navy. You're a natural at handling these girls, which is more than I can say for some of our officers. I wouldn't object to you serving in my command," the Admiral added.

Basically the exact same sentence. You could stand to lose one of them.

The Kaga opening is definitely a nice touch. Both as an alternate point of view and apossible misdirect as to who Swanson would end up choosing for her team.

Whiskey Golf · Apr 22, 2016

Pensive Rumination said:
Basically the exact same sentence. You could stand to lose one of them.

The Kaga opening is definitely a nice touch. Both as an alternate point of view and apossible misdirect as to who Swanson would end up choosing for her team.

It was deliberate choice on my part. Gibb!Teitoku tryong to make a point.

And glad to know you liked the kaga opening.

Pensive Rumination · Apr 22, 2016

Whiskey Golf said:
It was deliberate choice on my part. Gibb!Teitoku tryong to make a point.

And glad to know you liked the kaga opening.

Ah. Still, think you could chuck in an "As I said"? It makes it clearer that he's deliberately repeating the point for empahsis and not unintentional repetition.

Always Late · Apr 23, 2016

Whiskey Golf said:
Every time I close my eyes, I see them.

It always comes back to this. Always the same ferry. Always surrounded by the dead and the dying.

I can hear their weak pleas. "Help us," they beg me. "Save us."

But I come late to their aid. I am powerless to save them.

My fighters and torpedo planes and bombers can destroy or drive away the Abyssals. But my weaponry cannot save a dying child. My aircraft cannot combat sickness like medicines and vaccines. They cannot become food that will repel starvation and strengthen the weakened. And they cannot replace the lives lost to the demons of the deep.

I can exact vengeance for the dead. But my victory is meaningless. They still died. They died because I am a failure. Because if I was better, they would still be alive.

So I push myself harder and harder. I must be stronger. I must be perfect. We stand on a knife's edge. If I falter, we are all lost.

We stand on the edge of destruction, and yet the Americans do nothing.

It has been a year since we came back. Twelve months of continuous combat. But the Americans sit in their safe home, protected from attack, and do nothing.

Why are they not summoning their Kanmusu? Why have their mighty fleets not returned to scour the Abyssals from the seas? Can they not see that we are suffering, that we are worn to the bone, that we are not enough?

We need them. But they are not here. And victory is ever distant. It is all we can do to maintain the precarious balance of survival.

The Americans have abandoned us. In deed, if not in words.

But I... I will not abandon my nation.

On my honor as a member of the First Carrier Division, this I swear. I am aircraft carrier Kaga. I will not be found wanting.

I will do my duty.

-=-

Obviously, all new.

Whiskey Golf said:
so the Yokosuka Admiral decided to recommend Matsuda

sasahara17 said:
so the Admiral decided to recommend him

Whiskey Golf said:
given he knows how to use them best

sasahara17 said:
since he knows how to use them best.

Whiskey Golf said:
steal foreign secrets from an allied intelligence officer; in other words, an act of espionage.

sasahara17 said:
steal foreign secrets from an allied intelligence officer. Effectively, it was an act of espionage.

Whiskey Golf said:
Normally this kind of thing would have sunk the man's career outright. It was only the Admiral's gamble that had given Matsuda a second chance.

sasahara17 said:
This kind of thing would normally have sunk the man's career outright, and it was only the Admiral's gamble that had given Matsuda a second chance.

Whiskey Golf said:
By undertaking this high risk, high reward assignment, the black stain on Matsuda's career might be mitigated or even erased.

sasahara17 said:
It was only by undertaking this high risk, high reward assignment that the black stain left on Matsuda's career could be mitigated.

Whiskey Golf said:
If he failed... Well, he was pretty much screwed anyway, as the admiralty would make him the perfect scapegoat to foist their failure on.

sasahara17 said:
If he failed, well, he was pretty much screwed anyway, and would make a perfect scapegoat for the admiralty to foist their failure on.

Whiskey Golf said:
Yvonne didn't like the logic behind the decision, but she could see its appeal to the Japanese high command.

sasahara17 said:
Yvonne didn't like the logic to it, but she could see where the appeal for the Japanese high command would be.

Whiskey Golf said:
She didn't want to be in Matsuda's shoes right now.

sasahara17 said:
She didn't want to be in his shoes right now.

Whiskey Golf said:
Yvonne hoped he wasn't the kind to carry a grudge

sasahara17 said:
Yvonne hoped he wouldn't be carrying a grudge

Whiskey Golf said:
With that said, Yvonne turned to regard the guard on the other side of the guardhouse window

sasahara17 said:
Yvonne said, turning back to regard the guard on the other side of the guardhouse window

Whiskey Golf said:
how the carriers practice

sasahara17 said:
how the Carriers practice

Whiskey Golf said:
"Sorry, Shoukaku-nee, but it's just got me really riled up..."

sasahara17 said:
"Don't try and change the subject, Shoukaku-nee!"

Whiskey Golf said:
Safe to say, this was the morning's hot topic.

sasahara17 said:
Safe to say, this had been the morning's hot topic.

Whiskey Golf said:
an honor most Japanese soldiers

sasahara17 said:
an honour most Japanese soldiers

Whiskey Golf said:
The Admiral wouldn't be doing anything without good reason

sasahara17 said:
The Admiral wouldn't be doing what he is without good reason

Whiskey Golf said:
"Distractions on the battlefield are liabilities,"

sasahara17 said:
"Distractions on the battlefield is a liability,"

sasahara17 said:
"What does she think we are, pocket monsters?" Zuikaku grumbled

Whiskey Golf said:
American Navy officer

sasahara17 said:
American navy officer

Whiskey Golf said:
trying to fulfill America's demands

sasahara17 said:
trying to fulfil America's demands

Whiskey Golf said:
"Or so they say," Kaga returned, her gaze unwavering. "It has been a year, Yamato."

sasahara17 said:
"Or so they say," Kaga returned, her gaze unwavering.

Whiskey Golf said:
As it turned out, nobody needed to.

sasahara17 said:
As it turned out nobody needed to.

Whiskey Golf said:
Everyone, Yamato and Kaga included, started.

sasahara17 said:
Everyone, Yamato and Kaga included, jolted in alarm.

Whiskey Golf said:
"The quiver? It's actually my favorite bit."

sasahara17 said:
"The quiver? It's actually my favourite bit."

Whiskey Golf said:
Zuikaku shook her head, marveling at the brilliance of it.

sasahara17 said:
Zuikaku shook her head, marvelling at the brilliance of it.

Whiskey Golf said:
I trained with a few members of the US National Archery team.

sasahara17 said:
I trained with a few members of the US Archery team.

Whiskey Golf said:
surface escorts are its armor,

sasahara17 said:
surface escorts are its armour

Whiskey Golf said:
"You certainly aren't wasting any time. I'm surprised you went with Zuikaku. I'd have picked Kaga or Akagi.

sasahara17 said:
"You certainly aren't wasting any time. I would have thought you'd have selected a member of the First Carrier Division.

Whiskey Golf said:
More sea time, more experience, more skill. More kills," the Admiral mused. "Probably Kaga. She's more driven."

sasahara17 said:
They are far more skilled and experienced than Zuikaku," the Admiral mused.

Whiskey Golf said:
Changing the program to one to one sessions was pretty smart."

sasahara17 said:
Changing the program to one to one sessions was a stroke of genius."

Whiskey Golf said:
You have a way with Kanmusu. That's more than I can say for some of our officers," the Admiral commented.

sasahara17 said:
. You have a way with our Kanmusu that I honestly wish some of our own officers could emulate!" the Admiral commended with a laugh.

Whiskey Golf said:
. You're a natural at handling these girls, which is more than I can say for some of our officers. I wouldn't object to you serving in my command," the Admiral added.

sasahara17 said:
Handling these girls is tiring, and you do it like it comes naturally to you. If you don't mind me saying, I would love to have someone like you under my command," the Admiral added.

, for those who care about that.

Genolution · Apr 25, 2016

Someone on the committee should probably xpost the new British German shipgirl beach party omake from sb.

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