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...yes?
I mean, this is the big plot twist of the Rebel Yell campaign. Among the chaos of the Zerg invasion and the revelation of the Confederacy's wrongdoings, Raynor and the Magistrate make an alliance with Mengsk and the Sons of Korhal and find themselves increasingly involved in his plan to topple the Confederacy. Only to find out that they have enabled a Full Circle Revolution and put a mass murderer on a throne at the cost of entire planets.
In this context, the fact that the Dominion is barely even a new coat of paint over the Confederacy is entirely appropiate, because it helps to sell the emotional gut-punch.
I will also have to contend your characterization of Mengsk as a "cartoony evil emperor." He is shallow as a person, but in very believable ways that contribute to his villainy. And his shallowness as a person does detract from his depth as a character. He was perhaps a genuine freedom fighter at one point, spurred by the atrocities of the Confederacy, only to end up wearing the skin of the monster he slayed. That's pretty compelling.
You complain that Rebel Yell did not substantially alter the political sphere. Fine. I could contend that the destruction of entire planets thanks to Mengsk's mad schemes and Tassadar's decision to rebel against the Conclave's glass-first-ask-questions-later orders were pretty significant shake ups...but I won't.
Instead, I will say that the Full Circle Revolution served the big plot twist of the SC Terran Campaign quite effectively, and thus was good storytelling. It's not Shakespeare, but I liked it.
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@Leila Hann, I rather liked your rewrite of Brood War and the way it closed up the plot holes while hitting the same beats.
It makes me curious as to what your version of SC2 would have looked like (the Kerralisks aside, which I am admittedly not a big fan of). You seem like the sort to have some notes tucked away somewhere.
As for my own ideas...well, here's some spitballing on my part. Writing for the Terrans is the easiest part, since they give us the most material to work with - they remain a recipe for internicine fighting and some good old fashioned war, plotting, and skulduggery.
- The Confederacy/Dominion is well and truly in ashes. It's not going to turn up whole and powerful as if it wasn't ravaged by regime change, the Zerg, the UED, etc.
- The new villain Terran faction is the Kel-Morian Combine, which is now resurgent in the face of the death of the Confederacy/Dominion's death. They are an unpleasant sort, who are ruthlessly seizing and exploiting the Dominion's former holdings, turning lots of former Dominion civilians into debt slaves, wage slaves, and actual slaves to enrich their corporatocracy.
- The protagonist Terran faction is the Umojan Protectorate (the pragmatic democracy), who also happen to be quietly backing James Raynor and other groups resisting the Combine.
- The Dominion Remnants and the Ghost Academy (a quasi-independent branch of the Dominion, kind of like the CIA with psychics), inspired by the likes of Allen Schezar, have been working on controlling Zerg through their Ghosts. Their backers are Mengsk with what resources he has left to his name (because he is a persistent bastard if nothing else) and/or the Protectorate, because the Umojans have been scared by the sheer instability and chaos of the alien wars ravaging the sector, to the degree that they are willing to invest in mad science to tip the scales in their own favour.
- The ultimate ambition of the Academy and their backers is the creation of a homegrown Queen of Blades - a human overmind loyal to themselves. Of course, Kerrigan would come down on them with the wrath of an angry godess if she ever found out...
There are a variety of possible Terran campaigns, and all them sort of write themselves. It's more difficult to put together the pieces together for the Zerg and Protoss, because there is less to work with.
Kerrigan is implied to have gained full control of the Zerg, though it is not impossible that there are other broods out there. Which leaves us with the question of what her defining goal even is now that she won the Brood War and become the dominant military power in the sector. Maintain her position? Become even stronker by snatching up the feral broods on Aiur? Not exactly the stuff of riveting character development.
And the Protoss are, as you have pointed out, rather bare-bones in their characterization - their main source of internal conflict was the tyrannical and self-defeating Conclave, but they are now dead. Their obvious course of action is to try to rebuild themselves on Shakuras and to orient their economy to more guns and less butter while hoping that Kerrigan doesn's come to finish them off...but that doesn't provide a compelling narrative either.
Oh, and I still don't know what "Dark Origin" should lead to. Sinister and horrifying though that mission was, it drew a lot of its strength from its sheer vagueness and uncertainty. I know that it shouldn't lead to an army of hybrids invading from offscreen to wipe out human and terran life in the name of a generic doomsday villain, but I don't know where it should lead. (Nor do I understand how Kerrigan is supposed to have inadverdantly sped up Duran's plans).
...I guess a Protoss campaign could revolve around Duran's efforts to further sow chaos and destruction in the Koprulu Sector, thus preparing things for whatever his plan is, and Zeratul's efforts to pursue and stop him? I'm frankly at a loss.
What, pray tell, would be the impetus for Kerrigan's invasion of the UED? Why is she willing to run off and challenge them apparently without completely subjegating Koprulu first? Do they have something she urgently wants?Something I'd do in Starcraft 2 is split each of the races into two subfactions.
For terrans, it would be obvious. UED and Koprulu. Koprulu play very similar to the original terrans. UED has cheaper, shittier infantry, and more focus on air power.
For protoss...I'm tempted to say Khalai and Nerazim, but the way they seemed to be integrating in both my own and the canon versions of Brood War would make that feel like a step backward. Maybe instead it would be Daelim (mix of Aiur refugees and Nerazim, based out of Shakuras, who we last saw in Brood War) and a new faction made up of protoss from far flung colonies who weren't hit by the zerg, but have regrouped now after the shock of the empire being cored. I might draw on canon Starcraft 2 a bit here and have these guys be the ones who dug up the old protoss war machines from their far-flung vaults; the motherships, colossi, etc. They'd be a more mech-focused protoss subfaction, while the Daelim would be more magic and specops focused (due to their high and dark templars, which the colonist protoss lack).
For zerg...one faction is obviously Kerrigan's swarm, but I can see two options for the other. Option a) would be surviving cerebrates, in which case their zerg would be the original flavor while Kerrigan's would be somewhat humanified. Option b) would be for the other zerg faction to be Duran and his hybrids leading a brood of their own, in which case I'd have Kerrigan's faction be the original flavor and Duran's be the weirder, more humanoid (protossoid) ones.
Umojan Protectorate and Kel-Morian Combine are the dominant powers in the Koprulu sector now. The Dominion has been reduced to a shadow of its former self, and Mengsk is starting to lose it. Raynor either joined the Umojans, or went back to the Daelim and is part of a small human expat community on Shakuras.
I'm not sure how I'd get everyone involved. But I know I'd want the first major event of the game to be Kerrigan's invasion of the UED, while in her wake Duran begins setting his own plans in motion and threatening the Koprulu terrans and protoss of both flavors. He might also start fucking around with the protoss somehow, increasing the tensions between the Mechtoss and the Daelim. Not sure how.
I'm unfortunately at a loss as to who and what Duran is. His goal in "Dark Origin" seems to have been essentially the same as the Overmind's: fuse the protoss and zerg to create a new species with purity of form and essence alike. The obvious answer is to do what the canon SC2 did and make him a xel'naga or xel'naga servitor, but well...the WAY that Blizzard ended up doing that was pretty darned stupid. And...the xel'naga always struck me as one of the weakest aspects of the story even in the original game, so I'm cautious of giving them an active role in modern events. Not sure.
What, pray tell, would be the impetus for Kerrigan's invasion of the UED? Why is she willing to run off and challenge them apparently without completely subjegating Koprulu first? Do they have something she urgently wants?
I tried that already. It would be identical to Starcraft and I would be liable to get sued.Then you're not writing Starcraft, though. Why not just cut off the labels and make your own thing?
That's damning with faint praise. I don't like it because of the plot holes, the lack of scale and the obvious rush job.I have read @Unhappy Anchovy's LP of SC/BW and SC2. While he gave SC2 a well deserved tearing apart, I remember him overall liking the campaigns and praising Rebel Yell, explaining (for example) the distincly logical and organic ways that Mengsk was able to convince Raynor, Kerrigan, and the Magistrate to follow him for as long as they did. That is only the beginning of a long list of good things he raises about the writing in the 1998 stories.
He did not give the campaigns a free pass on their plot holes, but he certainly liked them overall.
Feel free to correct me if I am wrong, Anchovy.
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I'm sorry, but this is a blatent falsehood. Tassadar's rebellion against the Conclave's orders was a big plot point.
I don't care about fictional villains unless they are deep and complex. I am not a child anymore.UA is a wanker. Also the thing is most villains aren't deep or complex. Generally most dictators are monsters who would let the world burn if they didn't have power. That's how it is.
Most of the time the "greater good" is a load of horseshit
You are shackling yourself to a story you just stated is completely stupid. If you only had the manual to work with, what would you have written?Something I'd do in Starcraft 2 is split each of the races into two subfactions.
For terrans, it would be obvious. UED and Koprulu. Koprulu play very similar to the original terrans. UED has cheaper, shittier infantry, and more focus on air power.
For protoss...I'm tempted to say Khalai and Nerazim, but the way they seemed to be integrating in both my own and the canon versions of Brood War would make that feel like a step backward. Maybe instead it would be Daelim (mix of Aiur refugees and Nerazim, based out of Shakuras, who we last saw in Brood War) and a new faction made up of protoss from far flung colonies who weren't hit by the zerg, but have regrouped now after the shock of the empire being cored. I might draw on canon Starcraft 2 a bit here and have these guys be the ones who dug up the old protoss war machines from their far-flung vaults; the motherships, colossi, etc. They'd be a more mech-focused protoss subfaction, while the Daelim would be more magic and specops focused (due to their high and dark templars, which the colonist protoss lack).
For zerg...one faction is obviously Kerrigan's swarm, but I can see two options for the other. Option a) would be surviving cerebrates, in which case their zerg would be the original flavor while Kerrigan's would be somewhat humanified. Option b) would be for the other zerg faction to be Duran and his hybrids leading a brood of their own, in which case I'd have Kerrigan's faction be the original flavor and Duran's be the weirder, more humanoid (protossoid) ones.
Umojan Protectorate and Kel-Morian Combine are the dominant powers in the Koprulu sector now. The Dominion has been reduced to a shadow of its former self, and Mengsk is starting to lose it. Raynor either joined the Umojans, or went back to the Daelim and is part of a small human expat community on Shakuras.
I'm not sure how I'd get everyone involved. But I know I'd want the first major event of the game to be Kerrigan's invasion of the UED, while in her wake Duran begins setting his own plans in motion and threatening the Koprulu terrans and protoss of both flavors. He might also start fucking around with the protoss somehow, increasing the tensions between the Mechtoss and the Daelim. Not sure how.
I'm unfortunately at a loss as to who and what Duran is. His goal in "Dark Origin" seems to have been essentially the same as the Overmind's: fuse the protoss and zerg to create a new species with purity of form and essence alike. The obvious answer is to do what the canon SC2 did and make him a xel'naga or xel'naga servitor, but well...the WAY that Blizzard ended up doing that was pretty darned stupid. And...the xel'naga always struck me as one of the weakest aspects of the story even in the original game, so I'm cautious of giving them an active role in modern events. Not sure.
I want to know what Starcraft would have been like if I wrote it with the benefit of hindsight. Why do you people keep giving me crap for being unhappy with the canon and wanting better?I mean, you're also shakling yourself to a story that you just stated is completly stupid.
Personally I don't get what's the problem with it. We all like stories that are completly stupid every now and then, cuz yeah, it's silly and doesn't make any sense, that's exactly the beauty of it. You just don't have to take it seriously.
I think you are on to something. I will write a prospectus for my Starcraft rip-off and you can tell me whether it is worthy of a lawsuit.Then you're not writing Starcraft, though. Why not just cut off the labels and make your own thing?
You have been describing traditionally some deep divides between what you want and what Starcraft has.
I think the bland mediocre Starcraft manual is workable, but the games' stories are terrible so I want to see someone else's followup to the manual with blackjack and hookers.You have been describing traditionally some deep divides between what you want and what Starcraft has.
Lemme lay out a setting description.
In a dark, wartorn future, humanity has taken to the stars. All known aliens are hostile, but humanity isn't exactly the good guys here, either. Worlds are razed for questionable reasons, those in charge are often corrupt, if not out right malevolent, humanity is protected by questionably sane 'marines' in power armor, having psychic powers is grounds to be kidnapped by the government, and when the all devouring bio swarm comes along things are dire enough for even humans and aliens to set aside their differences, at least long enough for one pitched battle...
Now did I just describe Starcraft? Or Warhammer 40k?
Indeed, I could do the same thing with Starcraft and the Starship Troopers movie.
Psychically powered secret service, the ground troopers are bloodily slaughtered and little more than canon fodder, the aliens are commanded by a specialized cast of 'brain' bugs with no technology in sight...
You can use a surface level description to make any number of settings sound overly alike. But you keep talking about how you'd want to radically overhaul Starcraft, both on the overall background level and on the actual arcs of the story level.
You can say you don't want to reinvent the wheel, but what you seem to want is to reinvent the setting, so I'm not seeing where that comes in.
"Hmm. This setting isn't going over well. What should we do?"A reboot, basically. Again, the setting is still recognizable so I don't see how it is reinventing anything.
It's damning with faint praise to say "this thing has issues, but the positives outweigh the negatives?"That's damning with faint praise. I don't like it because of the plot holes, the lack of scale and the obvious rush job.
If you had only the manual to work with, would you or anyone else here have written the same story? I highly doubt it.
Tassadar kept happily glassing planets anyway despite promising not to. He is a hypocrite.
Furthermore all this happened because of writer fiat anyway.
Aldaris: En Taro Adun, Executor. I am Judicator Aldaris, and I have been sent by the Conclave to serve and counsel you. The former Executor, Tassadar, was commanded to halt the Zerg progress in the Terran sector by burning the infested human worlds.
Aldaris: Unfortunately, he disregarded his orders and attempted to destroy the Zerg while sparing the Terrans from the flame. Clearly, Tassadar has failed us. You must not.
Kerrigan was hinted at having something in 06. It also explained why the overmind left her on char even when the dark Templar were at his door. Amon as a darker power also could have workedI'm generally wary of those massive multiway crossover type fics, but I'm always willing to offer my opinion if its solicited.
Messiah Kerrigan and Actually Satan Amon were probably two of the worst ideas that SC2 introduced, at least in my opinion. They're not among the elements I'd make a point of including, unless you have an interesting take that makes them more sensible and compelling.
By chance ever played Legacy of the Confederation?I think the bland mediocre Starcraft manual is workable, but the games' stories are terrible so I want to see someone else's followup to the manual with blackjack and hookers.
He did not give the campaigns a free pass on their plot holes, but he certainly liked them overall.
Feel free to correct me if I am wrong, Anchovy.
What IS Starcraft at this point? SC2 neatly severed every major plot point so that nothing remains. Kerry and Raynor are gone forever and they pretty much took over the setting while they existed. They ruined it forever."Hmm. This setting isn't going over well. What should we do?"
"Well, a lot of people don't like the tone or the latest arc. Maybe we should reinvent it somehow?"
"Mm. Could work. But we should reboot it, so we can be clear that none of those ideas from the later arcs apply unless explicitly included."
The basic process behind most series reboots, if I had to wager.
But since you aren't the IP owner here, there's literally no reason you can't take the basics of the presented scenario, tweak things to your personal taste, and rename things. Boom, your own setting.
You explicitly don't want to work with the canon characterizations, so it's not like you plan to have Very Obviously Arcturus Mengsk anyways. Almost none of Starcraft's ideas are new ones.
The Protoss are a psychic species with a caste system and psychic tech that is older than humanity. In other words, they're the Eldar with a fresh coat of paint to stop Games Workshop suing Blizzard. The Terrans have been done again and again. It's just humans under a new moniker. The Zerg are the Tyranids or the Starship Troopers bugs.
None of this stuff is so obviously Starcraft that you couldn't use the core ideas without people screaming plagiarism. In fact, a lot of these ideas are so generic that people wouldn't necessarily make the connection at all if you quietly created your serial numbers filed off setting and didn't announce your inspiration.
Because it's not a serial numbers filed off idea. You want to take what you like about Starcraft and make a setting out of that. In fact, your definition is so narrow you explicit want to ignore everything but the manual, at which point none of the iconic Starcraft units or characters even exist.
I'm telling you 'why not give new serial numbers to your divergent idea rather than carve Starcraft serial numbers into an idea that isn't clearly starcraft?'
The manual explicitly stated Tassadar resolved he would not burn more worlds at the end of the protoss history chapter. The games are effectively an alternate universe from the manual, making numerous unnecessary contradictions and generally doing a terrible job with the plot hooks given. The game story is a rush job that haphazardly bulldozes all the world building previously established.It's damning with faint praise to say "this thing has issues, but the positives outweigh the negatives?"
Also, I have no idea where you are getting the information on Tassadar from, but it doesn't seem like the game itself. First you claim that the game "ignored" the manual saying that the Protoss made a decision not to glass any more human planets. This was false. Now you are saying Tassadar "made a promise" not to burn any more words, only to keep doing it. This is also false.
Here is what Aldaris had to say on the matter:
There you go. That, plus events in Rebel Yell, tells us all we need to know.
Someone over at the battle.net forums posted their own idea for a reboot. I internalized a few of its ideas myself but I disagree with some of its storytelling decisions.
The original forum thread is at: https://us.battle.net/forums/en/sc2/topic/17606004934
The author also compiled the thread into a PDF and included the timeline as a separate PDF. They used to be on deviantart but a friendly anonymous person mirrored the PDFs on googledocs.
Moving the goalposts, huh?The manual explicitly stated Tassadar resolved he would not burn more worlds at the end of the protoss history chapter. The games are effectively an alternate universe from the manual, making numerous unnecessary contradictions and generally doing a terrible job with the plot hooks given. The game story is a rush job that haphazardly bulldozes all the world building previously established.
(To end this post on a slightly friendlier note, I also suggest that you rename the stuff in your story and make it officially a work of original fiction. Star Wars started production as Flash Gordon fanfiction, and now its essentially a religion.)
Wouldn't surprise me, it blatantly is. It is amazing to me they got away with 'these are Marines. They have the basic design of Adeptus Astartes, but totally aren't those, honest!' as the bluntest example.Doesn't the story go that Starcraft was itself a Warhammer 40K game until Blizzard decided they could file the serial numbers off and make their own IP?
Not to mention the green Orcs and steampunk dorfs in Warcraft...Wouldn't surprise me, it blatantly is. It is amazing to me they got away with 'these are Marines. They have the basic design of Adeptus Astartes, but totally aren't those, honest!' as the bluntest example.
I can think of at least two things I'd change if I was in charge of Starcraft.
Kerrigan is a weird brain spider monster, Raynor is a buff space lady and they're going to smooch. Also some space wars might happen.
I actually didn't care at all about the plot of Starcraft. I just remember being annoyed that after Kerrigan's transformation was so built up she was just a hot lady in bug cosplay.
It is amazing to me they got away with 'these are Marines. They have the basic design of Adeptus Astartes, but totally aren't those, honest!' as the bluntest example.
I fully believe that Raynor/Fenix would have been a thing had the latter not been stuck in a dragoon by the time they met.