Astra: I'm not old! I'm not olllllld!!! :sour:
"it is not the time, it is the mileage"

if you replace "elder" by "expert [because nobody else has that level of basic knowledge]" , then she would qualify for the definition
on account of actually being able to read and get more information (Step 1 : ask may. Step 2 disregard may, ask brendan. Step 3 fiddle with pokedex. Step 4 ask brendan about the bug in the pokedex. ... step 42 distracted profit ?)
 
While there's a lot of things to be said about this chapter, most have already been said, so I'll mention something new:

Stupid crappy damp sealant; she bet humans had something five times as strong that could dry instantly. Stupid humans, grumble mumble—
Congratulations and condolences Astra; this has a good chance of ending with the village being subsumed into the world's capitalist market economy, and you too can purchase better sealants.
 
Absolute cinema! The whole chapter was great, but what really cracked me up was these little Abra being mortally offended at how shitty the teleports used by the Kirlia were. "I came out of the egg weaving better teleports, aren't you a grown-up? No wonder you almost had a brain aneurysm getting here. Do better."

I'm wondering if the spoon thing would boost the Kirlia's power/precision too, or if that's unique to the Abra line.
In the games, at least, the Twisted Spoon item works on all psychic-type moves.
 
Effect grows more when have more,] Echo said, shrugging. [Used to boil water. Stew, steam room, very handy! Many strange rocks in cave. Some shiny, some have strange energy.] Her face darkened. [Some very not good. Give feeling of stagnation. Not like; throw all find into river.]

I'm going to be extremely amused if Rena finds a Dawn Stone as a courtship gift to Grandpa by complete accident.

Either because it's pretty or thinking of the shiny stones she knows of and thought it'd be useful.

And before anyone says Dawn Stones weren't introduced in Gen 3, neither were Shiny Stones.

It's also just neat to note what Rena only having one spoon does - she's better but she's not at full capacity. Which gives the village some more wiggle room (Look I wouldn't want to mess with an Alakazam that could bring down cave systems as a Kadabra with a handicap) but very much leaves room for improvement/"Okay we desperately need to find a second Spoon" situation for hijinks.
 
Honestly, Miracle Eye is such a game changer for the ralts village that Rena is invaluable. even with the crippling loss of one of her spoons.

The ability to effect or sense dark types with psychic power is massive. It is still a horrendously dangerous match-up, but it goes from "Unstopable, Unsensable Threat" to "Extremely dangerous, but stop-able and sense-able".


Just the ability to actually sense where dark types are will make finding new frontiers for sources of food much safer.
 
The ability to effect or sense dark types with psychic power is massive. It is still a horrendously dangerous match-up, but it goes from "Unstopable, Unsensable Threat" to "Extremely dangerous, but stop-able and sense-able".

And the village does currently have one Mawhile as a Steel Tank which doesn't have the dark psychic match up from hell problems … honestly I can see the cutest Aron being very popular in the village after an evolution being a dark type deterrent if said cutest decides she wants to stay in the village instead of coming with in the future
 
And the village does currently have one Mawhile as a Steel Tank which doesn't have the dark psychic match up from hell problems … honestly I can see the cutest Aron being very popular in the village after an evolution being a dark type deterrent if said cutest decides she wants to stay in the village instead of coming with in the future
Don't forget The future insecninga brothers as bug is super effective against dark
 
"Rena," the Alakazam said, nodding to herself. "You may call me Rena."
A psychic fox named Rena, eh? Hmm.

Loved the chapter! The entire arc has been great, with Astra getting to show some leadership and help her community in ways other than just battling. And now she has reconnected with her family and accomplished something both positive and tangible, so she's hopefully feeling better and ready to take the next step on her journey.
 
I loved this. It was so incredibly heartwarming. Especially...

She sniffed, wiping a budding tear from her eyes, and looked up to see a veritable fountain pouring down Echo's whiskers. She'd reached down to grab the Abra—who'd started to move toward the stew in hopes of seconds—and clutched him tightly, caught between awe, joy, and a painful, overwhelming relief.

[He is alive,] she gasped, shuddering. [My {Blood of my blood}. Oh, ▒░▒▓▒░▒▓ ▒░▒▓▒░. Darkness take me, he is alive.]

[Not unusual,] Echo said, voice laden with whatever was left when sorrow was ground away by time. [Not many with good ▒░▒▓▒░▒▓. Tch. Spark. Even if, fires unfed. Embers smothered, starved, until...]

She sighed, bowing her head.

[Naught but cinders.]

Grandma has been trapped a long, long time with nothing but ghosts, and children who were naught but 'cinders', whom she never expected to actually properly come to life... It was basically like they were already dead ghosts themselves, or coma patients. But now...

[Oh,] she repeated, tail and whiskers twitching. She looked at all of her Abra, each single one now exuding more liveliness and joy than she'd likely have ever expected them to experience at all. [Is...all happy. All fed. Warm. Bright. Alive.]

The plaza was swarming with Kirlia and Ralts, each and every one holding or playing with a bright, excited Abra. A few floated through the air, directed by their Kirlia's telekinesis in a mockery of flight, while some were simply being gently thrown into the air, only to be caught immediately afterward. Dozens were playing some kind of teleport-tag with a large gang of Ralts, each Abra flashing somewhere else just as they were about to be caught.

It's beautiful. Her clan's children have been restored to life. To good health, and to potential growth. Astra resurrected her family's future.

No wonder she evolved after such new possibilities were opened to her.
 
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[Effect grows more when have more,] Echo said, shrugging. [Used to boil water. Stew, steam room, very handy! Many strange rocks in cave. Some shiny, some have strange energy.] Her face darkened. [Some very not good. Give feeling of stagnation. Not like; throw all find into river.]

Did... did she throw Everstones in to the river? The same river she and the Abra drank from and that one Kirlia said tasted like stones? Is that why none of the Abra have been able to evolve?
 
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Did... did she throw Everstones in to the river? The same river she and the Abra drank from and that one Kirlia said tasted like stones? Is that why none of the Abra have been able to evolve?

Pretty sure they weren't evolving due to lack of stimulation and new things to learn, but ever stone water could have been a contributing factor.
 
I'm wondering if the spoon thing would boost the Kirlia's power/precision too, or if that's unique to the Abra line. I vaguely recall that some Pokemon lore had spoons somehow helping human psychics too, so it could make sense, but maybe it'd come at a cost of the Ralts line's Fairy power, or something asking those lines? Like concentrating on spoons lessens the other stuff they could be concentrating on?
TwistedSpoon boosts all psychic type power a bit. Author is using Gen3 as base so fairy types don't exist.
 
Did... did she throw Everstones in to the river? The same river she and the Abra drank from and that one Kirlia said tasted like stones? Is that why none of the Abra have been able to evolve?

Depends where in the river they were thrown.

There was definitely a disposal area and water taken upstream of that.

So reading back - the joke when Rena/Grandma/Echo first appeared was

Having a bad day? No problem! Get kidnapped by a Kadabra and it will be everybody else who has a bad day instead.

And I do think it's worth pointing out that while Rena, formerly known as Echo aka Grandma is very much someone that Astra trusts and respects this is what her companions remember:

Psychic power flared, purple light illuminating the cavern entrance for a split second.

And in that split second, between Astra and her friends, something appeared.

"Kadabra!" The foxlike figure roared. Tall as a Kirlia, its gargantuan yellow flail thrashed wildly as it brandished its claws at Brendan and May.

Astra stared at the creature's back as twin cries of alarm erupted from her friends. Her legs gave out, what remaining strength she had left vanishing as she fell to the floor. Static and fog filled her head as she stared at this...being.

Really the lead up to their first encounter with Rena is funny because upon reread Echo/Rena is just the epitome of exhausted childcare person who just realized that one of their charges is in trouble.

"What!?" Astra repeated, prickling fury etching itself in her stomach once again. "What do you mean 'we're not going in'!? Did you forget about the letter? The entire reason we came out here is to hand that thing over to Steven!"

[...]

{2 paragraphs, Astra arguing mad and tired}

[...?]

{5 Paragraphs}

"You're doing it again," Astra said, fists clenched tightly at her side. "Both of you. Back at the gym and now here? Why do you keep doing that!?"

[???]

Both of them blinked, confused. "Doing what?" May asked.

"That!" Astra repeated, voice raising as she gesticulated wildly at them. "You—you keep deciding things without me!" She pointed at Brendan, arms shaking. "You dropped out of the gym challenge without even talking about it, and then you," she continued, whirling on May, "Stole the first challenge with Brawly before I could even get a word in! And now you both just decided we're not even going to try going inside like my opinion doesn't even matter!"

[!!!]

Brendan shared a wide-eyed glance with May, the two of them shifting uncomfortably.

"Astra," Brendan started, "I—we both had our reasons for doing that, and—I mean, they were all to your benefit, weren't they? I'd have been out anyway, May probably would have gone first in any case, and we really aren't prepared for spelunking—"

"I don't care!" Astra yelled, glaring at them through blurry eyes. Her pulse throbbed against her skull, stomach churning with a heat far greater than the spice of her Leppa berries. "I don't care if I benefited from it and I don't care if the gym and these damn caves would turn out like this anyway! I wasn't allowed to have a say in any of it! You two just acted like I wasn't even there, like—like—"

[Youngling!?]

"Like I'm a kid who can't make my own choices!" Astra screeched, panting despite her lack of corporeal speech.

[░▒▓▒░▒▓ status?]

"Well maybe you fucking are!" May roared in response. She stomped forward, glaring right back at Astra. "You're the one who kept pushing forward after that mess in the Town Hall, and even after you collapsed in the damn gym! Even I could see you were freaking out, and for what? You wanna burn out so hard you go up like a road flare? Am I supposed to just let that shit slide!?"

There was a haze in Astra's head again. Nothing coherent formed in the mists, and the red blob in front of her was barely visible in the dark cavern. Was she leaking again? She couldn't seem to care.

[!!!!!]

"That—"

"That's enough, May!" Brendan ordered, stepping between the two with arms outstretched as if to physically separate them. He glared at May, the girl's gaze flicking between him and Astra before she finally backed up a step, a thunderous expression on her face. Brendan exhaled, dropping his arms as he turned to Astra.

"Look," he said, exhaustion and mild panic scribbled on his face, "It's just—yeah, we screwed up, and it wasn't right to do that, but we were only trying to help as best we thought we could. Astra, listen, we're on your side, here! We've tried reasoning with you since the Town Hall, but you just kept ignoring us. Something has to give; if you keep insisting on making terrible choices that put yourself in danger, then—"

"Danger!?" Astra asked, a dark, bitter laugh congealing in her throat. "You think this is dangerous!? I've been in fucking danger since the day I left home!"

[
░▒▓ left home!? ░▒▓▒░▒▓▒░▒▓▒ DANGER!?]

"Right now the only one who's going to be in danger are you two if you don't stop refusing me my say!"

[
Refuse ░▒▓▒! ░▒▓▒░ REJECT ░▒▓▒░▒▓▒!]

"
And deciding what I'm allowed to do!"

[
░▒▓░▒▓▒ NO MORE ░▒▓▒░▒▓░▒▓▒!]

"Like I'm one of your stars damned Poke—"

[RESCUE! ░ ▒▓ ▒░▒▓▒░!]

Like you can just see Echo/Rena coming up from a quick nap she didn't mean to take, and just noticing at the edge of her range angry psychic youngling.

And the angrier Astra got the more Echo/Rena heard - just the broad strokes.

And enough to think that someone one of her charges had gotten very energetic mentally somehow and naturally went outside.

It's just really really blatant that yeah, Rena/Echo had sleep deprivation + sudden adrenaline going on .

But for May and Brendan - uh, Astra is the some what younger kid they're trying to keep safe, whose Pokemon were knocked out, and they suddenly were teleported away from.

I guarantee you they'd recognize Echo/Rena the Kadabra with no spoon. And I'd be utterly unsurprised if they'd recognize her as an Alakazam. Because again down one spoon.

(Rena said previously she's not a fighter - I think that's more a temperament thing than anything)

Why do I bring this up?

Because as already mentioned the Village is going to have to expand their food gathering footprint. There are 250 Abras to feed. Thankfully Abras are great teleporters so getting places isn't a problem.

And sensing people is what Ralts line does best so teleportation and sensory makes the pair extremely good at getting out of things. (Really there's going to be an Ralts and an Abra being the best of friends soon and making it everyone else's problem)

But that is going to be a change of things that makes humans noticing and investigating more likely.

Especially as there's a Mawhile to feed iron chunks to which will probably need to be uh... Liberated from closer to human settlements. I think Rena would do that gathering herself.

And with Kadabras' history in the region and then Astra being "abducted" I really doubt the two are going to be pleased with any news of a wild Abra evolution near home before the missing spoon gets out. As I said I think they'll recognize Rena.
 
Man I sure do love explaining how tall Astra is. New
Ruby Boule said:
Was this meant to be 'Gardevoir' or is my mental lineup of pokemon heights completely out of whack? Has Astra been taller than her this whole time?

My curse is eternal.

Ralts are 4'4''.

Kirlia are 5'0''

Gardevoir are 5'8''

It goes up by 8 inches each time.

I did this because Astra would have been one foot tall at the start of this, and there is absolutely no way that she could pass as a human teenager. I have many unicorns in this garden but this one is the most inexplicably unsaid. I did change Birch's dialogue to note that Astra is 4'4'' during the great 10 year edit but it's been a while and it is much earlier.

(Responses to other comments will come later.)
 
While there's a lot of things to be said about this chapter, most have already been said, so I'll mention something new:


Congratulations and condolences Astra; this has a good chance of ending with the village being subsumed into the world's capitalist market economy, and you too can purchase better sealants.
You know, that gives me an idea...
Astra has proven that it's possible for both a Ralts and a Kirlia to pass as human for at least moderate lengths of time.

If the village were to pretend to be a village of tribal humans, they could introduce themselves to human society more gently and start trading.

The full reveal can happen in steps to ease people into the idea:

1). Turns out there's an isolationist village of primitive humans living in that region. They don't like visitors. (It's a hassle to get everybody under their disguises at once)
2). They've got a high incidence rate of psychics in their population, weirdly enough.
3). Wait, all of them are psychic? How on earth?!
4). They're how strong?!
5). ... They're Pokemon? That explains so much, but only raises further questions!
 
You know, that gives me an idea...
Astra has proven that it's possible for both a Ralts and a Kirlia to pass as human for at least moderate lengths of time.

If the village were to pretend to be a village of tribal humans, they could introduce themselves to human society more gently and start trading.

The full reveal can happen in steps to ease people into the idea:

1). Turns out there's an isolationist village of primitive humans living in that region. They don't like visitors. (It's a hassle to get everybody under their disguises at once)
2). They've got a high incidence rate of psychics in their population, weirdly enough.
3). Wait, all of them are psychic? How on earth?!
4). They're how strong?!
5). ... They're Pokemon? That explains so much, but only raises further questions!
Probably not a good plan in practice. But would be really fun to see something written about this what?
 
You know, that gives me an idea...
Astra has proven that it's possible for both a Ralts and a Kirlia to pass as human for at least moderate lengths of time.

If the village were to pretend to be a village of tribal humans, they could introduce themselves to human society more gently and start trading.

The full reveal can happen in steps to ease people into the idea:

1). Turns out there's an isolationist village of primitive humans living in that region. They don't like visitors. (It's a hassle to get everybody under their disguises at once)
2). They've got a high incidence rate of psychics in their population, weirdly enough.
3). Wait, all of them are psychic? How on earth?!
4). They're how strong?!
5). ... They're Pokemon? That explains so much, but only raises further questions!
it does not even need to happen on purpose.

Astra, fast on her way to be considered an exceptional, potentially the strongest psychic in the region, mentionning finally managing a certain trick that her grandfather showed her, but she never had the power to do before, and that she hope to master before her cousins.
Or mentioning having had a lesson from a teacher (the artiste formerly known as last_echo) that eclipsed her utterly as a humbling experience ("when you were young and weak ? no. last week.")

And then , given the recent knowledge that human psychic existed (convenient excuse, so she would abuse it every time), not getting why the other people are surprise :
inhuman and inheritable psychic power, must be the descendant of a lost black box eugenistic program from the dark ages !
 
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