You know, it still amazes that Amelia is both competent and a decent person in the ministry. Clearly, she must have lied on her application.
Harry Potter and the Not-Fatal-At-All Cultural Exchange Program
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Nah, she's not a career bureaucrat, she's a career cop that got too good at her job and so rose through the ranks because she was also a pureblood (possibly with connections that are far shadier than she is). So in other words, different admission system to your average paper-pusher. (I guess this says good things about the Aurors back in the day)
The Sandman said:
Plans are shifting in general, though Voldemort is probably genre-savvy enough to know you never go full Hitler.
Erisah Mae said:
Basically this. Wizards don't really have militaries, but she's less a politician, and more a general - she knows enough about politics to have some idea what's going on around her, but she's not particularly involved in the game (which is one reason why the DMLE is the go-to for interim Ministers).
Spectrum
Tell me a secret~
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- Behind you~
New reader, hello~
The good:
Harry's mindset amuses me while still seeming mostly believable from canon. Also, the reactions of the adults around him all seem believable and reasonable.
Shahrizad is totally cute, also palling it up with Shirou. Given her focus on duty and being cloistered, does he get Ilya vibes from her?
Amelia Bones being reasonable and awesome and death-flagging herself like it's going out of style
The speculation on Faolan's original identity was interesting to me with the setting expansion that's associated with it.
The neutral:
The expansion on Greyback's crimes was A Thing. I'm just not sure how I feel about it yet.
The bad:
It's less now, but I was getting some pretty bad Sue vibes from Faolan off her first combat scenes. It was straining to my SoD for the girl to be that young in the HP-verse and to be able to throw down with Servants and have a good shot at taking out Voldy or Dumbledore and still be in Britain. She's strong enough to be setting distorting in her own right. Yeah, it's a Nasu fusion so everyone gets a bump or two in combat power but still. (And also, anime hair to make her special, even if you do explain that in-setting.) It's less so now seeing the aftermath of her fight and with others being strong as well, but first impressions and all. (As for why Shahrizad doesn't ping for me, it's because she's foreign, and so from the purposes of HP native canon, doesn't matter.)
Actually, I'll be honest, the werewolf Summit did kinda bore me enough to start skimming parts, then had to go back and re-read stuff for more detail after things kept coming up later.
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Still, looking forward to more, whenever it comes~
The good:
Harry's mindset amuses me while still seeming mostly believable from canon. Also, the reactions of the adults around him all seem believable and reasonable.
Shahrizad is totally cute, also palling it up with Shirou. Given her focus on duty and being cloistered, does he get Ilya vibes from her?
Amelia Bones being reasonable and awesome and death-flagging herself like it's going out of style
The speculation on Faolan's original identity was interesting to me with the setting expansion that's associated with it.
The neutral:
The expansion on Greyback's crimes was A Thing. I'm just not sure how I feel about it yet.
The bad:
It's less now, but I was getting some pretty bad Sue vibes from Faolan off her first combat scenes. It was straining to my SoD for the girl to be that young in the HP-verse and to be able to throw down with Servants and have a good shot at taking out Voldy or Dumbledore and still be in Britain. She's strong enough to be setting distorting in her own right. Yeah, it's a Nasu fusion so everyone gets a bump or two in combat power but still. (And also, anime hair to make her special, even if you do explain that in-setting.) It's less so now seeing the aftermath of her fight and with others being strong as well, but first impressions and all. (As for why Shahrizad doesn't ping for me, it's because she's foreign, and so from the purposes of HP native canon, doesn't matter.)
Actually, I'll be honest, the werewolf Summit did kinda bore me enough to start skimming parts, then had to go back and re-read stuff for more detail after things kept coming up later.
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Still, looking forward to more, whenever it comes~
all fictions
I hate you! (it's not against the rules!)
- Location
- Mons Regius
- Pronouns
- He/Him
Well better late than never, right? I may have missed the story 2-3 years ago, but that's no reason to not leave a polite review after reading.
I'm usually w(e)ary of Holy Grail Wars, even crossovers, and especially if it has new Servants.
But I guess it just works here.
This fic is a right mix of humour and action, and while focused more on the HP side of thing, the new dynamics the Nasuverse brings makes it into an interesting modified setting. The fusion (of basically everyting?) was unexpected, but works great here. We have a proper HGW full of cheating and haxxx moves, yet, despite not seeing much of it, HP magic holds its own and is not just curbstomped by Nasu-style magecraft.
A bit slow on the buildup to the first fight, but it did nicely set up the universe and the characters. I would usually be wary of OC participants, which is most of the Masters here as well as the Servants, but the narrative succeeds in making them interesting and make me care about them. The only problem, maybe, would be that Rider and his Master completely disappeared after the first scene, which is a shame. Even people with minimal exposure like Team Kotomine and Team Kuzuki got 2 scenes each.
(Speaking of those 2, I only regret not getting enough scenes with them. The glimpses of their lives in this different world, like Kirei and Caren or how Kuzuki was rescued from his assassin past, could make good stories on their own.)
I'm not one inclined to think people in the HP verse are that incompetent, even Voldemort, but the changes here are appreciated nonetheless, because it makes the stakes that much higher. Harry is even more smart yet we also get competent adults, which is probably an anomaly in HP fanfiction. Plus, Harry's snark is great ("it was distressing how many problems a good murder could solve").
The writing of the action scenes was top notch. That fluid and evocative description, as if I was wacthing the action take place, was pretty damn impressive. So kudos.
I think that's it. I should probably not speculate since this story is on hold...
...but the Eighth Servant is totally Ruler Tom a Lincoln
I'm usually w(e)ary of Holy Grail Wars, even crossovers, and especially if it has new Servants.
But I guess it just works here.
This fic is a right mix of humour and action, and while focused more on the HP side of thing, the new dynamics the Nasuverse brings makes it into an interesting modified setting. The fusion (of basically everyting?) was unexpected, but works great here. We have a proper HGW full of cheating and haxxx moves, yet, despite not seeing much of it, HP magic holds its own and is not just curbstomped by Nasu-style magecraft.
A bit slow on the buildup to the first fight, but it did nicely set up the universe and the characters. I would usually be wary of OC participants, which is most of the Masters here as well as the Servants, but the narrative succeeds in making them interesting and make me care about them. The only problem, maybe, would be that Rider and his Master completely disappeared after the first scene, which is a shame. Even people with minimal exposure like Team Kotomine and Team Kuzuki got 2 scenes each.
(Speaking of those 2, I only regret not getting enough scenes with them. The glimpses of their lives in this different world, like Kirei and Caren or how Kuzuki was rescued from his assassin past, could make good stories on their own.)
I'm not one inclined to think people in the HP verse are that incompetent, even Voldemort, but the changes here are appreciated nonetheless, because it makes the stakes that much higher. Harry is even more smart yet we also get competent adults, which is probably an anomaly in HP fanfiction. Plus, Harry's snark is great ("it was distressing how many problems a good murder could solve").
The writing of the action scenes was top notch. That fluid and evocative description, as if I was wacthing the action take place, was pretty damn impressive. So kudos.
I think that's it. I should probably not speculate since this story is on hold...
...but the Eighth Servant is totally Ruler Tom a Lincoln
I've always read that as a Chekov's Gun - we know they're out there being very sneaky doing something, and we can be pretty sure very few of the characters we are watching will be happy with the results.
But you're far from alone in enjoying the story.
all fictions
I hate you! (it's not against the rules!)
- Location
- Mons Regius
- Pronouns
- He/Him
Definitely a good point.
If I read correctly, it was also ambiguous whether Ettore wanted to take revenge on the Death Eaters or the Ministry, so that definitely made him a wild card. Though, the Ministry being the Ministry, the chance of not being the target of Ettore's ire are pretty slim.
And he had also brought part of his organization with him. But considering how most of the other Masters have whole contingent of allies and backups of their own, it's par of the course.
It was the Ministry, pretty sure. Their mercs were contracted with the Death Eaters, and the Ministry did something outside the bounds of honor to piss them off.
Well, glad to see you had fun, AF.
Team Rider will actually be returning in a fairly soon scene, but their activity up to this point has been somewhat boring groundwork and setup. I think I at least partially left them a little more fallow since they're purely original - there isn't the 'so what're those guys doing?' bit of fanservice.
They really could, though unfortunately mostly beyond the scope of CEP itself.
Y'know, you are legit the first one to guess it.
Or at least, it was initially, though after I found out about the more historical Llacheu it's him now instead. (Which involved changing essentially nothing but the name)
He worked for the Death Eaters in the Blood Affair, so he probably only has a grudge against them if they really pulled something bullshit on his contract.
Considering Amelia was cursing Bart Crouch Sr from beyond the grave for his part in the Rosetta Stone incident though, you can probably assume it was a Ministry policy that set him off.
He brought the entire thing, a full-scale magical mercenary company is already inside Britain. The older members have their own scores to settle, and he basically literally hired his own company to get everyone else in there.
Team Rider will actually be returning in a fairly soon scene, but their activity up to this point has been somewhat boring groundwork and setup. I think I at least partially left them a little more fallow since they're purely original - there isn't the 'so what're those guys doing?' bit of fanservice.
They really could, though unfortunately mostly beyond the scope of CEP itself.
I'm not one inclined to think people in the HP verse are that incompetent, even Voldemort, but the changes here are appreciated nonetheless, because it makes the stakes that much higher. Harry is even more smart yet we also get competent adults, which is probably an anomaly in HP fanfiction. Plus, Harry's snark is great ("it was distressing how many problems a good murder could solve").
The writing of the action scenes was top notch. That fluid and evocative description, as if I was wacthing the action take place, was pretty damn impressive. So kudos.
I think that's it. I should probably not speculate since this story is on hold...
...but the Eighth Servant is totally Ruler Tom a Lincoln
Y'know, you are legit the first one to guess it.
Or at least, it was initially, though after I found out about the more historical Llacheu it's him now instead. (Which involved changing essentially nothing but the name)
He worked for the Death Eaters in the Blood Affair, so he probably only has a grudge against them if they really pulled something bullshit on his contract.
Considering Amelia was cursing Bart Crouch Sr from beyond the grave for his part in the Rosetta Stone incident though, you can probably assume it was a Ministry policy that set him off.
He brought the entire thing, a full-scale magical mercenary company is already inside Britain. The older members have their own scores to settle, and he basically literally hired his own company to get everyone else in there.
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Not actively at this time, but it's about third from the front as far as fanfiction projects go, so it's not dead.
Suryn
On the wings of a Dragon
So what other projects are eating up your time now? Considering how much I've enjoyed this and other writings by you, I'll gadly take more
Ideally original work, game dev stuff, writingwise there have been a couple other things flirted with but what's actually ahead in the queue is... well, you'll see when I release it, I'm better at just tossing things out than explaining them. ^^;
all fictions
I hate you! (it's not against the rules!)
- Location
- Mons Regius
- Pronouns
- He/Him
I can respect that. The setup of Holy Grail Wars makes it difficult enough to focus on all the Masters without delving into each of their backstories, especially if they aren't main characters. The only way to manage would be to go the Nasu way and release Complete Materials, or go into their daily lives (though an exaggerated version of it) in a Carnival Phantasm-like setting.
Well I will always have my headcanons.
You said from the 16th century and a son of Arthur, I'm more suprised no one figured it out.
Tom a'Lincoln seems more interesting and "the Red Rose Knight" is a badass name, but from what I could find of Llacheu, he apparently was "one of the learned ones of the Island of Britain, to whom the elements and material essence of every thing were known", so I will reserve my judgement and see how you use him.
That is sure to bode well!
And how do you feel, in 2017, that there is now officially an Assassin EMIYA?
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Those are always fun. Carnival Phantasm is great for comedy, though I'm not 100% sure if I could pull such a thing off - I haven't made a habit of writing humour before. (I sneak jokes in all over, of course, but I haven't ever written a specifically humour story)
In the end the character is very broadly inspired by their prior mirror - the historical details of their character are rather lacking, so much of it has to be done by me - but I try to tend towards a veneer of historicity and 'this actually has a few things to do with the way things actually went down', so once I found a more historically-rooted character fitting the role, I snagged him.
That is sure to bode well!
And how do you feel, in 2017, that there is now officially an Assassin EMIYA?
Grand Order moves too fast, too gonzo, and too in a language I don't speak for me to keep up on it.
Besides, that's Kiritsugu.
Grand Order moves too fast, too gonzo, and too in a language I don't speak for me to keep up on it.
Besides, that's Kiritsugu.
*Kerrysugoi
Whatmesage
Goddess of the Hugs
*Breaks out the victory fans.*
It's not dead! It might actually get updates again eventually! Must be time to celebrate with a reread tomorrow...
It's not dead! It might actually get updates again eventually! Must be time to celebrate with a reread tomorrow...
I'm happy to hear that this story isn't dead, merely sleeping. This was actually my introduction to the Fate series.
I look forward to reading your original work when you feel ready to release it.
I look forward to reading your original work when you feel ready to release it.
Prince Charon
Just zis guy, you know?
Yeah, I think so too. If not tomorrow, then the next day.
Oh right, before I forget, this is one of the two fanwork things ahead of it in the queue: https://forums.sufficientvelocity.com/threads/fate-new-model-original-holy-grail-war-quest.37308/
Part of why I was cagey when asked was because I was literally gonna be releasing it within a day
Part of why I was cagey when asked was because I was literally gonna be releasing it within a day
HymnOfRagnarok
Let's Rock
...Well, it's not updating. But I had no idea this fic existed and have blown through it, and enjoyed it immensely. So I'm gonna watch it, and have some hope to see it again.
Given Voldemorts habit of wiping out entire families I have wonder why Ettore presumed the Ministry would avoid getting taking revenge on those they knew joined up with Voldemort freely.
Prince Charon
Just zis guy, you know?
That is a good question. He may not have thought it through (or been fully aware of it) before joining, but I would suggest that now, he just doesn't care why they did what they did, just that they did it.
Seihai-kun
[Unverified Wish Granting Device]
- Location
- Brasil
This isn't dead? What a pleasant surprise!
Mercenaries are classically somewhat outside participants to the conflict. Ettore would have worked for the Ministry instead if the price had been right, he had worked for the Ministry before.
As far as Ettore was concerned, he was on a business trip that happened to be against the Ministry this time. It wasn't personal for him, so he assumed that everyone would handle things rationally and reasonably - pissing off a mercenary unit without finishing them off is a terrible idea because now all your enemies get discounts.
He A: forgot that the Ministry only gets to worry rationally about the long term once it's survived the short term; and B: was sociopathic enough that this was just another job to him, and expected that to be understood and dealt with on its own level.
Plus C: the Ministry had to go very far to perform the reprisal in question - the people they targeted were still in Italy, Crouch triggered an international incident with that series of blows in the war by sending people to do it.