It won't be that bad, Artemis doesn't know Lonnie or Dick very well. Or rather, she only knows him via him being Eri's friend, she actually secretly doesn't like him all that much (for the same reasons as Dick) and just kind of tolerated him for Eri's sake.
So it is more "Are ALL of my classmates capes?". Lonnie, the MC, Dick, Wilson, herself. Is Batgirl a thing yet, because that would be Barbara as well. I don't know if "mafia heiress" counts, but if it counts anywhere it would be in Gotham.
 
So it is more "Are ALL of my classmates capes?". Lonnie, the MC, Dick, Wilson, herself. Is Batgirl a thing yet, because that would be Barbara as well. I don't know if "mafia heiress" counts, but if it counts anywhere it would be in Gotham.

I think it counts, DC civilians by virtue of being in a comic book world would be explicitly superhuman if brought into the real world. I don't know all of the DC lore, but I think that every human in DC also has like God-metal in their bodies or something?
 
I think it counts, DC civilians by virtue of being in a comic book world would be explicitly superhuman if brought into the real world. I don't know all of the DC lore, but I think that every human in DC also has like God-metal in their bodies or something?
I know that Thanagarians have Nth Metal in their bodies, also known as Ninth Metal, allowing them to fly and making them resistant to magic. Comparatively, New God tech is made from Tenth Metal, while Poseidon's Trident and other Old God weapons are made from Eighth Metal.
 
I'm considering working him into this fic, because he's my all-time favorite comic book character, and actually not that hard to work into DC. Problem is, he tends to take over any plot he's involved in just because he's Doom, so I'm undecided as of yet. If I go with "no", this'll just be a reference to some random Soviet official with fun fashion sense.
You could probably get it to work via some shenanigans, I.e

1. there was a Doom but he died only to be immediately replaced by another doom from a different dimension that has had his spirit/ambition crushed either by escaping from an earth that fell apart or he's just old and gotten tired of the whole "world conquest thing" and made a clean break somewhere without the bad reputation and is now basically only known as a dictator of a European country

Or

2. Doom had a (bad) plan with time travel and has somehow got all his future memories from when he failed at world domination too many times and thus attempts the slow way by going for World Unification after a global disaster from space

Basically you need a way to have a doom with a minor reputation without any of the ambition or spiteful triggers (Reed Richards). otherwise he'd dominate any encounter, as he's basically Lex Luthor but with magic or Batman with no limits and considering both of those have defeated the justice league before with almost purely technological means with a dash of magic artefacts

having a super genius that's better at applied physics would destroy them, it's my understanding that this is what keeps doom so powerful and able to counter any two other super geniuses
(Reed Richards(theoretical physics), Tony Stark(engineering), Dr Strange{exotic physics aka magic})
Dooms Specialty allows him to hit that sweet spot of Magitech and steal notes from any of the others, than use magic to shortcut the technology and technology to shortcut the magic plus whether he got anything from all that power cosmic (I don't know the lore around his early development beyond the movies)
 
Shame Artie doesn't hang around with Lonnie, she would have probably recognised his ranting style otherwise.
 
So it is more "Are ALL of my classmates capes?". Lonnie, the MC, Dick, Wilson, herself. Is Batgirl a thing yet, because that would be Barbara as well. I don't know if "mafia heiress" counts, but if it counts anywhere it would be in Gotham.
Remember, Gotham Academy is the most prestigious, wealthiest private school in Gotham, one of the major cities on the East Coast. Everyone who's anyone sends their kids there. So your average high school, like the one Eri and Artie's middle school classmates are now in, isn't going to have the same density of capes.

Shame Artie doesn't hang around with Lonnie, she would have probably recognised his ranting style otherwise.
There's something a little familiar about it to her. Once she learns who Dick is, she'll eventually be able to figure it out off-screen when she sees the two of them together in school.
 
Damn good story. Hellish tolerating them being this stupid. Like i understand them being dramatic because it's a drama, but we could do with more chapters from the perspective of people with normal human emotions. If only as a Greek chorus. Most sane perspective we've had so far was Falcone.
 
2.6 / Not Ready to Make Nice (Artemis)
AN: I set up a ko-fi page, for anyone that appreciates my work enough to give me a tip. I'm in college, so it definitely helps. If I get enough interest I may or may not set up a Patreon with early access to chapters.

PoV: Artemis

"*bzzt* Incident on the corner of Fowler and Drake, Falcone men are battling Bertinelli enhanciles, aided by an unknown figure in silver."

Finally.

I've been waiting hours for this. The past week, Er- Silver Sorceress has been popping up all over the police scanner, helping out with Falcone raids into Bertinelli territory.

Which, I mean… of course she's working with the Falcones now, of course she is! I mean, why wouldn't she. She's a villain, they're villains, it just fits.

Sure, Carmine is rotting Little Sicily from the inside out with his drugs, and gun-running, and protection rackets, and dozens of murders a year, but who cares about that! That's stupid mortal stuff, after all, far beyond her.

Why not join the payroll of one of the most evil men in Gotham?

So I've been tracking her movements over the radio, listening in, and trying to find an opportunity to bring her down. Normally, she's working with too many other capes, but even when there she's alone enough for me to actually try tracking her down, she teleports away right after the battle, meaning I can't ambush her.

My two previous outings haven't been useless, though: I've been watching, planning, learning how she fights. Er- Sorceress uses a lot more magic in these I had expected, especially on the lower-level goons — apparently Executioner's raw speed limited her repertoire more than I thought — so I've had to revise my plans a bit, but I still think I should be able to handle this.

I huff, vaulting out my windows.

Let's hope third time's the charm.



Bingo.

Sorceress has stayed behind after this one, watching as the Falcone goons loot the bodies — I do my best not to look at the results of her handiwork, fucking gods there are so many, she must have killed at least a dozen people, holy fuck — joking and laughing with the murderers she's shacked up with like they didn't just commit an extrajudicial massacre.

Eventually, she grabs one of the bodies of the enhanced goons by the ankle, and begins dragging him away.

If I weren't watching my former best friend perform a corpse-napping, I might just smile at my plan coming together. I know she can't bring other people with her through her teleportation, and I figured that if I wait around long enough, I'll catch her trying to study the corpses of one of these new Venom'ed-up Bertinelli goons.

Well technically I don't know it's some new variant of Venom, since Batman won't talk to me about whatever's going on with them, but c'mon! I grew up in Gotham and have eyes, I know super-steroids when I see them.

But regardless of what they're on, I knew she wouldn't be able to resist the allure of cutting one open like fucking meat, and that she wouldn't trust Carmine enough to have him just ship a corpse to her door, and so…

Here I am, hopping from roof to roof, following the silver-haired figure as she marches through various back alleys trying to find a good spot for an ambush.

After about five minutes, it finally looks like she's approaching a side alley that's decently cut off from the rest of the city.

I move to the top of the fire escape. Careful…

This is going to take perfect timing.

Right when she's in the center of the alley, the furthest away from both exits, I take aim at a point right above her head, and let my foam arrow fly.

I hold my breath as it flies through the air, perfectly silent thanks to some basic tech from Green Arrow.

Closer, closer…

Sorceress freezes, and teleports away in a flash of purple light.

Fuck!

In a flash, she appears at the other end of the alley with wide eyes.

Well, shit. I thought I could avoid triggering her precognition by not aiming directly at her, but it looks like that was a bust.

Onto idea two then.

She glares at the alley, raising a hand glowing with silver light. "Who the fuck is gonna die tonight?"

I stand up on the fire escape, now that the element of surprise is gone.

"You" she says, and her voice is practically a snarl.

"Me" I say, eyes hard.

"The fuck are you doing here?"

"I'm just doing my job" I say. "Batman appreciates it when I spend time patrolling for common criminals."

She arches an eyebrow. "Don't you have some guy in a neon jumpsuit to beat up then? I'm doing important work here."

I raise my bow.

She sneers, moving back into a ready stance.

I launch first, sending off a net arrow, which she teleports out of the way of.

Fuck, that's going to be so annoying, I just know it.

She reappears on the fire escape across from me, glaring. "You just couldn't resist butting in, could you?"

She snarls. "You smelled an opportunity for being the big, shiny, stupid fucking hero, and just had to nose your way into this. Can't have the horrible evil bad guys get any of the credit for doing something good, can we?"

I scoff, leaping down to the ground to dodge the blast of static-grey lightning she aims at me. "Don't give me that, Little Miss Mobster. Tell me, how much did it cost for Carmine to buy you?"

When I look up, she's gone. My eyes dart back and forth, searching for her.

There!

I have to backflip away from the static-grey lightning.

"You really should have taken that English tutoring, if you don't know the meaning of 'independent contractor'."

She's standing on the same fire escape that I was, looking down at me with narrowed eyes. "I'm working with him, on something that I don't think even you could object to."

"Oh?"

"Oh yeah. Ask your little sugar bat-daddy about the Cult of Skath, they're basically hostis humani generis. Hells, they're hostis omni generis. I'm helping the Falcones root out the branch that's taken up with the Bertinellis."

I scoff. "Wow, how convenient! Fortunate for Carmine that this group of evil blood cultists just so happens to set up with his longtime enemies."

"Are you- You think I'm lying about this?"

"Well" I say flatly, "it's not like you've proven yourself very trustworthy."

She growls.

"But no" I say, cutting off her response, "I don't think you're lying. At least, not about the basic facts. I just think that they're an excuse for you, to do what you wanted to do anyways. To get an obscene amount of money from one of the most evil men in Gotham for being his legbreaker."

"Are you fucking serious?"

"Yes" I yell. "Because if you actually cared about stopping these people, you'd be going to Batman. Or at the very least, the police. But no, you can't have that! Batman might have pesky rules, and morals, and plans. That'd stop you from having your fun!"

I backflip away from the next jet of lightning she lets out in response, shooting a foam arrow up at her. It explodes, flooding the escape with high-density polyurethane foam.

Don't worry, it's breathable.

I smirk. Well, breathable-ish.

Unfortunately for me, by the time the arrow explodes, Eri — fuck, Sorceress — is gone, and it's only my instincts which lets me dodge her retaliatory spell, a strange glowing set of chains.

"Fuck you, bitch" she says, snarling. "You don't get to judge me."

"Actually" I say, "I'm pretty much the only person on Earth who can."

She growls. "Tell me, does it run in the family, acting like a rabid dog on a chain for your scheming, secretive master?"

I barely stop myself from snarling. Oh she did not just fucking go there. "I can see you're lashing out at those better than you. I suppose you get that from your father."

I grin at the absolute rage in her eyes, only to yelp when she lets off a strange, pulsating red spell in response that I only barely manage to dodge.

God fucking damnit, I'm losing here. Time for plan C.

I take a smoke arrow out of my quiver, throwing it directly at my feet.

I smile as I hear Er- Sorceress curse.

I move back into the smoke, tapping the side of my mask, switching it to thermal vision mode.

There are benefits to working with Batman, you know.

I see a sudden splotch of red appear across the alley, and I send a foam arrow rocketing towards it, immediately backflipping away from the retaliatory lightning.

"You better fucking hide" she says, scanning the smoke for any sign of me, "because when I find you…"

Because I'm not an idiot, I don't reply and give away my location.

She sends a few bolts of lightning into the smoke.

I slowly make my way up to the fire escape above her, doing my best to keep myself still and silent.

After another bolt, she growls in frustration. "You know what? If you want to play like this, that's just fine with me."

She slams her staff on the ground.

The ground where I was standing begins to rumble, and begins to sink into a pit.

Unfortunately for her, by that time, I'm on the fire escape.

She sends another jolt of lightning into the smoke as I make my way to a position with clear sightlines.

She pauses.

"…Wait, I'm a fucking idiot."

She slams her staff forward, purple runes sparking around the head, and a great breeze shoots out of the front to disperse the smoke.

Y'know, I was wondering…

As she holds her staff forward, concentrating both on the spell and trying to spot my form in the dissipating smoke, I let my arrow fly.

Unfortunately for me, that precognition of hers is irritatingly effective, and her head jolts up to look at me when the arrow is still a few feet from her.

While the second she takes to disengage from her current spell and reorient disorients her, it isn't enough, and the foam from the arrow I shoot only encases a leg, instead of her head.

She staggers back, dazed from my blow, as I backflip off her with textbook-perfect kick to her stomach.

Er- Silver Sorceress staggers back, twirling her staff around her to let off a whirlwind that obscures my vision of her.

In a flash, she teleports in front of me, only to pause in shock as the foam moves with her.

I smile widely. Looks like I was right, her spell did treat a smaller amount of foam like it does with that cloak of hers, and teleport it along with her.

I leap down, trying to bring things to melee combat, where I know I have the advantage. My original plan was to do this while she was blind because of the foam, but I can still make it work when she's down a leg.

I swing an overhead chop directly at her head, but she manages to dodge better than she'd ever done in any of our spars.

Shit, she probably wasn't using her precognition then!

I my next fist slams into her shoulder, staggering her, but before I can land a counter-blow she flashes back to the end of the alley, foam still on her leg. She stands still, clearly concentrating, and I rush forward.

Time to do this before she manages to get her leg free.

Before I can reach her, she flashes away, and I curse as I see the shell of foam around her leg clatter to the ground.

I dodge to the side not a moment too soon, as a giant blast of lightning shoots past me from a fire escape platform above me.

I turn, to see her standing there, eyes blazing purple as she shoots me a venomous glare. "That… was extremely annoying."

She growls, jabbing her staff forward and sending out a torrent of lightning, like two dozen forks jabbing at me.

Fuck!

I start leaping and dodging like my life depends on it, but don't make it to the end of the alley before I feel something hit my leg, and I abruptly jerk to a stop. I look down to see a spectral green chain tethering me to the ground, emanating a soul-deep chill.

Oh, gods damn it.

Before I can blink, three other chains hit my other limbs, and I'm staked down in the middle of the alley, by bow clattering to the ground.

Sorceress teleports in front of me, grin wide and victorious.

"Look what we have here" she says, gloating. "A little hero, all trussed up, just for me."

I snarl at her, tugging futilely at the chains binding me to the ground.

Sorceress reaches over, pulling a foam arrow from my quiver, and tossing it directly at my feet.

"Fuck you" I say, as the foam rises to engulf me. "You think you can get away with this? Get away with paling around with murderers and monsters?"

"Oh Chryssa" she says, patting my cheek. "I already have."

She pauses, and straightens up, looking around the alley.

After a few moments, she sighs. "Gods above, did I seriously…"

She turns to me, glaring. "You made me disintegrate my corpse, asshole."

I just glare at her.

She bends over, reaching towards my head. I feel a flash of fear as she removes my communicator.

She wouldn't…

Would she?

Fortunately, she just holds it up to her mouth, and presses the button to communicate.

"Hello? Is this Bat Station One?"

"Who is this" I hear Robin's voice echo out over the comms. "Why do you have Chryssa's communicator."

Oh.

Fuck.

Just kill me now.

"This is Silver Sorceress!" she says brightly. "And I don't just have Chryssa's communicator, I have the whole package! She ambushed me, you see: terribly rude."

Robin growls. "Are you- No, of course she-"

He takes in a deep breath. "Silver Sorceress" he says, voice firm. "If you've done anything to Chryssa…"

"Oh, relax" she says playfully. "Little Goldie is fine, just sitting in that neat foam you've got her using."

"However" she says, raising an eyebrow. "If you want to ensure she stays fine, you'll want to get over to the alley behind 105 Eaglewood Street. I'll be leaving soon, and who knows what could happen to her."

Before Robin can respond, she drops the communicator, crushing it underneath her foot.

I swallow. Fuck, fuck, fuuuuck. I'm going to be in so much trouble for this. I mean, Robin doesn't have any room to judge in the slightest, but Batman's going to fucking kill me.

"You happy now?" I ask, glaring.

She rolls her eyes. "As I tried to tell you, I'm fantastic! Have been ever since you left."

I ignore the deep, thrumming pain in my heart that that pronouncement brings.

"Well laugh it up, bitch" I say, snarling. "But just you fucking wait for next time."

She laughs, literally staring down her nose at me. "Oh, Chryssa" she says, "if you think next time is going to be any different, you're even more delusional than I thought."

She leans down, pressing a finger against my forehead. "I thought I told you: I'm out of your league, Artemis."

She stands up, smirking. "If you come at me, you'll lose. Every. Single. Time."

She crouches down, picking up my bow, and tossing it to loop over my neck. "Stick to beating up the Riddler."

Before I can respond, letting the torrent of feeling inside me burst out to fry her like one of her bolts of lightning, Robin leaps down at the other end of the alley.

"Sorceress" he says, voice serious. "You need to let Chryssa go, now."

"I'm not holding her anywhere" she says with a roll of her eyes. "That's her arrow that's trapping her."

She smirks. "Rather poetic, don't you think? I'm not quite sure how, but it feels like something that should be poetic."

I roll my eyes.

"Well" she says, sighing. "I suppose that's it for me then. You tried to ambush me, you failed, yadda yadda yadda. Nothing much more for me to do."

Robin's eyes narrow, stepping forward. "I'm not just going to let you-"

She laughs.

After a moment, she pauses.

"Wait" she says. "You're serious?"

She rolls her eyes. "Please. If Chryssa couldn't fight me, what hope do you have, bird boy?"

Despite myself, I feel a flicker of warmth at the compliment, however backhanded and ill-intentioned it might be.

She turns around, tossing her hair over her shoulder, blocking Robin's boomerang with a shield cast by an errant flick of her wrist.

She snaps, and in a flash of purple, disappears.

After searching around the alley for a minute to make sure she doesn't reappear, Robin turns back around to me, glaring. "What the fuck did you do? Why were you on an unsanctioned patrol, and why did you go off to fight a known mage?"

I scowl, and get ready for the first of what's sure to be a long, long line of explanations.

I'm going to kill her for this, I swear to all the fucking gods.



AN: Spoiler for progress of their relationship: Don't worry guys, this is the most they will EVER hate one another. Things will be on a slow (sometimes very slow) but steady upwards trend from here.

Question 1: If Red X and/or Eri and/or Artemis could have a superpower, what do you think would suit them the best?

Question 2: I'm looking to commission some art of Eri for this fic, if anyone has any recommendations for artists, I'd be open to them.
 
Last edited:
Question 1: If Red X and/or Eri and/or Artemis could have a superpower, what do you think would suit them the best?

I mean, technically Eri has one already.....

Red X, well, in here, I can see like something to dissolve bonds or something?

Eri, I kinda like what Scarlet Witch had, Chaos magic.

Artemis, I think something to do with the moon, like a werewolf or something.

Question 2: I'm looking to commission some art of Eri for this fic, if anyone has any recommendations for artists, I'd be open to them.
ko-fi.com

arjart's Ko-fi Commissions

Ko-fi Commissions Open! Click to see arjart's commission menu.

Worked for Krieg when they commissioned some work from them.
 
I sincerely love this story and wouldn't change a word, but as for the author notes, would you mind popping them into a spoiler?

AN: Don't worry guys, this is the most they will EVER hate one another. Things will be on a slow (sometimes very slow) but steady upwards trend from here.

Part of the appeal of the trainwreck phase of stories like this is never knowing just how bad it's going to get, even if there's a promise of reconciliation. I want to worry! That's the point!
 
Question 1: If Red X and/or Eri and/or Artemis could have a superpower, what do you think would suit them the best?
Red X should definitely have the demon racial magic from maou gakuin. He'd need allies to fight with him then, but it is literally sharing power from each according to their ability to each according to their need.
 
Red X I would probably just give technomancy.
Artemis would be some sort of magical girl transformation alternate form thing.
Eri already has one.
 
AN: Spoiler for progress of their relationship
I'm going to be honest, I'm absolutely loving this. They're both such teenage morons, it's great and toxic and lovely. Obviously things staying exactly the same would be boring. Their emotional wounds are fresh, they're both doing stupid things to prove to the other how fine they are. I can't wait for things to get more calcified and be toxic in a different, equally fun way. And then that will need to change as well.

What I'm saying is "The future parts of their relationship arc are inevitable and necessary and are going to be just as much fun, but I'm having fun right now too, so I'm not in any rush." I hope that makes sense? It's not that I don't want things to progress -- in fact I want them too, because narratively they have to -- but I'm really loving it right now.

What they had was toxic in so many ways that it's not something I can say "I'm so sad they lost that." Even if they never became lovers after this and just moved on it would still be better than what they were. I love that choice -- it makes the explosion so much more fun and so much more believable. It feels inevitable instead of forced by either the author contriving outside events or out of character reactions.

I also really loved Robin going after RedX and fucking up so badly.

Most fanfiction is written because people love a character. It's rare for fanfiction to sit down with characters and "say I love this character and want to focus on their flaws and how they overcome them." There's plenty of fanfiction that wallows in angst -- they spend paragraphs talking about emotions and internal monologue and telling instead of showing and letting you see it for yourself. The best description I can think of is that the author sees it through the character's eyes. The people experiencing the angst are usually the victim and aren't contributing to their own problems (and if they are, the story doesn't really focus on it). The angst is always treated seriously, instead of with the understanding that it's often stupid or silly.

I feel like I could write a thesis about the pitfalls of angst focused stories (and I've already spent too much time on this), but this avoids them. It's so much fun to just enjoy people being toxic idiots hurting each other and eventually learning to be better.
 
I sincerely love this story and wouldn't change a word, but as for the author notes, would you mind popping them into a spoiler?
Done

I can't wait for things to get more calcified and be toxic in a different, equally fun way. And then that will need to change as well
Man, you are going to love the next few arcs then!

I love that choice -- it makes the explosion so much more fun and so much more believable. It feels inevitable instead of forced by either the author contriving outside events or out of character reactions.
This entire comment made my week, thank you so much! It's comments like yours that keep me writing.
 
If Red X and/or Eri and/or Artemis could have a superpower, what do you think would suit them the best?
I'm of the opinion that quality trumps quantity. Why not improve Red X's detective abilities with the one and only Negotiator from Worm (Tattletale).

For Artemis I'd probably pick the ability to enchant/imbue items, specifically her arrows and bow so she doesn't have to rely on tech all the time.

As for Eri, the best power she can get is time, more specifically time to grow her magical skills.
 
Question 1: If Red X and/or Eri and/or Artemis could have a superpower, what do you think would suit them the best?
Well, going out of order...for a non-racial, non-magic power for Eri? There's a couple ways to think of what fits I guess. In terms of what would be ideal in combat/general use? Some sort of brick package. Durability and regeneration to make up for Eri's lacking physical ability and secondary priority of CQC skill compared to magic.

As far as her character goes, and with her personality...some sort of mental boost, and not a big one. Something great for learning skills, memorizing information, and conceptualization...but NOT for empathic/social ability or, say, decision making. An INT boost, not a WIS boost to use RPG terms. Eri is learning to use magic to do anything and everything, and getting better faster, but her most threatening opponent (at least until we get to the really big leagues of DC) is and has been her own decision making/self control/mental health.

For Artemis, as a skilled normie, pretty much anything could conceivably help...but she's pretty hard- stuck into the archer theme, and thus wouldn't benefit as much from a flat skill/physicality power as an omni-disciplinarian like Batman would. Further, her use of equipment as her primary weapons further limits how well she could incorporate other powers, especially those that enhance her own person. Ironically, one of the better options she could get for her present fighting style is probably short-term Pre-cog. Her bow and arrows won't change with super-strength or elemental control, but she could get super-humanly good (for DC) at aiming and timing, while her raw skill in combat could be leveraged against those kinds of fighters she otherwise just really doesn't have the reaction for.

Red X is honestly the hardest. Kinda. The easy solution is just super-science/technopathy...but honestly that's kinda like unlimited magical disciplines. In a world of super-science, a tech power is the generic 'do everything theoretically, and in practice just whatever the author wants'. Additionally, eh, I feel like super-tech is just a bit too... investment heavy. Red X to me is coming across as an Anarcho-socialist at most, or otherwise just heavily socialist. Being a super/mad scientist usually means either building up a crap load of wealth in exactly the ways he doesn't approve of...or outright stealing it (and there's only so many easily justified hordes of big government/corporate tech stashes to plunder). Hacking is one thing, as that's honestly pretty resource efficient, but being a super-scientist requires the kind of material concentration he stands against, while flat technopathy besides just being generic isn't something he can empower others with or 'give to the people'.

Really, I'd say it depends on what his character is going to be doing long-term. Want him to be a true-to-spirit communist? What about a psychic gestalt power? Skip the intermediary oligarchic BS and the Great Leaders inevitable descent into (assuming they didn't GET the position by being) a ruthless, self-serving, tyrant. Just...bring everyone together. A true union of the common man. Also a great way to have a really screwed up brain if he's constantly making/hosting but not controlling a mental gestalt. Plus all the usual mind-control moral dilemmas.

Alternatively, for a less dark but still edgy Red X...maybe make him a read-only telepath? In practical use to better enable his genius (but not SUPER genius) IQ/EQ and plan better in combat. As a character let him hear/feel the true thoughts and feelings of others to really double down on why he fights for the common man and why he despises oppressors so personally (because for him, it effectively IS personal)...but also forcefully limit some of his ideological blinders in regards to his foes (like how, unlike real life,...morally good billionaires CAN actually exist, and Bruce Wayne is one of them.) All the while adding new biases because, well, everything being personal is a great way to make objective ideology/thought/planning/anything difficult to maintain.

As others mentioned though, a complete opposite approach might also work. Empowering or summoning others and being a minion master could fit Red X very well if he shifts more towards group/collective action rather then working by himself.
 
Last edited:
Goddamnit I've lost track of who most people are beyond canon YJ characters and our protagonist, who's in the Red X suit? I only vaguely remember him from the teen titans Japan style cartoon, didn't he end up just being robin in his emo double agent phase?

I need goddamn character sheets
 
Announcement: this fic now has a Discord server!
Yo, Hannya! This fic is amazing!

Your use of Sicilian lexicon is pretty much on point, nonno Jimmy should be proud ;)
Just a couple (hopefully useful) notes from your latest Italian reader, then:

picciota would be right there with her family instead of in an orphanage across town.
Picciotta, double t

As I wait for them to come in, I think about what a good find Lenny was. Say what you will about the Ebbrei, but damn if they man can't organize a schedule like nobody's business. Honestly, I was skeptical when Frankie said I should start bringing the them the family. But hey, that's just me: I don't like nobody that's not Sicilianu, and maybe some Calabriani if it's a good day.
Ebbrei is correct in Sicilianu (It. Ebrei) but I'm not sure where you found "Calabriani". It's Calabbrisi. Fun fact, "Testa di Calabbrisi" is a (relatively tame) insult in Sicily meaning hard-headed (like people from Calabria stereotypically are).
Sicilians are also infamous for being headstrong (and they know it), of course, and Don Carmine's attitude toward Calabresi feels very true to life.

Calabriani technically exist, I just found out, but are the members of a small religious order. Calabrian is also a stage of the Pleistocene.

The doors to my office open, and I look at the young girl walking through next to my girl and her Jinx, after receiving a pat-down from my longtime bodyguard Luigghi.

Luigi. As in Mario and Luigi. Unless you are doing a "Italian names often get spelled/pronounced wrong" thing, of course.
(In Italian ci, ce, ge e gi are always soft c/g; chi, che, ghi and ghe are hard c/g)

I love the idea of extremely-bad-but-trying trans ally Carmine, solely because he has the positive influence of Killer Moth threatening to murder the shit out of anyone who misgenders his precious Kitten. Also yes, if you didn't catch her in 1.4, this is that Kitten (real name Kitty), from Teen Titans. She acts exactly the same there, the only difference is that she's an incredible spoiled trans girl.

I love it as well! Also, the only difference? Poor Dick, he's getting a stalker in this universe too :D

Yes I'm aware that canonically, the Bertinellis are actually the more Sicilain gang, while the Falcones are more general Italian (although it would still be mostly Southern Italians, based on historical immigration patterns that would require giant historical changes to be different). But it's too late to change now, so the switched gangs are just another AU element I guess.

Actually it's much better your way! Bertinelli is not a Sicilian surname, they are originally from Parma (like the cheese). Falcones on the other hand are mostly originally from the South, and there are a bunch of them in Sicily. Indeed, the most famous one was Sicilian (but the complete opposite of a Mafioso).
 
Back
Top