Seems like it might have been better handled as
[ ][Mask] Take off your mask. This doesn't have to go on for any longer than it has to, and it's been too long.
[ ][Mask] Keep your mask on. Clint nearly broke in front of you. Danah... doesn't need to know.
[ ][Matthew] Stay, and ask Matthew if you can help do something.
[ ][Matthew] Make the conversation private. Matthew is a friend, but he didn't need to be here.
[ ][What do] Stay and talk to Danah
-[] Ask why she's been working, she never wanted to do anything like this before.
-[] Ask her if she's been safe. The worlds changed, and you wouldn't be much of a big brother if you didn't ask.
-[] Ask about her... husband. Does Clint know? Does Dad?
[ ][What do] Stay and talk to Matthew
-[] Have him tell you more about the parahuman situation in the city. You don't believe that things are quiet in New York of all places.
-[] Ask about the musicians, how many there are and if you need to stay to make sure things stay as quiet as he says.
[ ][What do] Leave the city, just go on your shift before you make things worse here.
Although now its written out I'm not sure its less clunky than one from each tier.
Plot importance says "this is probably a master". The probability that it really is is still only 50% or something like that. Since it probably is a master, being prepared to stop her from hurting herself might be a good idea.
Hmmm, I have no Idea what to do.
Maybe we can get 5 Minutes alone and call Clint? Finding out if he knows about the Marriage Thing could help.
If it is a Master then we don't give any Warning that we suspect something, if it isn't a Master we still get 5 Minutes to deal with ... this.
Wot.
Great, maybe something likeThis can definitely be a write in. Matthew has a phone and you know clints number.
[X] Keep your mask on. Clint nearly broke in front of you. Danah... doesn't need to know.
-[X] Write in: Get a Phone and Five Minutes Alone. Call Clint and ask him about Danah getting married. This gives you some Time to calm down and find out how that happened. And if he doesn't know about it ...
We did jump to this being some kind of Master Thing...Perfectly reasonable. Gets a call, lets you get some information and it might get something else. Although, you might get even more with a straightforward approach.
We did jump to this being some kind of Master Thing...
Meh, if it's just some Relationship Drama then we still get to ask Clint about it, instead of us having a surprise Talk about her Marriage with Danah.
Atlas: "Lying about your age is against the law young lady!"Honestly thinking this over Alex's real superpower is giving his siblings heart attacks.
Just walked in on Clint while he's cleaning and now this.
It was fun while it lasted. Thanks.Okay, I know this is the last thing that you probably want to hear from me, but I'm going to stop Shining Example.
I started writing this almost two years ago, and it's been a lot of fun. However, right now, I find myself dreading writing another update. I'm holding myself to a standard that I don't remember having and it's making every chance that I get to write feel like a chore instead of fun. As much as I want to see the plans that I have be realized, I refuse to force out a product that I'm not satisfied with.
That being said, thanks to everyone that's been here for the two book journey that this thing made. Honestly, while it has it's problems, I personally think that this story up to the end of London is my best work on this site. As such, if you guys want, I'm willing to post all of my notes and answering any questions that you might have about this story. And, if you guys really want it, after a bit of rest on my part, I wouldn't be against making another WORM quest with Atlas within it. Maybe not as the staring role, but as a character none the less.
So as I said, I invite any and all questions, thoughts on the story, memes or interest on another Shining Example.
What was the original core idea that inspired you to start this quest? Do you feel like you accomplished what you set out to write or do you feel like that goal is a hundred chapters away from coming to fruition?So as I said, I invite any and all questions, thoughts on the story, memes or interest on another Shining Example.
Thanks for running this, its been a fantastic quest and we've all had a lot of fun.Okay, I know this is the last thing that you probably want to hear from me, but I'm going to stop Shining Example.
I started writing this almost two years ago, and it's been a lot of fun. However, right now, I find myself dreading writing another update. I'm holding myself to a standard that I don't remember having and it's making every chance that I get to write feel like a chore instead of fun. As much as I want to see the plans that I have be realized, I refuse to force out a product that I'm not satisfied with.
That being said, thanks to everyone that's been here for the two book journey that this thing made. Honestly, while it has it's problems, I personally think that this story up to the end of London is my best work on this site. As such, if you guys want, I'm willing to post all of my notes and answering any questions that you might have about this story. And, if you guys really want it, after a bit of rest on my part, I wouldn't be against making another WORM quest with Atlas within it. Maybe not as the staring role, but as a character none the less.
So as I said, I invite any and all questions, thoughts on the story, memes or interest on another Shining Example.
Okay, I know this is the last thing that you probably want to hear from me, but I'm going to stop Shining Example.
I started writing this almost two years ago, and it's been a lot of fun. However, right now, I find myself dreading writing another update. I'm holding myself to a standard that I don't remember having and it's making every chance that I get to write feel like a chore instead of fun. As much as I want to see the plans that I have be realized, I refuse to force out a product that I'm not satisfied with.
That being said, thanks to everyone that's been here for the two book journey that this thing made. Honestly, while it has it's problems, I personally think that this story up to the end of London is my best work on this site. As such, if you guys want, I'm willing to post all of my notes and answering any questions that you might have about this story. And, if you guys really want it, after a bit of rest on my part, I wouldn't be against making another WORM quest with Atlas within it. Maybe not as the staring role, but as a character none the less.
So as I said, I invite any and all questions, thoughts on the story, memes or interest on another Shining Example.
As such, if you guys want, I'm willing to post all of my notes and answering any questions that you might have about this story.