[] I wish I could promise to take better care of my body. But I'm not strong enough, I'm not good enough to do that. I can't promise I won't keep getting hurt. I'm sorry.
-[] But I can promise that I'm never going to let my Soul Gem get that bad again. I... that was fucking reckless and stupid. Being scared and panicking isn't an excuse. I... I should fucking know by now how much my dying would hurt you. Would hurt everyone.
--[]This probably isn't exactly what you want to hear, but there are so many more things I want to do. With you, with mom, with everyone. And I plan to be around to do all of it. I am going to survive. We're both going to survive. Together.
Start of something maybe? idk I'm fucking tired
I think a "With enough time, experience or training maybe I can get good enough" should be added to the first line. A partially viable solution would go a long way to calm Kyouko down. At least she'd be able to help Sayaka instead of not being able to do anything but watch her get trashed over and over.
The Second line is still thinking about Kyouko instead of Sayaka though. I was thinking something along the lines of "I'd never let you witch out in front of me if I could help it, so I trusted you to clense me" at least that says something other than "I'll hurt Kyouko if I witch out" The first part about being reckless and stupid works and how it not being an excuse works though.
The Third line is pretty sound too. It shows that yes, Sayaka cares about living for more people than just Kyouko. While it's totally not what Kyouko wants to hear, it's about as good as it's gonna get. Lol codependent relationship and all that.
Still it gets all the major points accross:
1. Sayaka does in fact care about herself. It's not to the level Kyouko wants, but it's a start.
2. Sayaka explains why she doesn't care about physical injuries and why she can't aford to stop it.
3. Sayaka offers some hope of a solution to the problem, even if it's a far fetched one.
4. Liberal applications of self loathing.
[X] I wish I could promise to take better care of my body. But I'm not strong enough, I'm not good enough to do that. Maybe, with enough training and experience, I can get good enough, until then I can't promise I won't keep getting hurt. I'm sorry Kyouko.
-[X] But I can promise that I'm never going to let my Soul Gem get that bad again. I... that was
fucking reckless and stupid. Being scared and panicking isn't an excuse. It's just...I'd never let you turn into t-
that in front of me if I could help it. I trusted you do do the same to me.
--[X]This probably isn't exactly what you want to hear, but there are so many more things I want to do. With you, with mom, with everyone. And I plan to be around to do all of it. I am going to survive. We're both going to survive. Together.