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Oh boy... That asshat at the door should be fucking glad all he is going to get is a bee stinging his dick, because if Bitch saw what just happened...
 
For a moment there I thought that the girl was Emma, broken up over Sophia's death and walking over to the camp to attach herself to Rachel or Taylor or something like that, before I remembered that Sierra too had red hair. Also Bryce... sigh. Please tell me Taylor is gonna teach him a lesson in humility by way of beetles up the nose?

Also Dose is such a good Merchant name.
 
Rakkis157 said:
Also Bryce... sigh. Please tell me Taylor is gonna teach him a lesson in humility by way of beetles up the nose?
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Bryce is hard to teach. Canonically, he had to be babysitted by trained mercenaries to even get a little bit better, and I Think he still tried to hit on one of them and some dumb things? And he lost fingers and stuff.

If Bryce was capable of learning through normal means, like beatle inhalation, he never showed it before.
 
NemoMarx said:
Bryce is hard to teach. Canonically, he had to be babysitted by trained mercenaries to even get a little bit better, and I Think he still tried to hit on one of them and some dumb things? And he lost fingers and stuff.

If Bryce was capable of learning through normal means, like beatle inhalation, he never showed it before.
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In canon, he went willingly with them. In this, Taylor's forcing him to evaluate his desire to be in the Merchants in the most visceral possible terms. He wants to break the rules, then do it. His reaction showed that he's still not hardened to the ways of the Merchants, that he's still ignoring some of what makes them utter scum. Taylor made him face that.
 
The Laurent said:
I would replace his hopes and dreams with spiders.
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This is a great line.

The Laurent said:
There were car engines here and there, running off gas, that somehow, impossibly, hooked up to the electricity, through a set of strange machines… which made no sense, but tinkers were bullshit.
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This however doesn't make any sense at all...

I mean... a electrician, first year engineering student or a good mechanic could turn a car into a simple gas generator with the parts that are already in the car. There is nothing even remotely tinkertech about it.
 
I have to agree with @BiasedMendicant, that Taylor seems to be getting quite vicious, but having to watch a little girl get drugged without being able to do anything about it will probably do that to you.

I hope that somebody gets around to knocking some sense into Bryce, regardless of what he decides to do.
 
The Laurent said:
So do a lot of the readers? I mean, I don't want to be that guy, but... where is everyone?
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I don't know if they have anything relevant to post... I certainly didn't, apart from generic "This was great, but I HATE you for the cliffhangers !"
And everything I could think of had already been said.

This was a great chapter, but it feels like half a chapter. The other half hasn't been posted yet.
 
"I would replace his hopes and dreams with spiders." Tay Tay don't ever change!
Doping and raping women? Hell all the merchants need to end up crying on the ground.


When that woman showed up, my first thought was its a trap!
 
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Well, this was a good deal more graphic than usual for this fic(not that that's necessarily a bad thing. Or a good thing.)
It did make me want Taylor to replace all the Merchant's hopes and dreams with spiders(and bees, and wasps, and centipedes....) though, so it worked pretty well.
 
I would happily post just to coo at every new adorable thing Taylor does or thinks, but i don't really have anything constructive in mind, very happy with the pacing and development.
 
You did a good job conveying the Mad Max vibe this chapter. And not the sexy Mel Gibson driving fast cars part, but the hopeless apocalyptic rape-psycho world part. That line about the Merchants demolishing entire buildings to make room for their little fiefdom really sells how the city is still in the downwards spiral stage.


I'm super excited to see Pelter's role in the coming fight, since hopefully she's done some analysis on her powers with Taylor since her last showing. Equally excited to see how her powers actually work. She was capable of non-lethal crime fighting tactics when she was operating solo, which implies her shots can be tailored (via projectile choice, I think was established) to impart diffuse force rather than simply penetrating and risking bleed outs.

But apparently she's been kitted out with steel pellets and put on crowd control duties for the pending battle? I'm having a hard time parsing how steel pellets lend themselves to anything other than putting tiny holes in people's bodies. Then again, Taylor is putting them up against a crew of enemy capes that has 3-4 members at minimum and (depending on how exactly the patches work) dozens at maximum, so perhaps the plan does indeed rely on Pelter putting holes in legs/shoulders/whatever until the enemies stop moving, lest they get dragged down by a mob of pseudo-capes.


Speaking on the patches, I'm hoping we discover there's some inherent weakness to their use that we just haven't been make aware of yet. Possibilities off the top of my head: A non-negligble to high rate of failure (i.e., they hand them out like candy because only 1 in 10/100 work), a large amount of time between patch application and power manifestation (even 30 seconds to a minute could give Taylor time to bring them down), or just something as simple as the pseudo-capes not being familiar with their powers right from the get go.


Finally, I think the good guys should sit down and really think about the pros/cons of removing Dose (the chem Tinker) from the playing field, even if it requires drastic measures (like maiming him so he can't Tinker, or even assassinating him if no other plan will work). They really have to take into consideration how much damage the guy's patches are doing to the city. From the way the Merchants appear to be handing the things out like candy, it's all too likely that at least a few of their more unstable/inebriated gang members have used a patch, walked into an apartment complex or something, and just turned the place into an abattoir.

Killing is wrong, yeah, but unless Taylor can come up with some other way to stop Dose it could be argued that she kinda has an ethical obligation to forcefully stop him from causing the amount of harm that he currently (possibly) is. Both in the sense that she's a hero and in the sense that she's one of the few people in a position to stop the guy who's directly responsible for spreading around so much suffering to other people.

Then again she's just a kid, so the whole "obligation" argument loses a lot of the weight it might otherwise have. Especially if carrying out such a violent plan messes with her head so much that she goes on to do less good in the future.
 
Petersi44575 said:
But apparently she's been kitted out with steel pellets and put on crowd control duties for the pending battle? I'm having a hard time parsing how steel pellets lend themselves to anything other than putting tiny holes in people's bodies. Then again, Taylor is putting them up against a crew of enemy capes that has 3-4 members at minimum and (depending on how exactly the patches work) dozens at maximum, so perhaps the plan does indeed rely on Pelter putting holes in legs/shoulders/whatever until the enemies stop moving, lest they get dragged down by a mob of pseudo-capes.



Finally, I think the good guys should sit down and really think about the pros/cons of removing Dose (the chem Tinker) from the playing field, even if it requires drastic measures (like maiming him so he can't Tinker, or even assassinating him if no other plan will work). They really have to take into consideration how much damage the guy's patches are doing to the city. From the way the Merchants appear to be handing the things out like candy, it's all too likely that at least a few of their more unstable/inebriated gang members have used a patch, walked into an apartment complex or something, and just turned the place into an abattoir.

Killing is wrong, yeah, but unless Taylor can come up with some other way to stop Dose it could be argued that she kinda has an ethical obligation to forcefully stop him from causing the amount of harm that he currently (possibly) is. Both in the sense that she's a hero and in the sense that she's one of the few people in a position to stop the guy who's directly responsible for spreading around so much suffering to other people.

Then again she's just a kid, so the whole "obligation" argument loses a lot of the weight it might otherwise have. Especially if carrying out such a violent plan messes with her head so much that she goes on to do less good in the future.
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Having steel pellets is basically like having an extremely concealable firearm that can use anything as ammo. Depending on just how hard she can throw, that could make her anything from a nuisance to a walking machine gun.

As to killing Dose, nothing says a rampaging tankdog(like, say, the Inka someone requested to make a cameo) or it's rather short tempered owner can't make the decision for them...
 
The Laurent said:
The, "People seem to not be reading" is more the Like situation more than anything. I'm very sensitive to my like-game. :p
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The story just needs more advertising so people know what they are missing. Like the Reddit best of 2017 thread. You are on for a few categories, like romantic/slice of life. For second just need to out vote the Taylor/Madison one that never continued after one update but people still vote on for some reason.
Not sure if you can get first it's the same one from last year kinda overwhelms the slice of life part.
 
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