Wolf Spider (Worm) (Complete)

Not much follow up I can do for you there. As for the "beg pardon" as a short form is that one of those American things? Like y'all, or fixin' to? Never heard anyone shorten it up here in Canada.

Beg pardon is certainly not something that would surprise me to hear.

I can't actually remember anything about Grue-Rachel interactions. Feel free to tell me more.


Grue Rachel interactions? Let's see what I can dig up pre-leviathan. Post probably less representative.

2.8 said:
"Call off your dogs!" Brian shouted.
The largest of the dogs, an ugly Rottweiler or a mutt with strong Rottweiler blood, seized my wrist in its jaws. My knees almost buckled in response to the pain, which only worsened when it abruptly snapped its head to one side and wrenched my arm. I fell, and in a heartbeat, the other two dogs – a German Shepherd and a hairless terrier with a missing ear and eye – were on me.
The German Shepherd set to barking and snapping at my face, occasionally catching the hair that hung in front of my face to pull at it. The other started raking at me with its claws and nipping with its teeth, trying to find somewhere on my legs, body or backside that it could set its teeth into.
While those two were at it, the Rottweiler still had my wrist in its teeth, and it began pulling, as though it wanted to drag me somewhere. I grit my teeth at the pain and tried to think something I could do that would amount to more than curling up into a fetal position to protect my arms, legs and face.
"Call off the fucking dogs!" I heard Brian bellow, again.
A tooth or claw scratched my ear. I think that's what spooked me, because my composure broke and I cried out.
Just a second or two later, a much longer span of time than it sounds like when a pack of dogs is tearing at you, there was a whistle. Hearing the noise, the dogs abruptly backed off. The one eyed terrier offered one hostile bark followed by a long growl even as it walked away, as if it still had enough mean left in it that it had to let it out somehow.
Lisa and Alec helped me to my feet. I was shaking like a leaf. One of my hands gripped the forearm of my other arm, as much to stop the worst of the trembling as to cradle the injury. I had tears in the corners of my eyes and I was clenching my teeth so hard my jaw ached.
On the opposite side of the room, Brian was rubbing the back of one of his hands. The three dogs were sitting in a neat line ten feet away from a girl who was lying on the ground. The girl had blood running from both of her nostrils. I recognized her from the picture I had seen on her wiki page. Rachel Lindt. Hellhound. Bitch.
"I fucking hate it," Brian growled at the girl, putting emphasis on the swear, "When you make me do that."
Bitch propped herself up a bit, half against the wall opposite me, so she had a better view of the room. A better view of me. Seeing her in person just confirmed my impressions of her from her picture online. She wasn't attractive. An unkind person might call her butch, and I wasn't feeling particularly kindly towards her. Most of her features looked like they would have been better fit on a guy rather than a girl. She had a square face, thick eyebrows, and a nose that had been broken more than once – maybe broken again just a moment ago, given the blood trickling from her nostrils. Even as far as her physical build went, she was solidly built without being fat. The trunk of her body alone was bigger around than mine was with my arms down at my sides, just by virtue of having a thicker, broader torso and having more meat on her bones. She was wearing boots, black jeans with tears all over them, and a green army jacket over a gray hooded sweatshirt. Her auburn hair was cut shortish.
I took a deep breath. Then, speaking slowly so I wouldn't stumble over my words or let a tremor into my voice, I asked "Why the fuck did you do that?"
She didn't reply. Instead, she licked her upper lip clean of blood and smiled. It was a mean, smug sneer of a smile. Even though she was the one lying on the ground with a bloody nose, she somehow had it in her head that she'd beat me. Or something.
"God fucking dammit!" Brian was shouting. He went on to say something else, but I didn't really hear it over the buzzing of my power in my ears. I realized I was clenching my fist, and habitually forced myself to relax it.
Then, like I had done so many times over the past few days and weeks, I searched for a reason to justify why I was backing down. It was almost reflexive. When the bullies got on my case, I always had to take a moment to collect myself and tell myself why I couldn't or shouldn't retaliate.
For a few moments, I felt adrift. Around the same time that I realized I couldn't find a reason to back off, I realized I had already wrenched free of Lisa and Alec's support and crossed half of the room at a run. I reached for my bugs and realized I'd been using my power without thinking about it. They were already gathering at the stairs and by the windows. All it took was a thought, and they started flowing into the room in greater numbers. Cockroaches, earwigs, spiders and flies. Not as many as I might have liked, I hadn't been using my power for long enough to gather those from further around the neighborhood, but it was enough to count.
Bitch saw me approaching and raised her fingers to her mouth, but I didn't give her a chance to signal her animals. I kicked for her face like I might kick a soccer ball, and she aborted the whistle to cover her head with her arms. My foot bounced off of one of her arms and her entire body recoiled as she flinched.
Because I hadn't slowed down before reaching her, I had to use my hands to stop myself from running into the wall. A line of red hot pain ran down my arm at the impact, starting at the point where the Rottweiler had bitten my wrist. Reminded of the dogs, I glanced to my right, and saw the largest of them standing, ready to come to his master's aid. I brought a large share of my bugs in between myself and the beasts. The last I saw of them before the swarm blocked most of my view, the dogs were rapidly backing away from the swarm, startled.
Finding myself standing over Bitch, braced against the wall, I pressed the attack. Her arms were covering her face and chest, but I saw her exposed ear as a target and brought my foot down on it. Her head bounced against the floor, and blood bloomed from the top of her ear. The sight of the blood almost stopped me, but I knew that backing down now would give her a chance to set them on me again with a whistle. My toe found her exposed stomach, and as she drew her knees upward to protect her belly, I aimed a sharp kick between her legs. I managed to get kicks to connect firmly with ribs three times before she brought an elbow down to protect it.
I didn't get a chance to do any more damage, because the dogs had gotten over their fear of the bugs and were closing in, circling around me and Bitch as the swarm extended. I abandoned my assault on Bitch to step away and face them. I knew I could set my bugs on them, but something told me the dogs weren't about to yelp and run away while their master was being hurt. I might have the swarm attack them, but if the pain of the bites and stings didn't stop them, they'd attack me and I'd be in the same situation I'd been in a minute ago. I doubted Bitch would call them off a second time.
A shadow fell over my vision, like a jet black curtain sweeping in front of me, blocking my view of half the room and the dogs. It dissolved into wisps of black smoke a second later, and I was startled to see Brian right in front of me, between me and the dogs.
"Enough," he intoned. The little one-eared cyclops of a terrier snarled at him in response.
There was a sound I didn't recognize. It was only when Bitch tried again, more successfully, that I realized the first sound had been a weak attempt at a whistle. The dogs looked to their master and then retreated, still edging away from the swarm. I backed away a little as well, being careful to keep Brian between myself and the mongrels.
Bitch coughed, then raised her head to look me in the eye. She rubbed her ear with one hand, and her palm was red with blood as she pulled it away. As the German Shepherd approached her, she rested the same hand on its head. The other two dogs moved closer to her, as if they could protect her, but their attention was fixed entirely on me and Brian.
When a good few seconds had passed and Bitch had made no further overtures of aggression towards me, I sent an instruction to the swarm to make their exit. I could see Brian visibly relax as they faded into the cracks.
"No more fighting," he said, his voice calmer, "I'm directing that at you, Rachel. You deserved whatever Taylor gave you."
She glared at him, coughed once, and then glanced at the other two before turning her angry gaze to the floor.
"Taylor, come sit down. I promise we'll-"
"No," I interrupted him, "Fuck this. Fuck you guys."
"Taylor-"
"You said she wasn't cool with me joining. You never said she was pissed off enough to try and kill me."
Bitch and Brian started speaking at the same time, but Brian stopped when she started coughing. As her coughing fit subsided, Bitch looked up at me and snarled, "If I ordered them to kill you, Brutus would have torn out your throat before you could scream. I gave them the hurt command."
I laughed a little, just a little more high pitched than I would've liked, "That's great. She has her dogs trained to hurt people. Seriously? Fuck you guys. Count this as another failed recruitment."
Next one isn't per se a Brian and Rachel interaction, but gives us something of his opinion.
3.1 said:
"We'll leave the stitches in for about a week, I think, before we take them out," Brian said, "You can go to your doctor and have him do it, or drop by and I'll take care of it."
I nodded. A turn of the salt-water and seaweed scented wind blew my hood back, and I took a second to push my hair out of my face and pull my hood back up.
"I'm sorry for Rachel and that whole incident last night" Brian said, "I wanted to apologize sooner, but I figured it would be a bad idea to bring it up while she was in earshot."
"It's okay," I said. I wasn't sure it was, but it wasn't really his fault. I tried to put my thoughts into words, "I think… well, I guess I expected to have people attack me from the moment I put on a costume, so I shouldn't be surprised, right?"
Brian nodded, but didn't say anything, so I added, "It caught me a little off guard that it came from someone that's supposedly on my team, but I'm dealing."
"Just so you know," Brian told me, "Just from what I saw after you left last night and as people were waking up this morning, Rachel seems to have stopped protesting quite as loudly or often about the idea of having someone new join the team. She's still not happy about it, but I would be surprised if there was a repeat performance."
I laughed, a little too abruptly and high pitched than I would have liked, "God, I hope not."
"She's kind of a special case," Brian said, "I think that growing up the way she did kind of messed her up. No family, too old and, uh, not really attractive enough to be a good candidate for adoption. I feel bad saying that, but that's the way those things work, you know?" He glanced over his shoulder at me.
I nodded.
"So she spent a good decade in foster care, no fixed place to live, fighting tooth and nail with the other foster kids for even the most basic luxuries and possessions. My guess? She was screwed up before she got her powers, and with things happening the way they did, her powers pushed her into the deepest end of the antisocial pool."
"Makes sense," I said, then I added, "I read her page on the wiki."
"So you've got the gist of it," Brian said, "She's a handful to deal with, even for me, and I think she actually considers me a friend… or as much a friend as someone like her can have, anyways. But if you can at least tolerate her, you should see we've got a pretty good thing going with the team."
"Sure," I said, "We'll give it a shot, anyways."

3.3 said:
"On what?" Brian asked. When Alec shrugged, Brian sighed and explained, "It's a horrible payoff for the amount of risk involved. There's three big superhero teams in this city. Figure there's another dozen heroes that fly solo, and we're almost guaranteed to get into a fight."
"So?" Bitch spoke for the first time, "We win fights. We won before we had her." She raised her chin in my direction as she said that last word.
"We won because we picked our battles. We wouldn't have that option if we were cooped up in the bank and waiting for them to come to us, letting them decide how and where the fight happened."
Lisa nodded and smiled as he spoke. I thought for a second that she was going to say something, but she didn't.
Brian continued, getting pretty passionate as he ranted, "We won't be able to slip away like we have when things got a little out of control in the past. Can't avoid the fight if we want to get away with anything worth taking. The bank is going to have layers of protection. Iron bars, vault doors, whatever. Even with your power, Lise, there's a limit to how fast we can get through those. Add the time we have to spend managing hostages and making a safe exit, and I pretty much guarantee that there will be time for a cape to get wind of the robbery and slow us down even more."
Alec said, "I kind of want to do it anyways. Hitting a bank gets you on the front page. It's huge for our rep."
"The runt is right," Bitch said.
Brian grumbled, "Not fucking up is better for our reputation in the long run." His deeper voice was really good for grumbling.
Alec looked at me, "What do you think?"
I'd almost forgotten I was a part of the discussion. The last thing I wanted was to rob a bank. Hostages could get hurt. The fact that it would potentially put me on the front page of the paper wasn't a high point, either, if I ever wanted to drop the supervillain ruse and become a hero in good standing. I ventured, "I think Brian makes a good case. It seems reckless."
Bitch snorted. I think I saw Alec roll his eyes.
Lisa leaned forward, "He does make good points, but I have better ones. Hear me out?" The rest of us turned our attention to her, though Brian had a frown that made it seem like it would take a lot to convince him.
"Ok, so Brian said similar stuff before, before we hit that casino a few weeks ago. So I was kind of expecting this. But it's not as bad as it sounds. The boss wants us to do a job at a very specific time. I got the sense he was willing to offer a fair bit if we went the extra mile, and I negotiated a pretty good deal.
"The bank robbery was my idea, and he liked it. According to him, the Protectorate is busy with an event on Thursday, just outside of town. That's part of the reason the timing is so important. If we act then, there's almost no chance we'll have to deal with them. If we hit the Bay Central, downtown-"
"That's the biggest bank in Brockton Bay," I interrupted her, half-disbelieving.
"So everything I said about them having security and being careful is doubly true," Brian added.
"If we hit the Bay Central, downtown," Lisa repeated herself, ignoring us, "Then we're hitting a location just a mile away from Arcadia High, where most of the Wards go to school. Given jurisdictions, New Wave won't be able to jump on us without stepping on the Wards' toes, which pretty much guarantees we go up against the team of junior superheroes. With me so far?"
We all nodded or murmured agreement.
"Figure that's happening in the middle of the school day, and they won't all be able to slip away to stop a robbery without drawing attention. People know the Wards are attending Arcadia, they just don't know who they are. So everyone's constantly watching for that. Since they can't have all six or seven of the same kids disappear from class every time the Wards go off to foil a crime without giving away the show, chances are good that we'd go up against a couple of their strongest members, or one of the strongest with a group of the ones with less amazing powers. We can beat them."
"Okay," Brian begrudged, "I'll accept that we'd probably do alright in those circumstances, but-"
Lisa interrupted him, "I also got the boss to agree to match us two for one on the haul. We bring in fifteen grand, he pays us thirty. Or he gives us enough money to bring our total up to twenty five, whichever is more in the end. So we could walk away with two thousand dollars and he'd pay us twenty three thou. So as long as we don't wind up in jail, we're guaranteed five thousand dollars apiece, bare minimum."
Brian's eyes widened, "That's insane. Why would he do that?"
"And," Lisa grinned, "He'll cover all our costs, just this once. Equipment, information, bribes if we want 'em."
"Why?" I echoed Brian's earlier question, disbelieving. Lisa was throwing around sums of money that I couldn't even wrap my head around. I had never even had more than five hundred dollars in my bank account.
"Because he's sponsoring us and it stands to reason he doesn't want to fund a team of nobodies. We manage this, we won't be nobodies. That, and he really wants us to do a job at that particular time."
There was a few moments of silence as everyone considered the deal. I was frantically trying to think of a way to try to convince these guys it was a bad idea. A bank robbery could get me arrested. Worse, it could lead to me or a bystander getting hurt or killed.
Brian beat me to it, "The risk to reward still isn't great. Five grand each for hitting what may well be the most fortified location in Brockton Bay and an almost guaranteed confrontation with the Wards?"
"Second most fortified location," Lisa countered, "The Protectorate Headquarters is the first."
"Fair point," Brian said, "But my argument stands."
"It'll be more than five grand for each of us, I guarantee you," Lisa told him, "It's the biggest bank in Brockton Bay. It's also the hub of cash distribution for the entire county. Said cash gets transferred in and out by armored cars on a regular schedule-"
"So why don't we hit one of the cars?" Alec asked.
"They have ride-alongs or aerial cover from various members of the Wards and the Protectorate, so we'd be caught in a fight with another cape from minute one. Same problems that Brian's talking about, as far as getting caught up in a fight, difficulty accessing the money before shit goes down, yadda yadda. Anyways, the Brockton Bay Central has cars coming in twice a week, and leaving four times a week. We hit on a Thursday just after noon, and it should be the best day and time for the sheer size of the take. Only way we're getting away with less than thirty thousand is if we fuck up. With what the boss is offering, that's ninety thou."
She folded her arms.
Brian sighed, long and loud, "Well, you got me, I guess. It sounds good."
Lisa turned to Alec. There wasn't any resistance to be found there. He just said, "Fuck yeah, I'm in."
Bitch didn't need convincing any more than Alec had. She nodded once and then turned her attention to the scarred little dog.
Then everyone looked at me.

3.3 while discussing Aegis said:
"You don't, really," Brian said, "Best bet is to keep him occupied, keep him sufficiently distracted or stick him somewhere he can't escape. Trap him in a dumpster and throw it in the river, you can get a few minutes of relief. Which is all harder than it sounds. He's the team captain, and he isn't stupid. Rachel? Sic your dogs on him. A two ton canine or two should keep him out of our hair until we're ready to run."
"I don't need to hold back?" Bitch asked, her eyebrow quirked.
"For once, no. Go nuts. Just, you know, don't kill him. Alec? You're the backup there. Keep an eye on Aegis, see if you can't use your power to throw him off. Buy enough time for a dog to get its jaws on him and he's probably out of action."

3.3 said:
"Oh, I didn't mean to sound like I was criticizing your plan-" I said.
"Our plan," Brian interrupted.
I didn't want to think of it that way. Instead, I said, "I'm a touch nervous, is all."
"You don't have to come," Bitch said, her tone a touch too casual.
"In all seriousness," Brian told me, "If you're having second thoughts…"
"I am," I admitted, "as well as third thoughts, fourth thoughts, and so on. But I'm not going to let that stop me. I'm coming with."
"Good," Brian replied, "Then we've got the rest of today and tomorrow to prepare. Taylor? You can meet me on your run first thing. I'll have a cell phone for you. You can text Lisa with anything you think you'll need, like those weapons you were talking about. Look up models and brands ahead of time if you want something specific."
"What's her number?" I asked.

3.8 said:
"I'm going to be sore tomorrow," Grue groaned, as he recovered from strapping the bag of papers into place, "And we haven't even been in a fight yet."
"Sore and rich," Bitch spoke. I glanced at her and saw her grinning. It was disquieting. I'd only ever seen her sullen and hostile, so any smile would be kind of creepy. It was worse than that. Hers was the kind of smile you'd see from someone who had never seen one before and was trying to replicate one from what they'd read in books. Too many teeth showing, I suppressed a shiver and focused on the work.
We slid the third bag across the floor. Grue hooked it into the harness.
"We can't put any more on here without it being a problem," he decided.
"The weight is even?" Bitch asked.
"Close enough."
Bitch stood and crossed the length of the vault to where her creature waited. She rubbed her hand on Brutus' snout like you might see a horse owner do, except Brutus most definitely wasn't a horse. She was rubbing her hand on exposed muscle, calcified tatters of flesh and bone hooks that jutted out of gaps and knots in the muscle. She managed to look almost affectionate as she did it.
"Go, baby. Go," she commanded, pointing to the front door. Brutus obediently loped off to the front of the bank and sat, his prehensile tail absently coiling around the door handle.
"Hey!" Bitch called out, then whistled twice, alternating between short and long. The smallest of the dogs, who was only recognizable now by her missing eye, bounded towards us in her excitement. Some of the hostages screamed in alarm at the sudden movement.
I winced. I didn't want to think about the hostages. They were already heavy on my conscience, and they were constantly on the periphery of my attention, as long as I continued using the bugs I'd planted on them to keep alert for any movement or talking.
"That's the one you call Angelica?" I asked, to distract myself. "The name doesn't seem to fit with what you call the others."
"I didn't name her," Bitch said. As the creature approached her, Bitch slapped her a few times on the shoulder, hard. It didn't hurt the animal though – Angelica just lashed her tail in what I realized was a warped way of wagging her tail. Bitch snapped her fingers twice and pointed at the ground, and Angelica sat.
I had already partially filled a bag when Bitch rejoined me.
"She had previous owners then."
"Fuckers," Bitch swore.
"They were the ones who made her lose her ear and her eye?" I asked.
"What? You think I fucking did it?" She dropped the money she had in her and and stood up, clenching her fists.
"Woah, no," I protested, shifting my weight so I could move out of the way if she got aggressive, "Just trying to make small talk."
She took a step toward me. "Coward. You know you can't take me in a-"
"Enough!" Grue shouted. Bitch turned on him, her eyes narrowing.
"If you can't work over there, then take over here." His voice was steady, firm. Bitch spat on the floor and did as he asked, taking the offered crowbar from his hand as they passed each other. Grue took over the bag filling where Bitch had left off. We quickly got a rhythm down, and four more bags were filled in a matter of minutes.
"We want to stay to load up the third dog or run for it?" I asked Grue, then added, "No use getting greedy." I would be happy to leave as soon as possible. I wasn't interested in the money, and I definitely wasn't interested in going to jail for it.
"How much do we have?" he glanced over in Angelica's direction
3.8 said:
Of our group, Bitch seemed the least daunted. "I can take them. Just let me go all out."
"We're not going to fucking risk killing anyone," Grue told her. "We're not maiming anyone, either. The plan stands. We have the money, we run for it."
Tattletale shook her head, "That's what they want. Why do you think they're lined up like that? We bolt with the money from any of the exits, the person on the roof tackles us, incapacitates us or keeps us busy while the rest close in. Look at how they're sort of spaced out. Just far enough apart that if we try to go between them, one of them can probably close in fast enough to nab us before we get away."
"With my power-" Grue started.
"They still outnumber us. There's at least five ways they could take one of us down while we're running, even if they were going in blind… and Vista's in the equation. Figure any distance we need to cover is going to be much farther than it looks, and things get ugly. It wouldn't be a problem if there weren't so many of them."
"Fuck," Regent groaned.
"We can't just stay here," Grue said, "Sure, they're getting cold and wet, but our odds aren't much better if we force them to come in here after us, and if we wait too long, the Protectorate might show, too."
"We have hostages," Bitch said, "If they come in here, we take out one of the hostages." Somewhere behind us, someone moaned, long and loud. I think they'd heard her.
I closed my eyes and took a deep breath. It was a bad situation, and worse, I was afraid it was my fault. I'd warned Armsmaster something was going to happen. I could believe that he'd told the teams to be ready to go out in force. Even worse, he could be the unknown person on the roof. If that was the case, and Tattletale caught on, I was supremely fucked.
Fuck.
"We need to catch them off guard," I didn't realize I was speaking aloud until the words left my mouth.
"Sure, but how are we going to do that?" Grue replied.
"You guys are masters at the getaway, right? So we change gears. We fight them face to face."

3.9 said:
"The ones we sent out are staying put?" Grue asked.
I felt out with my power. The bugs I'd put on the hostages couldn't see or hear anything, and I wasn't sensing movement. "They're doing as we told them. They ran as far as they could before your power hit them, and then they lay flat on the ground, hands on their heads."
"Then I'm going," Bitch announced. She grabbed a bone spike that was jutting out of Judas' shoulder and heaved herself up to a sitting position on his back.
"No," Tattletale said, grabbing at Bitch's boot, "Wait."
Bitch glared down at her, clearly annoyed.
"That hesitation before Aegis gave the orders to the hostages… it didn't fit."
"If you've figured something out, spit it out," Grue spoke in his echoing voice, "We need to move now, before they get reorganized!"
"Bitch, you're going after Clockblocker. Stay away from Aegis, got it?"
Bitch didn't even respond, digging her heels into Judas' sides and ducking her head to avoid hitting it on the top of the door as they raced out.
"What the fuck are you doing?" Grue growled, "She's going-"
"They switched costumes. Aegis is wearing Clockblocker's costume and vice versa."
I would have liked to see the expression on Brian's face, but as Grue, his mask covered everything. He just turned his skull-helmet back to the window, silent.
It dawned on me how badly that could have fucked us. Bitch's dogs would have attacked the person they thought was Aegis, and gotten tagged by Clockblocker instead. In one fell swoop, we would have lost the majority of our offensive power.

Here comes another not involving them interacting but involving Brian's opinions on her.

4.1 said:
"What? The sweater?" I asked.
"The sweater. The dog being carried. Rachel would be up in her face, telling that woman it's not the way a dog should be treated. Screaming at her, maybe threatening violence, if one of us didn't step in to handle things."
"It doesn't take much, does it?"
"To set her off? No it doesn't," Brian agreed, "But you gradually learn how she thinks, what pushes her buttons, and you can intervene before a situation happens."
Lisa added, "The big trigger for Rache is mistreatment of dogs. I think you could kick a toddler in the face, and she wouldn't flinch. But if you kicked a dog in front of her, she'd probably kill you on the spot."
"I'll, uh, keep that in mind," I said. Then, double checking that nobody was in a position to overhear, I figured it was as good a time to ask as any, "Has she killed anyone?"
"She's wanted for serial murder," Brian sighed, "It's inconvenient."
"If the courts actually gave her a fair trial, if she had a good lawyer, I think she'd get manslaughter at worst, maybe reckless endangerment. At least for the events that happened then." Lisa said, her voice pitched low enough that nobody else in the crowd would pick it up, "It happened just after her powers manifested. She didn't know how to use her abilities, or what to expect of them, so the dog that she had with her grew into the sort of creature you've seen the others become, and because it wasn't trained, because it had been abused, it went out of control. Cue the bloodbath. In the time since then? Maybe. I know she's seriously hurt a lot of people. But nobody's died at her hands since we've been with her."

Brutus the dog interlude said:
"Bitch, hold up," speaks the scentless man. Scentless man makes Brutus nervous because he is big but he has no smell. But he is Master's alpha so Master stops and listens.
"You're going out?" the scentless man asks.
"Work," Master says.
The scentless man waits for something, then speaks again, "Are you okay?"
"Fuckin' peachy." Brutus knows Master only says fuck word like that when she's mad.
"I have a hard time believing that, to be honest. You were in pretty rough shape when I found you with Über and Leet's henchmen, and those guys from the ABB."
"I'm fine now," Master tells him. She sounds angry. Brutus steps forward, ready to growl to add own voice to hers, but Master tugs on leash just a little and Brutus stays quiet.
"When I found you, one of them had you tied to the ceiling by your wrists and was using you as a punching bag."
Master breaks eye contact. Brutus knows this is a sign that Master sees the scentless man as her alpha. When she speaks, she still sounds angry, "I fucked up. I was bored, restless, figured I'd walk Angelica and see if I could meet you guys where the money was. Someone recognized me and tailed me. I was stupid, I took my licks for it. I'm fine now, we have the money, all is well."
The scentless man sighs. Sounds a little angry as he says, "It's not… no, nevermind. No use getting into it. But what if someone recognizes you while you're walking him?"
"I'll fight back sooner, harder. Or are you going to tell me I can't walk my dogs anymore?" All of a sudden, Master is tense. Brutus can see it in her legs, hear it in her voice, feel it in her grip on the leash.
"I wouldn't do that," the scentless man replies, his voice quiet, slightly strained "And you wouldn't listen even if I did. Just… be careful."
"I can go?"
"Go. Enjoy your walk, both of you."
And the tension leaves Master. One small whistle and Brutus knows to follow. Down the stairs and out the door into the outside world. So many smells! So many sounds! So exciting!
But can't get too excited. Brutus is good boy. Doesn't pull on leash like Angelica still does. Master always makes angry clucking noise at Angelica on walkies.
Master is walking slower. Favoring one leg. Brutus is eager for walkies but doesn't pull on leash even if Master is walking slower.

5.2 said:
Nobody, to date, had ever escaped the Birdcage, the name that had been coined for the supervillain prison in British Columbia. Hookwolf, though, had escaped on no less than two occasions while being transported there. He was a killer, and thought nothing of murdering people if they didn't fit the Aryan ideal.
He turned to look at our table, very pale blue eyes visible through the slits in his metal mask, "My complaint's with her."
"What's the issue?" Grue's voice was calm, but it looked like he was generating a bit more darkness around him than he had been, making himself look a fraction bigger. I wondered if he knew he was doing it.
"The crazy one, Hellhound, she-"
"Bitch," Bitch interrupted him, "Only the panty-ass heroes call me Hellhound. It's Bitch."
"Don't fucking care," Hookwolf growled, "You attacked my business. Set your fucking dog on my customers. Lucky I wasn't there, whore."
Grue gave Bitch a long look, then he spoke to Hookwolf, "That's the kind of risk you run, doing business in Brockton Bay. Capes can and will get in your way, hero or villain."
Hookwolf glared at him, "It's a matter of respect. You want to fuck with my business, and we're not at war? You let me know if you've got an issue, first. Let me decide if I want to move shop."
"You mean give you a warning I'm coming," Bitch spat the words, "That's the dumbest fucking thing I ever heard. Just so you know, moving to a different neighborhood won't be good enough. You open up another dogfighting ring, I'll be visiting that one too."
Oh, that's what she'd done. I glanced at Tattletale, then at Grue. I was getting the impression neither of them had known.
Kaiser spoke, "Is that a declaration of war, Undersiders? We just agreed to a truce, if you recall." He was utterly calm, a stark contrast to Hookwolf. Hookwolf was brimming with barely suppressed rage to the point that I could picture him leaping across the room and attacking us if someone so much as dropped a glass.
Grue shook his head. I think. I couldn't really tell with the way his darkness shrouded him, with his back turned to us. He answered, "Not interested in war, but I'm not going to stop my teammate from doing what she has to."
"You mean you can't stop your subordinate," Kaiser mused.
Grue didn't have a quick response to that. I suspected he couldn't say Bitch wasn't a subordinate without demoting himself in the eyes of the others at the table. Kaiser, Trickster, Faultline and Coil were all leaders. Grue took a leadership role when needed, but he wasn't in charge of us. Not exactly.
Grue clasped his hands in front of him, leaning forward with his elbows on the table. "It's not so unusual for a cape to have a pet issue. You should know that as much as anyone. How would your people react if you forbid them from harassing or hurting gays, Kaiser?"
"I wouldn't."
"Exactly. Same with her. Word gets around that you're someone who hurts dogs, she'll fuck you up. It's kind of common knowledge here."
"Not something I'd pay attention to. I'm more of a cat person." The sardonic comment elicited a few chuckles from the room.
"I think it's worth paying attention to if it leads to situations like this," Grue responded, his voice firm.
"I delegate to my underlings and trust them to keep track of minor details. Hookwolf has been out of town until recently. He must not have heard."
The bullshit was so transparent I couldn't help but wonder if he was baiting us.
"I'd like to resolve this peacefully," Grue reiterated.
Kaiser shook his head with the sound of metal edges scraping on metal, "Peace is always preferable, but I can't let an insult like this slide. We'll need restitution before this can be put to rest. Money or blood. Your choice."
Bitch made a sound low in her throat. She and Hookwolf weren't the only ones bristling. I looked at the table where Hookwolf sat with Fenja, Menja, Night, Fog, and Krieg, and everyone there looked visibly angry.
"Then let's sit on it until we're freer to give the matter our full attention," Grue spoke, "The truce is in effect, and we'll meet again when things are more or less resolved with the ABB." He looked to the others at the table for confirmation.
"We will," Coil replied. Faultline nodded.
"What do you say?" Grue asked Kaiser, "Set this aside for now?"
Kaiser nodded, once. "Fair. We'll discuss the matter further at our next meeting."
"That's settled then. Anything else?" Coil asked, "Issues, negotiations, requests?"
There was no reply.
Coil took that as answer enough. "Then let's conclude the meeting. Thank you for attending. Faultline, could I have a word before you leave?"
There was the sound of chairs scraping against the floor as the people at the table got up, Faultline and Coil excepted. Skidmark's group headed out the door to leave right away, while Kaiser and Purity walked to the table where their underlings sat with their drinks. The Travelers loitered around their table, not quite settling in, not leaving.
Grue returned to us, but he didn't sit.
"Let's go."
Nobody argued. We stood and left Somer's Rock. Skidmark's group was taking their time leaving down one end of the street, so, unspoken, we headed in the other direction, just to be safe. There was no doubt those guys were spoiling for a fight. They were the diametrical opposite of Kaiser, Coil, and Faultline. Hotheaded, reckless, unpredictable. They would start a fight, even knowing they would set every other gang in the city against them for abusing neutral territory.
We were a block away from the pub when Grue spoke, "Bitch. Do you understand why I'm pissed right now?"
"Why we're pissed," Tattletale added.
"I guess."
Grue paused, as if he was choosing his words carefully, "I want to be certain you know what you did wrong."
"Fuck you," she snapped, "I get the idea. You don't have to get on my case."
Grue glanced at the rest of us, then looked over his shoulder in the direction of the pub.
We walked in grim silence past three different stores before he lashed out. He grabbed Bitch by the shoulder, then pulled her backward to break her stride and put her off balance enough that she stumbled. Before she could regain her footing, he forced her bodily into the recessed area at the front of an old bookstore and shoved her against the door, his hand gripping her throat.
I looked towards the pub. There was nobody leaving, and nobody looking our way. Biting my lip, I joined Tattletale and Regent in stepping inside the alcove. I was praying Grue knew what he was doing.
For several long seconds, he just held her there, leaving her to claw for a grip on his arm and glove, kick ineffectually at his leg. Twice, as she looked like she had enough leverage to hit him harder, he used his grip on her throat to pull her forward and then shove her back against the door again, hard enough to give her coughing fits.
She didn't stop fighting as he spoke, his quiet voice hollow with the effects of his power, "I hate this, Rachel. That you make me do shit like this. That when I say things like that, I sound like everything I hate most in this world. But that's just the way you play things. It's the only time you're willing to listen. You hearing what I'm saying?"
Bitch jabbed at the center of his stomach, but he used the length of his arms to pull his body back enough to avoid the worst of the hit, while still holding on to her throat. He slammed her against the door again. "You hearing me, Rachel?"
She nodded sullenly, eyes darting in every direction but directly at him. He eased up a fraction, and she was able to gasp in a few breaths.
"Look me in the eyes," he intoned.
She did. His visor was just an inch from her face, and she couldn't actually see his eyes, but she stared steadily into the dark holes of his skull mask. I wasn't sure I could have, and he wasn't angry at me.
"You made me look bad. You made us look bad. I'm not pissed because of what you did to Hookwolf's business. That's you. That's your baggage, your shit. I get that it's par for the course with you on the team. I can live with that. You following?"
Another reluctant nod. Not breaking eye contact.
I peeked around the corner to make sure this conversation was still private. The Travelers were outside the pub now, but they were taking their time leaving. Trickster was smoking a cigarette through the mouth-hole of his mask.
Grue went on, "You know what you did wrong? You didn't fucking tell us. You let me fucking go in there and talk to those guys and get caught with my pants down. I had to fucking defend the actions of my team without knowing what the fuck people were talking about. It made me look weak. It made all of us look weak."
"You want an apology?"
"Would you mean it? I haven't heard a honest apology from you since I met you, and believe me, an insincere apology from you would only piss me off more right now. So it's your call. You want to try?"
Bitch didn't answer. I could see her square her shoulders, straighten her head, a change of posture that was subtly challenging.
"Christ, Rachel. This is your second major fuckup in the span of two weeks. Do I need to talk to the boss and-"
"Stop," Tattletale cut in, "My turn."
Grue dropped his hand from Bitch's neck and stepped away, folding his arms as he turned his back to her. What had he been saying before Tattletale interrupted? Do I need to talk to the boss and see if we can replace you?
If that was it, I could see why Tattletale had stepped in.
"You're frustrated, I get it," Tattletale spoke. Bitch was staring in the window of the bookstore, avoiding eye contact while she rubbed her neck. Tattletale went on, "You don't feel like you did anything wrong, and if you had another chance to do things over, you feel like you'd do everything the same way… yet people are pissed at you."
Bitch met Tattletale's eyes. Her tone was a combination of irritation and boredom, "And people are taking turns chewing me out and spewing psychobabble shit at me."
Tattletale waited, maybe to get her composure, to figure out another approach, or to use her power to dig for information she could use. Or maybe she was waiting to give Bitch time to think about how she wasn't helping herself any with what she was saying. I wasn't sure – I couldn't read her expression. She wasn't smiling or grinning like she usually did, though.
Tattletale's tone was more exasperated as she replied, "Fine. I'll cut right to the point. Both of your screwups this past week had to do with a lack of communication. If you'd called to let us know you were heading out to the money early, maybe we could have anticipated the ambush. If you let us know you'd messed with Hookwolf's dogfighting ring, we'd have been more prepared tonight. So open your mouth more. Talk to us, let us know what's going on. Alright?"
Bitch didn't respond, tension standing out on her neck, posture stiff, hands in her pockets.
"Think on it," Tattletale suggested.
I checked around the corner again. Trickster was still smoking his cigarette, but he was looking directly at us. At me. The gorilla-thing was too, but the others were looking at Trickster. I think he was talking. It was hard to tell.
"I think it's time to wrap this up," I informed the others, "Eyes on us."
We left the nook, with only Bitch's slumped posture giving any indication that anything had gone on. She trailed a few feet behind the rest of us. There was tension, and it wasn't all directed at or coming from her. Grue and Tattletale were walking slightly apart from one another. He either hadn't liked it when she cut in, or he was angry at himself, but something was bugging one or both of them.

Eh. Skimmed up through 6.3 finding what I could but not gonna bother further at this point.
 
While this did feel less polished than Split, I still liked it. When I say, it feels less polished, I'm not sure I can put my finger on exactly why that is. Certain things are kinda awkwardly phrased, but I'm not always sure if it's unintentional or if it even needs correcting. I'm really bad at proofreading so I'll just pick out a few things that I hope show what I mean.

Normally it would be "I don't have an x bone in my body" if you wanted to use instinct it would be something more like, I dunno, "I didn't have an ounce of maternal instinct."

It feels really weird to include an "uh" in an internal monologue. It also feels very unlike Taylor, although that could just be my faulty memory, it's been a a few years since I read Worm.


Here she brings up her constume and seems to be about to talk about how she made it and how it's different from other hero's costumes but then just sorta forgets and starts talking about something else. Sure this is fanfiction and us readers know that she had spiders weave it out of spider silk but it's weird that she starts talking about it and then just drops it.

She says, "I'd even finished my costume a little bit ago. I'd made it myself, and not in the way most independent heroes did." then talks about what her power is and I think it's leading up to an explanation of how she made her costume but then the next thing she says about it is just "One of the things I'd done was make a costume. It was really complicated, and my costume was done".

It's weird, maybe I missed something, I dunno.

Again, I really like the story, there are just some rough edges.

Well, I fixed these problems, at least!

I think? Feel free to check.
 
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...I've never actually done a non-alt-power Taylor.
A little off topic, but when I first got into the Worm fandom I actually avoided altpower fics completely. That was because I loved her canon powerset so much. In fact, her power was almost the entire reason I read Worm to begin with, and it remains one of my favorite superpowers of all time.
 
I really don't know how Taylor is going to get on with the rest of the Undersiders ... let's be honest, Lisa and Alec can be really really annoying when they want to be, and even when they don't want to be ... and it's easy for Lisa to set off Taylor's 'Emma' vibes if she's not careful.
 
Well, there's always the bit where he choked her into submission and goes all 'I hate how you make me do this' like an abusive boyfriend after he learns about her attacking Nazi dog fighting rings from hookwolf in Canon. Not many people expound on that aspect of his character for some reason. It's weird.
Because physical force is what Rachel respects, or at least what she respects without putting a fuck ton of effort into building a relationship based on non human rules. Rachel is playing by dog rules and being physically put in her place is normal for her. Brian hates having to do it because he doesn't run by dog rules so it isn't normal for him. Talking doesn't work, smiling makes things worse and Rachel herself attacks people out of the blue.

and it's easy for Lisa to set off Taylor's 'Emma' vibes if she's not careful.
This is what bothers me about the end. Taylor doesn't have Rachel's fucked up instincts so she shouldn't think like Rachel in response to Lisa's smile. It feels really off and kind of railroady. If you need a reason for Lisa and Taylor to not get along then Lisa does sort of remind Taylor of Emma in canon.
 
Because physical force is what Rachel respects, or at least what she respects without putting a fuck ton of effort into building a relationship based on non human rules. Rachel is playing by dog rules and being physically put in her place is normal for her. Brian hates having to do it because he doesn't run by dog rules so it isn't normal for him. Talking doesn't work, smiling makes things worse and Rachel herself attacks people out of the blue.


This is what bothers me about the end. Taylor doesn't have Rachel's fucked up instincts so she shouldn't think like Rachel in response to Lisa's smile. It feels really off and kind of railroady. If you need a reason for Lisa and Taylor to not get along then Lisa does sort of remind Taylor of Emma in canon.

It's not railroady at all? When you talk to people, you get used to them. Have you ever heard the phrase code-switching before? How a person talks one way in front of one peer group, and another way in front of another?

Taylor was setting her, "Make sure not to smile, that's probably hostility" mindset on, and so when she sees Lisa, her first reaction is, "Hostility!" Her first reaction, not her only reaction.

Honestly, people keep on expecting me to treat Lisa unfairly, and it keeps on not happening in any of my fics?

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Also, Rachel doesn't attack people out of the blue, or rather, it's useful to think about what's really happening. It's that everyone else misses the warning signs. This comes off as out of the blue, and she's sometimes impulsive in her actions in this respect, brooding and then acting.
 
Because physical force is what Rachel respects, or at least what she respects without putting a fuck ton of effort into building a relationship based on non human rules. Rachel is playing by dog rules and being physically put in her place is normal for her. Brian hates having to do it because he doesn't run by dog rules so it isn't normal for him. Talking doesn't work, smiling makes things worse and Rachel herself attacks people out of the blue.


This is what bothers me about the end. Taylor doesn't have Rachel's fucked up instincts so she shouldn't think like Rachel in response to Lisa's smile. It feels really off and kind of railroady. If you need a reason for Lisa and Taylor to not get along then Lisa does sort of remind Taylor of Emma in canon.
On top of what @The Laurent said. Taylor has already been primed to dislike TT because her only friend (Rachel) said they don't get along.
 
Personally, I love this AU so far @The Laurent, Rachel is one of my fav characters (I'm a shameless Undersider fan in general) and I love it when she gets some spotlight.

I like your writing so far, and the only bit of "concrit" I can really think of are some/a lot(? I didn't count) of the sentences that feel like they shouldn't be 2 sentences separated by a period, but a single sentence divided by a comma, because so many extremely short sentences (some peppered in are fine) close together though read very choppily and some places have awkward syntax (but mostly the comma thing).

For example:
First was the obvious one. I got decent grades, and that despite the bullying and harassment campaign that Emma, Sophia, and Madison were leading.

The first was obvious, I got decent grades despite the bullying campaign Emma, Sophia and Madison were leading against me.

This was a lie, of course. But they tried to make it real, or rather, make it seem real.

This was a lie of course, but they tried to make it real, or rather, make it seem real.

Anyways, I'm looking forward to this! Rachel deserves some love! Lisa! Stop showing your teeth! Bad Thinker! BAD! :p
 
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I'm really liking this fic so far, for one it's actually making me like Greg. I didn't particularly mind canon Greg, but I can't stand fanon Greg or Taylor's interaction with him. It's either super au Greg or Taylor treats him like some sort of talking fungus which is all kinds of grating considering how she hates the way Emma and company treat her.
 
I would add that even in canon Worm, Taylor is able to note when Tattletale is smiling on purpose as opposed to sincerely. She very much likes having the upper hand, even when that's not the best idea diplomatically. So this 'intervention' is very IC, if stupidly risky given how badly things could go if Bitch flips out on her.
 
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Bit of fridge logic from canon:

Lisa knows enough about what sets Rachel off to have a pretty good guess that telling her her power messed with her head would cause her to freak out, yeah?

So she's been studying Rachel for a while, trying to get her to work with the team, to learn that kind of thing. Why doesn't she know that smiles set her off, or that she has to be blunter with her, or anything? She barely even gives tips to Skitter in canon, and that's while Skitter is the only one going to hang out with Rachel and keep her integrated socially with the team at all, basically.
 
Ruff 1.4
Ruff 1.4

Tattletale was a striking girl. She looked older than me, but wasn't any taller, and had dark blonde hair that was kept in a bun at the moment. Freckles dotted her face, and her green eyes looked back at me. She was dressed pretty plainly, in a somewhat long skirt and a blouse, a look that seemed to be striving not to be noticed, but not in a noticeable way.

It wasn't like how I wore heavier clothes to hide my body, this was more that she wanted to come off as just a normal girl. Which I supposed was part of the point.

I fidgeted, and her smile dimmed for a moment as the door closed. "You can call me Lisa," she said, holding out a hand.

I shook her hand, glancing over at Rachel, who already seemed to be bristling, retreating into herself. But it felt different, actually, and I wasn't quite sure why. I'd only known her a week, and so I tried to give a mental shrug and even smiled back for a second, before stopping myself.

Now there was a problem. I'd mentally readied myself for Rachel, but now I was getting someone else, with different social rules and norms. It made me nervous and afraid I'd make a mistake, or that she'd judge me harshly. The fact that she was so attractive almost reminded me of Emma, but I knew that wasn't fair, and so I tried to tamp down on any judgements.

After all, if I'd gone by my first impression of Rachel, that'd have been a disaster.

"Nice to meet you, Lisa," I said.

"Rachel's been hanging around here all the time, and my teammates were worried. They also caught wind of your existence, and aren't quite sure about that," Lisa said, earnestly, "but I'm sure we can work through any confusion there. It's good that Rachel has someone to talk to, really."

She said it all breezily, chattering away, but then there was that look in her eyes. Curious, as if she were taking me in.

"It's good to talk to her," I said, hefting my backpack a little. "I didn't expect this at all. They won't attack me, right?"

"No, they won't," Lisa said, stepping back slightly and turning. "You shouldn't have to worry… what can I call you?"

I frowned. "How much do you already know?"

"My power lets me figure things out, make guesses and inferences. It can annoy people sometimes," Lisa said, with another of those grins, "but I do think I've guessed your name. But if you want to hide it…"

"I don't have a cape name yet. I've been thinking about that. So why not just… Bug?" It wasn't a real name, and I didn't like it, but it'd work for now.

Lisa nodded, her face friendly, though the grin still made it hard for me to cope. Because my natural reaction was to start smiling more, to match her actions, I thought. Monkey see, monkey do. But Rachel was there, and she was the one I really wanted to talk to, now: I'd brought books and everything.

From the way she was looking at us, she didn't like this, didn't like it at all. I wondered what she was thinking, what her problem was with all of this. She didn't like her team, maybe they didn't like her back? Lisa seemed awfully earnest, and yet could she really be so clueless as to not realize that she was acting in the wrong way to get close to Rachel?

I wasn't sure what was going on here, and I have to admit, that made me feel nervous. That feeling I had before one of the trio tried a prank, before something went wrong. My hands sweaty, my body twinging, alerting me to every little ache and pain just in case they were relevant. I licked my lips, which suddenly felt dry.

Lisa moved towards the door, and I said, "One second, Lisa."

"That's fine, we're not in that much of a hurry," Lisa said, and she sounded like she meant it. It was easy to like someone who was trying their hardest to be friendly, and yet, Rachel's own tension was almost rubbing off on me, leaving me a little conflicted.

I stepped towards Rachel and gestured a little farther from the door, and asked, "Rachel, are you okay?"

A long pause. "Yeah."

"Listen, you're not usually one to mince words, right?" I asked, "I want you to be blunt here."

"No, I'm not fucking okay." she said, turning to glare over at Lisa. "They're just here to make fun of me and get me back there. Caged in that stupid apartment where they can keep me at heel." She crossed her arms, looking as if she wanted to move somewhere.

It made me nervous, actually, because I'd seen that kind of fidgety energy before, the way a body just wanted to act but couldn't. But I'd seen it on someone I didn't like, and I liked Rachel. Either way, it was the kind of thing I just realized was liable to explode in an instant into… something. Something that'd wind up with the room rearranged.

"You like it better here?" I asked, trying to keep a calm, even voice. Trying to work through the words. "And, they're not so sure about that?"

She nodded, turning to glare at Lisa.

"And so now they're coming to check up on you, and you think they're trying to pressure you? Then just tell them no. They can't force you to do anything, right?"

Rachel's eyes hardened a little more, as if she were gathering herself up for an attack, and she nodded again.

"So, I'll just go in there, I'll meet and talk to them, you'll brush off their attempts, and then they'll leave and we can just do other stuff." I shrugged, trying to sound as casual as possible, since I knew I was talking her through something in a way that might annoy her.

"I hate talking to them. They're all assholes," Rachel admitted. She looked like she tried for a shrug, but there was none of that retreat I'd seen before. When she was angry with me, she retreated a little, and bottled it up. This was a sort of… offensive holding it in. Like someone carrying a knife in plain view. From the way she was tensing, she'd had bad memories of talking to them.

That could be her fault, I knew, because she could be hard to get along with, but that didn't make it any less troubling.

So I just didn't say anything either way. Sometimes that was smarter than talking in a panic.

Lisa walked over to the door, the dogs already barking, and opened it up. On the other side was one boy, who I'd already gotten a general impression of from the bugs, but seeing him in person was a little different. He was a tall pretty-boy, with dark hair that curled up over his fine features, and pale skin, wearing a white shirt and black pants.

He looked like he could be a model, or a vampire. Or a vampire model, for that matter, and he even had the look of disdained boredom I associated with them. Rachel was behind me, Lisa ahead, and it was Rachel he first addressed in a lazy, faintly accented drawl, "So, this is your little friend, Rach. My, my, mighty fine to finally see you." He looked me up and down, a sly smile on his face that still managed to show teeth.

"Nice to meet you," I said, stepping forward as the dogs swarmed me. I crouched down to pet the dogs, getting a little distracted. "Ah, Brutus, not so… yes, yes, I'm happy to see you too, boy, but--" I looked up at them, distracted already. "What can I call you?"

"Regent. I see that you're taking to the dogs already. It's always charming to see," he said, in the kind of way I'd feared Lisa would talk like, "a bond between man and beast." The way he said it made it sound almost obscene, and he sat up a little more fully as I got closer to Rachel.

"Where's Grue?" Rachel asked, her voice harsh, "is he fucking around with my stuff?"

"He's in the bathroom," I said, "unless there's someone else." I had a bug on him at this very moment. From what I could tell, he was talking on a phone? Or at least, a bug had briefly flown across something that seemed like it was a cellphone. "Talking to someone?"

Regent whistled, "Huh. Is that your power telling you that?"

"Yes. She has control over insects," Lisa said, "which is a pretty useful power, really."

"Could use it to spy on people," Regent suggested, off-hand.

"I wasn't spying," I said, defensively, "just checking to see what was going on."

The dogs were still swarming me, though a few of them had backed off, hang-dog, when it turned out I didn't have any food for them at the moment.

In one of Regent's hands was a ball, and there was a single dog that was repeatedly licking that hand, while he completely ignored her to talk to me.

"Well, yeah, he's messing around in the bathroom. Unless you keep anything in there, he's not doing anything." Regent shook his head. "So, Bug, Grue's a hypocrite or whatever, thinks that Rachel should stay in the apartment because it's safer, yada yada, Tattletale agrees because she's the planner and junk, and so now we're here to check up on you. Make friends or whatever."

"Well, I'm pleased to meet you," I said, rather unenthusiastically, as I leaned down a little and finally fished out something from my backpack. I did have a few treats for them, or at least some luncheon meat, and now that they saw I did have something for them, all of them went for me, at least the ones that weren't checking out Lisa or saying hello to Rachel.

Rachel made her way over to a corner, arms crossed. As if she wanted to watch the whole room for an ambush. Because that was the feeling, like this was a fight, and nobody else had realized it yet.

The hair on the back of my head was standing up just looking at her, and I wondered whether Regent knew it. Or whether he cared, for that matter.

I was torn. Part of me wanted to go over to Lisa, try to draw her attention to it. I had new people to talk to, and having another friend wouldn't hurt. But, I also just wanted to go by Rachel, figure out what her problem was.

"I'm sure," Regent said.

"So, yes, Rachel, I am a little worried about you being out on your own. Ever since the raid on the dog-fighting ring, you've been distant. I hope you understand," Lisa said, her words soft and a little too coaxing. Like she was talking down. "We just need to make sure you're alright and that there's nothing you don't need. We can always talk to people, if that's what--"

"I'm fucking fine. I can do whatever I want," Rachel said, each word spat out.

"See? There's the Bitch we know," Regent said, "face it, Tats, you're not going to Thinker your way into being her friend."

"What are your concerns?" I asked, turning to Lisa. Maybe the best way to do this was to talk to her. That'd be the smart thing.

"She's isolated, and an easy target for attacks. We've survived so far by hiding. Lung doesn't know where our lair is, so he can't attack us. But if one of us is on our own, then that's someone that can be kidnapped or killed to attack us," Lisa said.

And really, that did make sense.

"But at the same time, this is a little out of the way, even if it's a very distinctive building in other ways," I said, "and I don't know what your policies are. But is she showing up for teamfights?" I flushed. God, Greg was starting to get to me.

"Team fights?" Regent asked, raising one of those thin eyebrows of his.

"You know, or heists, or whatever," I said. "The point is, if she's doing everything she's supposed to, then you can't just tell her she has to do something or else. Hasn't she slept here before?"

"Yes. Once or twice," Lisa said, "the concern is when it's every night. It feels like pulling away, and it makes it hard for us to get in contact with her."

"Well," I began, ideas starting to bubble up, "you could..."

"Did I miss anything?" a male voice asked. A little deep. I turned, and saw…

Well, I saw.

He was a tall, well-muscled young man, with rich brown skin, and musculature that wasn't too overbearing. Practical muscles, for a practical looking young man with a strong jaw and deep brown eyes.

I was staring. Yes, I was, my face flushed. I mean, trying to be blunt and open about this, he was just pressing a lot of my buttons.

"Not much, Bug here was just going to tell us what she thought," Lisa said.

"I think you should all just leave," Rachel said, her voice a growl. I blinked, turning away, my blush slowly dying as she strode forward. "I've said no. I'll play your stupid little games, but I don't need you to watch me every second--"

"If you get hurt, we won't be there. If you hurt this team," Grue said, stepping forward, until he was right up against Rachel, who had reached him as fast as she could, "then that's good for none of us, understand? Think about this logically. Just think." He loomed over her, tall and powerful, clearly trying to stare her down.

And it almost seemed to be working for a moment. I saw her shrink down a little. Like a dog shying away from a challenge, and trying to appear non-threatening.

I think he saw it too, because he relaxed.

But she was a person, and a person can draw back to leap out, and so I opened my mouth, "Don't!"

Just at the same time that she lashed out, shoving him back so hard he stumbled, more out of shock than pain, and almost fell over.

He was fast, rising up almost at a leap, going right at her and then grabbing her arm when she tried to punch him and just holding it as she struggled.

"Rachel. Don't. We can work this out," I said, "if you keep a cell-phone, you could just call them if anything happens. Grue, don't touch her."

He wasn't being gentle. His grip was leaving her skin white around where he was grabbing, and her teeth were bared in something between anger and pain.

Now I saw why she didn't trust smiles, because there was no way to mistake it for a smile, at least for her.

"She's her own person," I said. "And so I don't think--"

"Please stay out of this," Grue said, quietly, but firmly. It was a controlling sort of voice, the voice of someone who was used to being listened to.

"No. No I don't think I will. You could have confronted her some other time, when I wasn't coming around--"

"You're always here," Regent said, "like you wanna move in with her, be her roomie."

My face was hot with embarrassment, but I just tried to step forward, reaching Grue along with a cloud of buzzing flies.

The dogs backed up, dismayed and afraid, as I began gathering bugs into the area.

And then I made them buzz. Rub their bodies together. Make all of the noise they could.

Grue looked up, and he realized, I think, that I had an army of insects right about to fall down on both of them if they didn't stop.

He let go of her arm, and nodded, "Maybe. And if that doesn't work?"

"She makes her own choice, she deals with her own consequences," I said. "Of course, if she does get… kidnapped, was it, call me. I'd show up for that."

"Why?" Rachel blurted out.

"Why?" I replied, confused. I shook my head. "Anyways, does that seem like it'd work? If it doesn't, you can always talk about it later. I'm Bug, by the way. Or you can call me that now while I try to think of a name."

I wasn't sure if I liked him, attractive or no, but he did nod in an almost friendly way. "Sorry about that, I was trying to get my point across."

I frowned. "You did. Anyways, I hope we don't wind up crossing paths." That was a thought that had begun to worm its way into my head, the fact that as an independent hero, I might have to go up against Rachel. Maybe I could avoid that, or try to convince her not to take part in anything I needed to stop? We'd only known each other for a week, though, so I knew that was far too much to ask, and not likely to go down well. "Professionally, I mean," I added, feeling a little flustered.

Rachel let out what seemed like a growl, but shook him off and stormed off.

"I hope not, either. It sounds like an impressive power, used right, from what Tattletale has told me."

Here I was, surrounded by villains, and I was more worried about Rachel's feelings. It was bizarre, and probably not a good mindset to have.

"Thank you. It's not much, and it doesn't really help with finishing enemies off," I said, "but--"

"That's what you have a team for," Regent said, "or something." He shrugged, as if he'd read this once on the back of a cereal box and wasn't sure if it were true.

"Maybe," I said.

"Bug," Lisa said, "could you walk with me for a moment?"

I frowned, and then nodded, watching the way Regent was sidling towards the door to the back section. I followed her out into the yard. It was still sunny, and the yard needed the poop scooped up. Some of the dogs followed me, and I stopped as Kuro and Bullet came up to say hello. Kuro was a black mutt with a little bit of everything, and Bullet was the white and spotted girl that had been injured serving as bait for dog-fighting.

I looked around for a stick. She needed to run a lot, but she was injured so it wasn't as much of an option, but she still did like chasing after things. It was in her blood, it was who she was, and that wasn't going to change.

Lisa stopped when I did, and then said, "Thank you for what you're doing with Rachel. She does seem happier. I'm… not always the best with her. My power can tell me a lot, but the way I learn to interact with other people doesn't work on her."

"Your advice wasn't needed, but thank you for giving it." Did I like her? Sort of, so far. But I could see things about her that would get on anyone's nerves, and I knew exactly why Rachel didn't like her.

"She's had a hard life. Her parents--"

"Lisa," I said, "I know that what you're going to tell me is important, but I almost want to learn it on my own. I want to learn it when she's willing to talk about it, not from someone else." I tried to sound firm, even though I was curious. "Everyone who got superpowers went through a lot, and I can guess that she didn't have it easy."

"Ah," Lisa said, quietly. It was a knowing sound, and she nodded as I threw the stick for Bullet to go after.

Kuro just looked at me like he was asking 'Hey, where's mine'? Dumb mutt, I thought, fondly.

"Ah?"

"You're already a close friend of hers. I'm surprised. She doesn't take to people very quickly."

"Maybe you were just doing it wrong," I said, and then paused. "Sorry, that was probably a bit rude."

"It's fine, Bug. Just watch out for her, alright?"

"She's not dangerous," I said, and this time I did feel angry.

"For her. As in, to help her. She could use a friend, and I've tried to get close to her, but…"

Lisa gave a shrug, "It hasn't really worked. But you? She likes you a lot. You can just tell it, even without powers. And with powers, it's practically being screamed at the top of her lungs."

"Maybe, but she's only known me for a week. I…"

Huh, was that it?

"What is it, Taylor?" Tattletale asked.

Bullet came back, I took the stick from her and stroked beneath her mouth gently. I knew she always liked that. Or at least, she'd liked it this week. "Who's a good girl, you are, you are," I said, in a cutesy, silly baby-talk voice that I didn't use in case Rachel heard me, usually.

I didn't want to seem lame to her or anything. It mattered, even if I wasn't sure why it was so important. It wasn't like I'd cared about seeming lame with… Emma. So maybe that was it? If I seemed lame, she'd ditch me, or something. Find someone else to hang out with that wasn't mourning her mother's death. Or who wasn't making silly jokes or doing any of the things I'd done before life had just worn me down and made me wonder what the point of that kind of shit was.

Now I'd managed to think myself into a bad mood, I thought, frustrated.

"I was just thinking, and I think that some of it might be that Rachel feels the same way I do. That--"

I heard her growl, and the dogs started barking. I leapt up, at a run, and Lisa was close behind me as we stormed into the main area, only to see Regent backing away slowly from the dogs, who were being held back by the fact that Rachel was at the front of them, and those of them that she'd trained were waiting to follow her lead. Grue was standing off to the side, hands gripped into fists.

Regent had the book in his hands, the Christmas Dog book. "It's nice to see that you're enculturating yourself, Rachel. I'm impressed that you--"

"Let it go!" Rachel said.

"Or what? You'll take it from me? I just wanted to see what it was you'd hidden away."

"Stop it, Alec," Grue said, and that had to be his name then. "This is not helping anything."

"Oh. What-ever," Alec said. "So you're not going to take it back?"

"No," Rachel said.

"Why? You afraid it might tear? Is it a gift from your Bug?" Alec asked, then he rolled his eyes and, just as quickly, tossed the book back at Rachel. I blinked, surprised, even as I was moving forward, fists gripped together, in a cloud of insects. He was just some fucking asshole who toyed with people and didn't even have the dedication to mean it. He'd wound her up, he'd made her evening worse, and then he'd just backed down, and not even in a way that could seem like victory to her. In a way that made it clear that he'd do it again if he wanted to, that he was not going to be told to play nice.

A fly went straight in each of his eyes. "Agh!" he yelled, and I felt my knees buckle out from under me, landing me flat on my face.

I bumped my elbow against the ground, and rolled, frustrated and angry. I could hear Rachel yelling out an order to her dogs, and I knew this was going to be a fight. How dare he. How dare he do something like that to Rachel!

"Stop!" Grue yelled, and then I couldn't see anything. Could barely hear anything too. Just inky darkness.

I struggled to stand, and then when I did, a bunch of dogs crowded around me, confused in the darkness, licking at me. I could smell that one of them was afraid, via the most obvious way possible. Finally, I managed to stumble out of the darkness, and when I did, there was no fight at all.

Grue was standing in front of Regent and Lisa, and Rachel was in one corner, hand on Brutus and Angelica's collar, in the perfect position to start bulking them up if it came time for a fight.

"Are you--" Lisa began, her voice sounding nervous.

"Get out. Everyone. Get out. This is my place, and… and… " Rachel said it quietly, but I could see that she was fuming, that she was holding onto the leash of her own fury with all of her might, and that if I stayed, that if anyone stayed, she'd just blow up at someone. I didn't even get why she hadn't done so already, since she hadn't seemed to hesitate before.

"Rachel," I said, quietly, "I'll see you tomorrow."

She didn't respond.

I didn't get much sleep that night.
*******

I woke early, stressed and annoyed, my elbow still aching, and my chest hurting a little, in an odd way.

I'd had a nightmare, and I wasn't sure which one it was, but it was probably the same sort of one I had all the time. Of Emma abandoning me, turning her back on me. Of me not being good enough, or, or--

While I was awake, I didn't blame myself, I don't think. But at night, I suppose something was brought out? Something illogical and sick and probably unhealthy. My Mom died, my best friend became my worst enemy, and neither of them was my fault, but it felt like I should have been able to do something. Or like I'd done something and not known it.

And now Rachel had, what if she--

I didn't shower, I didn't mark off my calendar, I just hastily scrawled a three-AM note and stuck it on the table.

'Going out. Will be gone for a while. Don't worry. Couldn't sleep last night, had a few nightmares. I'll give you a call a little later..'

He would worry, of course he would worry. He loved me, and that meant worrying about people, sometimes. Plus, I knew I was being sketchy.

I jogged a while, not wanting to go see Bitch when she wasn't going to want to be seen. And since she was probably asleep, that was a good idea. Eventually, the jogging broke into a run, and even though I kept to the area around the house, I knew it was odd.

Three o'clock gave way to four, and by then I was soaked in sweat, and didn't really care. Then I started walking towards Bitch's, thinking I'd stop at a fast food place on the way to get some breakfast. I'd brought some money in a wallet, I could afford it.

If only there was some kind of food she really liked that I could get at this hour, then I'd be able to bribe her or something. As it was, I wound up spending a while in the bathroom, waiting for it to be closer to time, and pacing around outside the fast food place, which smelled of grease and sadness at this hour of the day.

Then I continued onward, hefting my backpack filled with food and hoping that she'd be awake at five-thirty.

The dogs were barking, at least.

When she came to the front door, she was dressed even more hastily than usual, and looking almost as sleep-deprived as I was.

"Taylor?" she asked, sounding like she'd just woken up from a dream.

"Sorry if I'm early, I just thought...if you want me to go I could go and I mean, I know that--"

"Come in," Rachel said, yawning.

********

There was something to say about routine. We fed the dogs, we cleaned up any of the obvious messes on the gravel and concrete, we got them water, and then I waited while Rachel brushed her teeth and ran her hand through her short hair with water, in what I assumed was meant to be preparation for the morning.

There wasn't a shower here, and so she smelled a little. Actually, I wondered at that, but that wasn't something to ask.

Once the routine was done, then there was just the awkward silence.

"You asked why," I finally said, after far too long of us staring at each other. "Why what?"

"Why are you friends with me?" Rachel asked, slowly, as if wanting to make sure I understood it.

"Because I like you?"

"The others, I don't like them, but I know they're more normal." She said it as if 'normal' didn't mean anything to her at all. "Lisa's pretty and popular, and you were staring at Brian like he was a side of beef."

I flushed, "I mean, yes. I sorta think that Lisa's alright, but there are things about her that annoy me, and none of that… I mean, do you really think I'd just stop being your friend to be either of theirs?"

I did want to get to know Lisa a little more, or rather, it seemed like she might be alright to hang out with. She had parts of her that were really, really annoying, but then, so did Greg sometimes. I didn't hate her like Rachel did, but that didn't mean that she was super amazing and I was going to leave her behind.

"Especially… Brian's? Is that Grue?"

"Yeah."

"I mean, he was…" I flushed, "but he also seemed kind of rude to you? And too serious."

"He was what?" Rachel asked, and I wondered if she was enjoying dragging me over the coals, or whether she was just trying to force me to say it.

"Attractive, okay? So's Lisa and even Regent if you like creepy pretty-boys, but why would any of that matter? I'm your friend because I like you and I like hanging out with you, and I like reading to you. We haven't known each other long, but I want to know more about you. What you like, what you dislike? I have food in my backpack though it's probably gotten cold, but your favorite color, what you eat… just. Stuff would be nice. And I'll tell you stuff back as well, because it'd be stupid and unfair otherwise. I mean, I came in here afraid that you were going to dump me. Leave me alone, I mean. It's happened before, friends just turning their back on me."

"Oh," Rachel said, her voice quiet as she looked at me, brow furrowed. Her eyebrows were thick, but they gave her face a certain intense look to it, really, as if she were focusing her gaze in on whatever she was looking at. "Grey or brown," she said.

"Ah, good. And… Greek food, I'd guess?"

"Meat in general," she said, sounding a little dazed, as if this hadn't been how she expected this to go, "Lamb is great."

"Ah, so gyros it is," I said, trying not to smile. "My favorite color is green. I like it a lot, especially dark green. It reminds me of camping, actually, but I also just…"

Green's totally your color, Tay.

"Like how it looks," I said, stumbling over the words, "and I guess I really like chocolate? And pancakes? The two of them together would be great. And burgers. I'm not really that picky, though I've gotten a bit more ever since I started cooking."

"You cook?" Rachel asked, frowning.

"Yeah. Ever since my Mom…" I trailed off for a second, and then pressed forward. It felt like shoving a pin into my heart. "She died in a car crash a few years ago. I've had to help out around the house ever since. I still miss her all the time, and then Emma, my former best friend, suddenly turned against me the fall after she died, and then started giving me shit. Harassing me, making fun of me, starting rumors, and her friend Sophia kept on attacking me, pushing me. Just on and on until… until I triggered."

I didn't want to talk about what had happened there, and I hope she understood.

"But you have bugs?" Rachel asked.

"If I do that, I can't try to be a hero, I'll…" I just stopped speaking for a moment, letting out a breath, "I'll lose the only chance I have to, I dunno. I just don't want to get revenge."

"I'd do it. Never knew my fucking mother," she admitted, leaning into me, "wouldn't have wanted to know her."

She didn't say more. She didn't give her story, or even the outlines of her story, like I had. But I had a color, and I had a favorite type of meat, and I thought that she was listening to what I said, that she cared about what I liked.

Or rather, cared that I liked them, since I knew she wasn't me.

I didn't even mind her warmth pressing against me, or the smell, or the way the dogs occasionally came over to sniff us. I just sat like that, and then eventually I closed my eyes.

I felt almost like I should be crying, because something felt like it'd come unstuck. Like the pin being pulled out of my heart.

"So, I don't know, now I'm trying, and… and we'll see if it works. I just can't keep on not doing anything," I admitted.

Then I was silent for quite a while longer. Rachel didn't get up, she just pressed herself closer, and after a little while, I did feel her brush a hand against my hair, once, almost curiously, and then stop.

Probably trying to figure out how to comfort me.

Finally, she asked, "Do you have that… story or whatever?"

"Yeah, I do. The food's gone cold."

"It's fine," Rachel said.

"None of it is good, but--"

"It's. Fine."

"Oh, okay," I said, getting up and grabbing the book and then returning to where I sat. It was a book of short stories, and I opened it to the right one.

"To Build A Fire, By Jack London," I said. I paused, taking in a breath, and scanned the first paragraph just to be sure I knew how to read it right without stumbling.

"Day had dawned cold and grey when the man turned aside from the Yukon Trail--"

"Yukon?"

"It's in Canada," I explained.

"Oh."

"He climbed the high dearth-bank where a little-traveled trail led east through the pine forest. It was a high bank, and he paused to catch his breath…"

*******

A/N: So.

Also, "To Build a Fire" is public domain. You can totally read it, or even listen to an audiobook recording of it, here:

LibriVox

Thanks to @NemoMarx .
 
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But is she showing up for teamfights?" I flushed. God, Greg was starting to get to me.
From this moment onwards, I thought of this chapter in a League of Legends chat.
Regent/Jhin: GG, Nasus was fucking farming top the whole fucking time, but never showed up to the teamfights.
Grue/Thresh: We got lucky that Nasus splitpush worked.
Tattletale/Ahri: Nasus needs to be with the team more.
Taylor/Elise: Layoff, Nasus still helped us win, you little shits.
Rachel/Nasus: just let me get my fucking Qs, dickheads, and try not to fucking throw, and we win. assholes.
I don't think I need to explain the full reference, but If I do, lemme know.
 
From this moment onwards, I thought of this chapter in a League of Legends chat.
Regent/Jhin: GG, Nasus was fucking farming top the whole fucking time, but never showed up to the teamfights.
Grue/Thresh: We got lucky that Nasus splitpush worked.
Tattletale/Ahri: Nasus needs to be with the team more.
Taylor/Elise: Layoff, Nasus still helped us win, you little shits.
Rachel/Nasus: just let me get my fucking Qs, dickheads, and try not to fucking throw, and we win. assholes.
I don't think I need to explain the full reference, but If I do, lemme know.

I'm actually not a MOBA person at all. :p

I just thought that it was something she could have caught from Greg. Like an infectious disease. :V
 
She didn't say more. She didn't give her story, or even the outlines of her story, like I had. But I had a color, and I had a favorite type of meat, and I think that she was listening to what I said, that she cared about what I liked.

Or rather, cared that I liked them, since I knew she wasn't me.

I didn't even mind her warmth pressing against me, or the smell, or the way the dogs occasionally came over to sniff us. I just sat like that, and then eventually I closed my eyes.

So like, approximately how much is Rachel cuddling Taylor to comfort her here?

On a 1-10 scale.
 
I am enjoying this. :)

One thing that I'm curious about is whether this will motivate Taylor to go more towards the feral direction with her own powers. Rachel, of course, revolves around her dogs; she doesn't really care how that leaves her looking or smelling. Taylor seems to have taken to Rachel very well, but I'm curious whether she'll start applying this to herself, and they'll eventually end up living in a lair covered in spiderweb and dog treats. :D

There may be hints of it in this chapter. She drew a swarm to herself when she was mad at Alec, which I don't think she did this early in canon. She was pretty squeamish about the bugs back then.

I'm also kind of wondering whether this setup might not lead to a reverse Lung scene, where the non-Bitch Undersiders are doing OK against Lung... until Taylor attacks them and leaves them to get pulped because she's angry about how they treat Rachel. Would certainly be amusing... :rofl:

It made me nervous, actually, because I'd seen that kind of fidgety energy before, the way a body just wanted to act but couldn't. But I'd seen it on someone I didn't like, and I liked Rachel.
I wonder if Taylor is thinking of Sophia?

Little too much hair. ;)

it was Rachel he first addressed in a lazy, faintly accented drawl, "So, this is your little friend, Rach. My, my, mighty fine to finally see you." He looked me up and down, a lazy smile on his face that still managed to show teeth.
Style nit, but you're using "lazy" twice in two sentences. You might want to rephrase.

And it almost seemed to be working for a moment. I saw her shrink down a little. Like a dog shying away from a challenge, and trying to appear non-threatening.

I think he saw it too, because he relaxed.

But she was a person, and a person can draw back to leap out, and so I opened my mouth, "Don't!"
Taylor seems better at understanding fights than I would expect from her. In canon, she mostly learned to fight from Brian. Will Rachel teach her at some point? :)

"For her. As in, to help her. She could use a friend, and I've tried to get close to her, but…"

Lisa gave a shrug, "It hasn't really worked. But you? She likes you a lot. You can just tell it, even without powers. And with powers, it's practically being screamed at the top of her lungs."
So there are a couple places in the chapter where you put a paragraph break in the middle of one character's dialogue. I suggest avoiding that – paragraph switches usually mean that the speaker is changing, so having that not happen can be confusing and make things harder to read.

I blinked, surprised, even as I was moving forward, fists gripped together, in a cloud of insects. He was just some fucking asshole who toyed with people and didn't even have the dedication to mean it. He'd wound her up, he'd made her evening worse, and then he'd just backed down, and not even in a way that could seem like victory to her. In a way that made it clear that he'd do it again if he wanted to, that he was not going to be told to play nice.

A fly went straight in each of his eyes. "Agh!" he yelled, and I felt my knees buckle out from under me, landing me flat on my face.

I bumped my elbow against the ground, and rolled, frustrated and angry.
(at a safe distance)

Brian: That's supposed to be a hero?!
Lisa: Well, she was...
Alec: She got infected with Bitch. (Wipes eyes again.)
Lisa: ... Basically.

I'm bisexual I think or whatnot, not that it really matters right now, and I was attracted to him. That's not really important right now.
I don't really like this. It feels to me like a really clumsy way to say "yes, she has the hots for Brian, but that definitely doesn't mean Rachel is off-limits." If you want a subtler way to suggest that, maybe have her say that Lisa was hot too?

"My favorite color is green. I like it a lot, especially dark green. It reminds me of camping, actually, but I also just…"

"Green's totally your color, Tay."

"Like how it looks," I said, stumbling over the words
I assume the italicized line is a flashback to something Emma said?

I suggest not putting the flashback in quote marks – they're not necessary for thoughts, and this kinda looks like Rachel said something which is clearly not as intended.
 
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"My power lets me figure things out, make guesses and inferences. It can annoy people sometimes," Lisa said, with another of those grins, "but I do think I've guessed your name. But if you want to hide it…"

"Why? You afraid it might tear? Is it a gift from your Taylor?" Alec asked
Well that didn't last very long at all. :o

And to be honest, I'm not sure that the whole "Tats is alright" really came across in the text, before Taylor went out and said it. Their talk before that seemed rather confrontational, with her mostly being frustrated with how Tats was handling the whole 'ambushing Rachel' thing. It kinda felt like it was relying on narrative inertia to tell one thing about their relationship, while showing something else
 
I am enjoying this. :)

One thing that I'm curious about is whether this will motivate Taylor to go more towards the feral direction with her own powers. Rachel, of course, revolves around her dogs; she doesn't really care how that leaves her looking or smelling. Taylor seems to have taken to Rachel very well, but I'm curious whether she'll start applying this to herself, and they'll eventually end up living in a lair covered in spiderweb and dog treats. :D

There may be hints of it in this chapter. She drew a swarm to herself when she was mad at Alec, which I don't think she did this early in canon. She was pretty squeamish about the bugs back then.

I'm also kind of wondering whether this setup might not lead to a reverse Lung scene, where the non-Bitch Undersiders are doing OK against Lung... until Taylor attacks them and leaves them to get pulped because she's angry about how they treat Rachel. Would certainly be amusing... :rofl:


I wonder if Taylor is thinking of Sophia?


Little too much hair. ;)


Style nit, but you're using "lazy" twice in two sentences. You might want to rephrase.


Taylor seems better at understanding fights than I would expect from her. In canon, she mostly learned to fight from Brian. Will Rachel teach her at some point? :)


So there are a couple places in the chapter where you put a paragraph break in the middle of one character's dialogue. I suggest avoiding that – paragraph switches usually mean that the speaker is changing, so having that not happen can be confusing and make things harder to read.


(at a safe distance)

Brian: That's supposed to be a hero?!
Lisa: Well, she was...
Alec: She got infected with Bitch. (Wipes eyes again.)
Lisa: ... Basically.


I don't really like this. It feels to me like a really clumsy way to say "yes, she has the hots for Brian, but that definitely doesn't mean Rachel is off-limits." If you want a subtler way to suggest that, maybe have her say that Lisa was hot too?


I assume the italicized line is a flashback to something Emma said?

I suggest not putting the flashback in quote marks – they're not necessary for thoughts, and this kinda looks like Rachel said something which is clearly not as intended.

Fixed it? Maybe. Not sure about the bisexual thing.
 
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