"This is New…Right?” (A fantasy adventure)

I mean, she got Robert to beleive her when blatantly lying on the spot.
Yes, she knows how to lie, but is bad at keeping a poker face.

Both sisters are a little bit manipulative, but it is far from being inconspicuous.

The money thing is a blatent lie.
Not so blatant in that Beatrice knows her sister has them, and she doesn't. Therefore finding her sister solves both of her problems, while finding a job only solves one.

I considered the idea that it might be someone other that Laqueta... but the dress, the hair and the complete obliviousness make it hard to believe.

I have to note, though, that True!Laqueta had an opal choker, while Robert only mentions it being white. Maybe he didn't notice?
 
Yes, she knows how to lie, but is bad at keeping a poker face.

Both sisters are a little bit manipulative, but it is far from being inconspicuous.


Not so blatant in that Beatrice knows her sister has them, and she doesn't. Therefore finding her sister solves both of her problems, while finding a job only solves one.

I considered the idea that it might be someone other that Laqueta... but the dress, the hair and the complete obliviousness make it hard to believe.

I have to note, though, that True!Laqueta had an opal choker, while Robert only mentions it being white. Maybe he didn't notice?
We of the male species cannot possibly be expected to remember every item on a womans person! (Saying Robert didnt care/notice.)

I find it amusing that no ones commented on the fact that Laqueta, according to Robert, was doing more than unconciously act like a flirt... and Beatrice is triggered by it.

Actually, thats a fair distinction between them. Beatrice is intentionally manipulative, and Laquita is unintentionally just a tad bit too flirty and unconciously doing half of the manipulation...
 
*Sipping Tea*

"Why do i feel like I'm forgetting something?"

*Spittake*

EDIT: In all seriousness, this post may end up being a bit longer than most, and I've forgotten that today was Thursday because I was too busy remembering today was the 12th. As a result, I may need to delay it until tomorrow if I cant finish.

SECOND EDIT: Yep, I cant finish it tonight. Nearly a thousand words typed up just setting things up, and I don't have it in me to write out even remotely decent dialog or characters at 10 PM while I still have to do some more studying. Rest assured, both this thread and the SB thread shall update on time tommorow.

I may even add in an Omake as an apology gift...
 
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Omake 1
Omake
Another Side: Happiness
I see... so, so much as I look down upon this world. Everything that is going to be, everything that is...

So much suffering. It pains my heart, to be unable to do more.

I look upon Lissandra, Garthriel, and Aghanim.... Three mages, fated to accomplish so much, all for naught.

But no,now my gaze turns towards two girls, young woman in truth. They struggle, they suffer... Try as I might, I can see scarcely an outcome that doesn't end in suffering for one or both of them. I see the truest of happy endings, and I smile.

But I still see so much, and I see so, so far...

Time is every flowing, a stream uninterrupted, unbroken by even I. It can be manipulated, controlled, and shaped, but it shall always and Yet that is a simple look, a simple view. Time splits in its flows, making delta's and eddies. flowing in ways only I can see, only I can understand... there's so many paths, so many alternatives. Every single difference, every single change, creates a new world,an alternate timeline, infinite and unceasing as they move on and on, local branches splitting, entire multiverses unaware of the nearly identical branch next door, and the two that they shall create if they should become aware -

But I digress.

You turn your gaze away from this world, to

. So far
Echos

W̗h̗̗͠i̧̼͍̣̹̦̞͇s̢̲̰̟̦̰͕̮p̹̥̪ͅe̜̝̲̳̘̙͎r̵͉̬̞͎̩̳s ҉͕͕̗o̫͕̬̺̯̱f̨͇̻̥̗̫ ̲͇̹̩̲̘̻͟N͎̘̙o̺̜t̞ͅh̢͇i̞͝n̰g̺͚̳

Black shards, what are they?
Prismatic wings, flying in harmony
̨̤W͉̟̜̙͔̯̬͟o̟͔̝͓̖͟r͔͝lds̭̳ ̬̠S̡̫͖͎̤̺̼ha̴͕̥͈͖̬̼t̘̣̗̪́t̳e̪͖̜͙r҉

A conclusion

Forever
҉̢̦͚̙̫͖̬̦͈̼̬E̹̼̫̺̲̖͉͞ṯ͓̬e͎͔͓̖̰̮r҉̯̝̯̱̜ń̲͖̹̘͕ị̠͟t̢̻̩͎̞̤̩̰y͎̳͙̹͍ ̮͔̼d̷̟͕͖i̳̤̫̼̪̰͘e͓̪͕s̺̻͙̘͕
EcHO's Of tHe TruTH
̺͔̟̦̭A̻̻͖̗̬͎͔ṛa̸n̟̱͕̺͍̗͝el͕̲
Shatter

Towards a world familiar in shape, in contours, appearing in so many more worlds than any other, an insignificant rock with 7 continents and with a surface mainly comprising of water-
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"Why are we moving again, Bea?" Laquita whined from her spot in the back of the car.

"Because Mom is still the slightest bit unstable, and your latest boyfriend decided it was a good idea to try and find our mother and tell her about your relationship." Beatrice intoned, turning the corner and driving onto a bridge. "Judging by the fact that he now has a half dozen nearly fatal cuts from a rapier, I would say that your oh-so-galent boyfriend wasn't a smart one. I cant even remember his name!"

"Ah yes, because your relationships are so much better." Laquita intoned, shoving a box away from her as it started to fall. She tugged at the band of her white tanktop, finding the summer heat a bit much inside of Beatrices somewhat beat up old car.

"Perhaps its because I've never been in one." Beatrice deadpanned.

"I still don't see why I cant move out..."

"You're underage! I had to keep you from going into a bar after you tried seducing its bouncer!"

"Accidently!" Laquita proclaimed, blowing her tongue out at her elder sister. She was promptly hit in the face by a pillow that Beatrice had stored in the seat next to her, getting knocked back and laughing.

"Besides, Kate is only a year older than me! Why cant I move in with her!" She continues he protest, prepping the pillow as the car slows as the bridge rises to let a boat pass.

"Oh, you know why." Beatrice looked back, her voice far more scolding now.

"I swear I don't, Indulge me!" Laquita eagerly said, her voice one of innocence and genuine curiosity.

Oh, and lots of sarcasm. Did we, the narrator, forget that?

"Let's see..." Beatrice begins, placing her elbows on the elevated space between the two front seats, placing her hand into her closed hands. "The fact that Kate is, in fact, a full year older than you." One finger rose.

"No,really?"

"The fact that she and Penelope, in fact, have near-full scholarships at Ivy league, and therefore arent allowed to house you." A second finger was now held up.

"First I've heard of it." Laquita continued her act.

"Third, most certainly not finally yet most important..." Beatrice went on. "There is no way I am leaving an impressionable and innocent dove of a young girl-"

Laquita snickered at the comparison - though at which part, no one could say.

"- who has the terrible tendency of seducing everyone she hasn't known for more than a month or putting them into a relationship onto a college campus, regardless of said College's prestige, where she will almost definitely be unsupervised regardless of our sisters' maturity because of how much they have to study for their exams."

"How terrible!" Laquita gasped, throwing the pillow back at her sister, who simply caught it before throwing it back to where it had been before.

"I swear I shall duly be a good Samaritan from now on!" Laquita continued, holding her hand over her chest as though saluting or making a pledge.

"Oh, I'm sure you will. Just like I swear not to yell at Kit until her eardrums bleed for so deeply ingraining your sexual tendencies into you while I was away the next time I meet!"

And at that, both sister's laughed, and Beatrice turned her attention back to the bridge. It took a moment before Beatrice groaned at the realization the particularly large boat that required the bridge to be realized for it was also a particularly slow boat.

"So then... I Spy?" Laquita quipped, having peaked over her sisters shoulders to see the exact same thing.

"Ill start..." Beatrice mumbles, her mood dampened.

"I spy with my little eye something that has an odd tendency to wear feathers...."

...and as you look, you smile.

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The update is coming soon, I swear! Though... er.. I might end up getting burned out before I finish both updates.... so, accept this sweet little omake twice over?
 
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1.8 - A Raven goes Barhopping
"This is New, Right?"
1.8 – A Raven's goes Barhopping

This… this was something important, something new. It was a lead; something to follow up on. A white-haired girl, dressed in a way that seemed oddly familiar yet triggered some form of loving rage, acting in ways that you could recognize - and spoke with an accent similar to your own? It coincided with what you had known, discovered – you had a sister, sisters.

Tightly grasping that thought, closing your eyes crossing your hands in your lap as you sit there on that bench, and smile. You would not let that memory, that one previous thought of yourself and your identity, fade away or be forgotten like so many other realizations had been today and yesterday as you ran from danger, your mind in a constant state between consciousness to unconsciousness.

And so, you sit, smiling, dedicating the fact you had sisters to memory. You could even, somewhat forcefully and headaches inducingly, pull up faint memories.

A somewhat devious Laugh…

A subtly encouraged grin…

An Innocent Smile, which you sought to preserve…

Faces you could recall, voices you could scarcely hear over the roar in the back of you mind –

Wincing in pain, you rub the back of your head. Thinking any deeper, trying to recall anything else… it would just hurt more. You already had a splitting headache that had begun to make it harder to think; you needed no more issues for the moment, especially ones that may leave you writhing around in pain. It appeared that whatever blue flames healed you earlier didn't extended to headaches.

Your current theory was it did so to annoy you; it was better than the darker alternative, that your memory loss and the blue flame's were linked. A somewhat easily arisen to conclusion, and one you couldn't exclude. But it was also one you didn't want to dwell upon at the moment.

No, right now, your first priority was visiting the Dancing Canvas – which, according to its description, it was quite surprising you hadn't seen yet – and search for the person Robert had told you about. If you knew her-

-if she knows me-

-then perhaps several of many questions could be answered. Chief amongst them being the giant murderous wyvern/dragon…. That Robert had only mentioned as nearing nearby and as already having attacked the village, having been driven off. Hm.

Yes, you needed to ask him about that next time you saw him. Because otherwise… perhaps you had been misinterpreting the hardiness, the wear and tear of the townsfolk in the now mostly empty street…

A single glance towards the mountains confirmed the sun was beginning to set, and that thoughts as those wouldn't suffice for the moment. No, right now, you needed a plan. You already had one, of course – try to find the person you felt was you sister, and even if you couldn't, settle down for the night somewhere.

Setting off towards the right side of town – asking a woman walking down the street for direction as you did so – you think of alternative goals, plans to act upon if one failed. What an odd glare the woman had given you at the Inn's name….

Now, back to the plan.

The likelihood of not finding your sister was uncomfortably large; as was the margin of error for finding out she was, in fact, not your sister or didn't even know you. You were willing to accept that. Yet you also needed to plan ahead in case of that scenario's occurrence.

You needed money; you knew that as a fact. While you were not, in fact, adverse to sleeping on the ground yet again, you were far less adverse to sleeping in a bed. If you could not find your sister, and if she did not have any kind of easily sustainable money – a thought for another time; how did she have money? What condition was she in?- you would seek work, however temporary, in the one place you knew according to Robert as

'Always seeking workers', though you clearly paraphrasing. You didn't feel like flattering yourself in your own mind; such a thing led to egos too large for one's own good.

And speaking of the establishment in question….

"May as well see what you have in store for me, huh?" You said, staring at the admittedly impressive 'building'. Barely three floors high, the building was impressive; reminding you of a sprawling Gothic manor in overall design.

If said Gothic manor was made of tents and colorful, inflated cloth, with a wide open entrance from which you could hear a few hearty men's laughter. How on earth did it possess windows? This… this was something you needed to chalk up to 'A wizard did it.' and think no deeper on, didn't you?

Stepping forward to the largest tent, which had vaguely door-shaped flaps that were opened to a slight degree, you enter the Dancing Canvas. And as you do, a single thought comes to mind, slipping out and to your tongue.

"Robert… You're a pervert, aren't you?"

The waitress and barmaids were all somewhat scantily clad, revealing far more cleavage than one would consider decent, and bore short skirts. It wasn't something one would consider truly outrageous or more than mildly indecent, but regardless… it kind of left you at the entrance, frozen in a numb shock. Never mind the nice scent in the air, the dark wooden boards making the floor, the actually nice looking walls and pillars made from a material you couldn't identify and built at the borders of where this tent connected with others…

There was just a blind, almost immaterial rage when looking at those women's clothing and connecting it with your sister. Why did it feel so… right, when you did so?

[X] Ok, maybe your plan needed to change…. [Write In]
[X] Try asking around to see if anyone has found any signs of your sister, or someone matching her description. Then, reconsider your plan to find work here…
[X] Maybe it isn't as bad as it looks? Hopefully search for your sister and a job if you cannot find her
[X] Write in


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Ya, I… I'm getting more than a bit burned out. Writing this took far, FAR too long. Also, Magical Hooters with the same dress sense as Laquita?

Also, I kind of lied. I thought this was going to be far larger. Then I realized I was effectively removing choices from you guys and throwing a single-lined narrative into the quest, and removed about 2k words from the chapter for future use, and was still burned out. I think I need to find something new to rant about to get myself back on track with the quest…
 
This place is too unfit and unrefined for a job, but it does not matter since we got directed here and we'll be damned if we leave without some information about our sister!

[X] Try asking around to see if anyone has found any signs of your sister, or someone matching her description. Then, reconsider your plan to find work here…

As for work, seek something more... reputable.
 
[X] Maybe it isn't as bad as it looks? Hopefully search for your sister and a job if you cannot find her

Why does our sister find this sort of behavior, not so bad? Let's see if we can find out. Just once.

Robert directed us here, probably because he wanted to see the pretty lady in her underwear, but also because someone we might know is here. We have a far better chance if finding out who they are if we work here and interact with them.
 
So then.... the polls closing has been pushed back to tomorrow for this thread, and we have a tie here people, so vote away!
 
[X] Try asking around to see if anyone has found any signs of your sister, or someone matching her description. Then, reconsider your plan to find work here…
 
I'd rather tip the bartender or a waitress once we have money than work in this place. Surely we are not that desperate as of yet?
No, we're not desperate.

I just like the thought of the sisters doing things they wouldn't normally do once they're out of sight from each other. They have a image to keep around each other, without a pair of familiar eyes, they're a lot more flexible.
 
Perhaps, perhaps. I'd add 'they wouldn't normally do but are still inclined to'. The way Beatrice treats Laqueta is as if she does have a 'moral highground' to claim on this matter.

If she didn't have an alternative, I can see her ceding ground, but to jump on the first opportunity to go wild would be somewhat uncharacteristic and make her a hypocrite. :)
 
I... er... seem to be experiencing technical difficulties in which no computers can be used to post the update, the google drive rendition of the post hasnt been updated since the title card, and the same goes for the omake. I'm typing on my phone.

...ER... Story Update and Double Omake please-forgive-me post tommorow?
 
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Omake 2
Omake 2;
Another way; Familial Bonds

Turning your gaze away from familiar figures, you move it towards one who shall not be seen yet, nor for a long while, jogging around the track in order to relieve her stress, her preferred method (right after passive-aggressive speaking) of taking her anger out onto the world….

Panting a bit as you jog, you can't help but think. Thinking about the past, about what might have caused what, was something you tended to do when you jogged; and something that came naturally to you regardless of what you were doing. You had chosen to write an essay on causality that your teacher could understand in the fifth grade; and somewhat ironically, you couldn't figure out why you did so.

So, now you simply jogged, taking in the cold, brisk morning air as the sun only just managed to peak up beyond the horizon, welcoming the muted feeling and shivering goosebumps the morning breeze brought you. Something that couldn't help but remind you of why you had just started running in the first place.

You had always participated in physical activities in your spare time; of course, some had been far less successful than others. You had tried swimming, at first; having been shoved into it by an over-enthused (and another far less enthused) sister, alongside Laqueta. She had learned to swim, and given up on it altogether a few years afterward. Perhaps it was the over - encouragement (and bitter hatred) of your sister that had dissuaded you from continuing; perhaps it was simply the fact that you felt oddly sluggish when submerged. Even now you had the bad tendency to flail around and kick if shoved into a large enough body of water without warning.

But regardless, your mother had insisted you find a new sport or physical activity to participate in. Her arguments went something along the lines of Beatrice's dedication to Archery, Penlope's obsession with swimming, and later on in life - after you had tried and given up on soccer - Laqueta's obsession with the foil club, one of few place's where she 'opened up' before Kit had decided to make sure Bea would stop coddling her more than their mother.

So, you had bounced from activity to activity, not quite dedicated and not quite willing to quit, trying out both Yoga and Gymnastics, switching on and off from them, bonding with your mother in the former and one of your sister's in the latter. Even though your mother, in the way only mothers could,kindly and firmly 'suggested' you needed to 'hang out more', even if you were closer to her than any of your sisters.

But it had been when you had started High School, a freshman just bursting with wit and snark born from the hellhole life calls puberty, that you had joined the track team. You had always enjoyed running; but something about putting a competitive spin on it had spurned a love. You had dedicated time to it, and found that you had enjoyed everything about it. You had, of course, eventually given up, unable to attend track meets any longer, the competitive spirit getting to be a bit too much for you…

...but you had never stopped running. It was relaxing to you, even if you ran yourself ragged, and collapsed into a panting mess; the exact way you felt about it was odd, and hard to describe. Your mothe-

….your mother. The reason you were out here, in the cold,dark field. To relieve your stress, your sadness. You had always used physical activity as the outlet for your emotions; but at what point had it become regular, scheduled, ordinary for your mother to be the cause of your early morning jogs? Your mother, who had always put time aside just for you , of whom you would always cherish the memories of as she was.

Your mother, who had also given you your every other hobby and personality trait? Who had, even if she herself wasn't doing well, never let her children see it so that they may have a rock to cling to? That Laquita had admired unblushingly, asking to spar with and give her lessons on how to use her foil every other day?
Had it been after your father had died, and she had hit a momentary slump, letting a crack show even in the legendary facade she had worn all her life?

Had it been when she had lost her job, her entire life's work in a single day for a single mistake no one could have seen coming?

When had you failed to help her? When had her sanity started to slip? Why had you failed to take notice of the mess she had become, the woman she once was fading away?

You jog faster.

Had it been when Beatrice had come home from college, taken one look at their mother, and decided to move Laquita away, to take custody of her? You didn't think so, though you had certainly attributed it to the decrease's incline. It certainly hadn't been when the time spent with your mother had decreased, when a heavy whiff of alcohol had started to saturate the house when she came home.... it hadn't even been when you were the only sister living at home, even if you weren't the youngest.

You honestly couldn't say when it had started, or when her mind had started to fail her.

Breaking into a sprint and breathing harder, you conclude it might've been when she attempted to maul Kit's boyfriend with a fencing foil when she had visited home. You had all been properly horrified, and you think that might've been when you realize how mad she was.

How messed up you had allowed her to become without noticing.

So you sprint faster, recalling the many events of the following few months - Bea's yelling, her attempts at gaining legal guardianship of her and Laquita, her success... your refusal, your many offers to care for your mother that all of your other sister's had eventually given in to, solemn looks on their faces. You eye headlights past the fence, as a deep blue car pulls up into the parking lot; Barry, a friend who had suffered through something similar. You ignore it and keep on sprinting, though you don't know why anymore.

Perhaps you can outrun your responsibility.

You wont ever outrun the guilt.

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So... er... bad news. This is the only thing i had in drive, and I left my flash drive plugged into a computer at school, which contains the other omake and update...I cant even ask for your forgiveness now, because I'm frankly pissed at myself. Itll all be resolved by tommorow, by which time I need to put the quest on a 3 day hold so I can study for several tests in a class I'm somehow failing.
 
The way you are describing it, the world in Omake feels way more real and detailed than the world where most of the action takes place.

Come to think of it, Laqueta mentioned going to a party. That must have been an 'original' memory. With the sisters' interests in antique weapons I did not think they were from a modern timeline.

Still no clue what happened to them and what connections they have to their animal counterparts, or what their goal could/should be.
 
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The way you are describing it, the world in Omake feels way more real and detailed than the world where most of the action takes place.

Come to think of it, Laqueta mentioned going to a party. That must have been an 'original' memory. With the sisters' interests in antique weapons I did not think they were from a modern timeline.

Still no clue what happened to them and what connections they have to their animal counterparts, or what their goal could/should be.
The sisters in these omakes are, in fact, not the ones in the quest. Mister multi-dimensional entity monologging at the start of these omakes is looking at a modern-day AU with no magic, occuring at the same time as the quests start. Theres parrallels, but not enough to do more than add depth to the quest charecters I might not be able to otherwise. I also wanted to show a charecter or two we might not see in this quest, ever.

As for it being more detailed? Part of that is this is my first quest and Im unsure exactly how detailed X needs to be or how long I need to spend on Y, part of why i wrote it like this is that a slice of life modern day au type of scene wouldnt leave my head after a full week, to the point where I coukd crank out enough snips I might just give it its own thread. The final reason? I goddamned hate writing in the second person instead of the first or third!

...The detail difference makes for a funny contrast, really: some of my chapters I havent released for Aranel (Ill remind readers thats this quests source material) are ridiculously detailed, and over or near 10k words. I pour over every single detail until Im satisfied, and I still refuse to let my beta read it until after Ive rewritten a large chunk of it...several times.

...Still no luck on the search for the flash drive.
 
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The sisters in these omakes are, in fact, not the ones in the quest.
Ah, yes. Yggdrasil, multi-dimensional Multiverse, etc etc. It's a shame, I kind of wish they were.

I also wanted to show a charecter or two we might not see in this quest, ever.
NO WAI, I HOPE KIT MAKES IT!

It's the sister Beatrice is following, right? The one who is a 'bad influence' on Laqueta? :p

...The detail difference a funny contrast, really: some of my chapters I havent released for Aranel (Ill remind readers thats this quests source material) are ridiculously detailed, and over or near 10k words.
Well, it's not the length. It's the little pieces of characterization and stuff that end to the mood of the scene. Hard to place my finger on it, though.
 
Ah, yes. Yggdrasil, multi-dimensional Multiverse, etc etc. It's a shame, I kind of wish they were.

Their charecters are almost identical, actually... the only real differences would be how they happened.

NO WAI, I HOPE KIT MAKES IT!

It's the sister Beatrice is following, right? The one who is a 'bad influence' on Laqueta?
...We've already seen her, at least twice now.No, I was refering to the rabbit, a charecter who will not be appearing in this quest save for perhaps a flashback, period. Its up to you to guess why she's the only unnamed sister though.

Dear god I just realized how much foreshadowment is in these omakes...

As for the off charecterization? Im willing to once more pin it on PoV, personal inexperience, and the actual quests formatting.
 
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Seen, as in 'seen', like, with our eyes? Don't think so, or you'd have to point out to me when we did.

Robert was talking about her, but when was the 2nd time? Don't think she showed up in Laqueta's branch either.

(and just how many sisters are out there, I wonder?)
...mm, perhaps Im using too much meta knowledge assuming. I didnt even give her full name, did I? Ill leave this one alone, simply stating that only @Hannz has physically seen her.

Yep.

Anyway, I thought I had said it before; seven sisters, seven animals. Also said before, I wrote out how each siblings personality would play out, as well as their relationship with one another, before the quest had started or their genders determined.
 
Ooh.

Color me interested in that Modern day AU. It sounds a lot more dramatic than the Fantasy World, and dare I say a lot more captivating because of the "Real-ness" it has to it.
 
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