Chapter 1-4: Win and Lose
Friday brings with it air that stinks of oncoming sleet. There's a low overcast, dark and full. The weather forecast says it'll hit tonight. I'm walking across the school's third-floor corridor, looking to have lunch today in the cafeteria. The food is actually quite good here. Casually, for practice more than anything else, I look out over the school.

Office Lady is standing at the gate, staring right up at me.

I grab for my phone, hit the app I use to draw designs for complex casts, then look up. She's gone. Where'd she go? I cover one eye, look for her, expecting her to be gone again, but she's not. She's moving along the perimeter of school grounds, going fast, a bolt of empty cold in the mountain's life.

"Gokigenyou Nozomi-san!"

Manako is right behind me. I didn't even notice her. "Ah, Manako-chan." I turn, try to smile.

"Is there something in your eye?"

"I uh, just have one of my migraines." I try to smile. "Sorry, we said we'd eat lunch together didn't we?"

"It's quite alright." she nods, looking at me in concern. "I just wanted to make sure you're okay. Should I take you to the nurse's office?" Without a material component, any attack I make on the thing is going to be much less powerful, but I can still probably fry it.

"No. That's okay. I'm sure it'll fade soon." I maintain my smile, maybe it looks better now? Inspiration strikes. "Could you get me some water from the vending machine?"

"Oh, yes." She runs off and I look down at my phone, page through the preloaded designs till I find the one I want, and turn to track the creature, starting to whisper names. I've got it. It's still moving, pacing around the edge of the school.

I launch the spell at it, mana surging between the design on the screen of my phone and the words I'm whispering, reaching out towards it to set it on fire.

The creature blocks the strike as if it's nothing. There's not even an explosion.

It turns and starts to make its way into the school.

"I have your water Nozomi-san." Manako comes back, offering me the bottle. "Uh, are you okay?"

All my usual poise seems to have deserted me. I'm wretched scared. Too scared. I should think up an excuse but all I have is: "Ah. I'm sorry Manako-chan. I-I I got to go!"

I grab the water and run. I need a plan.

There's the abandoned art block on the other side of the campus, almost unused now since the new one opened, and still in the process of being redecorated. I can head in there. Using the water and my emergency kit I should be able to get a better kill spell going, especially if I trick into a fixed position.

I sprint across into the building, then pick an internal room. A quick rune on the wall in water to decoy my presence and I dodge around another corner, drawing up a circle on the wall.

Footsteps outside. I lean against the wall, finger above the activation glyph. Someone is walking down the corridor outside, steps quite. They're almost at the point, almost. Just one more step.

The footfalls stop. "Nisfune-san?" A voice calls.

I blink, put a hand to my eye. The presence outside is not a void, but very much alive. There's something less alive next to it, but again, something fundamentally Of This World.

No sign of the hunter, not anywhere in my radius of vision.

I know who this is.

"Reijou-san." I step out. "And companion." Reijou Yuuko, a seventeen-year-old second year, short-haired, athletic, average height. I've always thought she looks like an otome game protagonist. Next to her is a large black dog, now fading back into the ether as it senses the danger from me is less.

Remember how I said the school was haunted? Well, Reijou is from a long line of exorcists who paid for her to come here to keep the place out of trouble. Exorcists tend to be a lot more into actually containing outbreaks of the supernatural than mages are. We've helped one another a few times in the past, mostly me giving her semi-cryptic hints to cover up the fact that I don't know that much about ghosts.

"Are you alright Nisfune-san? Something came onto campus. When I confronted it, it just turned around and left."

I sometimes wonder exactly what power rests inside Reijou Yuuko's slight frame.

Right now I'm too frazzled to be anything but gracious. I bow. "Thank you Reijou-san. You saved me." The words feel a little bitter. I should be able to save myself.

"What was that?" She asks.

"You know how I once said that you shouldn't get involved with me Reijou-san?" I take a long drink of water, then collapse on one of the old chairs. "Well, that was one of the reasons why."

She frowns at me. "If it threatens the school--"

"I know! I know alright!" I rub my eyes. "I'm dealing with it tonight. If I can't," then it won't be a problem anymore. "If I can't, then I promise I'll tell you everything, and we can deal with it together."

I don't want to bring this sweet girl into my family's grubby legacy. She has her own concerns. She doesn't need mine.

I need to end this tonight.

*****
The first rule of the magical world: things do not just happen. Sinister horror monsters still have to find you like everyone else.

I know that these things are somehow linked to my life energy, so there's the possibility that they can use that to track me. However, there are metaphysical problems with that. The number one being that I've already thought of that and taken precautions. I can't stop the life drain, but I can bounce the signal around. If it was tracking me through my life, then it would have bounced to one of the offsets and I'd have got the drop on it.

Other than the soul link, there's only a limited number of ways that you can track a specific person in an area the size of Tokyo. Scrying would be detectable. Fate manipulation is one I considered, I'm not actually that good at it but I can pay someone. A check with a specialist tells me, I'm not entangled.

You can't track my phone. Even a military-grade electromagnetic sensor wouldn't be able to do it without detectable scrying. I'd have noticed a follower. So what does that leave?

Actually, something fairly obvious.

It's at high altitude, a long-winged design. One of the older American models.

A drone.

I thought horrors from the outer dark wouldn't use technology, but then I already met some that did. More American equipment, and injected into Tokyo's busy air traffic pattern. This has some implications.

And why am I being stalked when I didn't have an attack? Well now. What else have I been doing lately?

"I'm an idiot," I mutter myself. Manako gives me a look from beside me in class, concerned. I smile at her, trying to tell her that it'll all be okay, and finally feeling like it will be. Now all I have to do is come up with a plan.

*****​

There's snow falling when I depart home, sneaking out a side door. My car left earlier, and Office Lady appeared in proximity. I'm still not sure how it's moving but it's definitely not near me. I was pretty certain they were tracking the car, because it would be a nightmare to track a single pedestrian in Tokyo from a high altitude drone.

Of course, my house has multiple ways that you can move out, covered against the most common detection methods like thermals. I get out onto the street and merge with the flow of civilian traffic. I'll get the subway across town, and play some poker. Office Lady can chase her own tail for a while. She'll be able to track me down eventually I'm sure, but I have time.

Kanezawa Palace is in Roppongi, a rich area of nightclubs and upmarket houses where foreigners tend to hang out. It's at the edge of it, built into an old nightclub which was abandoned after its previous owner went down for two life sentences for drug trafficking.

I don't take any chances on approach, eye-covered scan, check for any voids. Nothing. Good. The building is about what you'd expect from an old nightclub, a grand but dilapidated place, with peeling finery dating back to the middle of the nineties. A time capsule.

There are two men lounging on the door, who pay attention as I approach, as well they should. My outfit is devastatingly monochrome and expensive, which I hope will distract from the really vital element of it, which is the white silk gloves. I picked a pair that basically vanish into my skin and hope they won't notice. The jacket has an inserted layer of anti-stab material, and some kevlar, some magic enough to stop the kind of bullets I'm likely to encounter here. I have a handbag, Italian and red, and a briefcase, that's where the money is and where I want them to look.

I can't say that they're well dressed. Both are trying to look like they might actually work here, in cheap blue suits and colourful host shirts, but neither of them can pull it off. They look like a pair of schoolboys who've just rolled down a hill. Hoodies and jeans would have fit them better.

"Yo Ojou-chan." One grins, no, it's really more of a leer. "You looking for a good night?"

I'm pretty sure if I don't go willingly they're going to grab me old school and hold me hostage in there. "Maybe I am. I hear you've got a poker game here with some interesting stakes?"

"Ah." Both nod to one another, any concerns they had about why someone dressed as expensively as I am would be in a place like this. "You have a stake?"

I hold up the briefcase on my hands and flip it open, showing the money inside. This is going to be the tricky part. It's possible they're going to just grab for the bag, and then try to do something to me. If so, well, I have a contingency. It's just a lot neater if they let me in.

I relax a little when the left one speaks "Lemme call the boss." He runs a hand over his chin. "He'll get you settled right in."

His friend titters. I don't have to wait long for a tall, older guy, kind of heavy and muscular. He's doing better than his doormen, wearing a jacket without a shirt, and a big knife stuck in a sheath on his hip. We go through another round of "Ojou-chans" and him eye-fucking me before he leads me out of the cold and towards the back room.

The outer area of the club is set up with a bunch of different, mostly fairly low stakes betting tables, with a group of mostly low-stakes party-goers wandering around. The decoration is about what you'd expect from a semi-abandoned club, a lot of fresh paint trying to cover up decay, though as I noticed from some of my recon, they sure do have a lot of pot plants. Staff seem to be dealers and a few women in bunny girl outfits, none of whom look more than surface-level happy to be here, wander around with drinks, and I'm pretty sure helping the house cheat. There's also gangers, mostly at the bar, some in suits, most in hoodies and jeans, having a good time. Some are gambling, but only some. They mostly seem like security.

The boss leads me into the back, making a show of instructing a man to bring me chips on the way. It's not quite a room, not quite not, The door is a curtainless arch, and at the right angle I'll have a good view over the whole club. There's a green felt card table and a circle of men around it. I'm the youngest and the only woman. A bunny girl waits to one side with a tray of drinks. I make a mental note of her position. Not going to let her get behind me.

The prizes stand at one end, mystic objects stand like prizes at a fair, or a legal casino, each with an amount of chips you need to win it in front. There is a book with gold leaf pages, a broken knife, a carved clay statue, a jade bowl, and there at one end, the mystic glass. Going cheap.

Of course, given who these guys are, and the way they're looking at me then I'm pretty sure they're not going to let me go that easily.

Still, for now, it's just time to play poker.

There are four other guys playing tonight: A big, scar-faced yakuza with a caterpillar mustache and tattoos peeking out of an open shirt. A thin, dangerous-looking bald man wearing leather driving gloves and a sharp suit. An empty-eyed businessman, grey at the temples who is giving me a look just as predatory as any of the gang, and a white-haired guy in an actually not bad looking white suit who is looking increasingly uncomfortable with the company he's keeping.

Now to see how the poker club stacks up against these guys.

It turns out, not so badly. I win more than I lose, though I'm not as good as the bald guy who strikes me as maybe a professional player. If I was planning to actually win the game, this would be a problem.

We're five hands in, just about to deal when the gang leader comes back in. "Well now." He grins, and I get a sinking feeling that it's going to be something nasty. "It seems that we've got a special prize today. Just found, snooping around outside." He's looking at me, smirking, and the sinking feeling grows.

Two of his men pull a girl in. They have a bag over her head but I know who it is before they pull it away. Manako looks different outside school uniform, her hair tousled up, glasses askew from the bag. They have her arms locked up behind her, and she looks terrified. "Nozomi!" She blurts. "I'm sorry! I followed you! I shouldn't--"

She breaks off as the leader puts a boxcutter to her throat. "Easy there honey." He smiles. "If your friend can really play, you're in no danger." He looks up at me, eager. "If she can't, well I'm sure she can be a prize too."

The white-haired man glares. "So, that's the kind of place this is is it?"

"Yeah. That's right." The gang leader stares him down for a long moment. The Yakuza and the bald guy look mostly unbothered, the businessman is perking up. Creep. I make a decision about him. "Well, play on then."

One of his toughs comes and stands behind my chair, hands on the back. Another is holding Manako. She's not crying as much as I expected, her eyes are almost eager. I take a deep breath, wait for my cards.

"Hey bitch! You can't just walk in here."

Here we go.

The two men at the door are facing a disheveled figure just stepped in out of the rain. She's old and greying at the temples, dressed for work. Shoes still on the wrong feet. The two gangers step forward, menacingly, but she ignores them, looking at me. I look back. As I watch, one of the gangers grabs her by the shoulder, then screams as she unfolds.

Human guise falls away as the hunter elongates. It's pyramidal, centauriod, four legs on the bottom, two sets of four arms, one on each side. On the two, a three-cornered head with a lamprey mouth. Pure white, the same white as the worm things in the mouth of the man I killed.

It lifts the ganger who grabbed it up in one had and pulls him in two with a quick gesture. People start to scream running for the exits. The other players are on their feet, shouting.

"Fucking monster." The other man on the door shouts. "Fucking monster!"

The leader pulls his knife and points it at the horror. "This is our club!" He shouts. "Our! Fucking! Club!"

His men cheer, snarling like wolves. I see them breath in and clench up, igniting their powers. They pull weapons and charge the thing on mass. The guy behind me hasn't moved but he's looking. I pull the wire coil I have in my pocket out and slap it against him.

He feels it in time to wonder before I juice him with it and his implants go completely haywire. He drops, going into spasm. The other one comes at me around the table, but he's in the magnet's range and his motions become an uncoordinated stumble that end in a kick to the head.

"Don't fucking move!" the one in front of Manako grabs for a knife. "Don't move or I'll--"

I spit a word that yanks him away from her, then slams him into the wall. "Manako! Grab the magnifying glass!" I point at the cipher key. "We need too--"

The businessman grabs me from behind, bearing me over. "Leaving so soon?" He giggles. "Leaving so soon? Leaving so soon?"

White worms coil out of his throat.

I don't want to open my mouth and have one invade my throat so I shove a hand up into him and splay my fingers just so. The blast knocks him flying across the room and I speak a word of fire. He burbles, rises, more armoured than the previous one, then the white-haired man knocks him down with a chair. He twitches a few times then starts to burn in earnest.

Male formal fashion is actually so bad that even these things can get the hang of it.

At the door, the gang are coming at the thing in a rushing mob, moving too fast and smooth for humans, blades of darkness outlining their hands. It meets them with alien grace, limbs extending to grab and strip, space bending as it gyrates, superpositional, tearing through men one after another, even as they hack and beat at it, opening up great wounds.

The pro and the Yakuza look at one another, rising too, looking between me and the screaming carnage at the door. "I only want this." I indicate the cipher key in Manako's hand. "Take whatever you came here for if it's anything else."

Both men look at one another, then one grabs the bowl, the other the knife. They run for the fire exit. The bunny girl has already gone through it and out. Manako, showing a surprising amount of initiative, grabs the book and the statue.

The old guy is waiting at the exit, holding it open for us. "This part of a plan of yours young lady?" He asks, a little disapproving as we run for it.

"Apart from my friend getting held at knifepoint." I look down the alley. Rain and snow is pouring down now, and there's a distant rumble of thunder. "My car is down the alley. Go to it and get in."

"No way!" Manako grabs onto me. "If you're staying, I'm staying with you!"

"That's not--" I don't have time to remonstrate with her as the gang leader stumbles out of the fire door. He's missing an arm, blood drenching his suit.

"You bitch," he slurs, "you did--"

The hunter steps out behind him and twists his head off. Manako cries, and clings onto me tighter. It's beaten up, covered in cuts and dripping white fluid, but it still advances, claws up.

I take a deep breath, tasting the rain beating down on me.

At some point, you reach the end of indirect means, of pawns. You reach the point where you have to fight.

I've fought Hunters before, killed then in traps or with ritual magic, blasted them away from a distance.

I've never fought one this strong before and never hand to hand.

I've picked fights all over Tokyo, from dojos to streets, against karate masters and yakuza, MMA professionals and delinquents. I've faced mystic martial artists, spirits and undead.

My hands are shaking.

I clench them and take a deep breath.

Gently, I detach Manako from me and take a step forward. Quiet words begin to draw geomantic power up from the ground around me, pouring into the crystalline circuits fitted into my jacket, tattooed invisibly into my skin. Silver in my clothes, black against my pale skin. I whisper words of power, fixing the alley into a bounded field, preventing it from fully phasing. Holding it to a single position.

The Hunter stops, its wounds dripping, sleet sluicing the white blood down its flanks. It watches me, yellow eyes gleaming. Its arms are triple jointed, the clawed hands clenching and unclenching.

It moves so gracefully, this many place thing, shifting back and forth like a snake. It's movements are so languid, so unconcerned. And then it rushes, coming so fast that it leaves raindrop streaks in its wake.

I dodge back, then aside, desperately shaping a spell out of my movement, holding it into only a single position. Clawed hands flicker in and I dodge and block in frantic haste. It's impossibly fast, fast enough I can't get even a single strike off, just block, dodge, and give ground. The alley moves under me in a blur, and I'm gut scared I'll trip on something.

Manako and the old man giving more behind me, crying out. They know I'm losing. I'm scared, really scared, and embarrassed too. This was my chance to show Manako how cool I really am and I'm messing it up, losing to this monster. After everything I pulled to get it to this point, I still can't beat it. Even after I beat its main weapon, its superposition, I can't--

A claw finds a gap in my guard and slashes me open. The blow cuts through the stab liner and sends me flying, cut to the skin. I hit the alley wall, bounce off and turn it into a roll and kick out, coming back to my feet just as it arrives, to block and roll through another wave of strikes. The side of the alley looms up behind me, claws tearing up stone chips as I dodge to the side, and then I'm out of options. I touch my medallion and teleport, reappearing in a slide that at least gives me distance.

The creature doesn't pursue, it stands there, watching me. I pull myself upright, feel it tug at a wound I didn't know I had. Blood drips down my side.

It looks at me, head on one side, mouth working. It seems almost disappointed, Or maybe that's just me. I'm disappointed with myself.

I pull fire out of the air, hurl it in front of a word of power. The creature's parry cuts the spell away. I dodge back again, throw more fire, then a trash can. It flicks each strike away, walking up my attacks like a man straining against a fire hose.

My muscles are burning hot and I'm taking in air in great lungfuls. The cut in my side is starting to sting badly, a hot needle even through the layers of my system's geomantic reinforcement.

This isn't working.

I've made the most elementary of mistakes. I got into a fight without a plan on how to win. I sort of thought I might dodge around it, pick at its defences, wear it down, but it's too quick, too tough.

Well then.

I can't defend and attack. I can't win if I don't attack.

I kick a second garbage can at it, and then use the time it buys me to get into my pocket and pull the inhaler. Two puffs. The drug burns through me. The creature comes in, too casual, underestimating me. I teleport into it. It's eyes widen but I'm in close, punching a fist through its guard and slamming it into one of the wounds on its side. It screams loudly and lashes at me, but I ride the blow, not backing off, taking one strike after another to land hit after hit in return. I hammer the wound in its side with kicks and punches, then shape my fingers into a rune and slap it down into the creature's blood. There's a moment's delay and then its side detonates.

It reels back a pace, but I don't give it room, just step in and ram a knee up into an armless section of its stomach. It makes a horrible buzzing noise, then slashes across my forehead, glancing me as I lean back, blood getting into my eye but not enough to stop me crushing its face.

It clutches its mouth, stumbles back a step, then collapses to its knees.

My outfit is extremely colourful now, unfortunately, that red is mostly my own blood.

The rain stings at the cut in my forehead.

The hunter shakes itself, pushing up on its lower arms.

If I don't bring this to a conclusion into the next thirty seconds I'm going to pass out.

It gets up and charges at me, roaring and I go to meet it, jumping up in a long spin kick aimed straight at its yellow eye. I put everything I've still got into the kick, mystical and physical, for a moment linking directly to the local geomancy, cutting the limiters off my tattoos.

Claws slash at me, and I feel them burn along my stomach. The landing is bad and I half roll out, coming back to my knees, guard up.

The Hunter sways, then collapses, its decapitated neck spraying purple fluid.

For a moment I stay upright, swaying, and it comes to me how good that felt. How wonderful it was to test my limits against something so strong and come out the victor. Then I fall sideways.

"Nozomi!" Manako rushes forward, jumping over the fallen creature to grab me. She pushes down on my stomach wound, applying pressure. "Nozomi! Stay with me!"

"I'm not going anywhere." I whisper, there's blood in my mouth but I'm pretty sure it's from my forehead. "Not without you." The world swims in and out. "E-except a doctor maybe."

She laughs, sort of crying. "You dumbass! Stop trying to be cool."

"Card, in my wallet-- has the address." I blink. "I-Injector in my pocket. The blue one. Jab me with it and press the button."

My vision swims. The old man is looking down at us. "I'll get my car." He says. Manako searches and comes out with the injector. I feel the cold sting of it against my neck and the growing pain eases away.

I lapse, I think, into something like unconsciousness.

*****​

I come back to myself to find Manako leaning over me. I'm on a bed surrounded by a variety of medical devices, a semi-familiar white ceiling above me. Several monitoring systems beep out my status.

Manako looks very frazzled. There's blood on her, dried, and presumably mine. "Looks like I didn't make it." I mutter. "There's an angel here."

Manako does a double-take then hugs me. "That's not funny!" She mutters into my shoulder.

Alice steps up and looks over me. "Glad to see you're feeling better." She's eating a lollipop, one of her tells for stress. "You gave us quite a scare there."

"Sorry." I lean back, look over at Manako, who's blushing and kind of wish I hadn't thrown out a lame line like that on waking. "No pain, is that good?"

"Probably." She looks at me. "Lift your legs." I do. "Good, looks like you don't have any nerve damage. I thought I was going to have to shove you in the tank."

"My clothes were totaled?" I'm in a paper surgical gown.

"I had to cut them off you." She looks at the other two, and whispers. "You know they're civilians right?"

"If they were before," I lean back, "they sure as hell aren't now."

"Alright, but be careful."

I look down at my body, which is covered in fading lines of cuts where her magic wielded my wounds together. "Yeah, I'll do that."

I get out of there in about twenty minutes, exchange cards with the old guy, who turns out to be a collector of esoterica, and then head off with Manako.

"So, you're some kind of secret Esper?" She asks.

"I'm a witch." I smile a bit. "I live in the hidden world. It's a dangerous place, as you found. I'm sorry that I--"

"No." Manako's hand stepped back but now she grips my arm tightly. "No. Don't say that you're sorry you got me into it. I got myself into it, and I wanted to. I wanted to see the real you, and now I see her I want to see more of her world."

I consider for a moment, should I do this? Can I? Shouldn't I heroically refuse as I always have and just not get close?

No. I'll be honest with myself. "It'll mean a lot of danger, and a lot of hard work."

"I'm ready for that."

"Alright." I take a deep breath, surprised that nothing hurts. "Alright, then let me take you home. I'll tell you everything."
 
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The first chapter is perhaps a little rough in general. I'm thinking I'm going to do a major edit to it at some point when I figure out what that edit should be. Reading it again makes me realize that it serves perhaps too much as an introduction to Nozomi's status quo, with the school part basically just serving to introduce Nozomi's friends.

I'd be interesting to here what people think might be an optimal order for the opening to be set.
I read the opening when it was first posted and decided it was not a story I wanted to read, then today I started with chapter 3 not realizing it was the same story and really enjoyed it. I think this isn't due to anything about the order of events but simply the impression it gives of her emotional state.

The opening of chapter one gives the impression that she is mildly interested and so I left.
The opening of chapter three gives the impression that she is extremely concerned and so I stayed.

How actually important an event is matters very little to me because my main lense for understanding them is how much Nozomi cares about them. This is why it is so significant to me that she wants to look cool in front of Manako.
 
I read the opening when it was first posted and decided it was not a story I wanted to read, then today I started with chapter 3 not realizing it was the same story and really enjoyed it. I think this isn't due to anything about the order of events but simply the impression it gives of her emotional state.

The opening of chapter one gives the impression that she is mildly interested and so I left.
The opening of chapter three gives the impression that she is extremely concerned and so I stayed.

How actually important an event is matters very little to me because my main lense for understanding them is how much Nozomi cares about them. This is why it is so significant to me that she wants to look cool in front of Manako.

To some extent I feel like seeing Nozomi be at least confident is necessary to show how big of a deal it is when she's concerned.

That said given it's the opening scene she should probably be a lot more excited and determined to get a hold of the black books than she comes across.

I'll probably rewrite the opening once I'm finished with the next part and death stranding.
 
very fun! i love nozomi freaking out, and am curious about the ghosts! looking forward to more xD
 
To some extent I feel like seeing Nozomi be at least confident is necessary to show how big of a deal it is when she's concerned.

That said given it's the opening scene she should probably be a lot more excited and determined to get a hold of the black books than she comes across.

I'll probably rewrite the opening once I'm finished with the next part and death stranding.
After thinking about it more I think that my reaction is about what is at stake in the scene and how quickly I understand the stakes.

Her goal is clear, but I don't understand the possible outcomes and consequences for her so I don't care as much as I should.
But if you took the time to explain them, the scene would grind to a stop.

This is the reason why hope for clearer emotional reactions to events, because her emotional state instantly lets me know the magnitude of the consequences.
 
After thinking about it more I think that my reaction is about what is at stake in the scene and how quickly I understand the stakes.

Her goal is clear, but I don't understand the possible outcomes and consequences for her so I don't care as much as I should.
But if you took the time to explain them, the scene would grind to a stop.

This is the reason why hope for clearer emotional reactions to events, because her emotional state instantly lets me know the magnitude of the consequences.

So on that grounds, how was chapter 4? :V
 
In Japan drinking age is twenty one

It's actually 20!




I really like the texture of mage society here and the way it feels just that little bit bigger than Nozomi. That said, I think the fight in the middle there felt a little out of place and a little unnecessary. I'd consider altering that in a second draft so it's just a confrontation. Given that Yuuki shows up and given that Yuuki is a well-known badass working for one of the most important mage families, it seems to me that you could resolve it that way (and maybe Nanke shows up later, who knows ...).
 
I really like the texture of mage society here and the way it feels just that little bit bigger than Nozomi. That said, I think the fight in the middle there felt a little out of place and a little unnecessary. I'd consider altering that in a second draft so it's just a confrontation. Given that Yuuki shows up and given that Yuuki is a well-known badass working for one of the most important mage families, it seems to me that you could resolve it that way (and maybe Nanke shows up later, who knows ...).

While this is true, I also felt like I needed a fight scene for Nozomi to actually win, and to outright show just how good she is in combat to set up the later parts of the story.

Plus I kind of wanted to set up something where Nanke and Nozomi are jonesing for future confrontation.

Edit: It also sets up something for the final fight.
 
I look around gracefully into the beautiful face of Kurusu Nanase. The only mage in Tokyo outside of Junya (who only half counts) that I would really call a friend.

Horie Yuuki, is one of the deadliest hand-to-hand fighters in Tokyo and another old friend of mine.

Another friend in Tokyo outside the aforementioned one and a half only friends in Tokyo.

Your writing is very minimalist in a lot of ways; there are parts where they work well for you, and places where they don't. The introductory fight scene, for example, is a bit short for satisfaction; your pacing in terms of story events and scenes often feel a bit unbalanced, with a major rush in some places and a good attention to detail at others. Your introduction of new characters often feel like you're trying to just get it over with; you charged through a cast of schoolgirls so quickly, it didn't felt like any one of them were important - if felt like they were just random NPCs you'd mention once and then never bring back up again - until characters like Manako reappeared. Junya and Kaito, for example, get good introductions that establish their characters well, whereas - aside from the school cast - Nanase doesn't really get much of a chance to leave an impression. There are also instances where you're telling and not showing; Junya's "sadism" reads more like an informed attribute, and there wasn't much about his character that I could classify as "sadist". (This being said, I am a sadist, so maybe my expectations were too high. >_> )

By and large, your first-person narration is good, striking a good tone and fun beats. Nozomi - and therefore you - is a good narrator, and her description of the comings-and-goings have carried the story through some of its weaker moments.
 
Interesting start so far. I do dig the world building you've been doing and the style you've got going on. Personality wise, I like your protagonist, she's got a strong and fun voice.

On the other hand, it's imprecise to say but it feels like sometimes things are a bit too...tryhard? The scene with the tailor was gratuitous and the constant fashion feels a little forced.

I feel like the pacing is flipped a bit. I can't tell if the school scenes are supposed to be filler or worldbuilding or deliberate dead time or what. They usually work as a contrast to high octane magical girl shenanigans but things were breezed through -and- she was still both getting up to things with other magicals from the world go and also dominating the scene socially. Unfortunately school is going to be by default boring compared to cyberpunk-ish magical shenanigans or throwing down with yaks, so if it's not there as a deliberate pressure valve it doesn't quite work for me.

I also personally groan at plots where a supposedly hypercompetent person is trailed by the ignorant mundane who gets into trouble because of it but I guess do what you gotta do to get to the dynamic you want. (Honestly doubly so in this scenario where the protagonist has so many enemies and is involved in plots and where getting trailed at all is potentially hazardous to her health)

(This being said, I am a sadist, so maybe my expectations were too high. >_> )
Kei, you treat your readers and questers wonderfully and yourself terribly. You're not a sadist, you're a masochist.
 
I also personally groan at plots where a supposedly hypercompetent person is trailed by the ignorant mundane who gets into trouble because of it but I guess do what you gotta do to get to the dynamic you want. (Honestly doubly so in this scenario where the protagonist has so many enemies and is involved in plots and where getting trailed at all is potentially hazardous to her health)

While I see what you mean,

1: Manako is able to sneak up on Nozomi already in the story,
and more importantly
2: Nozomi was actually hampered here because she was almost exclusively looking for the Hunter. So she was doing eyes half covered scans for voids all the time, rather than the more conventional kind of checking for followers she might have been doing if she hadn't been chased by office lady.

That's how she managed to miss Manako. Her main "stock" sensory enhancements require that she sacrifice another sense for the sense she's getting, so this made it harder for her to realize one of her friends was behind her.

Of course it's still my fault for not bringing this across properly which I'll endeavor to fix when I do the big edit of everything later on.
 
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Huh. Somehow missed the alert for the latest chapter; didn't realize it had come out until I randomly checked the thread today.

Still, good readin'! Definitely like that Nozomi will now have a friend who knows what she's going through.
 
Chapter 2-1: Abduction
There's something wrong in Tokyo that April. Everyone feels it but me. It grows sunnier and brighter in the evenings but something is off. People do jobs or schoolwork with frantic energy, desperate to be home before dark. Parents drive their kids to school and children go home in groups. The conversation of drinkers are muted or too loud, full of false bravado. The homeless watch with helpless eyes, concentrating themselves for defense..

April has been a strange month for a while. It had been April five years ago when Espers had first appeared five years ago. That April when spectacular meteors lit the sky over Japan.

Perhaps that's why I miss the signs. For me, it was March, when the Spider emerged and my life fell apart that was the month to watch. The bad time of the year.

Rumors fly. Local news so severe as to momentarily displace even the continuing esper insurgencies in China and the Americas. Even the rout of another Brazilian army in the Amazon not enough to move the disappearance of several young middle-class women off the front pages.

People talk of a series of murders, a violent street gang dismembered and burned in their own club, supposedly by the Yakuza. Rumors were that they'd attacked the place with swords and axes, chopping their enemies into pieces before setting the place on fire. I know the real story and so don't pay much attention. It blocks me from seeing the pattern. I don't pay close attention to the first disappearance of a teenage girl, or the murder of a prominent business man. I miss the feeling in the air.

To be honest the reason isn't anything as metaphysical as I'm describing. The real reason is I'm distracted. There's the black book, with its descriptions of strange creatures and unknown spectrums, of dark and twisted extra-dimensional mana.

And there's having the time of my life.

*****​

"First, pronounce each syllable individually. Then make them into a word."

We're in the lab space in my basement, a great rough chamber where I test spells I'm building, the walls already marked with scorch and blister of combat magic.

Manako looks down at the page in concentration, mouths each sound written before her, then speaks it, and then says it faster and faster. She's wearing a tracksuit, ear protectors and a look that's beginning to frustration. Her pronunciation is improving. She says the word and a ball of light flickers into existence in front of her.

"Oh my god." She looks at it. "I did it."

"Well done, now--"

The light flickers, turns blue, and then explodes violently like a firecracker. Manako jumps, holding her ears.

"Are you okay?"

"Yeah." She gets up, removes her ear protection and hangs her head. "I didn't get it right."

"Too much emphasis on the first syllable." I sit down next to her. "Still, you managed a verbal cast. That's nothing to sneeze at."

"Magic is hard." She sighs. "I'm no good at calligraphy either. It takes me ages to get the symbols right!"

"Let's try something else." I look at her. "You like shooting right?"

"Uh. Yeah."

I walk over to a locked box to one side and pull out the weapon within. When I knocked it down in the building, the security thing dropped its carbine on the stairs, and I snagged it on the way out. Guns are rare in Japan and outright illegal for civilians to own, but it's not that difficult for a mage to make bullets. Manako moves over and cautiously inspects the gun. "An M4?"

"I thought they were called M16?"

"No. This is an M4 SOPMOD," She inspects it. "It's derived from the carbine version of the M16. American and JSDF special forces used to use these. They had one of these at the gunshop I went to when I was in America but they said I was too small to shoot it! They made me use these lame .22s!" She makes a face. I wonder just how much time she spent at the gun range when she was in the USA. "Where'd you get it?"

"I stole it." I grin, then lay out two magazines of ammunition. "Do you know how to work it?"

"Yeah." She walks to the computer and begins googling, then nods. "Yeah!"

Manako really does have the best energy.

"Alright, two mags, there's twenty five rounds in each." You can load thirty but I was always taught to underload the clip to increase reliability. "I want you to double tap each target as fast as you can." I check my own ear protectors and then clap my hands. There's a flicker on the walls and the image of a hunter snaps into focus. Manako fires.

She is, I quickly realize, quite good. Actually, she's inexplicably good. Not that accurate, but not hesitant about the gun the way I am. She's not John Wick or anything, but still stunning coming from a Japanese schoolgirl.

"Manako, when you were in America, how often did you go shooting?"

"Oh, about five days a week. My Uncle said we should. Said that it was something we wouldn't be able to do back in Japan." She looks down at the rifle. "I'm rusty though. I used to be better."

I knew she could use a gun but nothing like this.

"There are ways you can shoot more accurately. Let me show you." I lift the gun and pull out one of my markers and sign a rune onto the receiver. "Close your eyes."

"You're going to draw on me?"

"It's UV ink." I pull out a different marker and draw around her left eye. She's left-handed.

"This feels strange." She shoulders the rifle again and aims. I snap up a pair of person silhouette targets with score groups on them. Manako shoots, puts several rounds through the centre group. "Wow. The bullets just-- go where I want them."

"It's a version of a technique pioneered by mages like Aleister Crowley in the last century. It's called a Crawley effect. With a sufficient magical charge y,ou can influence how forces work by willpower alone." I wave. "Let's get through the rest of the set."

We go through about two thirds of the targets before I snap up one that looks like a man. Manako's finger tightens on the trigger, then stops.

"Problem?" I ask.

"It's a person!" She looks at me. "I can't shoot a person!"

"Even if they're trying to kill you? Or me?" She gives me a look, and I relent. Or pretend to, because actually this whole drill is part of a killer idea I just had. "There are ways you can vary the amount of force a bullet carries, or transmute it into another kind of force." I tap the gun gently on the top, careful not to jar it. "If you painted the right symbols on this, then you could knock someone out without killing them."

"Really?"

"Yes. Runes I think would be the most reliable way for you to caste. You can draw them on a computer and then use your phone screen, or cut them out and spray them on the gun with a stencil. You can even make them with light and shadow." I give her a stern sensei look. "Go up to the second floor library. Figure out the designs you'll need and have page numbers and drawings of the signs you'll need by eight tonight. I have to go out but I'll review your work with you when I get back."

"Thank you for trying so hard to teach me." She takes my hand. I let her.

"You're doing fine Manako. You have a lot to learn but you're making acceptable progress." I push her back and look into her eyes. "Did you think learning magic would be easy?"

"I guess not." She sighs and looks at the floor again.

"Now, remember to be careful upstairs. Don't go into any of the bedrooms, some of them are traps."

"I remember." She begins to tend the rifle. "You should go though, you'll be late."

I'm not so good at this stern sensei thing, at least with her. In that moment, looking at her just stripping the rifle into its component sections, fingers moving lightly, explorative, the sense of fascination on her face, I want her more than I've wanted anything ever. I almost say something, or kiss her, or pull her collar down and bite along her neck--

But I can't do any of that.

I'm dying.

I'm dying and I've let myself get close to her and in three years I'm going to take away her best friend, her teacher, and her crush. Maybe make her destroy the husk that claims to be me.

Should I really be thinking of leaving her without a lover as well?

I've got to get myself under some kind of control.

*****​

I will, I decide on the way, buy Manako some more different guns. The M4 I have heard in some of the forums I read, not all that good as a weapon (though some swear by it). I'll get a selection of pistols and rifles and ammo for Manako, and practice with her. I'll need to teach her how to do without sleep and make a new supply of memory potions. I spend the journey on my phone, ordering out of the small arms catalogue of one of the Mage Trust's go to arms smugglers.

My mentor's house is ugly. A strange and mishappen reef of domes and blocks, assembled in a way that draws the eye oddly, off putting in its angles. Some say that this ugliness reflects the ugly powers he consorts with. Others that it reflects his singular genius at the geomantic arts.

Personally I think the ugliness is of an unfinished thing. Even the most beautiful building rarely seems that way when it's half constructed. This sprawling house in the country outside Tokyo is my teacher's life work, the final culmination of a life spent learning geomancy that stretches back to the Sengoku Jida.

Since that time just after my thirteenth birthday, this house is the one place I've ever felt truly and completely safe. I played freely in its vast gardens, learned the arts of combat, magic and, espionage from its master and his servants.

I spent three years living here. Now I come back only when I wish to see my teacher in person.

I do a short breathing exercise to calm down before I approach the door.

I arrive by car and knock on the door. Laplace, the head maid, answers as she always does. She's a tall, silver haired woman of a willowy, slightly unreal beauty, made a little more unreal by the french maid outfit and the rabbit ears poking up through her hair. She is, according to both her and my Master, from the moon. I'm not quite sure how this is possible. She's the one who taught me to fight, to detect and evade followers, all the skills I'd need to survive.

Laplace wasn't my first crush, but she was the first time I had a crush on another woman.

Behind her, the hall has changed again. Now it's warm and golden black, shining in a way that makes me think of syrup or molasses.

"Nishifune-san." She bows. "Kondou-san is waiting for you in the rotunda."

"Of course."

My teacher is famous in his dislike of honorifics. He sneers at mage families who's patriarchs require themselves to be addressed as sama, or even worse dono, and refuses even Sensei. When we talk in English, he is always my teacher, not my Master, when we speak in Japanese, he is simply Kondou-san. Nothing else.

Laplace leads me through and I watch the changes in internal style. The black and gold repeats a lot, but there's also a huge amount of living plants out now, the bright greens and white flowers clashing violently with the new decor. The black and gold might appear random, but I know enough to understand that it's meant to alternately absorb and refract geomantic energy, probably sucked from a wide area by the root system.

The unified purpose of the design though? Even I, who considers herself one of the best geomancers in Japan couldn't tell you.

When I find Kondo, he's sitting in a wicker chair, long dark hair falling down his back and playing astral chain on his switch. He looks up as I step into view and puts the game aside. "Nozomi."

"Enjoying your birthday present I see." Laplace pulls out another chair and I sit opposite. Another maid, this one a mass of vaguely feminine shadows brings tea and small cakes in English fashion.

"Things were so much more boring in the past." He nods in thanks to Laplace and she and the other maid bow and withdraws. "We had so few ways to entertain ourselves. No one can work all the time, not even me. So, what brings you here?"

"An achievement, and perhaps a mistake. Also a request for permission." I outline the events of the previous nights. "I failed to conceal my activities, and a school friend followed me. I ended up telling her about, well, myself. Magic."

"You're a sentimental girl sometimes." He sips his tea. "So what do you intend to do with her?"

"I was thinking I'd train her as a mage. It wouldn't do for the skills I've learned to die with me."

"And so you come seeking my permission to take a student." He looks at the pool.

"That and one other thing that could bring us trouble."

"You've always resisted getting close to anyone before." Anyone but him. Until he sent me to live on my own. "What's different about this girl?"

"She's strong willed. She followed me into danger and I couldn't spot her." That still rankles a little. "She saw a hunter and still wished to be taught."

"Wishes are all very well, but you're putting her in quite a lot of danger are you not? Can she survive it?"

I look down at my tea. "I don't want to be alone anymore. I've tried but I can't just live a life that's all secrets. I've been trying but I can't--" I sort of choke off. He looks at me, expression suddenly bland in that way he always gets when he's actually feeling profoundly awkward.

Eventually, he speaks. "Do as thou wish. That shall be the whole of the law. If you wish her to be your student then train her. I would like to test her though, as it will be some of my teachings you pass on."

"Alright, but do not try to steal her from me. She is my student, not yours."

"Of course, of course."

"Speaking of which. I acquired a rather interesting item."

"Oh?"

"A black book and the means to read it. I haven't dived into it yet, I felt like I should take precautions."

"Remarkable." Kondo smiles. "I am interested in the results of such research, so of course I'll assist you." He makes no sign that I can see but a few moments later Laplace returns with a gleaming red leather book. "Here. All my procedures for handling such objects. Be careful."

"Yes Kondo-san."

"Speaking of forbidden things, what was this report that you sent to Laplace about some bandit with a geomantic grid?"

"Yes. Aratani threw them in front of me. A particularly nasty street gang is using it. Crude, but still quite effective. I suspect that he intends to use me as a stalking horse for his own investigation."

"That young man will go far." Kondou rubs some of the dirt on his fingers and feels the consistency. "Though, he's got us, we can't just ignore this, amateurs experimenting with geomancy could set off who knows what effects."

"No. Though I'm going to see if I can turn the tables on him, and at least steal their research."

He nods, looking pleased. "Very well. Then I shall make the arrangements for your student to enter our house."

"Thank you Kondo-san." I really don't have time to do the administration that you need to do to get a student right now. I have things to do. "The last thing is this." I wave at the pond and bring up an image of the drone, still circling over tokyo, following me. "The hunter used this to track me. I'm almost certain."

"Really? I wonder where they acquired something like that." He looks at the drone. "Well, this won't do at all will it?"

"I want your permission to shoot it down."

"Shooting it down over Tokyo will draw to much notice. No, let me show you how it's done." He raises a hand, palm open and then brings the other palm down on it. The drone discorporates away to mist. "There."

My teacher is such a showoff.

*****​

There's so much to do to induct a pupil. You have to let the Society know that you have a new mage so they can place the right processes in place with the government and the right flags on records. That takes ages. You also have to arrange a coming out party. I'm putting that off, nervous about how Manako will take the reaction of my peers. Will she find this less glamorous when she knows I'm so hated?

Manako seems worried too. We'd meet up in a restaurant after she'd finished cram school, and spent some time looking over her homework, which was mostly fine. I'd had to correct a few designs that had got perhaps overly ambitious, but I'd prefer an ambitious student to the alternative. She'll need all the ambition she can get to catch up.

"You're doing well." I tell her. "Make sure you keep taking your tablets when you study."

"Alright." Manako looks doubtfully at the pill bottle I've slipped her. "Are you sure we should be doing something like this?"

"It's quite safe. Tested for ages." I tap my head. "The human mind alone isn't quite up to magic. You need to give it a boost. This is the one that mages settled on."

"Do you use it?"

"Along with a few other methods." I check my phone and begin to pack away the books. "I'll have to teach you how not to sleep to."

"How not to sleep?" She looks surprised, but not as pleased as I hoped, then smiles. "That sounds great actually." There's a pause while she loads her bag, drawing out whatever she wants to say. I decide I'll give her a few moments and then if she hasn't come clean ask her straight out. "My family invites you for a meal." I consider and reject making a joke about dating her. She's still looking bothered, but not about this I think. "Would that be okay? They think that you're lonely. I told them some stuff about you, as we're going out a lot, and it'd let us work on stuff at my house"

"That's fine. I'll be in my best behaviour. What day?"

"Tomorrow."

" Should I wear a wig?"

"No, they know that your hair is white." She gets up. "Sorry to take another of your evenings."

"It's fine. I'll bring you some new texts." I get up and put some bills on the table. Manako follows me.

I arranged some additional volleyball practice with Akira. I still want to know what's up with Manako though. I decide I'll just ask her straight up, and wait for a good opportunity as step into the streets. There's a long silence and I decide to inject myself into it. "So what's bothering you?"

Manako looks over at me, sudden and guilty. I give her a reassuring look. "I know you very well Manako, something is bothering you. What happened?"

"It's probably nothing, he probably just forgot." She takes a deep breath, seems to examine what she's said and tries again. "It's my Uncle. You know he travels a lot?" I know Manako's uncle is her favourite relative. He was the first to take her shooting. Amd tells her stories from around the globe. "He always comes to see me to say goodbye when he leaves Japan, but this time he didn't."

"Did you have a time arranged and he no showed?"

"Not really. He was staying in our guest room, and then he left. My parents say he left early, and we just missed one another because I was out on Sunday." Ah, guilt, I'm no stranger to that one. Now I feel a little guilty too.

"I'm sorry you missed him."

"It's fine! Training is important." She sighs. "I'm more worried about him though. I would have thought he'd have at least left me a note or called."

"Did you call him?"

"Yes. No answer, but he might still be on the plane. He was travelling to the Philippines."

"I can check up on him for you. It wouldn't be difficult." A quick check on entry and exit records should suffice to know that he left the country safely.

"Really?" Manako smiles. "Thank you."

"I'll text you when I get a result." We're approaching Manako's station. "I'd better head off, I have volleyball with Akira."

"Sure." Manako waves and heads off up the steps into the station. I turn away, headed for the nearby subway entrance, when my phone buzzes. A text for Akira. Maybe she can't make it?

"Hey, how do you tell if someone is following you?"

*****​

"I keep seeing this guy behind me. He's got a brown coat on, like a detective, and a loud shirt."

The simplest way to determine if you're being trailed on foot is to pause and turn one hundred and eighty degrees as if you forgot your umbrella. This will work most of the time unless you're up against a team with a substantial number of people. It has some problems however, like revealing that you believe that you're being followed. Laplace trained me in quite a few of the better tricks, the ones that can detect even a team, such as noticing the most common formations that teams will use to follow you. Generally there'll be one or two behind on the other side of the street, and one ahead on your side of the street, or visa versa.

"Don't look back, just walk normally but slowly. Window shop a little. Keep your head up and watch your surroundings."

I don't want Akari to give herself away, so I don't want her to pause and turn. If she is being followed then I don't want her to do anything until at least I get there. Instead I'm going to conduct the other type of check you do. Get a confederate to a vantage point and have them mount a check for you. I use my phone to quickly plot out a route based. With the GPS location from Akira's phone it's fairly simple to figure out an intercept point. She's staying on populated streets and walking straight and slow, window shopping a little as she moves.

We're talking to one another in voice, partly for safety, partly because it makes coordinating what we're doing easier.

"You're really accepting this pretty easily."

"I guess you were right that I'm someone who knows about people following her." History hovers over this conversation. That one time that our worlds really intersected.

She laughs a little weakly. "Should I call the police?"

She should, but my blood is up and I kind of want to know who's following my friend. "When we're sure you're being followed, Then we'll call them."

Neither of us is in uniform, so unless the follower has really done his homework he shouldn't connect us, though will my colour scheme imply it? I'm in mostly black today. Black skirt, black jacket, black thigh highs, white shirt and red tie. For one of my best friends, I'll tint myself. I switch the black in my outfit to a progressively lighter blue as I hurry the subway. What about my hair? If the follower knows me too then that'll give me away even at a distance. If I'd known this was going to happen I'd have worn a hoodie.

I'll just have to trust that my own previous counterintelligence precautions would have alerted me to someone watching or investigating the school or me.

It's an agonizing twenty minute series of connections to get me where I want to go, with several short sprints between trains to get the algorithmically perfect course. Finally, I leave the last JR station and fast walk up into the second floor of a large department store then out into the skybridge across the main street. I pause, check my phone and locate Akari in the crowd. It's not to hard. She's tall enough to stand out. She makes a turn into this street, she'll pass below me. We're actually already past the in door sports centre who's volleyball court we tend to use for out of school training between the two of us, but that's into a series of less populated backstreets that maybe aren't a hundred percent safe.

And there behind her is the man. He's fat, gross looking man, cheaply dressed, brown detective coat, shirt that is yes, loud. A lurid blue Hawiian that looks very out of place in this weather. The collar of his coat and shirt are both up around his neck but it's open underneath, like a cape. His face is might be pleasant enough except for it's total dissipation and the smirk of total contempt for the world around him. I pull out my phone, zoom the camera in on him and then take a series of pictures of his face. Then I cover one eye and check what's inside him. That shirt is freaking me out.

There's a glow of life force in there at least. It's hard to make out more in a crowd situation like this, but he's not a walking void like a hunter or someone full of worms. There's something off about him though.

"I see him. He's definitely tailing you."

"Okay. I'm going to call someone."

"Alright. Call me back when you're done." She rings off. I walk back into the department store, buy a hoodie (white with a red rose) and cap (plain black) and put it on, stowing my coat in my bag then merge out into the street.

After what seems like an age Akari comes back on the phone. "They're sending someone. Where are you?"

"Behind him." I can see him in the crowd in passing glances, the bobbing flash of bright green on the shirt collar. "I've got eyes on you both."

"I thought we were going to play volleyball, not spy vs. spy."

"Hopefully there's still time for that."

"Okay, the cops are here. I'm going to ring off."

"Okay. I'll see you on the court."

Two police officers are cutting through the crowd to Akari. She pauses, then turns and points back towards shirt man. They nod to her, talk for a moment, and then tell her to stay put. Both cops walk towards the man, who stops, waiting for them. I keep walking, keeping my pace slow, not quite looking at him.

There's something I don't like about the way he's standing. It's too confident. He's been caught red handed following a girl and is about to be confronted, but his body language isn't at all defensive. The cops reach him, talk, then seem to stop. He doesn't show them anything but they begin to walk away. I see Akari's mouth drop open as he starts towards her and will her to turn and run, but she doesn't, held to the spot presumably by whatever force compelled the cops away.

I pause by a shop window, as if admiring something. The man reaches Akari and puts an arm around her. She goes meekly with him.

I fall in behind them. Reaching into my bag I find a particular chain and fasten it around my head like a princess, mostly concealed by my hair and the cap. Then I pull on my gloves. The man is walking Akari in towards a side street. I follow slowly. He seems like he has a particular destination in mind, not just heading for the nearest deserted alley. Residential neighbourhoods are not far off the main streets, and are only lightly trafficked. If he's on the ball he'll spot me as soon as we get there, so I'll take him before he can react. I close it up till I'm only a few people behind, looking anywhere but directly at him. A criminal superstition: a watched cop will always look.

I'll use a kick. Instant take down hopefully, then grab Akari and run for it. We turn off the street and I feel something awful, like a disgust at the street I'm about to turn into. Even with the chain it's enough to stop me for a moment and make me stumble as I come through.

The man turns and looks at me. Behind us, passers-by move unconcernedly. I stop a short way from him.

"So." He says. "You're hunting me?"

*****​

"Take your hands off my friend."

He doesn't, holding Akari close and smirking at me. Her eyes are blank and she has a strange smile fixed on her face. "Ah. I guess I'm unlucky. I never guessed she'd have a friend like you. Are you an exorcist? No." a sly smile. "A mage."

I fix on his voice. It's surprisingly deep and attractive for such an ugly man, a complex baritone, like an opera singer. I could get lost in that voice. Never return. Each word seems to have weight and power powered into it.

That might be almost literally what he's doing. A reverse spell, pouring might into words so that his words have power. It's a technique many mages use for low-level mental effects, often on themselves. This man has turned it into something far more powerful. Each time he speaks I feel myself sinking deeper.

"Don't worry." He pats Akari. "Your friend will come back alive. She'll be a sobbing ruin, with her personality crushed. Probably have a phobia about sleep but after a few years of drugs and therapy I'm sure she'll be vaguely functional. Why don't you come along? See how we treat her."

Despite the chain burning against me his words are getting through. I can't imagine what this must be like for someone without protection. I need to stop him talking. I'll play along so I can get time to plan. Or is that something I'm rationalizing to go along with him? Your brain can do that if the mental control goes deep enough. "I'd like that."

"This way." He waves. "You're both so tall. Very beautiful." A wave of warm emotion. It's hard to want anything but to go along with whatever he wants from me. "I like that. Keep your distance please. At least five steps between us." He stands with Akaira between us.

The street ahead is clear, empty. There's a large van parked and four men and a woman waiting. Three of the men are just muscle, the others is a grossly overweight man in a business suit, and is of similar aspect to my escort, while the woman is young and dressed in college student casual.

This isn't going to work. "You have a nice voice." I need a new plan.

"Why thank you. I'm really borrowing it though. Aren't you uncomfortable with that chain on you? It looks hot."

"It's burning." My hand rises towards the chain. I can't disobey him directly. It feels too good. The chain doesn't seem to be helping much. Maybe I can throw it at him. Or at least cool it down.

Oh, that's a good idea. I speak a word and switch the heat coming off the chain into sound. Maybe it'll block his voice. No, it's just really annoying.

A loud hiss fills the street. The chain almost instantly heats back up and the hissing grows louder, almost unbearable. I can only partly hear him through it. "That's annoying."

Got you. I make a sharp chopping gesture and sound ceases. The man's eyes go wide and his lips move. He's silenced. Damn. I should have silenced myself. At the van, his confederates start to move forward, one raising hands to cast a dispel.

I punch the fat guy in the throat. My fist hits something squishy and gross. The sensation is so disgusting that I recoil back a step, looking at my glove. Fortunately it's not stained, even though there's a spreading green slime forming around the man's scarf. He falls on his bottom, clutching himself.

The rest are charging at me.

Akari is on the ground, clutching her head, twitches running through her whole body. No time to think about that now.

The three men are coming, the woman is casting, switching from dispelling gestures to what looks like a fireball. Then, the fourth, the fat man, starts to sing. The sounds hit me in layers and I come to a stop.

The chain is still hissing, and its hot, its functions switching to maximum as this even worse wave of words hits me. It's hard to concentrate even on the heat and noise. Hard to concentrate on anything. The effect reminds me of the crash I experienced the one time I had MDMA. It was at a party in London and I was sixteen and had just found out what would happen if I committed suicide. I'd taken some of my hosts mollies, and it had been great, until it wasn't and I just lay in bed and didn't do anything as the bleakness of an overloaded reward centre reduced everything to grey.

"She's out?" The woman says. The three toughs are advancing on my cautiously, batons up.

The man licks his lips and stops his chanting. A weird susurration is coming from his throat. "Mostly. Be careful. The chain on her head is giving her some resistance even to the voice."

"What about Kin?"

"She messed up his implant. Don't lift the silence on him. It wouldn't be safe for us either."

"Poor thing. She did so well and now she's going to suffer for it."

I don't want to do anything. I just want to stand here.

I'm going to end up with Junya or Aratani rescuing me.

Even through the bleak haze, this thought is so disgusting I'm forced to action. It takes all the effort in the world to do it, but I make a gesture and reshape the silence. I almost but not quite just drop it entirely, but instead switch it into a ring. A bubble of silence with myself in the skin, Akari outside and the man with the damaged throat inside with his companions.

Sound snaps off, and I'm free. I'm still groggy, slow, but it doesn't matter. The sound the damaged one is making does my work for me. The Mage raises her hands to cast then starts to seize. The four toughs jerk around like puppets on strings, muscles firing randomly.. The fatman is able to stumble a few more steps towards me before toppling forwards.

I don't wait to see further results of this, but grab Akari in a fireman's carry and just run for it.

The direction is random, and I just go as fast as I can. After a block I lower her to the ground and check her out. She's unconscious, body twitching. I check her pulse and its fast and ragged. Searching around in my bag I find a healing potion and a general-purpose cure all and inject both. Akair stirs and moans, then her eyes open.

"What happened?"

"Something bad." I point down the street. Somehow, perhaps familiarity we've come out near the sports centre. "Head inside for a bit, I've just got to check something. I'll be back soon."

"Shouldn't we call the police?" she asks.

"It's--" I look back the way we came. "It's one of those Nozomi things."

"Ah." She pulls herself up. "Don't tell me anymore. Just stay safe."

"I'll be back in a bit."

There's the sound of distant car alarms, the silence has obviously dropped. I remove the hoodie and cap, stow them both in my bag of holding and put my coat back on, then pull a quick illusion across my hair, staining it black. There are people starting to move that way in numbers now, others coming out of their houses. A small crowd is forming by the time I reach the battle.

The kidnap team are all down, twitching, though no longer so badly. Drool, blood and vomit leak out of them in various quantities. I push through the crowd and approach: "I'm a nurse. Let me through!"

"An ambulance is coming!" someone calls. "Be careful!"

As I approach the reason for the clear zone becomes evident. Both of the fat men are emitting a low, almost subsonic hum from their necks. I begin to make a show of doing first aid, which I actually do know, and steal a look at the second fat man's neck. Below his collar is a complex vocal organ that resembles something between a frogs breath sack and severe cancer. It's green, oozing slightly and I am suddenly feeling quite unwell. Blood is fine, vomit is fine, but this just isn't right.

It doesn't stop me from stealing his wallet though, nor the womans. The other men seem like they're much less important to this. The IDs inside will certainly be faked but you can tell a lot from a fake ID.

The ambulance comes and I leave it to the paramedics, exchanging hurried words with them before retreating, vanishing back into the crowd and finding an alley to change my look again. Only then do I allow myself to check the wallets.

As I expected, the drivers licence and other ID papers they contain seem bland enough. Internet searches of the names show thousands of results. Almost certainly fakes. More interesting at the other items. Neither wallet contains much cash, but each contains a black credit card from the same company and bank. I'd be willing to bet good money that these are linked to the same account as well. A potential security weakness, though the bank also provides a good cutout for operational expenses.

Pretty soon, someone is going to check the necks of those two guys and panic. Esper down will be called and the Japanese state will become well and truly involved. As I begin to walk towards the sports centre, I call Aratani. Much as it galls me to admit, I'm going to need a favour.

I text him. <<Hey. Are you free today? I might need some help with a police thing.>>

<<Ah. Sorry I'm in Osaka. I'll be here for a while. If things go bad though, ask for prosecutor Tanigawa Junko. Use my name.>>

<<Alright.>>

<<I might need to call in this favour soon.>>

Become in my debt Aratani. I want that so much.

I try to put it out of my mind for now. I'm not going to call this prosecutor for at least a little while. This episode has been dangerous and frustrating and I want to burn off some of my energy. I want to play some volleyball.

I arrive at the sports centre, a long, large, square building up a series of steps and head inside to get changed. Akari is already out on the court, playing two on two with three guys who look like college students. She's holding her own pretty well.

"Everything okay?" Akari asks as I join her. The game turns into three on three, with the one guy on our side looking happy as punch.

"Yeah, for now let's just play ball."
 
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Sound snaps off, and I'm free. I'm still groggy, slow, but it doesn't matter. The sound the damaged one is making does my work for me. The Mage raises her hands to cast then starts to seize. The four toughs jerk around like puppets on strings, muscles firing randomly.. The fatman is able to stumble a few more steps towards me before toppling forwards.
How can the sound the damaged man is making do any work when all sound is muted inside the bubble?
I arrive by car and knock on the door. Laplace, the head maid, answers as she always does. She's a tall, silver haired woman of a willowy, slightly unreal beauty, made a little more unreal by the french maid outfit and the rabbit ears poking up through her hair. She is, according to both her and my Master, from the moon. I'm not quite sure how this is possible. She's the one who taught me to fight, to detect and evade followers, all the skills I'd need to survive.
So the silver hair and her being a maid makes me think Sakuya Izayoi is the inspiration here. The bunny ears and the moon stuff makes me think about Reisen. A good combo of influences if true, I approve. Her name being Laplace makes me think she can probably transform herself out of the time-domain which would be bonus points.

Oh, and the gun discussion makes me think someone has been playing too much Girl's Frontline :V
 
Oh, wow, whoever these guys are that's a slick strategy, albeit also morally awful. Their execution, though, had quite a few problems, and they seemed like one trick ponies for the most part. I'm willing to bet that they didn't come up with this, and someone else is using them as patsies. Of course, the fact that they seem to be able to produce agents of this level in actual bulk is also very concerning, especially when they're bound to have more tricks.
 
"Shooting it down over Tokyo will draw to much notice. No, let me show you how it's done." He raises a hand, palm open and then brings the other palm down on it. The drone discorporates away to mist. "There."

My teacher is such a showoff.
This is a great casual display of power, and I love how Nozomi is so deeply unimpressed.

She'll be a sobbing ruin, personality crushed out phobic about sleep but after a few years of drugs and therapy I'm sure she'll be back to something like normal
A quibble, but this sentence reads very poorly.

I'm going to end up with Junya or Aratani rescuing me.
And I also love this. Death or kidnapping? No, worse, the embarrasment of needing rescue. It's a really artful way of hammering home that these mooks are far below Nozomi's usual tier of antagonist.
 
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