The Map is not the Dungeon (Pokemon mystery dungeon quest)

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Or maybe someone else is reading hasn't voted yet ?

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Adhoc vote count started by FieryStarVictory on Aug 15, 2018 at 7:04 PM, finished with 22 posts and 9 votes.
 
Chapter4:Change

Chapter 4: Change

Choosing a pokemon eh ?.Maybe I could turn into a meowth and get unlimited money ? you think , but it might not work like that.
You have a lot of a lot of ideas , feeling really indecise.
Maybe phantup so people would believe you where human ?.But ghosts might not work like that either .
During a moment you even consider turning into an unown , to see what happens.Maybe you could even get awesome cosmic powers somehow that way?​
But you aren't really going to do something so risky whith your body , being stuck as an unown sounds potentially horrible.

And looking at spirit kind of makes you want to be an abra.
Abra have hands , and Psychic powers look cool and could end up being really useful.
Images of levitating cooking utensils come to your mind.Especially spoons(whats the deal whith those anyway , do alakazam actually get spoons after evolving , is this wold wiling to go that far in its madness?)

It also comes to mind how uncomfortable it would be if people could read your mind, even if spirit says that's not actually a thing .Maybe a dark type would be a good idea then?.
Zoroark is really cool, and has interesting illusion powers.

You feel like maybe you should be taking this decision more seriously but there is not much you can do about that . It feels a bit unreall now that you are actually on this situation.

"Are you OK ?"Spirit looks concerned.

"Yes , it's just that It's a big decision .And I need to think about it more."You say.

"What decision ?"

"Choosing a pokemon , like it says there."You check, but the strange semitransparent letters haven't disappeared.

"You can read that ? It does look like the symbols humans used to write , so I guess it makes sense .But you are speaking sinjohnese and that should be on another language if it was left by humans."

"Actually I can't understand what it says , only the symonds ."

"So its a phonetic alphabet then . But how do you now what it says if you can't read it ?"

"Can't you see that ?Its like a translation in floating letter thingies "You point at the ghostly floating unown symbols in front of you.

"No, and I don't know how to read those characters anyway ,but you having some kind of magical translation is interesting.Maybe it also translates voice? And that could explain why you seem to speak sinjonese.

Wait sinjonese ? You feel confused but decide to not interrupt him.

" Some of your expressions sounded weird ,and we haven't tried to talk about language itself which might break it ,but I wouldn't have guessed it without this clue."

"I couldn't read your notebook though so I don't have universal text translation.Not sure about speaking though."

"Weird. I will have to design so much experiments when we return to gem."
"If you want to stay whith me after this , of course " he says looking concerned.

"Don't worry , I'm going to need your help for a while .Especially since if this does work and I turn into a pokemon nobody is going to believe I'm acually human .And you are kind of my only friend here for now"In fact the only friend you can remember ,but you prefer to not dwell on that source of angst.

Spirit looks relieved at your response .
"Good , now we should figure out how to get out of here. I really don't like being trapped in a place like this , whith teleport and orbs not working "
You nod in agreement .This place creeps you out , even if it's breathtaking . Especially because of the eerie silent movements of the unown of the walls.

"I think the dungeon , or the unown or whoever brought us here wants me to write in that slab thing .So lets try that?"

"Are you sure you actually want to do this?"Spirit asks while you aproach the wall.

"Your body is fragile . But humans are awesome , and there might be opportunities only humans have"

"And I don't think writing there is a good idea, even if you decide you do want to turn into a Pokemon .Who knows what will happen when you do,maybe its a trap".

"Oh come on , whats the worst...."You decide its better for everyone if you don't finish that sentence.

"Any kind of trap could kill us easily . I'm not that much more resistant than you , and neither of us is actually good at fighting."

"And I expert most of my my blast seeds and gravelerocks escaping the rattata. So maybe we should just go back ?This is an adventure , and I appreciate finding a place nobody has ever seen .But I don't know enough to tell if people have been disappearing in this dungeon"Spirit said.
"Maybe we are just here because of you being a human , or maybe its just random and others have found this place before , and I hadn't heard about it because nobody returned to tell the story. And in any case I wouldn't be able to forgive myself if I let something happen to you."He continued ,looking concerned.

You are wondering if you should listen to Spirit but while you hesitate something materializes behind him, on the stairs.Its a diancie .

"Whatch out !" you shout, not sure if its a threat

"Its a dungeon boss."Spirit looks at the new enemy and takes a weird grey rock from his bag.

"Wait bosses?"You say, confused.

"Its a stronger Dungeon construct. We can't defeat it so ,run !"Spirit puts himself between the diancie and you.

The fake diancie continues towards you whith a neutral expression and eyes devoid of any emotion.It points at spirit and a smal rock materializes in front of it and is launched faster than you can see towards him.
Spirit somehow manages to completely dodge the attack , more by luck than reflexes , and he launches his own rock to the diancie.It doesn't seem to cause any noticeable damage.
You don't want to abandon him, and besides you don't really have that much places to run to ,so you do the only thing you can think of.

You go towards the message and write the first species that comes to your mind from the ones you were considering before , hoping to be able to help him.It occurs to you while you finish writing it that you probably should have chosen something that had a type advantage against diancie.
Or maybe a legendary.But you suspect choosing a legendary might not have worked.

Now its not time for regrets . Its time to fight to protect my new friend you think , channeling your inner shounen protagonist to try to ignore how deadly afraid you are .

It doesn't work . Maybe I have to make the letters more unown shaped or something? You are starting to feel desperate when the text changes.

"Are you sure ?"It says now in the translation

"Yes." you write on the wall.

After another moment the text starts to glow , the fake legendary disappears as fast as it came and a group of unown gather around you spinning very fast.You feel something weird happening to you .
Its fast , suddenly the room looks bigger and your everything hurts.Soon the pain and disorientation fades and you feel different .

Spirit was feeling conflicted right now .
On one hand he had found a living Human , something so awesome his childhood dreams fell short of . On the other hand they were two useless fighters on a unexplored , and therefore dangerous room .

Which sounded like the start of kind of cautionary tale that his mom would tell to dissuade him from wanting to become an explorer as a kid ,and none of those ended well for the careless explorers.
Well it could be worse , at least Alice hadn't actually said the dreadful phrase "What could go wrong "

The world doesn't actually run on stories , so we'll be fine, I hope he thinks.

At least the dungeon boss had disappeared(witch was a relief since he was sure they were about to die ) but something strange had happend to Alice.
She had disappeared , and in her place there was an abra.

The abra is wearing a bag like his.

"Alice is that you ?"he asks.

" Ehhh.Yes? I hope."She anwers.

Alice's voice sounds similar to his , which is weird , because its a masculine voice.
In fact she actually looks exactly like himself . Spirit does't look at his own reflection very often so he hadn't noticed immediately.
Do I actually sound like that?

"I dont know how to tell you this but"he says "You are an abra now , in fact you look exactly like me."
Explaining this to the people in gem is going to be ....difficult.

Saying that the dungeon did it explains a lot of things ( in fact you wonder how munch sketchy thigns near dungeon use it as a cover ) but people are going to have lots of questions.

Especially mom when she inevitably hears about it, and Spirit has't ever been able to hide anything from her for too long.



You are walking on your hands on a weird way .
Something is horribly wrong about the sensations your body is giving back to you . You try to stand upright , but your new body doesnt seem prepared for that so you fall .

Fortunately there is something fluffy on the floor under your neck and it softens the impact.
Wait .That's...actually your own fur.It feels like wearing multiple scarfs.

All your nerves seem to have been connected to really different body parts and your brain hasn't decided which is which.
But you are pretty sure that it should be worse.
You certainly don't feel phantom pain anywhere and all your body has been remodeled so you should .In fact you think you can move it more or less .

Spirit asks you a question.
You answer and your voice sounds .... Normal ? which is really weird .

Your mouth is completely different and speaking seems to work differently somehow.

Eh , good enough, you aren't going to complain .
You hadn't anticipated not being immediately able to walk when you choose , but at least there is some convenient details .

Who knows what just happened whith your previous body.Is it still connected to this one , or do you have a new brain or what ?You are pretty sure you old one doesn't fit in your new head.
That reminds you , you are still a girl, right ?Your voice us still the same so probably yes but It doesn't seem like there is a way to tell.

Spirit is freaking out for some reason and looks at you weirdly .

Is it because you are a dark type ?.You haven't asked anything about that , maybe you should have ?.
You hope there is no fantastic racism going on in this world .

"I dont know how to tell you this but"he says"You are an abra now and , in fact, you look exactly like me."

" Ah , sorry , wait a moment"you answer.

Illusion works apparently .
But you weren't trying to activate it consciously. Maybe it was because you were scared of the diancie?
You hope transforming into random people is not going to become a problem .
Your body still looks like a zoura's so maybe your power affects the minds of others somewhow.

Whats up whith that anyway?you are pretty sure you wrote zoroark there.
It probably was an horrible idea against a fairy type , but diancie is not here anymore , so lets pretend that didn't happen.

You can still become a zoroark so its not so bad but you do feel a bit cheated.Well at least you are really cute.

You are going to have to test your powers extensively and figure out what you can do whith them.
Like for example what happens if you turn into a wailord?
Also you are feeling a strange drain and tireness.

"Are you ok ?"

You explain the situation to Spirit .

"Interesting" he says "Can I touch you?"

"Sure"

He tries to touch something over your head . Surprisingly his hand stops ,encountering resistance and you hear a pop . It sounds like air rushing to fill a vacuum .
You imediately stop feeling drained and tired.

Spirit confirms you are back to normal (well you still are a zorua , but you supose this is what normal looks like for you now) .

"Can you walk?."

"Maybe ?Let me try."

You akwardly try to move your legs and actually manage to walk a few steps before falling , which is surprising given how different your body is .

"Do you need help?"

" No thanks , I think I can figure this out" you say , a bit embarrassed by your clumsiness .

"Are you sure ?"Spirit asks


"Teleport seems to be working now , so I might be able to teleport you ?It's more difficult whith dark types , especially If you can't control your powers yet
but there are some ways to do it ."
"Or maybe we can use an escape orb ,it looks like orbs work again "

Trying to look cool in front of spirit you run.Trying to look cool you focus and .....
Fail so hard you land on your face and almost fall from the platform.That could have gone better , but at least you didn't fall .

You have been ignoring it but the alien sensation on the end of your spine reminds you that you now have tail .

Which is really cool but you aren't sure what to think about it .Maybe you can use it for balance somehow ?
You don't know how to control it yet though.

But now that you notice it it looks like it just sort of moves naturally whith your feet , the same way your arms used to when you walked.

"Orbs are working , so this is no longer a death trap , and I guess we can afford to let you accustomed to our new body"
"People are a bit clumsy after evolution which is the most similar thing .I'm not going to lie , you are worse than that , more like a very young kid . That and your lack of knowledge can be very suspicious."

"With how old you look and the fact that you can talk we aren't going to be able to pass you as a newborn , or even a really young kid"

"Are newborns that different ?"you say while trying to incorporate.

"Not necessarily.Its just a series of details that tel you how old someone is , but their body is mostly the same , unless they have one of those evolution by age like riolu."
"Humans have a preevolution right ?.I guess you did't know about other kinds of evolution because you only have one of those ."
"Or is evolution another thing I'm assuming wrong ?"

"Kind of." There is the thing the term evolution is supposed to describe but it seems he means the pokemon thing. "Does evolution mean pokemon instantly change ?"

"Yes , we glow and change forms when certain conditions are met, generally just fighting enough "

It looks like any semblance of normal biology just went out of the window .
"Then no , we are born as babies and then slowly grow and develop until we are adult "

" Soo like whith people's minds but in the body ?."

"I guess? I find really weird that you pass trough the same stages of mental development but your body looks the same ".

"Actually I'm the one that should be finding you weird and nonsensical , you were a human , a weird and mysterious creature of legend , pokemon are just normal" says Spirit grinning .

"Weirdness is relative then.But I guess you are right whith that past tense , I should get used to the idea of not being human anymore "
While you say that you manage to walk a bit without falling, making you feel more confident .

"You know ,I'm actually taking back that past sense , you are , and always will be a human for me .Even if you apparently have illusion powers that you could have been using to pretend you were human until know. Even if that sounds what more likely than me actually finding an human."He seems to be thinking ."And it would explain why your mind looked like a normal one but made if something else , if it was an illusion."

"Ehhh.."You dont like where this is going.

"But I'm going to trust you anyway, and take the risk . My instincts tell me to trust you , and I've learn to trust my instincts about people. Well ,except the part of my instincts that are telling me to distrust you because you are dark type and therefore look full of awful emotions and thoughts to my psychic senses , but I learned to ignore those a long time ago "

"Thanks , that actually means more than I expected to me. Huh,I used to feel that people in stories that complained about not being human anymore were exagerating , but it's way weirder and uncomfortable than I expected.

"Are you regretting your decision of becoming a pokemon ? You did it to try to help me If I'm not mistaken, and that makes me feel a bit responsible."

"Nop , pokemon powers are awesome ."

Spirit chuckles.

"Is it that funny ?"you ask

"Yes, I hadn't thought about it that way"

"Ah of course, its like if someone from this world came to earth and said that things like cars are awesome while he finds things like being able to read minds and teleporting as perfectly normal "

"I still don't completely understand how they work, but by what you have told me cars are awesome , and it's something that not even humans here had, or at least we haven't found any on the ruins that I know of "spirit answered.

"Not sure they would have lasted that long, it's been what, centuries?"

"More like at least one millennium, but nobody really knows, there's a lack of precise records of the early days of our civilization ."

"Not sure how you even know what we looked like."

"Some places are better preserved than others, especially inside dungueons "

"Well I still think psychic powers are like actually the awesomest thing, minds are complicated , and I can't even begin to imagine how it could work."

"I guess awesomeness is relative then."

"Touche."

"That didn't make sense actually , maybe you do have translation and that sentence doesn't tranlate well"

"Its a word not a sentence ,and its something said when ..... Forget it we have better things to do"

"Fine, but for what its worth , I do actually find psychic powers awesome and want to learn how to use more of them , even if the ones that I was born whith aren't exiting anymore.And I have seen a lot of people that take for granted abilities that I can only dream of having so I do understand how you feel .But Human tech is still objectively more awesome"

You roll your eyes.

The unown continue their mysterious activities on the background .You felt like they where observing you before the change but now the sensation is gone.

Spirit decided to continue talking.
"Anyway returning to the matter at hand.If we wanted to pretend you are a newborn we could probably handwave the fact you look older, since most people haven't seen a zorua. But I don't think you can convincingly act as one , and sounds like the kind of lie that could backfire horribly."

"We could just tell the truth."you say.

"No way , people would think we are lying or crazy .Even if dismissing as just weird dungeon stuff could help a bit."

"I mean telling the true fact that I have amnesia and don't remember lots of things , and the true fact that I'm not from the region"you say, hopefully grinning ( your facial expressions seem to work normally but you really need a mirror to check )."

"That's a good idea actually ."He says

"I'm probably too trusting, and sometimes careless , but not dumb"

"Yeah I know , humans are awesomely smart , I won't forget that ."

"Ehhh, that sounds exaggerated and nonsensical .Pokemon look as smart as humans actually.And if it was me I would just have told people that I'm human without thinking"."Well maybe not since the voice told you to not do that.
Which reminds you that you haven't told him about the voice ,and maybe you should, even if it asked you to not tell anybody.

"You certainly aren't as I expected, but I'm not sure that my expectations corresponded to anything that could exist."

"We can use your idea on our our plan , but maybe the amnesia thing would attract too much attention. Also should we just get out and hope the rattata aren't there anymore?"

"What are our options?"

"Everything seems to work now .So as I said before I have an Escape orb which would leave us in the entrance of the dungeon or we could try to teleport to gem , or we could just exit from where we came hoping to end up in the safe room. And finally , we can risk diancie appearing again and rest here while you learn how to move before escaping.
Or any combination of those."
the rattata might still be waiting us outside.

"Teleporting directly to gem sounds good"you say wondering why he doesn't just do that.

"There is a catch , I'm not completely sure that I can teleport us both and the bag considering you are a dark type and I have to do some tricks so your defenses don't interfere" So if I can't maybe we would have to leave the bag , or at minimum empty it."
"Something I really don't want to do.Maybe we can try to leave it in the rest zone and then teleport , but I'm not sure what await us behind that door. "

"Good , do we have anything else? Also can you get my frying pan please?"you ask politely while you try to figure out how grab it whith your paws.

"This thing ?"he asks grabbing it.

"Yes."

"I don't promise the bag won't do anything weird to it but It shouldn't be a problem."
He stores it inside a big pocket on the bag , that you suspect its supposed to be for bicycles.

Wait so that's how trainers can carry a bicycle in the main series games , bags that are bigger on the inside?Cool.In fact now that I think about it that bag seems to be completely ignoring everything I know about physics because the things inside don't weight as much as they should
Spirit is right ,this world's humans had really awesome tech.


"I also have a message orb ,and we could use it send a message to gem for people to help us whith the rattata , or come find us inside the dungeon.The dungeon won't change much while we are in it so they should be able to find us , or check if the rattata are still outside "





What do you do?
And what will Spirit tell about you to the people in whatever population you end in?( I guess Gem village , but who knows what could happen ;) ).

Write in[]

Vote closes on Sunday.

Authors notes:
I decided to only give write in as an option this time as an experiment, but If you want I can give you some voting options.
Once you are in Gem village we will probably have a vote that convers a time skip and you will be free of doing whatever you want, but of course you first have to figure out how to get there and what story ti tell about yourself ( and I was not going to write both the transformation and getting into gem on the same udapte).
 
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[X] Try to teleport out of the dungeon.

[X] Tell people that Spirit found you lost in a cave with no memory- it's almost the truth, after all.
 
[X] Head for the rest area
-[X] then send the message requesting help while waiting in a safe-ish place

[X] Tell people you met shortly after an encounter with the Unown while in a dungeon and your memory is a bit scrambled.
 
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[X] Head for the rest area
-[X] then send the message requesting help while waiting in a safe-ish place

[X] Tell people you met shortly after an encounter with the Unown while in a dungeon and your memory is a bit scrambled.
 
"Orbs are working , so this is no longer a death trap , and I guess we can afford to let you accustomed to our new body"
"People are a bit clumsy after evolution which is the most similar thing .I'm not going to lie , you are worse than that , more like a very young kid . That and your lack of knowledge can be very suspicious."

"With how old you look and the fact that you can talk we aren't going to be able to pass you as a newborn , or even a really young kid"

"Are newborns that different ?"you say while trying to incorporate.

"Not necessarily.Its just a series of details that tell you how old someone is , but their body is mostly the same , unless they have one of those evolution by age like riolu."
"Humans have a preevolution right ?.I guess you did't know about other kinds of evolution because you only have one of those ."
"Or is evolution another thing I'm assuming wrong ?"
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I'll ask some friends to beta read it next time .
 
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[X] Head for the rest room to have a break, recover energy and, in the case of Alice, learn to control her new body. Then send a message to request checking whether there are still Rattatas outside, inform about the intentions to teleport to the gem and explain the current almost defenselessness situation of the protagonists, so people can stay in the dungeon entrance for a bit if backup is needed. In case of trouble while in the gem room, use the teleport orb to appear back in the dungeon entrance and ask the people that should be waiting outside for help defeating obstacles, if it makes sense given what's inside and who came to help. Although Spirit may need to leave the bag behind in the rest area, I guess he can hold the escape orb to use it while in the gem room. Make sure to head back to the safe room to pick up the bag unless the protagonists' lives clearly depend on not doing so.

[X] Tell people that Spirit found you lost in a cave with no memory.
 
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    [X] Head for the rest area
    -[X] then send the message requesting help while waiting in a safe-ish place
    [X] Tell people you met shortly after an encounter with the Unown while in a dungeon and your memory is a bit scrambled.
    [X] Head for the rest area
    [X] Try to teleport out of the dungeon.
    [X] Tell people that Spirit found you lost in a cave with no memory- it's almost the truth, after all.
    [X] Head for the rest room to have a break, recover energy and, in the case of Alice, learn to control her new body. Then send a message to request checking whether there are still Rattatas outside, inform about the intentions to teleport to the gem and explain the current almost defenselessness situation of the protagonists, so people can stay in the dungeon entrance for a bit if backup is needed. In case of trouble while in the gem room, use the teleport orb to appear back in the dungeon entrance and ask the people that should be waiting outside for help defeating obstacles, if it makes sense given what's inside and who came to help. Although Spirit may need to leave the bag behind in the rest area, I guess he can hold the escape orb to use it while in the gem room. Make sure to head back to the safe room to pick up the bag unless the protagonists' lives clearly depend on not doing so.
    [X] Tell people that Spirit found you lost in a cave with no memory.
 
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Btw I didn't abandon the quest or anything , I have just been busy and been procrastinating a bit when I had time .
But soon I'll have the next chapter .
I'm on the beach so maybe not tomorrow .

But I guess I'll have it for sunday (I hope ).
The week ended really fast .

Well that sunday is becoming further and further away, but its almost finished .
 
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Chapter5:Family
Chapter 5:Family

You decide on a plan and start going down the stairs. You are initially worried that you could fall, but the stairs seem to be made for something human sized and look big to you now.
You wanted to tell people that you met shortly after an encounter with the unown while in a dungeon and your memory is a bit scrambled, but according to spirit people don't know what an unown is .So you decide to talk about the unown only if people ask you for details of what you remember.

"Let's go then", you say.

"I'll grab an escape orb just in case, it works by contact so be ready to touch me if there's trouble and we have to use it." Spirit grabs an orb from the bag

"Ok, how do you activate it anyway? In case I have to for whatever reason." You ask curiously.

"You just channel your inner energy into it."

"Energy?"
Oh so they have some kind of mana thing. Should it worry me that I don't even see anything weird with that anymore?

"It's what we spend to use moves." Spirit shrugs.

"I don't have any idea how to do it then." you say.

"Yeah I guess you will have to learn how to use your energy in basic ways. Its better if you don't use orbs right now anyway", he said, looking at you with suspicion.

"Is the light in the room brighter now?" you ask noticing how everything looks more clear and bright

"No but you are a dark type."

"And?"

"Your species is probably nocturnal or lives in dark places, so you have good night vision"

You reach the end of the room. Passing through the door you feel the familiar disorientation that you should really ask spirit about latter and fall, not really accustomed to your body yet.

"Not all of them but a lot, and dark moves work better at night."

You suddenly feel dizzy and find yourself in a different place. The sudden change makes you fall still unable to maintain your balance very well. You stay a moment there in complete darkness, but whatever night vision you might have doesn't seem to work here.

So you stand up and few steps further you can see again. You are in a small square room that looks like a cave again, similar to ones you were in before, but with a different layout.

"Dammit, I had managed to not fall for all that time" you say exasperated.

"Are you ok?" Spirit turns, just noticed that you weren't behind him

"Yes, I'm not going to let something like this to stop me" you say with determination.

"Sorry for not noticing you weren't following "He looks sad

"Nah its fine" You should have said something when you fell anyway.

"No, it's important, what if something happened to you while I'm not looking or something. At least we are definitely in the safe room now "he says.

"What's worrying me is that those Zubats really shouldn't have attacked us there." Spirit looks thoughtful

"Why did you think it was the safe room? Doesn't the dungeon change or something like that?" you ask

"Yeah , but it still has more or less the same amount of rooms and floors"

"And this one has only one floor and between 4 and 5 rooms, so since that was the 6th I found I assumed It was the last one".

There is something weird in that statement, but you are still too distracted with your new body to think too much.

"I mean I guess maybe it was just a small room that was where the safe zone was supposed to be, we didn't see the Kangaskan statue."

"Speaking about that, why does it look like a kangaskan? "

"All of them do." he answered with a chuckle" It's even the same Kangaskan .A Narcissistic runemaster that ensured her apprentices also made them look like her. Safe zones are safe because they don't change and the number of dungeon constructs on a room is constant. Dungeon constructs never change rooms." he said thoughtful." You might still find wild pokemon there sometimes, but never dungeon constructs. So if the room didn't have them they shouldn't have appeared, regardless of how safe it was otherwise."

While he talked he graved a piece of paper and put it on the floor to write.

"Since we are here I'm going to just send a letter instead of wasting a message orb ,we are not immediately in danger and some people in the village know that I'm here, so they will probably check the statue "He finishes writing and puts the note on the bag .

You stare into the darkness for a while. While you wait spirit just sits on the floor in silence, seemingly lost in though.

You want to keep talking with him but you think he doesn't want that right now .You are very talkative and sometimes you aren't sure if people really want to talk with you or they are just listening out of politeness.

You guess you will let him rest and think for a moment, he seems to have a lot to think about.


You watch the unnatural darkness that indicates the exit of the room. It you to the loading zone of a videogame.

This room is definitely not the same you were in before somehow. The size and shape is the same, but the rocks on the floor and walls are on a different pattern.

Maybe it changed while you weren't there, or something. For some reason Spirit seems very sure that's not supposed to happen and he seems to think this is a different room, even if you entered through the same door.
He probably knows a lot of things about dungeons that he doesn't realize aren't obvious,
it seems pokemon aren't immune to hindsight bias. Not that much of a surprise considering how human like Spirit looks.
Doesn't matter, right now you are a bit tired of dungeons and more interested in finally returning to civilization , and figure out what kind of weird food pokemon eat .Well the food in the bag looked pretty normal , but that's just one example.

Spirit sees something in the statue and grabs a different looking paper.
"Team wisdom is coming" He says looking the letter strangely "My uncle is the leader, and it's really difficult to hide anything from him, even for dark people. Mostly because he can get obsessed about figuring someone out until he knows them better than themselves."

You are a bit nervous about that, but you don't really understand why Spirit looks so annoyed.

"Which maybe it's not so bad, now that I think about it". He murmurs and looks at you for a moment.

You wait for a few minutes, and you are starting to figure out how to control your tail when someone enters the room.

An Alakazam appears in the darkness of the door. At first you see only a bit of his face.

He looks all around the room in a few seconds, looking very alert, and then enters moving carefully, the rest of his body getting out of the door's boundary. Seeing someone else go through it makes the curtain of darkness looks even more weird.
Following the Alakazam enters a charizard.

"Hello Uncle. You came because of the message?" Spirit asks with a frown

"There aren't much more reasons to come to diamond cave this late in the evening."

"That was fast" Spirit says.

"I was in the village with my team and noticed that you sent a message, so we came here instead of waiting the mayor to make the official quest."

"Isn't that illegal unless it's an emergency?"

"It's just a minor thing and I doubt anyone in gem will care. Don't go aground telling it to other people though, I have a reputation."

"Fine. By the way, I... didn't know you were nearby". He said awkwardly, looking at him with a hint of suspicion in his eyes . Did you came here because of me? There is not much else to see around here."

"We just happened to be passing through Gem towards the north .People still do that , that has been the only reason your tiny village still exists since the dungeon ran out of diamonds"

"I know but ...."

"That's not what concerns us now, personal stuff can wait". He says very serious. "What happened exactly?"

"Well as a summary we were attacked, first by a group of Rattata, and afterwards by a group of Zubat dungeon constructs and finally by a dungeon boss."

"I assume there is more than that, that sounds like a bad but not unlikely experience with the dungeon, and you said something different in the message."

"Yes, I sent the message because the Rattata looked like they were being controlled by something, and the Zubats attacked us in what looked like the safe room, though I didn't see the Kangaskan statue."

"Runes did stop working for a moment in Gem" the Abra says thoughtful "Anything more?"

"We somehow found a new room in the dungeon."
Spirit describes the room and says that the Diancie construct attacked you there and dissipated, omitting your transformation.

"Good, I'll as you about details latter, but for now that will suffice .We already defeated the Rattata, but they seemed normal." Answered Spirit.

"You didn't kill them right?"

"Of course not, you know that we can't kill that much wild pokémon, and wouldn't do it even if we could .For all that I appreciate the work of the hunters I don't want to become one .We just made them faint and threw them out of the forest" he said.
"The new room is interesting, and those symbols you found might be valuable to a runemaster if you can find them again but I'm more immediately concerned about the safe zone." He says
"The statue is back here, but the room has changed since the last time we checked. And that shouldn't happen."

"The dungeon constructs didn't actually hit you, right?"

"No, why?" Spirit looks confused by the question.

"Nothing, I had an idea" The Alakazam looks at you with a strange expression.

"What about the girl you are with? I thought you left gem alone."

"My name is Alice, nice to meet you." you answer.

"Is she your girlfriend?" he says with a smile directed at Spirit, the air of seriousness of before disappearing.

"I..."Spirit seems to think about what to say for a moment.

The Alakazam nods as he just figured something out. "I see, so she isn't your girlfriend then"

"Let me finish, and don't start with the pretending to know everything. I know you can't actually read my mind in that much detail that fast."

"You and are just trying to cold read me by my reactions. You weren't even looking at my mind when you asked, or I would have noticed."

"I see that you already know my tactics but that hasn't stopped you from revealing that you are hiding something."

"Shit" Says Spirit before realizing his error.

"Oh so you *are* hiding something, good to know."

"Argh."

"You have to learn much more to be able to hide stuff from me"

"Well anyway, I found Alice in the dungeon, she doesn't remember anything about her life and lacks a lot of basic knowledge."

"And she even has trouble walking, I see. It's weird to see that kind of precise mental damage on a dark type." he says.

"In fact it's weird to see that kind of damage period , people with usually either end up messed up in the head , or just become braindead, but she looks perfectly normal except for the memory thing ,unless there are other non-obvious side effects."

"I'm fine, I think. Apart from not remembering anything" You say.

The charizard that had been silent smiles reassuringly." Don't worry miss Alice, we'll find out about your past" he says, his voice sounding weirdly warm for someone so big and intimidating.

"What did I tell you about not jumping to help people without consulting the team" the alakazam looks at the charizard.

" We did take a long detour for a personal thing of yours recently."

"I suspect what that thing could have been "says Spirit suddenly "I did notice how you dodged my question earlier ,and it's weird that you just happen to appear here the first time I was going into the dungeon and that I didn't knew you were going to be here." Spirit looks at his uncle with an accusatory expression

Is sounds like Spirit and his uncle have to talk about personal things so you go to the other side the room and ask the charizard about their adventures and he tells you some stories.

Meanwhile both psichics start arguing quietly, but not quietly enough you can't hear them anyway.

"Fine, I admit it .Your mother did ask me if I could come just in case. We were going north going to the north but not as soon, and I could have chosen another path, there are other dungeons that lead there."

"Dammit, why is she still treating me like that?"

"She is the only member of the family as manipulative as grandfather, and If you think you are out of her control living in a different house in the same village you are seriously mistaken .Also she was right in calling us, I was going to scold you for going alone into a dungeon, until I saw Alice and though you had some sense "He said sounding very serious.

"In my defense this dungeon is pretty safe for a dungeon and I had a lot of things on my bag "Spirit says.

"Did that help you when you actually got in danger ?Unexpected things happen more often than you think , and you really need someone to watch your back when they do .I'm not very angry though , you are right in that this dungeon is not that dangerous , and you were more prepared than most newbies. Just don't go dungeon alone again, there are good reasons why it's much more difficult to get a questing license if you go solo, apart from the political ones."

"Sorry , I thought my preparations were enough , but you are right that Its dangerous to go out without someone to cover you if something happens. Besides I didn't mention it because it was a bit embarrassing, but before I reached the safe room (or whatever it was) one of the real zubats confused me and left, And I couldn't use my items easily because of the confusion so I spent a while bumping on walls until I was able to eat a persim berry." spirit said, looking embarrassed. "So I already have learned a lesson about that."

"Anyway does this mean that you want to be an explorer now?" asks the alakazam with an expression of hope. "Your mother has been trying to ensure you don't do anything like that for ages, and you seem to want to be more independent now" he says with a wink.

Spirit deadpans "No thanks, I won't accept just to spite her or something like that. You missed my rebellious teenager years."

"I didn't know you had those." Spirit's uncle grins.

"Well, ok actually I wasn't very rebellious precisely but you get my point. And I already have something important to do with my life."

"So you finally decided what you want to do? I assume it has something to do with human tech." the Alakazam looked curious.

"Yeah something human related."

"It's not anything related to that thing, right?he said looking suspicious.

"Nah don't worry, I'm not an idiot."

"Any chance we can still recruit you? You can still work on whatever even if you form a team, a lot of teams don't get together that often, or are just for legal benefits."

"I know .I'm not as opposed as I used to be to things like that, and maybe I'll even form my own team, that's one of the reasons I want to train. No more T.A.C though."

You have the impression that it should be A.C.T, but maybe it doesn't make sense in whatever language they are actually speaking.
Unless they are actually speaking English? Or maybe you are the weird one that speaks their language for some reason, your memory has already tampered with, and who knows what else.
That way lies Descartes style madness so you avoid that kind of though.

The charizard interrupted the conversation between the two psychics looking sad "Aww come on, imagine if you teamed up with my son and a charmander, you would be like a super cute version of our team ."

"I'm an adult."

"Yeah but you are still an abra and therefore cute." the charizard says making Spirit roll his eyes.

"Ugh, I feel sympathy for Bugsy now."

"Phyro, you aren't helping" Says the alakazam with a stern look.

"Sorry"

"Your son isn't a charmander?" You ask the charizard, curious.

"No, he's a larvitar" he answers with a frown". Why, do you come from one of those places that only let people have children with people of the same species or what?"

"No? , well actually maybe yes" you say thinking about your world.

"Ah right you don't remember where you are from, sorry." The Charizard seems to feel bad for reminding you that.

"Don't worry "you answer cheerfully, having already decided to not dwell on that more for today.
You really want to ask him about the different species thing and children. But you better ask Spirit later, since you don't know how much worse than it is you can pretend your amnesia to be before it start to seem suspicious.
And it sounds like an embarrassing topic you don't want to talk about now.

"About the training, you could have asked me to train you." The abra says looking at Spirit.

"You are not very good at teaching that kind of thing, and you haven't been here for a long time."

"Well now I am here, and we are going to stay for a while."
"But yeah, Espe is a better master, though not that much if you just want to get stronger, she's not a combat expert. And I mean if you just want to be stronger there are good move tutors in Kawa town."

"I hadn't considered that actually .I don't think I would be able to afford it anyway.Also I want to be more capable, not just become better at punching things ."

"You certainly aren't going to learn any physical move like that, that's for sure "The alakazam grins.

Spirit rolls his eyes, but at the same time he's smiling "You know what I mean."

"I can train you one of these days, if you want ."

"Seriously? I guess that could be good. though Mom won't like it"

"Weren't you independent now?" The alakazam asked maliciously

"Kind of, you're right with that I'm not really out of her reach yet" Spirit admitted."I plan to move to a different city someday though"

"Well, if you are ready I'll teleport us to Gem, said the alakazam not wanting to escort us all the way to the village.

"Wait, I have something else to ask you." He said looking at Alice. "In private"

"Fine"

Spirit whispers something to his uncle , and he nods

"Yes I think you can" The alakazam says answering whatever question Spirit had

"Fine, just wanted to be sure, and I trust you for this kind of thing." Spirit looks relieved.

The alakazam teleports everyone, and looks a bit tired.

You arrive at some kind of fence in the end of the road, guarded by a scyther wearing a headband with an strange symbol of it, the lines of a pokeball with a diamond in it, the pokeball in black while the diamond is in white.

"We are going to go get Axis , she was waiting us at the entrance of the dungeon" Says the charizard "But later well go back to Gem and sleep in the inn"
You enter the town ,while the two team wisdom members go towards the forest.

The scyther looks at both of you and frowns.

"Hi Spirit, didn't you go to the dungeon alone?" he asks.

Spirit explains that he found you in the dungeon with amnesia.

"Ah, fine then, but I'm going to have to check the list of criminals anyway, it's my job"

You wait while he checks a long list he had in his bag.

"Everything in order, you can pass"
You enter the village.

Gem Village is surrounded by a fence, except in places where natural obstacles like the forest or mountains close it.
The village seems to be situated on a flat terrain, and a dirt path goes through it connecting all the houses.

Toward the north were you are coming from, there is the forest that leads to the diamond cave, the dungeon you just came from. At the east there the start of a rocky hill, with a path apparently carved through it. To the west the fence separates the city from some colorful plains full of tall grass and towards the south the village continues a bit further.

The few houses in it look isolated, like they were built in a time were the village had more people.
You can also see a few abandoned houses, and what looks like the remains of more, covered in vegetation.

"I'll show you the village, and then you can sleep in my house, we'll decide what to do tomorrow."

"Ok"

In the middle of the village you can see a small space surrounded by a fence and full with all kind of products and a kecleon in front of it ,there is also a kangaskan statue at its side.

"That's the kecleon shop, they usually sell supplies to Pokémon teams, but being the only shop in the village they also sell other basic things".

"Why is it called like that?" you ask, wondering if you have to be a kecleon to own a shop or something.

"Well it's a shop run by the association of kecleon merchants"

"Are they all kecleon then?"

"Not necessarily ,being one of them is an hereditary thing so most are kecleon, but I know of a tyrogue who is one of them for example"

There is also a big building near a bulletin board full of pieces of paper with things you can't read written on them.
This reminds you that you should learn their writing system, maybe you can ask spirit something about that.

"In that building you can find the mayor's office , an inn ,a pub where teams gather and other services , like for if you want to send a message, or register as a new team" Spirit says pointing at it .

"That's a lot of things for one building" you comment while you walk around the village.

"It has multiple floors underground, but yeah, it used to be one of the guilds, so it has a lot of space " he answers.

"By the way is that wooden house "he points to a small wooden house "Lives a very nice old woman that knows a lot about the story of the city and the region , if you want to know something we can visit her one of these days, she usually likes to tell her stories."

You both continue walking around the village, not finding anyone, probably because it's late.

"Towards the south you can find gem shipping were you can send things to other villages and also there is my mother's house. I should probably go tomorrow so she doesn't worry" you walked for a bit until Spirit remembered something "Ah and the old battleground , I can try to teach you how to use moves there if you want."

"Maybe tomorrow, now we need to sleep" you say though you aren't feeling very sleepy yet, despite the sun having almost set.

"Yeah you are right ,I guess I could talk you about the people in the village "He says "But let's go sleep"

You follow him towards a wooden circular house with that look recently rebuilt , and surprisingly clean compared to how messy and full of vegetation its surroundings look


What will you do tomorrow?
[]Train whith Spirit and figure out how to use your new body
[]Talk to the people in the village
[]Go meet team wisdom in the pub
[]Ask Spirit if there is some way you can learn to read.
[]Go to the pub and get as drunk as possible because reasons.
[]Go whith Spirit to see his mom
[]Get a questing licence
[]Learn about the history of the village.
[]Try to get a job
[]Go see Espe the psychic master(this means going back to the dungeon)
[]Buy suplies at the keckleon shop.
[]Write in.

You might have time for more than of those things,so you can have a plan whith multiple of them , I'm mostly putting them as suggestions but your plan can include multiple things ,though some of them might not get done if you want to do too much things for the day(and its boring if you only choose the options that I give you, even if it makes things easier for me).
Next update will cover whatever time takes to complete your plan(unless something unexpected happens).

Author's notes:
After a long time without chapter I'm finally back .Future chapters will definitely not take this much , but I will be probably be slower now that clases started(or maybe faster since I'm going to be bored in the breaks).
Let's hope I didn't just lost my players for spending too much without chapter.
I have a map of the village and I'll put it here latter when I have time (or maybe in another post threadmarked as informational).
Being this late does't mean that I spent longer than before on checking the chapter so tell me if you find any typo .
Or any general writing thing that I should know but don't because I don't have much experience writing.

(Edit: Yay , likes)
 
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[X]Train whith Spirit and figure out how to use your new body
[X]Learn about the history of the village.
[X]Ask Spirit if there is some way you can learn to read.

Get settled in first.
 
[X]Train with Spirit and figure out how to use your new body.
[X]Learn about the history of the village.
[X]Ask Spirit if there is some way you can learn to read.
 
[X]Go with Spirit to see his mom
[X]Ask Spirit if there is some way you can learn to read.
[X]Learn about the history of the village.
 
I think I forgot to say when I was going to close the vote I was going to do it today but I'll close it tomorrow in case people want to change their vote or something .
But most likely veekie's plan wins.(btw veekie I just noticed the insane amount of quests you are in , how do you even have so much time to expend in sv?)

There is not much discussion here which is sad , but not that unexpected I guess.
What do you guys think about the quest?
 
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What do you guys think about the quest?
I find it enjoyable, in the sense that it's something I can just pop in on occasionally. With an emphasis on occasionally. Some quests can handle a pace like this, but the low average number of voters means that, to me, it stops existing for most of the week. Not necessarily a bad thing: I'm busy enough as it is trying to keep up with my own things, but not everybody can be so patient. Which is a shame, because PMD fanworks as a whole are difficult to come across, but I guess that's just how these things go.
 
I find it enjoyable, in the sense that it's something I can just pop in on occasionally. With an emphasis on occasionally. Some quests can handle a pace like this, but the low average number of voters means that, to me, it stops existing for most of the week. Not necessarily a bad thing: I'm busy enough as it is trying to keep up with my own things, but not everybody can be so patient. Which is a shame, because PMD fanworks as a whole are difficult to come across, but I guess that's just how these things go.

I think it would would be fun if there were more people and more disussion.
Maybe I can get more people , I haven't advertised the quest much yet.
And I could write way shorter chapters more often if that's a problem.
Whith longer chapters sometimes .

Though I usually end up writing way longer chapters than I expected(especially when I'm having fun writing dialog).
And there is also the fact that now that clases have started again I will have less time during the week.

But yeah, there is a few things I can try to keep the thread interesting enough that people stay to make it more interesting , or to get enough voters interested.
I should have started whith a smaller quest in a different setting to figure out those kind of things first (and some people told me to do that)
But I really wanted to use my pokemon setting for something , and I didn't feel motivated to write anything else.
 
Well, I certainly like it. But not every quest can be a super-popular one with a debate every update. Still, I don't want to see the author of it quit because they didn't get large amounts of participation like so many others. It seems ti me that those that DO participate are more likely to continue participating in the future, regardless of audiance size.

tl;dr The people that participate like it, and want to keep going.
 
I mean I'm certainly going to keep writing it in any case, as long as there are people reading.
I was just saying that it would be fun to have more of those things.
And If I can get a few more people good, but I'ts not so bad if I don't.
It would probably be too stressing if it was super popular anyway.

Also a friend is reading it and that makes me even less likely to quit .

I mean part of why I decided to write a quest was to try to make it more difficult for myself to abandon it like I tend to do whith my other stories and proyects in general .
 
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Audiences tend to come and go. The best way to ensure an audience is to develop a reputation for interesting and complete quests. Length of update on average in successful quests verge around the thousand word region, lower and people don't get very invested or the quest updates too fast, higher and people don't feel like experimenting with such a large reading commitment.

You can go a LOT higher once you have a loyal readership though.
 
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