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When Sheila reaches her Apothesis, she is going to have glowing hair (that looks a bit like sunlight-fiber optics) and glowing blue-green eyes.

Normally, she's a quite pretty, over-tall 11-12 year. A few of my older stories have her 16+ish (and the Exalted one to avoid any complaints of too-young 'sex' even though it was a fade-to-black scene). She lanky, athletic with light blonde hair, blue-green eyes and goes from Appearance 4 w/ Epic Appearance 1 all the way up to (planned) Appearance 6 w/ Epic Appearance 6.

Most of the cool 'disguise' knacks are Epic Appearance, so I try to downplay the appearance slightly. And, as a bit of a tomboy, she doesn't really try to knock people's socks off. Thinking about it, people probably think she spends a lot of time on her appearance. I'll have to remember that at some point.
 
Yeah, I first started reading your Sheila stories when you had her at sixteen, and that's still how I most often think of her.
 
Prince Charon said:
Yeah, I first started reading your Sheila stories when you had her at sixteen, and that's still how I most often think of her.
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Funny thing about that... Sheila was supposed to be a 'child prodigy' and then I read this story about this 11 year old graduating from Berkeley. Since she was supposed to be 'larger than life' in concept I had to at least match that.
 
Is anyone up to do a consistency check on the latest Scion of Honor? I almost put in a incorrect epilogue and I want to make sure I didn't screw anything up.
 
arthurh3535 said:
Is anyone up to do a consistency check on the latest Scion of Honor? I almost put in a incorrect prologue and I want to make sure I didn't screw anything up.
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I'd like to, but given how distracted I've been, recently, I think I'd better let someone else do that.
 
I got it in the mail, but didn't have the opportunity to check it yet (either busy doing stuff for new courses or tired because of some sleep problems, it is not really productive to proofread something when you fall asleep in front of your PC), but I will have something to say Sunday evening. Probably. Depends on what work we are assigned Friday.
 
I understand it mangled the formatting slightly. I did catch that the second epilogue should be in the next chapter.

(Oh, and thanks Seonor, for taking a look. I think it might really improve with a couple more sets of eyes looking into it.)
 
Speaking of Scion of Honor, there's always been a section that I've been confused by:
They found themselves in a locked and marine-guarded conference room with no windows, awaiting the very high ranking officer in the form of one Vice Admiral Adam Patrick, Second Lord of the Admiralty. He doffed his beret and looked at the two of them. "Midshipwoman Daria Golds, you are free to leave as soon as you sign a writ that lets you know about what matters you will never discuss with anyone of lesser rank than captain of the list." He slid the data pad over so that Daria could view the information. "You will however have to speak to the Commandant about an empty package with drug residue."

Daria gulped and saluted. "Yes, sir." She started to read her papers very quickly. It was confusing to her, telling that she would not discuss matters of Sheila's homework. "Ma'am, I couldn't even understand some of her homework."

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"Very well, midshipwoman. You are also going to fall under the Official Secrets Act. Though I dare say you are probably going to be dragged from your classroom to teach some professors a little bit about how you figured out how to do all that with old inaccurate data." Givens stood up and accepted the salute from the midshipwoman, sending her on her way.
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So... guy, girl, Patrick or Givens? (And I thought Givens was the 2nd Space Lord?)
 
katreus said:
Speaking of Scion of Honor, there's always been a section that I've been confused by:


So... guy, girl, Patrick or Givens? (And I thought Givens was the 2nd Space Lord?)
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A gender-typo that didn't get changed when I changed who I was having speaking at that point. Little things like that aren't the easiest thing to fix on FF.net.
 
First, very excited to read another chapter of Scion of Honor. Probably my favorite series of yours.

Second, some thoughts:

1. This chapter, overall, basically is a failure for Sheila, right? (And the Phoebe's death being the sacrifice that the Treecat God was warning about?) She did pick up some minor victories but the battle's 'honor' will probably go to Harrington herself since she's the big honcho there. As Sheila said, she got caught up in the plots (and plot) against Honor.

2. I did wonder how you were going to get around her entire starship being aimed at. While it's clever, it's pretty unstandard for Manticore to second captains of other ships to a command staff given how much they revere the idea of the captain being with her ship if at all possible. (I was a little unclear on positioning. Was Phoebe with Honor's fleet or with the second group? Seems like the former since Phoebe gets pounded. If the former, then there was time and space for Sheila to take a pinnace back.) While she was ordered to stay (will she be called up before a captain's board to defend her decision?), it seems problematic if Sheila wants to continue to stay on the front lines. The results of the battle and the Havenites aiming at her ship in particular will give more weight to those in the Navy that want her to stay off the front lines whether as an engineer or strategizer.
 
katreus said:
First, very excited to read another chapter of Scion of Honor. Probably my favorite series of yours.

Second, some thoughts:

1. This chapter, overall, basically is a failure for Sheila, right? (And the Phoebe's death being the sacrifice that the Treecat God was warning about?) She did pick up some minor victories but the battle's 'honor' will probably go to Harrington herself since she's the big honcho there. As Sheila said, she got caught up in the plots (and plot) against Honor.
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It sorta came out a wash, even though Sheila feels horrible about how things turned out. I figured Marjorie Sylvester would be politicking with Sheila's/Manticore's enemies. She's also being part of the funnel for Solarian techn into Haven space.
katreus said:
2. I did wonder how you were going to get around her entire starship being aimed at. While it's clever, it's pretty unstandard for Manticore to second captains of other ships to a command staff given how much they revere the idea of the captain being with her ship if at all possible. (I was a little unclear on positioning. Was Phoebe with Honor's fleet or with the second group? Seems like the former since Phoebe gets pounded. If the former, then there was time and space for Sheila to take a pinnace back.) While she was ordered to stay (will she be called up before a captain's board to defend her decision?), it seems problematic if Sheila wants to continue to stay on the front lines. The results of the battle and the Havenites aiming at her ship in particular will give more weight to those in the Navy that want her to stay off the front lines whether as an engineer or strategizer.
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Sheila could have taken a Pinnace back (and in fact planned on it) but Honor was just slightly tired enough that she wanted another high octane strategist/tactician on board to spot her problems. Sheila is supernaturally smart, hence why she could see the benefit of Honor's plan and then plug a few of the holes (like the post contact strategy). Setting up things for the 'relief' fleet to appear just before their actual conflict made a much more convincing illusion against Theisman. Theisman is still not totally sure about the 'relief' fleet. His gut is still telling him that it was a fakeout, but he has very thin evidence that it could have been.

It's tricky writing people being super-smart when you aren't. :/
 
Oh, I could definitely see why Honor would do it and even why Sheila would agree given what she knows about Honor's condition. My uncertainty is more how the Admiralty would take it. Course, they might just agree but again, given the Manticoran fascination with captains going down with their ship since Saganami, wouldn't it be weird to them that she's not even on it? That she willingly agreed to give up her command?

Like I said, I think it might lend credence to those in the Navy that want her to basically become, as I'm guessing, an engineer or strategizer (either in the back at the Manticore Admiralty or seconded to another Admiral in fleet operations) rather than commanding in the Captain's seat of a tin cruiser. ;) You know, safely out of the way of missiles blowing up their golden girl who keeps churning out tech improvements. :p

I'm a little unclear on Sheila's endgoal. That is, I do remember that she wants to become - something like an admiral commanding a grand fleet from an earlier chapter. Being one of the strategy wonks at the Admiralty is a little similar, but wouldn't really do all that much for her Legend from what I understand. So she'll probably want to stay on the tactics track and get another hyper capable command...

I can see how that would lead into the next book given some of the considerations the Admiralty might have, but I'm really interested in seeing where you decide to take this.
 
Yeah, Sheila is using her 'legend' as a commanding officer of a fighting ship to grow her actual legend. She has vague aspirations of kicking in the teeth of some of the gods that banished her from Solarian space and Earth, but that wouldn't happen unless she either gets that death sentence lifted in the Solarian Union or it becomes a non-issue.

She is very useful for helping with technical issues, but Manticore has lots of really smart techs and designers. They were already qualitatively better than everyone. Sheila has amplified that (and the higher hyperspace generator is really starting to make a difference in its own way). MESA is terribly pissed at their 'advantage' being totally destroyed there, BTW.
 
They have to be slightly careful and stay within the laws and polite society. Which pisses off the dying Earl of North Hollow who still wants her dead. She's that loose end that could tie him to the assassination attempt on the queen.
 
arthurh3535 said:
They have to be slightly careful and stay within the laws and polite society. Which pisses off the dying Earl of North Hollow who still wants her dead. She's that loose end that could tie him to the assassination attempt on the queen.
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Yeah, when/if she finds out, he's very screwed. I'm not at all surprised that he's still dying, though - gods and demigods don't exactly reward failure well, especially evil ones.
 
Prince Charon said:
Yeah, when/if she finds out, he's very screwed. I'm not at all surprised that he's still dying, though - gods and demigods don't exactly reward failure well, especially evil ones.
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He was dying of old age. Scion doesn't technically have any 'cures' for that, even if they extend his life another decade.
Avalon Aurora said:
Any news on the new stories in the line? Particularly the Mass Effect one?
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That one is a little log-jammed. I'm wondering if I need to rewrite the fact that Therum, Noveria or Feros are 'completed' before Vimire (technically impossible by the game normally) or if its not that huge of an issue that all three are done before Vimire so that I can drop right onto Illos. :/
 
Hmm. Well, I was thinking that they might have managed to get through the three missions just slightly faster. There is an awful lot of filler you could have between your two missions.
 
Avalon Aurora said:
Getting through them faster works I suppose, you have to make sure to carefully portray it that way though. Might help to actually do the various side-missions in between ME1 and ME2 storylines, except for some of the ones on the Citadel, while Shepard is trying to figure out what to do about the coming Reapers, or perhaps helping with cleanup after Soverign's attack.
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Potentially. Sheila is probably going to be going through the records to verify why it was so hard for a fleet to take out one Reaper. It would only take a couple of dozen Reapers to destroy everything. I'm figuring she finds there is some hinkiness in the base 'technology' that everyone uses to target with, because its all derivative of Prothean tech, which is part of their 'trap' again.
 
Hmm. Some might be possible. The Luna VI is fairly important to EDI later, but would Shepard really go all the way back to Earth to do that?
 
arthurh3535 said:
Hmm. Some might be possible. The Luna VI is fairly important to EDI later, but would Shepard really go all the way back to Earth to do that?
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Probably would, as it is an important Alliance (which still holds most of Shepard's loyalty) assignment.

One huge divergence that can be done here is Sheila recognizing "HELP" sign being translated by the V.I. / A.I. and actually trying to (and potentially succeeding) negotiating with it / rescuing it.
 
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