Itinerant: A Pilgrim Quest

Status update regarding this week:

Last four days, I was attending a... let's call it an "academic" conference. Being under a false assumption that I am a responsible person, I intended on making updates in the evenings. Sadly, other activities usually associated with conferences took precedent. I apologize. In any case, I will be trying to post an update later tonight, assuming I don't die first.

In other words: god-damnit where did my free time go :C
 
6.8 Hazy Memories
We're back! With a lot of twists! Okay, here's QM's honesty: they are not as unplanned as they appeared to be. But during last two weeks, I have reworked several plans I've had pretty massively, so there may be some obvious welds. I am sorry! Also I am sorry if things appear to make little sense for now, I swear, there will be answers! Confusion is temporary. Meanwhile, an update!

6.8 Hazy Memories

"What an interesting response" Elvar nodded, unmoving. "They will loathe you for it; but she will be proud. And you, one day, will be sorely disappointed."

Saying that, the beast straightened, and came closer, so that you could finally see its awful shape in entirety. Broad like a hill, tall like a tower, it was as if a mountain had moved against you. Long-limbed and long-toothed, you recognized its appearance: it was the image of a devil you had seen when you were young, in your homestead's shrine, painted on a blackened piece of wood, laughing and cackling. It left an impression on you: it is how you imagined the servants of the Malefactors ever since. And now, there was no doubting that, you had come face to face with one.

You don't know from where, but something akin to a mist rose; wisps of white haze curled around your ankles, carpeting the beaten soil, covering it with a milky shroud. When you moved, it rippled like water, and you could a damp air on your cheek, a wind from over a river or a lake.

Elver smiled and spread its mighty limbs. You had seen oaks less massive than them, and pillars of stone which seemed easier to topple. And as it did that, you finally recognized the shape of its snout, the expression of its mockery of a face. It was the face of Dagome, twisted beyond recognition by vileness and fury. From the mists, it drew a sword as large as a man, and brought it down on you. You raised your shield, and it held. Elver recoiled and stepped back, sinking knees-deep in the mist; you were drowning in it.
"You have made a promise" its voice did not belong to it know; you recognized it. It was a voice of a woman in a cloak of feather, who received you on a rocky shore a mist-strewn lake. "I will help you keep it."

You thrust with your spear against it, and realized that you were thrusting against Notker, wielding a sword with a black pearl set in its pommel. He deflected your blow with ease, and responded in kind. But your shield held.

Behind it, within the mists, a fire appeared, and behind you, a gate closed, slammed shut. You recognized the sound. The air was thick with haze; it was not a mist, but rather a cloud of fumes. Burnt incense and herbs, strong enough to keep even death at bay.

"She will chase you; she will not be cheated for long. But she can be evaded" Elver said in a voice not its own. "There are many roads, and many places. Many different skies. If you move through them quickly enough, you will outpace her."

Now Elver was shapeless, a black mountain shrouded in white. It swung at you, both arms smashing. No mortal force could stop it.

"But first, you will meet her, so that you understand."

Your shield held. Elver was blackness, Elver was death. You stood against her, and held.

"In this dream, she will be powerless against you. But no less real for it."

Elver smiled at you, and you thrust against her; the Rye-Stalk pierced the hide easily; for it was not a real thing, but a column of smoke, too. And then before you stood a woman, in a white shawl, and with a sword in hand. Her hair were gold, her eyes warm. You recognized your mother in her, and recognized that she wanted nothing more but to take you in her hands.

"I am sorry" she said; it was the voice of the woman in the black cloak, it was the voice of Elver, it was a different voice, one that you would never forget. "This is the only way you can keep your promise."

For a moment, you felt like dying. But it did not last. And then, it was all gone. You stood on the beaten soil, Elver impaled before you, your spear dripping blood. Her lips opened, and she rasped.

"They cheated you, and she cheated you… and now you will be lost…"

She smiled, knowing that you would see again.

"I pity you… so I will give you an answer, before we part our ways."

And you asked a question:

[ ] "Who was she?"

[ ] "What did she do to me?"

[ ] "Where am I?"

[ ] "Was any of that real?"

[ ] "Cheated?"

[ ] "Lost?"

[ ] [write-in]
 
They will loath us. Saints? And the woman who saved us will be proud? We'll be disappointed because it's not saints who stand with us, today or ever again, I suspect.

So we evaded... death? And the woman in feathers we met on the lake helped us do so?

[X] "Cheated?"

Lost probably talks about our faith. Maybe.

...

I don't mean to sound ungrateful, this is still a great quest. But I think I was having more fun with it before things went all trippy :\
 
I don't mean to sound ungrateful, this is still a great quest. But I think I was having more fun with it before things went all trippy :\

I know! It will stop getting trippy soon. The thing is, I am not the best at planning ahead, and some weeks ago, I've written myself into a series of corners due to misplanning and misplotting. Once this clears out, we will return to down to earth, just with a small twist. I am sorry it came to this, but sadly I just couldn't figure out a better way. As said: new to this questing business.
 
TBH, against my instincts, I may go for a crude infodump/exposition update if I can't clear out stuff in a neat fashion.
 
[X] "What did she do to me?"

I have to admit I am quite confused in regards to what exactly is going, which is perhaps quite appropriate since the protagonist likely feels the same way.

It might also be a good idea to include the actual response into the post since I had to backtrack and look at the previous votes to actually know what it was.
 
[X] "What did she do to me?"

I'm actually enjoying this section, but I'll admit it's the sort of enjoyment that balances on a knife's edge.
 
[X] "Who was she?"

We have the Book. We can know what she did once we have something to reference her with.

I greatly enjoyed this update. It was trippy as hell, but it had this confusing and exciting feel to it.
 
"What an interesting response" Elvar nodded, unmoving.
A minor nitpick, but I think this is the only case of a 'lower' quotation mark in the entire quest? I thought those aren't used in English?
When you moved, it rippled like water, and you could a damp air on your cheek, a wind from over a river or a lake.
'feel'?
"You have made a promise" its voice did not belong to it know; you recognized it. It was a voice of a woman in a cloak of feather, who received you on a rocky shore a mist-strewn lake. "I will help you keep it."
'now'? And there appears to be a preposition missing.
The story certainly took a different direction, but I find it pretty cool. It isn't all that confusing, really, just vague.

"They cheated you, and she cheated you… and now you will be lost…"
That sounds like we have been abandoned by the Saints to die, though I am not sure whether that qualifies as cheating, considering they had no obligations before us. Then it fell to the crow woman to save us from certain death, and the conversation with peasants alluded to that whatever was done to us, it is considered a grave sin by our religion. That might be what Elmer refers to in regards to the woman cheating us - she made a choice for us that we might never have made if it were up to us at that time. The Saints may have been indifferent to our fate, but now that the third party has intervened, they disapprove of us. The mere mention that they have something to do with us, that we still call upon their names makes them furious, if Elmer is to be believed.

The woman we are fleeing... the visions are uncertain whether she and our savior are one and the same. But it alludes heavily to her being death or fate (Elmer was her, and Elmer was death at the same time; we felt like dying at the thought of her; she appeared in the guise of our late mother wanting to embrace us), and I suspect that in our case they are one. It certainly would fit the 'may be evaded, but won't be cheated forever' theme, but the 'different skies' part makes me stumped. Is this really what we think it is?

In the end, it is not clear who cheated whom and on what, but the overall message comes across - we should have drowned and passed away after the battle, yet we didn't die, and now owe our life to something not of this world. As a result of the act, something dangerous is now chasing us, and the Saints are deaf to our prayers. The proposed solution? More itinerancy!

That, I can get behind. :cool:

[X] "What did she do to me?"
 
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I'm leaning towards this being one big feverdream. We were dying, and the redheaded maiden called upon the woman in the feathered cloak to save us (I think she's inspired by the Morrigan, and likely had dealings with Cu if so).

Actually, after rereading, I think the voice of Elver/the woman/the other woman is the redheaded maiden. She is saying we will be in a dream where we will see death, so we understand it's form. It will chase us forever when we wake, but it can be evaded. She's sorry for doing this, but it's the only way we can keep our promise to our family.

I think this has been a really interesting section, but I am ready to get back to the "real world".

[X] "Cheated?"

I think I know who the woman is and what was done to us, we might be lost to the Saints, we are dreaming of a real threat, but what were we cheated out of? Who cheated us?
 
If there's a tie, consider me flipping to another option.


Well, enlighten us! :)

It would be nice to know why the Saints would drop us. Actually, does our character even believe the Saints have abandoned her?

The woman speaking is the Redheaded Maiden, the woman in the cloak is what the maiden called to save us, and the woman in white/the demon is death.

The cloaked woman defended us from death, but it seems that has blocked us from the Saints (the sound of the door slamming shut) and Death will hunt us for the rest of our days, meaning we can't stay in one place for too long.

So we can keep our promise to seek aid for our family, but we might be lost to the Saints and cannot stay with our family when our journey ends.

Of course, I could be completely wrong, but this is my best guess as to what's happening.
 
It sounds logical, but I don't quite get where Redheaded Maiden comes from. The voice does not sound anything like hers, and I highly doubt she had the connections necessary to alter our fate if she couldn't save herself.

It also brings us no closer to who the woman in a cloak is.
 
It sounds logical, but I don't quite get where Redheaded Maiden comes from. The voice does not sound anything like hers, and I highly doubt she had the connections necessary to alter our fate if she couldn't save herself.

It also brings us no closer to who the woman in a cloak is.

I got the idea because the RHM was pleading our case just before these bizarre dreams started; the cloaked woman seems related to the homeland of both Cu and the RHM, maybe a pagan goddess; the only thing the RHM would be saving us from is death. She couldn't defend herself from a sword or chains, but might be able to intercede spiritually.

Anyway, it's just a theory, so I don't have a ton of evidence beyond perceived connections and gut feelings. I'm interested to see if any of it was right in the next update, but I won't be surprised to learn if I was off-base.
 
7.0 Home, Whatever That Means
Cheated! And cheated you were. And with this update, the dream sequence is officially over. Have fun.


7.0 Home, Whatever That Means

"Cheated?" you asked, and she nodded. For a moment, as you looked into her face, you saw a glimmer of something like sadness, or perhaps sympathy.

"The City of Step" she paused, hesitated, then spoke again. Her voice was the softest thing you have ever heard "does not exist."

Your heart stopped.

"And yet, you cannot rest until you find it. You have made a promise."

She spread her arms. The world blurred.

"Goodnight, my little lynx. Until we meet again."

You started to wake.

***
After the treachery of his son, the house of Ulla was put into mourning, and remained in it until the end of spring; however, by the grace of the Saints, none of those who were wounded in the assault, no matter how grievous their wounds were, passed away from their injuries, and they returned to good health in appropriate time. There was one exception to that, and that was the mysterious woman who was found out in the swamps, and who fought like a man, slaying Dagome, but being terribly cut by him before he died. Her wounds did not close, and they festered, sending her into a very high fever, in which she refused a priest, who was sent for to administer to her passing. However, clinging onto life with incredible tenacity, she refused to move to the abode of the Saints. A rumour arose among the people of Ulla that she was indeed a witch, or perhaps other creature not quite human, and thus should be removed from the homestead, lest she would bring more misfortune than she had previously inflicted.

Finally, their voices were heard, and they convinced Ulla to dispense with her. However, instead of simply leaving her out to the wilds which brought her among the men of good faith, she was taken on a shield, in a manner of a warrior, to a lake which, according to some, had an island in the middle, on which a witch lived, and she was pushed onto the waters, which took her. That happened three days after the feast of Saint Traft.

Afterwards, the peace in the house was restored, although Ulla seemed to take to some strange melancholy, and few things could cheer him; and to the surprise of many, when the Armalings requested wergeld for those who were slain in the battle, or else a continuation of the feud, he paid it readily, which was so unlike his previous actions that some have started taking heed to the old stories about him suffering under a spell.

He also abandoned another habit of his, and that was his fondness of concubines and bedwarmers. This change pleased many, for it was thought to be saintly, and it helped to dissuade others from believing the rumours once spread by his traitorous son. Furthermore, opening his mind to the words of the blessed abbot Galen, he made his decision to free all of his slaves, and commit them to saintly work in congregations. Alas, his intent was marred by a very scandalous situation, and that is the madness of one of his concubines.

She, a known blasphemer and a saintless person, refused to enter covenant as she was meant to be, and instead chose to dwell on the shores of the witch-lake, sustaining herself on roots and nuts, in the manner of a hermit, or a madwoman, and lingering for long hours at the shore, watching the waves. Some have asked for her to be exorcised, but the Malefactors driving her to action were very cunning, and every time holy men appeared to dispatch them, they bade her to hide, so that she would not be found by them.

***
The waves washed you ashore, your shield, your spear, and your book all with you; and very little else. Your body felt very strange, stiff, almost alien, almost as if someone else's. You touched face and felt the thick, ugly scar running across it. But you were alive, and there was no doubt about it. And the world around it felt familiar, and solid. You were at a lakeside, lying on a gravely beach, deep-grey sky above. You looked around, and saw a wetland forest, like the one you have braved… some time ago.
You ached, but it was a dull, distant echo of a pain. Memory, not a sensation.

You rested for a moment, before the chill coming from over the waters became rather biting, and then you gathered yourself up, took inventory of your things. You opened the book (somebody had mercifully put in a leather sack, mostly protecting it from the waters) half expecting to find that slip of papyrus inside. But it wasn't there. The shield was familiar, too, and still bore a notch where Dagome's blade stopped. You touched it for a moment, remembering. The spear had not changed any, either, and neither did you cloak, however damp it was. Whoever sent you into the lake did it with all of your meagre wealth. A warrior's funeral, of sorts. Something to be proud of.

You looked around again. All you could hear was water, and birds, and you had no idea where you were, even if the surroundings looked vaguely familiar. It was, however, a feeling which you were starting to get rather intimately familiar with, and harboured little doubt that this wouldn't be changing anytime soon. Particularly with having to find a city that does not exist.

If anything, you were just surprised how easy it was for you to focus and…

[ ] …start looking for people.

[ ] …check if the waters have washed anything else onto the shore.

[ ] …try to find some sort of a trail or a path away from the lake.
 
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[X] …check if the waters have washed anything else onto the shore.

Well, crap. I confess, City not existing did not occur to me. It should have, but it didn't. Well, if we have to find it, we will. After all, cities are being found all the time :V
 
[X] …try to find some sort of a trail or a path away from the lake.

Something about fundamental assumptions...well, I wasn't sure if the City of Step was Jerusalem or the Kingdom of Heaven, and I'm still not!
 
Welp, I'm glad the "cheated?" question was answered. It's a terrible but necessary revelation.

And wow, given a warrior's funeral, inspired Ulla to be a better person, and freed the RHM. Plus the whole "rising from the lake" thing. Very cool.

[X] …check if the waters have washed anything else onto the shore.
 
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