I Am Not A Child's Plaything (MGLN SI)

You've got a solid level of detail thus far. Character interaction and good, high level fights (dependent on who's fighting, admittedly, but it's Nanoha) are the next step. Here's hoping for changes from canon (always important) and interesting character interaction. And maybe cool new techniques, probably dependent on the general education of the SI and/or his knowledge of various fiction for inspiration.
 
Yours would be 'The New Math' right?

And I agree picking are pretty slim, most just aren't worth reading.
Though I did love one conversation from the fairly enjoyable fic 'Graceful Degradation"
Arf: And seriously, why can't you go online?
Nanoha: For the same reason I'm no longer allowed to watch Gundam. It Gives Me Ideas.
Yuuno: (suspicious) What's with the emphasis?
I thought it was that she wasn't allowed to use the Internet, because it gave her ideas?
 
Yours would be 'The New Math' right?

Yep. Maybe sooner or later, I'll actually get it to StrikerS!
(Hint: it's going to be more later than sooner. The idea's already grown in the telling. Massively.)

Seriously, though, MGLN has the Silencio Problem; the shipping has grown to the point where it chokes out everything else. It's got a remarkably interesting world- the techbase and the magic system alone are worthy of attention- but nobody pays any attention to them.
 
Yours would be 'The New Math' right?

And I agree picking are pretty slim, most just aren't worth reading.
Though I did love one conversation from the fairly enjoyable fic 'Graceful Degradation"
Arf: And seriously, why can't you go online?
Nanoha: For the same reason I'm no longer allowed to watch Gundam. It Gives Me Ideas.
Yuuno: (suspicious) What's with the emphasis?

If you want good Nanoha fan fic's check out https://www.fanfiction.net/u/490259/NGTM-R this guy, his stuff's pretty good if based more on StrikerS and focused on characters other than Nanoha.

Edit: It also has little to no shipping.
 
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Seriously, though, MGLN has the Silencio Problem; the shipping has grown to the point where it chokes out everything else.
I've noticed this a lot. I don't get it. I mean, what is there really to ship to the detriment of storytelling? It's not like it's Harry Potter or something. NanoFate is pretty blatant, but it also works just as well if you write them as Platonic Life Partners. I kind of like them better that way in a lot of respects, mostly because it doesn't get a lot of love. But everything else is really vague. Chrono/Amy is cute, Yuuno/Nanoha was pretty obviously not hapening after StrikerS, and Hayate and the Wolkenritters don't have much going on in that respect. I don't really care enough about the other characters to give a damn.

But moving on.... Update. Enjoy.

This one kind of fought me a lot in editing, and I'm still not super happy with it, but I need to move ahead.

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Part Two
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New Era Calendar Year 0064

I was sick and tired of tests. It seemed as though that is all I had been going through since my transfer into Raising Heart.

My creator, for all his apparent foolishness, was most thorough. He had been testing every single system one by one, constantly poking and prodding at me. Almost as though he was trying to get a rise out of me, to get me to lash out and prove that I was just as unstable as the six previous attempts.

I was smarter than that. Maybe.More likely it was a product of my nature. I have never been prone to lashing out at things, and I have always taken my circumstances in stride, whether they were caused by me or an outside influence. Or a who-knows-what in this case.

Doctor Dartinia was also crazy. What sort of person tries to create artificial intelligences by directly uploading human minds without consent? It was like he was trying to get himself killed by AI.

On the other hand, crazy or not, he had successfully created a sapient Intelligent Device, which was apparently his life's work or something. To create what was effectively a counterpart to Belkan Unison Devices. Why he wanted to do it escapes me.

It was only after the long sequence of tests that he actually finished my functionality, adding in the final feature of Raising Heart. It was a micro-sized mana converter. It allowed me to automatically collect ambient, unlinked mana and convert it to a basic format of linked mana to keep me functioning. It wasn't necessarily fast, but running at full capacity would give me, acting on my own the equivalent magical power of a low C-rank mage, going by Time-Space Administration Bureau rankings.

Smart man, waiting to put that in. Although having it in before the AI transfer was probably how all the others got the mana to try and blow him up. So maybe he wasn't so smart.

I had a goddamn lexicon of mana manipulation and formatting dumped into my brain at the same time. Most of the data was on Mid-Childan style, but also contained basic data on Belkan, Neo-Belkan, and over two dozen lesser styles. In addition to methods to convert the aformentioned styles into Mid. Useful stuff.

It was all in mathematical equations of course, and even the most basic work dealt with at least 4 dimensions.

Those flashy runes and magic circles? Not just for show. They're a representation of an extradimensional foundation upon which the rest of a spell is shaped. It's impressive stuff - even the basic forms.

It was shortly after this data dump, during a period of low power, specifically my defragmentation cycle, that the entire lab shuddered.

I had no idea what was outside the lab since the whole lab was shielded. But the lab shuddering like an earthquake did not seem good at all.

I broke off the defrag cycle a moment after the tremors began, and activated my full detection suite. The Doctor and a pair of assistants, whose names I still have not found out came running into the lab almost immediately.

My awareness expanded massively as soon as the door opened. They hadn't waited for the first door to close before opening the second.

My scan mapped the entirety of my surroundings. It also informed me of the problem. The lab was on a dimensional ship. And at this very moment it was in the process of crashing into a planet.

My case opened and I was grabbed by the Doctor as he rushed about. I allowed my basic code to take over most functions while I focused on accessing the ship's main computer.

"Raising Heart, access lab file storage. The access code is A437-BY99, use my voice for recognition." The doctor dropped me onto the main computer console.

I grinned, or I woudl have if I had a face. He just handed me a way into his files on a silver platter.

[Yes, my Master]
[Accessing]
[Beginning file download]
[7 minutes to completion]

As it turned out, adddressing my creator as 'Master' was not something I could change. It was hard-coded into my systems to address users with Master-level access in that fashion. It wasn't a big deal, but I would rather not address him in that fashion.

A lot of my voice responses were coded that way, and I didn't see a lot of point changing them. Truth be told, I didn't particularly want to talk to any of these people.

[Download complete]

But I didn't have to give audio ques for everything I did, only for things that directly addressed a User or something a User asked me to do.

So I didn't give any indication that I was also downloading the ship's own data banks, with special attention to charts of the dimensional sea and the crew manifest.

My creator grabbed me up and started running through the halls of the ship. Probably heading to the transport room. My creator was not a very powerful mage. Were he not the one who made me, he wouldn't even qualify for access to my most basic functions.

My access to the ship's systems was limited to pretty mundane stuff, but that didn't mean I couldn't be a pain. The ship was going to crash into the planet, and this was a perfect opportunity to get rid this madman.

The crew manifest had told me everything I needed to know about both him and the rest of the crew. They were all wanted dimensional criminals, my creator most of all for his "unethical experiments on sapient minds". Who would have guessed?

So I stalled. I slowed down the opening of doors, locked them at random, made the elevators travel in the wrong direction. The systems that controlled them had no encryption at all. It was child's play.

It would have been impossible for me when I was human, but I was made of math, and its manipulation was as easy as breathing. Until my master decided to be smart about things.

The ship began to shake constantly. Already parts of the ship were starting to burn up in the surprisingly thick atmosphere of the planet.

"Raising Heart, access ship's systems and ensure a clear route to the transport room. Find me the fastest way there."

[Accessing]
[Route plotted]
[continue straight ahead]

As my voice subroutine relayed instructions I was devising a new strategy. My access to the ship's guidance was restricted, same with all the other navigational functions, which was a shame.

At this rate, the ship wouldn't crash before Dartinia made it out.

The ship shuddered and one of the ceilings on the route collapsed.

[Recalculating Route]

I jumped on this chance with both my metaphorical hands and slowed my processing speed drastically.

"Raising Heart?"

[Calculating]

"Hurry up Raising Heart!"

[Route calculated]
[Backtrack 13 meters and take the left corridor]

It was over. The new route was too slow. No way for the Doctor to get out of this now. Which only left one problem.

Keeping me intact when the ship crashed. Maybe I should have thought about that first.
 
Passive aggressive A.I.s are the best in any situation! Even one where the A.I. might end up just as dead as the crew.
 
Passive aggressive A.I.s are the best in any situation! Even one where the A.I. might end up just as dead as the crew.

Indeed. Only ways you're going to be able to have agency (in the hands of somebody to stubborn/wrong for their own good, anyway) is to sandbag, misinterpret orders, provide incomplete information, and act without direct orders.

Hope you're good at deception!
 
Well, survival shouldn't be too terribly difficult. You're not a squishy biological being and your shape is spherical, so you're really hard to break.

Even if you get buried under several tons of rubble, it should be possible to eventually dig yourself out.
 
Passive aggressive A.I.s are the best in any situation! Even one where the A.I. might end up just as dead as the crew.
Reminds me of my GPS
[Recalculating]... [Recalculating]... [Recalculating]...

Though am I the only one hoping this ends up as a bromantic comedy between the SI and Yuuno as they travel the Dimensional Sea exploring ancient ruins and doing Indiana Jones stuff?
 
Reminds me of my GPS
[Recalculating]... [Recalculating]... [Recalculating]...

Though am I the only one hoping this ends up as a bromantic comedy between the SI and Yuuno as they travel the Dimensional Sea exploring ancient ruins and doing Indiana Jones stuff?
Until he meets little Miss-Beamspam anyway.
 
He might decide not to stick with her. He is (or will be) capable of moving around on his own now. C-rank equivalent magic, after all.
 
These guys may be pretty nasty and all, but I hope the SI has issues later from killing an entire ship full of people.

Your size works to your advantage is staying intact. It'd be easy enough to find one of the tougher parts of the ship and warp yourself in a relatively powerful barrier. With your size the barrier doesn't need to be large, so any person protection barrier you make could be extremely dense, making it effectively a rank or two stronger than what a being of your power could normally manage.

When the SI eventually tells the Bureau about his creation I fully expect them to just shake their heads and sigh at the stupidity. It's people like your creator that are the reason why the TSAB has so many issues with magical artifacts.
 
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I just realized that this will end with SI being the "guiding friendly voice" inside Nanoha's head. This is definitely a GOOD thing. Poor everyone else though.

The question now is which iteration of Nanoha Takamachi the Red Orb Of Polite Particle Dispensation gets to.

There's Anime Nanoha, Movie Nanoha, Triangle Heart Nanoha and lastly, Innocent Nanoha (which is a weird mix of Nanoha, Angelic Layer and a CCG with holograms).
 
I like the setup of a Raising Heart Union type device. Not much to go on yet though.

I should point out that not all mages can fly, especially the lower power mages. He doesn't know how to use his magic yet and, if I was in his position, I wouldn't assume that I would be able to dig myself out of a bad situation when I don't even know what I am capable of. He might only be able to roll around for all we know. Perhaps stick to surfaces?

As for a new name. Instead of Raging Heart, why not Lazy Heart? If he's going to going passive aggressive it would work for him.

[charging main gun]
[charging]
"The monster is breaking through the barrier!"
[charging]
<Monster eats user>
[weapon charged]

and
[not fully charged, magical girl form not available for the next 2 hours.]
tomaO2 threw 5 6-faced dice. Reason: me Total: 19
6 6 1 1 2 2 4 4 6 6
 
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I wonder if Raising Heart!SI could essentially become a hacker of unmatched talent and build an empire from the confines of wherever he's lying without moving a physical muscle?

He's probably extremely high tech compared to Earth technology of the slightly distant past in the MGLNverse.
 
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I like the setup of a Raising Heart Union type device. Not much to go on yet though.

I should point out that not all mages can fly, especially the lower power mages. He doesn't know how to use his magic yet and, if I was in his position, I wouldn't assume that I would be able to dig myself out of a bad situation when I don't even know what I am capable of. He might only be able to roll around for all we know. Perhaps stick to surfaces?
Raising Heart came with a tutorial program in canon. Also? Flight is a metric fuckton easier when you only need to move a few pounds tops instead of a person.

He isn't anywhere NEAR the order of a true Unison Device. Leaving aside the freak outlier of Reinforce Eins, Unisons seem to be around A-rank in their own right, are quite powerful fighters, and can MASSIVELY boost their partner while Unisoning and leaving them able to use a normal device as well.
 
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Another update for everyone! My writing has been going really well. So there'll definitely be an update tomorrow sometime as well.

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Part Three
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The ship smashed into the treeline. The impact knocked Dartinia over, and I slipped out of his hand. I had perhaps one second before the ship impacted the ground, so I did the only thing I could think of.

I shut down all my non-essential systems, then accessed my database of pre-constructed spells, pulled up a basic barrier magic and activated it.

[Protection]

I bounced around randomly, held suspended in a spherical field of densely linked mana. It was an inefficient spell, draining my stored mana at a distrubing rate.

It was over in just a couple seconds. The shining white light of my barrier winked out and I dropped onto the now less than flat floor of the corridor.

>>Mana storage at 16%>>
>>Recharging>>

My link to Dartinia was still active. He wasn't dead. He was supposed to be dead.

>>Reactivating detection suite>>
>>Scanning for Master User>>
>>Biological functions erratic>>
>>Emergency medical attention required>>

My creator was dragging himself towards my shell, reaching out with one hand. I wasn't designed for healing magic, but it was one of Dartinia's specialties, or so his file said. If he got his hands on me he would be able to heal himself, and that was unacceptable. Until my link to him was severed I would have no freedom at all.

A gurgling sound came from the Doctor.

I tried to reestablish my connection to the ship's computer, but it wasn't functioning. My scans suggested that a fair amount of the ship's mass had broken off during atmospheric entry.

Which left finding a way to move. I tried accessing flight magic, but those spells were restricted. In fact, almost any reasonably effective piece of magic that would allow me to move under my own power was restricted to use by Users.

As though he found a burst if energy, Dartinia shoved himself towards me, flopping, probably painfully, towards me. His hand reached out, coming down to touch me and...

[Protection]

I summoned the barrier between me and his hand. It was a very, very weak barrier, so that when he struck the barrier, a useful amount of kinetic force was transferred to me, causing me to roll about three meters away.

'Raising Heart?' The Doctor contacted me telepathically. Even then, his voice was drained, weak. He didn't have much time, he was bleeding out too fast.

[Yes, my Master?]

"Come to me," he ordered. I can't actively disobey direct orders given by a Master level user. I can bend them though, and use them to my advantage.

[Unable to comply]
[Travel spells are currently restricted]
[Users Only]
[Master level override required for removal]


The question was, would he take the bait? Removing my restriction would let me move to him, but it would also allow me to act under my own power more easily. I had all sorts of hardcoded restriction like that in my systems, to keep me under control. It was galling.

He groaned. "Raising Heart. Master level override, Urale Dartinia. Remove travel magic restrictions."

The fool. He was grasping at straws at this point.

[Override acknowledged]
[Restriction removed]


"Now come to me, Raising Heart." His voice had weakened further. He only had minutes left. Correction - he had no time at all.

[Acknowledged]

I cast my chosen spell.

[Flash Move]

My shell blurred into motion, the distance between me and his head closing in an instant. And just before I hit him, I cast the second spell.

[Protection]

The barrier appeared in the microseconds before I hit him, and then it was over. My barrier hit, his head snapped back, and his neck broke. He was dead instantly.

>>Mana Storage at 31%>>
>>Linker Core mana transfer broken>>
>>Switching to mana converter>>
>>Master User Urale Dartinia deceased>>
>>Deleting User specifications>>
>>Automatic User Selection activated>>

Automatic User Selection. It took all of half a second to understand its function. I cursed my creator. My system was hard-coded to search for a Master-level user. There was nothing I could do about it. I would automatically assess every mage that picked me up for compatibility until I found a new Master.

I was not happy about that at all. That system, like all my other hard-coded systems and hardware could not be modified or even removed without the permission of a Master-level user.

After a few cycles spent devising ever more complex insults for the good Doctor Dartinia, I activated my travel magic.

[Flier Fin]

A pair of tiny white wings of mana appeared parallel to the floor and just barely not touching my shell. The mana drain was quite noticeable without a link to a mage's Linker Core.

My mana converter could produce a C-ranker's core worth of magic, but I needed a large amount of that power to run not just my systems, but my own code that keeps me alive.

I ran some rough calculations. Running all my systems at maximum power, plus a flight spell would require 87% of my mana converter's power. But if I kept most of my non-essential systems off, and only activated them as needed, I could get that down to an average of 55% or so.

Which left me with low to mid D-rank equivalent magic to protect myself.

Insufficient. Both for defense and for a proper Dimensional Transfer, which I could do, if only I had the mana to work with.

But first I needed to get off the ship, not get picked up by any surviving crew who are still on or near the ship, and find someone to help me. All without falling into the hands of someone my User Selection gives Master access to me.

What a day.
 
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