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It's also the day after Xmas to be fair, I kind of assumed a slump for the last few days. Now that it's over and done with things might pick back up. I don't celebrate personally, but I do kind of see the internet depopulate from the 23rd to the 26th every year. Whenever I write anything serialized I try to have something loaded up the day of, or right after everyone gets "back" from their families or w/e.

I'm also a fan of:

[X] Reintroduce herself, hoping he'd take the news well.

If it's going to be an issue, let it be now rather then later.
 
"Whatever he may do to," Koyomi then stated, "know I won't tolerate it."

Oh no, how will the childhood friend manage to succeed in stealing Miyako's heart if her fairy godmother won't tolerate his presence.
Surely the only way to get a fighting chance is for him to immediately accept Miyako.

[] Reintroduce herself, hoping he'd take the news well.

EDIT: changed my mind, this feels like a better fit for the romance subgenre:
"The mysterious girl♀ is claiming to be my childhood friend♂? And she's pretty!"
[X] Slowly reintroduce herself, gauging his feelings by asking him questions before she revealed who she really was.

Double EDIT:
Just to sure. I'm meming, I'm sure that Sora will turn out to be a entertaining character no matter what direction he takes. I just like shipping Miyako with everything approximating her age.
 
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[X] Reintroduce herself, hoping he'd take the news well.


"It's okay, he was always... nice. I think I can handle this," Miyako said, as she breathed deep and tried to smile. Walking back out, she started with a wave then said, "Yasuda-san, no, Sora-kun, remember me?! We were in school together, er, but could you call me 'Miyako' instead?"

This Sora had to take a step back and look Miyako up and down. "Oh, wow, it really is you. But you're... you're cross-dressing, I think?" he ended up saying, scratching his head, "Does this fair host that sort of performance then? Hey, that's really cool then!"

That made Miyako's face grow pale, and Koyomi tense up as she looked at Sora. "Ah, no, it's not crossdressing. I am a woman, that is I'm trans," Miyako stumbled a little as she said that.

Sora took another step back, clutched his head, and said, "I-I didn't know. Look, I'm real sorry, I mean I knew of trans-people, I just always thought of them as 'somewhere else', if I phrased that right." Then he thought a little more and figured, "Obviously, you were really into Hanazakari, guess I should've picked up on that. But I thought y'know, they saved the world, a bunch of guys still like them, and there were male Hanazakari, so I thought it wasn't unusual..."

"Please, Sora-kun, it's okay," Miyako tried to insist. "Look, you know now, that's all that matters." And I tried not to hint at it back then 'cause, well, I was scared, she thought, but didn't tell him out of worry he'd blame himself for it.
"Anyway, uh, lots of stuff happened to me since we last met, got a part-time job, wrote an article I'm still trying to publish, but the big thing is, I've actually a met a Hanazakari!" she squealed as she dragged Koyomi out right in front of him.

Koyomi had to glare at Miyako for that, before she turned back to Sora and, with it sounding like he hadn't said anything that bad, told him, "Yes, I'm a Hanazakari. Much as I would really not rather bring it up unless necessary," she glanced back at Miyako with those words. "My name's Arisugawa Koyomi, Nozawa and I crossed paths after she'd run away. So, you're her old friend then?"

"Yeah, all throughout high school," Sora said, "People always said we had a real Boke and Tsukkomi thing going on. Miyako- gonna need to get used to that, anyway, she did land us in detention a few times, but hey, nowadays that's all water under the bridge."

Koyomi nodded at all this without a hint of surprise.

"Wait, 'Nozawa', so you even changed your last name?" Sora then asked, "That I should've seen coming. Miyako, er, only ever invited me back to their house when their parents weren't out. Of course, I knew things were bad! But... it was only once I got to college and heard they'd run away did I realise how bad."

"You're sure making this about yourself a lot, you know," Koyomi had to say, arms crossed as Sora flinched.

"Eheh, well I am a little out of date to what's been happening," Sora had to admit.

You're already in college... Miyako drooped as she thought. She then tried to say, "Also, there's Daimon-" but got a cold look from Koyomi before she could give away that the publicly disgraced mangaka was right here. "Er, that is I met with Daimon Emi-sama! You know, she had the pseudonym Miss Peel?" she then course corrected. "Look, a lotta bad stuff's been said about her lately, but don't you believe it."

"She was one of your favourites, how could I forget?" Sora smiled back at her, though his positivity faltered as he asked, "So er, you're saying she wasn't part of a cult and missed a whole bunch of deadlines?"

"Er, well, that part's true, yeah. But she definitely not in that cult anymore!" Miyako said. As Sora kept nodding at that, she instead changed tracks with, "Hey, I've also met all sorts of other people since, I'll introduce ya!" Reiji and Ryoichi had already gone ahead to the duelling arena, but she was still able to drag Kazuya and the human-disguised Sfira back. "Okay, this is Kai Kazuya-kun, he's the son of this douchey rich family, but he's not like them at all." That being because his emotions were stolen as a child went unsaid. "And this is Sfira. They're... from outta town, but real good with plants." In a way. "Kazuya-kun, Sfira-chan, this here's Sora-kun, my high school friend!"

"Wait, he's rich? And they're-" Sora mumbled as he took in the inhumanly pretty form Sfira had put on, "I mean, it's a pleasure to meet you too. Wow Miyako, you've been able to meet some really interesting people."

With Sora now brought to his attention, Kazuya had to decide on the right thing to say. "Charmed," he settled on.

"<It is,>" Sfira began, before they realised they were thought-speaking in front of someone who didn't know they were an alien, so tried to mouth-speak, "It's good meet- good to meet you. Do you... like rollercoasters? I am told that is what huma- people like to go on at fairs. It seems intense to me, but I'll go on one of them if Miyako wants that."

"Aw, that's sweet," Miyako said with a blush, then kept telling Sora, "And they're not the only ones. Hayato-kun isn't here right now, but he knows heaps about traditional stuff like archery, ikebana, and calligraphy. He's the son of my boss Higashi-sama, the head priestess, so I get to live him. Reiji-kun and Ryoichi-kun went ahead, but they're a theatre guy and Kazuya-kun's brother."

"Do you have to put the spotlight on Sfira?" Koyomi hissed at her.

"Wait, did you say you live with a traditional arts expert?" Sora asked, shrinking back a bit. "I mean, I've got a roommate, they're alright. And yeah, rollercoasters are cool. But er, you really wanna go on one again after last time, Miyako?"

"Ah yeah, good point," Miyako said, tugging her collar as that memory came back, and she really didn't want to think how a war vet like Koyomi would handle on. "So about Reiji-kun and Ryoichi-kun, they went to this duelling place up ahead to, er, sort some things out. We probably should catch up to them, I'll then introduce you." This assuming Reiji and Ryoichi would be in any mood for introductions.

As she said that, for some reason Miyako could pick up a rustle of wings and pattering of feet in the background. She looked around, but it didn't seem to be anything. So she led everyone forward, Sora now in tow.


The duelling arena looked halfway between a Ren Faire and an old jRPG, the surrounding castle and moat decorations even having the texture of pixels. As watching was free, Miyako soon spotted Reiji and Ryoichi in the middle. Reiji's own swordfighting style, er, would've looked really impressive on stage, but so far he was failing to land a single hit on Ryoichi.

As for Ryoichi, er, was any duellist supposed to move like that? Was any human supposed to move like that? And while Reiji was wielding a prop sword, Ryoichi's looked all too real. Well, the parts not shrouded by strange, dark wisps anyway.
Zigzagging right up to Reiji, Ryoichi was then spun around by this sword as he knocked Reiji done. "Foul cur!" Reiji tried to scream, as he braced for no less than the sword piercing his neck. But suddenly, the sword then jolted Ryoichi back.

"That sword," Koyomi immediately took notice of, "the closest thing I can think of is a Hanazakari Cultivar. But what Hanazakari's even in sight?" She scanned the arena audience for anyone moving their arms in time with the blade, found nothing, then muttered, "Unless..."

Before she could say what this 'unless' was, a sudden loud honk was shot into the arena. Not being left behind by Koyomi this time, Maimi flapped her way right down into the arena, then charged straight at Ryoichi.
The sword pulled Ryoichi towards the swan, but Maimi flapped up and over to land on his arm. A barrage of pecking down at him, and the sword finally dropped from Ryoichi's hand.

The dark haze that'd enshrouded Ryoichi now vanishing, he then stood up, limbs moving as normal, and went, "W-what just happened? They gave me that sword, and now there's a goose honking at me or whatever this is?" He then looked over at the prone Reiji and had to say, "Hah, I won! Er... somehow."

Koyomi then jumped into the arena to chase Maimi away, the swan relentlessly pecking at that shrouded sword. "How did you even get here?" she said to Maimi after transforming.
The audience kept murmuring to each other like this was all on script, like the nearby Hanazakari stage show had for some reason spilled over.

"Does this-" Sora then brought up, "Does this stuff happen to you all the time? Now that you know a Hanazakari and all."

"Well, er, not stuff exactly like this," Miyako told him.
As Koyomi came back, Miyako tried to say, "Hey, that sword stopped and wouldn't stab Reiji-kun. Maybe whatever it is, it's not that bad!"

Reiji, having gotten back up, instinctively shielded his neck with his hand on hearing Miyako say that.

Ryoichi however said back, "That sword, whatever it is, tried to possess me! How can anyone seriously insist it's 'not that bad'?"

"Well, maybe it just amped up your emotions, made you go all 'blind rage mode'?" Miyako asked. to which Ryoichi just scoffed.
She then looked at Koyomi's deep scowl and could only think, She's gonna say RUNE's behind this, right?

Article:
Miyako's best idea for what to do about this weird sword was:
[ ] To go see Hachiro about it, if RUNE really did know something.
[ ] To ask the people in charge of the duelling arena about it.
[ ] To search the audience, the whole fair even, for the Hanazakari controlling it.
[ ] To track down the Earthly Purified. Emi said they'd be here, maybe they had something to do with it?
[ ] To try wielding it herself, see if it did possess or merely amplify. It refused to kill, and Maimi was there to snap her out of it.
[ ] To trust Koyomi could handle this and stay out of things, there was a Frost fair exhibit she really wanted to get to.
[] To brush the whole thing off and say weird stuff happened all the time. [Miyako has too much Emotional Intelligence to say this.]
[ ] Wait a bit longer to see if Koyomi can actually handles this / blames it all on RUNE (ScribePrincess write-in)
[ ] Write-in
 
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[X] To ask the people in charge of the duelling arena about it.

Well, might as well start with people that should have an idea what's up before jumping to specific conclusions.

Not sure I've got much to say on Sora right now. He didn't make a horrible impression, but aside from his past with Mmiyako he just kinda strikes me as a guy.
 
Sora took another step back, clutched his head, and said, "I-I didn't know. Look, I'm real sorry, I mean I knew of trans-people, I just always thought of them as 'somewhere else', if I phrased that right."

So real lol, ❤️😭❤️

Still. Much better than it could have gone.

I really want to just leave this to Koyomi and go do something else, because fun at the fair, but also I could see this going poorly...

Can I do a write-in?

[X] Wait a bit longer to see if Koyomi can actually handles this / blames it all on RUNE

I want to see what Koyomi does before we decide what we should do. If that's not ok since it means more QM work or a really short update.

(removed the rest of my post so as not to mess up the tally thing)
 
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I want to see what Koyomi does before we decide what we should do. If that's not ok since it means more QM work or a really short update,

That'd be fine. The previous 'what to do at the fair' vote has given this arc a good backlog of stuff to go through, so the next update wouldn't be that short either way
 
By the way, anyone have any thoughts on Darkness being Koyomi's power (or 'cultivar' as it's known among Hanazakari), in general outside of that one fight?
I like it, and it seems fitting. Additionally, despite her sour attitude, it is nice to see a darkness-associated character who is not evil.

I do remember her art though, it… wasn't the best, to put it mildly," she said and coughed,
...This feels like it explains some things.

"Ooh, I'd like that, but…" Miyako said then sighed, "I shouldn't. Guess it's for the best that I talk to Arisugawa-sama on my own, don't wanna crowd her or anything."

"Yes, that's understandable. And I can always meet her another time, so no bother," Hayato said before his mother interjected.

"Well, how about if Hayato just walks with you to her house, then? No harm in that," Asahi kept asking Miyako.

"Sure, I'm cool with that," Miyako said, thought twitched a little at Asahi's sudden insistence.
Is she trying to set them up together already? I suppose it makes sense if Miyako gives her a connection back to Koyomi.

She then grabbed Hayato's arm and went, "C'mon, Higashi-kun! I know a shortc- ah, no I don't.
Oh and Hayato-kun, how about we-" she was about to suggest a shortcut, but then went, "Nevermind."
I think this is my favorite running gag in this quest.

Miyako froze, her eyes almost popping out. "Arisugawa-sama… was at Shin Sekigahara? As in, 'final battle Japan fought against the Frost Fair' Shin Sekigahara?!"
Now Miyako knew more than anything what she wanted to ask Koyomi… and knew more than anything what she couldn't. It'd be the biggest battle she ever fought, I can't bring that up on top of everything she's going through now, she thought.
Very intriguing.

"Do I look okay?" Koyomi sighed, slumping in her chair.
I feel it is safe to say that Koyomi and "being okay" took a break in their professional relationship in the 90s, and never got back into contact since then. I do not think she would recognize them anymore, if they ever met again by unlikely chance.

Miyako showing Koyomi her old fanfiction sounds like it could be a fun premise for non-canon omake. Maybe not such a good idea for the actual Quest, though.
One would think. And yet.

Koyomi told her, then sighed, "To think I actually recognise more than a few of these tags from how I've seen books marketed these days. I've even gotten demands to write an 'Enemies to Lovers' story like I'm Austen or whoever. And wait, 'omegaverse dynamics', 'hanahaki disease', 'soulmates'?"
Oh dear.
Oh dear.
Oh dear.


...Well, the silver lining is that if being shown A/B/O real-person fanfiction has not made Koyomi disown her on the spot, I am quite confident nothing will. Her bark is severe but she truly has the patience of a saint.

"Look, Nozawa, if you're start getting doubts about staging your own story, you can just adapt one of mine. You wouldn't even be the first to."

"Oh wow, thank you so much Arisugawa-sama," Miyako blushed and even bowed, before her eyes widened "Wait, even your-"

"Except my first book, that's off limits," Koyomi glared.
This is a rather impressive way of talking her out of embarrassing herself without making it obvious that she is talking her out of embarrassing herself. Koyomi is truly a kind soul.
Also, I cannot wait until that mythic first book is someday discovered.

And besides, I wrote her…" her tone softened to nearly a whisper, "before I was out as trans, no, before I'd even decided I was trans. I don't know if she did it on her own, but writing her still helped me figure a lot of things out."

The previously scathing Koyomi softened too on hearing that, even admitting, "I'm sorry, I wasn't thinking, even though I should have been. That does put your story in context."
Despite how painfully humorous the rest of this scene was, this moment is very sweet.

"Nozawa, it's not that the Frost Fair had no emotions, or more correctly severely muted emotions. It's that they were never content with it, that they so desperately wanted to just feel anything again they didn't care how many they hurt in the process,"
Ironically, would that desperation itself count as an emotion?

Miyako is...possibly not the brightest bulb, but she's clearly among the bravest. I could never show my fanfiction to anyone I know IRL, and it's not A/B/O flower-coughing real-person fanfic with a blatant self-insert OC.
I once had much less objectionable fanfiction that I made the mistake of showing someone. Perhaps the problem was simply the person in question, but the experience... well, I do not make that mistake anymore. So regardless of whether it is bravery or stupidity on Miyako's part, (though personally, I would blame the latter) I do have to appreciate how Koyomi, for all her grumbling, was not nearly as nasty about it as I feared she might be.

Though his expression grew less serene as he looked down at Koyomi's garden, as ramshackle and in disarray as her house was. "Not that the local nature couldn't use a little care."

"Er, maybe Arisugawa-sama just likes her garden that way?" Miyako figured, or at least figured that's what Koyomi would tell her if she brought it up.
I am suddenly reminded of the duo from Countdown Precure, and their efforts to fix up that old mansion Mira had claimed.
On a more relevant note, I enjoy how both of the leading characters get poked fun of equally, despite Miyako being the more obvious target.

Or that you wouldn't care 'cause you couldn't care.
Precisely.

"Look, Nozawa, if Asahi starts giving you a hard time, tell her to stop comparing herself to me. Chances are that'll be her problem," Koyomi tried to say one last thing
I know from discussion in the crossover thread that Koyomi and Asahi are not the reason for the "toxic yuri" tag, but my initial assumption was that they were. Their dynamic is fascinating, in the way a terrible freak-chance disaster that killed thousands is fascinating.

Koyomi sighed. "Look kid, none taken, I'm just irritated is all. But now you know, never meet your heroes. Pity some of us are too far gone to get that through their heads," she briefly side-eyed Miyako.

"Wow, rude," Miyako at least said back.
On the subject of the tags, I am astonished that "never meet your heroes" is not one.

Miyako was about to ask if he was his younger brother
I did not understand this phrasing, how would he be his own brother?

F*kin' alloromantics, man. I'll never understand what makes them tick.
You and me both. You and me both.

The holiday break (and the unprecedented opportunity to focus on my own projects it presented) somewhat derailed my recollection of where I was and what was happening, but at last I am resuming my read-through.
 
Ironically, would that desperation itself count as an emotion?

Yeah, kinda hit the key problem with writing emotionless villains, or at least emotionally deadened. Of course, the Frost fair would want to experience more emotions than just desperation.

I did not understand this phrasing, how would he be his own brother?

Good catch! Reworded it to 'ask if he was Ryoichi, the younger Kai brother'
 
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  • [X] Wait a bit longer to see if Koyomi can actually handles this / blames it all on RUNE
    [X] To ask the people in charge of the duelling arena about it.
 
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[X] Wait a bit longer to see if Koyomi can actually handles this / blames it all on RUNE (ScribePrincess write-in)


Koyomi's glare intensified as she examined every inch of this blade. "This has to be…" she began, only to stop and sigh. "No, for all the reason there are to suspect RUNE, especially with them oh so nicely inviting me here, we don't have the evidence yet to link our little phantom sword back to them. A whole bunch of other factions could be behind this.
Not that I won't be taking hold of this sword, Cultivar, whatever for now, we don't need RUNE taking it for themselves either," she said, then tried to sheathe it in one of her pockets, "At least till we track down its real wielder."

Miyako could only blink at first, but then said, "Wow, I genuinely did not expect that answer from Arisugawa-sama."

"Wait, RUNE? You mean 'the UN magical military' RUNE?" Sora asked, his mouth hanging open. "You, er, made it sound like your Arisugawa-sama has a real problem with them."

A smirk came over Miyako as she said, "Ooh boy, you don't even know the half of it. She's a Witch, all independent, so she really doesn't get along with them. But on the bright side, at least all the trouble RUNE have given us mean I've got this big report on them."

With each word, Sora's face grew paler and paler. "Miyako… you do know this isn't a rival baseball team you're talking about? This is an international military, the international military post-Frost Decade! Are you sure you really wanna get on their bad side?" he asked, eye contact firm.

"Well, er," Miyako feebly began. Her instinct was that her old friend Sora was about to end up like Asahi, try to pull her away from Koyomi too. C'mon, it won't get that bad. Arisugawa-sama wasn't intimidated by Higashi-sama, no way she'll be by Sora, she thought. "It's not all bad between us and RUNE, Ogami-sama's still nice to us; he's the guy who invited us here. And Arisugawa-sama and I have been through heaps, Heart Leeches, cults, corporations, a trigger-happy cosmonaut," she had to restrain herself from bringing up Blue Lotus, "and we've always come out fine!" She also didn't bring up how present she really was for most of those.

If she thought that would actually get Sora to loosen up, well… "Miyako," he said as he stepped back, "What's gotten into you? I mean, I get why you ran away from home, but with everything else you've told me, and now there's these two guys fighting over you-"

"Er, Reiji-kun and Ryoichi-kun were fighting over Kazuya-kun, their friend and brother," Miyako said. Not that she didn't blush to hear Sora thought that.

"My point is," Sora said, but then stumbled, "my point is- you were my friend, but now I've got no idea what's gotten to you. You're not a Hanazakari, and even if you were, you could wind up in serious danger! Maybe if it wasn't for college, I could've kept an eye on you," before he muttered, "or maybe if you'd studied harder you could've come to college, and all this would've never been an issue."

"Yeah well," Miyako said as her brightness faded, her clenched, and a tear started to fall, "you're no Hanazakari either. Is that it, you know I'll always like more than- more than-" More than you was what she couldn't bring herself to say.

"No, that's not it at all," Sora gasped at that accusation. As all this tension started to weigh on him, he then asked instead, "Er, so what's the deal with that swan? Guess there's something to them if they came right for that sword."

"That's Tobi-san," Miyako said and puffed herself up, "She's also a Hanazakari. Yeah, she's another one I know, on top of Arisugawa-sama and Daimon-sama!"

"I don't appreciate hearing you treat us like a scoreboard," Koyomi then said, having caught that last line. Miyako then shuddered to think how much else Koyomi could've overheard.

"A Hanazakari? B-but they're a swan," Sora said, having to look back and forth. "I mean, some animals could be smart enough to have been anointed, like ravens or octopi. No, would they still be alive decades later? Er, she's transformed then, right?"

Before Miyako could say anything, Koyomi stepped in, looked down at Sora and said, "Yes she is, in a sense. And that's all you're entitled to know."

"Hah, you cheated, blackguard!" Reiji's voice suddenly called up from the arena, cutting their conversation off. He then groaned as he tried to stand up, with Miyako being closest and Sfira being fastest having to run over to lift him up. "Whatever that Ryoichi pulled, no way it could've been legal. Ergo, I… I win," he managed to say. With Miyako seeing him torn and bleeding not for the first time, it was clear that sword may not have killed him, but it barely held back that much either.

"<Humans' red sap,>" Sfira remarked, then corrected themselves with, "<Ah, sorry. 'Blood', yes, think that's the word.>" Reiji just groaned louder, though Miyako had to admit blood was like sap, er, in a way.

Needless to say Reiji needed medical attention, though hopefully he wouldn't have to stay in hospital as long as last time. Ryoichi meanwhile grabbed Kazuya's shoulder and said, "Well, come along now. As blunt as that writer-witch may be, she undeniably has a point about us needing to track down whatever's behind that sword. With how that Reiji seems put off by her, she must be doing something right."

"I'm staying with him," Kazuya told him right there. "It's what I feel I should do, that's the only way I can articulate it."

"W-what, him? But… Oh, suit yourself, you're old enough to make your own choices, aren't you?" Ryoichi, the younger, said, "And I suppose I am 'disqualified', aren't I?" he huffed.
Kazuya just nodded at that response, before he walked over to help Reiji.

"<You said you didn't have duels or tournament over people as possessions here on Earth? Well, not normally you said,>" Sfira then had to bring up, "<So I take it this was 'not normal'?" Reiji stared wide-eyed at Sfira for saying that, and even Kazuya had to blink.

"What? No! Nobody was fighting to own Kazuya or anything, they just wanted to settle some disagreements about him, that's all," Miyako quickly said, sweating a little. She wasn't sure if Kazuya even knew who Sfira really was yet, let alone about who Pathragada classed as 'possessions', so she just told him, "I'll explain later."

"Nozawa, I know that cosmonaut who was a toy till she turned back said something about a tournament over Sfira," the limping Reiji whispered to her, "…but you also haven't been showing Sfira any random anime or anything? Confusing their idea of fantasy and reality?" he all of people asked.

"Of course I haven't. Only some magical girl shows, since they're Pathragadan," Miyako said, but then admitted, "and ones with really pretty boys in them."

Reiji looked at the pretty boy form Miyako had Sfira take, which didn't fit them as well as mimicking Koyomi, and went, "Why am I not surprised?"



They soon got Reiji to an on-site infirmary, and along with Kazuya staying with him, Koyomi and Ryoichi off investigating that sword, Sfira then said they'd prefer to stick with Koyomi. They didn't specify why, but Miyako couldn't help thinking it was partly because Koyomi was far less likely to blab. Emi, far as she knew, was still off checking there were no earthly purified recruiters anywhere around, the first bit of initiative she'd taken in… ages, probably.
So, in the end that left Miyako once again with her friend Sora. Or did it?

"Hey, Miyako, it's been… fun, catching up with you after all this time," Sora said after Miyako ran to meet him again, "And I gotta admit, worse could've happened to you by now, what with RUNE and stuff. But I've got stuff to do, so I should be going- I mean," he then changed his tune, "See you around again, sometime?"

"You bet!" Miyako said on instinct, two thumbs up. She then had to wonder if that was the best idea as she recalled how heated things had gotten, but it's not like Sora was gonna tell on her or anything. "Oh, I live and work in this town called Hinodeharu, it's a real nice place. East of Nagoya, er, hope that's not too far?"

Sora shrugged and said, "Guess it's manageable. Heads up that college spares nobody, so time's probably a bigger issue for me than distance. But hey, when all else fails there's the internet, huh?"

Another reminder that Hinodeharu had far from the best service, but at least Miyako still had her trusty laptop. "Yeah, can barely remember my life before the Information Superhighway," Miyako chuckled.

"Oh, and Miyako," Sora said one last thing as he turned to leave, "Please, be careful."

And with her slowly nodding back at him, Miyako now really was by herself. But hey, this is Tokyo Summerland, if I can't keep myself entertained here, where can I? she thought.
If looking at a map told her anything though, there may have been too many places here to keep herself entertained, where to choose? But she soon settled on a Frost Decade history exhibit, even if she expected a Hanazakari expert like her already knew most of it. Still, reminders wouldn't hurt.


This being Tokyo Summerland, they really went all out with the exterior design. It looked just like photos of Frost Fair ships, which could easily be mistaken for a comet in what was no doubt a tactical advantage. Though to Miyako, they always looked a little like giant mirror shards. While Miyako didn't stop to think of it till later, she did wonder whether a building in the style of the Frost Fair was really the best fit for a theme park once devastated by them. She could certainly see Reiji raise a fuss about that, since she thought a Hanazakari stage show was 'too soon'.

Or you could look at it more positively, say they designed it this way as a show of triumph, really saying they're back, Miyako thought. This all conveniently ignoring there was one Frostfarer still very much alive.

The inside looked much more like your standard museum, though lit in a fitting eerie cerulean shade. Given no photos of a Frost Fair ship's interior had been publicised, they'd made the best with what they had. And the best included holographic displays that surrounded entire rooms, showing girls first meeting their Dandelionhearts, the Frost Fair Rooks, Knights, and Bishops all scheming to steal emotions, the formation of RUNE, the battle of Shin Sekigahara, and a proclamation of Hanazakari as defenders of Love and Purity!

Except… were they? That was how Miyako always saw them, always been told to see them, but it wasn't like Koyomi brought up those words much at all. I mean, I know Arisugawa-sama, she certainly won't stand for hate, corruption, and injustice, that's for sure. But still, it was the Hanazakari who said that, right?

The deaths of all Dandelionhearts were mentioned, but were very brushed over, not something you'd stick on a big hologram. No mention of Idol Hanazakari being forced to side with the Frost Fair, that was a given, and Miyako still didn't want to think about that. There was also only so much mention of anywhere outside Japan, again expected, though the US, the UK due to Tudor Rose, and Brazil did get some mention (and Nepal/India, because you couldn't not mention Padma). Oh, and the 3D approximations of what Pathragada and Cocytus were theorised to look like.

Two girls who definitely did get mentioned were Cherry and Chrysanthemum in Full Bloom, the most famous Hanazakari to ever come out of Japan. The latter a Wand clad in gold with powers of command and control, the latter a pink Sword whose blade could kill in one slice. Miyako remembered being told as a child that Cherry could 'defeat' anyone with a cut, but no, she since learned it really was 'kill'.
She couldn't help but remember that Cherry and Chrysanthemum were the first two Hanazakari she'd ever tried to contact. It had naturally been a disaster, given how private Cherry had become and how busy Chrysanthemum was. Credit to Sora for being polite with her about it, unlike the rest of her school. Still, that had been her start till she eventually contacted Koyomi.

Speaking of which, the sole mention Miyako could find of 'Black Rose in Full Bloom' was on a list of Shin Sekigahara veterans, and the name Kuramazov didn't pop up anywhere. Knowing Koyomi, that was probably how she would've wanted it, though she'd be less fond of Yumemi getting several more mentions, though at least no hologram.

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Fact-checking with Koyomi about this place might be a good idea, who better to do so than with one who'd been right there in the trenches? She'd certainly have opinions about what Miyako had seen [multiple votes possible if they don't contradict].

[ ] Ask her how much Hanazakari really had talked about love and justice.
[ ] Ask her if Cherry and Chrysanthemum really were that amazing in their prime.
[ ] Ask her if Yumemi really should have more credit than her.
[ ] Ask her if she thinks the Frost Fair ship design is a good idea.
[ ] Ask Sfira how right they got Pathragada.
[ ] Ask Emi about her Frost Decade experience in comparison, if she was comfortable with answering.
[ ] Don't ask Koyomi, she's busy finding out what's with that sword.
[ ] Write-in
 
Yeah, kinda hit the key problem with writing emotionless villains, or at least emotionally deadened. Of course, the Frost fair would want to experience more emotions than just desperation.
Ah, that does make sense.

Good catch! Reworded it to 'ask if he was Ryoichi, the younger Kai brother'
I am glad to have helped

Kazuya took a little while to respond to that, briefly staring down at himself and out the window. "I suppose it is more advantageous this way. My lack of emotions meant I was going nowhere in life, so I should be pleased with even being able to be pleased. And yet…"
Somehow I did not anticipate this direction for this to take, but in hindsight, the emotions and awareness thereof gradually seeping back in instead of returning in one massive rush does make more sense. I am interested to see how this goes for him.

"Isn't that, oh I don't know, conflict of interest?"

Miyako flinched on hearing that, but then said, "How about if I write the review under a pseudonym so nobody knows?"
Miyako, I do believe you have completely missed the point. I do not want to be too harsh, but perhaps it would be better if she kept her writing purely in the realm of fiction.

"Reiji-kun, Arisugawa-sama told me that the Hanazakari weren't supposed to be heroes. The Dandelionhearts gave them their powers for self-defence, so the Frost Fair wouldn't start by attacking the most vulnerable."
Interesting.

Of course, Miyako realised this'd mean she'd have to read Ladder to Heaven first, on top of having Paradise Lost to get around to. I mean, people have adapted stuff without reading the original, right? Makes it more 'their own'… doesn't it?
Oh dear. The secondhand embarrassment is... powerful, in this arc.

This is the point where I'd joke about the natural consequences of juggling all the pretty boys instead of settling for a single love interest, but really, they boys just seem to manifest wherever she goes and I don't exactly see her sitting still with any one activity.
I feel there is a joke to be made about the wish fulfillment of romantically attractive people materializing from thin air wherever one goes, but I cannot figure out a good way to phrase it. I could not consider them romantically attractive so quickly after appearing in the first place, so I suppose that only makes sense.

...I feel there is a comedy (or horror) premise in this.

That aside, Miyako very much strikes me as the kind of person who would require multiple partners, as I do not think any single prospective suitor could hope to keep up with her energy on their own.

"They say a Hanazakari visited this place on opening night."
"Oh my, sounds prestigious."​
"Except she thought this restaurant was really a Frost Fair plot."​
"Ah, just like the olden days then?"​
Word was clearly getting around, which suited Miyako fine. People here already having Koyomi on their minds would make this much easier.
I quite like this method of conveying multiple snippets of conversation from different sources.

Don't worry if we manage to out-cringe eneugh Reiji, then it will just look like a normal feeling you have for friends:V
I do not think Miyako will have much difficulty managing that, at this stage anyway. Perhaps if we pour enough points into emotional intelligence that may come to require more active effort to keep up.

But it seems like everyone acts like a character in a magical girl anime. Except the magical girl.
There is a beautiful irony in that, really.

"She's probably only into it because she's fallen for the Lucifer fandom," Reiji grumbled.

Am not! Miyako would've said… but she knew she couldn't say that in good conscience.
Oh dear.

Red Spider Lily in Full Bloom
...This is rather tangential, but while I have already drawn a comparison between Kikuko and the Frostfarers, if she was a Hanazakari instead, do you think her flower would be a Spider Lily? I do not know enough about different flower types and their meanings to know of any potentially better alternatives. The color would not fit of course, but symbolically it would match her nature quite well.

On the other hand, Death is the more directly appropriate one to have that flower, despite not technically being a Magical Girl, and she does wear red. So perhaps Kikuko would be better suited by something else. Though again, her Yuki-onna nature makes her being a Frostfarer feel rather sensible to me.

...And now I am picturing an alternate universe scenario where Kikuko is a turncoat Frostfarer placed under the close supervision of Red Spider Lily in Full Bloom, whose transformation comes with an included motorcycle for reasons nobody can quite understand.

"Well, 'real person' just means it's got real people in it. The Hanazakari Cherry Blossom and Chrysanthemum, and others like them," she said.

"And that is legal?" Kazuya had to ask.

"It shouldn't be," Reiji hissed.
Typically my stance is "live and let live," but I must admit that in this particular case I do somewhat take Reiji's side.

"It that so? It appears a lot has been developing in the fanfiction world that Reiji has neglected to tell me," Kazuya said.
How the tables are turned. I am very curious to see what kinds of embarrassing things he has penned.

Barely a sliver of moonlight sneaked its way through the canopy, though Miyako took comfort in that if she was ambushed in this pitch darkness, it'd probably be by something cool like a monster or ghost instead of just some creep.
A very commendable sense of optimism. (I too have had this thought.)

"You shouldn't blame yourself, Higashi-sama. Kazuya-kun and Reiji-kun are both all back together, it's all in the past," she said.

"Yes, of course. It's just…" Asahi began brightly but then lowered her tone, "I had my one chance to show Koyomi I could beat back the Frost Fair without her help, yet I again only survived because of her."
As I have said before, I quite enjoy their toxic yuri dynamic.

Like I figured us adapting her book would do it, but just to be sure, you'd be the best person to help get her on board, right?"
...I genuinely cannot tell if Miyako is being an optimistic idiot or astonishingly insightful here.

"Oh, about as much experience as with anything else she's done lately," Koyomi had to say.
Heh.

"Higashi-kun, since we're sticking you in here, remember you're playing the ghosts of fallen warriors, or visions that can pass as them, whichever feels most natural, before you get hung on them being crabs," she shot a glance at Miyako while saying that.
Hopefully Hayato's not still stuck on that crabwalk."
I had a joke to make about this that has unfortunately fled my mind, but regardless, I found these moments amusing.

"I get into town plenty!" Koyomi said back, only to find herself at a loss for how to elaborate on that.
As I said before, even with how heavily this arc has emphasized Miyako's embarrassing attributes, I do like that Koyomi is not exempt from being narratively mocked either.

"How about you, Kazuya-kun? Surely acting the lead has got you feeling something, right?" Miyako turned and asked.

"…It has,' Kazuya muttered out, his hands shaking like he was only now feeling the cold, "Fear and embarrassment. I've been told those aren't good emotions to have."
It is still better than nothing at all.

(It really is a mercy for more than just herself that Miyako was talked out of adapting My Chemical Valentine.)

you're not going to Flower Jail
Nel laughs. "Well, we don't have a Magical Girl Prison, so you don't have to worry about that, at least.
I believe that this is what is called "Cinematic Parallels"?

"I… told you that Hirasaka Namie was the first ever Hanazakari I saw die, remember? Higanbana was her flower."
...Ah. Very unfortunately apt.

Whilst again, I do not wish to be too harsh on Miyako, this really does underscore for me a certain sense of insensitivity underlying her fangirling. In a different setting with a different take on Magical Girls, it would be significantly less objectionable, but here, with the Hanazakari and all of their baggage and how politicized it is, it almost feels like the kind of people who are uncomfortably obsessed with something like 9/11 and the war in Iraq. (Not a perfect example, mind, but hopefully close enough.) The general tone of the story so far has kept it from feeling uncomfortable, and Miyako is still likeable, but it does strike me that if I were someone living in that universe and met her in person, I would likely not be nearly so understanding. (Which in turn further reinforces to me how Koyomi's bark is worse than her bite, especially given everything she has been through.)

In any case, it's quite depressing to see that the meguca ultimately reacted to the barbarity of the world by choosing to embrace it.
Indeed. The distance from it helps, and it is an interesting angle to take, but I must admit it is still an angle I have mixed feelings on, personally speaking.

I hope this isn't foreshadowing. Though until Miyako gets a crush and starts barfing flowers, I'll call that a long shot.
Given she already seems to have three potential crushes, (somehow, I do not understand how quickly these have happened but that is very much my own biases at play) I do think we are safe. Though Hanahaki disease, despite its unfortunate aspects in regards to us aspecs, would be an especially interesting thing to occur in this particular universe, given the existence of the Hanazakari. Whatever else can and has been said about My Chemical Valentine, Miyako really did stumble across some potential brilliance with that aspect of it.

So this excerpt was the first thing I ever wrote for Fool Bloom
This was very enjoyable! I do quite like these sorts of prototypical versions of stories; this feels like an unaired pilot episode for a television show that has been unearthed years after the original run ended.
 
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Since you brought up which flower would fit Kikuko (apart from chrysanthemum being in her name), there is a flower called Snowdrop. Purple Heather I also thought of due to its colour and being linked to solitude, and there's also the Asphodel flower when it comes to death.

Also, I'd be fine with you crossposting these chapter summaries over on the Crossover thread, if maybe with a few quotes removed for anyone not on that thread yet
 
At least Reiji has the spirit to keep standing up after getting cut. He basically deserves the win for that alone.

[X] Ask her if Cherry and Chrysanthemum really were that amazing in their prime.
[X] Ask her if Yumemi really should have more credit than her.
[X] Ask Emi about her Frost Decade experience in comparison, if she was comfortable with answering.

If nothing else, getting some roundabout info on Cherry and Chris sounds like it could be interesting. At the very least, the insta death one cutting herself off from public life has implications given how other hanazakari handeled things so far.
...I feel there is a comedy (or horror) premise in this.
The show "Romantic Killer" comes to mind. Aka. "Attack of the Ikemen."
That aside, Miyako very much strikes me as the kind of person who would require multiple partners, as I do not think any single prospective suitor could hope to keep up with her energy on their own.
Well, then it's a good thing Reiji and Kazuya seem to come as a pair? Now if only Miyako could do a better job of actually attracting romantic interest herself. :V
 
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[X] Ask her if Cherry and Chrysanthemum really were that amazing in their prime.
[X] Ask her if Yumemi really should have more credit than her.
[X] Ask Sfira how right they got Pathragada.
[X] Ask Emi about her Frost Decade experience in comparison, if she was comfortable with answering.
 
[X] Ask her if Cherry and Chrysanthemum really were that amazing in their prime.
[X] Ask her if Yumemi really should have more credit than her.
[X] Ask Sfira how right they got Pathragada.
[X] Ask Emi about her Frost Decade experience in comparison, if she was comfortable with answering.
 
I'd like to announce that I'm now looking for Beta-readers. I didn't have one at first since I was worried having to wait for them to get back could slow down updates, but once Arc 6 I started thinking the story could actually use one, plus I know enough people on SV who are still regularly active.

If you'd like to beta-read, all I ask is you've read all of Fool Bloom up till now, and can respond regularly to chapter drafts (unless something comes up of course). PM me if you're interested
 
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[X] Ask her how much Hanazakari really had talked about love and justice.

Finding out that stories were extravagated is horrible, Koyomi rescue the poor girl's dreams in the name of love and justice.
 
Also, surprised there wasn't that much of a reaction among readers to Maimi suddenly showing up at the duel, given her not getting to participate in battles in the previous two arcs
 
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