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Flames (Worm AU)

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Always sad for ending because ending but it was good and will look forward to anything you write will look forward to whatever you next choose to write I enjoyed this
 
Well that was good. Not surprising, of course. People wanting to leave is usually a positive thing for everyone in the long run.
 
Honestly, I agree. I think you tried indeed to do too many plotlines at once here.

To be fair though I would read, and every single one of them if you decided to make them separate. And with less powerful power(s) to maybe add a bit of tension to the story.

Escaping Brockton Bay to create a new civilization in the wilderness? Skitter would still be great for it, and with Panacea on board? More than doable, especially if they manage early enough to escape Earth-Bet.

The gang option? Whatever power works really. Especially if inspired somewhat by being a 'gentlewoman gang leader', in the style of less ruthless Marquis.

Flames? Still fine the way it is. Worth exploring.

So if you decide to go for any of those on their own? They would be pretty good stories, yeah.

Anyway, thx for this fic, even if the ending is the way it is. It's finished, and this is what is important.
 
Sometimes "done" is the best feature. It is all too easy to overreach and burnout without noticing, so having the awareness to realize that something is wrong, and then articulate why it's wrong is impressive.
 
As others have said, I'm sad to see it end, but I'm happy that it got AN ending. I enjoyed the story, even if I have zero familiarity with the crossover.

Fencer said:
I finally worked out what it is about this fic that I don't like. I'm trying to do too many things at once.
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This is a common issue with fanfiction. Noel brought it up when WIND collapsed, linking back to his earlier commentary on Copacetic. SV isn't playing nice for me on my phone, so here's think link to his WIND comment: WIND - ALT POWER TAYLOR - AU [DEAD FIC]

Do please note that I'm not saying Flames was nearly the mess WIND was - I dropped WIND for a reason, and I stuck with Flames for a reason. I'm just trying to say that it is a known issue for authors, and it's good that you noticed it on your own.
 
Thanks for giving this fic a solid conclusion.
I'm a little sad to see it go, but if it made sense to you as a good stopping point, then everything's alright.

I was a little curious if she'd teach her new people to all be Flame Users though :D
 
Welp it might not be the greatest ending ever but at least it's a decent ending and that's more than most stories get.

Thank you Fencer for the story.
 
Step into the darkness
And one door closes,
But the one that is meant only for me, I will find, open and cross the line.
For good luck or for your own misfortune...
 
I'm so glad to see a conclusion, and it's interesting to see your thought process on why you didn't want to continue.

This is one of my two favorite ways an author has dealt with a fic they lost interest in (the other being bullet points of major plot points / story arcs)
 
Sad to see you've lost the drive to finish this, though maybe you could just keep an open mind for the future, who knows you may suddenly get inspiration that rekindles your, and pun not really intended but I'm amused it's there regardless, flame to write more of this. Honestly I thought this was the better of the two Worm Fics you've had active most recently.

But I do have one final critique. This Taylor would never, ever, choose Australia over another location on an empty Earth. Obviously it's habitable, but the sheer amount of deadly critters that make that area of the world their home means that it would never be a place for consideration for her. I've already given my two suggestions on possible places, but Australia would never be a choice for a Survivalist if they were given such a choice like Taylor had been given. Even with Amy on board she'd be extremely leery of going to Australia where some of the most poisonous shit in the world lives.

But I'm glad you gave it one final chapter. So thanks for doing that @Fencer.
 
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This Taylor would never, ever, choose Australia over another location on an empty Earth
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Australia is the name chosen for the new country. Not the location. It's a bit of an ancient joke. The british used to ship criminals to Australia. Taylors group is made up, at least in part, of criminals. It's a dumb joke but there you go.
 
It returns! Even though this was the end, it was the end of a masterpiece. The story, despite its flaws, was gripping for much of its story. Thank you for writing this, it will be something that I will likely come back to for a long time to come.

Now, to reread! :)
 
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Australia is the name chosen for the new country. Not the location. It's a bit of an ancient joke. The british used to ship criminals to Australia. Taylors group is made up, at least in part, of criminals. It's a dumb joke but there you go.
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Okay that makes much more sense, thanks for the clarification.
 
Maybe change it to New Australia? Otherwise I'm glad this was given a conclusion, and that trying to make a better ending would be counterproductive and possibly mess up your motivation to continue to write.

Can I ask what plans you have for other stuff you want to write?
 
It's sad to see this idea come to an end. I really enjoyed the ride and I hope some of the pieces get used again.
 
Well, it's a somewhat mediocre end to a good fic. You are correct in that it's not really the ending the fic deserves. It feels very rushed and there are a lot of steps missing. However, the ending fits in well with the way the previous chapter ended. Also it's nice to see an ending at all. So many authors abandon their fics they don't like anymore without any ending what so ever. Usually I wish they would at least post their thoughts on where it was going and how they thought it would end. So any ending at all is better than no ending, especially since you say you lost the inspiration and desire to write it.
 
A sad ending but also a hopeful one.

I understand entirely, Fencer. I have been following and loved this fic for a long time. And have reread it multiple times and will probably do so in the future.

Looking forward to your future works with any similar themes, even if the future ones involve different takes on the narrative.

Thank you for writing this and sharing your muse. Its been a joy to read and have as part of my favorite Worm fictions.

Really eager to see where you go and what you write from here. More Archer or other Worm stories or other tales all together. Going to be quite exciting to see where your muse will take you again.

At least Taylor, in this fic, will have what she needs. Also, if Gold Morning comes... well... Scion will be met by the Sky Flames. And that is its own possibilities all together.
 
As others have said I'm happy that the fic has an actual ending, even if I would have loved to see Taylor slowly gather all these people to her. But I understand why you felt you had to end it and if you ever decide to fully write out any of those three plotlines/ideas you mashed together in this fic, I'm certain I would love to read those separately as well.
 
While a bit unsatisfying, an OK conclusion nonetheless (especially as an alternative to just abandoning the story, or burning out trying to finish it)
Like that Cauldron is being sensible for once, and just getting the problematic people out-of-the picture the easy way.
 
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