Conference Call: Redhead Redemption

Alright. I've received some responses. In the form of quite a lot of well-meaning advice, which is always a pleasant surprise! I've taken some time to process and think it over. And I think I ought to take some time to respond, and, unfortunately, also correct and clarify some things.

Not on SufficientVelocity though, lol.

Alright geez that was way more rambling than I expected to do, writing this post took actual hours so I hope it'll be appreciated lmao
Hey, Lynn! "Appreciated" is right. I might end up copypasta-ing this or referring back to this post when I need crossover writing advice or to give someone else advice; it's a very insightful write-up!

An excellent example is in the twelfth episode of Avatar: The Last Airbender. The Storm delves into the backstories of both Aang and Zuko, and is constantly going back and forth between the Aang-side story and the Zuko-side story. But that's not because of each of them deserving their own turn, its because they fit together, they complete each other. Zuko's story is better because its told side by side with Aang's story, and vice versa.
Complementary plotlines, even with no direct interaction, huh...

Yes. Hard to pull off in a setting where I didn't put the characters and plots together by hand, but still doable, with some finagling. Compare & contrast. Heights for one character to go with depths for another. Find lines where two characters run parallel or perpendicular, see if there's anything to be done there. It's definitely food for thought.

2: Be Respectful, Not Polite
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Respect is about understanding, appreciation, acknowledgement.
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Politeness, on the other hand, comes less from a place of appreciation and more from a place of fearing wrongdoing.
Now this is legitimately a completely new take to me. I had to turn this one over in my head a number of times before I really internalized it. Being respectful and polite, in my personal experience, have been so intertwined that I felt like I was pulling them apart, a la two taffied concepts. But I think I understand what you mean, and even agree, in a fashion.

As far as multicrosses go, you're correct in that attempting to tell a perfectly balanced story would likely kill some of its cohesion. Every crossover I've read has been balanced to one side or another, in some fashion. Finding a fic that perfectly straddles that needle between worlds is... well, it's that same needle in a haystack. Hasn't stopped many of them from being really good, though.

I might end up experimenting with formatting in the near future. What I've mentally been calling "Kyoko's Arc" has been spread out across four-five perspectives for its entirety. We'll see how the upcoming shift to Emma and Undyne goes.

3: You Are The Author, Make The Story Yours
I'm going to double back to this point later. It's a very good one, but I want to delve into this more in-depth when I feel like I've got more time to rant.

4: Be Willing To Put Things Aside
As an example, I'm a big fan of Katalepsis, which has a constantly growing cast, and something I've noticed is that each arc tends to take a few members of the cast and makes them the active participants/focus of the arc, while deprioritizing the rest. Essentially, the entire cast beyond Heather(the viewpoint character) is constantly switching between being supporting protagonists and being background characters depending on which arc we're in, and it works great.
Finally, this legitimately isn't a problem for me, weirdly enough! I cut a lot of things out of chapters, but almost all of it gets recycled later on. To be fair, though, I'm mostly referring to snippets of dialogue, bits of inner monologue that don't quite fit the situation but are too good to toss out, and funny character interactions I come up with when half-asleep (also known as the only time I feel like I have a sense of humor.). When it comes to plot points, too, my outline is blessfully static; things simply get shifted down, rather than shifted out.

I have, however, been looking for an excuse to read Katalepsis for a long time. Looks like this is as good as any!

Thanks for the advice and feedback, again. I agree with almost all of it, and I appreciate every word.
 
In light of the rework on chapters 7&9 I reread 7-9. The chapters flow much better now, so kudos. I think I've also identified two of my pain points when reading more clearly if you're interested in further thoughts on the overall story presentation.

1 Conflict is necessary for a story, but it needs a release. Having the cast constantly argue, without a full understanding of the situation, and constantly escalating the situation between each other or in their own personal lives makes the story feel frustrating because everything feels like it gets worse all the time. I don't think even a week has gone by yet, but because the story is made of a series of short chapters it feels like a longer string of events which are bouncing from pain point to pain point without resolution. Kyoko is about to kill someone to prove a point and has driven the chat room to chaos (this is after she and Undyne almost fought to the death), Undyne is trying to convince someone to kill someone for her, Phyrra is frustrated at Undyne for the previous point and is considering suicide somewhat needlessly when their are better moral options, Yuri is plotting to kill someone ANYONE in the hope of freedom while losing her life savings chasing a dream, and Emma is depressed and manipulating the person who should be helping everyone because that's all she knows how to do. From the current story setup it seems like resolution will occur soon, but you have thrown together enough grimdark properties (or at least properties that you are focusing on the grimdark elements of) that the story is rapidly approaching the too dark, stopped caring threshold.

2 The moderator isn't doing their job. I've elaborated on this in the past, but if you think of someone who is connecting worlds together you want someone highly skilled in several fields. They should have the people skills to communicate with various cultures and bridge the gaps between them, the engineering skills to understand their technology, the history and philosophy background to understand their worldviews and beliefs (Among several other fields and talents). "The person in charge doesn't know what to do, and flails around" is a great story device because it allows you to setup challenges regarding how to operate the node system, and leads to funny bits. However, it's a little suspension of disbelief breaking that the person in charge of the system seems to have no idea how to operate the chat room, improve it based on the resources available to them, or moderate the people in the chat room despite that being their job. It reminds me of the trope where sufficiently advanced aliens have their (small) child break into the control room and mess with the settings to explain why the weird stuff happened that episode. I'm not saying the moderator needs to be memetic hyper competent (tm), but some basic people skills that don't come from Emma, problem solving for issues the node is facing, and inventive ideas based on their unique perspective as a (alien/higher dimensional being/god/whatever) would be cool. Just have them suggest Phyrra asks Weiss to channel some of each dust type into the portal to see how the magic is used or just scan aura itself since a soul is probably 0 dimensional. If the people in the 3d worlds don't know what counts have the mod give them pointers.
 
I kinda hoped that Yuri will get picked up by Limbus Company, either as a Sinner or as LCD after she Distorts, but I'm not sure whteher or not being exposed to Mirror Worlds would be good for her.

Knowing Remnant is a far off better world is one thing. Knowing there's a version of herself that's more successful in the City would be a gut punch.
 
2 The moderator isn't doing their job. I've elaborated on this in the past, but if you think of someone who is connecting worlds together you want someone highly skilled in several fields.
To be honest I don't really get where you're coming from. Possessing phenomenal cosmic powers and presenting as a professional doesn't make one qualified to moderate an interdimensional chatroom. For all we know the mods of the different conference call fics are just random people who stumbled upon a contraption capable of connecting cosmological contexts and decided to make it more coherent. (Edit: missed the opportunity to say "and craved coherency.")

Also ModScarlet specifically has been terrible at this all along so a sudden show of competence would be weird. ModScarlet doesn't need to stay incompetent but that would require either learning from the nodemates, which you seem to be against, or learning off screen, which could be unsatisfying. If you want a more competent mod you might need to wait for, or write, another fic.
 
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The thing is they really feel like some who just stumbled across a random "connect universes" device, rather than anyone important. If you are going to make a chatroom, have the skills to run it. ModScarlet doesn't, and isn't organicly growing through interactions with the group, (which I wouldn't mind) but instead being given answers by Emma in exchange for favors. Still, it's the story's early days, everyone has room for growth, and I'm willing to see where this goes.
 
Chapter 10: Dance Dance Infiltration

Chapter 10: Dance Dance Infiltration

Node1127: Private Channel with Yuri
Yuri: Hello?
Yuri: …No response?
Yuri: I'll try to keep this brief then.
Yuri: I don't have anything against the concept of…
Yuri: "Killing in self-defense."
Yuri: Even "killing for personal gain."
Yuri: But "killing to vent frustration," "killing to prove a point"...
Yuri: Unless that point is so important to you…
Yuri: It seems like a waste of your time?
Yuri: If you have the choice not to…
Yuri: I imagine your would-be victim would appreciate it if you exercised that.
Yuri: This probably isn't what Pyrrha wanted me to say.
Yuri: But it is the truth.
Yuri: So…
Yuri: If I'm not already too late, please think it over.
Yuri: …Senpai, I guess.


Node1127: Private Channel with Pyrrha
Pyrrha: Kyoko. I'm sorry if what I said upset you.
Pyrrha: But please, don't take your frustration out on someone all but innocent in all this.
Pyrrha: I understand that doing so against me is impossible at the moment.
Pyrrha: And frankly, if we could meet face-to-face, I would stop you.
Pyrrha: But…
Pyrrha: Well, please don't let it come to that.
Pyrrha: Even if you are no hero, you are, at least, a good person, yes?
Pyrrha: You have a heart.


Node1127: Private Channel with Undyne
Undyne: Hey.
Undyne: So.
Undyne: Okay.
Undyne: I honestly couldn't care less about what humans you do or don't kill.
Undyne: We're gonna kill you all anyway, when we escape from the Underground!
Undyne: Not gonna lie, though…
Undyne: I thought magical princesses…Magical Girls were better than that!
Undyne: …
Undyne: Welp.
Undyne: I've said my piece.
Undyne: Undyne, out!


Node1127: Private Channel with test
test: so
test: o hold on.
test: /name emma
emma: ok so
emma: u dont know me.
emma: obv
emma: but ya, Im Emma.
emma: ex alpha bitch & recluse.
emma: …uh
emma: was kinda expectin a 'who tf r u'.
emma: but ur rly committed to the whole silent treatment.
emma: I guess.
emma: or maybe ur asleep, idk.
emma: anyway
emma: I dont think Pyrrha knows I exist yet.
emma: hell, u girls have all done a good job accidently ignorin me.
emma: yay
emma: so this next part
emma: it comes straight from the heart.
emma: corny as that is.
emma: so
emma: murder is wrong, mk.
emma: ok jokes aside
emma: like
emma: ur powerful, right?
emma: I get that.
emma: u talk like ur strong, like u believe ur strong.
emma: n thats great
emma: strength is great
emma: dont need to rub it in tho, right?
emma: the weak r
emma: still ppl, at the end of the day.
emma: I guess
emma: …ugh, idk
emma: just think it over.
emma: hypocrite like me has no place talkin bout this shit.







The Beacon Academy Dance was a truly wonderful time.

Walking down the star-studded aisle next to Jaune, watching the crowd murmur and whoop, meeting Nora's eyes as she cheered for the pair of them… even the clammy feel of Jaune's sweaty hands didn't feel so bad. Pyrrha was sweating too. It was almost romantic, in a slightly gross and sticky sense.

The atmosphere schismed between a refined, classical ball and a hard rave. Powerful stacks of speakers that stretched to the ceiling blared out a gentle piano waltz. Doilies and lace lined the cheap folding tables. Hors d'oeuvres sat out on a plate next to a spiked red punch bowl. Yang and Weiss had collaborated to create something truly special here.

Most of all, she couldn't believe that Jaune, the densest boy alive, had finally taken her hints. That she'd wanted to go to the dance with him. Granted, she'd had to spell it out to him in extremely clear terms. Twice. And even then, it'd taken him ten minutes. If Nora had felt bad watching him puzzle things out with a barely-restrained screaming sound, she couldn't have imagined how Pyrrha herself had felt, watching him blunder around the answer to a question that hadn't even been asked.

She ought to thank Weiss. Her final announcement regarding defenestrating Jaune had been what had given her the push to move, to finally take the step in bridging the incredibly stupid gap between them. Pyrrha hadn't intended, strictly speaking, to ask Jaune out that night. She'd honestly planned solely to communicate that the Schnee heiress was running out of patience for his courting. But, well, one thing led to another… And here they were. Dancing.

She had once been told that dancing was much like tournament combat, in that it revolved around the careful interplay between two people in constant lockstep, where a single mistake could spell disaster. And while she had not much experience in dancing, she was quite well-versed in combat. Pyrrha concluded that that person was not so far off the mark, in the end.

Jaune, as everyone knew, was not the most experienced fighter. But he was a surprisingly competent dancer! He seemed to have a gut understanding of rhythm and melody, the appropriate movements and timings. It was not as if Pyrrha had not listened to music before, but he seemed to get it, better than she did. During the waltz, she found herself occasionally unsure, caught off-guard by the "three-four tempo". Jaune was never unsure, though. He moved smoothly, pulled her along firmly yet kindly.

Ultimately, they didn't miss a beat.

"You're quite the dancer," Pyrrha remarked at some point, shortly after the waltz had ended. "How did you become so experienced?"

"Ah, well… seven sisters, remember?" Jaune said sheepishly. "They loved music of all kinds. And they loved to dance. Dragged me into it pretty frequently! You'll get the hang of it."

"Teach me for once, then," she replied, smiling.

A fast-paced dance number started up, base vibrating through the floor. Yang must have chosen the next song. Jaune gave her a nod, smiling just as wide.

"Of course, my lady."

Pyrrha didn't know exactly how long the two of them were on the dance floor. But she knew for a fact that she enjoyed every second of it. Ren and Nora, who had been off to the side not-flirting, even joined in when Shine began to play. Would be a waste not to perform that choreographed dance number, after all, to a smattering of applause.

Oh, what a night. So many sights, so much fun…

Ultimately, though, she did grow slightly tired. And Jaune, despite his impressive resilience, perhaps could have used more training in the field of endurance. The pair eventually broke off for some fresh air and time alone, with intent to return to the festivities later on. Refreshed and relaxed!

Attempting to slip out to the balcony failed to pan out. A pair of visiting Haven students—Pyrrha recognized Mercury Black, the gray-haired kickboxer who'd once attempted to challenge her to a spar, but got shot down by Professor Goodwitch—blocked the way. They politely yet apologetically explained that their team leader was feeling a bit ill and wanted time alone with some fresh air, same as them.

So they substituted. Pyrrha'd had cinematic views on the mind, though, so…

"Jaune, hold on tight," she told him.

"Wait, what? What are you planning?" he squeaked, confused. "Why are you carrying meEEE—"

They landed gently on the ballroom rooftop. Pyrrha waited for Jaune to steady before settling him down on dry tiling.

"Whoa," Jaune said, breathless. "That was awesome. But a little warning, next time?"

Pyrrha chuckled, letting out a slightly insincere "I'm sorry!" She enjoyed seeing him flustered. Frankly, she enjoyed seeing him, period. For all that he was normally so lanky and awkward during his day-to-day, he cut a surprisingly nice figure in his borrowed suit.

Seeing that he seemed to have no intention of standing from where she'd put him down, Pyrrha brushed her dress a bit and sat next to him quietly, looking at Vale's nighttime skyline. There were still Bullheads active, and their lights could be seen flying above the buildings. But for the most part, it was quiet. Even with the dance going on at full power beneath them—apparently, the grand hall was well-soundproofed.

Jaune was the first to break the silence. "So… this has been fun. Thanks, Pyrrha."

"It has, hasn't it…" she said. "I should be thanking you, Jaune."

A blink of confusion. "Huh? Why?"

Seriously? He didn't… Ugh. Of course he wouldn't. But she could spell it out for him.

"You've always been there for me," Pyrrha tried. "In our time here at Beacon… I honestly don't know how many students are currently in attendance. But I don't think I would have had nearly as pleasant a time if my partner had been any one of them but you."

"Man…" Jaune groaned. "You don't need to flatter me, Pyrrha. We both know I'm nobody special. I'm not strong, not clever, not smart. I barely know where my own feet are half the time."

"But that's precisely it, Jaune!" He turned to face her, eyes wide, and Pyrrha realized she might've accidentally raised her volume a bit more than was appropriate. In more subdued tones, she continued, "At this school for Huntsmen and Huntresses, you'd be hard-pressed to find a person who hasn't heard the name 'Pyrrha Nikos'. I'd once thought that would mean that I could find peers here. people with which I could form meaningful relationships, rather than one-sided rays between idol and idolator. But it turns out, Huntsmen and Huntresses have, if it is even possible, an even greater appreciation for my skills and power.

"If it hadn't been for someone like you, someone so impossibly far-removed from politics and Huntsmen and popular culture, I think I would've been more alone at Beacon than I was on the tournament circuit."

A moment of silence.

"Pyrrha…" Jaune started, "...when you put it that way, somehow it sounds even worse."

She couldn't help it. She laughed. A full belly-laugh that left her clutching her stomach and Jaune sputtering in dismay.

As she recovered, her eyes wandered to the CCT Tower, Beacon's Tower, and Headmaster Ozpin's office at the top. Absentmindedly, she wondered if he'd planned this, before deciding it really didn't matter.

"Wait," Jaune asked about a minute later, notes of panic and realization beginning to creep into his voice. "Does this mean we're dating?"

"Jaune," she deadpanned. "I asked you out to a dance. You accepted. We danced."

"Oh," he said, voice having crept from 'panicking' to 'panicked'. "Oh. Oh jeez…"

"Jaune," Pyrrha said.

"Oh, God, this is my first time having a girlfriend!" he almost shrieked.

"Jaune," Pyrrha said.

"I wish I'd listened to what my mother told me! I knew it would be important one day I just didn't—"

"Jaune! Someone just jumped out of a window!" Pyrrha interrupted, finally getting his attention.

She wasn't lying. Likely a coincidence, but not long after she'd started looking at the CCT Tower, a dark smudge had smashed out of one of the windows on the upper levels—the Communications Centre, if she remembered correctly—and fallen to the ground, out of sight. At best, they were responsible for entering the tower after-hours and a case of damage of public property. At worst… well, as everyone knew, the CCT was foundational to life as they knew it on Remnant. Sabotage, while unlikely, was not out of the possibility.

Pyrrha rose to her feet and pulled out her Scroll, Jaune unsteadily getting up with her.

"What are you doing? Do you need help?" he asked, fumbling for his own Scroll.

Navigating to the application that managed the rocket lockers, Pyrrha shook her head. "No. You go back down, alert Professor Ozpin. I think I saw him on the fringes of the dance floor. I'll head out and… see what's going on, I suppose."

Jaune nodded, then pushed off the side of the roof to slide straight down. Then he fell straight down, with a bit of a girlish scream. Pyrrha felt bad for his pride, somewhat, but rationalized that his embarrassment would likely draw attention, which could be helpful for chaining that into Ozpin's. Plus, when it came to pride, she doubted that Jaune Arc had much left in the eyes of the students of Beacon.

In the meantime, she took off across rooftops, heading towards the site of the yet-to-be-determined crime. A bit of calculation let her obtain her weapons, Miló and Akoúo̱, along the way, with a well-timed rocket locker landing. She'd lost track of the defenestrator's exact location, but she was fairly familiar with Beacon's campus at this point—she knew there were only so many places she could go, so many routes to take to get there. And if she was correct…

There.

A woman in a black bodysuit, with long flowing black hair. And a mask, which couldn't signify anything good. Pyrrha jumped down straight in the woman's path, landing with a clang of her shield on pavement.

"Stop," she announced. "What were you doing at the CCT Tower?"

A wary silence was all that awaited her, an acute gaze. Pyrrha tensed her grip on her weapons. The woman wasn't obviously armed, but… that often didn't mean anything, when it came to Huntresses. Something about this woman made her skin crawl, itch.

"Explain yourself," Pyrrha tried, to no avail. Only more silence awaited her.

…She didn't want to be the aggressor. Maybe there was a good reason for what was going on here.

Pyrrha opened her mouth a third time.

That was the precise moment the woman struck. Pyrrha, not quite unprepared, tracked the distance between them, watched the woman cover it in a worryingly quick frame. Miló transitioned into its javelin form and shot out , almost catching the woman's path, but her foe contorted around it mid-jump, striking her across the face with a bladed heel and forcing her gaze away.

Instinctively, Pyrrha tucked in, brought her shield back towards her, and felt about for any metal she could control with her Semblance. Aside from some public lampposts and a signpost, there was nothing to be found. The woman's heels were made of something that Polarity couldn't touch.

The woman attempted to follow up with more strikes, but she'd lost the element of surprise. Pyrrha hunkered down, keeping her eyes on her opponent. The other woman was faster, which was quite surprising to her, but she wasn't so fast that she could not be reacted to, that Pyrrha couldn't respond to each of her strikes with a parry from Miló, a block with Akoúo̱. A degree beyond, but not a whole league.

Pyrrha came to the realization that, even if she were to lose this fight—a prospect that, while unlikely, was possible—she would still be at an advantage of sorts. This woman was likely a criminal of some sort. And Jaune was currently getting help. Any time she could stall was another second the woman didn't have to spare. Every second closer to reinforcements arriving was valuable.

Her opponent must've realized this as well. A well-timed palm strike, too quick to comfortably avoid, struck her leg, knocked her footing out beneath her. Launching Akoúo̱ into the ground and having it rebound back to her steadied her balance, but it gave the woman just enough time to disengage, to dive through a glass storefront window and shatter it as well.

She seems to enjoy destroying windows, Pyrrha couldn't help but note as she pursued, launching herself forward with the help of rifle recoil.

…Only to find herself in the middle of a storm of glass, a sudden whirlwind spun out of nowhere, slicing at her Aura. No, not nowhere. The window!

The attack came from everywhere at once, unblockable. She gritted her teeth, pushing through, but the scintillating razors continued to slice at her, following her. Pyrrha couldn't see past the wall of rapidly heating shards, as they rose to a fever pitch. This must've been the woman's Semblance.

It took at least another ten seconds to disengage from the whirling menace, after which the storefront ended up utterly trashed. Pyrrha made a mental note to apologize to whomever owned it, but then realized that she'd lost her opponent. The woman had left traces, though. Speckles of that same glass, which must've caught on her suit. Pyrrha quickly followed, though she had little hope that she'd actually find the culprit anymore. She could only hope that Jaune had put together a team quickly enough to catch her on the backend.

The traces of glass, even as they became fewer and fewer, led her straight towards the ballroom, where she ran into Jaune, Nora, Ren, and… huh. Blake?

"Pyrrha?" Jaune gaped. "I thought you said—"

"Yes, I did!" She quickly explained. "I've been tracking her path. She should be…"

A twinkle, on the balcony. The one where Mercury and his partner was! And their team leader!

"Up there!" she finished. Another mighty leap took her straight up, only to be greeted with a truly gruesome sight.

A dark haired woman in a ballroom dress, one that she didn't recognize—their team leader, Pyrrha deduced. Mercury, spattered in blood, cradling his green-haired partner. And his partner, that had been caught with her Aura down, gouged across the face beyond any hope of disguise or recovery. Unconscious. Broken glass glittered across the balcony.

The two remaining members of the Haven team looked up at Pyrrha's landing, eyes wide.

"Did you see… Who in the world was that woman?" Mercury's team leader muttered, tone dead and dull. Like she was in shock. Then she shook her head, as if disbelieving her own curiosity. "No, I frankly do not care. You're chasing her, yes? You're covered in glass."

"Is she alright?" Pyrrha choked out, eyes transfixed by the pooling of blood.

The woman said, "Emerald is tough. She'll be fine. But whoever that was… she hurt a member of my team. Mercury and I will look after her."

She pointed towards the shuttleport.

"She went that way. Avenge my subordinate for me."

Pyrrha was torn. Something about this almost seemed fishy to her… the woman was too calm, Mercury too quiet, the girl too specifically-wounded…

"Pyrrha! Did you see where they went!" Jaune's voice shocked her out of her theorizing, reminded her that, likely, they had no time to lose. The woman was quick. If they didn't chase her, they'd never find her again.

Pyrrha jumped down to rejoin her team.

And so they searched for hours.

But no traces of the mysterious intruder would be found.
 
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Pyrrha was torn. Something about this almost seemed fishy to her… the woman was too calm, Mercury too quiet, the girl too specifically-wounded…
So close, and yet so far...

Also, that Emma text message chain was a complete trainwreck, as expected. Could've been worse, but I doubt any of those messages will accomplish anything.

If Kyoko does end up stopping short of murder, I'm guessing it'll probably be primarily due to a realization of her own character rather than being won over by the others.
 
There be butterflies of Emerald being taken off the board for a while or at least limited capability.
The big fight brutality fakeout and other events are probably a nope here.
good.

Shh fey. Take yer sweet time healing. At least long enough for people to realize it was Cinder, yer so called friend and ally who shred your face, and convince ya to healfaceturn to the light.

....
wait. I was wrong.
Pyrrha was torn. Something about this almost seemed fishy to her… the woman was too calm, Mercury too quiet, the girl too specifically-wounded…
Oh. Oh.

Cinder is reckless, but not enough to hurt her fey minion unneeded.

Of course the fey was not actually injured.
She is master of illusions strong enough to fool a stadium full of people, many with strong willpower.
A few people and a seer/wordsmith peering thru the 4th wall is low level.
Meanwhile, Cinder unseen makes many rude gestures until people nearby allow /are fooled enough for, her and her team including her loyal fey to slink away into the night.
 
Ooh, medium sized butterfly going off right here. First, if Emerald has to pretend to be hurt she can't fight in the tournament either, which doesn't prevent her from using her semblance in the stands, but does mean her team can't fight in the tournament to pull off their specific gambit. Second, the "mysterious figure" was now seen by someone besides Ruby, and was stopped in a public space. While we probably aren't in a fanon "Evil Ozpin bugged every inch of campus to control his students" world, Beacon probably has security cameras they can pull from. Which they probably need to do before the bad guys realize this and use the virus to erase the footage, although that would itself tip their hand their is a virus or hacker working for them.

And his partner, that had been caught with her Aura down
Can this even happen? It's been a while since I've done a dive in Ruby's mechanics, but I remember the whole point of having aura (doyalisticaly) is that the aura is active 24/7 to explain why no one ever has blood stains from sudden fights breaking out to begin with. It's only when the aura breaks during a suitably dramatic moment a person can be hurt to gain a suitable dramatic injury.
 
Can this even happen? It's been a while since I've done a dive in Ruby's mechanics, but I remember the whole point of having aura (doyalisticaly) is that the aura is active 24/7 to explain why no one ever has blood stains from sudden fights breaking out to begin with. It's only when the aura breaks during a suitably dramatic moment a person can be hurt to gain a suitable dramatic injury.

Yeah, after they get Oscar on the team they said that Aura needs a bit of focus to use instead of being 100% autonomous. Presumably it becomes easier the more you practice, but getting caught with your Aura down is possible now.
 
Whoof. Chapter posted by the skin of my teeth. I should prewrite more.

Some quick (and I do mean quick) follow-ups regarding the last couple of responses, and then I'm hoping to move onto a new week.
1 Conflict is necessary for a story, but it needs a release. Having the cast constantly argue, without a full understanding of the situation, and constantly escalating the situation between each other or in their own personal lives makes the story feel frustrating because everything feels like it gets worse all the time.
Yeah, you're on-point. My perspective on this kind of thing might be a little warped--I'm more than willing to read a hundred thousand words of conflict with no end in sight. But catharsis is incoming, and hopefully we'll be mostly resolved by next update.

With that that's out of the way... Hm. I was gonna go on a tangent regarding story identity and what it means to be a 'Conference Call fic', but I'm going to save that for another day, courtesy of your second point here.

The moderator isn't doing their job. I've elaborated on this in the past, but if you think of someone who is connecting worlds together you want someone highly skilled in several fields. They should have the people skills to communicate with various cultures and bridge the gaps between them, the engineering skills to understand their technology, the history and philosophy background to understand their worldviews and beliefs (Among several other fields and talents).

This hearkens back to the original Conference Call, wherein ModThunder is alternately not present or somewhat unhelpful. It's generally pretty clear they mostly know what's going on and what do to do in most circumstances, but they also rarely communicate these things to the Node unless explicitly asked or it becomes pressingly relevant. The Node users, in that fic, treat the Moderator with a strange degree of distance: they trust that ModThunder can probably do any or all the things they say they can or will, but they do not trust them to be helpful. The Moderator is a resource, but not one that is reliable. It's an interesting dichotomy, and it's largely one that's been repeated in most of the Nodefics I've seen, in varying degrees.

In Masterweaver's fic, the Moderator is cheerful, immature, and a bit of a troll. ModSteel seems to act to tick off and confuse the Node members in equal measure, as befits the fic's mostly-lighthearted, mostly-fluffy nature. You can get a good grasp on their personality solely from the intro, where they explicitly cite the Node as a 'plot device' to get up and running. They don't seem to want anything, aside from watching people have an interesting time, and maybe getting them some therapy. They're almost entirely benevolent, but usually aren't all that helpful.

In Iolande's fic, the Moderator is almost a non-entity. ModDog creates the Node, explain the chatroom to Azula, give the Nodemates the ability to summon, and then basically fuck off, aside from expressing concern whenever a user is in danger or such. It'd be fair to call them pretty neutral. They have interest in the characters they're connecting to, but very little interest in expanding the Node, cosmologically speaking. This is likely because Iolande mostly wants to explore how the chat and summoning affects the characters and their worlds above any of the rest of that stuff, but that's just my read of things. All in all, because they don't want much, it's hard to judge how competent they are at what they want to do.

In Pink Fluffy Cat's fic, the Moderator is actively attempting to be helpful, but is constrained by a nebulous superior and their own lack of resources. In a sense, you could say ModBunny is actually the inverse of ModThunder--they know what's going on and are very forthcoming about that information, but outside circumstances constrain them such that they are unable to act on it for the most part. They have the goal of making cosmological contexts more similar and are acting on it to the best of their ability. I assume most of their time is spent offscreen filling out cosmological 1040's.

There's a couple more CC fics that barely got off the ground I'll go over in brief. In Pachy's Conference Quest, there are two Moderators--both acting with full intent to expand their Nodes and help their Users, but constrained by the fact that they are in conflict with each other. In EtchJetty's Power of a Princess, the Moderator does act something like a small child, but with sincerity and genuine desire to make a good impression. Very recently, we've received a Conference Call: Evil Parent Support Group from Z. R. Stein, whose Moderator seems pretty self-aware, all things considered, but committed to their bit as just a plot device. There's also TSK's Dig Two Graves I suppose, but that fic seems to break from format quite a bit, so I won't count it.

Common thread?

Theorem: The Moderator can have almost any personality, with almost any character traits you want to ascribe to them, so long as they do not overshadow the characters in the Node, and can adequately facilitate interactions between those characters.

My take with ModScarlet is undoubtedly inspired by each and everyone of these Mods (except for the ones I wasn't aware of when I started writing this fic). But I might be pushing the boundaries of that theorem later on; we'll see. In other words: yeah, Tiz is completely correct, it makes little sense for the Mod to be this incompetent. But there's certainly precedent, and I do plan on going into it at some point. If it strains your suspension of disbelief too much, I'm gonna try and invoke the grandfather clause.
 
Thank you for the very detailed response. There is no perfect way to manage tension for readers due to different people having different levels of tolerance. What for some people feels like an appropriate length for a conflict, may to others feel like the plot was resolved too soon with too little thought about the confict put into the plot. While conversely what feels like the appropriate level of tension for others might cause some readers to believe the conflict has dragged out too long and stopped caring about it due to darkness induced apathy.
This hearkens back to the original Conference Call, wherein ModThunder is alternately not present or somewhat unhelpful. It's generally pretty clear they mostly know what's going on and what do to do in most circumstances, but they also rarely communicate these things to the Node unless explicitly asked or it becomes pressingly relevant. The Node users, in that fic, treat the Moderator with a strange degree of distance: they trust that ModThunder can probably do any or all the things they say they can or will, but they do not trust them to be helpful. The Moderator is a resource, but not one that is reliable. It's an interesting dichotomy, and it's largely one that's been repeated in most of the Nodefics I've seen, in varying degrees.

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Common thread?

Theorem: The Moderator can have almost any personality, with almost any character traits you want to ascribe to them, so long as they do not overshadow the characters in the Node, and can adequately facilitate interactions between those characters.

My take with ModScarlet is undoubtedly inspired by each and everyone of these Mods (except for the ones I wasn't aware of when I started writing this fic). But I might be pushing the boundaries of that theorem later on; we'll see. In other words: yeah, Tiz is completely correct, it makes little sense for the Mod to be this incompetent. But there's certainly precedent, and I do plan on going into it at some point. If it strains your suspension of disbelief too much, I'm gonna try and invoke the grandfather clause.
I recognize the moderator can kind of be anyone or anything that's needed. I really like Conference Call style fics, and I've read them all, so I'm aware that each one's moderators have different strengths and weaknesses. In my offhand "I commented on this before" I was referring to this comment
I have a few different thoughts about the moderators. The first consideration is simply that I have always felt moderators in Node stories are idiots to facilitate the plot. Why wasn't there an option to decline joining the node? "I didn't think of adding one" [Snip]
I simply start listing odd things moderators do in various stories, however I make sure to start with the OG, mistake of not having an off button. So yes the grandfather clause is definitely applicable here. You seem to have put a lot of thought into how this works and I appreciate your level of forethought. I look forward to seeing where the story goes.
 
Hi. So, no update this week. I tried rushing out the last couple thousand words a couple hours before my deadline. But upon a last-minute reread, edit run, it came off as flat, low-quality. Not something I could fix within a couple of minutes. My procrastination tendencies have come back to bite me in the ass. It's made worse by the fact that this next chapter is a pretty major milestone—first full character PoV, a resolution to the first arc. What I had was not up to my standards. It's gonna need some more time to cook. Apologies, but it'll be delayed until next Friday.

So in lieu of an update, I'm here to present some research, some accounting.

Recently, I learned that all PMMM episode titles are quotes taken directly out of their respective episodes. There's a question to be asked there regarding chicken and egg, horses pulling wagons, but regardless: that neatly solves my chapter titling problem on the Madoka front. I've also finally started watching Magia Record's cutscenes, as has turned out to be necessary for verifying characterization. Man… this gacha game has some competent animators, I think I'll say. Story-wise… it's slightly questionable. Still, that's what we've got, so that's where I'll go. Plus, while I can see why people give it flak, there's been some pretty good moments in this Magical Girl funhouse!

Finally, a couple of people made some claims regarding wordcount and screentime. It made me curious, so I went back and did that bit of Orwellian accounting to determine who, exactly, had the highest word count, whether or not I cared, and so on. Following are the results:



The first and most obviously pressing issue is that the supposed total word count is larger than the number of words that Spacebattles claims. This is because of a somewhat fixable formatting issue. I calculated word count by highlighting a whole chapter section in Google Docs, and grabbing the figure I see there. Mostly reasonable, I'd like to think

The issue therein is that my finalized ready-for-posting documents look something like this:



BBCode Formatting, everybody! In other words, the word count in Nodes gets buffered and exaggerated somewhat, courtesy of the mandatory formatting tags. This is especially prevalent when a character is present that posts frequently with small amounts of text. This is true for the entire sample, though, so I don't think it should overly distort accurate word count. Also, I'm not 100% certain that this is the issue? Let me know if I'm missing something more obvious.

Secondly, if we otherwise assume the spreadsheet is at least accurate as a point of comparison… I'm surprised that Kyoko actually currently has the smallest PoV word count among the cast, aside from Emma. And this is with her sections actually being overrepresented, courtesy of her PoV usually featuring more Node sections than most.

Pyrrha currently has a sizable lead. That is partially due to her recent chapter, but more probably simply due to the fact that she tends to vomit words all over the page whenever she's in-focus. Yuri is in second for a similar reason: her sections tend to be a bit flowery. Undyne and Kyoko, by contrast, tend to be more on the 'short and sweet' side of things when it comes to writing style. One-liners and pithy descriptions.

This says nothing about the actual amount of spotlight shining on any given character, for the record. You can have a lot of focus on a single character without them having much word count. And you can cover very little ground with a character despite what should be sizable paragraphs about them by including a lot of drivel and prose.

I just thought this was interesting.

Anyway. All that said... see you next week! Apologies, once again, for the lack of chapter.
 
Chapter 11: One Choice to Make

Chapter 11: One Choice to Make


Kyoko couldn't help but wonder, sometimes: when was the last time she'd prayed to God? When was the last time she'd really, genuinely, tried to talk to, with, the Lord up above? Not just dropped His name as a swear word or mockingly sent Witches to Him.

It wasn't as if she'd stopped believing, or so she'd like to think. She'd been raised better than that. She'd just… gained perspective. Yeah.

Sayin' that they had a complicated relationship was either overstating it or understating it, depending on your point a' view. Would be arrogant to claim that God gave any more of a whit of His infinite time and care about some random Japanese girl than every other in the world. But if He was supposed to be looking after her like her father'd said, then He'd been doing a pretty lousy job, ain't that right? Given how hard she'd tried, the happy dream she'd chased—the dream He'd denied her… God couldn't blame her for being a bit ungrateful, could He?

The very thought was probably heretical. Kyoko couldn't find it in her to care.



Okay, that was a lie. She did care. She really did care. She'd really like to know if He was watching, whether to smite or to bless. To know if He was judging her right this instant.

The Lord was the closest thing she had left to family left on this earth. Closest thing to a father other than her actual father. Hell, He played that role in the scripture, didn't He? That, the Son, and the Holy Spirit, if she was remembering correctly? So…

If He really was watching… she wanted to know what He'd thought. If He approved.

Kyoko wanted to know if she'd made the right decision.






Alright, Kyubey. Who'm I dealing with?

Kyoko wasn't thinking about much. Nothing important. Combat strategy. The simple motions of spear and body. A fierce torrent of not-thoughts ran through her brain. She could drown in them. Drown everything else out.

A girl named Tsuruno Yui. She utilizes fire magic in the form of fans in combat.

The girl hadn't been far. She was just as Kyubey said. Yui Tsuruno was clad in orange and white, bright and cheery. Her weapons, those fans, were held at her side. They weren't active, at the moment, but something about the way the air spiraled around her, the scent of smoke and echoed heat of a once-present blaze verified Kyubey's report. Not that he was known for lying in the first place, but it couldn't hurt to make sure.

The other Magical Girl hadn't quite been expecting her at this moment, Kyoko could tell. There was surprise in her eyes, but not her response. She'd been expecting
someone at some point. Whoever was in charge of this area. Her, in other words.

Yui made the first move. "Hello! I'm Tsuruno Yui, from Kamihama City! The Mightiest Magical Girl!"

"Kyoko Sakura," she replied bluntly. "You say you're from Kamihama? What's someone from so far away doin' in Kazamino City, huh?"

The other girl scratched her hair, right above a flower-shaped hair ornament. Embarrassed. "Well… evil needs to be fought with justice, right? My hometown's been peaceful, but Magical Girls have a duty! I wanted to promote my family's restaurant, and I wanted to fight a Witch!"

Kyoko could read between the lines. Kamihama was going through a drought. And the girl needed Grief Seeds. Survival. Unless your name was Mami Tomoe, that usually was the name of the game.

"Speaking of which, I just slammed down a REALLY big one! A massive, ugly Witch! You won't need to deal with it anymore!"

"Mhm... What makes you think I
needed help, hm? Kinda sounds like you think you're doin' me a favor. Helpin' me out."

Kyoko smiled, all red edges and hard lines.

"Whatcha gonna do if I don't see it the same way? 'Cause, my point of view... you came in 'ere, fans blazing. And started poachin'."

Kyoko gave her spear a twirl, a stylish show of force. The other girl's smile didn't let up. So not-pale, maintained such a facade of confidence. No one was that naive in the face of such an obvious threat. It kinda felt to Kyoko that she honestly wasn't all that sure of her situation at all. Miss Yui's Soul Gem was prolly pretty dark right now. Probably pretty desperate to brave her turf, to try and negotiate.

"Well… If you do see it that way, then I'm so sorry! I didn't mean it!" Yui said. Still not panicked. Still cheerful. Kinda grated on Kyoko's nerves, and they were rubbed a bit raw to begin with.

"I still have this Grief Seed from the Witch I beat! I haven't even used it yet, on my family's honor! We can share it! Is that okay with you, Sakura?"

Preaching peace. Wasn't that a riot. How'd that Psalms verse go again? Do good? Seek and pursue peace?

"Guess Kamihama's not the kinda place where you hack each other up to steal territory," Kyoko mused aloud.

She wasn't thinking. She didn't want peace. Conflict was simple. Win. Lose. Just 'cause she could've compromised… didn't mean she was gonna.

"Not how things work here. Here's what's gonna happen."

Finally. A spark of something. Yui took a step back. Raised her fans.

"I'm gonna beat you down hard enough you won't be able to get up again. And from there…"

Kyoko levelled her spear. Sighted her target down the shaft. Fire in her soul, a beckoning blaze.

She shot herself forward.

Crack of a bullet.

The spear that would send her to Heaven.

"...From there, we'll get started!"







Yeah. And as far as fights had gone, it wasn't close. The so-called "Mightiest Magical Girl" wasn't unskilled, wasn't quite weak. Clearly, she had some experience, some training. Maybe even an ex-senpai of her own. But that senpai had been no Mami Tomoe, and by extension that theory of a girl's kouhai fell even further from that ideal. Meanwhile, Kyoko Sakura, despite herself, had always held herself up to that standard, found herself looping back, trailing back towards those stupid yellow hair drills.

Down in Kamihama, who knew? Maybe Tsuruno Yui was the mightiest there was.

Not here. Not in Kazamino.

In the end, with so many things predetermined, there really was only one choice to make.

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Kyoko: Ugh.
Undyne: KYOKO!
Pyrrha: Kyoko!
Pyrrha: Are you alright?
Kyoko: Eh.
Kyoko: You should see the other girl.
Kyoko: …She's still alive, for the record.
Kyoko: …Hate it, but you guys were right.
Kyoko: I'm just not spiteful enough.
Kyoko: Not ruthless enough to execute someone helpless and at my mercy.
Kyoko: I just… couldn't do it.







Yui's defense wasn't half-bad, when she put her all into it. Fans were made of sturdier stuff than they looked, as with all Magical Girl weapons. And they covered a pretty large area. Wending strikes were deflected, dodged.

Didn't matter. Restaurant-girl didn't have
power. Couldn't fight back without leaving herself wide open. No more tricksy playing around.

Tack switch. Kyoko hammered strike after strike into Yui's center of mass. Lightning quick. Left no room to dodge.

Block. Block. Block.

Shatter.

The other Magical Girl's arm gave out, snapped under the strain. Magical Girls could recover from worse, Kyoko knew. In that moment of pain and shock, she took Yui through the opposite shoulder.


That would do it.

Kyoko slowly levered her opponent into the air, watching her futile efforts to dislodge herself. Sparks sputtered and died as she tried and failed to launch a counterattack. Her spear, coated in blood, pointed just above the horizon, Magical Girl impaled upon it.

Drip. Drip. Drip.

It would be… child's play. To slash her apart, shoulder to sternum. Disable her for good, while she found and crushed her Soul Gem. And burned the remains. What was a little more red against Kyoko's dress? What was a little more fuel for the fire?

She'd seen the messages left to her by the Node. None of it stuck. This wasn't an
inconvenience; it was something she wanted to do. Anyone who still thought she was a hero, a so-called 'good person'... clearly they hadn't been paying attention. Even the plea that came out of the blue, the one from so-called emma… what had other people ever done for her? What was wrong with the strong dominating the weak? That was just the nature of things. Predator and prey.

Tsuruno Yui was weak. Kyoko oughta put her out of her misery. It was what she'd said she'd do. Kyoko Sakura was no liar. The girl was still struggling, with a weak smile on her face. But there was no world in which she got down by herself. Not with a shoulder destroyed and an arm broken.

"Ugh… Sakura. Do me a favor, please? Before you—"

Another attempt to wrench herself off ended in failure, cutting off Tsuruno's wet rattle; must've clipped a lung. Kyoko tapped her foot impatiently.

"Tell my dad… what happened? Please? His address… is on the flyers. In my uniform."

"He know you're a Magical Girl?" Kyoko asked, eyebrow raised.

"No!" Yui tried for a chuckle, which came out more as a hacking cough. "But… he'll be so worried. I don't want him… to worry."

Kyoko didn't say anything.

An afterthought occurred to the other Magical Girl. "Oh! And… if you're there… try out our mapo tofu! It's the house special! Guaranteed—"


Shinnk. Thud.

"He doesn't have to know," Kyoko found herself saying. Her own voice felt far away. "The knowledge could destroy him. Take it from someone who knows what happens."

A cough. "...Sakura…"

Kyoko fished out a Grief Seed, half-consumed. Flipped it in Yui's direction, watched it clink along the ground towards the Magical Girl with no means to catch it.

"You wanna tell him? Do it yourself. And if you don't… make sure he
never finds out."

A forlorn smile, unconsciously adopted, morphed into a vicious snarl.

"Now get the Hell out of my city. Don't ever come back."







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Pyrrha: That is good to hear. A great weight off my shoulders.
Kyoko: Okay, why the Hell?
Kyoko: Seriously, I don't get this.
Kyoko: What do you care 'bout what I do?
Pyrrha: I believe it is time to put a certain misunderstanding to rest.
Pyrrha: You seem to believe I am a "college girl".
Pyrrha: That I am spouting off a soapbox, with nothing of substance behind my words.
Pyrrha: …In a sense, that is true.
Pyrrha: I am only a Huntress-in-training, after all.
Undyne: I KNEW IT!!!
Pyrrha: …What.
Kyoko: ???


Seriously?

Kyoko rolled back through the chat's history. Leafing through Pyrrha's messages. And… welp. In hindsight, it should've been damned obvious. Look, it was kinda hard to dislodge an assumption once you'd made it, okay? And, technically, Pyrrha hadn't actually said anything to disprove that she was anything more than an ordinary university student until now. She wasn't an idiot for thinking it!

Still embarrassing.

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Undyne: Oops.
Undyne: Sorry, carry on.
Pyrrha: …As I was saying.
Pyrrha: I don't have much in terms of tangible benefaction at the moment.
Pyrrha: But it is my sworn duty to protect.
Pyrrha: To act as a beacon of humanity.
Pyrrha: And to combat those that would do harm.
Pyrrha: Your actions may be your own, but I do not think I could live with myself if I were to allow someone innocent to die.
Pyrrha: Not when I could have done something to prevent it.
Yuri: …
Undyne: Oh, hey Yuri!
Kyoko: You…
Kyoko: You really are a freakin' goody-two-shoes, ain't'cha?
Kyoko: Dammit.
Pyrrha: I'm fine with being called as such as long as you don't act antithetically to one.
Pyrrha: I hope we will be able to get along more smoothly from here on out.
Kyoko: Yeah.
Kyoko: I'll try.
Yuri: I am… glad that this has been resolved to some satisfaction.
Yuri: I would prefer if we all got along from here on forward.
Yuri: And to accomplish this…
Yuri: …It has been my experience.
Yuri: That humans rarely tend to simply get along without rules to follow.
Yuri: Lines that shouldn't be crossed.
Pyrrha: You wish for us to set boundaries?
Yuri: …Sure.
Undyne: Alright. Rule One!
Undyne: NO DYING!
Pyrrha: …???
Undyne: I have it on good authority that kicking the bucket SUCKS!
Undyne: So don't.
Undyne: Plain and simple.
Kyoko: That something that really needs to be said?
Undyne: Probably!
Undyne: Though I'll make an exception just for you, Kyoko!
Kyoko: As if I'd die.
Yuri: We might not all have a choice… but I'm sure we will all try our best.
Undyne: You guys BETTER!
Yuri: As a tentative rule two…
Yuri: We all live in different worlds.
Yuri: Live with different standards, unique things considered "normal".
Yuri: The way the Node seems to work, comparison is inevitable, and yet…
Yuri: I would ask that we all attempt to keep the contexts of our… contexts in mind.
Yuri: To avoid judging too harshly, prematurely.
Yuri: Those that dwell within the light may find it difficult to perceive the shadow they leave behind.
Yuri: And those that live in darkness can be blinded by the light.
Yuri: Am I making sense?


Hm.

So Yuri wasn't saying anything insane or anything. Hell, the example they'd just gone through meant someone was probably gonna bring this up sometime or another. Maybe it woulda been Pyrrha, or Undyne. And maybe Kyoko, a girl not known much for thinking, was overthinking this over much. But on top of bein' hungry (munch munch though not anymore), her gut was rarely wrong. And right now, her gut was saying that Yuri was… um. Lying wasn't quite the right word, but…

See, check this. Say you had an empty closet. And an acquaintance poking around your house. You probably wouldn't be against them sticking their nose about into your sorry excuse for a clothes-holder, would'ya? Worst they can do is poke fun atcha for not having anything to wear.

Now. Say you've got one or more corpses in that closet. As many as you fancy. Skeletons or not. And if that sama's still poking around… might be inclined to warn 'em away from your bedroom, right? Say you want your privacy, and sound perfectly reasonable doing it. Who'd object to a bit of privacy? And if that acquaintance started pushing? All of a sudden, they'd be the unreasonable one.

Kyoko wasn't going to say anything. Yuri could have her boundaries, her privacy. She'd follow the rules set up, lest she get into more conflict with the other members of the Node, who were frankly probably fed up with her antics. But she wouldn't forget, and if corpses came tumbling out of Yuri's closet… she'd be ready.

Rules were made to protect those with something to hide, after all.

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Pyrrha: That seems fair.
Pyrrha: I will refrain from acting rashly or hastily, if I can avoid it.
Undyne: Oh?
Undyne: Finally, with Pyrrha out of the way, I can kill all the humans I want!
Pyrrha: …Ah. I would prefer if you didn't?...
Undyne: Kidding!
Undyne: Well, mostly.
Undyne: We only need one more, anyway.
Kyoko: Sure, okay.
Yuri: If we're all agreed, then one final question.
Yuri: Moderator, are you there?
ModScarlet: Yeah.
Yuri: Can you be trusted to help us enforce these rules?
Yuri: And to moderate in case of ambiguity, as your name suggests?
ModScarlet: Uh.
Pyrrha: Good thinking, Yuri.
ModScarlet: Yeah, I guess!
ModScarlet: Sure!
ModScarlet: Don't expect too much, though.
Kyoko: If it helps, I don't.
ModScarlet: …Right.
Yuri: If there's anything else that needs discussing, we can always follow-up later.
Yuri: Otherwise… I have some work to do at the Office.
Yuri: I hope to talk to all of you later.
Pyrrha: Meeting adjourned?
Undyne: Wait, this was a meeting?
Yuri: Meeting adjourned.
Kyoko: See ya.


That'd gone better than Kyoko had hoped.

And now… to deal with a certain "newcomer"...






Emma sighed.

She'd been anticipating this moment for what felt like a long time. Ever since she'd reached out to ModScarlet. Not quite since the formation of the Node. There was this sense of dread, anticipation. Reaching for something new, yet a return to form.

There was a science to first impressions. Levers and buttons, conscious or otherwise, that could be pulled, pushed. Clothing, body language, eye contact. She'd once had an innate talent for this, bolstered by years of practice and analysis. A spot of research for her modeling career, in attempts to stand out to directors and talent seekers. It'd been easy for her to walk into a room and command its attention. And in many ways, she still had a knack for it. She'd atrophied, a social muscle disused for more than a year, but Emma was still fairly certain that unless a situation involved—

Flinch

Emma flinched. A full-body shudder. Her eyes tore away from the nothing-in-particular, shut tight. Buzzing filled her ears, her skin crawled. It was like every thought in her head jolted to a sudden stop, derailing and shattering.

A mental breakdown.

To face the outside world… she… she just couldn't. Composure was king. Like, she could put on a passable front for, like, a couple minutes? Maybe an hour at a time on a good day? But inevitably…

There was a reason she hadn't left her room in more than a year.

Deep breaths. In. Out. Pull yourself together.

It took her a couple of minutes of blind, seemingly timeless reorganization, of rethinking and reconstructing. She'd gotten better at this, too, piecing her thoughts back together after an episode, trying to start again back where she'd left off. Early on…

No. Not a good place to go. It had been worse, and she'd leave it at that.

Where was she? Right. First impressions.

In text, in the Node, there were so many fewer factors. Only the context of her words. The speed at which she sent them. So many things that would otherwise be considerations… weren't. From what she could tell, the "/inputFlow" function, even as it showed every facet of a Node member's senses, only showed singular instants, infinitesimally brief snapshots.

Text could be edited, polished, perfected. An image could be taken in the best possible lighting, from angles that hid imperfections and accentuated details.

Emma, at this point, all but lived on the internet. The fact that emotion and subtext were lost in translation was not unfamiliar to her.

Private Channel with Kyoko
Kyoko: Alright. Now that that's all taken care of…
Kyoko: Time to take care of you.
Kyoko: Emma, huh.
Kyoko: You've been here this whole time?
Kyoko: Without saying anything?
Kyoko: The Hell?


At the present moment, it was her only lifeline.

Kyoko… Kyoko's behavior was painfully familiar to Emma. The mannerisms, the philosophy, the anger, the hardness. It was all Sophia. Shadow Stalker.

Sure, the Magical Girl was Japanese. More Christian, if the way she capitalized 'God' was any indication. And her fashion sense was less, like, emo? Edgy, reeking of delinquency, but not dark, not ashy smoke. But at heart? Kyoko Sakura and Sophia Hess…

Thinking of her former friend hurt. Not nearly as much as a certain other one. But there were regrets there, and they stabbed at the fringes of her withered conscience.

Sophia… maybe she was looking back with an imperfect lens. But some part of her wondered if their relationship was destined to end with words meant to hurt and prisons of their own making. If there were a point in time where she could have changed things, made a different choice.

…In other words, she was relieved. Relieved that Kyoko hadn't made Sophia's mistakes. Hearing of the deaths Shadow Stalker had caused had made her feel squirmy inside, though it hadn't been enough to persuade her to change.

Maybe it was a small thing, in truth. But it felt larger in her mind.

Anyways. Time for a response long overdue.

Time for a test run.

Private Channel with Kyoko
emma: ye
emma: sorry about that.
emma: Im not exactly…
emma: sure of myself most of the time anymore.
emma: wasnt sure if this was, like
emma: a hallucination.
emma: seemed too weird to be real.
emma: and by the time I was sure it wasnt
emma: it was, like,
emma: awkward?
Kyoko: You've been quietly sitting, watching us, without a peep.
Kyoko: For days.
Kyoko: And you didn't speak up because it was awkward.
emma: p much.


It was a half-truth. There'd been time, between processing the Node's existence and her role in it, for her to approach the other members before hitting the awkward point. She'd chosen not to engage. Half-remembered Master-Stranger advice from Sophia encouraged her to observe and analyze.

Should've contacted the PRT, actually.

But that certainly wasn't happening anytime soon.

From there, she'd tried to learn as much as she could. Reached out to the Moderator, gotten what she could out of them. Looked up names and gotten some matching results, though they were probably only coincidental. And finally, planned her ultimate approach to the group.

Emma was at a disadvantage now. Everyone else had already established a rapport, gained common ground, banded into loose pairings. Yuri and Pyrrha, acting together to reign in chaos and bring the more enthusiastic among them down to earth. Kyoko and Undyne, despite their seemingly adversarial position; they'd mostly settled down into semi-friendly ribbing, if she was reading the toneless text correctly. She'd be working her way in from the outside.

But gaining a greater understanding of the Node had been a worthwhile trade, in her eyes.

Private Channel with Kyoko
Kyoko: Ah, you're kidding me.
Kyoko: You're test.
Kyoko: You were the one I was talking to, at the start of the Node.
Kyoko: I thought it was Yuri, dammit.
emma: ye.
emma: rip.
emma: tbh, Id kinda intended to, like
emma: keep staying quiet?
emma: since everyone was ignoring me.
emma: but the stuff u were saying
emma: I couldnt ignore it.
emma: so here we are.


The character she was trying to portray here… it needed to be a balance. Enough truth that she could shift seamlessly away from her current vulnerability. Half-lies enough to convincingly show that vulnerability.

Even though I am vulnerable... I need to lie in order to show it.

If Emma was reading the room correctly, Kyoko was the most paranoid, least trusting girl. Convincing her would be a good indicator she'd be able to convince everyone else, for the most part.

Private Channel with Kyoko
Kyoko: …Right.
Kyoko: So who're you?
Kyoko: What are your powers?
emma: I was hoping to tell everyone at once.
emma: give the rundown to everybody.
emma: but it couldn't hurt to tell you early.
emma: Im emma barnes.
emma: and I dont have any.
Kyoko: No kidding.
emma: im an ordinary human.
Kyoko: Don't even have a super-physique like fighters in video games?
emma: uh
emma: no?
emma: all of you are way stronger than me.
Kyoko: Damn.
Kyoko: Welp. Do whatever you want then.
Kyoko: Send me a picture later, or something.


Way more muted than I was expecting.

It was a good sign, Emma liked to think.

She'd make her full debut when she was ready. Gather a run-down on the situation on Earth Bet. Be as absolutely helpful as possible, with her limited resources and ability.

She'd been a victim of her own insecurities, her mistakes for… far too long. She would've been one for even longer, if not for the Node. Hopefully. Hopefully. This time, she'd prove herself a survivor instead.
 
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I'm glad to see this back. I have but one question which I might have missed since it's been so long.
It would be… child's play. To slash her apart, shoulder to sternum. Disable her for good, while she found and crushed her Soul Gem.
When did Kyoko figure out what a Soul Gem was, and you had to crush it to kill a Magical Girl? I remember further back in the thread there was talk of soul dynamics, but part of the irony was Kyoko didn't know what she was talking about.
 
I'm glad to see this back. I have but one question which I might have missed since it's been so long.

When did Kyoko figure out what a Soul Gem was, and you had to crush it to kill a Magical Girl? I remember further back in the thread there was talk of soul dynamics, but part of the irony was Kyoko didn't know what she was talking about.

The logic could just be simple as "she can't regen without magic, no gem equals no magic."
 
Yay, new chapter!
I wonder if Kyoko is letting Emma off easy because of the new rule on assumptions and how she resolved to act on it rather than because Emma convinced her she wasn't suspicious.
I liked how Kyoko looked at Yuri's attempt to preempt some drama and immediately assumed she had something to hide, though I admit Yuri fucking off as soon as her proposed rule was adopted means I also find her suspicious.
Undyne's very pointed rule proposal followed by teasing/probing Pyrrha with the 'joke' about killing all the humans was pretty funny.
Finally It's interesting that Emma's take on honesty include some manipulation and I wonder if building a friendship or herself back up (whichever comes first) would be enough to get her to drop the pretenses. It's good that she resolved to take a more active role.

Shad been expecting someone at some point.
She'd
And if that sama's still poking around
Same person?
 
Considering the story, most world's powers can exist in worm-verse with very little maintenance, Aura would probably require maintenance or be significantly nerfed to internal expressions only + no magic crystals and DETERMINATION is 100% out.

Magical girls are fine basically anywhere since they are product of soft science and are of equal bullshit as shards from worm.

Though to be fair, soul powers could be apread around to increase the softness of physics and eventually allow full on actual magic to work.


Question, is there any Conference atory that actually got anywhere or are they all dead\hiatus\update once in a blue moon after a solar eclipse?
 
Man, I'm starting to realize- the title of the story isn't just for Emma. Reading about Kyoko about to murder some innocent cinnamon bun of a magical girl just to prove a point, lifting her impaled body on a pike, watching her struggle and wriggle about, contemplating how easy it would be to wrench the blade out and tear her in half before burning her corpse-

I mean, I sympathize with her backstory. But on the other hand, there's no denying that Kyoko is sort of that guy right now.

Also, that "Try our Mapo Tofu" line was straight gold. I know it's unlikely, but I hope to see this character again someday.
 
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