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Stella Imperium said:
Just to let everyone know that this is not dead, but instead will be going into a full rewrite after the plot and original resources where lost on my old Laptop which died on me.
The universe list will under go changes as well once the plot has been established, however I can tell you that it will Start in the SGU universe and will work its way from there into other universes.
Thank you for your patience.
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Okay.
Any chance of one of the universes being Detroit game?
 
Stella Imperium said:
Just to let everyone know that this is not dead, but instead will be going into a full rewrite after the plot and original resources where lost on my old Laptop which died on me.
The universe list will under go changes as well once the plot has been established, however I can tell you that it will Start in the SGU universe and will work its way from there into other universes.
Thank you for your patience.
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Have you tried saving it's harddrive?
It's how I still have most of my files & web adresses, you know.

And see about keeping Noble Team alive, including Dot, if you redo the universe hopping into Halo.
Mass Effect could be funny as well, the cityship might fit inside that ring of the Citadel, with all the causes that such a thing will thus cause.
And yeah, both Mass Effect & Babylon 5can use a Ancient styled cityship in order to keep the alien ego's down.
Just think of Atlantis being in either of them, controlled by a human via a control system that has a biological lock on it and then the (hull) age.
O, their ancestors where first ones??? (slight freak out happening)
Macross/Robotech, Star Wars, Star Trek, Andromeda, Battlestar Galactica. Gundam (pick your serie or is it series?) and lots more.
Vianca said:
Starting a bit strong, would it not have been better to start as a BioCylon (nBSG) and/or maybe the major (Ghost in the Shell)?
Then a little trip to the Star Wars Universe, before even touching Stargate?
It would keep the overkill a bit limited and lets you setup your SI for some real trouble in Halo, Macross/Robotech, Starcraft, Mass Effect, ect, ect.

Which when I think about it, is probably why almost nobody starts as a Asuran.
Might I suggest you visit Arpeggio of Blue Steel or Aoki Hagane no Arpeggio.
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Still think this old review of mine might potentially be usefull for this rewrite your currently are talking about, lets you more easily crop in some slightly lower scale setting without too much problems.
Gundam Age, Gundam 00 and Gundam Seed are four very nice gundam settings, if you start as a nBSG BioCylon, you could use a miss-jump to start the universe hopping.
Then slowely upgrading your body to something that can run for a long time, without the risk of a biological break down (death).
And the best part of using nBSG as a starting point?
It lets you use some small craft equipped with a jumpdrive, like a Heavy Raider or a Raptor.

Then you can abuse the event that turned Doctor Weir into a Asuran, a little later on.
Would also give you a good reason to introduce some tech restrictions after such a conversion.
 
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edboy49 said:
Okay.
Any chance of one of the universes being Detroit game?
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Maybe, though I don't own a PlayStation console, so I will be going off on what I have watched on youtube.

Vianca said:
Have you tried saving it's harddrive?
It's how I still have most of my files & web adresses, you know.

And see about keeping Noble Team alive, including Dot, if you redo the universe hopping into Halo.
Mass Effect could be funny as well, the cityship might fit inside that ring of the Citadel, with all the causes that such a thing will thus cause.
And yeah, both Mass Effect & Babylon 5can use a Ancient styled cityship in order to keep the alien ego's down.
Just think of Atlantis being in either of them, controlled by a human via a control system that has a biological lock on it and then the (hull) age.
O, their ancestors where first ones??? (slight freak out happening)
Macross/Robotech, Star Wars, Star Trek, Andromeda, Battlestar Galactica. Gundam (pick your serie or is it series?) and lots more.

Still think this old review of mine might potentially be usefull for this rewrite your currently are talking about, lets you more easily crop in some slightly lower scale setting without too much problems.
Gundam Age, Gundam 00 and Gundam Seed are four very nice gundam settings, if you start as a nBSG BioCylon, you could use a miss-jump to start the universe hopping.
Then slowely upgrading your body to something that can run for a long time, without the risk of a biological break down (death).
And the best part of using nBSG as a starting point?
It lets you use some small craft equipped with a jumpdrive, like a Heavy Raider or a Raptor.

Then you can abuse the event that turned Doctor Weir into a Asuran, a little later on.
Would also give you a good reason to introduce some tech restrictions after such a conversion.
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I'm sorry but I haven't watched anything to do with Gundam but your old post has been used with the plot.
I will drop a hint Alteran Body enhanced with Nanites.

Additionally a new chapter will be dropping in about a day or two.
 
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Is there a particular reason why your si is female? It says on your profile that you are male.

Also you are an asuran. You can change your form at will.


As for legitimate concerns, you might want to cut down on the menus. It makes the story really hard to read. It also might be a good idea to male it so the readers and si dont know what universe they are in until they make first contact or see something they recognize.

I would also suggest rather than having rob restrict things, that you only give yourself what the asuran would normally have.

It might also be a good idea to order the universes by how powerful they are, unless you want to pull a dritch eventually and restrict yourself to the local techbases.

Also the story kind of reads like a list. There hasnt been any real exploration or wonder at what is going on, which is always something nice to see.


On a separate note, are there any BOLO SI multicross series? Because beyond 2 worm crossovers, one of which being dead, I havent seen anything.
 
Astrobot said:
Is there a particular reason why your si is female? It says on your profile that you are male.

Also you are an asuran. You can change your form at will.


As for legitimate concerns, you might want to cut down on the menus. It makes the story really hard to read. It also might be a good idea to male it so the readers and si dont know what universe they are in until they make first contact or see something they recognize.

I would also suggest rather than having rob restrict things, that you only give yourself what the asuran would normally have.

It might also be a good idea to order the universes by how powerful they are, unless you want to pull a dritch eventually and restrict yourself to the local techbases.

Also the story kind of reads like a list. There hasnt been any real exploration or wonder at what is going on, which is always something nice to see.


On a separate note, are there any BOLO SI multicross series? Because beyond 2 worm crossovers, one of which being dead, I havent seen anything.
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On the new rewrite at some point that particular question will be answered
as for this version of the self insert the plot had a load of holes in it which have been improved in the new one.
 
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