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I've gotchu in my sights! Also I'd like to suggest metal gear solid series for their use of nanomachines especially those HF blades, I figured that those world would be a good starting universe to invade imo.
 
I've got to ask are you going to do Warhammer 40 K I really need to know it's a really good series but it's okay if you don't have to also I was wondering if you can make your chapters a bit longer
 
Chapter 2
Updates to Fanfiction.net will be posted after I have made sure there are no mistakes.
I would like to thank everyone for the help they have provided me with so far.
More will be added onto the list of universes at later dates as I go through my movies, books and games. Plus as for the Percy Jackson Series I don't know why I added it to the list, does divine tech even exist.
I was asked if Athena could turn other people into Asuran's and the answer is yes she can, but she won't useless they ask her to due to Human morals. When I enter the Harry Potter universe I might convert Harry into an Asuran to save him from his aunt.

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[THREE DAYS SINCE ARRIVAL. ]
So it has been three days already and I have learnt a lot about the Zero Point Energy generator, to kick-start the generator you need a lot of power about fifty Z.P.M's and then the by-product exotic energy is converted to anti-matter. Which is then contained in a pocket dimension.
But I don't have any way of using anti-matter yet so that is useless. The Ancients probably did, however considering Asuran tech is less advanced then the Ancients. It stands to reason that the Ancients never gave the Asuran's the complete database, so a trip to the Star Trek universe is in order.

[DESIGN DATABASE LOADING. ]
[LOADING. ]
[LOADED. ]
[LOADING AURORA-CLASS BATTLESHIP_MK5. ]
[AURORA-CLASS BATTLESHIP_MK5 LOADED. ]

The original Aurora-class battleship was in my opinion not much of a battleship. I have upgraded it to fit my nature as a machine composed out of nanites, I have removed almost all the corridors, living quarters and other rooms that organics needed. I have kept the bridge as cosmetic. For armament I have added two more drone launchers, fifty Asuran pulse energy weapons across the hull as well as hanger bays filled with puddle jumpers and some land vehicles based from my memory of modern military vehicles from some of the games I have played.
I have also added a city-ship class shield into the extra space I find myself having. The city-ship class shield hugs the hull of the ship at the expense of more power usage, so I also have the Aurora-classes original shield installed with the other shield only being activated in combat.
I have also added empty rooms where I will put other types of FTL drives and more power rooms that will have a collection of Z.P.M's and power crystals.

[CLOSING AURORA-CLASS BATTLESHIP_MK5. ]

I already have one of these ships built and unpowered as I don't have the ZPM's yet or the energy crystals as they take time to grow.

[LOADING UNITS MENU. ]
[UNITS MENU LOADED. ]
[CONSTRUCTORS: 10,000. ]
[COMBAT FORMS: 500. ]
[AIR UNITS: 300. ]

Constructors are basically small replicator bugs that can build, mine and use themselves to form structures.
Combat forms are bigger replicator bugs which I have given personal shields and a handheld pulse energy weapons integrated into it.
Air units are just puddle jumpers equipped with pulse energy weapons, shields and the crew compartments have been removed to use the space for power and shields.

[CLOSING UNITS MENU. ]

Using the constructors I have queued factories, power production, crystal growing facilities and then in the systems star I have sun collectors gathering energy which is then used to produce ZPM's. To produce one Z.P.M it takes a year to grow them and then they can last up to 10,000 years powering a shield covering a large city-ship under crushing depths whilst being orbital bombarded.
I plan on going into the Halo universe to gain the Forerunners technology, to be clear the composer, the sentinels and the shield worlds. The slip space based technology is just an added bonus.
After the Halo universe I plan on heading to the X-COM EU & EW universe for the psionic based tech and their genetic manipulation tech. After that maybe the Stargate universe as I need Ancient DNA to combine with the Spartan augments, psionic's and the near ascended Ancient abilities. Through before I do create this avatar for me to control remotely whilst my real body is safely within my city-ship fortress. I need to travel to the Battlestar Galactica universe and grab the Cylon resurrection technology.

[ENTERING HIBERNATE MODE. ]
[IN…]
[5…]
[4…]
[3…]
[2…]
[1…]
[HIBERNATE MODE ACTIVE. ]

[MAIN CORE STATUS: HIBERNATING. ]
[ZERO POINT ENERGY GENERATOR STATUS: ONLINE AT 10%. ]
[NANITE FABRICATOR STATUS: OFFLINE. ]
[SUBSPACE SENSOR SYSTEMS STATUS: ONLINE. ]
[AVATAR STATUS: OFFLINE. ]
[COMMUNITCATION SYSTEMS OFFLINE. ]

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Please comment, I would welcome any help or corrections to be made within this self insert.
The way that Z.P.M's measure up to the Z.P.E.G, is that 5% is equal to one Z.P.M.
Aurora-Class Battleship_Mk5 needs 5 Z.P.M's to be fully power through in combat 6 can be used.
A Z.P.M is basically a universe in a bottle, they are a highly advanced battery in other terms.
 
Please comment, I would welcome any help or corrections to be made within this self insert.
I'm curious what's Athena(that was the name of your SI right?) goal in the end?Will it continue traveling or establish herself in a unvierse and continue from there?
 
Starting a bit strong, would it not have been better to start as a BioCylon (nBSG) and/or maybe the major (Ghost in the Shell)?
Then a little trip to the Star Wars Universe, before even touching Stargate?
It would keep the overkill a bit limited and lets you setup your SI for some real trouble in Halo, Macross/Robotech, Starcraft, Mass Effect, ect, ect.

Which when I think about it, is probably why almost nobody starts as a Asuran.
Might I suggest you visit Arpeggio of Blue Steel or Aoki Hagane no Arpeggio.
 
I like the story idea but not the execution. It feels rushed with artifical limitations and yet insane OPness in the same breath.

Given your wanting the character to journey universes collecting technology I think just having a basic Asuran with the ability to jump universes and forced to utilize local technology would have been better. You could have had it that the Asurans store alot of power but have to recharge which means jumping universes or trying to replicate carelessly costs a good bit of energy and that would force them to obtain external power sources while not growing too fast for local threats.

On the whole idea of needing to go to Star Trek universe for anti-matter technology it feels both good and bad. On one had it acknowledges that making something new takes time and technology developed due to thousands of people interacting with their own unique insights yet it also falls into the trap of nerfing a hyperadvanced nanomachine entity with a database of sophisticated knowledge. It could sound better to simple state that stealing designs from other universes is easier than building from scratch certain technologies to the same level.
 
I like the story idea but not the execution. It feels rushed with artifical limitations and yet insane OPness in the same breath.

Given your wanting the character to journey universes collecting technology I think just having a basic Asuran with the ability to jump universes and forced to utilize local technology would have been better. You could have had it that the Asurans store alot of power but have to recharge which means jumping universes or trying to replicate carelessly costs a good bit of energy and that would force them to obtain external power sources while not growing too fast for local threats.

On the whole idea of needing to go to Star Trek universe for anti-matter technology it feels both good and bad. On one had it acknowledges that making something new takes time and technology developed due to thousands of people interacting with their own unique insights yet it also falls into the trap of nerfing a hyperadvanced nanomachine entity with a database of sophisticated knowledge. It could sound better to simple state that stealing designs from other universes is easier than building from scratch certain technologies to the same level.
Its my first time writing a self insert, but i'm doing my best to try balance it. Plus right now it might seem OP but ROB's not going to let that last for long.
I welcome all the ideas anyone could give me in improving this self insert and over time the quality will increase.
 
Starting a bit strong, would it not have been better to start as a BioCylon (nBSG) and/or maybe the major (Ghost in the Shell)?
Then a little trip to the Star Wars Universe, before even touching Stargate?
It would keep the overkill a bit limited and lets you setup your SI for some real trouble in Halo, Macross/Robotech, Starcraft, Mass Effect, ect, ect.

Which when I think about it, is probably why almost nobody starts as a Asuran.
Might I suggest you visit Arpeggio of Blue Steel or Aoki Hagane no Arpeggio.
I have a BioCylon in the works, just doing a basic outline for the plot and the direction i'm going to take it in.
 
You might want to go to Gundam Iron Blood Orphans for the Ahab reactors.

If you can't find a use for a perpetual energy generator your not trying hard enough.

Also their armour rendered beam/energy weapons in universe useless to the point that they went back to kinetic weapons.
 
Chapter 3 Halo beginning
I apologise for the delay in getting this chapter up. At the end of this chapter is when we will begin the Halo arc of Asuran Rising. This chapter can be considered to be a filler chapter whilst I continue to plan out the Halo arc.
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[MAIN CORE STATUS: ONLINE. ]
[ZERO POINT ENERGY GENERATOR STATUS: DISABLED BY ADMINISTRATOR. ]
[NANITE FABRICATOR STATUS: ONLINE. ]
[SUBSPACE SENSOR SYSTEMS STATUS: ONLINE. ]
[AVATAR STATUS: ONLINE. ]
[COMMUNITCATION SYSTEMS: ONLINE. ]

As it seems ROB thinks that with the ZPEG that I am too powerful and so he has restricted it for now. It appears I will get access to it when I'm in universes with magic. I suppose using Z.P.M's isn't too bad as time is a concept left over from my Humans past life.
During the time in hibernation mode I have been able to produce 60 Z.P.M's which out of the 60 I'm using to 15 to power everything including my ship.

[ASSUMING DIRECT CONTROL. ]
[AURORA-CLASS BATTLESHIP_MK5 CONTROL ASSUMED. ]

[SHIP DESIGNATION: OVERWHELMING FIREPOWER. ]
[OVERWHELMING FIREPOWER STATUS REPORT. ]
[POWER SYSTEMS: ONLINE. ]
[Z.P.M'S STATUS: 100%. ]
[ENERGY CRYSTALS STATUS: 100%. ]

[ASURAN DATACORE STATUS: ONLINE. ]
[ENGINES STATUS: ONLINE]

[WEAPON SYSTEMS: ONLINE. ]
[DRONE LAUNCHERS: ONLINE. ]
[DRONE RACKS STATUS: 100% FULL. ]
[ASURAN PULSE ENERGY WEAPONS STATUS: OPERATIONAL. ]

[HANGER BAYS STATUS: ONLINE AND STOCKED UP]

[SHIPS SHIELDS STATUS: ONLINE AT 100%. ]
[CITY-SHIP SHIELDS STATUS: ONLINE AND WAITING. ]

[HYPERSPACE DRIVE STATUS: ONLINE. ]
[COMMUNICATIONS SYSTEMS: ONLINE. ]
[SUBSPACE SENSORS: ONLINE. ]
[UNIVERSAL JUMP DRIVE STATUS: ONLINE. ]

To be the ship is weird, I see through the sensors. I can see the cosmic background radiation, spectrums beyond the Human eye. I can see for lightyears and if there were any other systems within this pocket dimension I would be able to see if there was any life on the planet. I think I might have forgotten to mention that the sensor systems are of the city-ship class.
Launching Overwhelming Firepower into space is an experience in itself. To feel the atmosphere resisting against the hull.

[UNIVERSAL JUMP DRIVE CHARGING]
[10%. ]
[20%. ]
[40%. ]
[60%. ]
[80%. ]
[100%. ]

[UNIVERSAL JUMP DRIVE CHARGED. ]

[JUMPING IN. ]
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[4. ]
[3. ]
[2. ]
[1. ]

[JUMPING. ]

Jumping is like a wormhole, one second you are in one universe and then you instantly appear in another. In terms of how a wormhole works from point A to point B.

Upon jumping into the Halo universe, I almost collided into a platform, with the length being around two kilometres. There were still more satellites spread all over the system especially the planet I recognised as Reach, there were at least thirty platforms. There were another twenty large platforms orbiting the planet I was in orbit of, all of them mobile going by their engine signatures.
The platforms were just under two kilometres in length and included a central spar that ran two kilometres length with a C shaped ring attached halfway down the spar. According to the sensors nearly the entire length consisted of enormous magnetic coils surrounding a central pair of rails in what was apparently a sort of hybrid coil/rail gun.

Moving on from the platform, I turned my sensors towards the ships that were slowly turning towards me. There were a lot of ships that came in at just about five hundred meters, many were moving about in purposeful groups, others docked for repairs, and some on their way out or in-system.
After the smaller ships, I turned my attention onto the larger ships with in the system. There were a few that sat close to three kilometres in length, my sensors picking out cavernous hangar bays filled with fighters and bombers. Every one of these ships, including the five hundred-meter ones, featured some variation of the MAC gun that the orbital platforms had, all of them also contained numerous missile pods spread across their hulls.
It was the ships that were just over eleven hundred meters that grabbed and held my attention. Both versions were bulky, heavily armoured, made of hexagonally shaped sections, and centred in the hearts of little defensive groups.

The first design was like the small ships and the orbital guns.
I especially recognised the second design though, and how could I not?
I had after all spent far too many hours playing the games that said ship hailed from.
If the ship I had spotted with my sensors was still in orbit amongst the fleet above, then I had maybe a few days, and a few hours at least, before the invasion began.
When the UNSC Pillar of Autumn was leaving Reach didn't everything go to hell.
So I have time to see if I can turn future events in my favour and maybe save some of the AI's from their fates, such as Serina and Cortana.
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I will try to get the next chapter up soon.
 
Rewrite in progress
Just to let everyone know that this is not dead, but instead will be going into a full rewrite after the plot and original resources where lost on my old Laptop which died on me.
The universe list will under go changes as well once the plot has been established, however I can tell you that it will Start in the SGU universe and will work its way from there into other universes.
Thank you for your patience.
 
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