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From the previous update:
your hand reaches out carefully towards the back of Ripper's head over the smooth warm scales... it's that cats love to be scratched behind the ears. He does not purr, more a kind of low growl that that you can practically feel running up your shoulder.
but he had looked rather agitated to seem them all weighted to the bottom with pieces of stone ballast.
it turns as though some unseen hands are upon it to point the longer thinner part of itself points aft.
Some word doubling.
It is in that state, pondering what you are feeling and what you aught to feel, that Zaia finds you.
ought
the man produces another polished stone, this one glistening black, and a piece of iron that he moves around the table, causing the stone moves as though by an unseen force following his hand.
to move
From the last update (I know it says "not yet edited", but here is is anyway)
There is always that niggling fear in the back of every knight's mind that they should die not in battle but in the sickbed burning from the inside too weak to even open your eyes or raise your head,
The sentence uses "they" but then switches to impersonal "you"
As it happened the morrow did not bring any news good or ill, only swift cold rain of the sort that put one of a mind to winter, though it had been summer when you set off from Alexandria.
not familiar with the expression; suspecting a typo.
The remaining crew crumble, but they do so softly, the fate of their mutinous kin still very much on their minds, Antonio peers up at the sky day and night, trying to take such measurements as eye and instrument can and as for Doctor Zaia the man seems to find the strange stone a more fascinating study than Ripper.
"grumble", and either a dot or a semicolon should be present to divide the sentences.
Not that you can really blame him for it, the stone after all had ripped into his hand. Still you find yourself very much at odds ends. One might almost regret that dignity and blood do not allow a knight to take up the oar of a common sailor. Not that there it takes much rowing to to follow the path of the stone. s strong wind from the Northwest bearing rain also pushes the Marcella along on its chosen course.
"had
not ripped", possibly? The beginning of the last sentence is missing.
more to set your thoughts in order about these strange happenings then because you have any hope of her receiving it
"than"
At first it seems to you a strange call indeed, but see in your confusion the old quartermaster explains. "He's seen a land bird my lord, an eagle or a hawk or something else that does not fly so far in search of fish as the gulls do."
"seeing", and also possibly a comma to separate the direct speech.
not Sicily where sparse thorny underbrush stretches under the ho sun save for tended groves of olives or ceder.
not Sicily where sparse thorny underbrush stretches under the ho sun save for tended groves of olives or ceder.
..."cedars", possibly?