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By the way @Embler I did put in a Magical Swan transformation for Maimi like you wanted, but I admit I may have glossed over it too quickly:

Or was the 'tournament' really over? Maimi through some feat of hearing came flying in, her swan self having grown larger and frillier as several bulb-like pink and green feathers now blossomed from her wings.

On another topic, since I brought Persona: The Beautiful up, yeah if the likes of RUNE, YamahiPro, and EP are exhausting here, the All-Aces may be a little... much (I know they were for at least one reader). Granted, P:TB did have a lot more friendly faces to balance the Aces out though, something I've taken note of
 
While I really like this write-in, a slight issue with it is that Sfira's already been taken away by Hibiki and Chigusa, so Koyomi doesn't have the opportunity to say this to them right now.
And Sfira never told Koyomi her phone number (nor did Koyomi give her a phone), so it'll be a while until they can talk.

Still, I was considering giving you Omake EXP for this post given you planned, or started to plan, a whole arc essentially. Unless you think i should hold off till you've refined it more
I don't have any plans to write an actual omake about it; I just had some ideas that I wrote down and thought people might like. And it looks like at least four people did!
 
And Sfira never told Koyomi her phone number (nor did Koyomi give her a phone), so it'll be a while until they can talk.

With details like these I'll sometimes won't bring them up in the text if I see them as minor enough, assuming they happened offscreen. But in this case, if Sfira had been given a phone I would've mentioned it, though Koyomi would've seen to it and definitely will now if she ever gets the chance.

Also, another tidbit about your tournament bracket ideas, it's funny you said the jobbers would most likely be from the US and China, given Vasilisa was originally conceived of as American (probably Texan though I also thought Florida) and I also considered making her Chinese to tie in with the moon rabbit myth
 
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On another topic, since I brought Persona: The Beautiful up, yeah if the likes of RUNE, YamahiPro, and EP are exhausting here, the All-Aces may be a little... much (I know they were for at least one reader).
"The fancy private high school's godawful ruling clique" is a very different kind of exhausting to "the CIA, Royal Dutch Shell, and the Moonies or Scientologists".

(Partly because the clique are a lot easier to administer the mene mene tekel upharsin treatment to.)
 
On another topic, since I brought Persona: The Beautiful up, yeah if the likes of RUNE, YamahiPro, and EP are exhausting here, the All-Aces may be a little... much (I know they were for at least one reader). Granted, P:TB did have a lot more friendly faces to balance the Aces out though, something I've taken note of
I think the issue for me is that by introducing things like Project Lazarus and YamahiPro, you've implicitly raised the benchmark for success, in a narrative sense, to "these various unconscionable institutions are dealt with" - while at the same time aggressively hammering in the idea that the main characters do not have the power or conviction to do any such thing.

At that point, the Quest itself begins breaking down, because what we're being led to expect going forward is things continuing to get nastier and grosser without any real hope of improvement.
 
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  • [X] Write-in- "No" and hang up
    [X] Write-in- "I just told someone they weren't some object" and hang up
    -[X] "Sfira, You hoped that it may be different here. I thought it was supposed be different here, apparently we share a boat. Do you want to join me, because if your 'ownership' is determined by this tournament then nobody could possibly object if you won."
    [X] Go on a date with Yumemi
    [X] Write-in- "I just told someone they weren't some object" and hang up
 
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[X] "No" and hang up (Iris-Iven-Ibis write-in)


Were this a corded phone Koyomi would've slammed it down hard. But as doing so with a modern phone would risk shattering it to pieces, instead she just scowled as she hung up.
Whatever. YamahiPro might take some more digging up, but it shouldn't be that hard to find info on just Narcissus without the slightest help from RUNE, she thought.

Before doing so, she checked up on Maimi first, that imitation Frost Fair icicle luckily having melted away by now. The hole it had left in her wing however wouldn't be so simply dealt with. Living at the edge of the woods, Koyomi had picked up some basic First Aid know-how, but nothing on this level. She took it Hinodeharu had at least one vet, not having had any opportunity to find one till now, as Maimi, who normally went the 'tough it out' route, would kick up a ruckus at any further reminder that she was stuck as an animal. For the moment Koyomi feebly made do with applying disinfectant around the wound. If only Maimi hadn't tried to charge Hibiki, she could've come in real useful right now as an eye in the sky to track the fleeing Idols.

What was visible through the wound were the maidenstears roots and stems that snaked their way beneath Maimi's feathers and through her nervous system. One of the less pretty and more 'open secret' parts of being a Hanazakari was how their bodies were fused with their respective flower upon anointing, with a Hanazakari's Regalia not simply being a magic costume but their half-floral physiology rising to the surface. I guess Miyako knows this already, huh? Koyomi couldn't help but think back to her, even if knowing it and actually seeing it were two different things. Koyomi and most Hanazakari she knew had had the luck to be warned by their Dandelionhearts of this physiology shift before accepting their anointing... but was every Hanazakari so lucky?
Point was, at least this was indisputable proof that Maimi was still a Hanazakari, human or not.

After that, she approached Vasilisa slumped down in her wheelchair on her porch. As was typical with transformations, she looked a lot less glamourous out of Hanazakari form, her space jumpsuit less Raygun Gothic and more crumpled work clothes, her hair less stylishly retro-coiffed and more a greasy mess. Since the cosmonaut had gotten this whole stupid tournament ball rolling, Koyomi was hardly in the mood for gentility when she approached her. And yet Vasilisa's drooping eyes and saggy face reflected barely any hostility back, with her instead saying in what Japanese she'd picked up, "I'm sorry."

Sorry won't cut it, was Koyomi's first inclination to say, her fist even clenching. But she then breathed out and let go, as she figured even with how many reasons she had to be furious at Vasilisa right now, what good would lashing out actually accomplish? Koyomi not able to say anything back in Russian without going through the effort of transforming again, other than what she could maybe fudge from what she knew of Polish, so she settled for nodding in return, putting her hand on her shoulder, and saying "I know" in her own tongue.

There was little she could do for the doll-ified Emi right now apart from put her someplace where she was unlikely to be knocked down. Hibiki's victims sorted, Koyomi then headed out into town, still not for a second planning to let YamahiPro just waltz away with Sfira, no matter how humiliating that defeat.

The instant she reached downtown and found somewhere with a faster Wi-Fi signal, Koyomi began scouring the web for any info on Chigusa Kagamino... and found nothing much she hadn't already worked out. She was an Idol mostly linked with YamahiPro being a singer first then actress, was meant to be in her forties but looked much younger (Koyomi twitching at the reminder her own fortieth birthday was just around the corner) which helped her maintain relevance unlike Hibiki, and could make clones of herself.
Most of the coverage on her was either positive or professionally neutral, anything more critical being either tabloid gossip or raving anti-fans prying into whether or not she had a boyfriend. At over forty. A few posters said it'd be cool if she had a girlfriend though, but likely less due to gay rights and more because lesbians 'weren't a threat' somehow.

One upside to being a 'serious' literary author, it occurred to Koyomi, was that nobody gave a damn about the existence of her love life. No, instead I get slagged for being too gloomy or too incomprehensible, while the boys in my circle get off scot-free, or genre authors trash me on social media to score points, her thoughts went way off on a tangent.

Anyway, Koyomi at least dug up two useful facts on Chigusa. First was her main residence being public knowledge, an old manor in the west in the Kiso to Takayama area, naturally with sturdy iron gates in front. A little out of the way given Chigusa's line of work, but travel was likely no object for one of her fame. Much closer than the nearest YamahiPro base down in Osaka too, so Koyomi now knew where to set her sights. The other was those clones of her earlier looked identical to her photographs, even clearly filtered ones, and posters, to some of her drawn posters no less. A few of both were from decades back now to boot.

Still, would help to get some dirt on Chigusa from someone in person. Koyomi immediately thought of Miyako, but then sighed. I know, I was way too quick to dismiss her, but I can't go back to her so soon... she thought in the clutches of shame. Calling Palmira also came to mind, but unless they'd had reason to investigate Chigusa before, they'd likely take a while she didn't have. But then she thought of a third someone, right here in town.

"Welcome, dear watchers, to a world of wonder and imaginat- Oh, it's you. What do you want?" Reiji said as he realised Koyomi of all people had come to visit mid-sentence. He was presently half-dressed in what had to be the most pint-sized kaiju costume ever, holding a script in one hand and a stage light in the other. "Please let it not be another cult, I'll just stage Lovecraft if I have to have one of those."

"I need you to tell me everything about one Kagamino Chigusa you can. Figured you'd have knowledge of her," Koyomi said without hesitation, standing in the theatre doorway.

"Really, her?" Reiji had to ask; he would've folded his arms if he could. "Another singer who mistakenly thinks she can automatically act, and aggravatingly famous enough to keep getting roles despite all the evidence against her. But what wouldst you expect from a Hanazakari?" he said, as if Hibiki Izumi was somehow an exception. "Absolutely cannot believe she's in her forties," he said, having the dignity to not make any cracks about plastic surgery.

He also had the dignity to not say a word about any potential boyfriend of hers, suggesting his judgment wasn't completely clouded. Still, Koyomi needed more info, and knew just which vein to tap. "Any word on how she feels about Izumi Hibiki and vice-versa? My research turned up that they've been in some of the same projects together," she asked.

"Ah, Hibiki-chan, er, Izumi-sama has been nothing but polite about Kagamino in interviews, as is befitting one of her calibre. Any complaints, which I imagine must be quite a few, or age-related jealousy, if such even exists, she's kept to herself. No surprise that someone like Kagamino has had far less decorum in return, 'playfully' insulting Hibiki-sama's looks any chance she gets," Reiji said starting to fume, before he had to ask, "Er, why the interest? What, don't tell me Kagamino's been cast in one of your books' adaptations or something?"

"Oh no, nothing like that," Koyomi said, her face lighting up for once, before she grew stern again. "Kagamino's no less than kidnapped Sfira on YamahiPro's orders, and I thought Izumi could help me deal with her." She stayed quiet on Hibiki being Chigusa's accomplice, not needing to deal with Reiji's possible reaction to that. But Hibiki helping her, however intentionally, take down Chigusa was no lie, at least it wouldn't be if Koyomi could pull off her new plan.

"Wait, kidnapped Sfira?!" Reiji gasped.

"It's nothing I can't handle," Koyomi said a little too pre-emptively. "And technically Sfira went willingly, even though they absolutely shouldn't have, due to... reasons. Look, it's nothing you need to be concerned about." Not like being told that made Reiji relax any more.

"Hey look," Reiji then asked, "Between whatever happened at the RUNE base, Sekigahara, that cult, and now this... does there always have to be something up with you?"

At first, Koyomi didn't know what to even say to that, but then it came to her. "Ashamed as I am to admit it, I think part of me prefers it that way. If evil is afoot, at least I know for certain I'm right that something's gone wrong. It's the quiet moments, where in Schrodinger fashion I don't know if there's danger lurking or not, that really get to me. I'll take certainty whenever I can get it," she managed to say.

"...I see," said Reiji, who had mostly only heard such talk when people were analysis the horror genre. "Hey, at least do me a favour and don't rope in Kazuya again this time round."

Koyomi nodded, said "Thanks", and that was that.
Her next stop was Hinodeharu's dusty old train station where she'd commence her pursuit the two Idols... only to find Emi, Vasilisa, and Maimi all tailing her.

"Arisugawa-sama, wait!" Emi called; Freesia's imitated Cultivar seemingly less long-lasting than the real thing. "I knew you'd never just let Sfira be taken, but please! I-I really don't want to use my Cultivar, but I just can't let you go alone!"

Vasilisa promptly nodded as she came up the awkwardly placed ramp. "What happened, my responsibility," she had the lexicon to say.
And Maimi defiantly flapped and strutted proudly, even if the wound in her wing was still clearly there.

"Really, you don't..." Koyomi began, faced with the choice of who if any to take.
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Team set-up:
[ ] All three.
[ ] Emi and Vasilisa.
[ ] Emi and Maimi.
[ ] Vasilisa and Maimi.
[ ] Just Emi.
[ ] Just Vasilisa.
[ ] Just Maimi.
[ ] None of them, Koyomi would do this alone.

As for how they'd break into Chigusa's mansion:
[ ] Climbing over the gates.
[ ] Impersonating YamahiPro at the door.
[ ] Impersonating RUNE at the door.
[ ] Ambushing Chigusa and/or Hibiki when they came out.
[ ] Improvising something when they got there.
[ ] Write-in
 
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She took it Hinodeharu at least one vet, not having had any opportunity to find one till now, as Maimi, who normally went the 'tough it out' route, would kick up a ruckus at any further reminder that she was stuck as an animal.
Is this sentence missing a word?

The other was those clones of her earlier looked identical to her photographs, even clearly filtered ones, and posters, to some of her drawn posters no less. A few of both were from decades back now to boot.
So we're probably looking not at a power that makes duplicates of its user, per se, but one that creates identical minions that look like either Chigusa when she became a Hanazakari or some kind of idealized self-image.

"Really, her?" Reiji had to ask; he would've folded his arms if he could. "Another singer who mistakenly thinks she can automatically act, and aggravatingly famous enough to keep getting roles despite all the evidence against her."
Better than actors who can't sing getting cast in musicals for name recognition.
(I'm not even thinking of Gerard Butler. It gets so much worse.)

"Hey look," Reiji then asked, "Between whatever happened at the RUNE base, Sekigahara, that cult, and now this... does there always have to be something up with you?"
She spent her formative years saving her classmates from magical monsters and/or dramatic personal issues once a week. This is a slow month by comparison.

"Really, you don't..." Koyomi began, faced with the choice of who if any to take.
Maimi is out. Not only is she wounded, she's a swan. Barring some extremely clever trenchcoat shenanigans and unattentive watchmooks, I don't see any way that bringing her isn't going to cause a scene, and nasty as swans are, I still don't think she would be enough to make a frontal assault viable.
Emi is...complicated. She wants to help, I don't want to turn her down, but I worry that we'd be putting her in danger for little benefit to any party.

[X] Emi and Vasilisa.
[X] Just Vasilisa.

I think it would be extremely funny if Koyomi bluffed YamahiPro into thinking Yumemi sent her ex to check on something there. I do not know whether Koyomi has the Bluff ranks to pull that off.
[X] Ambushing Chigusa and/or Hibiki when they came out.

...but hey, you never know.
[X] Impersonating RUNE at the door.
-[X] Claim to be doing a favor for Yumemi
 
[X] Emi and Vasilisa.
[X] Impersonating RUNE at the door.
[X] Improvising something when they got there.

Well, on the bright(?) side, Hibiki played her hand when it comes to making it clear she doesn't need somebody to be present to copy their powers, so there's no need to hold Emi back on that regard. Maimi's probably out of the running though.

As for getting in, I half suspect that we'll need to barge our way in regardless, but I suppose we might as well try to make Yumemi some trouble along the way.

That aside, I didn't expect for Koyomi to be the one considering going back to Miyako for help. Good thing Reiji has been earning his stripes as replacement sidekick, I suppose, even if he isn't nearly as enthusiastic about it. Though man, he was doing relatively well until that Hibiki-chan. What is it with the boys around Miyako and them being too interested in older women?
 
[X] Emi and Vasilisa.
[X] Ambushing Chigusa and/or Hibiki when they came out.
[X] Improvising something when they got there.

This isn't a RUNE facility, I feel like theoretical gate mooks would just call their boss for guidance and the gang would be instantly exposed. YamahiPro is likely more concerned about RUNE than they are about Koyomi.

By the way @Embler I did put in a Magical Swan transformation for Maimi like you wanted, but I admit I may have glossed over it too quickly:
I noticed!
 
Surprised there's been no reaction to the reveal that becoming a Hanazakari changes your biology, basically making you half-plant. Maybe that's because I somewhat suddenly brought it up early on and it doesn't factor into the votes
 
Surprised there's been no reaction to the reveal that becoming a Hanazakari changes your biology, basically making you half-plant. Maybe that's because I somewhat suddenly brought it up early on and it doesn't factor into the votes
I mean it's neat.
Freaky but neat.
Coincidentally, I am currently watching Episode 2 of Hannibal.
 
Surprised there's been no reaction to the reveal that becoming a Hanazakari changes your biology, basically making you half-plant. Maybe that's because I somewhat suddenly brought it up early on and it doesn't factor into the votes
It's a neat bit of worldbuilding, but we've seen enough Hanazakari running around long enough to know that it doesn't turn people into plant monsters or release magical pollen or cause chronic pain or anything. So until some cop sprays Koyomi with weed killer to incapacitate her, it's only a neat bit of worldbuilding.
 
[X] Emi and Vasilisa.
[X] Improvising something when they got there.

Hanazakiri being turned into plant people hybrids is pretty neat. Worldbuilding is fun, but it just doesn't seem really that crazy big of a reveal in of itself, just a fun detail that may or may not come into play later on. But that's the fun of worldbuilding, seeing how various tidbits and pieces may or may not fit together.
 
When I thought up Hanazakari being made half-plant, I guess I was mainly thinking about it from a psychological perspective, like what it would do to one's self-image, more so than its physical effects.
But yeah, I suppose it's easy to tell I only thought the idea up later on, though thankfully it doesn't outright contradict anything from earlier in the story, as far as I've checked
 
When I thought up Hanazakari being made half-plant, I guess I was mainly thinking about it from a psychological perspective, like what it would do to one's self-image, more so than its physical effects.
Don't you mean the phycological effects? [/rimshot]
...wait, I don't think there are any algal Hanazakari.

Anyways, same deal. Maybe it would be more significant if the Hanazakari hadn't known they were half-plant for most of their lives and adjusted to that, but as-is it seems like everyone has adjusted to that revelation.
It's the difference between Sayaka having an existential crisis when she realizes her body is basically a corpse puppet, and a middle-aged Sayaka who's more worried about work or politics or whatever than the consequences of making a magically-binding contract as a kid.
 
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Yeah.

The drawback of writing a story whose elevator pitch is "the Great Magical Girl War ended twenty years ago and life goes on" is that all the big revelations about the nature of the magical girls are already public knowledge and you don't get to see the shock and profound impact they might have had at the time.

This is offset by the many many many advantages of writing such a story; it's just a question of which things the story lends itself to.
 
all the big revelations about the nature of the magical girls are already public knowledge and you don't get to see the shock and profound impact they might have had at the time.

Well more 'kinda sorta public knowledge', given I called the plant thing an 'open secret'. it's not anything RUNE or anyone else in power officially acknowledges, but which a lot of people have figured out on their own due to not exactly being easy to keep secret.

But yeah, your point stands. It's also compounded by me trying to avoid depicting the Frost Decade directly (as I feel it has more power if it's kept in my readers' heads), so any initial reactions to it will have to be the domain of Omakes
 
What would be bad about acknowledging being part plant, politics? Having plant physiology sounds like interesting from a medical standpoint. Do magical girls have specialized doctors for example?
 
The public outcry that could happen on people finding out their saviours are no longer fully human is something RUNE finds easier not to deal with (as futile as keeping that secret can be), or at least to delay as long as possible.
I like the idea of Hanazakari having specialised doctors, some physician-gardener hybrids I imagine. They would've only had so much time to learn from the Dandelionhearts though.

On another note, I'm pleased with the last update being relatively dialogue-lite. Dialogue's naturally my favourite thing to write, but I've been concerned about it becoming a crutch for me lately, so I was pleased at managing to be more restrained with it this time. I feel it really lets Sfira being taken away sink in
 
The public outcry that could happen on people finding out their saviours are no longer fully human is something RUNE finds easier not to deal with (as futile as keeping that secret can be), or at least to delay as long as possible.
I like the idea of Hanazakari having specialised doctors, some physician-gardener hybrids I imagine. They would've only had so much time to learn from the Dandelionhearts though.

On another note, I'm pleased with the last update being relatively dialogue-lite. Dialogue's naturally my favourite thing to write, but I've been concerned about it becoming a crutch for me lately, so I was pleased at managing to be more restrained with it this time. I feel it really lets Sfira being taken away sink in
I do not buy that they could keep something like this Secret there's just too many it's basically a number game for those who want to keep it secret eventually someone's going to speak out and they just need to say it in the right place but with this many people trying to keep this a secret eventually something will cause this damn to break
 
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