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Between the Darkstars (NO SV, TRY AND CONQUER THE GALAXY!)

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Themarineguy said:
ALL THE CRITS...
We just kept getting crits and completely mucked up their trap in the process...
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Let's hope they don't have a nuke wielding lunatic in a mobile suit and also they could've made way worse weapon or example there's this really god trilogy of SEED fics and in the third one a group called F.E.A.R makes a type of nanoweapon called MAIDEN which kills anything that isn't human or coordinator by setting it on fire like napalm THEN they used construction nanotech called red EDEN (which is completly harmless to living beings and has large limits like no self replication/grey goo incidents and can only rearrange molecules and atoms) to to create more MAIDEN out of the corpses of their enemies and this was their more "ethical" creations.
 
[X]WARCRIMES ONLY EXIST IF YOU LOSE IT: YOU... you.. you need to be calm about this. justice can't be rushed. You practically have a manual for something like this. The Athenian war conventions lists a series of war crimes to never be enacted. That seems like the perfect list of thigns to do to these scientists.
[X]Turn the Station against them: They've made this whole station 'secure' for its owner.... so you just need to become the 'owner' and label these scientists as 'trespassers'. I can't imagine they're ready for anything like this. And you would really like to see the fireworks they've prepared in the defenses.
 
[X]WARCRIMES ONLY EXIST IF YOU LOSE IT: YOU... you.. you need to be calm about this. justice can't be rushed. You practically have a manual for something like this. The Athenian war conventions lists a series of war crimes to never be enacted. That seems like the perfect list of thigns to do to these scientists.
[X]Turn the Station against them: They've made this whole station 'secure' for its owner.... so you just need to become the 'owner' and label these scientists as 'trespassers'. I can't imagine they're ready for anything like this. And you would really like to see the fireworks they've prepared in the defenses.
 
[X]FRY THEIR MINDS AND MAKE THEM SCREAM: THEY THINK THEY CAN TAKE YOUR BABY AWAY! THEY DON'T DESERVE DEATH. THEY DESERVE PAIN! THEY DESERVE ENDLESS PAIN!

[X]Turn the Station against them: They've made this whole station 'secure' for its owner.... so you just need to become the 'owner' and label these scientists as 'trespassers'. I can't imagine they're ready for anything like this. And you would really like to see the fireworks they've prepared in the defenses.
 
Cyberphilosipher said:
So...any feedback? I worked hard on it.
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I noticed we were 308 lbs as a woman, is this do to altered gravity or evolved human biology just making us denser. Also it seems like we were embracing our physic bond with the void entity to much because we were relaxed? Was that hinted at being a possibility somewhere that I didn't notice or was the void part hyperbole for the nothingness of relaxation. Also totally stealing this bed for us to have raunchy fun on later.
 
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Cyberphilosipher said:
So...any feedback? I worked hard on it.
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I will say, it is more suspenseful then I'd thought it be, but then again that might be my bad since you said you where heavily inspired by The Black Hole.

[X]WARCRIMES ONLY EXIST IF YOU LOSE IT: YOU... you.. you need to be calm about this. justice can't be rushed. You practically have a manual for something like this. The Athenian war conventions lists a series of war crimes to never be enacted. That seems like the perfect list of thigns to do to these scientists.
[X]Turn the Station against them: They've made this whole station 'secure' for its owner.... so you just need to become the 'owner' and label these scientists as 'trespassers'. I can't imagine they're ready for anything like this. And you would really like to see the fireworks they've prepared in the defenses.
 
General_Hatvenom said:
I noticed we were 308 lbs as a woman, is this do to altered gravity or evolved human biology just making us denser.
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A Mix of being denser as a Mutant Humanoid.

And Second due to being pregnant and I'm rolling for your Child's development as a Mutant.

Its gonna be a bit bigger then your PC at birth.

Secondly...Mutant Metabolisms, you burn a lot of energy and need a lot of food to function...and given Ellara's Pregnant...she's eating her body weight in food nearly every meal.

General_Hatvenom said:
Also it seems like we were embracing our physic bond with the void entity to much because we were relaxed? Was that hinted at being a possibility somewhere that I didn't notice or was the void part hyperbole for the nothingness of relaxation.
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Mix of opening your mind. Mix of being near a black Hole.

Its mixed.
silvershark said:
I will say, it is more suspenseful then I'd thought it be, but then again that might be my bad since you said you where heavily inspired by The Black Hole.
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Thank you...I worked very hard.
 
[X]WARCRIMES ONLY EXIST IF YOU LOSE IT: YOU... you.. you need to be calm about this. justice can't be rushed. You practically have a manual for something like this. The Athenian war conventions lists a series of war crimes to never be enacted. That seems like the perfect list of thigns to do to these scientists.

There's no way this could go wrong

[X]Turn the Station against them: They've made this whole station 'secure' for its owner.... so you just need to become the 'owner' and label these scientists as 'trespassers'. I can't imagine they're ready for anything like this. And you would really like to see the fireworks they've prepared in the defenses.

They left us with their computers the idiots.
 
[X]WARCRIMES ONLY EXIST IF YOU LOSE IT: YOU... you.. you need to be calm about this. justice can't be rushed. You practically have a manual for something like this. The Athenian war conventions lists a series of war crimes to never be enacted. That seems like the perfect list of thigns to do to these scientists.

[X]Turn the Station against them: They've made this whole station 'secure' for its owner.... so you just need to become the 'owner' and label these scientists as 'trespassers'. I can't imagine they're ready for anything like this. And you would really like to see the fireworks they've prepared in the defenses.
 
[X]WARCRIMES ONLY EXIST IF YOU LOSE IT: YOU... you.. you need to be calm about this. justice can't be rushed. You practically have a manual for something like this. The Athenian war conventions lists a series of war crimes to never be enacted. That seems like the perfect list of thigns to do to these scientists.
 
[X]WARCRIMES ONLY EXIST IF YOU LOSE IT: YOU... you.. you need to be calm about this. justice can't be rushed. You practically have a manual for something like this. The Athenian war conventions lists a series of war crimes to never be enacted. That seems like the perfect list of thigns to do to these scientists.

[X]Turn the Station against them: They've made this whole station 'secure' for its owner.... so you just need to become the 'owner' and label these scientists as 'trespassers'. I can't imagine they're ready for anything like this. And you would really like to see the fireworks they've prepared in the defenses
 
I'm fine with whatever option happens for Ellera

[X]Turn the Station against them: They've made this whole station 'secure' for its owner.... so you just need to become the 'owner' and label these scientists as 'trespassers'. I can't imagine they're ready for anything like this. And you would really like to see the fireworks they've prepared in the defenses
 
[X]WARCRIMES ONLY EXIST IF YOU LOSE IT: YOU... you.. you need to be calm about this. justice can't be rushed. You practically have a manual for something like this. The Athenian war conventions lists a series of war crimes to never be enacted. That seems like the perfect list of thigns to do to these scientists.
[X]Turn the Station against them: They've made this whole station 'secure' for its owner.... so you just need to become the 'owner' and label these scientists as 'trespassers'. I can't imagine they're ready for anything like this. And you would really like to see the fireworks they've prepared in the defenses.
 
I don't know if it is because it's been a while but I felt that the chapter was a bit unpolished and in need of a second pass for some edits. I think the surname of our MC is wrong but I could be mistaken
 
[X]FRY THEIR MINDS AND MAKE THEM SCREAM: THEY THINK THEY CAN TAKE YOUR BABY AWAY! THEY DON'T DESERVE DEATH. THEY DESERVE PAIN! THEY DESERVE ENDLESS PAIN!

[X]CUT LOOSE: Well...Darling, I guess its time to cut loose and use my Mutation...how bothersome.
 
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