It was definitely better with a friend.
Most things people, especially teens, find 'fun' are more about the people you're with than what you're doing. Rin's respecting Ranma's boundaries better than just about anybody from their* manga/anime.
*With the nature of Ranma's curse, I expect, in modern times, they'd insist on "they" as their pronoun of choice. It applies regardless of form, after all, but I'm not sure how much Japanese culture has accepted this shift.
Her friend hummed. "Nope. It really does look good on you. Just a little jealous. You've got a better bum than I do," she pushed Ranma into the stall as Ranma's cheeks flushed. "I'm sure whatever boy you've got waiting back in Nerima will be happy," she teased.
Are you British, or just read a lot of British stories? "Bum" is one of those that really helps narrow down a writer's accent.
She turned to see her bum in the mirror. It wasn't too big in this dress, right?
As the wise knight, Sir Mix-a-lot stated, there's no such thing
I once had a ~15yo girl come running up to her mother, who I was helping, because her crush was coming into the store. She asked me if her shoes were alright, and I said, "Honey, if he notices you're
wearing shoes, he's probably not interested in dating girls." It takes a while for guys to learn, and too many never do, that it doesn't matter what you think, or how little, of their clothes, complement something. Always complement the woman, criticize the clothing. Simple rules that will make your life easier.
she sorted the boys she knew in Nerima, trying to think of someone with enough positives to be, objectively, a good catch to a girl.
Very few characters in that show are not a parody of something, so Tofu is really the best of the bunch simply by being quirky but nice so long as Kasumi isn't there.
Tofu was too old, seriously why did Akane have a crush on him?
Mature men tend to appeal the most to girls during the age where their bodies are reaching the end of puberty and the boys are still catching up. Having that process happen at different ages can be a bit awkward for a while. Older guys are also safe to have a crush on, because(with some rare* but horrible exceptions) they won't act on whatever the girl is feeling.
*Admittedly nowhere near rare enough, but this is a subject I try to avoid because of being too passionate about it, so that's all I'll say here.
It had certainly helped when he'd had to save her bacon a few times over the last year
Frankly, the pig needed his bacon saved more often...
I don't like Ryouga as a character. You clearly disagree, but it's hard to make him true to the core of canon(without the caricature of character implicit in the style of the story) while also being likeable. Genma's Daughter is one of the few that managed it for me.
The one on the Mallida Mark I had her brown hair in a, slightly messy, bun and was dressed in a blue version of St. Gloriana's British Grenadier-inspired Sensha-do uniform.
The commas here are extraneous and should go away, though I can see why you put them there. Punctuation can be tricky in English.
He'd have to take a boat to get on board first.
Hasn't she already seen him on board once? Regardless, "boats" are only an issue with some versions of his direction sense.
In the mirror, sitting on a bookshelf behind her, was the cat statuette.
That was completely expected.
Ranma, you need to understand how cats think. For them, acknowledging somebody and turning away is a way of showing trust and inviting reciprocal gestures. This is why cats often gravitate to the humans who least want them around, If you really want to drive a cat away, treat it as if it were the most adorable puppy you'd ever seen.
El Goonish Shive - 2003-01-28
Edit:
Oh, something I forgot for my last post: In
Puella Magi Adfligo Systema , tea snobs keep knocking people for using tea bags. At one point, the quest protagonist shocks one of said snobs out of a near catatonic state by announcing that she's going to microwave her tea, as it had cooled too much while waiting for her to respond to whatever the topic was. The juxtaposition with your story where tea always comes in a bag amuses me.
But, well, tantrism, or in the case of Ranma, the interaction between Yin and Yang is a thing.
The disconnect between Yin/Yang and the many ways it comes up without the characters ever really addressing it is one of the perplexing writing choices for the original series. The Hiryou Shoten Ha is pretty much a direct yin/yang analogue, yet that mastering those energies within Ranma's self might permit taking their art to a new level never seems to occur to them, though that, arguably, may be what happened at Jusendo against Saffron.
And, also, his ability seems to be fixed on your position. A Ki thing, I think.
Ryoga seems to have better luck when aiming for a person than when aiming for a place.
AKA "She's Ranma".
I wrote a scene for a story that never happened where Ranma is told they'll never be free of their curse: Genma Saotome would always be their father. After all, almost every last curse Ranma picks up can be traced to Genma's stupidity.
Ranma, why did you not take the scroll that Happy would have liked?
Knowing it, would have let you figuring out a counter.
It's most likely that Happy already knows that move.
Besides, out of contect, whatvif Ranma used such moves, for say tank maintaince(?)?
It being a scroll Happosai would like does not mean it had martial techniques on it, though it could be like when Genma and Soun misread a location offering training in the "marital arts". That got them Konatsu in Nerima, so wasn't a complete bust.
Well, if that statuette really is dedicated to Bastet of all deities, then Ranma will never manage to get rid of it. On the other hand, proximity to that statuette might just end up helping her get over that fear induced trauma curtsy of Bastet herself...
A large part of where this is likely to go depends on what the Neko-ken actually is. If it is a spirit sealed inside of Ranma rather than a phobia, then yes, this statue and the Neko-ken are likely to make a bigger impact in the pages to come. It could be big, it could be just a fun tzchotsky.