Thunder of the Gods (Worm/DC)

[CorellianJedi]

Nice chapter, cool that she has an official name now, now she's officially Captain Marvel/Shazam, anyways excited for the next chapter whenever that releases and I am curious to see how she deals with the E88.

 

[Helkil]

man I wish this updated more

 

[the DragonBard]

Going after first responders, E88 is really asking for it.

 

[sun tzu]

Going after first responders, E88 is really asking for it.

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I admit I find this weird.
Like, fighting with the police I can get.
But attacking the fire department? That feels like a weird mistake for E88. They do actually need some measure of PR to function, and that's a recipe for losing it.
But I assume they have reasons.

 

[Xanderhunter]

Being called Mrs. Palmer by some who looked almost thirty, even if they might be younger, made her feel ridiculously old.

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Should be Mrs. Pelham

 

[tortiecat]

Typo hunting time:

You're the other way around, built it's not entirely unprecedented.

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Should be "but."

"This lesion is about control, remember?

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Should be "lesson."

The Captain did a good job of containing but

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Something's missing between the last two words unless "containing" is supposed to be "containment."

"If you try to compress it too quickly, it could be "

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This really needs an ellipsis or other punctuation indicating that she doesn't manage to finish the sentence.

This was a nice cafe, but it was perfectly affordable. Not like one of those ridiculous avant-garde restaurants which demanded two hundred dollars a plate.

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That whole thing should be one sentence.

You guys have a good time."

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In context, I think this is supposed to be a question.

 

[Solarion]

Typo hunting time:


Should be "but."

Should be "lesson."

Something's missing between the last two words unless "containing" is supposed to be "containment."

This really needs an ellipsis or other punctuation indicating that she doesn't manage to finish the sentence.

That whole thing should be one sentence.

In context, I think this is supposed to be a question.

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Thank you, fixed.

 

[Nimodes]

Nice to see this continued, and as the next chapter has Nazi smackdowns foreshadowed, I am very interested in seeing how far Hookwolf gets punted and if he will end up in some particularly karmic-comedic landing spot. An automated pie factory, sewage reclamation plant, etc.