The Crystal Lord (C&C:TW/Berserk SI)

05: Unit under attack.
From a few hundred meters away, it was pretty obvious my four riders were using horses. The riders looked human as well, which considering everything else so far seemed terrestrial meant there wasn't much of a chance they weren't. When night fell I was going to have to check for constellations I recognized.

"HEY!"

I had no idea if the party ahead could hear me. The sound of the wind whistling through the tall grass and buffeting against their ears could have drowned out my shouting. Waving my unarmed hand, I started to jog towards the armed men, hampered from a real run by my determination not to muzzle sweep the soldiers ahead of me.

And they were soldiers, if not professional ones. With the clouds gone and the sun starting to dip behind me, I got a very good look at my guests. Dirty, uneven plate twinkled as shoulder pads bounced with their mounts. I counted two with spears, while other sported shields and one riding the wagon rested a crossbow in their lap. There didn't appear to be much unty in the style of their weapons and armor, but I didn't think uniforms were that common in that period.

Had I gone back in time? No, probably not. Tiberium, or all-consuming crystals, would have left a pretty hefty impact on modern culture and mythology if I had contained it. I must be in another world, or universe. I'd already dismissed the possibility of being somewhere in the modern world, so that must have made me some kind of Isekai. A Regular Space Yankee in King Arthur's court!

"STOP!"

The riders ahead of me finally reacted to my presence. The largest of them, a man with dented armor and a beard that concealed his face, picked up his pace and separated from his comrades. I slowed, allowing him to make up his distance. He didn't slow, though. I stopped as the rider continued his approach, that started to feel more like a charge. Both hands gripped the 1911 as he approached, but at that speed…

Just as I took a nervous step away, he pulled on his reigns and brought his panting mount to a halt. It didn't show his teeth, but I could just make out a smile through his scruffy, uneven beard. Asshole.

"Who dares stop the Snake Lord's tribute?"

If he thought dropping that name would get a reaction out of me, he must have been disappointed. The word 'tribute' peaked my interest, though. Ignoring the man in front of me for a moment, I peered around him, at the strange wagon they'd been escorting. It was a massive cage, but it's contents were hidden by the pair of riders and the supplies behind them. What was in there, sheep? Pigs? What kind of Lord who could give their troops steel armor would concern themselves with those?

"The road's out in a few miles." Part of me was surprised I could understand the man at all, which further disqualified the time travel theory. I was certainly not in the same universe I'd been born in. "You'll have to find another way to get-"

I was cut off by what seemed like a terrible cough, as my mounted comrade doubled forwards. It took me a couple seconds to realize that the man's torchered retching was laughter.

"What's wrong, Issar?" The cry from the wagon drifted over the wind once the leader's laughter died down.

"This minstral has just told me the road's-" The man's pathetic laugh returned, preventing him from finishing. "The road's gone!" I was feeling my temper rise when I realised that, by shouting over his shoulder like that, he didn't think I was enough of a threat to bother watching. Why would I? To him, all I was wearing was light clothing and a metal trinket. The chorus of guffaws didn't help.

"It is!" I shouted, unable to keep the indignity out of my voice. "The meteor from earlier destroyed-"

"Shut up, whelp." The man growled, his hand resting on his hilt. "I don't know where the theatre troupe you came from went, but no one interrupts the men of Koka if they value their lives."

I took a step back, raising the pistol to his face, but he didn't seem disturbed.

"Now, you don't seem to be from around here, and since I'm feeling a little generous, I'm willing to offer a deal. For a little silver, me and my friends are willing to forget about your wild tales and let you on your way to spout tales of 'Meetors'..." The way he said the word left spittle in his beard. "...to anyone you like."

"Uh…"

I was flabbergasted. I was trying to save their lives and they wanted to rob me? The ungrateful little bastards!

"I- I don't want any trouble here..." I finally managed to state, taking another step back from the man and keeping the pistol leveled directly at his face. "...but if you keep walking down this road, you'll die." I took another breadth, as the pistol began to shake. It was a gamble, but these people only seemed to respect power. I needed to show it. "And, if- if you want any money from me, you'll have to pry it from my cold, dead hands."

"Listen, kid." The man growled, right hand tightening around his sword. "The only thing between here and Koka are a few hours of grassland. I don't know what you thought you could gain from tricking us, but if you wanted to pull it off you should have tried it a lot farther from town."

Koka Castle? Despite the risk, I brought up the drone's radar-created topographic map of the area to exame it for anything. Beyond the crater itself, the entire landscape for miles was nothing but easy hills and planes. Unless they thought that rock formation to the south was a Castle-

Oh.

Oh, shit!

"Koka's only a few hours from here?" I asked. The abrupt and seemingly irrelevant question must have caught the warrior off guard, because he paused.

"Yeah…"

"Then it's gone." I deadpanned. When I'd first looked at that thing on the drone's radar map, I'd assumed it had been a volcanic neck of some kind. Perhaps not the most reasonable assumption, but an american like me sees a lot more of those then castles, so give me a break. If I'd had the drone investigate there instead of the road, I might have known, but it was much farther than the road, and what could I do anyways? "Everyone there is probably dead."

I was too angry to grieve over a bunch of people I didn't know. There wasn't anything I could have done to help them, anyways.

"Impossible!" He growled, his sword coming out entirely. "The Snake Lord is unkillable!"

Part of me wanted to laugh in the man's face, dismissing his superstition like he dismissed me. Let the bastard get crystal-ed. The other part of me, the one who noted how quiet his sword had been when it had left the scabbard, needed to do otherwise. A man who had pulled a sword on me was far too close.

"Okay, you're going to have to drop that weapon." I started, taking another step back from the madman and waving my pistol. I didn't actually want to shoot anyone, but between my life and this asshole's…

"You think you can order me around?" The man bellowed, bringing his horse to the left, facing me. Right now that sword was in his right hand opposite me. It was clear he was intending to charge after he turned, and at that point I'd lose a good shot.

There wasn't any more time to talk. Steady breathing. Focus on the target, not the pistol. Aim for the head- no, between the shoulders. Don't pull, squeeze.

Idly, I noted the crack the .45 was significantly quieter than I'd thought it would be. Odd, I'd fired plenty of guns in my life and the opposite was true. Even with ear protection whenever the 9mm fired I'd felt like the entire world stopped to listen. What was different?

The man I'd just killed buckled backwards, a surprisingly thick spray of blood the only indication I'd gotten my kill, as the horse reared the corpse away from view and then darted. The panicked beying of the creature as it fled was dead quiet, and was the clatter of armor as my victim landed in the mud. Now that I thought about it, the whistle of wind through the grass had died down as well. Maybe some implant had deadened my hearing, which made less sense the more I thought about it. Had I deafened myself?

Huh. There were 5 more guys out there and I was worried about my hearing.

I turned the gun back towards the cart, to find the enemy in complete chaos. Someone had been thrown off their horse, one of their boots caught in a sturrup and dragging the man along as the horse desperately tried to free itself and flee. The other two riders were busy getting their mounts under control, shouting and screaming as the horses bucked and jumped. The driver of the cart was desperately trying to calm his horses (odd choice, having horses drive a cart), while the man with a crossbow stared at the fallen warrior, dumbfounded. I hadn't thought of gun shy horses being a factor, but why wouldn't they be?

"YOU WANT SOME?" I bellowed, surprised at how loud my voice was. The pistol was leveled on mister crossbow, now, but I with how the first enemy had been positioned I doubted he realised the 1911's power.

The man brought the crossbow up and my pistol bucked, but this time the man seemed unaffected. His weapon blurred as a bolt came loose, flying almost too fast for my eyes to track. My second shot must have surprised him, though, because the bolt flew harmlessly over my head.

The horses hadn't enjoyed the second shot either, as the two mounted bandits desperately clung to their fleeing equines. They'd obviously managed to gain some control, though, as they left down the road. The other two horses were darting in random directions, one towards the tiberium field. The fallen rider hadn't moved since it's ride had finally shaken him free.

That left the two on the cart. Both had dismounted, one rushing me with a short sword while the other hurriedly rewound his crossbow. The charger certainly was coming directly at me, however, putting a bullet in his chest was easy. He face planted in the mud, writhing as I started my run towards the crossbow boy. I didn't trust my shooting and it looked like I had plenty of time to line up a good hit.

Stop. Feet shoulder width apart. Finger on the trigger. Focus on the-

The man stopped cranking his crossbow, eyes the size of golf balls staring directly into mine. His forehead glinted with sweat, while his shoulders heaved with short breadths. This person was human. Hell, he looked younger than I did! He had a family, goals, and desire to live, and I was about to snuff all that out. I'd already done it twice, but this time despite being armed he was helpless.

But what else could I do? I didn't know how I was going to feed myself, let alone a prisoner. There was no way I could watch him. I had too much to do if I wanted to fight tiberium. I already had too many loose ends with those two runners. This man was helpless now, but he'd already tried to kill me once. A second attempt wasn't a matter of if, but when. Unless…

As the .45 bucked in my hand once more, I couldn't help but wonder if I'd just killed a part of myself, as well.
 
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Interesting conceptually. Spiritually its a commander fic, but one that:

1: Keeps power scales small. Tiberium boosted production is bullshit but hardly von neumann. Moreover the SI is still human, which makes them vulnerable but also means they interact on a human scale, not giant death robot.

2: Keeps power interpretations fair or even harsh. It'd have been easy to write the MCV as largely automated and no harder to operate than it is for a player playing C&C.

3: The power also comes with the huge liability and responsibility that is tiberium and the threat it poses to the SI, civilians, and enemies alike. The SI also had a realistic reaction to tiberium of "let's nope the fuck out of it to another world" but will probably feel pushed to act otherwise now that its clear people live on the world.

4: Picks an interesting setting balance wise. Berserk is a setting which the modern world could easily beat conventionally... then promptly lose the unconventional side of the conflict. Even if the SI can pull together a horde of self replicating combat robots the main threats of the setting simply cannot be stopped with conventional forces at all and can pry at him from weird angles.

Frankly, given how ####ed that setting is, Tiberium could perhaps be seen as a small mercy, perhaps?

... Or not so, maybe...
Getting your planet turned into space crack that space alien drug addicts then snort up may not be a dignified death but its still a step up compared to what Berserk is used to.

Though my Berserk lore is bare so I got to ask, what is the timeline?
Koka is defeated by Guts in Chapter 1 of the manga. Of course Berserk is in non-chronological order, so all the arcs prior may or may not have happened. My assumption is the author is probably going with "after the Band of the Hawk era, but with a little time before the in media res kicks in".
 
06: Bonus Objective Complete
I should have gone back and checked the bodies. Beyond ensuring none of them were playing possum to try and ambush me later, I should be seeing where I'd hit them to get a gauge on my rusty marksmanship skills. However, examining the fruits of my labor seemed like the least appealing activity in the world at the moment, and the last thing I wanted to do was stare into their dead eyes again.

"Shit."

I don't swear this much, I promise. Before today (good god, it feels like I've been here for weeks), I'd avoided profanity. Saving it for a special occasion, I guess.

"God damn!"

I couldn't get my last victim's face out of my head. The desperate pleading in his eyes… It wasn't going away. Now I understood why killers like Guevara were always pictured shooting people in the back of the head.

"Jesus christ."

I was trying help those fucking people! What sort of person tries to rob people that warn them? My day was already bad without having to murder three assholes!

"What the FUCK!"

Something in my peripheral moved, and I spun to face the cart. Between the .45's sights and bars of the cage, a pair of icy blue eyes glared back at me.

I lowered my pistol, wiping my face with the patrol cap and blinking again. No, I wasn't breaking under the stress. There actually was a woman's face giving me the stink-eye from behind the cart's supplies.

"What the…"

I hurriedly shoved my pistol into my holster. Why would anyone stick a person in a cage that big? Was she some kind of prisoner? A slave? That didn't make much sense to me. Why deny yourself that much space on a cart (not to mention the weight of all that iron) when you could shackle them up behind and have them walk?

"Hello?"

If the woman understood me, she didn't show it. Dark-blonde hair clung to her face, the day's rain giving it a damp sheen that reflected the sun. Her simple clothing clung to her shoulders, the rest of her hidden by the pile of supplies stacked in front of the cage. From the way her cheekbones protruded without lending a malnourished look, she reminded me of some cosmetic product model. What was she doing back there? My thoughts drifted to what the lead asshole had said, something about a 'snake lord's tribute.' Was it a religious thing? I mean, these people looked european, but considering I wasn't on my earth no assumption could be trusted. I was pretty sure no pagan religions from northern europe worshiped snakes, but my pre-industrial revolution history was terrible.

Maybe I'd just interrupted some important ritual, shot a bunch of priests, and now she doesn't think it'll ever rain again or something. It was a silly assumption, but I couldn't discount it, could I? Part of me wanted to dismiss the thought on the grounds that priests didn't try and mug anyone they came across, but considering some of the things priests in my world had been caught doing, I couldn't discount it.

I moved around to the side of the cage, stopping in disbelief upon unmasking it's full contents. Huddled against the supplies at the front of the cart, in a mass of soaked clothing and fear, were several women and children! There must have been about a dozen adults, with that many in children. The confidence in the first woman I'd seen was totally lacking here. The women squeezed together, hiding their children and giving me terrified looks not too dissimilar to the crossbowman a few minutes ago.

In the back of my mind, I noted the group had been as silent as a tomb, even with my shooting. It couldn't have been my hearing, could it? No. I remembered the sound of my boots in the mud as I approached the cart, and the whistling of wind in the grass had returned to my awareness. Some sort of collective experience was keeping them quiet. An unnerving thought, to say the least. Gunfire wasn't that terrifying, was it?

"What are you?"

For someone who seemed on the verge of hypothermia, the woman who'd been staring at me had a very strong voice.

"Uh…" I have to admit, it caught me off guard. "Human?"

"Don't be flippant with me!" She snapped, her eyes burning with rage. "Do you realise what you've done?"

"Not really, but-"

"Without his tribute, the Snake Lord will unleash his men on our villages!" She shouted, and I found myself finching away from her on instinct. "He's killed families for much less!"

"Well, excuse me for saving your life!" I shouted back, trying to put a similar strength into my voice. There was no way I was going to let someone trapped in a cage, who probably didn't even understand germ theory, lecture me. "If I'd let those men lead you into the Tiberium, you'd all be dead, uhh..." I paused, trying to think of something clever "...like the Snake Lord!"

Okay, I might not be a professional orator, but since I'm pretty sure the Snake Lord (if he had an actual name, I needed to find it. For my own sanity, if nothing else) lived in Koka, and since I'm pretty sure Koka was a crystal-infested hellhole at the moment, it was a pretty good bet nobody was going to have to worry about the tyrant. If I was wrong, then he had to be far enough away that, by the time he figured out his domain had been compromised, gotten an enforcement squad together, and sent his men to stop me, I'd be meeting him with a suit of Zone armor and a wall of auto-turrets. Let's wait on calling someone unkillable until after ventilating him with lead and DPU, okay?

"The Snake Lord is dead?"

"Probably." I shrugged. Speaking of future plans, I really needed to get back to putting the refinery together. If people like the three soldiers I just killed were common, I wanted something with a higher rate of fire than a .45.

"So you don't know?" The prisoner enquired petulantly.

"I don't even know what he looks like!" I shouted, my acting replaced with actual frustration. "Look. The entire town of Koka is gone, and everyone in there's probably gone with them. Even if I knew his appearance, he'd be entirely unidentifiable!" Finally, the glare had disappeared.

"Uneye… what?"

"Okay, look. There's this crystal that-" I paused. How do I explain this in a way your typical medieval peasant would understand? "Alright, an evil rock is just a few-" 'Evil rock'? Really? "I can explain later. Look. My home's not too far away from here. Let's get you out of that cage and the weather, and then we'll talk, okay?"

There was a brief pause, before the woman I'm assuming had taken command of the group nodded.

"Their leader had the keys on him"

Well, I was going to have to check my handiwork eventually. I had plenty of ideas of what I'd be looking at, through historical footage if not movies, but there was always a screen between me and them, and I hadn't personally killed any of them. I guess burying them would eventually be my responsibility, but I already had so much to do so rationalizing leaving them there was pretty easy.

I assume their leader was the man who'd rode out to meet me. I'm not an expert on power dynamics, but someone who wasn't in control probably would have relayed my message a little better before trying to rob me. Hopefully I was right, so I wouldn't have to focus on my other victims.

Despite my intentions, I found my gaze drifting to the other two corpses as I passed them. The man with the crossbow lay face-down in the mud. If there was an exit wound I couldn't find it, and I didn't care to search. I'd forgotten about the man who'd been thrown of his horse, and my hand almost went to the pistol when I saw his corpse. Death by poor horsemanship. A reflective trail in the mud pointed from where it had initially fallen to a surprisingly serene face. His foot must have been caught in a stirrup for a moment. I couldn't help but recalling that feeling of suddenly losing your balance and falling. Beyond paintball I couldn't empathize with the gunshot victims, but most people were familiar with the feeling of falling in an unsafe area.

I wasn't sure the one who had charged me was truly dead, but he didn't seem to move from where he fell. I felt my hand straying back towards the pistol, before remembering I hadn't engaged the damn thing's safety.

Oh god, of all the little things to forget! Quickly- no, carefully, I fished the .45 back out of my holster and slid the safe back behind the slide. Dammit, I was practically alone out here! I couldn't afford to keep making airheaded mistakes like that!

That pig-headed blunder got my mind off my dark task, at least until I found myself staring into the wide, dead eyes of their presumed leader. Beyond the shocked expression, the man's face seemed pale. The brilliant red gash in his neck showed why. I was clearly going to have to work on my marksmanship. I'd tried to hit him between the shoulders, but instead I'd nicked an artery in the man's neck. That explained the spray, at least.

I expected to be repulsed at the sight of the gore, but beyond some bile in my throat I couldn't say I was especially moved by it. Now that the adrenaline had diluted somewhat and I'd at least intellectually come to the terms that I'd killed, I found the bullet wound more intriguing than repulsive.

Looks like the bullet didn't get lodged in anything. Is this the cleanest these things get?

I hadn't thought the tissue around the wound would bruise like that, but I guess it makes sense.

With how quickly the blood drained from the brain, it couldn't have hurt much, could it?


My feet shifted, and I suddenly realised I'd been leaning into the wound to inspect it better. Jesus, was that sort of morbid curiosity healthy? I didn't want to think about it.

The key wasn't exceptionally difficult to find. I'd fished it out of a rather full coin purse, Each coin bearing someone's face and a simple seal. Either the Snake Lord was pretty generous, the land had an inflation problem, or these soldiers had a side-business in theft and bribery, because I the purse was stuffed with coinage. I ended up securing it to my belt, as I would probably need some kind of currency later. Hell, if I could get the fabricators to reproduce them, I could add "artificially-induced economic collapse" to my already impressive arsenal of science fiction weapons. If I really wanted to power play, I could devalue a kingdom's currency to the point it's people were forced to use a currency I created, giving me massive control of the market and legitimacy over the monarch in the eyes of the common man.

As I fumbled with the gigantic, rough-looking padlock to release the present captives, I mentally filed that thought under "nuclear options." The peasant of this world suffered from enough hardships without me torpedoing the economy. I really needed to invest the time to figure out what exactly the MCV was capable of.

When their leader exited her cage, my first thoughts were on how short she was. She still exuded that confidence she'd shown earlier, but the fact her eyes barely reached my chin dampened the effect. It wouldn't have been so bad if she hadn't seemed the tallest of her group when I'd been looking up at it.

"You said you have a dwelling nearby." Her anger was mostly gone, but the weariness remained.

"Huh? Oh." I nodded, turning away from the rapidly emptying cart and back towards the Conyard. The Conyard was certainly visible, but from this distance it seemed miniscule. The building's I'd gotten used to seeing at this distance were barns and farmhouses, and both were normally larger than the squat, earth-tone structure. To think you could fit so much utility into such a small object…

It would take them several hours of walking for them to get there, which was several hours I'd rather spend getting some sort of containment system set up.

"It's over there a few miles."

"You saw us from there?" She inquired.

"Yeah." I didn't want to explain much to her, at least not out here. Eventually, I could brief the group on everything I wanted, but I wanted to get as much done on the refinery as possible before fatigue set in and I started making mistakes. After I had some form of security from the encroaching sea of tiberium I originated at, I could try and recruit them into helping. Sure, a bunch of medieval peasants weren't ideal workers and probably just wanted to return home, but I really needed help. "Think everyone can make it there?"

"Yes." She nodded, her skepticism to my earlier claim obvious. "But once we arrive, you're going to have to answer some questions."

A woman of this era challenging a man? And not just any man, but one who'd killed three people a mere minute ago? Was that brave of her, or were gender roles different then what my history knowledge said they were?

"Of course." I nodded. I really didn't need submissive people at the moment, so good for her. "I'll get the place ready for you." And with that, I turned and started making my way back towards the forklift.

"Wait!"

The shout made me jump, and I spun to face the leader once more.

"Don't you have a name?"

Ah. I hadn't introduced myself. My uniform had sported a name tag, but it's not that surprising they didn't pick up on it. There was an opportunity, however…

"Right now? I'm just The Commander."

Not too helpful, sure, but doesn't that sound badass?
 
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I'm seriously loving this fic, as well as the sheer humanity that radiates off of the SI. It's very clear that he's just an average guy thrust into a terrible situation, but one that then soldiers on anyway in spite of it all.

I look forward to your next chapter. :)
 
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I'm unfamiliar with either of the two settings your mashing up here, but I'm intrigued with what you have so far. The first few chapters have that slow awkwardness that most SI fics wind up with, although you get out of it relatively well due to having to take care of the Tiberium. Dealing with a semi-existential threat that your SI brought with him is a fairly unusual twist to the trope. I like it.

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I'm seriously loving this fic, as well as the sheer humanity that radiates off of the SI. It's very clear that he's just an average guy thrust into a terrible situation, but one that then soldiers on anyway in spite of it all.

I look forward to your next chapter. :)
I agree completely. So many of the newer wave SI's just...don't feel human. Whether it's god-like power, toned down flaws/eccentricities, or something else, they end up feeling like perfected copies of someone, or largely untouchable.

Additionally, I have no idea where this is going to go, which is great. The novelty of it keeps my interest stoked.

Bringing Tiberium into the horror show that is Berserk is so crazy it loops around into genius.
 
I'm not sure what the endgame of the Godhand is, but my assumption is that having humanity and the biosphere get eaten by space crack runs counter to it. They can't defeat it conventionally, the GDI was much more powerful in that sense and couldn't make headway, and as for unconventional tactics, you can't just give a behelit to space crack and get it to betray its space crack buddies like they did with the Band of the Hawk. They can't overpower it, they can't manipulate it, and based off the author's comments in time it will invade the astral plane they live on too. Which screws over the SI even more, as sooner or later the Godhand is going to notice that the SI is harvesting the material and seemingly controlling it and presumably be the one who unleashed it in the first place. Which means the Godhand will want him. Not want him dead, but alive, which is much worse...
 
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Thank you! They've been corrected, and I'm happy for the feedback.

To everyone else, I have to say I've been a little overwhelmed by the feedback. Between an original fic, a KC project, and an indie game I'm trying to throw together, I really wasn't planning on investing significant effort in this fic, but I can say everyone's feedback has been really inspiring. Of course, with the semester coming to a close updates aren't going to be that constant, but I can safely say this fic isn't dying any time soon.

(Also, I forgot how silly Tiberium Wars' difficulty curve is. I was told some of the missions were literally impossible on hard mode, but while I still think I can bully my way through Sarajevo without reducing the difficulty I'm starting to understand the sentiment.)
 
07: The Commander's Lair
Unlike their new masters, the horses driving Alessia's cart had recovered from the day's terror. They shouldered through the grass, seemingly heedless of the day's events and the strange structure before them. For the life of her, Alessia couldn't determine how it had been erected. The hues of brilliant yellow and sand-brown were clearly paint, but beyond that Alessia couldn't fathom what the odd dwelling was built from. It's walls were too smooth for stone or wood, while its structure was too rigid to be plaster. Perhaps it was iron?

Impossible. Alessia had trouble imagining the kind of work needed to forge plates so large and uniform, and even then the weight alone should have made the building collapse. The brilliant white symbol displayed on its side, a sharp silhouette of a diving hawk, wasn't offering any clues.

Still distant, that strange cart appeared once again, it's two gigantic wheels carving through grass at amazing speed.

"How does it move?" The woman beside her asked, her whisper barely audible over the wind. While her bonnet obscured her face, Alessia was sure her face was balancing between awe and terror, like her own.

"I don't know." Alessia admitted. She wouldn't have said as much in front of the rest of the group, as they had been relying on her steady example throughout this ordeal as tribute, but Ruth was a strong woman. "Perhaps some form of sorcery is involved."

Unlike their cart, the strange vehicle had two tongues in front of it, but while it was hard to tell from afar, they didn't appear to have the yolk required for livestock. She wasn't sure what kind of beast could have pulled something so large, in any case. No, it had to be moving on it's own, somehow.

"Such a power… What could The Commander have done to obtain it?"

Alessia grimaced. Witchcraft and Sorcery were terrible, deadly sins. The village priest had no issue with small charms- they did not interfere with any soul, increased the fertility of the land, and thus God's tithe, but getting something so massive to move must have required a terrible ritual indeed!

Briefly, she considered turning the cart and heading back down the road, attempting to return to the nearest village, but if the Snake Lord had been killed, then no one was holding the leash of his army. Without fear of him to keep them in line, the Snake Lord's men would have undoubtedly returned to banditry on a scale not seen since the Hundred-Year war. Those dogs wouldn't hesitate to prey on her little group, even if it was still guarded by their former comrades. A life of farmwork had left Alessia fit, albeit ill-prepared to serve her late fiance, but even if she was armed there was no way she could guard her group against one bandit, let alone several. She would have to trust this mysterious Commander, the one who had so easily dispatched her former captors.

Odd, that the man's weapon didn't scare her, at least in a superstitious sense. Ruth hadn't stopped talking about it until Alessia reminded her of her father's old profession: manning Cannon during the Hundred-year war. Building one so small, that could fire more than once, was a feat, yes. However, the issue more than likely boiled down to an issue of craftsmanship rather then magic. Impressive and dangerous? Yes, but it made much more sense then to say that then The Commander had struck down the Snake Lord's men with a curse.

With such skilled craftsmanship, Alessia had to admit she didn't know what would be possible.

On its own accord, the structure's gigantic doors slid wider to allow the strange vehicle admittance. Dutifully, the odd cart dipped the pair of tongues and plunged into the structure's common area, withdrawing with another dull-colored object. Perhaps it was some sort of barn or warehouse, and the Commander was clearing room for his guests. Either way, as the cart hauled it's bounty towards a structure in the distance, it became apparent that Alessia would arrive at the building before The Commander's cart returned.

"That second structure was always there, correct?" Alessia asked her partner, finding herself unsure of the answer. Judging by how her companion stiffened, the feeling was not alone.

"It had to have been." Ruth stammered. "No building simply rises out of the ground, does it?"

The fears of sorcery among the pair returned with a vengeance.

Alessia brought her cart to a stop, her gaze on the structure intensifying. Of course, having studied the building for hours already, she didn't gleam any new insights. More action would be required.

"Stay with the cart and wait. I'm going to explore this Commander's dwelling."


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New rule: cancel refinery construction once it starts putting the harvester together. The construction yard could throw a surveyor together, sure, but a harvester was far too large for it to handle. Because of this shortcoming, the damn thing had been split into two seperate boxes, that had to be at an exact distance and angle from each other before they would deploy. Since the only thing I had that could move them was exactly as precise as a forklift, this caused far too much frustration. It was hard enough to slide the boxes off of the forklift, let alone picking them up without the grooves in the Conyard's floor.

The harvester itself reminded me more of concept art I'd seen then anything in-game. It was squat, simplistic, and unarmed, unlike it's in-game predecessor. Thinking back on the canon design, I realized why: it contained several parts that by themselves wouldn't have fit into one of these boxes the MCV created. Maybe the war factory could throw together something that didn't look so flimsy. At least it was automated. Seeing the squat vehicle dutifully rolling towards the red zone on its own accord was a massive relief. If I had to do it manually, there would be no way I could keep up with the growth, period. Even if the harvester ended up as hair-brained as the ones in game, I had plenty of worse crap to complain about.

Speaking of the Red Zone, it was clear my fellow visitor had been just as busy as I had. The grass had yellowed considerably, first in uneven splotches and then completely as the distance from me increased. The faroff treeline had lost all its former color, dead, brown trees occasionally lit with brilliant green like someone had carpet-bombed the dying forest with off-color christmas lights. While the ground here seemed to be almost alive, rippling and swaying with the wind, all was still in Tiberium's realm. If I'd bothered to look closer, I imagined I would have seen the even pulsing of the occasional blossom tree, or stead fall of dying leaves, but sitting and staring at my foe wouldn't be productive, would it?

Well, I had a harvester and a refinery, and it only took all of my energy and the majority of the day. This sucked, because I still needed to get a barracks together. The refugees I had were due soon, and while I could probably shore up in the Conyard I wasn't going to shove everyone in there if I could avoid it. Besides that, my stomach had figured out I'd been purposefully ignoring it several hours ago, and had grown increasingly insistent I find food.

Calm down, gut. People can go on without food for a lot longer than this.

Still, the Barracks hopefully had a way to manufacture food as well as serving as a place to sleep, and I was sure hunger plus fatigue created a perfect environment for mistakes. In a world where the mother of all crystal growing kits sat only a click west of me, I didn't think I could afford mistakes.

Why am I even trying to rationalize this? I'm hungry and tired. End of story.

Even with the accelerator firmly against the floor, the forklift was painfully slow. The gigantic wheels of the forklift had all the torque required to haul the MCV up a mountain, but they really traded speed for that strength. It was almost as if the MCV was manual all along, and I'd been petering around in first gear the whole time. I hadn't bothered to count how many trips I'd made in this thing, but I could definitely say I'd spent too damn many hours in this cockpit.

I needed to be doing something as I sat.

I didn't know how I felt about becoming so used to the HUD I'd woken up with, but while there were disturbing implications it was just too convenient. Even now, the now-familiar interface flicked to life in front of me, reminding me of my progress.

You managed to get done in a day what the average player achieves in under a minute. Congratulations.

Even that pesky thought did nothing to suppress the sense of pride I'd felt at seeing the list. In the old world, the same thing would have taken months. I wasn't here to admire my accomplishments, though. With enough concentration, I managed to expand the Conyard's icon, opening an interface familiar to the one I'd seen when operating it. I admit it was disturbing how quickly my implants realised I'd been searching for barracks variants, but if that meant I could turn my time driving into something productive, I guess I would allow it.

There were four immediate kinds of barracks, which didn't surprise me. They probably came with different room layouts and fabrication equipment, based on my how they'd been labeled. Let's see… Enlisted, Officers, Security, Humanitarian. Not a surprise on the last one. With a more and more of earth being rendered uninhabitable every day, I'd be surprised if the Brotherhood didn't have significant humanitarian equipment on-hand, let alone the UN-derived GDI.

Still, I couldn't afford to be wasting time on something that had no-doubt been stripped down compared to the base models. Enlisted it is, th-

"Warning: Unauthorized entry detected."

EVA's dispassionate announcement jerked me out of my planning as a yellow warning appeared on my HUD. With a moment's consideration it expanded, showing a security camera feed from the MCV. The refugees must have beaten me there. Since I'd sent the drone southwest, I'd hadn't been tracking their progress, but with how little time I was spending at the Conyard it made sense they'd arrive while I wasn't there.

The woman I'd shouted at -Anita, I think- was the only one in the camera feed, and judging by how she gripped the knife she'd been bringing with her, She'd probably been the only one brave enough to enter. Good on her, then. Curiosity wasn't a bad thing. Still, with her making her way past the assembly bay and into the control room…

I shouldn't.

I remembered my surprise when I'd first activated the conyard, and tried to multiply that by the difference between me and the woman- mainly, the millennium of technical knowledge. No. Beyond schadenfreude, nothing good could come from exposing a medieval peasant to something so impersonal and automated as an active Conyard. On the other hand…

I needed a barracks yesterday. Surprise is temporary. I'll apologize to her when I arrived, then ask for forgiveness under a roof with plumbing, air conditioning, and food.

Assuming her heart doesn't burst, first.
 
Soon as possible, learn and practice witchcraft!

Thankfully, the rudiments of The Craft are fairly straight forward, involving meditation, exercising visualization, and even prayer/communion with the divine like anyone can do!

Now all the SI needs is an actual practitioner to give him a more structured paradigm to work with...

Hopefully, not all of the Spirit Trees, and thus their witch-guardians, have been completely destroyed as of yet!
 
Soon as possible, learn and practice witchcraft!

The problem with that is that studying witchcraft is that it requires a significant investment in time and effort. Finding that sort of time could be a problem.

That being said, not finding a way to capitalize on the fact that freaking magic exists would be pretty stupid.
 
Overall my impression is that the author has been carefully setting up the level of automation in this interpretation of C&C such that the SI can and must recruit the locals to help. It seems pretty clear that while the SI might be able to field some autonomous assets (the UAV, the harvester) most of the economic macro and military micro requires manual intervention. However given that the SI is able to do things without any prior experience just help from the onboard VI, then it means that other people could be taught to do it, albeit with more difficulty. The SI can't field brutally efficient self replicating mechanisms of war, but they can probably give powered armor and battle tanks to the locals and teach them how to use it, as well as help on economic things like the construction yard-forklift-refinery-harvester, which would be as much of a game-changer for the Berserk setting as any BERSMOW would've been.

Its definitely a twist from the usual "SI can do everything without help". Lost Star's fic is the only one I've read that had a Commander-esque SI recruit/rely on the locals rather than just humoring them at best.

Also how long is it going to take for the tiberium to encircle the SI's location? Even with a harvester chipping away the tiberium is expanding radically outward from all locations its at, so sooner or later it'll achieve such.
 
One suggestion. Spend much more time describing things. Setting scenes and explain and or show us where people are. I got confused at some points as to where protag and refugees were and what order they were arriving in.

Basically keep in mind that things aren't always immediately obvious to the reader. Ie more detail about the base, landscape, more specifics.

Perhaps send out lots of long range drones to help define the local area for us.
 
The problem with that is that studying witchcraft is that it requires a significant investment in time and effort. Finding that sort of time could be a problem.

That being said, not finding a way to capitalize on the fact that freaking magic exists would be pretty stupid.
Considering what kind of spirits might emerge from, or be drawn to the very existence of Tiberium, making time for Magic will be a MUST.

If Fanese can do it, anyone can!
 
One suggestion. Spend much more time describing things. Setting scenes and explain and or show us where people are. I got confused at some points as to where protag and refugees were and what order they were arriving in.

Basically keep in mind that things aren't always immediately obvious to the reader. Ie more detail about the base, landscape, more specifics.

Thank you for the feedback. I always find it a little annoying when a fanfic author makes a little too many assumptions about the reader's knowledge on the settings, especially when a crossover is involved, and it appears I've done that. I'll try to address that in the future, even though reinforcing that philosophy may cause a few technical problems:

You see, one of the "rules" I've set for myself when writing this fic is that each segment (calling them chapters is a little generous) needed to fit on no more than 4 pages, preferably 3. This is opposite from my other ongoing project (which I need to get around to cross-posting here from SB), where I set myself a minimum of 20 pages per chapter, with I think the prolog jumping over 30. While more happens in those 20-page chapters than these 4 page snippets, it's not significantly more, and I spend a lot prose on heavier descriptions, longer internal monologues, etc.

Obviously I can update this a lot more then Anchorfall, but the delays there also affected by more rigorous (read: perfectionist) self-standards, waiting on beta readers, worldbuilding issues, and currently motivation problems. I don't have those in this fic.

I guess my major concern with increasing the purple prose is this: While setting the scene the characters are in, my page limit means I have to try and cut things down to make sure something actually happens every chapter. That being said, I did mention taking too much for granted is one of my pet peeves, so I would like to put a bit more effort into avoiding that. Therefore, I might increase my internal page limit to five or six, which might have other problems.

Obviously I wasn't going to maintain this update schedule even if I did stick to the old limit, but doing so here is going to increase update time regardless. Is everyone okay with that?

All hail the fifth King of the World, Tiberium; well once it gets around to covering most of the planet anyways.
Tiberium is kind of an Anti-King, now that I think about it.
 
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I'm actually not having any issue following along. I find your level of description excellent for the story's pacing and approach to story telling. While the location of stuff is minimally mentioned, at no point was I ever left feeling that I needed to know and remember that information to enjoy the story. It's just not something of major importance. The well described passage of time while traveling is of much greater importance to the premise than distance. The SI isn't really restricted by the short distances involved here after all; time is the real adversary.
 
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I'm actually not having any issue following along. I find your level of description excellent for the story's pacing and approach to story telling. While the location of stuff is minimally mentioned, at no point was I ever left feeling that I needed to know and remember that information to enjoy the story. It's just not something of major importance. The well described passage of time while traveling is of much greater importance to the premise than distance. The SI isn't really restricted by the short distances involved here after all; time is the real adversary.

I think this sums up my understanding of the chapter, too.

However, it still remains that i'd love to see an instance in a coming chapter when the SI spends (Slightly) more time describing the landscape, so that the pacing we have currently can be later maintained whilst providing a good sense of direction.

All that is needed is a quick overview of the nearby surroundings before returning to current standards of description and pacing - Kind of like the drone surveyance that the other person mentioned, but perhaps not so extensive. We don't want it to take up too much time, after all.
 
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