I am the rats in the walls, the birds in the sky, and the stranger on your corner.
I am the cat that lays kittens in your bed. I am Darkwing Duck.
I am the rats in the walls, the birds in the sky, and the stranger on your corner.
Lisa - *Takes one Look at Blasto* Nope! Were moving... cant stay on this continent any more!I like the idea of her becoming The Warlord of Brockton Bay without ever meeting Lisa.
"Permanently" is a rare and very very powerful word in the wormverse that's generally reserved for Dauntless, Crawler, Glaistig Uaine and the like. She could permanently make all the capes (and members) of the other gangs weaker and slower than normal, permanently, and make the capes and regular members of the ABB strong and fast enough to get minor brute and mover ratings, permanently.-Gorgon- Eyes permanently cause whatever he looks at to get progressively weaker/slower or faster/stronger.
gammoregan said:"Permanently" is a rare and very very powerful word in the wormverse that's generally reserved for Dauntless, Crawler, Glaistig Uaine and the like. She could permanently make all the capes (and members) of the other gangs weaker and slower than normal, permanently, and make the capes and regular members of the ABB strong and fast enough to get minor brute and mover ratings, permanently.
Darkmavrik said:
- Have you decided what happens if she tries to clone a Caldron cape?
- Can or will she use a Kaiser clone for free metal (just making metal lumps doesn't sound like it needs sentience)
- And will Othala enhanced clones become common?
So. Coil. Simurgh. Leviathan. And Taylor. The lineup is inspirational.Dinah Alcott was having another restless sleep. She had been having nightmares every night and her parents were getting worried. It had gotten to the point that they were considering taking her to a therapist because of how strange her behavior had been lately. She didn't want to do anything but stay in her room.
Dinah dreamt of a strange white snake that squeezed around her and whispered sweet nothings into her ear. She pictured a giant covered in screaming mouths, and a vast ocean that threatened to drown her. No matter what she did, she couldn't get away.
But for the first time, something new had started to show up. She saw a strange tree on a hill. It was huge, so high that she could barely see the top. Closer inspection revealed a figure connected to it. She was carved from wood and was growing beautiful flowers that on closer inspection were filled with teeth and flesh. She wasn't sure why but she found herself at peace beneath the shade.
For the first time in weeks, Dinah Alcott slept soundly.
You asked for critique, and I will provide.So that is part 1, or the prologue. Critiques and constructive criticism is welcome since I am still a beginner and I know I will make mistakes. I will try to fix parts that are rough or need rewrites as needed. I tried to do 3rd person for the second half of the 5th chapter as an experiment, and hopefully it wasn't too bad. I am going to try and aim things for one chapter every week or two with writing 7 to 10k words as my goal. I finally decided to make a thread for some of my stuff after reading that the number one tip for new writers is just to write on a schedule and keep it for practice.
Taylor is powerful, but she is far from invincible in this story. Though the ABB is going to be afraid of going at night before too long. Hope you guys like it.
For some reason I want to call her Glasshouse.-Bodyguard forcefield cape. Older Chinese woman who agreed to work for Lung if he moved her family to America after Behemoth hit Beijing. Very short, and looks older than she is as she used to be in an older version of the Yangban before they started sharing powers. Can create large force fields that look like large panes of glass in her line of sight. Two modes with one that is a strong force field, and another that can act like portals between each other. Can only have three at a time. Can transport people through portals but the space between is very cold, crushing, and it really hurts to do so. Is occasionally ordered to transport people through it to punish them. Otherwise acts as Lung's bodyguard to protect him while he bulks up after nearly dying to Accord/Butcher.
Oversight, Overseer, and Gazer seem like better options. Gorgon is a bit too pretentious. And more fitting for a Case 53 anyway.-Gorgon- Eyes cause whatever he looks at to get progressively weaker/slower or faster/stronger. Eyes are always on. The longer he stares at something the more info he can gain on it. Sort of like a very weak Tattletale in a specific way. Wears glasses and hides his identity in a crowd of regular ABB members. Tends to be overly focused on single things and misses details. Tar's young 20-year-old boss.
@ foldimort
Well Taylor theorizes based off of the other Butcher that at least part of her consciousness would survive in her killer, and yes they probably would get every shard at once. Though she obviously can't test that. Her hope is that she will get to live on in someway and direct the mind of her killer toward good.
FTFY
Positive, nature-oriented names:
- Sprout
- Green Thumb
- Farm Girl
- Orchard
- Bamboo
- Kudzu
Powerful, scary names:
- Alchemist
- Chimerical
- Guts
- Incisive
- Splice
For a more grow-up sounding name, stick "Dr." in front:
- Dr. Sprout
- Dr. Greenthumb
- Dr. Guts
- Dr. Bamboo
- Dr. Kudzu
- Dr. Chimera
- Dr. Splice