Of Slayers and Shipgirls (BtVS/Kantai Collection crossover)

Nice. I liked the summoning of the Taffies.

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That's... not going to work in the long run. At least not since the transformation seems to have left them recognizable.

Still, it will likely work for the short term and will allow them to work out a way to handle things when the inevitable happens and somebody recognizes them and spills it to the media.

Glad you liked it! I really hope people like the next set of summonings as well as the next chapter. Unfortunately it's delayed a day due to serious RL issues (long story short. Ford Explorer fall down transmission go boom, just bought Ford Escape and spent way too much time on this, no writing time, sorry!)

I agree with you on the short term nature of Buffy's 'solution', but remember that the USN has good reason to go along with the story, and there are enough elements of the US government familiar with the supernatural that they are going to be willing to help with the coverup even if somebody spills.
 
Hmm. Question: In the first 'wave' of US summoning, will any of the great names come out, besides Ari and Taffy 3?

Enterprise, Wahoo, Harder, Tang, Archerfish, Albacore, Sister Sara, San Diego, O'Bannon, Houston, any of the Iowas, NorCal or SoDaks? (and what's the status of the museum ships?)
 
Hmm. Question: In the first 'wave' of US summoning, will any of the great names come out, besides Ari and Taffy 3?

Enterprise, Wahoo, Harder, Tang, Archerfish, Albacore, Sister Sara, San Diego, O'Bannon, Houston, any of the Iowas, NorCal or SoDaks? (and what's the status of the museum ships?)

At least one of those is in the upcoming chapter, which is about 80% finished right now. Just as a minor hint the summoning featured in this chapter is at the Washington Naval Yard *grin*.
 
Chapter 05
A/N – See the first chapter for the full list of disclaimers, don't own a thing so I'm still just a poor fanfic writer and not a rich and successful author.

Reviews and recommendations are the bread and butter for me, I love them all even if they are critical. I'd like to thank everybody who has been so kind as to read, comment on, like, follow, or recommend this story!

I apologize for the delay this week in the story, had a very unfriendly week starting with my truck dying on me and ending with me having to shell out far too much money to buy a new vehicle. Writing time has been unfortunately limited.


Chapter 05


Location – Washington Naval Yard

It took between six and eight hours on average to turn around a summoning chamber from one attempt to the next. New supplies had to be brought in and stacked in the prescribed locations, replacement candles had to be set out, and the clouds of stale incense had to be ventilated to clear the air. Every so often a longer gap would be required in order to scrub down the summoning pool to ensure the water was nice and clean.

Ever since the breakthrough had occurred with the first known officially successful summoning in Hawaii every US naval facility around the world had been conducting ceremonies as quickly as the summoning chambers could be turned around. The Washington Naval Yard was no exception and, as it was also the navy's formal headquarters, those ceremonies tended to be attended by not only naval officers but also politicians and the media. It also boasted one of the most efficient turn arounds amongst all the chambers as the entire rear wall was actually a giant loading dock with hangar-style doors closing it off during the ceremonies themselves. As a consequence, they could turn around a ceremony every four hours.

The last summoning attempt here had netted a quartet of Brooklyn-class cruisers and a dozen destroyers mixed between Bensons and Fletchers. The very first attempt, a mere thirty minutes after the report from Pearl Harbor had galvanized the fleet, had yielded both of the North Carolina class battleships along with the Northampton-class cruisers Chicago and Houston. The twenty girls who'd already been summoned were mostly asleep in the spacious barracks set aside for them and now the crowds were gathered for another ceremony.

Unlike the other summoning pools, this one had a dedicated observation room for VIPs to observe, and like the last summoning it was packed to the rafters with politicians eager to see the results. Clouds of incense obscured the water in a filmy gauze, while massive drums pounded out a brutally martial rhythm and sailors chanted in hastily memorized Latin since it had been found that that worked just as well as Japanese and was easier for westerners to pronounce. Then it fell silent, and the pool erupted in a storm of bubbles that filled the entire chamber.

When the eruption cleared there were only three girls standing there in a triangular formation. The faint sense of disappointment faded almost before it could form. This may have been the smallest numerical summoning here at the Washington Naval Yard, but the onlookers realized just who they had summoned.

In the front was a somewhat older looking yet short and elegant ship girl. Out of all the ones summoned so far she looked the most old fashioned, wearing a modest country dress that would have been suitable for the set of Little House on the Prairie. She was cradling an old Henry rifle on one arm and had what looked for all the world like an old washboard marked up as a flight deck attached to the other.

Behind her were a pair of twins who towered over her yet seemed in some indescribable way to be subordinate to her. They were tall and strong and nearly absolutely identical. The only real way to tell them apart was that the one on the left had a red tropical flower tucked behind her ear while the one on the right had a blue one tucked in the same place. Each of them had a Springfield '03 tucked under one arm and a long flight deck attached to the other. Each had a substantial island and funnel structure as a backpack, with the one on the right having a broad black stripe painted down the center of her funnel.

The lead figure skated forward slightly then stiffened to attention before proffering a textbook perfect rifle salute. "Sir, USS Langley reporting for duty accompanied by USS Lexington and USS Saratoga." She said in a soft yet oddly compelling and commanding voice. She paused, then a slight quirk on her lips. "And if she'll come down from where the dear girl is hiding in the rafters, USS Los Angeles."

The observers all startled and looked up, to find a fourth girl was floating in midair up amongst the ceiling lights. She was wearing a blue and black dirndl of all things, albeit with a scarf that looked like an American flag around her neck and a pair of excessively large binoculars in a case on her belt. On her back was a massive cylindrical gas bag that held her up and she looked exceptionally sheepish as she drifted downwards to hover right over Saratoga. "Guten Morgan" she said in a soft voice, betraying her German origins as a product of Luftshiffbau Zeppelin. "Errr… good morning. USS Los Angeles, ZR-3 reporting in, ja?" She blushed slightly, the English spoken in a definitely mixed German and Californian accent. For all that she appeared to be the same age as the fleet carrier twins she was positively tiny, a perfect representation of proportional dwarfism in action.

Saratoga smiled faintly and lifted her left arm so that the zeppelin girl could take hold of the edge of her flight deck. Moments later she huffed as Los Angeles dismissed her rigging and wound up cradled against the much larger fleet carriers hip. Then the three carriers slid across the pools surface and up the ramp, dismissing their rigging as they did so. Saratoga immediately set the zeppelin girl down and aimed a slight smirk at her twin sister before schooling her expression back into professional calm. Lexington, on the other hand, rolled her eyes very slightly before she too returned to the placid professional demeanor they'd been showing.

The Lieutenant standing at the top of the ramp returned the salute and held it before snapping his arm down. "Ma'am, we've prepared quarters for all of you and the mess hall is open, if you would accompany me?"

Langley smiled gently, but her eyes were solid. "No need for either, Lieutenant. I'd like to get the girls into the water and practicing right away. Hopefully we'll be able to get them upgraded to more capable birds quickly since I do not relish sending them out with SBUs, T4Ms and F2Fs in their air groups." She paused and her smile broadened. "They can eat after a few hours of practice."

Behind her the two fleet carriers were actually pouting, and it is a terrible thing to see fleet carriers pouting. But neither raised any objections to Langley's pronouncement. Los Angeles, on the other hand, giggled and smirked as she ostentatiously patted her belly and silently mock yawned.

Langley didn't even turn around. "And, of course, we need to start working with Los Angeles to integrate zeppelin operations into the mix, best to start as we intend to continue." Her voice never changed but her eyes twinkled just a little bit.

The zeppelin girl's face immediately fell, but like the two much larger fleet carriers she raised no actual fuss about it beyond a slight sigh and a crestfallen expression.

The Lieutenant looked over his shoulder helplessly and started to open his mouth when Langley interrupted, lifting one finger chidingly. "Young man, you do not think that I will be able to stand in the line at my age, do you? My plane capacity is far too limited and I am much too old and slow to be effective. I will instead spend my time ensuring that my daughters are at their best." She glanced over to where an Admiral was standing and nodded respectfully to him. "And that they are treated properly. Am I clear, young man?"

The lieutenant paled slightly, swallowed, and resisted the urge to salute again. "Ma'am, yes ma'am." He nervously said instead.

Langley just smiled and patted the young lieutenant on the cheek in a quite motherly fashion. "Very good, young man. Be a dear and round up the other girls, no doubt lazing about in bed when there's practice to be done. Come along, ladies."



Location – Ventura County Naval Base

Buffy groaned a bit as she swum back to consciousness in an unfamiliar bed with an unfamiliar ceiling overhead. It took the slayer a few moments on the edge between sleep and wakefulness to remember where she was and she groaned again, forcing herself to actually wake up and swing out of bed rather than burrow under the sheets for some more shuteye. She then found herself blinking and a slow smile crossed her face as her faeries reported in about what had happened in her vicinity while she was sleeping.

The room she was in was a double, and across from her was Cordelia still snoring away as she'd obviously slept through her alarm. Buffy started giggling as she watched Cordy's faeries trying to wake the slumbering battleship up through increasingly bizarre means and nearly fell back onto her bed and started laughing uproariously at the sight of a team of faeries cooperating to maneuver a large glass of ice water into position via an improvised crane consisting of a pyramid of faeries, a ruler, and lots of ropes.

The water splashed, the tower collapsed, faeries were sprawled everywhere… and Cordelia was still snoring, only having shifted irritably in her sleep at the attempt. Buffy at this point completely lost it.

An evil grin graced Buffy's face as she had an idea and winked at the exasperated faeries. "I've got this." She said, winking again, then leaned in close to Cordy's ear.

"WILLOW WAS VOTED HOMECOMING QUEEN!" she suddenly shouted, causing the former cheerleader to surge upright looking absolutely horrified, which only caused the swiftly dodging slayer to laugh harder. Moments later she was dodging a pillow thrown by an irate fellow battleship girl but even that couldn't stop her mirth.

"Jeesh, Cordy, you sleep like a log. Reveille and all that jazz." Buffy picked herself up, still chuckling, and headed towards the en-suite bathroom that the battleship girls were privileged with as their quarters had been converted from BOQs.

"Some of us don't have slayer metabolism, slay girl." Cordy grumbled as she dragged herself out of her own bed. "And if you use up all the hot water…"

"You'll what, snore louder at me?" Buffy replied from the bathroom. "Don't worry about it, going to rinse off then head down to soak a bit at the docks. You'll want to do the same thing, the docks should wake you up better than a mere shower."

Cordy's grumbles could still be heard, even over the shower. Buffy grinned, luxuriated under the shower for a few more moments, then shut it off and stepped out. Wrapping a towel around herself, she left the bathroom and gestured for Cordy to go in before she paused and glared at the swimsuit that was in her closet.

"SPIKE!"

A few minutes later a still visibly fuming Buffy and a yawning Cordelia made their way to the pool that had been converted into a dock for the ship girls, both wearing matching American flag string micro thong bikinis that seemed more designed to cater to male eyes than anything else.

As soon as they reached the docks they ran into Joyce. Now, Joyce is a very nice woman in many ways, and very kind and understanding. But seeing her daughter wearing three postage stamps and some dental floss was just a bit infuriating.

"Where did you get those… those…" she glared at the two girls, who shifted a bit on their feet before Buffy planted her hands on her hips and glared back.

"Spike told us he'd left swimsuits in our rooms. He left these." Buffy grated. "Not that we don't look wonderful in them, but still. I'd rather wear these than skinny dip in the docks."

For the second time that morning a bellowed "SPIKE!" rang out loud and proud. Momma Bear was angry.

That shout brought results, as Spike poked his head out of his office, then his jaw promptly dropped upon seeing Buffy and Cordelia. "Cor… why aren't you girls wearing the navy issue suits I had delivered?" He wasn't drooling, but Spike being Spike he was certainly smirking and leering a bit, which resulted in Joyce smacking him upside the head.

"These ARE the suits that were delivered!" Buffy screeched at him, glaring furiously.

"Bloody hell they aren't. The quartermaster wouldn't even stock suits like that." He was now looking annoyed as he was being blamed for things he had absolutely nothing to do with.

Right then the doors opened and Dawn skipped in accompanied by the Amy, Jenny, and Willow. All four wearing nice proper US navy standard issue female swimsuits. Seeing Buffy and Cordy the three Des Moines girls blushed furiously while Dawn just started giggling. Buffy, Cordelia, Spike, and Joyce all looked at each other, then simultaneously… "DAWN!"

An hour, a good soak in the docks, a decent breakfast, and one extremely grounded Dawn later, the Sunnydale girls gathered in the briefing room along with the recently summoned escort force that had been commandeered by Spike. They could hear another summoning in progress nearby but had mostly tuned that out. Most of the girls were quite nervous. Despite the action that the Sunnydale girls had been in most were still woefully inexperienced.

Spike positively sauntered in, still wearing his trademark duster and with a cigarette held between his formerly undead lips, with Joyce and Drusilla flanking him. He preempted even the slightest attempt at military courtesy with a shouted "Anybody stands up and salutes or bloody shit like that I'll have you scrubbing the bloody mess."

Buffy rolled her eyes, like she'd do something like that period for Spike of all people.

"Alright, we've got harbor boats marking out an assault course and weapons range for you girls. We're going to be spending today in heavy training, both individual runs and group runs. I want all of you girls to get comfortable working with everybody else. We've got three bird farms, one fleet and two escort. You escort girls will be working up full ASW loadouts, Tarawa will be sticking with a full air superiority loadout. Our main striking force will be the battleships and cruisers, we don't have enough carriers to form proper strike packages." He looked up from some notes he'd pulled out of his pockets, then smirked. "So hurrah for the big bloody guns. Montana, you are overall field command, Porter, you're the most experienced of the destroyers so you'll be provisionally in command of the escort, likewise Tarawa will be in command of the air groups. Any questions?"

Witek started raising her hand, and Spike just rolled his eyes. "Yes, Witek, we will get you a lab to do your bloody boffin things in but not until I'm satisfied that you are fully up to speed combat wise. So work your bloody arse off and you'll get to play with your test tubes faster. And no, McCaffery, we're not going on a bloody field trip to NASA anytime soon." Spike smirked, lifting an eyebrow at the other destroyer girls. Ares had told him you had to be firm with the destroyers from the start or else they'd unleash their powers of cuteness and you'd find yourself agreeing to just about anything to keep the little terrors from pouting.

Buffy grinned and raised her hand, then spoke before Spike could even react. "How long do we have the range for?" she asked, smirking a bit.

"All day, the new arrivals will be getting settled in and we're the first coherent and organized battle group present." Spike replied.

Buffy promptly stood up. "Alright girls, form up on me. Dru, I'd like you to practice acting as comms support." She didn't pause as she strode towards the door, the girls falling in behind her almost on instinct. Alpha predator leading the pack and all that.

She started giving instructions even as they headed to the harbor slipway. "OK, Porter, is it? You set the marksmanship mark for the destroyers and let me know when each of your girls reach it. Fargo, you do the same for the light cruisers and Des Moines will do it for the heavies. Hawaii, you'll be with Cordy and I." she gave her little sister a smile that would send great whites fleeing in terror. "And I'll be setting the mark for us. Tarawa, you work out with Rabaul and Tinian how you'll handle flight training, but be ready to start launching target planes for AA practice later. We'll keep up the individual practice until noon or everybody hits the standard their type leader sets. Eat lunch, then group and AA training."

They reached the harbor slipway which had been modified into a mounting station for their rigging. None of the girls paused, Buffy's determination was infectious and even the most nervous of them couldn't help responding. They each stepped onto the platform that they instinctively knew was meant for them to use.

The sound of gears grinding and chains clanking sounded out from the quay as mechanical arms deployed around the platforms, each holding one piece of the rigging. How they'd gotten there was a mystery to everybody and was already being ascribed to magical sparkly shipgirl bullshit. The platforms slid down the slipway into the water as the mechanical arms worked their magic, bolting on the rigging in a hiss of pneumatics and buzz of motors so that by the time the girls touched the water they were fully rigged. They set off without pause, skating out into the harbor towards where the training area had been set up.

"First pass stationary, second at speed. Go." Buffy commanded before she led Cordelia and Dawn to where the longest ranged targets were placed, the most distant of them well beyond the harbor breakwater. "Training munitions loaded."

She came to a halt and straightened her shoulders, standing as tall as the sadly still diminutive slayer could, and thrust out one arm. "Thirty five thousand yards, solution set… bracket firing."

All twelve of her massive 16"/50 rifles spoke as one, obedient to her will and aimed by a potent combination of American Radar Master Race bullshit and slayer instincts. Dyed water erupted around the target raft. An airborne observer would have noted, no doubt with great incredulity that all twelve shots landed within 50 meters of the target in a near perfect straddling bracket. Buffy just smirked and adjusted her aim slightly. "Firing for effect!"

Another bellow of smoke and flame as the twelve cannons blasted out the training rounds downrange. Seconds passed, then the target raft vanished from sight as the practice rounds pummeled it down. "Direct hit." She turned and grinned at Cordelia.

"Louisiana, you are up!" she gestured grandly down range.

Cordelia skated forward a bit then came to a halt, closing her eyes and steepling her fingers in front of her face. She sat there in silence for several moments, moving with the gentle swells of the water in the harbor, then without saying a word she opened her eyes, straightened up, and her right hand thrust forward with her fingers splayed wide.

Her main battery bellowed, twelve gouts of flame erupting in unison. Her gaze remained fixed downrange and when the shells hit she easily replicated Buffy's second shot, her entire broadside striking the target with lethal accuracy. Being a member of the American Radar Master Race is one thing, being a slayer is another thing, yet being a seer with slayer faeries? If she wishes to hit something, it is hit. She looked over to Buffy with a smirk, while the slayer simply applauded then turned a truly evil smirk on her little sister.

Dawn was pouting, 35000 yards was a hard shot for any of them, but the 16"/50's of the Montana's were capable of reaching out that far much more readily than her 12"/50 Mk 8's. "It was just a prank, not like I stole your swimsuits and made you go skinny dipping." The large cruiser ship girl pointed out, seeking some measure of mercy from her prank victims… and finding none. "Fine…"

She skated forward to the firing line, aiming one last appealing look at her sister, sighed dramatically, then concentrated so hard that beads of sweat appeared on her forehead. This shot was almost at the absolute maximum range of her guns and she was neither a full slayer nor a seer. She closed her eyes, letting her radars do the seeing for her, locking on to the target. She could almost feel the whirring of her electro-mechanical fire control computers calculating trajectories and forming a firing solution. She felt the gentle waves, opening her eyes and visually orienting herself. She gritted her teeth, then flung out her hand much like Cordelia had. "FIRE!"

Her nine barrels spat out flame and smoke, albeit in not nearly the sheer quantity as the much larger battleships had. Nine super-heavy 12" shells flew downrange. And missed. Widely. Dawn glared as Buffy and Cordelia both smirked at her.

"Try again, Hawaii." Buffy said, eyes dancing. "We'll be waiting here until you manage to hit the target."

Cordelia then pulled out two bottles of chilled lemonade, one of which she passed over to Buffy. "Take your time, we'll just be laughing at you as you miss. Go on, Miss Prankster, Junior Edition."

Dawn huffed then turned back to the target, glaring at it and dialing in corrections to her firing solution. She wasn't a slayer despite having slayer faeries, she certainly wasn't a seer. Her targeting radar continued to track the target and she compared the impact point recorded with the desired target and shifted her point of aim slightly. Again she flung out her arm and shouted "Fire!" in a loud voice.

Once more her nine rifles spoke. Again the shells rumbled down range. And again she missed although she was much closer than before. "This is totally unfair, it's SO outside my effective range." She grumped as the two battleship girls chortled at her failure. But she knew they didn't care, not after her little prank, and deep down knew that this was proper sisterly retribution for it.

A third volley arced out after Dawn dialed yet more corrections in, this time missing a bit long. She glared, took a deep breath, and tried again. This time she finally managed to straddle the target, causing her to pump her fist triumphantly as she made a number of minute adjustments. "Firing for effect!"

Another volley and another. She kept on firing downrange and finally, FINALLY, she hit the target squarely. She turned to glare at the chortling duo, who instead of looking suitably impressed were still smirking. "Now to do this while moving instead of staying still. Targets marked 1 are mine, those marked 2 are Louisiana's, and those marked with a big ole L for loser are Hawaii's." Buffy ignored Dawn's put upon expression with appropriate sisterly disdain. "Minimum speed for the run is 25 knots, we'll go simultaneously and range control will post our results. See those slaloms that the destroyer girls are using? We'll be using them as well, try not to run into any of them. Score will be based on number of hits on target multiplied by average speed through the course with penalties for hitting the wrong target and running down a destroyer or hitting one of the slalom poles."

Buffy grinned then, as she saw the destroyer girls rather hastily clearing the course. "Pity, would have added a degree of difficulty." She winked at Porter, who grinned a bit uncertainly back. "Alright, ladies. On three…" she paused, rolled her shoulders. "Three."

And immediately took off, turrets already slewing about and locking on the first of her targets while Cordelia and Dawn both muttered about dirty rotten cheating battleships. She only fired one turret, trusting in her Slayer instincts and her fire control to hit the target while she slalomed around the first of the poles. She was running at the Montana class's normal 28 knot top speed, not wanting to reveal her full abilities here. Her second target was much closer in and she had one of her 5"/54 twins deal with it as she did a classic powerslide around the next marker.

Behind her Cordelia and Dawn had also started their runs, their own weapons barking out as they went. Cordy limited herself to 25 knots but was making up for it with laser perfect accuracy thanks to her seer powers, while Dawn was not nearly as accurate but was blazing along at 32 knots. She quickly overtook Buffy, giving her sister a raspberry as she passed, but Buffy kept her speed down and simply focused on keeping her turn's crisp and precise while maintaining nearly as high an accuracy as Cordelia.

The destroyer girls were gaping at the demonstration. Sure, battleships were far more powerful than they were and every destroyer girl secretly envied them, but to see battleships (and a large cruiser) racing through a course optimized for them at speeds almost as high as they were capable of and pulling turns just as tight as they could while their main and secondary batteries blasted targets almost faster than they could pop up. That, that was awe inspiring to them.

Bristol leaned in to whisper to Henley "How are they even doing that?" in a somewhat shaken voice. Battleships were the slow, ponderous, elegant ships in her mind, not what she was seeing here.

Henley shrugged. "I don't know… but… how the… she hit two targets at the same time!"

Behind them Willow chuckled, the set a hand on each of the smaller girls' shoulders. "Multiple fire control stations, one in the main tower and one in the aft superstructure. Add in twin balanced rudders placed optimally in the water flow for the maneuverability and you've got them. At a given speed, Montana and Louisiana can turn inside of Porter and match you turn for turn because of that. Throw in that they've got later model fire control radars to the sets you were summoned with, and you have the complete package." She then leaned down to their level. "But, I happen to know that Montana is the nicer of the two, and Louisiana is very ticklish behind her knees." She winked and straightened up.
 
This story has some potential. But this last chapter started ringing so many warning bells that I will probably drop it in disappointment soon.
Main issue: Too little crossover social interaction, too much showing off. You are edging into the typical arrogant Buffy crossover territory if you aren't careful.
Still, the chapter could have worked better if it was chapter 07-08 instead of chapter 05.
What was really needed was the first meeting with the escorts chapter. Remember that first impression matter also in stories.
 
This story has some potential. But this last chapter started ringing so many warning bells that I will probably drop it in disappointment soon.
Main issue: Too little crossover social interaction, too much showing off. You are edging into the typical arrogant Buffy crossover territory if you aren't careful.
Still, the chapter could have worked better if it was chapter 07-08 instead of chapter 05.
What was really needed was the first meeting with the escorts chapter. Remember that first impression matter also in stories.
You obviously don't much of Sunhawk's earlier works.
 
This story has some potential. But this last chapter started ringing so many warning bells that I will probably drop it in disappointment soon.
Main issue: Too little crossover social interaction, too much showing off. You are edging into the typical arrogant Buffy crossover territory if you aren't careful.
Still, the chapter could have worked better if it was chapter 07-08 instead of chapter 05.
What was really needed was the first meeting with the escorts chapter. Remember that first impression matter also in stories.

Thanks for the feedback, helps me with pacing and such.

Two things I'd like to point out that may alleviate your concerns, I hope. First, I intend for Buffy's arrogance issues to be one of her main weaknesses, requiring her to regularly be jerked up short when she gets on her high-and-mighty slayer jags. So I'm hoping to be able to portray it as well as I can and hope that I don't fumble it too badly. Second, this *is* the first meeting with the escorts, they were summoned while Buffy et al were sleeping and they all met for the first time at the briefing. I intend to show the actual first social/non-training interactions in the next chapter.

You obviously don't much of Sunhawk's earlier works.

To be fair it's been awhile since I've done any serious writing, and I'm hoping to improve and do better than my previous works. I need both positive and critical feedback if I'm ever to get any better.
 
So its a case of 'Get back onto the horse' and all that?
Eh, fair.
 
I'm still quietly enjoying the story. The WW2 techporn is light fun to read, and the upcoming interactions between BtVS characters and Kancoll characters should prove to be interesting.

However, my main criticism of this story is that it suffers from "too many characters" syndrome. There's like half a dozen protagonists (or at least it seems that way) plus about twice that in surrounding cast, and even if I'm familiar with the characters, it's hard to get invested behind them all in the context of the story. If it was just a couple characters getting shipgirl treatment initially, it would be easier to explore each character in detail in both internal thoughts and external presentation. This is something I find problematic in YAHFs that try to expand costume treatment past the Scooby Gang cast. I'm fine with more characters eventually appearing in the story, but not all in the very first episode, so to speak - Faith is a great example of doing this right.
 
I'm still quietly enjoying the story. The WW2 techporn is light fun to read, and the upcoming interactions between BtVS characters and Kancoll characters should prove to be interesting.

However, my main criticism of this story is that it suffers from "too many characters" syndrome. There's like half a dozen protagonists (or at least it seems that way) plus about twice that in surrounding cast, and even if I'm familiar with the characters, it's hard to get invested behind them all in the context of the story. If it was just a couple characters getting shipgirl treatment initially, it would be easier to explore each character in detail in both internal thoughts and external presentation. This is something I find problematic in YAHFs that try to expand costume treatment past the Scooby Gang cast. I'm fine with more characters eventually appearing in the story, but not all in the very first episode, so to speak - Faith is a great example of doing this right.

Thank you very much for the comment and criticism!

The main viewpoint characters for the 'action' of the story will be Buffy, Cordelia, Willow and Spike, with Dru popping in whenever she kidnaps my muse and threatens to torture it to death unless she gets to be playful. The other summonings are meant to set the mood and provide spring points for future interactions and to illustrate elements of the world for those who may not be familiar with Kancolle. The other characters in the Sunnydale fleet will only show up on occasion and in the context of their interactions with the main group.

Hopefully this makes sense?
 
I personally like stories with just 1 or 2 protagonists or POVs, but I also like crossovers and many require more than that.

Basically, I think it does boil down to pacing. There are a lot of characters and places and concept being introduced within 5 chapters, and a lot of that was front-loaded to the first 2 chapters. Whole thing just felt too quick for me.
 
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I have a minor nitpick. The Montanas would've carried 18-inch guns if they were built, not 16-inch guns.
 
I have a minor nitpick. The Montanas would've carried 18-inch guns if they were built, not 16-inch guns.

Like Richardson said, the Montana's were designed to use 4x3 16/50 Mk 7's (the same gun and turret as the Iowa)

The US had actually done tests on 18" guns previously, first with the 18"/48 Mk 1, which was completed as the 16"/56 Mk 4 due to the Washington Naval Treaty banning bores above 16" and was later re-lined as the 18"/47 Mk A when World War 2 removed that restriction. A superheavy shell was developed and tested in this gun. This gun was *considered* for the Montanas, but was not selected as the 16"/50 Mk 7 was deemed superior .

You can actually see this gun at Dahlgren in a display alongside a 16"/50 Mk 7, a 8"/55 Mk 16 and a 8" SK/C34 taken from Prinz Eugen.

I apologize for the delays with the chapter, it's being written but last week was hell. I'm a poll worker and election day took its toll, and then other issues came up.
 
Chapter 06
A/N – Still don't own anything, see the disclaimer in the first chapter.

I apologize for the lateness again, I am a poll worker where I live so all day election day was spent working the election, Wednesday recovering from a twenty hour day and I'm still not at 100%, so I lost a great deal of writing time. Add to that my birthday was on November 11th and, well, I was way behind the 8-ball. Then the worst happened, my muse went silent for this chapter only. I know where I want to go, and have more written for future chapters and even have this one fully outlined, but actually writing this chapter kicked my proverbial backside. But it's done now, hopefully it's good and people like it! Again, I apologize for the delay!

Comments, criticisms and such are always welcome. I don't consider myself that great of a writer but I want to improve, and the best way to improve is to get critical feedback. Thank you to all those who have done so, it is greatly appreciated.


Chapter 06


Location – Charleston Navy Yard

The wreckage had finally been cleared away from the old dry dock and wharf. Beneath the water could still be seen the burned out timbers of an American icon. Old Ironsides had met her fate to fire, while beside her the burned out hulk of Cassin Young still steamed as small fires continued to burn deep within the ruined hull. The entire waterfront was desolate and shattered, burned out buildings and the smell of death and ruin. The Abyssal bombardments that Boston had suffered had caused enormous damage and loss of life.

But Bostonians were a tough and stubborn breed. Crews moved through the wreckage, salvaging what they could and marking structures too badly damaged for repair for eventual replacement. Out in the harbor a pitiful few naval vessels sat, many damaged, but luckily Boston was close enough to a few of the new ship girl bases that they'd not suffered a raid since the summoning's started to work.

Alex Martinez and his crew of construction workers and firefighters had been busy for days clearing out structures around the naval yard turned national park. No building was intact, either savaged by shells or burned out by the fires that had raged through the area. They still had to survey the damage and they'd gotten rather skilled at the task.

"You hear that?" Alex paused, listening hard as they clambered amongst the ruins of the old ropewalk building.

The crew looked around, frowns appearing on soot-stained faces. A soft groaning noise could be heard, seemingly coming from within the rubble that had once been the last operational military ropewalk in the United States. Alex gestured and the crew carefully picked their way through the wreckage, dodging around twisted metal plates from the roof that had collapsed when the thick wooden walls had burned.

The sound seemed to be coming from a particularly large pile of debris and the crew stopped short.

"What do you think it is, boss?" one of the construction workers asked, shifting a bit nervously.

"Not sure, doesn't sound…" Alex cut off as the debris shifted, multi-ton slabs of charred wood and copper roofing being pushed aside.

Another groan, and the figure stood up, creaking noises coming from the unmistakably female form as she stretched to her full height. She could easily be mistaken for either a young woman or an ancient lady; her figure was that of youth and vitality yet her hair was the deep steel gray of advanced years. She was wearing an extremely old fashioned black and copper dress that, despite the wreckage about her, appeared to be in pristine condition, unmarked by dust or ash. A wide white-checked belt encircled her waist and delicate gold filigreed patterns twined about the long sleeves and yoke of the dress. A modest white collar that appeared positively ancient and brightly polished brass buttons completed the outfit. A few more creaks and groans, and the figure turned to face the men, a slight smile on her classically beautiful face marred only slightly by a nose that had a hint of crookedness.

Alex opened his mouth to speak, but the figure spoke first in a Boston accent so thick you could almost taste the clam chowder. "A quite annoyed USS Constitution, reporting for duty. Direct me to the nearest operational naval base, young man."

Even with the thick accent the voice of command could make even the most insolent and rebellious youth leap to obey, and Alex was no exception to that. "Portsmouth Naval Shipyard is closest, I think." He paused briefly, then coughed and added a 'ma'am' at an arch look from the old sail girl.

USS Constitution arched an eyebrow at Alex, a ghost of a smile playing over her lips. "I do believe that facility is dedicated to ships that need to sink to do their duty, yes?"

"Ummm… I think so, ummm ma'am." Alex replied.

"Then I should have been more clear, the nearest operational surface warfare base. I was hoping that New York Naval Shipyard was operational, but that would have been closer than Portsmouth, yes? Is the Washington Naval Yard operational?"

Alex nodded, not trusting himself to speak.

USS Constitution chuckled slightly. "Contrary to popular belief, young man, I do not bite. My thanks for your assistance."

She swept past the gaping crew, heading directly for the harbor with her hands clasped lightly behind her back as she navigated the ruin and wreckage with complete aplomb. "I quite enjoyed my last stay in the Potomac, but I do hope that they have done something about the silt. Good day, gentlemen." And she was out of sight.

The crew scrambled after her after a moment, reaching the seawall right as she calmly made her way to the nearest boat ramp formerly used by the harbor tours. As she stepped onto the water the air shimmered about her. What appeared to be the sort of pack that wouldn't be out of place on a revolutionary war reenactor appeared on her back and about her shoulders, with a single tall mast sprouting from it. Canvas spilled out from the yards on the mast and despite the near complete lack of wind billowed out as if caught in a stiff topsail breeze. The shipgirl's hands were still clasped lightly behind her back, her posture erect and proud as she skated smoothly out into the harbor under the impetus of unseen winds.

The crew looked at each other, then jumped as a young voice frantically called out from the wreckage of the nearby dry dock. "WAIT FOR ME!" In the harbor the shipgirl turned, arresting her progress and raised one elegant eyebrow.

A young girl clambered over the wreck and ruin of the dock and leapt into the water, Fletcher-class rigging materializing around her as USS Cassin Young landed and hurriedly skated up to the now smiling sailing frigate. The crew was too far away to hear anything that passed between them, but the hug the pair exchanged before skating off together brought smiles… fierce and hungry smiles from men who'd survived the worst the Abyssals could throw at Boston. The two warships of the old Charlestown Navy Yard were going off to war.



Location – Naval Base Ventura County

It had been several days. Several days of hard training. Around the United States the frenetic pace of summoning ceremonies had ended as the initial rush of ship girls had dried up. Only about a quarter of the believed available girls had been summoned so far, spread out around the country, but that was still more ship girls in absolute terms than any other nation had managed to summon. Most of the girls summoned were older pre-World War 2 vessels or light combatants, with the Sunnydale and Oxnard girls being the most 'modern' of them all.

It had taken a while, but the task force was finally functioning smoothly. Individual and group practices had been grueling, with Buffy driving 'her' girls to meet rather exacting standards. In the absence of any dedicated training ships, like Langley on the East Coast or Utah at Pearl Harbor, Buffy had had to combine tactical leadership with becoming the training mistress of the girls on base. This, of course, had led to plenty of conflicts between the various girls, especially the Sunnydale crew, but in the end things had shaken down with relatively little harm beyond some bruised egos and backsides. It helped that after the first day Buffy had been in near constant communication with both Utah and Langley for advice and assistance in her new duties.

On the other hand it didn't help that Buffy's inspiration for how to go about training people was drawn straight from the boot camp scenes of most major war films and the diminutive slayer seemed determined to out-Drill Sergeant even the grouchiest and meanest DI's in those films. That both Utah and Langley fully approved of this attitude and even at times commented that Montana was too soft somewhat terrified ship girls at all US bases. Buffy would then turn around and lead raids on the local ice creameries once the training day was over, so the girls equally hated and loved her. She kicked their ass out on the water in training, then gave them ice cream and head pats. The destroyers especially liked the head pats. And were short enough that Buffy didn't have to get on tip toe to give them. Mentioning this minor if indisputable fact was a quick path towards utter and total exhaustion as she dragged whoever was so foolish as to make the comment back out on the water and made them do drills until they nearly passed out. Spike and Joyce were the only two to make the comment more than once, since both of them had taken to deflating Buffy's ego at every opportunity.

Abyssal activity had dropped a bit due, as far as anybody could figure out, to the increased losses to ship girl patrols along the coasts. Two raids, one on New York City and another on Seattle, had been intercepted by local ship girl formations and driven off. Attacks seemed to have leveled off at about the same level that other nations with active ship girl forces faced, which was a massive relief to all involved. Convoys with surviving merchant vessels had already started in the Caribbean to relieve the island nations from the threat of starvation as their fishing fleets had been utterly devastated.

"Alright, listen up you bloody wankers." Spike stood in front of the briefing room filled with ship girls, his ship girls. "We've got ourselves a mission."

The girls perked up slightly from where they'd been variously doing their nails, reading magazines ranging from teenage fashion mags to highly specialized technical manuals, wolfing down ice cream (all the destroyers), bragging and glaring (Buffy and Cordelia), a rather enthusiastic thumb wrestling war (all the carrier girls) and all of them were dodging the faerie pilots bombing them with packets of glitter (one of Buffy's ideas to both improve situational awareness and to give the pilots some practice at the same time). But the noise level didn't abate one bit, not that it ever really did.

Spike just shook his head and wondered for the umpteenth time if it was worth it but yet again coming to the silent mental conclusion that it certainly was. "I said listen up." He repeated himself before rolling his eyes and glancing over to Dru. The former vampire seeress turned secretary ship grinned a bit before sticking two fingers in her mouth and letting loose a piercing whistle, thus causing the room to finally quiet down.

"Like I said, we've got us a mission." He glared around the room. "We're going to sail down to LA and pick up the escort of a convoy to Hawaii. Ten container ships loaded with food and munitions, along with a pair of tankers loaded up with fuel oil. This convoy has to get through, Honolulu is on heavy rationing and the power plants only have a week of fuel left. We'll have a six ship division of destroyer escorts from San Diego joining us for this who'll be doing the close in ASW, but we're the heavy escort in the event of surface or air attack. Once we get the convoy through, you'll be escorting them back here loaded with refugees. We don't have nearly enough freighters left, the yards are working on building replacements but that will be at least three months, so don't fucking lose any of them. They are more valuable right now than bloody gold."

He paused and fished around in his jacket pocket for a remote before thumbing it on, bringing up a chart of the Pacific showing the planned route. "You'll have P-8 coverage the entire route, and I'm told the flyboys have gotten their hands on the first batch of depth charges designed for high altitude high speed release and will be testing them. If they work that should reduce the strain on the escorts since hopefully they'll be able to thin out any submarine Abyssals before they can get in position to hit the convoy. Plan is you'll be taking a direct path with variable leg zig zags to throw off any sub attack and complicate any surface intercept. The Pearl ship girls will be meeting you at point Bravo." He used the laser pointer on his remote to indicate a spot about ten nautical miles out from Pearl Harbor. "They'll be augmenting the escort force as Abyssal surface forces have been hitting the islands hard."

He paused again, hard eyes sweeping over the girls who were furiously taking notes, ignoring the fact that many of them were doing so with varicolored ink with glitter and sparkles and other ridiculously un-military things, in notebooks that ranged from professional to ones more suitable for middle school.

"Once you arrive in Hawaii and while the ships are being unloaded, you'll be joining the Pearl Harbor girls to aggressively search for and destroy as many Abyssal surface units as you can find. Thin them out as best you can so hopefully your return trip will be somewhat easier." One last pause. "Any questions?"

Immediately Buffy and Cordelia's hands shot up.

"No, you bloody well can't load Katies." Spike said immediately to preempt the two battleships causing both Montana's to pout at him. He waved that away. "Any serious questions? Tarawa?" he nodded to the lone fleet carrier in the room.

"Keeping the air supremacy loadout?"

Spike nodded. "One fleet carrier alone isn't going to be very effective, and we can't spare any additional since Sara, Lex, Ranger and Wasp are all on the east coast, plus you have the most advanced fighters of any of the carriers who've returned. So keep a very heavy CAP up for the convoy since even though what we've seen of Abyssal airpower is practically non-existent but I would rather not take any bloody unnecessary chances."

Buffy kept her hand up for a moment longer before just speaking up. "How about Dionysius and Wright? Will they be accompanying us to provide C3 and at-sea repairs?"

Spike chuckled "I'll be on one of the freighters, and both of them will be along as well"

"What about supplies?" Buffy asked as she consulted her notebook. "Both at sea and when we reach Pearl?"

"One of the cargo ships is of the LASH type, we're setting aside capacity on her for at-sea resupply of the escort force." Spike replied, consulting his own notes before smirking. "We've also got plenty of ice cream set aside for the escort force so you should all be in good shape presuming we get enough breaks in Abyssal strikes to indulge. Once we get to Pearl we'll have a pair of repair ships to get you all back into top condition since Vestal was summoned last night."

"Is USS Independence out of dry dock yet?" Cordy asked, frowning a little.

"Yes, why? Weren't planning on bringing any conventional warships along on this trip." Spike replied.

"We should see if she's available, we may need her boat retrieval equipment and module space to serve as an emergency dock if any of us take significant damage. Might make the difference between losing a girl and all of us making it through this." Buffy said, having picked up on Cordy's thoughts quite quickly. For all that the two battleships bickered…

Spike nodded and made a note after glancing over at Dru and getting a nod. "I'll see what I can do. We're going feet wet in an hour, girls."


Location – San Pedro Bay

Ever since the chaos of the initial Abyssal attacks the roadstead of San Pedro Bay had been deathly quiet. The surviving container ships that had managed to make harbor floating listlessly at anchor with no real prospect for further voyages while their crews drowned their sorrows ashore remembering friends who'd been lost at sea. Many of the anchored vessels had been sunk in subsequent Abyssal raids while helplessly swinging at anchor with, thankfully, nobody on board.

That had now all changed. Patrols of destroyer escort girls and coast guard cutter girls swept the approaches to the bay regularly, preventing further attacks from the Abyssals. And now the surviving freighters were forming up into a convoy in the main ship channel of the bay accompanied by the greyhound sleekness of a single grey warship that appeared to be racing even while barely maintaining steerage way. Surrounding them were the figures of young women and girls skating about on top of the waves. Yet if one were to squint just right and let one's mind drift just so, one could see instead the ghostly hulls of old warships summoned from the grave to serve their country once more.

On the bridges of several of the massive cargo vessels elderly men who hadn't been to sea for years, decades in some cases, stood or sat next to sailors young enough to be their great grandchildren. The navy had scoured the country, searching for surviving veterans of World War 2 convoy operations to assist with running this, the first true convoy of a new, far more deadly, war. Age-roughened voices advised young professionals about the tricks of forming up a convoy, how to work out separation intervals and maintaining formation without breaking light or radio discipline. The little tricks, the ones that somehow never made it into textbooks or Merchant Marine Academy classes, but which were invaluable at sea.

Meanwhile, out at sea, beneath the waves, a twisted form drifted in the currents. It vaguely resembled a shark crossed with a squid and was pitch black with metallic highlights. In the uncertain light of the depths it had a mottled appearance that shifted and flowed. A single eye on a stalk extended above the waves, focusing in on the roadstead.

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It seems to come out differently in different places. I'll see if I can get it to more consistently tone down though if I continue to use Zalgo for abyssal-speak.
Well, i think you set it to Moderately Fuck Up top, mid, and bottom.
Try the generator set to Minimally Fuck Up top, mid, and bottom.

Also you can keep hitting He Comes for different possible variations.
 
I'll see about that, thanks, Sakuya's Butler!

Incidentally, I'm going to throw this open to all. Any ships you'd like to see the summoning of at the start of the next chapter? Already got some nominations from SB (USS San Diego, USS Enterprise, and USS New Jersey) so will open it up here as well.
 
I'll see about that, thanks, Sakuya's Butler!

Incidentally, I'm going to throw this open to all. Any ships you'd like to see the summoning of at the start of the next chapter? Already got some nominations from SB (USS San Diego, USS Enterprise, and USS New Jersey) so will open it up here as well.
I can't help but imagine either Enterprise or Iowa pulling a Big Damn Heroes moment, ultimately resulting in her joining Admiral Spike's fleet (I can't think of a good name).


And delayed reaction, but IT LIVES!!!!
 
Little E and Iowa will be showing up eventually in the fic, although not sure if they'll be joining the main cast. That being said, I am going to be doing a subplot over in Blighty involving Constitution. All Hail the Sisterhood of Sail.
 
OK, this is a request for assistance for this fic. I'm in need of somebody who is capable of 'britpicking', highly knowledgeable about the difference between American and British English, familiar with English (and to a lesser extent Scottish) modern culture, the political situation circa 2012 (the time period for this fic), how Parliament works, etc. I'm planning on showing what the Watcher's Council is up to in the UK and the shenanigans required to counter that featuring a number of very old salts sticking their oars in and making the system howl.

As a teaser... "Cast your votes of defiance as you will, ladies and gentlemen. I have 104 guns that fully support Her Majesty in this matter."

If you are willing to help, please IM me here. Thanks!
 
I read a few older chapters on fanfic.net I think and it never got the the summonig. I see the athor posted in a differnt fic and seen the link for this story and come over to read it. Very cool and nice to see connie showing up. Would be neat to see her out fitted with sub hu ting gear since she could very nice on solo long range hinting shots and not many subs are going to hear her really since she has no motors or props. Her cannons might not work, but the sail girls and airships could still have some use though as scouts.
 
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