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Long Road Home: A Wandering Quest (IsekaixLitrpg)

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Narasan said:
Well thats disappointing.Evil mc . Im out . have fun
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I wouldn't say evil, I would actually say that the MC grew into a man who most would say is overly good, someone who always tries to see the best in others, and will always offer redemption to others no matter how much 'wrong' they have done.

But obviously had to balance that and naivety, so I tried to show a reformed man who in his childhood wasn't evil but was misguided, immature, and mean, pretty much a stereotypical high school bully who takes jokes way too far, but because of his choices and circumstances out of his control he was implicated in a serious crime. Came to terms with it, while in prison and is actively trying to redeem himself for his mistakes. At worst I wanted him to come of as 'petty evil'. But I probably leaned overly much into his mistakes.

I may go over and change some small details to try balance it out.
 
Jeez, first impression makes mc out to be garbage.
And then themes of redemption by faith and sins and stuff.

Not sure this quest is for me.
 
[X]He believed in the Most High/Allah/God yet he did not know how to worship, nor what was the correct way, so he simply mouthed a prayer, one in which he created. [Mix of all three Abrahamic religions, can do stuff from all three previous religions, yet can have moments where the faith is weak and therefore cannot use abilities.)
 
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I wouldn't say evil, I would actually say that the MC grew into a man who most would say is overly good, someone who always tries to see the best in others, and will always offer redemption to others no matter how much 'wrong' they have done.

But obviously had to balance that and naivety, so I tried to show a reformed man who in his childhood wasn't evil but was misguided, immature, and mean, pretty much a stereotypical high school bully who takes jokes way too far, but because of his choices and circumstances out of his control he was implicated in a serious crime. Came to terms with it, while in prison and is actively trying to redeem himself for his mistakes. At worst I wanted him to come of as 'petty evil'. But I probably leaned overly much into his mistakes.

I may go over and change some small details to try balance it out.
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You did go really hard with the backstory, a cyber bully and drug dealer to small children who drove someone to murder is perhaps too dark.

There's still time to go back and change it to military, as religion is a very contentious topic, not to mention how far you went with his pre-life. After all he didn't actually do anything positive with his faith once he got it, he was just stuck in a cage, so he never acted in a way to warrant redemption.
 
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I am sure i clicked on unwatch but sure i will answer: i dont believe in redemption from truly inhuman crimes. No matter what your mc does in my opinion he will always be evil. So im out.
 
[X]He did not have enough people for a minyan with him, yet he had never had one, still he called out.

Cute MC, this is going to be REALLY interesting and different.
 
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Yeah, themes of redemption are fine (even if I personally find them boring), but participating in "one of the worst crimes in human history" is… like… going way too hard. Especially since you didn't signal that at all during the vote.

Also in the Spirituality vote option you made it sound like we wouldn't be choosing a religion, more vague ideas, if even that. So that is an unpleasant surprise, at least for me

Edit: Reread the vote option. Am stupid. That one was my bad. Bad reading comprehension
 
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[X]He believed in the Most High/Allah/God yet he did not know how to worship, nor what was the correct way, so he simply mouthed a prayer, one in which he created. [Mix of all three Abrahamic religions, can do stuff from all three previous religions, yet can have moments where the faith is weak and therefore cannot use abilities.)

why not?
 
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