Legendary Tinker (Worm/LoL)

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Imagine if he hit Jack Slash with it though. Or Nilbog. Or basically any S-Class threat.

I think most people would have been buried and just die again?
I'm unclear in how the resurrection works, if they're teleported to a safe place or just brought to life wherever their corpse is, if there's one.

By the way did Jack Slash and Nilbog even trigger yet? I know the slaughterhouse must be active but they should still be under King, right?

On an unrelated note, I'm surprised Rubedo didn't desire about being Doored out of his predicament at all, but maybe he has and Lawless just interpreted it as flights of fancy, not unlike him misunderstanding the Dematerializer.
 
3.6 Charmed
Charmed 3.6

2000, July 9: Phoenix, AZ, USA


Judging by the digital clock in one end of the room, it was one in the morning. I spent all of today, yesterday technically, creating Control Wards. They were confiscated from me and placed in a storage room on the first floor of the warehouse. I could still see them with the Oracle's Elixir, though hiding them from me wasn't the point. The point was to keep them out of my reach just in case it was possible to tinker them into something more problematic.

Lawless and Camille had checked in on me regularly. The latter had even asked me what I wanted for dinner and spent time hanging out with me. Honestly, she reminded me of an older girl I used to have a crush on in my past life. It would have been endearing if her plan to consistently expose me to her power wasn't so transparent.

And now I was free. Sort of.

I shared the barracks with Lawless and two other mooks. Camille had another room, with Freeform as a cat curled up at her feet. She'd had sex with him and did a remarkable job of feigning affection, before rushing to the bathroom to vomit into the toilet after the fact. Every. Night. It was… not my favorite thing to watch.

I now knew just how far she was willing to go for La Torcha's ambitions.

Lawless heard every bit of the cocktail of conflicting desires whirling within me and laughed. I swore every night to kill him, just one more desire I couldn't act on. It only made him laugh harder.

I didn't sleep. I couldn't. Instead, I'd forced my young body awake for the past several nights to memorize their sleep schedules. I wanted to know just how light a sleeper Lawless was. After all, whispers were only damning if he was awake to hear them.

I'd been meditating for hours while lying on my back, the stillness, even breathing, and emptiness of thought good enough to fool my captors. All my gathered mana went into my Tear, removing any distinctive light shows.

Hearing their soft snores, I finally allowed myself to emerge from within my soul and plan my escape.

To start, no matter my violent intentions, I had to admit that the likelihood of fighting my way out of here on my own was slim at best. Three insta-kill bullets. I could probably steal my gun back, but… then what? I was good enough to not shoot myself, but I was no marksman. The relic pistol wasn't something that'd let me win against multiple gunmen. The only chance of escape I had would be to use the resources they'd need to provide me to make my own solution. That'd be hard enough to do from under Lawless' nose without having to also hide the specifics of how I'd love to murder him with whatever my current project happened to be.

No. No matter what, busting my way out like an action movie star was out of the question.

'Let's see… What do I have available to me? I had a quart of holy water, which they didn't know was special in any way. I knew where my relic pistol was being kept, on Camille's nightstand as a memento. I could reasonably make requests for more potions ingredients.' Seeing how pitched combat was out of the question, my thoughts immediately strayed to the most basic of all underhanded weapons: poison.

'Can I make a poison?' I wondered as I allowed the tidal wave that was the World Rune's memories wash over me. 'I can't hope to shoot everyone with a dart or stab them with a dagger, so it'd also have to be aerosolized. I'd need to be immune to it obviously. It'd have to be fast-acting to give them no time to raise the alarm. Odorless. Colorless too… Do I have anything like that?'

I dismissed Cassiopeia's noxious fumes. Though highly lethal, they were also an eye-catching purple.

There were subtler poisons used by both the Du Couteau family and the mythical Black Rose, but none would suffice. 'The poison won't spread fast enough,' I realized. 'The warehouse is too big.'

Nor, for that matter, could I think of a ready justification for why I needed twelve quarts of rattlesnake venom, the minimum I estimated I'd need if I wanted to cover the warehouse and the surrounding lot.

Poisons used by Singed, Twitch, and Teemo faced similar problems.

On top of that, I was almost certain that La Torcha was immune to poisons. Her breaker state effectively made her Portgas D. Ace, all but invulnerable to physical dangers. I could conceivably catch her by surprise, but that surprise wouldn't be long enough to kill her with poison and it'd certainly end with my own death. There was also a good chance that she would burn away the poison, if it could reach her at all. And Freeform… He'd simply change himself into a new body, washing away all poisons before they could incapacitate him.

Worst of all? I had no time to devise a safe delivery mechanism and I wasn't immune.

No, poisons weren't the way to go here…

My thoughts then turned to the simplest method of escape: teleportation.

It was only simple on paper though. While the World Rune gave me recipes and ideas, it would require a fully functional Hex Core and an intricate enchantment, at minimum. And to build that, I'd need a Namestone of the Brackern, something that obviously didn't exist on Earth-Bet. It was theoretically possible to fashion one, albeit greatly diminished, but not in any reasonable length of time. This was one of those "build tools to build better tools" scenarios tinkers often found themselves in and I couldn't afford to sink into this spiral.

'it'd be nice if they could just sleep forever…' My thoughts trailed off as a lightningbolt shot through my mind. It'd been a while since I had such a blatant eureka moment. I could put them to sleep for an extended period of time. It wasn't reliant on the airflow and wouldn't weaken over a large area. It couldn't be avoided nor resisted, not by a human who was completely unaware of the spiritual anyway. They could be in the middle of a fight to the death and it'd still take effect. Best of all, I had holy water already.

I was talking about the God-Willow.

Well… kind of.

More specifically, I was interested in the dream blossoms nurtured by Lillia in the Garden of Forgetting.

I was extremely fortunate in that the dream blossom was in the same boat as the relic stones that made up the weapons of the Sentinels. Once, the God-Willow represented the very heart of the world, the focal point of all life magic in the First Lands. It arguably predated even the likes of Ornn.

Once.

I burned at the hands of Ivern the Cruel, the very same who would one day come to be known as Ivern the Green Father. And when it fell, the very land wept.

Just as the Water of Life I used was a pale imitation of the Well of Life originally discovered by Maokai, the dream blossoms were several times removed from the God-Willow, and very much its lesser for it. The God-Willow made a seedling. That seedling made the Dreaming Tree. The Dreaming Tree lost a branch and that branch flowered into the Bashful Bloom.

In a way, Lillia was Ivern's granddaughter.

I couldn't make the God-Willow, but I could make dream blossoms.

'Yes… A cup of holy water… Some flowers conceptually tied to dreams…' A broad grin split my face. Yes, this was possible.

I allowed myself to drift off to sleep, the skeleton of my plan starting to take shape.

X​

"Oi, wake up, kid." I was shaken awake by Lawless. "Take a shower and come out in six minutes," he ordered, shoving a cup of elixir into my hand.

I dragged my groggy ass into the water and emerged mostly awake.

"You know what would help? Setting an alarm," I grumbled as I walked into the office that doubled as our living room. A squishy lump impacted my face, my body too lethargic to catch it.

"Ha, not a morning person, cutie?" came Camille's cheery greeting.

"Huh?"

"Pick it up 'cause that's your breakfast."

"Right…" I picked it up. It was a breakfast sandwich from McDonald's. For all that Lawless and Camille loved to hear themselves talk, they were careful, leaving me as few clues as possible to discern my location. For instance, by buying food from places so ubiquitous I could be anywhere, or by intentionally removing packaging labels from local stores before feeding me.

I scarfed down the Egg McMuffin and brushed my teeth before returning to stretch in the office. Yes, I was kidnapped. Yes, I wanted to escape. No, that wasn't a good reason to stop my morning practice. If anything, the more I worked out, the less time I'd spend helping my captors.

"Heh, doing some karate kid shit again?" Lawless laughed. "You imagining beating my ass like a drum, little tinker?"

I flowed from the kneeling dragon to the swirling cloud, a series of movements meant to harmonize the spirit with the body and center the practitioner. It was a part of the foundational motions taught to every Shojin acolyte. I stepped lightly and brought my hands forward into a grasping claw before my claws turned into two middle fingers.

"Heehee, leave him alone, Kev. Let the little guy do his thing. Besides, I'm pretty sure that's not karate."

"What the hell do you know? You ain't Asian."

"Filipinas are Asians too, you piece of shit."

"Sure as hell don't act Asian."

"And what does an Asian act like?"

Lawless shrugged and gestured towards me. "That."

"Fuck you, Kevin."

"That in invitation, sweetheart?"

Camille made a disgusted face. "Ugh, I'd rather replace my tampon with a lit cigar."

"Bitch PMSing all the time, I thought you already did," he snarked back.

I did my best to tune them out. I couldn't spot Freeform, which admittedly didn't mean much. He could have been sent away on some mission to win Camille's favor or he could be that spider in the corner of the room, waiting for me to make my escape attempt. When I made my break for it, I'd have to make sure to kill him first.

The bickering between Lawless and Camille was practically a ritual. As much as La Torcha tried to portray the Crips as one big dysfunctional family, they weren't. They worked together well enough, or they'd never be trusted to watch me, but they definitely didn't like each other. The impression I got was that Lawless thought of Camille as little better than a cheap whore while Camille considered herself La Torcha's real right hand gal.

Eventually, I could put off my tinkering no longer.

X​

On the bright side, my skill at engraving runes was progressing rapidly. Having the memories of rune masters certainly helped, and like my martial arts, I was slowly turning distant, hypothetical memory into something more actionable.

By the time lunch rolled around, I'd made four more Control Wards, all stored in the same room on the first floor.

The three of us sat together, eating some bulgogi that Camille had Freeform pick up for her. It was manipulative, a blatant attempt to get an eight year old boy to associate her with something familiar, something reminiscent of home. It stung that it was working. The bulgogi was subpar, made for the overly sweet American palette. A part of me still loved that she'd thought of me as she ordered lunch.

"You're not making any more of those wards," Lawless spoke as he polished off the last of his meat.

"They work."

"They do. And we got enough. Ain't so many invisible capes that we need a giant stockpile. Next time Dos Caras squares up with us, someone's gonna set a ward and we'll have a sniper on watch. Fucker's gonna pop like a balloon."

"They only last five minutes apiece."

"See? That's how I know you never traded hands with anyone before. Five minutes is fucking forever in a fight, midget."

"Fine. What else am I making?"

"Powers in a bottle." He must have seen something in the way my face paled. "Fuck's wrong with that? You got more than that steelskin shit."

"I do," I admitted hesitantly. He'd obviously heard my internal bitching at some point. "There's a reason I don't make it, a reason I didn't make it for the PRT. And it's not because Director Lyons didn't know about it. Did you know I admitted I could give people permanent enhancements?"

"For real?"

"Yeah. We decided we shouldn't touch it. If she sees a bunch of guys running around with identical brute and mover packages and shiny purple veins, she'll know who took me. I told her about Shimmer, that's the formula by the way, but we agreed to scrap the idea because it drives people insane. And I don't mean a little eccentric; I mean full-on catch and eat roaches, peel off your own face with your fingernails kind of insane.

"Look, Lawless. I know you probably heard me thinking something like, 'I wish I could give myself powers.' And you heard right. I wish I could. And I can. It wasn't because the PRT didn't like the idea. It was because I didn't, and still don't, know how to make the Shimmer formula safe. Trust me. Don't touch Shimmer. It's really not worth it."

I could have simply not said anything and gone ahead with making Shimmer. It would have given the PRT a heads up as to who had taken me, if Watchdog hadn't figured it out already. But it would also cause wonton destruction across the city while costing La Torcha many of her soldiers. I couldn't afford to alienate the Crips yet.

"Well fuck."

"Make me a knife, Andy," Camille interjected. "You know, one of them super tinker weapons."

I wanted to immediately agree but caught myself. "A knife is a knife is a knife. It won't be much more deadly than any other blade just because a tinker made it."

"I know."

She then did something unexpected and placed a pound of fossilized wood on the table. "Had a mook order another mook who got some homeless guy to buy it for me yesterday," she said in explanation. "I want one of them fancy Petricite knives. It'll block powers, right?"

I looked at the multicolored block of calcium, its red and blue crystalline hues carved into something resembling a howling wolf. My pistol was made with only three pounds of Petricite alloy. With a pound of pure Petricite… Yes… I nodded slowly. "This is enough for a blade."

She pumped her fist and pulled me into a hug, one I'd no doubt have enjoyed more had I been older. Flushing red, I reluctantly pulled away and did my best to banish the warm and fuzzies.

"I-I want a reward," I said, stuttering.

"Hahahahaha, hear that, Teq? Kid wants a reward," Lawless cackled, waggling his eyebrows suggestively at the two of us.

Camille's face went through a myriad of emotions in rapid succession. Surprise. Bemusement. Revulsion. Hate. Her expressions shot conflicting feelings through me.

"N-Not like that! I want a tea set!"

"Oh, thank fucking God," she sighed with relief. "A tea set..."

"Kind of. More than that. The whole thing, really. One of those traditional Korean tea sets. Teapot. Cups. Jasmine and chamomile. Incense burner, press, and mold. White ash bedding. Powdered sandalwood incense. The whole shebang."

"What the hell? Most kids ask for a video game."

"Trust me, the tea set is more expensive," I said simply. "Besides, we all have our hobbies. Mine is martial arts, listening to jazz music, and tea. If you're so hell-bent on making me a gangster, I'm going to be one with style."

"I'm not buying you a full tea set, Andy. Where would I even find one of those?"

"Probably in Chinatown. It doesn't need to be authentically Korean, just made in that style. I wouldn't know the difference, but I do know my teas though. I want jasmine, chamomile, and sandalwood incense."

She looked at Lawless with an arched brow. The thinker shrugged with an amused smirk on his face. "Ehh, he really does want them. Tea bags ain't good enough apparently. Wants the pressed flower kind. Gook's got class."

I flipped him off. "Fuck you too. Oh, and a pound of good knife steel. The better the steel you get me, the better your knife will be. In fact, if you get me the wood as well, I can make a proper handle too. If you have a picture of your ideal style and length, it'd help to have that too."

"Fuck. You know what? Fine. You have a deal, Andy. I'll get you your tea set. Just write it all down."

"Good, now what else can you build?" Lawless said, leaning forward. "Shit don't need to be a weapon, just has to be useful."

I shrugged, not wanting to volunteer anything too powerful. "More health potions?"

"Nah, the two dozen you made are enough for now. Try again."

I looked to through the wall and over my temporary lab. I couldn't deny that a part of me was drawn to all the tools and materials I hadn't used yet. The problem was, anything I built would be taken from me immediately to ensure that I couldn't use it against them. I didn't want to empower the Crips. The least I could do was make something that wouldn't hurt anyone directly.

"An EMP, an electromagnetic pulse that shorts out electronics in an area," I said. I wanted to use it to make my great escape.

Lawless smirked. "He's fucking adorable. He wants to use the EMP on us. Knock out the electronics and sneak away in the chaos."

"Andy, can't you see we want to be your friends?" she cooed. "You may as well stop trying to find a way out. Everyone becomes my friend eventually."

"Pretty sure Lawless isn't," I snarked back.

"Yes, because I don't want him to be," she scrunched her nose cutely. "He's an asshole."

"Ehh, she starts with her power on me, I put two between her eyes. She's smarter than that," the thinker said. After a moment, he added. "You know what? Sure, kid. Build your EMP machine, but know I'll be listening even more closely. I can just take it away the moment it's done. And if you do activate it, well… Let's hope you're faster than you look."

Author's Note

Camille isn't gay, at least conventionally. Her entire sense of identity is focused on Veronica. The inspiration for their dynamic was a more fucked up version of the relationship between Emerald Sustrai and Cinder Fall in RWBY.

Camille doesn't want a knife, not really. It'd be great to have, but it's hardly going to change her life with the way she operates. What she wants is to slowly get him used to the idea of following her orders. She wants to eventually control his pipeline, what he can and can't build, while simultaneously getting him used to the idea of making lethal weapons, starting with the simplest weapon she could think of.

You know, my favorite part about having an arc written already is that I can read all the comments stress-free. It's amazing how close some of you are, and also how far off the mark people can get. Three more chapters then a clarifying interlude that wraps up the PRT and Cauldron response.
 
"N-Not like that! I want a tea set!"
That was smart of him. I didn't think of anything that would have had his chosen flowers without it being suspect.

I think his best bet to escaping is to make a call to PRT and have them trace it while he has his sleep device on. Then he just needs to hold out under the night while they come.
 
Actually, I was wondering about something: Rubedo makes a lot of potions but is stated to be able to make Champion equipment.

What if he makes something that directly heals people, like Soraka's staff or even Redemption? Would that work for him?
 
Actually, I was wondering about something: Rubedo makes a lot of potions but is stated to be able to make Champion equipment.

What if he makes something that directly heals people, like Soraka's staff or even Redemption? Would that work for him?
As a rule, I've been sticking with the lore over game mechanics. Not a hard and fast rule obviously seeing how I made the Control Wards, but yeah. In general, if it doesn't appear in a story, I try to stay away form it because I find it difficult to translate a purely game mechanic to the story without at least a little bit of context.

But as for Soraka's staff, Andy could theoretically make it, but he'd lack the ability to use it. Remember that Soraka is a celestial, a goddess who effectively gave up her divinity to wander Runeterra. It'd be one of those pieces of equipment that belong in the Inspired Inventor series, or until a bit later when he has a better understanding of what a celestial is. He had a hard time making anything greater than the Water of Life.

You're right though. He absolutely can make healing items and will eventually.

Yes, but later.
 
Ayyy. I thought about Lillia but I didn't think her weapon would help, nor her techniques be useful in the short term since he'd have to learn. Never even thought he'd be able to make the plant. I should have remembered petricite is basically tree bark.

Good show, and good on him for finding a time Lawless naturally can't listen (hopefully). Clever way to get access to calming tea leaves.
Hope he figures out a solution to the mastering before its too late.
Maybe he'll just fall awake rise asleep with the Lillia angle. Will be fun to see.
 
lol Fun fact: Lilia is a plant.

She's actually not a fawn at all. It's definitely crack, but Andy could theoretically grow a Lilia if he ever made a true God-Willow.

And it's been less than a week. Cauldron hasn't done anything useful because it's still in the wheelhouse of PRT SOP.
 
You know, my favorite part about having an arc written already is that I can read all the comments stress-free. I

The problem with this is that it also prevents one of the functions of *having* comments--messing up and have your readers point it out to you. If this happens, it's hard to change the story to fit.

And because you're a human being, if someone finds a problem with your story, and you'd have to change things you already wrote, it's tempting to rationalize away why it's really not a problem even if had you been writing the story chapter by chapter, you'realize that it is.
 
So he has proactively made his elixirs, his gun, and the tear. It is a bit disheartening to hear he won't be making in-game items, even though he's making pots and pinks. Maybe my lack of lore knowledge is hurting me and most items will be represented in some fashion in lore. Champ specific stuff is still cool and I love the integration into Worm, it's handled really well IMO.

A refillable, rejuv bead, or charm would all help him tremendously. Rejuv bead especially. Sticking 3 of those on a necklace or bracelet would be a huge boon to any brute (or just himself, considering he gets a 50% buff).
 
The problem with this is that it also prevents one of the functions of *having* comments--messing up and have your readers point it out to you. If this happens, it's hard to change the story to fit.

And because you're a human being, if someone finds a problem with your story, and you'd have to change things you already wrote, it's tempting to rationalize away why it's really not a problem even if had you been writing the story chapter by chapter, you'realize that it is.
Honestly, a valid criticism. Once you've written a chapter, it's difficult to go back and change things. This is just that, but turned up to eleven because the more backlog you have, the more you would potentially need to rewrite, which makes editing difficult.

The secondary disadvantage of prepping entire arcs ahead of time is also the fact that you kind of need ungodly patience and self-control to keep yourself from publishing the chapters as soon as they are grammar checked, if they were even grammar checked in the first place. God knows that if it was me, I wouldn't have been able to make a backlog in the first place.
 
before rushing to the bathroom to vomit into the toilet after the fact. Every. Night.
Yikes, this makes me pity the Master. Also, Rubedo should asks if she uses birth control. It's not something a child would know, but all that vomiting could be mistaken as Morning Sickness. The fact the vomiting happens with this degree of regularity is…. impressive.
 
I like that he will use a tea set to escape. It reminds of Wildbow's explanation of why Coil didn't drug Chariot and keep him in his basement like Dinah. Basically the PRT learned a while ago that it's basically impossible to force an unwilling Tinker to work for you and incredibly difficult to keep one in prison. Anything they get their hands on could potentially turned into an escape. The rubber bands in their underwear, some tungsten wire from the light bulb. Anything. Bakuda almost escaped her Bird Cage transport using only her mouth to make a bomb.

Most parahumans can be restrained once you figure out a work around to their power. Can't really do that to a Tinker since the nature of their power is too versatile.
 
Omake - PinkShadowReader: A perfect distraction
Yikes, this makes me pity the Master. Also, Rubedo should asks if she uses birth control. It's not something a child would know, but all that vomiting could be mistaken as Morning Sickness. The fact the vomiting happens with this degree of regularity is…. impressive.

A perfect distraction - Omake

"Are you making children," asked Andy.

They were just packing in for the night. When Andy asked a question like that.

Camilla spurted out her juice. "Brughhh! Wh- What?! Who taught you that?!"

"Mother said when a man and a woman wants a child they do a special hug together." Andy gestured with his hands to to make an obscene gesture that definitely isn't a good sign that a child of his age has learned.

"When they do this special hug it's often very loud sounds from their bedroom. She said it's from the exercise from the special hug." She looked at him in horror and felt her insides die a bit every second before Andy leaned forward against her in a conspiratorial fashion.

"Later when they succeeded the woman sometimes vomited. She said this is morning sickness." He looked pensive. But all she felt was her head dunking like she was under water with a live concert.

He holds up his hand. "First you and that other man is alone in a bedroom at night. Granted that alone isn't enough but you is always sweaty when you leave." He hold up two fingers. "Two, there is that special hugs sound that also mom also does when she's trying to get kids."

Camilla's feet feels like they have gotten tired and a bit burning sensation, like someone has stepped on them. But she felt she was a long from her body.

"Three, you also vomited. Therefore, "he suddenly proud like he had solved one of world's mysteries, "You and La Torcha are secretly married and loo", his face burst into a sunny grin on it like it explained everything, "-oves each other."

Her body felt slow and far away.

"So is it a boy or a girl?" His face began to fuzz out. A buzz began in her ears and and it slowly began to buzz more and more. Addy began to tilt and tilt tilt... Dunk!

Suddenly the floor was alongside her with him standing on the floor. No? She was on the floor? A- an- That boy took something from her. But she couldn't remember what. Her hands and feet feels wrong. Her skin feels wrong.

"Finally did the poison work. You know that you are a chewy bitch that you didn't want to go down." Ow. His foot was suddenly in her face. But it didn't really hurt much.

"Did you know you can create a specific type of poison with jasmine and chamomile tea? If you didn't know now, now you do. Aren't I helpful."

Her body feels wrong. Her stomach begins to feel like it's burning. Her skin feels like something it something sandpapers it.

She managed to turn her head towards the body mirror.

Wha-what! She is ble- bleeding from her body orifices. She- that woman looks feverish but that woman can't be her!

She has La Tor- La Toba ambition to fulfill! She- she can't give up here.

That boy won't escape! She's Toba's right hand. His most important peoply.

She will.. not.. die. here.

Toba.

Will.

Save.

Her.

___________

Somehow it wrote itself like this.
 
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Brings to mind that comic of the girl distracting the werewolf by calling it a furry for just long enough to load her gun and blow its head off.
 
Honestly, a valid criticism. Once you've written a chapter, it's difficult to go back and change things. This is just that, but turned up to eleven because the more backlog you have, the more you would potentially need to rewrite, which makes editing difficult.

The secondary disadvantage of prepping entire arcs ahead of time is also the fact that you kind of need ungodly patience and self-control to keep yourself from publishing the chapters as soon as they are grammar checked, if they were even grammar checked in the first place. God knows that if it was me, I wouldn't have been able to make a backlog in the first place.

Honestly, I kind of disagree, this reasoning applies only if there are massive plot holes, and even then most can be fixed with minimal writing.

Imo comments should be that.. comments, speculation at most.
Otherwise it becomes a Quest.

I like stories which take minimal inspiration (or absolutely none) from comments, it feels more genuine that way.
 
I really liked this fic but for some reason this arc is just annoying me. Its well thought out and well written but....idk. when I think of this are I keep getting a image in my head of Ralph Wiggum saying "I'm in danger". And I get why he was captured and how they're hard countering him with desire reader guy and slutty master lady. Well this was just me sharing my thoughts/ramblings, still like the story and looking forward to next arc.
 
Honestly, I kind of disagree, this reasoning applies only if there are massive plot holes, and even then most can be fixed with minimal writing.

Imo comments should be that.. comments, speculation at most.
Otherwise it becomes a Quest.

I like stories which take minimal inspiration (or absolutely none) from comments, it feels more genuine that way.
This kind of argument uses a false dichotomy I think. Taking into account criticism does not automatically turn a fic into a Quest, because that butchers what a Quest means and that also ruins the point of comments when readers are reduced to "Unless you're just talking to yourselves, shut up."

It doesn't even have to be big too, how comments affect stories. It could be small plotholes, minor edits to phrasing, etc, and external checks for out of character moments and all of those are valid points of criticism. And these things could build upon themselves very quickly as far as chapters go, OOC moments could become OOC arcs, plotholes could lead to more plotholes etc.

Sure, you may prefer that authors don't bother to listen to their readers, because that makes it more "genuine" in your perspective. But it won't help the story and the author improve if you go about it that way, as in the end the comment section just becomes a collection of yes-men and the author might as well would've written in a vacuum.
 
This fic is nice, but god I hate reading it in this most recent arc. Having to read this sort of "smug hopelessness" of the gang currently keeping our hero captive is not worth the inevitable catharsis of him getting one over on them, imo, even if he got away scot free. The combination of a Tattletale-esque mindreader and a Heartbreaker-esque mind controller, both of whom seem to be portrayed as essentially being in utter control of the situation, paired with their gross personalities makes it feel like Rubido is only alive and free-willed but for the grace of Contessa god.

At some point during these latest chapters, I had to push down this strange, paranoid flavor of suspension of disbelief, because it feels both like he's kind of bullshitting his way out with the whole "Well, he can read my mind and she can master me, but I'm getting good at not thinking about my detailed escape plans and thinking really really hard about not being mastered", but also, it feels like if it wasn't for that conceit that he's just somehow resisting, this would pretty much be a no-win scenario. It made this arc genuinely unpleasant, and makes me wish it was close to being over already.

Maybe if he killed them all after putting them to sleep, I could call that a good enough payoff for this, if he did that, I'd probably be hype as hell, to be frank, but I unfortunately doubt the author is going to go in that direction. And I do mean unfortunately, because that seems like the only way this arc won't end with a sour, unpleasant aftertaste.

Great story, though. I enjoy reading it enough to tolerate this near-intolerable plotline and the dynamics of the characters involved.

Edit: This arc feels like it would have been a lot better if he had already gotten some sort of Petricite item to resist the Master/Thinker influence, early on enough that I could believe he has some sort of minor edge over them. It could have easily been portrayed as something that is merely weakening the influence or something, even if the author still wanted them to struggle with the effects and the tension.
 
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This fic is nice, but god I hate reading it in this most recent arc. Having to read this sort of "smug hopelessness" of the gang currently keeping our hero captive is not worth the inevitable catharsis of him getting one over on them, imo, even if he got away scot free. The combination of a Tattletale-esque mindreader and a Heartbreaker-esque mind controller, both of whom seem to be portrayed as essentially being in utter control of the situation, paired with their gross personalities makes it feel like Rubido is only alive and free-willed but for the grace of Contessa god.

At some point during these latest chapters, I had to push down this strange, paranoid flavor of suspension of disbelief, because it feels both like he's kind of bullshitting his way out with the whole "Well, he can read my mind and she can master me, but I'm getting good at not thinking about my detailed escape plans and thinking really really hard about not being mastered", but also, it feels like if it wasn't for that conceit that he's just somehow resisting, this would pretty much be a no-win scenario. It made this arc genuinely unpleasant, and makes me wish it was close to being over already.

Maybe if he killed them all after putting them to sleep, I could call that a good enough payoff for this, if he did that, I'd probably be hype as hell, to be frank, but I unfortunately doubt the author is going to go in that direction. And I do mean unfortunately, because that seems like the only way this arc won't end with a sour, unpleasant aftertaste.

Great story, though. I enjoy reading it enough to tolerate this near-intolerable plotline and the dynamics of the characters involved.

Edit: This arc feels like it would have been a lot better if he had already gotten some sort of Petricite item to resist the Master/Thinker influence, early on enough that I could believe he has some sort of minor edge over them. It could have easily been portrayed as something that is merely weakening the influence or something, even if the author still wanted them to struggle with the effects and the tension.
The most important thing you pointed out is that he's the protagonist and therefore he's not thinking about his plans to escape and he's resisting the master effect, for no reason other than that he's the protagonist. He's 8 (and change) he should absolutely be deeply under the control of Camille.



I still don't understand Lawless' power. To me his "I pick up desires" should easily have parsed that he wants tea to escape? I don't get why it didn't ping.



Really, most complaints I have/see are exactly why Masters are reviled in-universe. It's not really a complaint against writing the arc, it's just a reaction against Masters, at least for me it is. It's interesting to write a character be Mastered, with all of the negativity surrounding that.
 
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3.7 Charmed
Charmed 3.7

2000, July 12: Phoenix, AZ, USA


Honestly, I thought she'd ask for something smaller and leaner, a stiletto maybe. She wasn't the sort to actually get into a frontal fight with anyone so I expected her to want something she could hide in a discrete pocket, maybe even a ring with a collapsible blade she could drag over someone's throat when they weren't paying attention.

Instead, she asked for something with far more substance. I suspected that this overlarge kitchen knife would either be a gift for her dear Veronica or a way to arm Freeform further. Or perhaps a bribe for someone else? Who knew with her?

Regardless, I finished the knife in two days, though it looked more like a shortsword than a knife in my diminutive hands. It was as long as my thigh, a tad less than twelve inches, five inches of hilt and seven of blade. It was a sleek, double-edged thing made for thrusting, with a nice, sturdy spine that did not fold. The hilt was wrapped walnut and colored with a smoky, dark lacquer that contrasted nicely with the almost pearlescent-white Petricite alloy. All told, it was a beautiful piece, both functional and elegant.

'Leave it to Inspiration to make sure I give it my all.'

And true to her word, Camille had delivered on her side of the deal. The very evening I gave her the knife, she gave me an extremely pricey tea set, the sort used in Shinto and Buddhist tea ceremonies. It was the single most expensive thing I'd ever owned in either of my lives, not counting my car or similar major purchase. Just the tea set, cups and pot, cost over seven hundred dollars, with the incense burner and complementary supplies adding up to an additional four hundred. For a boy who'd been born to immigrant parents in both lives, a thousand one hundred dollars was an absolutely staggering price tag for some leisure items.

"This is the kind of money a Crip exec can throw around," she said with her characteristic seductive smile. "You could have this kind of luxury too," she implied.

It was early in the morning, hours before daybreak. I took a sip of the Oracle's Elixir on my nightstand and made sure Lawless was still asleep before I shuffled out of bed and got to work. It wasn't the expensive tea cups I was interested in. Rather, it was the chamomile.

It was no coincidence that I'd asked for it, buried as one of many requests addressing my personal cravings. Fun fact: Chamomile was a type of daisy, but that wasn't important by its lonesome. Good chamomile was characterized by its mild flavor and fragrance and only the flower heads were used to brew the tea. The tea was most commonly known for being a home remedy for insomnia.

A flower associated with a good night's sleep.

A flower associated with good dreams.

Perfect.

In the main office, I gently cupped a handful of dried flowers and poured mana into them, focusing earnestly on my need. A hauntingly beautiful blue light shone from the flowers as they were remade into something different, something that didn't exist on this world. A set of six half-bloomed buds sat where the chamomile daisies were moments ago.

The dream blossoms were flowers with five large petals, blue on the inside and royal-purple on the exterior. They were creations of magic and spirit as much as standard matter and seemed to glow with an inner light, thankfully not too bright in the darkness.

I took a whiff of the flowers. Their smell was impossible to describe, a fragrance that reminded me of tranquil nights and childhood bedtime stories. It reminded me of my father in my past life, who decorated the ceiling of my childhood room with glow in the dark stars because I was afraid of the dark.

But there was danger there too, a hint of bitterness and something briny. It smelled of the ocean and I was briefly taken back to Busan. Salt on my tongue. Shouting. Feeling so small as I sank, paralyzed by the cold. White hot pain in my eyes.

I reeled back as though struck. Too much was definitely a bad thing. It was a warning, like ominous stormclouds in the distance.

Nightmares were dreams too.

I stood and immediately staggered a bit, feeling drowsy. I frowned. It was as I thought: Just as I wasn't automatically immune to any poisons I could make, I wasn't immune to the dream blossom's effects either. Still, this was a solid proof of concept. I could control this, my first foray into the higher magics of the First Lands.

I spent as much time as I dared pouring mana into the dream blossoms then pressed the flowers inside my pillowcase until they lied flat and hidden. Lillia cultivated them, but they also naturally nourished themselves off of the dreams of mortals; it was what had gotten Lillia so fascinated with humanity in the first place. By leaving them inside my pillow, I was both hiding them and giving them the chance to absorb my own dreams.

Soon, the blossoms would bloom in full and I'd be able to make my escape.

X​

I went to sleep and found myself within the temple of my soul once more. The Rune of Inspiration swirled before me, three Keystones surrounded by nine lesser runes in an ever expanding orbit. It took my breath away, every time like the first time.

I was familiar by now. I knew what had happened; the dream blossoms had been enough to propel my progress. It wasn't too much of a surprise. One of the lesser runes ignited after I built my relic pistol, but I hadn't received anything from making the Petricite Elixir, the Tear of the Goddess, or the Control Wards. I was very close anyway.

With eager hands trembling, I stepped towards the altar and beckoned a star down.

I'd never been happier to receive one of these before. Every one of them was unique in their own way, each a fragment of eternity, but there was an undeniable urgency that accompanied this one.

Help, it promised. More and more, I was realizing that the World Rune had a mind of its own.

"Hextech Flashtraption." I recognized the rune with ease.

I looked down as power filled me. Heat coursed through my body and condensed itself onto my hand, forming yet another tattoo just behind the three bullets of the Minion Dematerializer. It looked like a swirl of energy overlaid atop some complex gear.

'No, not energy,' I realized, 'a portal.'

As the power settled, its properties engraved themselves in my soul and I knew that nothing in existence could separate it from me.

Once per day, I could overcharge this fragment of the World Rune, allowing me to channel for three seconds then teleport to anywhere within my field of perception. I got the sense that this could improve, if only I could grasp a complete understanding of the magics that governed space and time. The obvious solution would be to simply increase my range of perception.

"Can I make binoculars for the Oracle's?" I wondered to myself.

I shook my head. That was stupid…

"But… maybe not?"

What were Master Yi's goggles if not overlarge binoculars? The Seven Lenses of Insight, they were called. They were unique, crafted by none less than the Revered Inventor who was so impressed by the blademaster's martial prowess that he gave them to him as a gift. They were synchronized to Yi's own magical resonance and could change their settings through thoughts alone.

That certainly gave me some ideas…

I laughed. I laughed and laughed and had I been anywhere else but the confines of my own soul, would no doubt have been committed to an asylum. Here I was wracking my brain for a way out and one possible avenue dropped into my lap. I hadn't truly counted on it either; the growth of my personal power thanks to the World Rune seemed so very unreliable.

"But maybe," I said aloud, "unreliable is the way to go. Lawless can't hear anything if I don't know what I want either."

I could leave right now. Rouse myself, pack up what I could, then teleport away. Fifty meters, or a hundred-sixty-four feet wasn't a great distance, but it could be a good head start, right? They were all asleep anyway…

Then, like an icy deluge, reality reasserted itself into my life.

"No," I denied myself. Flash was not a quiet spell, nor a lightless one. Half the warehouse would be looking for me the moment I left.

At the end of the day, I still had no idea where I was. Even if I left, if Red Sands was located on the outskirts of town, I'd have to travel far on my stubby little legs to reach home, assuming I could figure out where that was. I could try to arm myself, I knew Camille kept the Petricite dagger and relic pistol in her nightstand, but trying to sneak into her room like that without the aid of the blossoms might get me caught.

And if I went to a cop… I knew for a fact that Lawless had cops on retainer; he certainly bragged about it enough. Phoenix wasn't Brockton Bay, but it wasn't exactly the safest city in the world either. I had no idea who could be trusted. There was a good chance that the first cop I met wouldn't be corrupt, but by putting myself into the system, I'd alert my pursuers of my location sooner than not. There were even odds of me having an "accident" as the PRT picking me up.

Worse, that would be plenty of time for them to take my mother hostage.

The same went for the PRT, but for different reasons. There could be moles, but… maybe not? My best bet would be to steal a phone and try to contact them, hoping that they could reach me before I was discovered, if they were in any position to come at all. Did the bombings happen or was it one more lie? They would have reorganized with reinforcements from other departments by now, right? Did mom get scooped up into protective custody? Or did she fall between the cracks amidst the chaos?

The appalling truth was that right now, I had no idea how solvent the local PRT was and the uncertainty weighed on me like heavy chains.

"They need to die," I realized.

I had similar thoughts during the day of course. When Lawless not so subtly threatened my mother. When he dropped racial slurs at me or told me about all the "fun" he'd had with this or that woman. When Camille hurled into the toilet after a night "convincing" Freeform.

But this, this was an epiphany. It wasn't a moment of passion or some dark thoughts sprouted in irritation. No. They needed to die because my circumstances would not change without their deaths. My physical escape would get me away from Camille, but it would put them on high alert and force them to retaliate in a way I found unacceptable. I knew their faces and names. If I wasn't theirs, I couldn't be allowed to live; La Torcha made that abundantly clear.

A wave of nausea filled me at the thought of harming Camille. It told me how deeply she'd already wormed herself into my head. I hardened my heart and decided on the only course I had left, the only course there could be since my kidnapping:

"So be it," I resolved myself. "There needs to be a precedent for the unwritten rules, right? Fine. Let's set a goddamn precedent."

X​

The past few days had seen me make some progress on the EMP generator. It was Blitzcrank's, scaled down to be roughly the size of a basketball and only slightly south of twenty pounds, light compared to the behemoth that was the Great Steam Golem.

Blitzcrank didn't pop up in Zaun out of nothing; he was made by Viktor when the mad scientist was mostly sane. Viktor had wanted to eliminate human error from dangerous jobs like sump-diving, construction, and mining. When there was a massive chemical spill in Zaun, he created Blitzcrank to rescue and protect Zaun's denizens. If he hadn't, if his intentions had been to conquer or destroy rather than to save and defend, I suspected I would have had a much harder time isolating and adapting Blitzcrank's generator design into something completely nonlethal and human-friendly.

Still, this was my first foray into hextech, that mysterious and at times utterly paradoxical branch of science which sought to quantify and industrialize magic.

It wasn't easy.

Like any creation of Viktor, I needed a Hex Core. Or, an early-gen prototype of one that didn't require a Brackern's Namestone.

The real Hex Core that was embedded in Viktor's staff was a fully functioning artificial intelligence in its own right, capable of adapting and streamlining its systems on its own prerogative to better assist its master. That was how Viktor could use a single power source to power everything from an electromagnetic force field to a gravity field, thermal laser, and even a fully unrestrained mana storm… that could be remote-controlled somehow because genius and sociopath were often synonyms.

Blitzcrank's version was nowhere near that adaptable, but that was fine. I didn't need it to be. I just needed it to power a static discharge.

It took some carefully worded maneuvering, but I got everything I needed to build one from two car batteries and ten Mana Crystals. Or technically, six car batteries, seven portable generators used by campers, and a box of transformers. I had my fair share of failures.

No lie, I felt a bit like Tony Stark as I put the finishing touches on my prototype. Hell, it even looked a bit like an arc reactor, cylindrical and glowing with the blue light of mana. I wanted to turn it into a bomb. It wouldn't be too difficult to destabi-

The moment I thought that, the core was taken from my hands.

"No. No bombs, kid," Lawless said.

"I wasn't going to."

"I know. You got it good here. You ain't about to make shit worse for yourself. This an EMP?"

"Ha! No. That's the battery."

"You spent three days… making a battery?" he said, face carefully neutral.

"It's a bit more complicated than that, but sure. You know how a battery loses its capacity over time?" He stared at me blankly. "Well it does. That one doesn't. It's clean, light, and will last damn near forever. It also has a high enough capacity to shut down an entire city block."

"It need to be in an EMP?"

"That one? Yes."

And it was even true. I would love to explore the possibilities that a Hex Core represented, but right now? In their captivity? Not a chance in hell. "That thing can do a lot, but it also needs a lot of juice to get started. Kind of like how a boulder rolling down the hill has loads of energy, but you need something strong enough to shove the boulder off that ledge in the first place." I preempted his next question with a carefree shrug. "And no, you can't just hook it up to a car battery. It specifically needs to be steam. Don't ask me why, but my tech wants to be a hodgepodge of magic bullshit and steampunk."

"You made an infinite battery that only responds to… steam?"

"Not infinite. Nothing's infinite. Sure, it'll last for decades, maybe even centuries, but it'll still deteriorate eventually. But yes. Steam."

He looked at the first-gen Hex Core for a moment and stuffed it into his jacket pocket. He grabbed me by the arm and started dragging me out of the lab. "You know what? I don't give a damn. You can tell me what you need for the rest of this over lunch."

"Peruvian chicken?"

"Sure, kid. Where does a chink even get a taste for Peruvian chicken?"

I let the casual racism slide off me like water off a duck's back. It was practically second nature now. "What can I say? I'm a cosmopolitan."

Author's Note

Ugh… Not happy with this, but ehh. I think it's a decent attempt at getting Andy to build something more than potions and vague enchanted things.

Yup. Hextech Flashtraption. Useful, but very situational, just like the in-game ability.

A reminder that Andy was captured on the fifth of July, making this one week in captivity. Camille started working on Freeform since Oathkeeper's interlude, June fourteenth. She's had a full four weeks to work on Freeform, as opposed to just a week with Andy and she'd been far more… physical… with the older cape for obvious reasons. Andy isn't magically resistant to her power; she's just taking her sweet time for a number of reasons.
 
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