Judgement [Young Justice Self Insert]

[KathyArmy]

Is that all metals, or just the transition ones? Since she was able to sense lithium (unless she just recognized the shape of a battery), that implies she can control group 1 metals. If she can control trace amounts of them she can turn off nerves.

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How I came up with her powers was that I was on the metro and just randomly thinking of powers to give her, I thought about Magneto and how he can control metal and I was like, wow that's a cool power that I've never seen anyone do before.

So then I was thinking of ways that Magneto uses his powers and how, contrary to his name, he can seem to control all big chunks of metal, so then it was like.



Magneto can control all metals, even alkali and alkaline, that's OP I'm gonna use it.

And then my brain stepped in and was all like, but first!!! Let me science the shit out of his powers!

And so to balance out all the science! and logic! I applied to his powers I limited the scale of what she can do.

She's well trained, but she's been on Earth-16 for less than a year. Her powers are more inward base and with enough training and time she will be able to do awesome science stuff like that, but currently she is unable to control things smaller than what the naked eye can see.

Conversely, she will never be able to do some of the feats Magneto does, like lifting entire stadiums out of the ground and flying with them or crumbing Auschwitz with a thought. It's not like she can't control anything large, but just nothing larger than say a tree or two depending on it's weight and composition because some materials are easier to move than others.

Sorry for the weird tone of this rant. I was rewatching Ant-Man when I wrote this,

Also sorry if I overexplained, I was just happy to have a chance to share my enthusiasm for how interesting and fun it is to take famous powers and alter them.

 

[Vaalintine]

So Luthor is abducting children to turn into weapons? Yeah, that sounds like him.

 

[KathyArmy]

So Luthor is abducting children to turn into weapons? Yeah, that sounds like him.

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To evaluate what Lex Luthor would do, I just try to think of the most horrible and greedy thing I could do if I was rich that might bring me a sliver of more money while simultaneously screwing over the most people possible.

To be fair to him though, depending on what continuity he is in he's not always as evil. But in most of them he's a tremendous prick that will bring me great joy for my SI to eventually screw over.

MWA-HA-HA-HA

But on that note, I'm curious to hear your guesses on who the other seven people in the facility are. None of them appear in Young Justice that I can recall, but they are all canon DCAU characters.

I'll break it down for you.
Five of the seven she was pretty certain were in there. They were all taken as children after some weird accidents occurred around them. They come as a group in B:TAS and only one of them ever made a return appearance in JLU.

One is kept in a glass bubble filled with gasses. IIRC she only ever appeared in S:TAS but I have to double check.

Edit: Just checked and she also appeared in JL and JLU. She was mostly a Superman villain though.

The last one is kept inside a human size tube. She was a recurring character in JLU.

All of them were originally supervillains in the DCAU.

Have fun

 

[w34v3r]

The Royal Flush Gang.

Volcana

Still not sure about the last one.

Honestly Speaking Lex is the last of Judgement's problems on 16. I mean he's a problem, but compared to Waller, and Eiling and their supporters he's chump change. I mean Lex can make his own abominations when he needs them, Waller and Eiling on the other hand tend to be quick to pull a Danzo.

 

[KathyArmy]

The Royal Flush Gang.

Volcana

Still not sure about the last one.

Honestly Speaking Lex is the last of Judgement's problems on 16. I mean he's a problem, but compared to Waller, and Eiling and their supporters he's chump change. I mean Lex can make his own abominations when he needs them, Waller and Eiling on the other hand tend to be quick to pull a Danzo.

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Right

Correct

I don't know if Waller and Eiling are as big as deals as you make them out to be here. In the DCAU or most comics, absolutely Waller and Eiling could be worse to deal than Luthor, but on Earth-16 I don't think we really see them do much of anything.

Waller is just the warden of Belle Reve instead of working for Cadmus, and I know that Eiling was involved in Captain Atom's backstory from the tie-in comics but I don't know of anything else he did on screen in Earth-16. On the other hand Luthor is involved with the Light and Canonically with a bunch of human experimentation.

Of course, that might just be because I've never actually read the tie-in comics, or that I might not work them into their comic roles, it just means that to the best of my knowledge, Waller and Eiling's evilness was toned down much more for young justice than Lex's was.

 

[w34v3r]

Well it's less a matter off evilness and more a matter of a limited budget.

Usually Waller and Eiling are working within the bounds of government black ops projects, impressive budgets, but nothing compared to the money, tech, and more importantly the super science infrastructure Lex can casually swing around. So they usually end up trying to coerce super-types via force, blackmail, and other unsavory practices, where as Lex can just buy, make, and sell super powers for anyone he chooses, and he rarely if ever does so with children, not out of compassion or virtue, but because it's stupid, kids take forever to make useful, adults are useful now. Waller and Eiling on the other hand tend not to have the option to get picky since in their own ways they're even bigger control freaks than batman, and don't have access to Luthor's resources/knowledge. So they do tend to do horrible things to kids and other people who they're supposed to be protecting.

However Cadmus being a Luthor project in 16 does mean he's more involved in that sort of thing than he usually is.

 

[edmantgoog]

Caddis in yj Is a publicly known genetic research lad far was doing illegal cloning it is not affiliated with the government.

Unless we are doing season of yj them walker should still be a prison warden

Gen.elling has not yet to my awareness had that defining moment that causes him to believe that all metahumans are an unconiable threat to the stability and s sovrinty of the United states

 

[Hexxart]

How I came up with her powers was that I was on the metro and just randomly thinking of powers to give her, I thought about Magneto and how he can control metal and I was like, wow that's a cool power that I've never seen anyone do before.

So then I was thinking of ways that Magneto uses his powers and how, contrary to his name, he can seem to control all big chunks of metal, so then it was like.



Magneto can control all metals, even alkali and alkaline, that's OP I'm gonna use it.

And then my brain stepped in and was all like, but first!!! Let me science the shit out of his powers!

And so to balance out all the science! and logic! I applied to his powers I limited the scale of what she can do.

She's well trained, but she's been on Earth-16 for less than a year. Her powers are more inward base and with enough training and time she will be able to do awesome science stuff like that, but currently she is unable to control things smaller than what the naked eye can see.

Conversely, she will never be able to do some of the feats Magneto does, like lifting entire stadiums out of the ground and flying with them or crumbing Auschwitz with a thought. It's not like she can't control anything large, but just nothing larger than say a tree or two depending on it's weight and composition because some materials are easier to move than others.

Sorry for the weird tone of this rant. I was rewatching Ant-Man when I wrote this,

Also sorry if I overexplained, I was just happy to have a chance to share my enthusiasm for how interesting and fun it is to take famous powers and alter them.

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Aww I thought the SI was a coinshot from Mistborn. But Magneto based powers are cool too if maybe a little on the strong side for the setting. But I suppose a lot of that depends on how you interpret the other powers on Earth-16 and how quickly she improves with her own power.

(Minor Nitpick: Technically Magento has control over the entire electromagnetic spectrum and he just prefers to use magentism)

I don't think I've seen an SI that goes into espionage type work right away before. Definite points for originality there. Lots of good stories you can tell with that setup, plus the SI having actual covert experience makes her a natural fit for the Team later on.

Though I have to admit, Luthor being involved in such an obviously evil scheme seems a bit odd to me, his successes in YJ largely come from the fact that he keeps a decent distance from this sort of incredibly shady stuff. I assume he has plausible deniability for this particular scheme, still, it seems odd for the recruiter to be so openly namedropping Luthor. Especially since I think he's the Governor-General of the UN at this point in the timeline and I can think of a lot of better people to namedrop if you want a teenager to trust you. I suppose this could be a plot by someone else trying to frame Luthor, but that seems a little too convoluted.

On that note, I've been assuming that this is set post-season 2 of YJ based on the metahuman trafficking plotline you seem to be opening with, but I don't think you've actually given an in-universe date yet. Are you setting the story later on in the timeline or did I just read too much into it?

The use of Cheshire was odd regardless of the timeline. She's either a proffessional assassin or she's mostly reformed. Both roles are an odd fit for being an assistant to kidnapping kiddy metas.

Everything you've written so far seems solid, the dialogue between Railgun and the SI at the start seemed a little stiff and awkward but other than that everything seems solid. (Speaking of is Railgun an expy pf Mikasa from To Aru?)

 

[KathyArmy]

Aww I thought the SI was a coinshot from Mistborn. But Magneto based powers are cool too if maybe a little on the strong side for the setting. But I suppose a lot of that depends on how you interpret the other powers on Earth-16 and how quickly she improves with her own power.

(Minor Nitpick: Technically Magento has control over the entire electromagnetic spectrum and he just prefers to use magentism)

I don't think I've seen an SI that goes into espionage type work right away before. Definite points for originality there. Lots of good stories you can tell with that setup, plus the SI having actual covert experience makes her a natural fit for the Team later on.

Though I have to admit, Luthor being involved in such an obviously evil scheme seems a bit odd to me, his successes in YJ largely come from the fact that he keeps a decent distance from this sort of incredibly shady stuff. I assume he has plausible deniability for this particular scheme, still, it seems odd for the recruiter to be so openly namedropping Luthor. Especially since I think he's the Governor-General of the UN at this point in the timeline and I can think of a lot of better people to namedrop if you want a teenager to trust you. I suppose this could be a plot by someone else trying to frame Luthor, but that seems a little too convoluted.

On that note, I've been assuming that this is set post-season 2 of YJ based on the metahuman trafficking plotline you seem to be opening with, but I don't think you've actually given an in-universe date yet. Are you setting the story later on in the timeline or did I just read too much into it?

The use of Cheshire was odd regardless of the timeline. She's either a proffessional assassin or she's mostly reformed. Both roles are an odd fit for being an assistant to kidnapping kiddy metas.

Everything you've written so far seems solid, the dialogue between Railgun and the SI at the start seemed a little stiff and awkward but other than that everything seems solid. (Speaking of is Railgun an expy pf Mikasa from To Aru?)

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This is set during season 1 of Young Justice, specifically during the episode "Downtime." I haven't put the year on my timestamps because they mess with the formatting I've been using. I was making some assumptions about how well metahumans were before the time skip.

About the ending of the first real chapter, I do have plans to go back and rewrite it so that it is a bit more "realistic" for a given value of realism at least. I haven't gotten around to it yet because of work I need to do for school.

The previous chapters were all ones I had written before hand so it will take me a bit to write some more, especially since I'm having some issues with the pacing of the next chapter, I feel like I'm stuck between Super slow and detailed and clunky, or way too fast why aren't you describing anything in detail. It will probably still have tons of issues by the time you guys see it but yeah. Cause really my only two options are to speed run it in my usual 1000-1500 word count mark, or break it into a bunch of little chapters around 300-400 words with no clear seperation between the two, because their is no good way to split the chapter in half and still make them feel like proper chapters.

Also yes. That is indeed Mikoto Mikasa from To Aru. I think her powers are cool so she's my backup in this mission.

Thanks for your comment!!!