I've Got a Twig (Twig Let's Read)

Ok. I've deleted the arc 9 enemy thing cos everything I'd written was like some Anti-Bow manifesto. And a few "Don't kill my fav characters" or "He killed my fav characters" are fine, but that was like an attack. Bow's cool. So. I'm gonna start again. And do a proper update.
 
Enemy 9 - Boota isn't allowed to do this while frustrated anymore
Within a short time of becoming aware, this creature experienced a large, ferrous foreign body penetrating skin, three layers of supporting bone lace, and the organ primarily responsible for the awareness. Other, complimentary organs remained in place, processing this reality.

Processing itself and its surroundings on a higher level had rendered this creature vulnerable somehow. Using the limited pool of resources available to it, this creature began solving the problem. It created another, similar organ for higher processing and coordination. This one was different in the nature of the encasement, slightly different in position, lower to the ground.

The ferrous foreign element was triangular, this creature noted, as the object cleaved the new growth away.

Within a short time of starting enemy 9, this reader was aware of the nature of how terrifying Primordial life is. Communication, thoughts instinctual and independent as an artificial form drives its own development, birth, and form. Unable to use a brain, or any organ, as a method of recording memory, lest the organ be removed in an attempt to prevent development of higher thinking, it carves its memory into its fucking bones.

It communicates with the others of its kind via exhaling differently. It proceeds to imagine and develop new ways to use this, and finds that languages have evolved, more complex ones, where the more developed of its kind talk about the new ones behind their back.

Having done so, and attempted to organise an escape, all the while sharing how best to be a monster, this reader realises why this is scary enough when an artificial intelligence does this within a virtual world, and that a biological version is freaking insane.

Mauer, being a sensible person, tells the people responsible for the creature that if there is a chance they have developed thinking, they have. If there is a chance they are communicating with each other, they are. He decides to cull them down to four. At which point this happens.

"Do you know?" the man with the red hair asked, looking at the creature again. "When I said that, you relaxed your muscles at your shoulder, your mouth sagged, and your wings dropped. You subconsciously prepared yourself to wait."

A man soils himself at this information, an adequate response.

The beasts are loosed on the frontline, where they are exposed to pain, and to death, and the one that we follow consumes another of its kind in the fighting. It uses metal as a way of reinforcing its body. It uses wood and splinters and it builds itself up.

Mauer eventually corners it after the fight with the Crown ends, and has it executed. But not before

"Nnnnooo," It said, again. "No."

"Yes," the red haired man said.

"Nno. Iii- I… God," the primordial uttered the words.

It could hear the response, the mutters, the surprise. Quiet, or disquiet.

It wondered if it had achieved the desired effect.

Even the man with the red hair, for the first time, seemed taken aback.

The man did not respond, but only raised a hand.

The primordial could see the cannon, and recognized the gesture for the signal it was. It threw itself to one side, so it might be flush against the side of one building, the shot flying past it-

With a whistle to command it, the white spined thing put itself between the primordial and the wall. The shot from the cannon raked the primordial's side and caught in its hind end, a cannon shot with a chain attached.

Machinery squeaked as the chain was hauled back, and the primordial with it.

"I… God!" the primordial uttered. "I God!"

And in a way, they actually built some sort of god. In a way. Mauer has it killed. But in the moment the red haired one kills it, it rewrites itself. Spores. Seeds. Ways of spreading a version of itself. It paints itself red in order to spite him.

It fucking breeds.
 
I find the primordial stuff in Twig interesting, because it feels to me like something which fits with the whole Frankenstein bio-punk aesthetic, but which is also completely modern and could never have actually been written by any of the contemporaries of Mary Shelly, because they didn't have concepts it works off yet. Frankenstein was published in 1818; Charles Darwin was born in 1809, and wasn't published until 1859.

Primordials are basically the idea of a fast self-modifying system, like using evolutionary computer programming techniques, except applied to biology instead of computer science. (And much faster and more effective, but, hey, fantasy science.)

Mary Shelley could imagine reanimating the dead. She could imagine giant monsters, or custom, bespoke life forms. She may or may not have ever come up with the cataconda specifically, but if you presented the idea of big, man-eating cat-cnake hybrid monster, her audience would grasp it.

Whereas, if you presented the idea of "pile of goo which doesn't do anything, except it changes over time, and eventually it may change to be horrifically dangerous, you don't know", I think you'd have to spend the whole book explaining why it was so scary, and even then it would seem like a stretch. Modern people have been primed with a whole set of concepts and expectations that had not really been popularly explored yet at that point.

It's like trying to write a story based off H.G. Wells's War of the Worlds, and including lightspeed time dilation and computer-controlled drones to it. They make sense to modern people, but they're not something Wells would ever have included.
 
Whereas, if you presented the idea of "pile of goo which doesn't do anything, except it changes over time, and eventually it may change to be horrifically dangerous, you don't know", I think you'd have to spend the whole book explaining why it was so scary, and even then it would seem like a stretch. Modern people have been primed with a whole set of concepts and expectations that had not really been popularly explored yet at that point.
I could honestly go for something like that, told from an outside perspective as they cull it, little hints left here and there like Mauer noticing its subconscious reactions.
 
Twig Arc Lugh... Arc 8 and 9 takeaways
By this point in Pact I was reading my favourite arc in any Bow story. And bare in mind there's an arc in Ward centred around my favourite non-mermaid character in a Bow story. By this point in Worm I was getting teased about the most memorable villains in that entire story. By this point in Ward I think that arc I mentioned earlier was out? Dunno. Gonna count it as its own arc, gonna count this one as 8/9, so yeah Eclipse was the same Arc as this one.

Arc 8/9 of Twig is long. There are no breaks, and most of the Lambs who brighten up or keep an arc interesting are off having a party with the new Lambs that are totally cool and we'll get to them anytime soon. Well, there's a break but it features the Nobles and Warrick(sic) castle. I was kinda hoping we'd get a peak in at what the other Lambs were doing, or get to see a bit from Candy's perspective. Its long, and its ending is monumentally short. Like collapsing into bed after a night at the gym I suppose. Sy's narrative shows him as caring about the people of Lugh, and about the population, and then the second the mission is over the narrative gives up on Lugh. No closure, which oddly enough I was kinda hoping for despite (having looked over the rest of my read of Arc 9 in a moment of terror and wondering where all my darts had gone) being largely sorta "eh" about most of the population, about the kids that Sy rescued, or about anyone other than Bat Nose. The story just sorta wanders off and goes to bed with Lil and Mary. Which is a pretty negative way for me to put the ending, but that was my first impression. To put it in a better way, Sy doesn't care about Lugh once its saved, the story leaves Lugh once its saved, why should the reader?

And while my opinion on Arc 8 and 9 is damn near flipped by reading the first chapter of arc 10, I've put together a couple of thoughts, mostly pessimistic but I'm trying to be a little bit more positive because I'd have quit Twig by now if I didn't like it.

The War between the Crown and the Shepherd: But Both sides are bad...
Perks of continued Crown rule; an extra brain for every child that makes it past the age of thirteen, free snake kittens and birth control for every family. Perks of discontinued Crown rule; no Nobles that kidnap every nubile young boy in a village, less people being dragged off and shot.
Long story short no they fecking well aren't.

Fray: The Bad Guy
Rescues an awful lot of people that were ruined by rampant abuse of science, hands out free books so people can rampantly abuse science. She's about as evil as an evil Sy could be, and for some reason the Lambs aren't joining up. After this arc we can add Lil's lingering loyalty to her off screen parents to that list of reasons why they're still alright with losing Lambs one at a time to the Academy's unwillingness to save them.
Warren and Wendy deserve a quiet life.

Mauer: The Good Guy
A monster handed redheaded preacher man and former soldier who seems to be the only person accomplishing things on the side of the rebellion barring Fray's printing presses, and any lingering self propagating Percy's out there. Any attempt to make him seem like a war criminal on the end of the story will be ruined by the fact that the Crown is like the British empire if the american education system was right all along.
Went from wishing he'd stop being mentioned to wishing he appears more.

JamII: The Sequel
Right back to where he was at the start of Twig. Ignored, shoved into the background, and brought up only when people want to feel sad at him.
Lilian: There's an arc for her in this arc somewhere...
Somewhere beneath JamII's, and Sy's, and the Duke's and Mauer's and the Baron's and Candy's and Gordon's...

The Death of Gordon: Loss of a Lamb
Jam1 was Sy's best friend. Gordon came up mostly in the context of dying or being an obstacle, and its hard too say I really miss the guy. As far as being the action hero of the team, Mary seemed to be pushing in on his territory by the first arc. As far as the likeable good old boy, Jam1 always seemed like he could play that role. Jam1 was replaced, I don't think Gordon will be.
Also his death was completely avoidable if they'd sided with Fray but I doubt that's ever going to come up.

Back to Lambsbridge: Return to innocence/youth/home.
None of those things ever seem that important to Sy. The most it ever seems to creep into his head is hating that one random kid he can't stand. Most of the last few missions have started without going back to Lambsbridge, and there's not really any connection I've built with it or anyone there. Sy's handlers have more personality than the headmistress. I suppose my point is that trying to return to it every now and again and say "they're children!" doesn't really work.
Or rather, it does because Sy doesn't get to do that. Doesn't get to go home and be a kid.

That LiL Mary Sy Triangle: Romance in Twig
The three form a continual support network brother sister sister thing, and cling to each other like some sort of Remora/Shark hybrid to a mirror. Its odd and its parasitic and its oddly inhuman, and its a sign of how much Lil is being shaped by her time with the psychotic children.
Messy, alien, and incomprehensible.

Nobles: Primordials are easier to understand
Raising more questions than answers. Unlikely to be answered by my reckoning, but that's what finishing Twig and asking for WoG is for. I'm going to try and avoid being angry confused, and stick to bemused confused. For example, instead of "Why the fuck is the Baron this hard to kill!", I'll stick to things like "how long did doctors spend making sure one of the Twins' bosoms looked right?" or "How long do the twins have to sit still so the Twins' bosoms don't start moving around on their own."
Designed by the academies most intelligent and least mature.

Primordials: Yeah, nothing is topping these.
The Academy can't really top assimilating flesh monsters that drive their own evolution and develop at an exponential rate, can design diseases in their dying moments, can develop human level intelligence without detection... You really can't top that without introducing a Primordial that's already escaped, or one that some psychopath let loose in the water. I swear, tossing one of these things over the side of a boat is about the easiest way you can end the world. I expect the escalation ends here, and the majority of what we see will be more along the lines of Lamb style projects and.... Nobles....
Unless we see more of Petey.

Is it a Fighty Story, or a Talky Story: Yes
The correct answer is either. I'm trying to cut back on vitriol, unwarranted harsh criticism, and throwing darts.
At this point in time, Twig is no better than Pact at balancing character relationships with conflict. The character relationships are more complex and more meaningful than SPOILER and SPOILER. They are still being juggled by the same juggler that's keeping a birthing saw, a primordial, and the Baron in the air, and there are a lot of chapters where it feels like the relationships and/or the fights are pitstops.

All that said, I'm still enjoying Twig, I just don't see why its supposed to be the best of Wildbow's three stories, and let's get into arc 10.
 
Arc 10 - Wolfk
CHAPTER LINK
In Sheep's Clothing – 10.1
OPENING LINES
I was still awake as dawn broke. It would have been quaint to say that the sun streamed in through the window, but Radham was conservative with its sunlight, and the Academy was a small fortress, surrounded by a wall. Even if the sky was clear, the wall meant that sun wouldn't shine directly on the Academy grounds until mid-morning. As it was, it was a faint light, deceptively dim. I'd made the mistake of trying to gauge the time by the light in past visits, and found myself waiting a little too late to sneak out.
Uncomfortable with tossing and turning all night, lost in thought, I'd propped myself up, sitting with my pillow up between my back and the headboard. I ran my fingers absently through Lillian's hair, watching her eyes move beneath the eyelids. She dreamed. Sleeping next to her, Mary's eyes were still: dreamless.
I touched the edge of Lillian's ear as I ran my fingers through her hair, and she squirmed a little.
Well seems my hope that Sy was hallucinating again was unfounded. Start the chapter where we ended the last one. The one before last one.
CHAPTER SUMMARY
Sy wakes up in bed with two lambs and then wanders off after writing a letter ending with "i love you", a sentence that loses its impact when he always lies and gains some impact when it comes after he tells Lil about dealing with doses of Wyvern like she had.
Its a conversation and feelings chapter. Sy calls Rick a dozen names and either uncovers that he's secretly a sociopath or gets him to lie in order to get a straight answer out of a kid who is being brought up at an orphanage for... I think narrative reasons really? I don't think we've ever seen or heard why they needed to be brought up at Lambsbridge. I suppose just to keep them from being totally evil and inhuman.
Anyway Gordon is dead and we need to talk about that some more because he needs a grave and all the girls miss him and Rick can't be beaten up by him anymore.

And suddenly everything we weren't allowed to deal with in arc 8 and 9 has weight. Closure.

I really wish we could've ended arc 9 with some of this, rather than watching a giant murderbeast be cool and murdery.
CHARACTER BEATS
Yay all the lambs are here. Rick's a prick in Sy's eyes and Sy doesn't want to live the way he has been.
CLOSING LINES
Because I liked being alive, I just… didn't want this life.
I was done. I'd told myself I couldn't see another Lamb die. Mauer had talked about me needing just one more push. Now I was on the ledge, there was no stepping back. I just had to figure out how to move forward.
Or if the other Lambs would even come with me.
I was thinking Lilian was going to have to die before he said this.
KEY QUOTES
For the sake of Lillian's future, we'd gone to Lugh. We'd walked away from tens of thousands dead, the loss of a team member and his dog, the loss of my left eye, and a city in flames. That was without touching on the fate of the person we'd been sent to find, the enmity of one of the more powerful people in the Crown States, and the near end of human civilization because of some very misguided experiments that both sides had ended up using to force the other side's hands.
With that in mind, it was hard to put into words the feelings that drove me as I left Lillian's room and brazenly walked down the hallway of the girl's dormitory, making my way into the girl's bathroom. All that trouble to give her a better shot at becoming a professor, and here I was, running the risk of getting her kicked out of the dormitory.
I need to pull out more of the
Will be at Lambsbridge. Might leave to go to the Shims, have to let the mice know about Gordon and Hubris.
I read this sentence and realised that of every noun in that sentence, I only cared about Hubris.
There was a skeleton guard at the front of Radham.
Really?

COMMUNITY COMMENT HIGHLIGHT
Some guy who had a joke about Rick going missing after asking too many questions like "Why are the lambs being raised in an orphanage rather than an academy lab?" "Isn't it easier for experiments to escape that way?"
guy | March 22, 2016 at 2:05 am
Rick is asking too many questions and I have this vague feeling Helen is going to come in one night and tell everyone he dislocated every bone in his body in a tragic cart accident.

TYPO TANGO!
Rick was nearly two hundred pounds and an inch or two shy of six feet tall, a natural Bruno without any physical modification to him, that he had a baby face without a hair on his chin, and weirdly intense eyes and manner, though it might have only been me that could put a finger to the eye thing. He hadn't had any luck finding work, too young looking for the hard physical work, too big and scary for the gentler, customer service work.
Its really distracting when these come up in the middle of a character's description.

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PARTING REMARK
Arc 10 feels a bit samey in a sort of weary way. Vague sense of Deja Vu, probably meant to evoke that by feeling similar to a couple of earlier Twig arc openings. Mourning a lamb, waking up in bed, dealing with Rick... Sy's trapped. As much here as in the middle of the action. The other lambs, the wyvern, he doesn't have much of a choice.
 
Twig Arc Lugh.... A positive retrospective
Here's just a list of stuff I liked from arc 8/9
Lilian getting to prove herself as a doctor in that fight scene with the fishmonger
Sy and JamII talking about things in a rare lowkey moment.
We get to see this creepy asylum where the Nobles are kept if they can't be let out in public anymore, and its something neat that's like, what you'd expect from Georgian Britain.
The Baron's Baronette's Baroness'? Baronites? Whatever. We knoow some Nobles go in for silly and fashionable surgery.
Fighting Krakens.
Bat Nose.
Sy actually caring about civilians. Even if its probably him trying to be Gordon.
About even for antagonist gain. Up one Baroness Candy, down one Duke.
Mauer <3
Common people fighting back against the Academy and the Crown, just like Britain fought back against the monarchy.
Sy hallucinating the rest of the team, and trying too coordinate with them.
The Engineer continues to be an inspiration. I'm sorry I ever doubted his qualifications. I'm sorry I thought he was just some experiment like an eyeless cat or a Snake Cat, or Snake Hips. I shouldn't judge him just because of his current job.
Getting to see day to day life in a city.
Getting to see the sort of mods people have in an ordinary city.
Jokes about that city going down the Lugh.
I don't know why, but Lugh reminds me of Karnaca from Dishonoured 2.
Making Primordials.
Primordials are cool I guess but I don't they can't come up again without taking over the story.
But in like a good way.
Gordon's dead. We can move onto mourning him.
JamII supporting Lil.
Stitched infantry tactics.
Plague Men infantry tactics.
Noble and infantry squad tactics.
Does it show that I like tabletop wargames?
Twig would make a great squad tactics tabletop game. Something like Malifaux. Maybe more like Necromunda so you can make a gang with Brunos and Bat Noses.
And Emily as a leader.
Emily. Just Emily. She was great. Making moral sacrifices the rest of the Lambs never would. Giving up her freedom. Giving up her boyfriend. I was thinking she was gonna be the villain of the arc, when she was the hero.
And when next we see her she'll have lost all her horns and scales or whatever.
And it'll be really sad.
Because she'll have lost everything that made her free.
All the side characters in Twig get these big horrible stories to them.
There's a smallness to them as well.
A completeness that we don't see with the Lambs, because the story needs to explore their relationships more slowly.
Lilian and Sy, or Sy and Mary, or Mary and Lilian, and their little triangle.
That'll be great.
And we have time to see that.
But I like Warren and Wendy better.
 
10.2
CHAPTER LINK
In Sheep's Clothing – 10.2
OPENING LINES
"She got frustrated, I think," Helen confided. "Duncan got the worst of it."
"Frustrated how?" I asked.
"She decided she was leader, which makes sense, right?"
"Right," I said. I thought about it for a second.
"She-" Helen said, in the same moment I said, "Oh."
She smiled wide. "Yeah."
"She led you like you were Bad Seeds?" I asked.
"She tried. She got frustrated, like I said. So she paired me with Ashton and she tormented poor Duncan, demanding he keep up."
"Poor Duncan?" I asked.
"Poor Duncan," Ashton echoed me.
We open on Helen conversing like a normal person. And Ashton not conversing like a normal person.
They take a little time to dissect how the mission went, how Mary did as a leader.
CHAPTER SUMMARY
We get a conversation with Ashton! It only took... Mavis was interlude 6... It only took 3 arcs! Hi Ashton!
Ashton is great, and i'm not just saying that because he's exuding pheromones that stimulate the chemicals in my brain that make me like Twig. On top of that, Helen is here, that character with a 100% approval rating among readers of Twig.
She's great this chapter. Ashton's great this chapter. They're both inhuman, they're both loyal to the Crown.
Anyway, they all go talk to the mice to tell them Gordon is dead, and then Sy tells them that he's out.
CHARACTER BEATS
Sy's injured and wants to leave, Helen is the best character, and Ashton is here! He's young and lacks personality or drive, but he's here, and everyone likes Ashton.
CLOSING LINES
"Go," he said. "Go get your friends. Walk out that door. If I see your face again, I'm going to hit you, and I'm going to keep hitting you until I can't feel my hand anymore. Understand? You need to go. For your sake."
I climbed to my feet.
"I'll send one of the kids to Lambsbridge with some names and places," he said. "I, uh, I'll keep the details short and sweet. Use the scratchings to let you know who's who and what's what?"
"That works," I said. My voice was hoarse. I had a lump in my throat. "Thanks. I'd say we could meet up, if you wanted to leave Radham, but…"
"But there are too many kids here who can't pull up stakes, because they spend half the time here and half with their shitty families, or for other reasons. Because this is a place we know, and we'd get eaten alive in stranger territory. Yeah, Sy. Yeah."
I nodded.
I opened the door and let myself back into the house, signaling Helen. I didn't have the voice to reach out to Ashton, so I let Helen do it, calling upstairs.
Craig remained sitting on the back step, probably for a long time after our trio had put the hideout behind us.
Well. It seems like he'll actually do it. But I've been disappointed before.
KEY QUOTES
"And I want to know how the pain you and other people feels, compared to the pain I feel. I asked Ibott if there was a way to attach my nerves to other people's nerves to feel what they felt while I hurt them, so I could figure out the best kinds of hurt and the best ways to understand others when they hurt, but he said no, that was a whole different project."
"I have feedback mechanisms that would make that easier," Ashton said. "So I can understand the things people are feeling. They could probably give me the ability to feel others' pain. But you need a secondary brain to process it, detached from the primary brain. I think he's right. It would be complicated."
Helen's scary, and Ashton is definitely telepathic.
"Okay," he said. "I think I understand. Then there's one for bad people, one for good people, one for food, and for water."
"Yes," I said. "Good observation."
"It makes sense," he said, while Helen nodded behind him.
He wasn't hopeless after all.
"But-" he said, "Why not make them bigger?"
"Bigger, as in…"
"In the middle of the street, the street is so wide, and you can see it from a distance. A picture of a wolf so big you could see it from two blocks away."
"Um," I said.
"It makes sense," he said. "Because it's about communication, and big communication is better. Something people won't miss, that more people see, and it marks out territory, so people know, and they might change their behavior."
"It kind of does make sense," Helen said.
"No," I said, gravely and fundamentally offended at the assertion. "No, it really, really doesn't."
From there, I launched into particulars about how the mice wouldn't want to broadcast their presence, that they were fundamentally prey for others, or parasites. I went onto a tangent about subtlety, how, no, people wouldn't always see the positive signs of 'helpful person' as positive reinforcement to continue being helpful.
There was nuance and tangent enough in the explanation for me to talk all damn day. Instead, I was cut short by our arrival at the hideout. I felt a lingering, bittersweet feeling, combining with an entirely renewed experience of fear, about Ashton, about Helen, and now about the mice.
I like this. Good for understanding communication, and early Ashton.
"Anyone near Richmond?" I asked. "Warrick?"
Warwick. Nah, I'm kidding. Wore that joke out. A lot of early American cities and towns are named after places in England, and some of them liked phonetical spelling it seems.
COMMUNITY COMMENT HIGHLIGHT
Someone that came up with a decent idea for Sy's relationship with Helen.
Xicree | March 24, 2016 at 10:06 am
Is it only me that thinks that Helen has literally been watching and listening to Sy ATTENTIVELY from the time they were placed together?
It seems like she didn't just learn from the group, she internalized and set priorities… and Sy/Gordon would have been the absolute best models for understanding how people think. She'd have been listening to his every explanation of the internal models of the world which Sy extrapolates, learning where he looks to see what he sees, listening to every aspect and becoming a chameleon based on a chameleon.
TLDR… Because of Sy, Helen has likely learned to People like few people ever do.
And because of that it is likely that she's learned how to Empathy as well. It might not run 'naturally' to her, but as something adopted which she runs ontop of her other 'programs' and as something which she has come to see as valuable all round to hold onto and use as a filter for her world.
PARTING REMARK
Ashton brings the ratio of vatborn to natural psychopaths on the Lambsbridge team to just about even.
 
Helen has 100% approval rating in this thread.

Although, I suspect she's better in measured doses. She really needs other characters to bounce off for full effect.
 
I'm glad to hear that you're enjoying Twig. I was starting to worry that you were forcing yourself to read something that you didn't like.

Arc 9 went on sooo long. I'd forgotten how much it dragged on.

It's great to see Helen and Ashton interacting. Seeing her instruct him on how to act human is just full of good character beats. You actually got a bit of Ashton's prediction/telepathy thing in his first interlude, I think. He likes red.

I think that the Lambs live at an orphanage so that they'd know how to mimic normal children, because that was such a big part of their MO. They're a brain-based superweapon, which means that they require mental stimulation like normal children, and I don't think the Academy wanted to put that much scientist-time into socializing with them. The orphanage was mad science daycare.

I can't remember what happens in this arc so it will be a surprise for both of us.
 
I'm glad to hear that you're enjoying Twig. I was starting to worry that you were forcing yourself to read something that you didn't like.

Arc 9 went on sooo long. I'd forgotten how much it dragged on.

It's great to see Helen and Ashton interacting. Seeing her instruct him on how to act human is just full of good character beats. You actually got a bit of Ashton's prediction/telepathy thing in his first interlude, I think. He likes red.

I think that the Lambs live at an orphanage so that they'd know how to mimic normal children, because that was such a big part of their MO. They're a brain-based superweapon, which means that they require mental stimulation like normal children, and I don't think the Academy wanted to put that much scientist-time into socializing with them. The orphanage was mad science daycare.

I can't remember what happens in this arc so it will be a surprise for both of us.
I love Twig, but a long art in Twig isn't something you can force yourself through very easily. And twice during arc 8/9 I tried to fit a few chapters in in one day so I could push past it. But unlike Pact (NO SLEEP TILL TORONTO) and Worm (I actually liked arc 23, 25, and 26), I don't get to rush through an arc I'm not enjoying because I have to make notes in a way that lets me recall what each chapter of Twig had in it. Or approximately at least. That way I'll be able to pretend to be Kyakan in case someone asks about making Twig art. That wasn't a joke, someone on Cauldron wanted to draw Catcher and I was able to point them at the right quotes in Arc That One With the Ghosts.
 
10.3
CHAPTER LINK
In Sheep's Clothing – 10.3
OPENING LINES
Our 'picnic', as it turned out, was situated under a jutting roof, beside a storage bay that was intended to hold an assortment of wagons. Wagons and the stitched horses would be parked here outside the building in order to get cleaned or repaired, before being moved back to the bay. It was a nice building, all considered, one planted here in anticipation of the higher-end buildings appearing nearer the Academy, something that hadn't yet happened. There were still lingering traces and some odds and ends from when the building had been used as a storehouse for military assets.
For our purposes, it worked nicely. The overhanging roof with only two adjoining walls -one to block the wind and another from the adjacent building- gave us cover from the falling snow. The open nature of it gave us a view of the hills and fields beyond Radham. We had a place to sit, complete with benches and crates to use as tables, and we had some privacy.
Jamie's suggestion, of course. He'd noticed the place some time ago, made a mental note of it, and was able to point us over here when the subject of the picnic had come up.
This is just so cosy in a way the story hasn't shown us before.
CHAPTER SUMMARY
Conversation chapter! One picnic! Everyone acts according to their characters, eats a meal, Sy decides he's off to off the Baron, and that coming back to the Academy afterwards isn't going to be a thing. I can only hope he isn't without the rest of the team long. I like them, I hate him, and the shadow of Worm arcs 23 and 25 loom long over Bow's "Left the main characters behind look at these guys" bits of the story.
CHARACTER BEATS
Rick's just been carried away by the Academy. This is why I describe Twig to people as "five mystery solving friends that work for the okrana (if they took GCSE history with me), or the spetsnaz, or another drag people out of their houses organisation. You wouldn't recommend Worm to someone if they don't like main characters being evil. You wouldn't recommend Pact to someone if they're uncomfortable with body horror. You wouldn't recommend Twig if they were uncomfortable with the main characters being agents of a racist monarchist institute that kidnaps and mutilates children. Sticking a blanket "Trigger Warning Everything" on a story doesn't cover what the actual main characters commit and are exposed to.
CLOSING LINES
And this wasn't a job I planned to return from. The alibi was only cover against the other Lambs, so they wouldn't suspect what I was really doing. The Baron would die, and I would rendezvous with other Lambs, heading for the furthest territory from Radham I could get away with. If Mary was inclined to stay here, then she couldn't come with. She would stop me.
I finished the last of my sandwich, eating with one hand. Duncan was making his way back, walking at a leisurely pace.
And then there was Helen… I took a moment to study her, while I squeezed Lillian's hand. In this moment, Helen's expression and behavior were the focus of my attention.
"Helen," I said, sounding far more normal than I felt, "You damn well better not have finished off all the tarts."
But can he trust her?
Why not.
KEY QUOTES
Back at Craig's, he hadn't used his pheromones to win his exchange with the boy. His victory had been an earned one, and it had indicated that he was learning fast, even if it might take him a long time to get up to speed.
He was going to be a monster. He had the tools and he had the ability and willingness to learn to cover the gaps those tools didn't provide for.
Ashton. The only descriptions of him in how he operates have come from the last three chapters. I could go back and read what had come up in the last few appearances before that but I shan't because that was practically a novel ago. Teased by Mavis, practically cameoing in the battle with the Minotaur, and offscreen for arc Lugh.
Duncan was tall for his age, and had been cursed with what I deemed a very punchable face, with too small a mouth and too much distance from his prominent chin to his high forehead. He looked like a character that had been drawn on the cover of a children's book, and the confidence with which he held himself, combined with his very regimented style, shirt buttoned to the collar, academy jacket in the soldier's style, and wavy black hair parted in the middle… I somehow imagined that his parents were the hoity-toity type that brought up their child's accomplishments as if those accomplishments were their own, or, more generously, that his parents were the type that looked at their son and sighed in disappointment over how he'd turned out.
There was a small chance that my impressions of Duncan were colored by personal bias. Small. I really wished he wasn't here, but I wasn't about to tell him to go away.
Ranking his description among how colourfully the other Lambs were introduced Duncan comes in dead last. But I like the weight of the two takes on his parents. Gives an immediate sense of character.
"They want to work on Caterpillar further. The nobles are interested in the project as a process they might undergo for all nobles. It's arguably one of the reasons the Lambs were started as a project, to put forward all of these unique ideas and things the nobles might be interested in, projects that could be stepped up and used as augmentations or novelties."
"Novelties?" Lillian asked.
"Remember the Duke's attention to Helen?" Jamie asked. "The old Jamie wrote about it. The appeal is undeniable. Servitors or partners for the nobility, up to their standard of beauty, usable as bodyguards, personal doubles, or spies, with built-in weapons, like Helen's. Ashton isn't as pretty or refined, he was made by a team, not by a genius, but his weapon is more obvious, and it's one that sells very well to the nobles. I think he breaks even with Helen."
"I'm pretty," Ashton muttered.
"And, in the end, someone expressed interest in you," I said. "In caterpillar."
"Hayle may be shifting his focus," Jamie said. "They decided on Ashton over Evette, and Evette hasn't had a serious mention. As far as I know, I don't think there's been any talk of a replacement for Gordon, or of starting a new Wyvern project, so that the child is of age by the time Sy retires. But I do know that they've doubled the size of my team, and I know that I got special attention. It's something to keep in mind, when deciding if Hayle is going to be reasonable."
My god. Nobles as immortal as Jam1, who is definitely dead, and Percy, who is alive several times more than he had been when he started off.
COMMUNITY COMMENT HIGHLIGHT
Someone concerned by Duncan. Personally, I think the idea of aactually haivng a straight man on the team rather than Lilian the sometimes frowns a little when you feed a man to a cataconda to be a little appealing.
rustblood | March 26, 2016 at 5:32 am
But the thing is, Lillian actually seemed to be trying to get with the mindset of the existing Lambs when she joined. On the other hand, though Duncan is still trying, it just doesn't clinch as well… Though the Lambs are a lot more anti-Crown now than they used to be.
PARTING REMARK
Commentors on the chapter speculate a Sy and Helen buddy cop arc, I'm tempted to agree as her reporting on him would be a little stupid considering how much else she's let slide so far.
 
10.4
CHAPTER LINK
In Sheep's Clothing – 10.4
OPENING LINES
I exited the bathroom, a towel wrapped around me, a bag of the more expensive products in one hand. I was scrubbed pink, my hair was oiled back and away from my face, left unparted, though the ends of my hair were already pricking up and curling away. Any adolescent boy given access to the products that smelled 'manly' tended to overdo it, much as the girls went over the top with makeup, but I knew enough to go light. It was a good smell, and one that would complement the smell of shoe polish.
The hand that wasn't holding the bag held a fresh bandage over the ruin of my eye. It put me in an awkward spot when it came to the towel around my middle.
We open with Sy mucking about with his personal appearance, and in front of JamII no less. Don't let the Jamie 2 Sy Nill shippers near this one.
CHAPTER SUMMARY
Here's a fun question. Name a Lil conversation chapter in recent yonks that hasn't also had a conversation with JamII. JamII is concerned by Sy and his mission, and wants him not to.
At Lil's, Sy talks to Lilian about her ideas for her project, we get some neat worldbuilding about the Academy's project proposals. Its pretty neat.
Also, for some reason Lilian being a Lamb is kept secret from her parents, which is awfully silly if you ask me but its probably part of the five mystery solving teens genre. I wouldn't know, I spent my teen years reading the "One monster killing teen, their also monster killing friend, and their utility focussed sidekick" genre that is seemingly propagated solely by Rick Riordan.
CHARACTER BEATS
Mary might be coming on the job, Sy and Lil are revealed to her parents, Ashton is sitting around thinking contentfully with his nightmare imagination thing that makes Helen seem normal, and Duncan is allegedly a git but he's had all of one chapter where he did anything. Rick's being carted away to be turned into some taser handed monster or something.
The next time Sy bemoans a Mouse getting hurt, remember this.
CLOSING LINES
Lil's father, meanwhile, released my hand. The frown lines in his forehead deepened.
"I believe you have lipstick on your ear," he told me, staring me down.
"Ah," I said. I pulled the handkerchief from my pocket, and rubbed at my ear.
"And you smell like perfume," he added.
I didn't even get a chance to get a word out before the door opened. Lillian must have run to get downstairs as fast as she did. She skipped down the path until she was at my side. She hugged my arm, smiling up at two very disapproving parents.
I'd say Aww or something if I didn't think Sy was a jerk and Lilian was a hypocrit hiding behind the illusion of morality but remaining wholeheartedly behind the academy.
Hah. Just kidding. I've written S9 shipfics. Sy and Lil is perfectly adorable.
KEY QUOTES
I pulled clothes on. Slacks, a belt. Every time I looked in the mirror, I saw the ruin of my eye. Beyond it, I saw the Lambs dead in their individual, detailed ways, Lambsbridge's staff and occupants maimed or altered.
I'd been thrust into the world of adults, out-thinking grown men and women, facing mortal peril in a way that even soldiers didn't necessarily have to deal with. At least they had moments of rest and moments of peace. I'd been faced with being on call, dealing with things on the spur of the moment, with regular situations and simple jobs becoming nightmares.
Even now, as I got dressed in a casual suit, like the preppier Mothmont or Academy kids might wear, all of the pressures and the confusion added up to make me feel far from ready to face the world of adults.
I'd been given a set of tools to help me adjust, to put me in the right frame of mind and give me the flexibility to deal. It wasn't the wyvern formula. It was the Lambs, first and foremost. Now I faced losing them.
I think I need moments like this every now and again to remind me that despite Sy being a lying murdering hypocritical manipulative jackboot wearing bastard whose every likeable trait is unfortunately tied to one of the above traits, he's also a kid who is ironically enough more human than both of Bow's prievous protagonists.
"As far as I can figure, you want to secure things, keep the Lambs safe. The deaths don't weigh on you the way they weigh on me, though I imagine you mourn and remember your predecessor in your own way," I said, as I fixed my tie. "But there's clearly another side to you that's more caring. The way people operate, they're all the protagonists of their own story. Everyone wants to be the hero, and for that to happen, the story needs to be tellable in a way that puts them in a good light."
It was his turn to be silent.
"So I can't help but imagine a scenario where you tell yourself I've gone off rails, the horse is running away with the cart, and in that scenario, you make the decision to put the bystanders first, the wrecked train or the runaway horse second. If I don't sell you on this, or if I break the promise, now that I think about it, maybe you tell, because that way, the Academy can't justify hurting the Lambs."
He remained silent.
"If you do decide to tell, whatever your reason, I won't blame you," I said. I pulled on the jacket. There was a dried drop of blood on the inside lining. I picked at it with my thumbnail until it came free. "I've blamed you for an awful lot of stuff that wasn't your fault. It makes sense if, should you decide to go to Hayle and tell him I've gone rogue, that I can't hold it against you. It might even be an optimal way to go. It would tell the Baron that you serve him, first and foremost."
Sy at his most vulnerable, self aware, and his most powerful. Although this clearly either isn't the story that puts him in a good light, or somewhere out there is a story where Sy shaves kittens, kicks Hubris, and won't let Helen eat cake.
And Ashton, in the idle hours, just sat. He liked to have a window, but he didn't need one.
Whatever went on in his head was more colorful than what the rest of the world was doing, apparently.
I like Ashton. Its a good thing he's here.
"Dumb vessel for collecting the wounded. They get pulled inside, their legs inside its legs, their chest in its chest, their arms in its arms. It works as a weak exo-suit, added muscle, for when you need more heavy lifting, but the real purpose, what I'd really hope to pack it with, would be life support. Not a lot, but enough. Pressure on wounds, help with breathing, help with heart rate. If I did it in an advanced way, I'd have it recognize the need on its own. As it is, I think I'd have it respond to external cues. Taps."
Isn't this a worse version of Sub Rosa? Sounds neat enough Lilian but I'm fairly certain Sub Rosa does its job better. Heck, Sub Rosa doesn't even need the wires to keep its victim/occupant alive for two solid weeks.
Come to think of it, did they even kill Sub Rosa? They fed her to Gorger but that's no guarantee. If anything her suit sounds like it could've eaten Gorger.
COMMUNITY COMMENT HIGHLIGHT
Someone with a great name who just wanted to talk about Sil. Yeah. That's the ship name we're going with on this. I can call the Lambs the Twigs, what of it? I don't need your fandom nicknames. And If there was a better name, you'd have to comment to correct me, and then I get a comment! Hah! HAH! HAHAH!
Cogitothala (reading from an island without electricity give me a break) | March 29, 2016 at 9:04 am
On no… This is all going to go do wrong and I like Sy / Lil really well…
COMMUNITY COMMENT HIGHLIGHT
My most liked post is still a stupid omake for Monster! Its not even that good! Its the longest exploration of Night's powers and it's bleeding Taylor!
TYPO TANGO!
"The third project is a drug. I… I don't know, Sy. It's not fully thought through. I'm sure it's been done before, but I thought I should have a third project. I admit I'm selfish in wanting it. Something to help suppress fear, to clarify the mind. A low-impact combat drug for soldiers."
"Something you could take, so you didn't need wyvern?"
"I don't want to use wyvern ever again, Sy," she whispered. "I'm sorry, but-"
I think it should be don't need, not didn't, but I'm not certain. Its an impactful line that all but guarantees she'll end up needing Wyvern again and I can't tell if that's a typo there or not.
PARTING REMARK
Sy and Lil continues to float happily in the same sea as every other ship in this mess of an ocean.
PARTING REMARK
Scryx is a great ship idea for the S9.
 
I imagine that Lillian's edition is a lot cheaper than Sub Rosa, too.

It's only doing basic first aid, after all, not setting up to keep someone alive in the face of hideous trauma for weeks.
 
As of 10.5, I've stopped reading. I don't thing Twig cares about the parts of Twig I care about. Gonna try and word it a bit better. But, um, here's that art of Sub Rosa I commissioned off Lonsheep.



 
That's fair.

I think that 10.5 is pretty representative of what the rest of Twig is like, so if you're not liking it, you're probably not going to miss anything that would change your life.

Twig is super character-focused, and the main character is not a nice person. So, on the one hand, if you're looking for really coherent world-building, you aren't going to get it, because it always takes a back seat to rambling around with Sy, who is not a reliable narrator or all that interested in the subject, and if you want a strong story arc, you're also not going to get that, because the story warps heavily to follow Sy as he rambles around doing stuff.

Which leaves you with the question of how much you enjoy seeing Sylvester ramble around talking to and backstabbing other characters. And he's a terrible person in the midst of terrible events being pushed by other terrible people, so it's not all super-fun rambling, either.
 
10.5. End of the Let's Read.
CHAPTER LINK
In Sheep's Clothing – 10.5

OPENING LINES

I gave Lillian's hand a squeeze, turning my attention to her parents. The thing to do was to maintain a cool poker face. If I looked guilty, I would be hung as a guilty man.
"I live at the orphanage further down the road. Beautiful stone building with the stone fence around it? You would have seen it as you came up. Lots of kids, a number of girls, a number of us getting ready to go out? I couldn't escape the haze of perfumes."
"Perfumes?" Lillian asked. Then, without missing a beat, said, "Helen?"
"Helen and Fran," I said. "Your dad saw a smudge of crimson on my ear."
Lillian smiled.
"You're an orphan, then?" her dad asked, his voice low, his tone like that of a priest at a funeral, heavy and suggestive of doom and gloom.
"Yes, sir," I said.
"What happened?" he asked.
"Dad!" Lillian sounded positively horrified.

This is all morbid and polite and morbidly polite and entertaining and all, but every time normal life comes into Twig it feels like an intrusion rather than a natural part of the story. Maybe its because its done so rarely, maybe because Twig spends more time describing fights, fighting, and the aftermath of fights than Pact.

CHAPTER SUMMARY

Sy meets Lil's parents, whose sole purpose for a while has been as a big target on a dartboard for the Baron, the Academy, Fray, and that one sniper that got away in arc 5 and will likely show up again in time for Mauer to kill him.

They talk. The talking is fun. This is a fun scene that sees Sy go to a party and be manipulative and...

Oh.

In time honoured Twig fashion, we skip over that sitty downy talky bit, summarise it all in a scene or two, and spend the last scene setting up something offscreen that was probably agony to wait for at the time but is just sort of... there... for me. I could click next chapter and end this cliffhanger, and I'll likely hear exactly what it is that Sy heard that breaks his tiny little heart.

CHARACTER BEATS
Lilian's mother is about as interesting as Lilian circa arc 1, Lilian's father is as interesting as the fishmonger, and Sy is as interesting as one of those videos someone at work calls you over to their desk to show you.

CLOSING LINES
Moving slowly, adjusting my weight to squirm forward more than I pushed myself with hand or knee, I approached the room where the meeting was being held. My hand cleared away dust, and I laid myself down, eye and ear on the vent that opened into the meeting room.
I listened to the first clear sentence they'd uttered since my arrival, then the second.
I listened, and a not insignificant piece of me broke.
Another story might use the dining hall as a break for the chapter or the arc. Oh well.

KEY QUOTES
Her dad seemed as if he was going to remain dark and silent, like a stormcloud that hadn't yet stormed. He surprised me by speaking. "I recall letters you wrote home where you damned the name of a boy named Sylvester."
"Ah," Lillian said. "Yes."
"A different Sylvester, then?" her dad asked. "This boy bears a startling similarity to a drawing in the margins of one letter. Dark hair, triangular face? The boy you drew had knives and daggers sticking out of him, if I remember right, so perhaps I'm mistaken."
"No, daddy. This is the same boy."
"I think our differences in the beginning were a question of clashing methods," I said. "Lillian is a builder. I prefer to shake things up, and shaking things up causes a lot of frustration for someone who is trying to build on a steady foundation. She's brilliant, and she's one of the brains I respect the most-"
That earned me a hand squeeze.
"-and she's the person I have the highest expectations for, when it comes to the future. We've learned to work together remarkably well since that time."
I'm not going to quote the whole thing and I'm not going to react line by line. I pick out the bits that will let me remember the entire chapter, and right here I'm picking out the sort of fun back and forth that was absent for the last ~40 chapters, side by side with the sort of conversational help along the themes that Bow likes to do. He can do subtle, and he does, but he also takes the time to lay it out in places which is nice for people like me that haven't done proper literary analysis since school.

It was with that in mind that I made it my mission for the dinner to make Mrs. Garey as excited and loud as possible. That it served a double purpose in flipping Mr. Garey the bird was a nice reward.
"I know some riders are uncomfortable if they're on a ledge, they don't want to look over the edge, because they instinctively feel like they'll go over that edge," I said.
"That's me!" she exclaimed. "We were riding the carriage over and I felt uncomfortable looking out the window and over the edge of a bridge. I never connected the two ideas!"
Heads did turn. Mr. Garey raised his hand up and more firmly took hers. She pulled it away, not paying attention to him, clasping her hands in front of her. "Do you ride?"
"I do a little bit of everything," I said. "In the field behind the orphanage, we sometimes see some altered horse stock the Academy is raising. Beautiful creatures."
"Altered how?"
Lillian seized the opportunity to leap into the conversation.
The deep sadness that seemed to have soaked me through and through didn't go away. If anything, I felt as though a rock had plunged into the depths of my stomach. At the same time, paradoxically, I could appreciate the pleasant warmth of the present moment. The benefits of a mind that could travel several roads in parallel, perhaps.
I can empathise with that deep sadness. I was hoping we could stay with the interpersonal drama of Twig for more than five minutes before someone discovered another secret or another piece of conspiracy or I don't know. Twig seems to have an awful lot of start to each arc or an awful little. As much as I adore Twig arc 3, it just about holds the record for "Right. Stop that. Here's a monster to deal with." when they wander off to conduct another interrogation and bump past St Thing of the order of Another World on her way downstairs. While arc 8 gets the award for longest time, having to kill a dozen rats, a fishmonger and exorcise Jam1's ghost before we get the Primordial showing up and turning the story into another war drama.

COMMUNITY COMMENT HIGHLIGHT
Someone more positive than me about another Twig end of chapter cliffhanger with all of a paragraph's set up.

ahdefault | March 31, 2016 at 2:45 am
Man, that cliffhanger hurts. I can think of a few possibilities. They're saying something bad about Lillian, something possibly harmful to her, and that's hurting Sy. They're saying something good about Lillian, and it's crushing Sy's hopes to leave with Lillian completely. Or perhaps, the most unlikely, they're implying something about Lillian's relationship with Sy and/or the Lambs, which is a pretty significant part of Sy's mental makeup right now. Maybe she's been faking attachment? Doubtful, doubly so if Sy's never picked up on it.
Guess I'll just have to wait and see.

PARTING REMARK
For a function, the function's inclusion was purely functional. I get that Sy skips the bits that he isn't interested in, but a lot of the time they seem to be the bits that I'm interested in. I wanted to read more of this chapter. I really did. But there wasn't more. So, that's the end. That's where I'm stopping my read.
 
So does this mean that you'd like spoilers of future plot developments?
Nope! Not even gonna turn the page! I don't want to know what breaks Sy's heart so much one has to turn the page to discover it. And if I don't know something in Twig, or I make the wrong judgement about a character, well I'll keep that wrong judgement and base my conclusion and understanding of Twig on only 150 chapters instead of... 316? 320 something.
 
Nope! Not even gonna turn the page! I don't want to know what breaks Sy's heart so much one has to turn the page to discover it. And if I don't know something in Twig, or I make the wrong judgement about a character, well I'll keep that wrong judgement and base my conclusion and understanding of Twig on only 150 chapters instead of... 316? 320 something.

In 10.6, it is discovered that Helen is gluten intolerant and can no longer have cake.

True story.
 
Nope! Not even gonna turn the page! I don't want to know what breaks Sy's heart so much one has to turn the page to discover it. And if I don't know something in Twig, or I make the wrong judgement about a character, well I'll keep that wrong judgement and base my conclusion and understanding of Twig on only 150 chapters instead of... 316? 320 something.

That's fair. Thank you for this Let's Read! I had a lot of fun.
 
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