Fun story, I really like the writing style, the jump back and forward between "Historical description" and Semi-live thoughts/following individual people.


Sheer dumb luck had tripped him up and now he was going to fail.

Frustration and rage rose within him; a toxic wave that chewed away at his thoughts with the eagerness of acid. Then, as quickly as they appeared, they vanished. Without warning, a strange coldness washed over him and he felt calm take over as adrenaline flooded into his system --clarity of reason banishing all other emotions before it.

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Out of the corner of his eye, Harris caught sight of Agent Blake moving to secure the fallen drone controller; the young agent keeping her gun pointed off to the side but ready to use just like he'd taught her.

Face pressed against the boiling hot asphalt, the terrorist began to cry as Harris continued his rote repetition.

It feel like here you've transitioned from a sort of ... 3rd person shoulder POV that's mostly inside Bret's head, to on that's mostly inside Harris's head (but still 3rd person).
There's a couple sentences in between, where its hard to tell which "he" is being refered to and (more importantly) its hard to tell whose thoughts are colouring your Narration. Is the change of camera angle needed? Could it be more explict? And is there a reason you jump to Harris's POV rather than Blake's (who we had in the previous scene).
 
Fun story, I really like the writing style, the jump back and forward between "Historical description" and Semi-live thoughts/following individual people.




It feel like here you've transitioned from a sort of ... 3rd person shoulder POV that's mostly inside Bret's head, to on that's mostly inside Harris's head (but still 3rd person).
There's a couple sentences in between, where its hard to tell which "he" is being refered to and (more importantly) its hard to tell whose thoughts are colouring your Narration. Is the change of camera angle needed? Could it be more explict? And is there a reason you jump to Harris's POV rather than Blake's (who we had in the previous scene).
I tried writing it from Brent's perspective, but it just seemed weird. Ahh well, I'm trying to get better about keeping POV's clear so I'll try not to do the same thing again later.

Good so far and a very interesting concept. Definitely watched.

Wouldn't it make more sense for the feds to just alert the local police, they're most likely already there to provide security to the march and there's a lot more of them.
Yeah, probably. Somehow I just never thought about it. :V
 
III -- In the Ruins of Their Cities
Choosing The Divergence Point
There are several reasons why, amongst all the other nations and periods they could have selected as the point at which to bifurcate the timelines, the Federation and Union chose the United States of America circa 2028.

Temporally, the answer comes down to the simple fact that they went as far back in history as was possible given the restrictions they were operating under. Despite having the full backing of two superpowers, the Concordia gateway facility found itself unable to reach back any further than the summer of 2028 due to limitations in the resolution and power output of the technology used. While both nations had hoped to create a portal leading to a time roughly 500,000 years in the past to sidestep the majority of moral issues involved with time travel, they were ultimately forced to accept a much, much later divergence point in history --one that would place them in the lead up to the collapse.

Given the restriction in when in time the portal could be opened and the divergence made, the question of where it should be opened naturally became of supreme importance to the people of both nations. As one might imagine, the differing needs and beliefs of the Union and Federation lead to lengthy deadlocks in the decision-making process, and it was only after months of tedious work that a set of key criteria were developed by which past nations could be analysed. While the exact formula for this system cannot be repeated here for reasons of brevity, three factors are essential to understanding why the final decision was made as it was.


First and foremost amongst these factors was the nation in question's mineral and energy reserves.

With the Earth having suffered extensive damage to its ecosystems and climate from the never-ending hunger of the 21st-22nd centuries, the large-scale exploitation of the planet's remaining mineral and energy reserves remains a difficult proposition. Though large quantities of useful material still exist in the 23rd century, extracting them from anywhere outside the Arctic and Antarctic is all but impossible due to a combination of regional instability and lethally hot wet-bulb temperatures. Furthermore, though the technologies of mining and ecosystem restoration have greatly improved in the time since the 21st century, the planet's climate and ecosystems remain precariously balanced and many fear that a return to large-scale mining could cause extensive die-offs which would further destabilise the climate.


The second major factor in selecting a place in which to emerge was the owning nation's agricultural surplus.

While both the Antarctic Union and the Arctic Federation make extensive use of technological farming methods[1], the majority of foodstuffs are grown in vast outdoor farms much as they have been for millennia. Exposed to long hours of darkness and often situated on nutrient-poor soils[2], these farms struggle to produce enough food for the planet's one and a half billion-strong population, and continued genetic tweaking has been required to ensure sufficient nutrient uptake in plants whose growth has been overclocked by atmospheric CO2. Making matters worse, storms supercharged by climate-change often waterlog what farmland exists outside of the poles and can carry vast clouds of dust everywhere they go --starving plants of sunlight and altering the pH balance of soils. As a result of these issues, food security was a major concern for both the Federation and the Union at the time, and so a nation able and willing to supply them was highly sought after.


The third and final factor in selecting a nation to serve as the landing point for the gateway portal was the amount of influence said nation had on the world stage circa 2028.

With their populations having barely lived through the Great Collapse once already, the political leadership of both the Union and the Federation rightly believed that blunting or outright preventing ecosystem and climate collapse in the new timeline would be deemed a humanitarian priority by their citizens. Ignoring the practical effects of stopping the Great Collapse --a world sliding into authoritarian strongman-ism and outright war is hardly able to provide needed resources, after all--, the chance to prevent the deaths of billions of human beings proved to be a moral responsibility that could not be ignored. Given the scale of the action needed to fight climate change, any hope of preventing the collapse required finding a nation with vast amounts of soft power and a willingness to use it.

Though anthropogenic climate change had been a long-established fact, climate-change denial was widespread throughout the 21st century for a variety of reasons. While it would be impossible to hold this view today, the dominant political philosophies of the 20th and 21st centuries were largely opposed to the idea that humans could cause or prevent large-scale alterations to the planet's climate. Furthermore, as a considerable number of contemporary nations were enamoured with the idea of laissez-faire economics and public austerity, many were loathe to consider the kind of large scale programs needed to fight climate change once its existence became impossible to ignore as it would require massive public investments, strong regulation of harmful industry, and a fundamental redistribution of wealth.


While many nations in 2028 met some of these --and other-- requirements, very few met all of them, or else were considered politically non-viable due to current or future events.

For instance, though the Russian Federation had significant reserves of mineral and energy resources, its near-term stability and ability to provide resources was considered doubtful at best. Firstly, its government was a kleptocracy ruled by a strongman from a previous era whose eventual death would precipitate a governmental crisis. Secondly, Russia's civil rights record was considered poor even for the time with journalists routinely being murdered for investigating corruption, LGBTQIA+ people arrested, and more besides. Thirdly, many of its wealthiest figures had strong ties to both the government and criminal spheres of the nation in a complex relationship of corruption and graft all but destined to resist influence by the 23rd century. Finally, much of the aforementioned energy resources of the Russian Federation were fossil-fuel based and thus largely unconscionable to the 23rd-century populace.

India, meanwhile, would suffer from severe heat waves within the next four decades that would eventually displace millions and lead to conflict with its neighbour, Pakistan. China, a rising power at the time, would find itself facing significant instability and grow increasingly authoritarian due to the flood of refugees from India and the simultaneous implosion of the Democratic Republic of North Korea into civil war. Similarly, the European Union would find itself torn apart by multiple far-right agendas united in fear of climate change refugees from the Middle East and North Africa until it eventually dissolved in ignominy; the farthest-reaching effect of which was the return of widespread warfare to the continent.


As a result of these factors and many others, the Antarctic Union and the Arctic Federation eventually settled on the United States of America as the ideal target for their portal to the past.

Firstly, by controlling the majority of the North American continent, the United States enjoyed vast quantities of mineral wealth in addition to the industry needed to extract and process said materials. Though the United States' mining output had fallen in the decades prior, the sheer quantity of American industry and the growth it could achieve lead analysts to believe that the nation could easily sate the appetites of the Union and Federation for raw and processed materials. Furthermore, as a wealthy, first-world nation, the United States had means of minimizing environmental damage that poorer nations lacked --something that served to make it a more politically viable choice amongst citizens at home.

Secondly, the climate and soil of the Americas were well suited to farming a variety of crops --the federal republic producing everything from cereal grains to avocados and nuts in almost unbelievable quantities. In 2027 alone, the United States of America produced 330,200,000 tons of corn, 47,343,830 tons of wheat, and 20,024,140 tons of potatoes --a surfeit of food of which roughly half was destined to be thrown away for reasons both understandable and not. With access to this market, both the Federation and the Union could provide their people with the staples of life without worrying about storms covering precious cropland with toxic soil.

Finally, despite the best efforts of businessman-and-con-artist Donald Trump during his term as President, the United States of America in 2028 enjoyed strong internal stability and held a great deal of influence throughout the world. A wealthy, militarily powerful, and highly educated nation whose society was descended from that of the British empire and whose culture was widely exported thanks to films, television, literature, and music, the United States had a preeminent position amongst the nations of the time and its politics were exported as a matter of course. With the ruling Republican party growing increasingly far-right over the past several decades --a trend that would culminate with the Johanson regime--, this cultural exportation inevitably lead to beliefs such as islamophobia, homophobia, Christian extremism, white nationalism, and climate-change denial being reinforced throughout the world. As a result, any attempt to stop or blunt the impacts of the Great Collapse would require a realignment of American cultural views as a matter of course and would incidentally halt some of the worst crimes of the 21st century before they could begin.

With the location and time of the portal's emergence thus chosen, it became all but inevitable that a debate would emerge as to how the people of the 23rd century would acquire the resources they needed and how they would impose the changes necessary.


[1] Urban vertical farming, controlled-environment agriculture, kelp farms, etc.

[2] Despite both nations spending significant percentages of their GDPs on the effort, improving the quality of soil that has been buried under snow and ice for thousands of years remains an arduous process. See Mohammed Badat's A Modern History of Farming for more on soil conditioning.
 
Not too sure about this update myself, but whatever. :V
 
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While many nations in 2028 met some of these --and other-- requirements, very few met all of them, or else were considered politically non-viable due to current or future events.
Your list omits any mention of Brasil who is on a steep rise despite some impressive setbacks. Who is a dominant local power with a large easily boostable economy (a perfect place for selling and establishing future scientific thought), and who is getting back on track to be a nuclear capable nation, or at least already capable of building nuclear powered submarines IRL.

[2] Despite both nations spending significant percentages of their GDPs on the effort, improving the quality of soil that has been buried under snow and ice for thousands of years remains an arduous process.
Isn't this what was specifically done and tested in Australia though?

Local companies there use pulled rock crushers as an efficient and cheaply way of crushing the upper rock layer once it was ripped off, then add in organic fertilizers, such as human and animal waste.
Simply adding in organic waste, as well as byproducts of farming and fishing such as chopped stalks, and bones would keep improving the soils quality by large margins after each year.
 
Not too sure about this update myself, but whatever. :V
I am more curious about the means of how the Alt!Future Humans want to prevent Alt!Past Humans from finding out about this operation...

...oh, the Alt!Future plans to publically First Contact Alt!Past Earth with the US being the sole point of contact?!

In that case, I hope Alt!Future Humans plan to also bring along some nice mobile ABM platforms for the ride to the past. Because I can see Russia and China instantly mass launching their nuclear arsenals at the US the moment they realize America got technological and scientific cheat codes and I!Win!Buttons.
 
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Your list omits any mention of Brasil who is on a steep rise despite some impressive setbacks. Who is a dominant local power with a large easily boostable economy (a perfect place for selling and establishing future scientific thought), and who is getting back on track to be a nuclear capable nation, or at least already capable of building nuclear powered submarines IRL.
There are a lot of fucked countries. :V

Isn't this what was specifically done and tested in Australia though?

Local companies there use pulled rock crushers as an efficient and cheaply way of crushing the upper rock layer once it was ripped off, then add in organic fertilizers, such as human and animal waste.
Simply adding in organic waste, as well as byproducts of farming and fishing such as chopped stalks, and bones would keep improving the soils quality by large margins after each year.

Now do it to two entire continents. :V :p
 
Two things:

Firstly, the next update will either be this weekend or sometime after Christmas. If all goes to plan, it'll be the first update from the point of view of a future person, so look forward to encountering some weird shit.

Secondly, I recently realised that I've not done as much to showcase the world of 2028 being pretty fucked up as I planned to. This will, hopefully, change quite quickly.
 
Two things:

Firstly, the next update will either be this weekend or sometime after Christmas. If all goes to plan, it'll be the first update from the point of view of a future person, so look forward to encountering some weird shit.

Secondly, I recently realised that I've not done as much to showcase the world of 2028 being pretty fucked up as I planned to. This will, hopefully, change quite quickly.
So about my question from earlier? Are the two states from the prime!future planning on public disclosure of their existence to the alt!past Earth?
 
Yes.

I have watsonian and doylist answers for why, too, if you're interested.
I will answer that: The Alt!Past is very close to us in terms of understanding it. The best way to explore the Prime!Future is by having someone from the Alt!Past asking someone from the Prime!Future questions about it.
 
Man, I set this thing in 2028 to make the decline into insanity seem believable. Guess I'm going to have to change some plans.

Btw, the next update will be in the next week or so.
 
I mean, most estimates I've read about put civilization collapse as inevitable somewhere between 2030-2050. 2028 seems slightly early, but its not like there won't be major disasters beforehand. It just means that before the cuttoff point we as a civilization would be able to bounce back from disasters, rather than being overwhelmed by them. For example, as bad as Katrina was to New Orleans, the city was ultimately rebuilt rather than abandoned (however foolish that may be in the long run). As bad as Australia is right now, those towns that have been lost will likely be rebuilt in time. After the cutoff point, its not like every city gets abandoned immediately, but those which are destroyed or lost to natural disasters (or unnatural ones as the case may be) will not be rebuilt. Nations destroyed by wars will remain devastated rather than recover, that sort of thing. Even then, its not like the whole world will hit the cutoff point at the same time. The US will be able to rebuild their cities far longer than for example, India will be able to. That's due to different levels of development, geography, political systems, trade networks, social (in)stability, etc. 2028 may be too late to fully stop the effects of climate collapse, but it should be mitigated enough to allow a majority of the human population to survive, at least if managed carefully with a full understanding of what the future could be.
 
I mean, most estimates I've read about put civilization collapse as inevitable somewhere between 2030-2050. 2028 seems slightly early, but its not like there won't be major disasters beforehand. It just means that before the cuttoff point we as a civilization would be able to bounce back from disasters, rather than being overwhelmed by them. For example, as bad as Katrina was to New Orleans, the city was ultimately rebuilt rather than abandoned (however foolish that may be in the long run). As bad as Australia is right now, those towns that have been lost will likely be rebuilt in time. After the cutoff point, its not like every city gets abandoned immediately, but those which are destroyed or lost to natural disasters (or unnatural ones as the case may be) will not be rebuilt. Nations destroyed by wars will remain devastated rather than recover, that sort of thing. Even then, its not like the whole world will hit the cutoff point at the same time. The US will be able to rebuild their cities far longer than for example, India will be able to. That's due to different levels of development, geography, political systems, trade networks, social (in)stability, etc. 2028 may be too late to fully stop the effects of climate collapse, but it should be mitigated enough to allow a majority of the human population to survive, at least if managed carefully with a full understanding of what the future could be.
You're a little off with the timeline here, but your logic for the rest is sound. The 2020s here are more akin to the Weimar Republic era than anything else (though like the Republic there are warning signs present).
 
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As bad as Australia is right now, those towns
etc. 2028 may be too late to fully stop the effects of climate collapse, but it should be mitigated enough to allow a majority of the human population to survive, at least if managed carefully with a full understanding of what the future could be.
Poking a bit on this, but at the moment the fires in Australia that started before new years, in less than two weeks are on the cusp of burning more acres of land than all the other global wildlife fires thorough 2019. And its just the start of their summer season.

It took 20 years on a low end budget in Nigeria to plant some 600k acres, so it will potentially take Australia as much as 30 years to replant that burned out zone, not accounting for the fact fires might devastate it all again.
And then the same trees will need between 20-30 years to grow back to a useful size. So that one country is now on a downwards ecological spiral they might potentially never surmount without heavy and very dedicated outside support.

If you throw in a similar situation occurring globally, with increasing food and plant material prices, while economy is constrained by fuel availability (in an attempt to stop fossil fuel use), you can quickly find yourself in a global crisis that just spirals out of control with a few incidents.
 
I mean, most estimates I've read about put civilization collapse as inevitable somewhere between 2030-2050.
You're a little off with the timeline here, but your logic for the rest is sound. The 2020s here are more akin to the Weimar Republic era than anything else (though like the Republic there are warning signs present).

Midnighter13 I think your sources have an alarmist bias. Or you're mixing "civilisation collapse" with "window of time where we can still take effective measures that are not extreme".

First, it's not yet inevitable. Transition to non-fossil-fuels within the first half of the century could keep temperature increase down to 2C-3C. This would cause a lot of change and stress, it can be adapted to, it's just that a lot of old life styles will not be possible any longer.

Second, civilisation collapse cannot happen as fast as 20-30 years due to only "business as usual". If you want collapse, you need external shocks, like a 1929 style depression or worse. Or some big wars. Or a release of the clathrate gun. Or a sudden halt of the thermohaline circulation. Or a combination of those together and more.

With only "business as usual" and no exogenous shocks, it's unlikely that civilisation would collapse before the 22nd century, if it does at all, just becoming more and more degraded, poorer, and generally shitty.
 
Midnighter13 I think your sources have an alarmist bias. Or you're mixing "civilisation collapse" with "window of time where we can still take effective measures that are not extreme".

First, it's not yet inevitable. Transition to non-fossil-fuels within the first half of the century could keep temperature increase down to 2C-3C. This would cause a lot of change and stress, it can be adapted to, it's just that a lot of old life styles will not be possible any longer.

Second, civilisation collapse cannot happen as fast as 20-30 years due to only "business as usual". If you want collapse, you need external shocks, like a 1929 style depression or worse. Or some big wars. Or a release of the clathrate gun. Or a sudden halt of the thermohaline circulation. Or a combination of those together and more.

With only "business as usual" and no exogenous shocks, it's unlikely that civilisation would collapse before the 22nd century, if it does at all, just becoming more and more degraded, poorer, and generally shitty.

Oh I fully agree with your point of the actual collapse of civilization not happening all at once. My point was that by 2050 at the latest, unless something changes dramatically, then such a collapse is inevitable and unavoidable, not that it will actually occur at that point. 2-3 C would still be pretty devastating, but yes, in theory humanity and modern civilization could adapt to the new much less friendly environment (or at least so we hope).

As far as the speed at which civilization can collapse? The idea that business as usual can continue as things get worse is rather optimistic. The reason is that as more and more negative factors accumulate, the various social stressors start to build on one another. Political instability is bad. A drought is bad. Weakened central government is bad. Religious fanaticism is bad. None of those individually can bring down a country. Combined though, you get modern Syria.

The same sort of thing can happen in the developed world too. Poor economy, loss of social cohesion, rise of ethno-nationalism in diverse states, political instability, resource loss, foreign conflicts and domestic terrorism, none of these can bring down a modern developed state alone. But as they build on each other, each makes the other issues worse until you eventually reach a critical mass where the government either looses the support of the population, or the government simply looses the ability to effectively govern. At that point collapse becomes all but inevitable.

What I'm getting at, is that while the stressors are building up it may seem like its just business as usual, with things gradually worsening. But when a country hits a breaking point it often happens really quite quickly. Syria was a fully functioning stable country, and then over the course of a few months it ceased to be stable, and a few months after that the state was in a state of collapse. It took less than a year for that to occur. And less than a decade of fighting has left the country in a state it is unlikely to ever recover from given global trends.
 
It took less than a year for that to occur. And less than a decade of fighting has left the country in a state it is unlikely to ever recover from given global trends.
Their economy is so shot up they have no chance in participating in global trade with 1 Dollar being equivalent to their 515 Pounds (Syrian), and in some cases it is no longer honored as trade is conducted only with dollars.

If you extrapolate that situation, the more unstable states there are, the more they cease to use their home currency, and switch to a more stable foreign one. But the more unstable states present, the less stable that single foreign currency will be, and less trade its owner can conduct, continuously lowering the price, until they are forced to print money (which the US started doing long ago) that is not backed by anything, but relies on user goodwill and trust.

And when to many countries populace switch to that currency, when there is too much of it going around but nothing really to buy... well the economic collapse would be global.
 
If you extrapolate that situation, the more unstable states there are, the more they cease to use their home currency, and switch to a more stable foreign one. But the more unstable states present, the less stable that single foreign currency will be, and less trade its owner can conduct, continuously lowering the price, until they are forced to print money (which the US started doing long ago) that is not backed by anything, but relies on user goodwill and trust.
Wait. US started the money printing machine with Nixon when he left the gold standard.

So the collapse started in the early 1970s!?
 
So the collapse started in the early 1970s!?
We had several small economic collapses, and state liquidations since. While a lot of countries keep their insolvency labeled as "debt" ,if a big enough shake comes its going to crumble down hard.

This was one of the main reasons behind the Great Depression, and that lead to the Sino-Japanese war and WW2.
It too started decades earlier at the closing days of WW1, and everyone (contemporaries) discarded the possibility as temporary, or short term.
 
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Chapter Three
Long strings of tracer fire stitched their way across the night sky like ruby thread; the chatter of gunfire washing across the waterlogged streets of Philadelphia a fraction of a second later before dying away as the AA fire ceased. Lying across the street like a broken beast, the ruins of the multi-story office block had been taken over by the warlord months ago and its concrete and steel frame transformed into a veritable fortress; shattered concrete barricades and gabions providing cover to all manner of weapons. Half-crouched in brackish, plastic-choked water, I didn't flinch as a short burst of machine-gun fire from one of the fortress's windows punched into the half-decayed car I was using as cover; brilliant tracers whizzing into the air as they ricocheted all around me.

"What do we?" Begged the Pennsylvanian lieutenant beside me, blood oozing from a cut that slashed its way across his face --his pale skin turned orange by the light of distant fires.

He was young, seventeen if I had to guess, barely more than a boy. He and a dozen others were all that was left of a company that had been thrown into combat with inadequate training and inadequate equipment, the ill-prepared unit all but annihilated by the initial attack on the hardened structure. It was a mad, vicious waste of lives; screams rising all around me as men and women died in droves on the barbed wire or in the street in an attempt to break the defences and seize control of the strongpoint.

I didn't react as a human would. Glacier saw to that.

Despite the pain and fear that surrounded me, I was as cold as ice; as impassive as stone. Every soldier in the Federation used thoughtware for combat; the programs for the neural lace that entwined our brains items capable of modifying them in controlled, reversible ways. The thoughtware made us better soldiers. The thoughtware made us less than human. The thoughtware saved lives.

Raising my Ripgun above the hood of the car with the too-smooth motion of someone running Murder, I let loose a barrage of fire toward the distant fortress. "Shoot back," I said evenly as I dropped back behind cover.

Seemingly taking my words as gospel, the lieutenant followed suite; his chemical slugthrower roaring as it fired countless rounds into the darkness. Without warning, the boy's head suddenly disappeared in a cloud of red mist; the sharp crack of the sniper's bullet ringing out moments later as his body crumpled to the waterlogged ground with a splash. An instant later, a fresh barrage of machine-gun fire rattled across the frame of the destroyed car sending a shower of orange sparks into the night air.

Crouched beside the lieutenant's fallen corpse, I hastily checked its pockets for something useful before pushing it away to make room for someone else; the act smearing mud and blood across my skinsuit's dull green skin.

Overhead, something shrieked deafeningly loud, and the world dissolved in a flash of blue-white light.


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Alone in the passenger cabin of the maglev train, Lieutenant Anoki Sigurdsson stirred from the somnolence vir neural lace had enforced and cancelled the alert with a thought --the last vestiges of vir dream slipping away as vir neural lace cancelled the alarm. Rubbing the sleep from vir eyes, Anoki yawned and pressed virself against the window of the cabin; staring out at the landscape beyond.

It was winter in the northern hemisphere and, as it had been for the past two months, the sun was low on the horizon. A fat orange ball, the eternal sunset left the sky painted a brilliant gold and turned the plain that lay beside the maglev a deep purple colour --clusters of scattered trees flashing past the window every few seconds. Despite the speed, Anoki could still make out the tentacled forms of labour servitors as they faithfully carried out their orders.

At ten meters long and half a meter wide, the biological robots resembled nothing less than the Arthropleura of prehistory --their segmented bodies a common sight throughout the Federation and the Union. Capable of rearing up to a height of three meters, the thorax of the artificial bugs featured a crown of tentacles dextrous enough to play the piano and strong enough to bend steel, and what would be a digestive tract in an evolved animal had been configured to produce concrete using ingested dirt. Grown in biological factories throughout the nation, teams of the quasi-insects were used for everything from gardening to building houses.

Falka would love this, ve thought idly before bitter memories rose to the forefront of vir mind and they banished the thought.

It's okay, Anoki spoke into the minds of those who, sensing vir rancorous emotions churning in the Matrix, had instinctively offered support through the psychic field that connected them. I just wasn't expecting the deceleration to be so harsh. Ve lied.

Vir fellow passengers responding with thought-imagery of smiles and rolled eyes, Anoki allowed a faint stirring of embarrassment to enter the emotional medium that surrounded them before turning vir attention back to the view. In the time the mental conversation had taken, the train had slowed down from fantastically fast to merely uncomfortably so, and the clusters of trees and servitors that had once been little more than blurs had resolved themselves into distinct organisms.

Without warning, a sudden sense of awe surged into the Matrix from the head of the train; a ripple of emotion that spread like wildfire down the line of carriages accompanied by an insistent suggestion to look out the window opposite. Turning just in time to see a hill flash by the left-hand side of the carriage, Anoki felt vir jaw drop as ve caught sight of the same thing the others had --vir own outpouring of wonder adding to the flood of emotion that had blossomed.

Erupting from the earth like the femur of some great forgotten beast, a vast pillar of metal seemed to slowly drift past the window; its stark white form stained a mottled orange by the ochre dust of distant lands. Here and there, scattered at random across the tower, dark caverns gapped like hungry mouths; the centipede-like forms of countless labour servitors clinging to the side of the pillar as they worked to seal voids that dwarfed them.

As the train crawled around the mighty tower, a second pillar slowly emerged from out behind its majestic bulk; a cage of golden rings visible at its crown who-knows-how many meters up. Craning vir neck in a fruitless attempt to spot to the top of the closest tower, Anoki let out a long, low whistle as the sheer scale of the structure pressed down on vir with an almost physical force. Then, a whoosh of rushing air and both towers vanished; blocked from sight as the maglev entered a tunnel.

Smiling to virself as the Matrix faded down to its usual gentle wash of emotion, Anoki leaned returned to vir chair and closed vir eyes. A moment later, a ghostly version of the world faded into view in vir mind's eye as vir espersense extended outward and the physical world slipped away to be replaced by a long string of minds shining in a ghostly version of the maglev.

Vir imagination pictured the gland responsible, a tumour of oily darkness buried in between the hemispheres of vir brain, rippling gently and without rhythm. The actual thing looked nothing like that, but as psychosis went, it was mostly harmless. Other psi-operatives had much stranger hallucinations and the successful ones had long since learned to accept theirs.

Turning vir attention to the sky beyond the cabin of the maglev train, Anoki pushed vir espersense through the thin walls of the tunnel and into the open-air --concrete and steel phasing through vir vision like ghosts and sending an involuntary shudder down vir spine. In earlier times the ability had been dubbed Astral Projection out of the belief it involved a spiritual basis, but in the modern-day, it was known as Remote Viewing --the separation of mind from body. Anoki was the first to admit that, as powers went, it wasn't the flashiest, but it had saved vir and vir squad more than once in the Americas.

Floating well above the maglev now, Anoki could see their destination sprawling across the landscape like an indolent cat.

A vast complex of concrete and steel, the Concordia gateway facility was awash with the light of countless intellects; a quick estimate by Anoki putting the number at several thousand at a minimum. Covering an area of several square kilometers, easy, Concordia was clearly a combination military base and cargo facility --barracks squatting next to air traffic control towers, and fields of cargo containers lying next to tangled nests of maglev tracks which terminated in gigantic A-frame terminals. Soaring high above the densely packed structures, a dozen vast murmurations of servitor Starlings flocked to and fro --fine silver threads connecting each flock to buildings throughout the base.

Vir curiosity satisfied, for now, Anoki closed her eyes above the sprawling base and opened them on the maglev once more.


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"It's amazing what we've been able to achieve with just a radio and some prior knowledge," said the historian excitedly as he waved his hands above the table; the woman sitting beside him jerking out of the way just in time to avoid a glob of potato curry that sailed through the air.

Flashing her an apologetic smile as he received the spike of irritation she sent into the Matrix, the green-eyed man, Carlyle, dropped his spoon onto his tray and leaned in toward Anoki as ve speared another slice of tank-grown meat from vir plate.

"I mean," he continued conspiratorially, his giddy eagerness seeping into the Matrix, "we've only had the ops centre running for a couple weeks now and we've saved maybe three-four hundred lives. It's incredible."

They were seated in one of Concordia's many mess halls, the murmur of conversation and the psychic trill of identitas suffusing the room with a pleasant air as friends and comrades kissed one another in greeting. Anoki had been in line at the commissary when Carlyle and his friend had run into vir; the tall blond man and the short raven-haired woman recognizing Anoki from an earlier run-in on the maglev platform and inviting vir to sit at their table. Having arrived a day before the rest of vir squad, Anoki had little else to do and so had accepted the invitation; the three of them instinctively exchanging identitas through the Matrix.

Carlyle, he/him, was thirty-six years old and taught modern history at the University of Edinburgh with a focus on the early 21st century. He grew up in the Celtic Union and had never been this far north before. He was married and loved his husband enough that it stained his identitas --his psychic identifying code-- with a gentle warmth.

Layla, she/her, was three years Anoki's junior at only twenty-eight years old. She lead one of the engineering team responsible for tower maintenance and was proud of her ability to direct multiple labour servitors at once. She grew up in the Antarctic Union and missed her family, but she desperately wanted to see the Amazon her avó's avó had taken pictures of.

"Five hundred, peste," corrected Layla as she idly sipped her chai; her crossed arms covered in a plethora of tattoos that stirred and shifted on their own accord across her olive skin. "They ran the numbers again this morning."

"How the hell do you know that?" Queried Carlyle, the pale man flushing as she shot him a satisfied look.

Civilians, it seemed to Anoki, were as eager to share gossip as soldiers were.

"Whatever," he continued, "five hundred people, then. The important thing is that I'm a historian and I didn't really get just how bad things were back then."

"I thought you said you were on the research team?" Anoki asked the lanky historian, pausing mid-stab as ve shot Carlyle a dubious look and allowed vir gentle confusion to seep into the Matrix.

"I am," he acknowledged. "But there's a difference between knowing something and understanding." The man paused, an unreadable expression flashed across his face too quickly for vir to parse.

What do you know about the United States' history? Carlyle sent, his mental tone weighed down with fatigue and disgust.

Anoki shrugged. Not as much as you, I expect, but I know the major things, ve replied.

Carlyle smiled wanly and sent a request to share qualia, the mental link between them expanding from a rivulet to a river as Anoki accepted and closed vir eyes --the gentle warning Carlyle placed on the memories vanishing like mist under the blazing sun.

There was a moment of disconnection...


And Anoki opened his eyes to the dimly lit confines of some unknown room; the hum of countless conversations replaced by the near-subliminal whir of air conditioning. He was standing before a desk kept clear save for the pyramidal form of a laser projector, a handful of people hunching over its glazed glass surface like crows. In some distant part of his mind, Anoki felt as if he knew these people well, recognition stirring in his mind even as he knew he had never seen them before.

They're good people, thought Anoki as he looked from face to face. The best. He was proud of them all and trusted their opinions. In a way, he almost regretted having to show the-

With a mental jerk, Anoki clamped down on the memories that played through vir head; Carlyle's thoughts curling up and dying in vir mind as ve pushed back against the thought-patterns that accompanied the sense-memory. Qualia, one of the stranger offshoots of the modern dive into the mind, were tricky things. More than simple sense-recordings, Qualia allowed users to experience a moment in time exactly as the recorder had --provided the user so chose.

"Adebiyi," Anoki felt virself say to a dark-skinned man standing across from vir, "your thoughts?"

"Of course," replied the man, uncrossing his arms from his sapphire and gold robes as the projector splashed the image of a street across the glass.

It was a sense-recording from a servitor, Anoki recognized immediately. The viewpoint somewhere high up and motionless; a tree-lined boulevard stretching out beneath it. One side of the avenue was made up of red brick row houses while the other looked out onto a vast and open parkland. Here and there, archaic-looking cars stood parked in the shade of trees while people dressed in similarly old fashioned clothes meandered their way down the sidewalk.

"It's no surprise we encountered this so quickly," the man said as he began to circle the table. "Raids increased dramatically under President Trump and successive Presidents failed to reverse it due to reasons both ideological and practical."

Without warning, the footage leapt forwards and a group of three warped into view. Two adults and a little girl, all holding hands. The mother pushing a covered pram. The father carrying a bright pink backpack.

A family, clearly.

"Though the actions of the executive branch were still beholden to the legislative," Adebiyi continued, "the late 2020s were the tipping point by which the American far-right began to ossify their control of the nation's politics.

Half-listening to the man's stilted narration, Anoki watched as a dark grey van slid into view from the bottom of the frame; its engine purring as it inched its way down the street. In the distance, a sedan curved around the corner and began to do the same.

Suspicion bubbling in the depths of vir gut, Anoki eased vir grip on the Qualia and allowed Carlyle's thoughts to once again flow through vir mind.

Past. 2028. America. Mexico. A drought. Tens of thousands crossing the border to seek a better life. Border. Republicans. Republican president.

The family were oblivious to those stalking them; their backs turned to the dark grey beast as it crept closer to the shoulder. They couldn't sense the eyes of the driver boring into them. They couldn't see the shapes moving in the recesses of the van through the windows. Behind the glossy windshield of the sedan --tinted to stop humans from seeing within--, a man checked his pistol.

There was no warning when it happened, no split-second flash of precognition, or countdown. One moment the family were walking down the road and then the next, lightning-quick, the vehicles leapt forward and swooped into place to block them. Before the family could react, the van's side door slid open with a rasping whine and three armoured figures spilt out; rifles up and ready, the letters ICE stamped across their backs.

In a heartbeat they covered the distance, shoving the father to his knees as they bellowed for him to stay still and raise his hands. Ripping the backpack from his grasp, the paramilitaries tied his wrists together with plastic cables and yanked him to his feet with a pained yelp. Wailing, his daughter lept toward him only to be dragged to the ground by her mother; her undulating scream replaced by choked sobs as all three began to cry.

"I think that's enough," said Anoki-Carlyle; the projector freezing on the tableau of a crying family.

Adebiyi nodded and gestured at the image. "As you can see, ICE is already displaying the same pattern of violence that would eventually lead to the Greenshirts. As such, I believe close observation of founding members is warranted, as well as observation of any catalyzing influences."

Anoki paused, tossing the idea over in vir head. Servitor observation was capable, certainly, but there were places an animal couldn't get into and actions they couldn't carry out. Close observation meant people and people meant risk, but Anoki couldn't see a reason to deny it.

Ve sighed. "I see your point. I'll include it in the report unless anyone has any objections..."

"Alright then," Ve said as each historian shook their head in turn, "who's next?"

There was a moment of disconnection…


And Anoki found virself back in vir seat, the noise of the mess hall crashing into vir awareness like a tidal wave as the last tendrils of Carlyle's recorded memories slipped away.

The room felt colder all of a sudden, and darker too.

"I… Hell," Anoki grunted after a long pause.

For many of those rounded up, yes. Antelope Wells was- is still a dream, but not a distant one.

Okay,
ve replied as suspicions slowly dawned within vir mind. I imagine the reason for special forces has to do with what your man Adebiyi said: you need someone under observation.

Got it in one. You supersoldiers will help us save the world.
 
So I've finally updated this story, and I can honestly say I'm not particularly happy with this chapter. I feel like I've introduced too many new concepts at once and the writing is clunky at best as character writing has never been my strong suit (hence the need to practice by doing stuff like this chapter). Still, I hope y'all like an extremely limited look at the future from an agender special forces soldier with brain implants!
 
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Still, I hope y'all like an extremely limited look at the future from an agender special forces soldier with brain implants!
You should include this in the text itself. For a moment I thought I was reading a pre-beta release before it clicked that you might be using 'vir' as an agender form.
You wen't in relative depth about servitor robots, yet at the same time totally glossed over one of the centerpieces of this story, which I assume the golden ring tower was (time machine element).
 
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Fuck me. They are a more militaristic/interventionist lite-version of the Martians from A Miracle of Science webcomic.

The alt!right is so fucked.
 
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You should include this in the text itself. For a moment I thought I was reading a pre-beta release before it clicked that you might be using 'vir' as an agender form.
You wen't in relative depth about servitor robots, yet at the same time totally glossed over one of the centerpieces of this story, which I assume the golden ring tower was (time machine element).
I'm not sure about making it a section like the Servitor bit, but I'll probably chuck a line in early on making mention of the fact they're agender for clarity. The time machine thing is a good, though, I just forgot to add it in. :V



As an aside, I was worried about adding psychic powers into the setting but then I remembered a popular series from the 2000s featured the superpowered ghost of Al Capone. :V
 
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