I don't want to be a superhero (SI Dc-superherogirls)

Chapter 6 : me too I have secrets
Before you read this chapter, I want you to know it will be more about Zach's psychologie rather than adventure and theme such as suicide or grief are in this chapter, I understand it may be offensive to some people so I warn you




chapter 6 : Me too I have secrets​




Planet Oa

Kilovog had been a green lantern for a long time, so long he could say during all his life; he was a bolovaxian, a specy with a communal mind; and thus he was one of the loneliest green lanterns.

Sure, he seemed rude when he was training the cadets but he just wanted to prepare them for what was coming, he soberly remembered each of his comrades who died, there were just too many of them.

It is why he was at Oa's archive, he saw this strange boy in Jessica's ring and these powers he knew weren't from earth, sure some human started to have powers but bending space and using a laser beam like a green lantern was too much.

So he decided to have a look at the planet with billions of years of knowledge, there was surely information about that.

The archive were empty since most of the green lanterns patrols in their sector and a few of them bothered to come there often, anyway, the Bolovaxian just put his ring in a scanner as it contained a copy of jess and hal history; the scanner was linked to a computer who would analyse theses information to find a file about them.

After ten minutes it came, one single file named 'eliatrope', Kilovog quickly read it and was surprised.


Observation on specy #616 : Eliatrope




By Krona




A specy of humanoid able to manipulate an energy called "Wakfu", my studies on this energy seem to indicate it is another part of the lifeforce present in anything alive.

The manipulation of Wakfu permits them to have access to incredible powers such as energy manipulation and teleportation.

Their society is a monarchy where the ruler chooses his successor among 'the six primary eliatrope' I still ignore why this group has such a privilege but I am led to believe it is because of their religion toward their deity named after their specy.

The planet is in harmony with nature, none of their infrastructure disturbs the ecosystem, they are clearly not able to travel in space for now.

I decided to hide this observation by fear that other species will try to exploit the eliatrope that I considere as a race too pure for space; it is clear this society isn't ready to know about life outside of their planet.

Update : I came back to observe their planet a century after I stopped my research on them but to my horror there was nothing left, the planet was nothing more than an asteroid when I came back, I could sense that nothing was alive, it was a complete dead world as if something syphoned all life in this planet, I found no trace of the eliatropes in the following centuries and thus I made this file and the following observation public.


That file was made public a millions years ago, there was no trace of the reappearance of these eliatropes following the last update, meaning that an earthling came out of nowhere with the powers a specie that disappeared years before the green lanterns, a specy too similar to the green lanterns.

Kilovog knew it wasn't good, he had to act; his cadets could be in danger.

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After the beat up from Saturday, I stayed at the hospital for a while until they released me, I was a bit surprised that no one remarked I was a metahuman but I won't complain.

The Zeuls stayed with me at the hospital, even Doris, to be fair my feelings were mitigated, I felt awful that I was receiving care the original me needed but… I was happy to be loved, I won't lie by saying I didn't miss my old world and family, no matter how bad my world was I still loved them but I wasn't good at showing it, I was a bit distant and didn't talk very much while I was always afraid that the one I love would died just like that.

Ironically, I'm the one who died without warning.

I won't lie, I have regrets about my previous life and I decided to profite of this new life to live without regrets. I knew it would be difficult to change and living with the memories I had was going to be hard but I will try.

On a more joyous note, I had to go back to school on monday since my injuries were healed quickly, probably because of my powers.

Also because even if the school got trashed by a supervillain they weren't going to close it, if Metropolis closed everything that got attacked by a supervillain for a week then nothing would be open.

I spent a good part of my sunday in my home but now I was heading right to school, my foster parents had to go to Star lab early while Doris was not really pleasant.

I asked her if she wanted to walk with me but she didn't answer and just walked away.

Now, I was walking to the school and the first thing I noticed was the big hole at the top of the school windows, the sames who taught me that having a bleeding statue will bleed yout out in seconds unlike in video games.

I really needed a gamer body but I guess the angel would be bored.
I entered the school where all the students were distracted, albeit it wasn't the goggles this time, everyone seemed to be reading a newspaper.

Wait, is that a picture of Carol at the first page?

"Excuse me, can I have a look?" I asked a big guy with a yellow jacket, he was way taller than me and his eyes were covered by his hat and hair.

He nodded before handing the newspaper to me.

It was news about what happened when Star Sapphire went on a rampage at the school, there were pictures of Jess when she was in her green lantern suit, me and Carol.


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Saturday, September the second; a villain attack happened during the football match between our team and the west coast's.

The reason of the attack is still unknown but witnesses assure the villain was after the football star 'Hal Jordan'.

Fortunately, the attack was stopped by two superheroes from our local league, the green lantern girl this newspaper named 'lightbringer' and the teleporter dressed as batman, we assume he is another of Batman's fan like the the mysterious Batgirl.

Lightbringer took Hal Jordan to safety while this batboy fought the villainess, a girl dressed like a disney princess with the same powers as green lanterns.

We couldn't assist at all the fight but it was a fierce one, the football field was destroyed, our school damaged but most importantly, three students were injuried during the fight.

Garth Bernstein, a fourteen years old water carrier.

Carol Ferris, a cheerleader of west coast.

And an unknown student.

They were carried to the hospital by Lightbringer but her comrades and the villain disappeared. We don't know where they are, who won and if this villain will come back again but we should ask yourself if we can trust these heroes.

After all, isn't it weird that this villain has powers near identical to green lanterns?

Isn't it weird that Batboy can create the same portals that the alien used on the news?

We don't know everything about them and it is why we shouldn't glorify these superheroes just because they stopped a giant robot piloted by a child.
For more information, go to page five

Wow, that's a bit insulting, I mean yeah I screwed up but it could have been worse if I wasn't there.

There were photos of the fight between Star Sapphire and me but, fortunately, my face was covered as my Batman Hoodie had its zipper all the way up.

Too bad Carol blasted it, I liked this hoodie.

Anyway, as much as it hurt, it wasn't all wrong, the school got wrecked and the bill was going to be salty.

And most importantly, it was Lois Lane who wrote that she must know a lot about how a superhero should act, she wrote about Superman after all.

I was also interested by the article, there were nice photos, then I was at the part about the fight, it started with ….the photo were I accidently grabbed Carol


"OH, COME ON, WHY DID LOIS PUT THAT PHOTO?!!!"

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"WHY DID YOU PUT THAT PHOTO?!" Jessica exclaimed to Lois as she showed her the embarrassing photo at the fifth page of the newspaper.

Jessica joined the newspaper club a year ago, she wanted to talk about the issue of nature and advice on ecologie but it was a bit complicated to capture people's attention although she won't give up on her causes for that .

She met Lois Lane on her first day, the black haired was a nice girl but sometimes she was a bit too passionate with her work.

"That was Jimmy's idea, he thought it would be nice to start the story with a good laugh, although I admit we could have chosen something else." Lois replied while she was tipping on her computer

Jess internally winced at the memories of the incident, after all, she was there when her friend was at hospital and his family was worried sick about him.

She knew it was her fault, she wanted to put Hal to safety and spend quite a time figuring out a plan to take down Carol but Zack wasn't with them, he was fighting a lantern all by himself.

She knew from firsthand experience how dangerous a lantern can be so for him to fight and win was a miracle.

Except he was injured and nearly died if she didn't bring him to the hospital in time

She wasn't there when he needed her.

That was definitely going to be on her mind for a long time and seeing that on the school paper wasn't arranging anything.


"Also don't you think Lightbringer is a touchy subject… I mean it's basically Satan's name." Jessica tried to change the subject from the fight to her new identity, she was catholic after all.

"I don't really see a problem with that, OLSEN? WHERE IS MY ART? LAYOUT'S IN FIVE!"

Jimmy practically ran to get what she asked.


Toc-toc​




"Enter."

"Excuse me." Someone entered the room, it was Zack, what was he doing here? "I came to join the newspaper club."

Oh, Jessica forgot Zack wanted to join the newspaper club, he didn't seem to care about the press.

"Too late, we were recruiting yesterday." Lois quickly replied before she got back on her work.

"But I was attacked by a supervillain, it's not my fault that I couldn't apply."

Lois sighed before she stared at Zack, she paused for a moment, looking perplexity at him.

"You recovered quickly." Lois seemed intrigued, that wasn't a good sign.

"I'm though."

"You know what? you're right; come back here at five tomorrow and we will talk about that." the reporter excitedly told him.

Jess knew it was out of character for Lois, she always took her job seriously and wouldn't have made an exception, except if she had something to gain…

Like an interview with a superhero!!!!

Did she figure out about Zack's identity, Lois just met him but knew jessica for years so how is it possible?

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Pov Zack

I was surprised to see Jess there but we all have our hobby so who am I to judge also maybe she could help me if Lois accepted me in the club.

I wanted to join the newspaper club because :

1-I'm a superman fan.

2-DC world suck when it come to press, it's still better than Marvel's but too close since Luthor was elected president in one timeline.

Anyway, I had to speed up because my physics class was about to start, I ran as fast as I could until I reached the classroom.

There was no one except a sort of … throll?

"Excuse me, is it where the classe A-1 has physics?"

"Yes, you're just early."

"Thanks, I thought I was late."

"Just take a seat." The troll like teacher told me.

Wait, bald, check; pointed ears, check; big glasses, check…. I think I saw him in 'the brave and the bold' but where…. he was a doctor …. doctor cypher? no… It started with a 'Siv…

Sivana is my teacher, the doctor Sivana?

"Are you … are you dr Sivana?" I asked him.

He stopped to take care of his copies and stared at me before he laughed.

"No, but it's true we look alike, My name is Isaac Von Braun."

"Sorry but …. I could swear you were him." I wonder if Sivana is still evil or not in this world . I read about his backstory after I saw Shazam and he was actually a decent guy …. before the trope 'reed richard is useless' crushed his dreams.

"I'm surprised you know him, he was a brilliant scientist but … some fools did all they could to erase his name, his work…" he started to rant.

Okay, it's I'm. I'm sure at one hundred percent that my school suck, not as bad as the previous one but still sucks.

I still have three years of advance on the program at least.

After a few minutes, students entered the class and the teacher started to write on his board.

"Our first lesson will be on lasers, more precisely their heat and military uses."

AAAAND my advance is gone, I should have know they were going to teach comic physic in this world.

great…. just great….


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It was finally lunch break, physic was actually interesting but I needed a break like anyone, I waited in the line and took my lunch, a burger, they never served that in my school.

After that I had to find a table where to sit… There was : a table where Doris was chatting with her friend, considering what she told me I'll avoid that place, I see her at home anyway.
a place next to the future poison Ivy...no, just no.

And I spotted an empty chair next to Kara.

"Hi Kara, can I sit here?" I asked her.

She seemed grumpy but she said move the chair so I took that as a yes.

I started to eat my meal… next to Supergirl…. It was awkward as I didn't know what to do next to a superhero, you can think it's creepy but let's be honest, anyone would react like that next to a superstar : uncomfortable and thinking of a way to make a good impression.

considering she told me 'screw you.' It didn't start well between us….

"Thanks for the gift … I really appreciate it." She gave me her autograph after the fight with Lena, it wasn't Superman's but I'm glad she gave it to me.

"You would have prefered to have Superman's." she grumbled

Okay, I wasn't an expert in social interaction but even I knew something was wrong

"Okay, what's off?"

"what's off… WHAT'S OFF, I will tell you what's off . Everyone worship my cousin like if he is their god."

Of course they do, it's the plot of many movies and stories on Superman.
"Did you know I was 12 when Uncle Jor-El and Aunt Lara had him? I used to baby-sit him back on Krypton!" she almost yelled.

Okay, that must have been a shock to see her baby cousin grow up so fast but still, WE WERE IN PUBLIC!!!!!!

"Kara…. " I was panicking a bit since the room was crowded.

She didn't noticed what I said and kept ranting about her life.


"I could've gone to Earth first and then everyone would love me, but no, I had to get stuck in space stasis while he was down here becoming a... "Man." I mean, I have the exact same power as him. I come from the exact same planet. I practically have the exact same backstory


"KARA!!!!"

My scream advertised everyone as their gaze turned on us… I was pretty embarrassed but Kara seemed to have taken it bad.

"What?" She seemed angry that I interrupted her.

"Not in public." I quickly answered her.

Speaking of the autograph was one thing but speaking about coming from Krypton and Superman's life.

"oh… my bad." She said.

I didn't really want to stay in public like that so I quickly finished my burger and walked outside.

But I was followed by Kara. although we were alone this time.

"Look, I may have overreacted about my cousin."

"you didn't 'overreacted'... Look I know no shit about what you went through… you lost everything and … I have no words for that."

But I actually know that, I went through it… I will live through it

"But… you're jealous of your cousin… the way you're talking about him is like … he isn't someone, did you know I had to fight a cyborg to save your cousin?" I asked her

"That's not new." She answered about his situation.

"IT SHOULDN'T BE LIKE THAT!!!!" She was taken by surprise because of my outburst.

Family was an important thing back in my previous life, reacting to a near death experience of someone from your family shouldn't be like that.

"Kara… I like heroes, I admire you." That's true, I watched all the animated serie of superman and loved it, supergirl included. "But the way you're talking … it's like you just want people to love you."

"Hey, I told you I didn't want to be a hero but you and Diana asked me to become a hero, did you forget what happened at sweet justice? because I remember how you yelled at me when I just tried to do what you asked me."

"I'm sorry about that Kara but if you really didn't want to be a hero then why did you take your suit on your first day of school?"

She didn't have an answer to that.

"Being a hero is more than having people to worship you, it's about saving life and risking everything you have even your own… wanting glory is not a good reason."

"So why did you choose to become one if it sucks so much? want to kill yourself?" she asked me.

I didn't answer, her eyes widened.

"Zack…"

"Forget it…" I tried to walk away but she grabbed my arm

"Why did you choose to become a hero?" She asked me.

"I don't want to talk about it."

"You practically harassed me about being a hero so why won't you tell me."

I couldn't get away from her grap, she was too strong and there's no way I could overpower a kryptonian at my level but I wanted to get out.

"I don't want to."

"tell me."

"no."

"tell me."

"no"

"I SAY TELL ME;"
"TO GO TO HEAVEN!!!"

The pressure on my arm left my emotions too much so I did the only thing I knew in these situations.

I ran.

I ran away from her, left the school and just lashed out, I created a portal and jumped inside it… I just wanted to go away.


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Kara didn't know Zack so well, she met him three days ago and her feelings about him were mitigated.

It was annoying how he was telling her to act, she was older than him so why doesn't he mind his business.

She told him she didn't want to be a hero but kept asking her to act like one.
She tried to save those people at sweet justice and he yelled at her

But…

He genuinely cared about others, he really enjoyed having her autograph… it was nice to see someone react like that.

But how could he change like that? one moment they were chatting then he yelled at her_okay speaking of her origins in public wasn't a great idea but still_ was there something off about him?

'To go to heaven' what does it mean… he… he wouldn't.


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I hated sadness, each time I was sobbing or just feeling it I felt so vulnerable.

I had the bad habit of trying to forget anything that made me sad, grief from the dad of a loved one, I don't talk about them and try to avoid everything that reminds me of them.

But my whole world…. I couldn't really do it, I'm trying, I'm really trying to not think about them but I can't.

The worst part is the memories. I have the memories of someone else who went through the same things as me, he lost his family. I could feel sadness when I tried to remember about his parents, HIS sadness.

So I walked in order to calm down, trying to clear my mind… but two freaking hours did nothing.
So now, I'm sitting on the daily planet's golden globe, watching the horizon.

"Hey." Someone called me.

I turned my head to him, it was Superman, I met him for the third time.

"Hi." I wasn't as excited as before. That's how low I felt

"So… Kara called… you really worried her."

"really?"

"She never calls me except for prank calls. Just last week she told me Zod was invading earth."

That wasn't responsible.

"You should talk to her."

"You need to talk." He answered me.

"I don't want to."

"Not even to me?"

"Not even to you."

"Fine."

Then he sat beside me, I didn't tell him to get off and I wanted to stay here a little.

"You know, you remind me of a girl I knew." he started. "I thought she was a jerk at first, telling me to get my head off my ass, that I wasn't special and she even punched me after I got the worst beating of my life.

"Come to the point."

"She had a lot on her mind." He was blunt and the joking tone was gone. "She… she was a descendant of the greek gods, it seemed cool at first but it wasn't. She lived for hundreds of years… the way she acted was a means to distance herself from us until the day we… you know."

Yeah, immortality has some downside when you care about people who aren't.

"Her name was Gally, she always fought evil no matter how outmatched she was or how desperate the situation was but ironically she always told the team to back off in these cases.
It took me time to realise… her work was just a way to end it."
I… I didn't know this story.

"She aimed high one day… there was a villain and … she didn't make it, I had to read her will to understand who she really was…. I knew she had problems but not that…"

I wasn't comfortable where this conversation was aimed.

"Look, I don't know you nor you know me but I can tell something is off, it's scaring Kara, it's scaring your friend. They skipped school to search you… don't let it consume you."

…..

"I can't deal with it…. I… still remember that I was saying going back home after I borrowed books from the library then... " Then I died but the other me… "I received that call… It was the neighbor, he found blood on a window… called the cop first before me… he was a friend so he thought I had to hear it from him… I try to suppress that memory… I try to forget them like if they never existed… I'm trying but I can't." Tears started to come out of my eyes…. I couldn't tell him about the truth but I could try to talk about my feelings.

"But it's not healthy, instead you're stocking it all inside you. I have been a hero for years, I faced demons and all kinds of monsters with my team but none of them thought that keeping their pain to themselve was a good idea."

"It's my life."

I don't want to deal with that.

"What about your friends?"

They aren't real… they come from a comic… they don't care about the 'real' me.

"I won't tell you how to live but you need to know that if you continue then you will lose everything."

He left and I stayed here, thinking about what he said… my life is a lie and it's not a fancy power, adventures or even joining a club and trying to join a club that would change that… It never crossed my mind how my death affected my family.

"Hey."

You know, the daily planed had too many people flying near it.

It was Supergirl.

"How did you find me?"

"Super hearing."

Makes sense… but that means…

"Did you…"

"I heard everything."

Okay.

"I won't kill myself if that what's worrying you."

"That's what you say."

"Kara… I went through a lot… so did you, I'm gonna be fine."

"But I needed help; after krypton was destroyed I was lost and afraid. Kal helped me to adapt to this new world but I still missed krypton and my parents."

Yeah… I can relate to that.

"Look, it didn't start well between us but if you need help or someone to talk I'm here."

"Thanks Kara… I will think about that."

But I will never do it, I couldn't tell her the truth like 'I died and an angel sent me here so he can have fun.' or even better : 'Did you know you lost everything because people thought it would be a great plot for comics?'

Even If I wanted, I couldn't tell them the truth.

It was a secret I would take to the grave.

Yeah, I haven't written a new chapter in a long time but I was busy with life.

So the whole chapter was there to talk about Zack's character as an Isekai, he miss his family and tries to cope with the grief by forgetting them but he can't.
He is human, he has loved one but he has flaws and refusing to talk about his emotion is one of them.

he is in a new world and lost everything, people around him are only human to him because he decided they were but when he snap they aren't people anymore. He is alone and that's when I saw it was something in common with Kara.

Also yes Eliatrope existed there, it will be the cause of many chapter,

About the whole 'Gally' and superman past it's going to be important later as I already have Ideas about Superman's past in this world. (it won't be based on Smallville but a cartoon, guess wich one.)

It's not the kind of chapter I wanted to write at first but it was probably one I needed to write.

still, I hope you enjoyed it.
 
Oof, heavy chapter. It's nice to see that the emotional and mental consequences of an isekai aren't ignored.

About the whole 'Gally' and superman past it's going to be important later as I already have Ideas about Superman's past in this world. (it won't be based on Smallville but a cartoon, guess wich one.)
A brief Google search didn't reveal any "Gally" so it'll be interesting to see who they are and how that plays out.

Small nitpick: you seem to have a tendency to put "ie" when you should put "y" in your words. Some examples:
Also when you put "specy" I believe you mean "species".

But good job, I know it's not easy writing in another language but you're doing great!
 
Oof, heavy chapter. It's nice to see that the emotional and mental consequences of an isekai aren't ignored.


A brief Google search didn't reveal any "Gally" so it'll be interesting to see who they are and how that plays out.

Small nitpick: you seem to have a tendency to put "ie" when you should put "y" in your words. Some examples:


Also when you put "specy" I believe you mean "species".

But good job, I know it's not easy writing in another language but you're doing great!
thank you a lot, that means a lot to me
 
interesting and unexpected. and it's cool, life sometimes takes up a lot of time, thanks for the new chapter.
 
Sidestory : sneek peak #MetalloRevange
Sorry if it has been a long time but I had a writter block and I was busy with my studies. Anyway here is a sneek peak of a futur chapter to make up for the time. I hope you will enjoy it

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Star lab wasn't so far from Metropolis, it was two hours by car and half an hour if you take the train. Because of that a lot of technology from supervillain fights ends up there.

Such as Metallo's body. The robots have been stored there since his fight against Superman and Zack. For Those who don't remember Zack was getting used to his powers and tried to help Superman, sure the kid almost did nothing but he gained enough time for Superman to recover and the man of steel helped the teenager to steal his Kryptonite heart. After that the scientist took his body for research but there is one thing they didn't know

John Corben was still conscious. That man spent months in total deprivation sensoriel, the only thing he had was his imagination the the perfect memory of the little bastard who interrupted his fight. He could do nothing else than imagining how he would take his revenge on the kid.

Sure, Superman was responsible for his defeat but he had the alien in the corner before that kid made him close his chest and distracted him so Superman could pin him on the ground. Meaning he owned this hell to the brat.

So imagine his delight when he became aware of his environnement for the first time.

"Mr Luthor... " "Show me."

Then Corben was able to see again. He was in the same lab where he got his body and saw the body of his benefactor : Lex Luthor, the same man who saved him from a certain death.

"Hello Corben. Can you answer me?" Lex was smiling at him.

"Yes..." Corben moved his jaw as he tried to get used to it again after a long time. "I was beat by that Superman and a weird kid... How long was I out?"

"You have been out for three months." Lex declared

Three months. It was an eternity for Corben, an eternity of torture, speaking of this.

"My body Lex, you promised a body with senses, where is it?"

"I'm still working on it." Lex bluntly answered.

"You promised me... you said I would get a new one." Corben tried to jump on Lex but to his surprise he was still on the table, While he struggled to reach the impassive Lex, Corben got a view on the mirror in front of him and to his horror he saw that he was just a robot head.

In front of him was the reflection of a metallic skull with two green glasses for eyes with wire coming out of the neck, these wires were connected to various pieces he couldn't recognize but what marked him the most was the loss of his skin. For the first time he could see the abomination he became.

"What happened?" Corben asked in shock.

"The scientist in Star Lab dissected your body but fortunately they did nothing that could endanger your consciousness so I recovered your head and here we are." Lex seemed proud of his actions.

Corben knew that even if Luthor was his benefactor there was a limit to human kindness, Lex would have never bothered to help him unless he would get something in return. "What do you want?"

Lex smiled at his question before he took his phone and showed a video to Corben, There was a girl Superman lifting a bus out of the way of a giant red haired cavewoman then there was the picture of Poison Ivy riding a giant tree with a green lantern following her. There were others videos but the one he noticed the most was the one where a snow skinned alien jumped out of a portal, a portal like the ones used by the little bastard who put him in hell.

"You see, while you were out. A group of vigilantes started to make some changes in my city." Lex winced when he talked of what the group did. "They call themselves the teen titans. Unfortunately since they have been at Metropolis the crime rate dropped quite a lot and I don't even talk of damages to properties."

"You're losing money." Corben interrupted him. Lex was making a huge profit by selling weapons to gangs and repairing the city after a superhero battled, while it was nothing compared to the money he was making it was still a lot of money that would annoy everyone.

"Yes," Lex wasn't pleased to be interrupted but he remained calm. "I told you that making the body you asked was so complexe that it would take time but fortunately humans are better at killing than helping. So I can give you something that you will enjoy so much that you will barely be bothered by the wait of your new body : REVENGE!

Revenge, yeah he would like that, just the memory of killing the brat would make his year. "I'm listening. Corben declared"
 
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chapter 7
Note : Sorry for the wait, I was busy and got a bad writer block but I posted two chapters to apologise although the second is shorter.

Chapter 7 : picture day

"I never skipped school in my life before but I did it, I knew it was wrong and I'm sorry I worried you but … I needed to get out, it was just too much for me."

It was the afternoon and right now, I was talking to the Zeuls about what happened with Kara.

The school phoned them about what happened but fortunately since it was just the beginning of school the two hours I skipped were just an introduction to the program so no harm done. But I still decided to be clean with them so now I was sitting on the couch talking to them as they were worried about me_ although Doris wasn't there_

"Why was it too much for you?" Beatrice told me

She was worried about me, how could I have done that to her, she was so nice to me.

"I talked with Kara and she brought up her family then I just became upset and… walked away to wash my mind."

They looked at each other, unsure of what to say but then Francis spoke to me.

"Look, the death of your parents was tragic and losing them has been hard for you…. I … I can barely tell you how it felt when I also went through it… Your parents were good people and you miss them but life goes on, it's just like . People face hardship in life but keep going, that's just life … "

"I understand but …. I 'm struggling to get through it."

"We are here for you. Never forget that." Beatrice Hugged me after and I just accepted the warmth.

I'm a terrible person.

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Doris was doing bench-press in the garage of the house, there was her sport material here; she wanted to have her own bodybuilding room but all the rooms were occupied since Zack came to live with her family.

She was also using her computer next to her in order to chat with her friend, Leslie Willis. She had short black hair with blue highlights on one side of her head, brown eyes, light pale skin, and wore a black choker, a full gray-blue bodysuit underneath, a black jacket with diamonds, along with a short black ripped skirt with two diamonds. And also wears black/blue boots and has grey piercings at her ears.

"So how is it to live with the morron?" Leslie asked her.

"He is a freeloader, he eats, he sleeps, he tries to get attention and he complains 'Doris please don't talk like this to your parents, Doris help me with dishes' who the hell he thinks he is." the more she talked about Zack the harder she pushed her weights.

Seriously, he comes to her home and her parents treat him like a godsend. Always polite with them and interested in their work. It's like the child they always wanted

"You know, I saw him yesterday. Puberty really did a good job.

She knew him for years. Had to tolerate the little crybaby when her parents visited his parents. Although she had to admit he really changed a lot. He went from a shy fat kid to a taller and more muscular teen. But he was still annoying.

"Doesn't seem like a big deal."

"That's not what Danvers thinks."

Doris stopped just after that.

"What?"

Doris knew Leslie loves gossip but if something juicy happened at school she knew it.

"Yesterday. They had a lovers' quarrel and he skipped school because of it." Leslie laughed after that. "I didn't know Danvers loved them young." She laughed again.

That was so wrong. Sure Zack's love life doesn't concern her and she doesn't like him very much but he is fourteen and she is seventeen, almost eighteen. Worst of all, Zack isn't in a normal state after all the stuff he went through.

"You're sure?"

"He yelled 'not in public'. If it's not enough, Kara also skipped school to look for him."

What were they talking about? They could have only met last week. It has been a long time but she knows the only thing the nerd knows about romance is from his mangas.

Why does he have to complicate everything?




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The morning after was Just another school day. I got up, took my breakfast and walked to school although the Zeuls will have to work at Star Labs. To my surprise Star lab isn't too far from their home. That would explain why Superman often went there.

So on the way to school I started to think of what to do. I got my ass kicked when I fought Star Sapphire, no surprise considering she is a lantern. I really need to level up but the thing is that beating up some punks in the street would be a problem because :

  • It wouldn't bring too much Exp.

  • It would be difficult to keep my secret identity while spending too much time beating up thiefs considering the time it would take.

  • I'm not familiar enough with Metropolis to know where to strike gangs and go back home in time.

I could use my meta-knowledge to find powerful villains or good missions but I only know the animated series and some stuff I read on the internet although I could try to get a power up. I could ask Karen for a suit like her. Flying and teleportation would be awesome!!!

But seriously, I'm green when it comes to fighting supervillains. My experiences in fighting is limited to boxing (I was a fan of Ippo and Rocky so I took a few classes) and getting my ass kicked by an amazon, Star Sapphire and almost getting my head crushed by Metallo.

Maybe there are some dungeons like in the gamer fanfics, if there are dungeons I could enter in one of them and conquer it over and over again to level up.
Now that I think about it I think there is a troll in the sewer … his name was started by sle…. sleep… no ...SLEEZ!!!

PING!
[Quest alert]

"Sewer threat"

Sleez, the most depraved of apokoliptian. This creature disgust even Darkseid. You can't let such an abomination live in suicid slumn 's sewers.

{Objective} :

Kill Sleez

{reward} :

  • ?????
  • Exp points.

WARNING: You are discouraged to start this quest. An apokoliptian is too dangerous for your actual level. His mind control makes him a fearsome foe.

You have no obligation concerning the quest, you can start it whenever you want.


I… I don't know how to react to that. I barely remember that thing but heck the system itself asks me to kill him. TO KILL!!! I mean is he that horrible? Am I actually allowed to kill? When do I know I'm ready?

"Hi Zack!"

"Ah!" I was taken from my thoughts by Babs when she greeted me.

"Are you okay?" She looked at me worried

"Yeah… you just surprised me."

"Okay… So why are you hair spiky? you forgot to brush them?"

"I never brush them. It's a waste of time."

"But today is picture day." She answered me as I blinked…

"Is that important?" I probably didn't listen when they talked about picture day but seriously what was going to happen anyway.

PING!

[Quest Alert!]

'Picture day'!


Ah picture day, some people await this day but to you it's nothing but a waste of time. Unfortunately This is going to be a busy day for you.

{Objective}:


· Help Hal (expire at 10 a.m)

-Help Zee to look good

-join the newspaper club

talk to Karen about a supersuit.

apologise to Zee

Don't use your power during the quest


{Reward}:


· Free EXP

· ?





Now that I think about it, I don't remember apologising to Zee for what happened at Sweet justice. I should do it, she saved my life after all

But then a dumpster with a pair of legs rolled in front of me. I know it's weird but considering what happened in the last few days it was rather tame.

Without wasting my time. I ran toward it and quickly caught it. That was the advantage of my new body.

But then I noticed it was a girl wearing a dress in that dumpster and without the kinetic energy it had, the dress fell…. exposing her panty.

"OH MY GOD OH MY GOD!!!! I 'M SORRY I ...I." Oh god, it was way worse than what happened with Star Sapphire.

"Zack? Is that you?" JESS!!! What was she doing in a dumpster? Seriously, I probably won't be able to look at her for a while. How could it get worse?

"What was thaaaat?" Babs just caught up and saw what was surely an awkward moment

I sighed. Fate will never stop screwing me over.


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It was quite embarrassing to get Jessica out of the dumpster after the little 'incident'. Babs and I just got her out of it and we walked to the line for the photos.

A lot of people let us pass before them because of Jess's new smell.

"So…" I started

"Let's never talk about that." The green lantern.

"Okay." … It was a bit awkward so I was glad to spot Hal although he seemed to be wary.

Jess discreetly walked behind him to surprise him. "GOTCHA!!"

Hal was surprised by her actions as he jumped behind. "Aw...Jess! Thank goodness it's only you."

He was acting just like saturday.

Wait, the 'help Hal.' the fact he was acting just like with Carol. ARE YOU KIDDING ME!!!!

"Do you need something?" Please not Carol, not Carol, not Carol.

"Do you know how to block someone with my phone?" Oh thanks angel.

"It's easy, go to settings, click on the 'lock button' and you tape the number."

He followed my instructions but seconds later, someone bursted out of the door. The crazy yandere that put me to hospital. She looked furious. "Did you block me, HAL JORDAN?!!"

DID SHE CAME FROM HER SCHOOL TO HERE IN A SECOND???!!!!, That's girl is a yandere.

Hal hid behind me and Star Sapphire stopped yelling to look at me intensely. "You." she frowned.

"Do I know you?" I lied to her.

"YOU'RE THE SAVAGE WHO HIT ME!!!!" She shrieked before jumping on me.

Thankfully she didn't have her ring at the time and I became stronger than an average human after I reached level five so restraining her was quite simple and I grabbed her hands quickly.

"Calm down."

"Fuck you." Then she kicked me between my legs.

I won't lie, it was the worst pain ever!!! I could barely stand after that

"WHAT HAPPENED HERE!!!" someone yelled It was Mr Chaplin.

"She kicked Walker!!!" Someone yelled as I did my best to keep Carol restrained.

The principal quickly caught Carol, "Follow me and someone take Mr Walker to the Nurse!!!"

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So, now I had a bag of ice resting on my injured parts, I recovered quickly and went to my classes. There isn't much to say about it.

Now it was chemistry.

"So, everyone pair up and follow the instructions I gave you on the table." Sivana told us.

"Hey Karen, want to work with me?" I asked her

"Sorry, I'm paired with Zee." The magician was next to her but while everyone put on their gear there was a problem.

"Where is your blouse?" I asked Zee.

"I don't have to wear it, only the glasses are obligatory." She answered me.

"You could at least do something for your hair." her long hair was free. It was dangerous to have your hair like that during chemistry.

"good point." she agreed

"Jessica?" I asked the lantern.

"Sorry, I'm with Pam." The future poison Ivy didn't look pleased at the partnership.

"Okay," I looked at the teacher. "Hey Mr Sivanna, I'm alone."

"My name is Braun!!! just go with Mr. Queen." The teacher quickly answered.

He pointed to a blond with a goatee.

That was Oliver Queen, aka Arrow. The protagonist of the show introduced me to the flash and lost quality after two seasons. But meeting him didn't surprised me as much as the other heroes since I was getting used to it, no what surprised me was his goatee

"How old are you?" I asked him

0000

After the first classes it was lunch time, I was sitting next to Karen.

"Wait, you build your suit with pocket money?" I shouldn't be surprised since it's DC but I'm still getting used to the world.

"Yes."

If her suit was so easily made then maybe I could pay for my own version. "So if I give you the money could you make one for me?"

"Maybe but some parts may be difficult to find."
"Well I live with scientists who work at Starlabs so it can help."

Karen looked quite interested at the mention of the famous lab.

"Really?"

"Mr and Ms Zeul work in biologie and machines but I'm pretty sure they can help us to make an upgraded suit. Also, could you make one for me if it's possible?"

Karen didn't answer, she paused when I said 'Zeul'. "Karen? Are you okay?"

"Sorry. Did you say 'Zeul'?"

"Yes, they are my foster parents."

"Do they have a daughter named Doris?"

"Yes. You know her?"

Karen hesiated. "She trapped me in a locker last year…. multiple times."

I stopped eating when she told me that. "I'm gonna talk to her parents."

Karen didn't answer me although she looked uncomfortable. Just after that someone dropped a necklace in front of me.

"Here. That's for your disguise problem." I raised my head and saw Zee.

Wait, she spent time making me a suit despite our last talk, that's nice."Thank you… How does it work?"

"It's easy. touch it and think about a suit but be careful you can only have one suit and I don't advise you to use the last one now that you passed on the news" She warned me.

Yeah, there was a huge amount of weirdo on internet and the streets who were looking for the 'alien', I should use another suit, and one who cover my face this time. I already got an Idea of what I want.

"That's nice. Also I'm sorry for what happened at the shop."

Zee looked at my eyes for a moment. "Don't apologize if you don't mean it." Then she left.

The fact I only did it because the quest reminded me of it didn't help.

"Wow, she's angry."" I looked at my interlocutor and saw a total stranger. Her entire face was painted in blue as was her shredded hippy dress. She had a spiky dog collar and blond hair. And her arms were quite muscular.
"Do I know you?" I asked her.

"Yeah" She flexed her arm.

"Kara? What happened to you"

"My clothes are being washed so I have to wear this for today."

"You look great."

So now the three of us were sitting at the table. It was quite awkward.

The rest of the afternoon wasn't worth being noticed. I just got to class and waited until I got to the newspaper club.

------

So being in the club was quite nice. Sure the room was messy with all the papers around it but I found it funny.

Right now I'm sitting in front of Lois as she is at her desk.

"So. Zachary Walker?" She asked me.

"No, It's Zack. Z-A-C-K. My parents named me after a videogame character." I changed my name back in my original world but the other me never did it. Considering my situation I don't think I will change my name again.

"That's… unusual."

"But the character was great so I'm fine with it." Zack Fair was truly a badass.

She was unimpressed. probably not a gamer as she looked at me. "Let's get to the topic, you want to join the newspaper club but this is serious. I don't want you to join and leave a month later because it isn't as 'fun' as you thought" She looked at me in the eyes.

I didn't know her eyes were purple. "What contribution can you give? Why would you be qualified and why did you choose this club."

kay, calm down take a deep breathe and explain.

"Well I can help you at the club. After considering what I saw yesterday, It seem to be understaffed. About my qualifications, well to be fair my orthography is pretty bad but I know French andI know some jokes we could use … in comic strips."

Lois wasn't impressed. "I can also do what you tell me to do or take photos."

"So an errand boy."

"Wouldn't bother me."

"And why would you want to join this club rather than another one?"

"Well first I got a bad first impression with the president of the Drama club and I don't like sports. I also enjoy stories about superheroes but I'm quite upset that no one talks about serious subjects like how an eight years old stole a warsuit from Lex Luthor… I also need to socialise more." I added the last part in an akward tone.

Lois looked at me. "It can't be so bad. You start thursday. Also, I got something for you." She opened her desk and…

My Batman hoodie!!!

"I found it on the football field."

"Thank you." I was smiling when I put it on. I really love this hoodie.

"No problem." Lois smiled to me as I put it on.

-0-

I was leaving the club when the notification appeared


[Quest Completed!]

'Picture day'!


Ah picture day, some people await this day but to you it's nothing but a waste of time. Unfortunately This is going to be a busy day for you.

{Objective}:


· Help Hal (expire at 10 a.m) succeed

-Help Zee to look good succeed

-join the newspaper club succeed

talk to Karen about a supersuit. succeed

apologise to Zee (It was not an objective, You just acter like a jerk)

Don't use your power during the quest Succeed


{Reward}:


· Free EXP

· membership to the newspaper club

  • Magic necklace

  • Batman Hoodie.

  • You unlocked the quest 'ant-man."

You gained the title 'Errand boy."

Errand boy : This title increase the EXP points by 10% for every quest requiring a service.

[Quest Alert!]
'Ant man'

You know Bumblebee, you saw both ant-man movies so what are you waiting for? Get your own suit.

{Objectives}:

Complete a shrinking suit with karen help.

{Reward}:

Shrinking suit.

Free EXP

Level up!



Name: Zack Walkers

Species: Human/Eliatrope Hybrid

Level: 8 | EXP: 0.00%

Title: The [Apprentice hero], [The errand boy]

HP: 1500/1500

WAKFU: 3700/3700

STR: 19

VIT: 15

DEX: 16

INT: 28

WIS: 35

CHA: -5

LUK: 0

Attribute Points: 2

Money: $0

You unlocked new options :

Spells will be soon at your disposition.

Camera, thanks to a new option you can get pictures of the events of the day without taking it, the photos will be automatically on your phone.

Oh my… That's awesome!!! I mean I got a power up, I got a way to gain more EXP. But what about the spells?

|Spells}:

[Some power from the mmorpg wakfu can be attributed to you.]
Warning : You are limited to one spell, you will be able to be equipped of more when your become high enough.


Speells:

Ardent Aegis : this power boost your defense

Flood : You switch place with an objet of your choice from your surrounding

Siphon : You can trigger a repulsion or an attraction on your enemies

Good to know, I choose to get equipped with 'Flood' before I went back home.

By pure envy I used Zee's necklace and turned into an alter ego. My thoughts were actually on spiderman, magic surrounded me as the black and white suit covered me.

Now my suit was made to look like the one from 'far from home'. since I will never see its sequel I should consider the post credit as no -canon. It reminded me of when I used to dress as him for halloween when I was eight.

Although there were modifications, the spider and web were retired from the suit, the symbol on the chest was now the eliotrope's emblem. Also while the suit was covering me I wasn't bothered by the heat, as if it was nothing.

Now I felt more like a superhero.

Note : Zack helped zee by preventing her hair to get on fire and thus to get water on her and later food. I always thought it was weird that Oliver has a goatee at seventeen.

Also yes Lois found his jacket and I will be important later.

About what happened well recently I started to play the game wakfu and I thought some of theses power could be useful but I wanted to keep a game aspect so here it is

Also, Anyone read 'I'm not Starfire?' I swear It's that sort of thing that prevent me from buying modern comics.
 
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chapter 8 : Zack's week
Note : here is the second chapter, it's just focusing on little events from Zack's daily life with a twist in the end.

Also I wonder about the future of the story such as do you think Zack should be with one girl or more?

Or which villain girls do you want him to meet first (in costum I'm taking about since he already met Doris)




Chapter 8 : Zack's weerk

Wednesday.

I was on my phone talking to Karen about the bumblebee suit. "Karen, I don't know half of the thing you described to me… I know it was my idea to upgrade the suit … and yes I still want you to make one for me… Okay you know what." I took a pen and ripped a page from one of my notebooks. "Repeat everything you need I'll write it down."

Just after that I went to the lab next to my room. It was where Francis Zeul was working on his growth formula.

"Hey, Mr Zeul." I called my foster father while he was working in his lab.

"Yes?" The red haired man was still working on his project.

"Can you help me to find some of these things? It's for a friend." I presented to my caretaker the page where he wrote down what Karen wanted.

The scientist looked at it. He raised his glasses. "It's for a girl?"

"Yes," I answered a bit uneasy.

"Just give it." Once he had the paper the scientist started to read it. "Most girls don't ask for such materials. What is she trying to do?"

"She wants to become a giant, so she studied doctor Palmer's formula and tried to inverse the process." I bluntly explained

"You know I worked on a growth formula before." The red hair laughed.

I raised an eyebrow at that "Did it work?" Maybe it could make me stronger later.

"I'm still testing at Star Labs, The subject is growing but it's not permanent and Right now we are working on a robot so it won't be finished before a long time."

"A robot?" The last time the new talked about a robot was shen Metallo tried to bashe my skull.

"Yes, the one from the attack at the mall. We have been disassembling it and studying him since we got it."

I internally winced at the idea I could have indirectly caused Metallo's death, Sure Corben was a merc and killed people but I still felt uncomfortable at the idea someone died because of me

"Great… So can you help me?" I really wanted to finish the 'Metallo conversation'

"Of course."

I spent the rest of Wednesday finding pieces for upgrading Karen's suit and making one for himself.

Thursday

"Walker! Where are the photos of superman?"

Right there. I gave her pictures Jimmy left near his desk. "Also can you call me Zack. I feel old when people call me Walker."

"Not talking, we're working." Lois answered while tipping on her computer

"Okay." I sighed.

Then Kara entered the room, she looked angry.

"What's buzzin', cousin?" Lois asked her

Kara pointed to the school newspaper where Superman was the headline "Why are you printing stuff about him in the school paper?"

Apparently she is still bitter about her cousin

Lois wasn't bothered. "What's eatin' you, Danvers? That's a legitimate story and I'm a legitimate reporter. Got it? Now who's got a pencil?"

Kara: There are way more important stories out there than Superman.
Jessica: She's right. I've got a lead on some terrible chemical dumping.

Kara looked at Lois " What if I told you there was another hero out there, hmm? A better hero, with all the same powers as Superman but even awesomer."

Lois Lane was still on her computer almost ignoring her. "I like your potatoes, Danvers, but where's the meat? What other hero's gonna get me an internship at the Daily Planet?"


" Ever heard of Supergirl?"

"Super who?"

Wait, Lois doesn't know Supergirl? We passed on television last week.

"Superman's cousin. She was also here when Lex's sister tried to trashe the pier and 'sweet justice'." I told her

Lois just leans in her chair "Eh, sounds like a retread to me. " Kara seemed to be ready to burst in anger until Lois spoke. "But I think I can do something with that."
Kara smiled at the new_probably happy to be recognized.

The next article was a critic of how poorly the situation at 'sweet justice' was handled as a good part of the sweet shop was destroyed and how far Supergirl was from her cousin's level.

friday

"You don't have to do that."

"Don't worry. All my friends are busy and I have nothing planned this afternoon." I tol Beatrice while I helped her to clean the house.

Hey, I had school and activities all week. Is it too much asking to have an afternoon off?

Saturday

"Again" Diana told me.

"Can't we take a break?"

"No, we will continue until one of us collapses from the effort."

Diana agreed to train me after my fight with Carol. To be fair the training was quite harsh. footing across all the city, then lifting weights and finally a spar to see what I can do.

Her mom almost killed me and so was she.

I only know boxing because I liked Ipo and Rocky but against a three hundred and seventeen years old amazon I'm outmatched with no doubt.

Soon, I was leaning on the whole. My whole body hurt after a training session.

"You actually did great. Usually most beginners don't last this long." Diana told me while she was next to me.

Having a level eight help a lot for that.

"Thank, you."

"But you have some lacunes, first your timing lets a lot to be desired, you can't use your surroundings to your advantage and your powers are not used to their fullest potential." She told me in a military tone

"What do you mean?"

"You could use your portals to get a better reach for your attacks, in fact if you learn to use your portals while punching and aim you could attack by surprise and it would be more effective."
She is right, I know eliatropes don't need to open their hands for a portal but I never tried it before, I was just happy with what I already know

Although I got a better hand on my new powers and practiced them to be more comfortable with them I just did the basics and what I saw on Tv.

I never tried to make a wakfu weapon before.

you gained one Wisdom point.

"I think I have an idea." I told Diana.

"What is it?"

"I can try to make weapons." I thought about something simple like a rod or a blade. I focused the wakfu in my hand, trying to give it a form.

After a few seconds later, a blade formed in my hand but she barely materialised that I suddenly felt exhausted

Wakfu : 1000/3700

New ability created : wakfu weapons.

This ability enables you to form weapons out of your wakfu but be careful, materialising a weapon out of your wakfu consumes a lot of your reserves. The larger the construction is the more wakfu it will take.

You can use these weapons to attack your opponents. It's quite effective against being weak against magic. It can replenish a part of your wakfu reserve by draining wakfu from your opponent and

Well, that's gonna be useful later but gotta be careful with it.

Sunday

You know, leaving my home to live there for the rest of my life was awful but after a week I think I'm getting used to it. Sure I still miss my family but considering there is an afterlife I will just wait.

I mean things are getting great in my new life, I have friends, powers, health, heck I even met my heroes and it has been a week since my last supervillain fight.

I stand corrected, whatever did this explosion, nine out of ten it's from a villain, I just send a sms to my team while I use Zee's necklace to change into my alter ego.

Getting there isn't complicated, I use my portals and follow the smoke, I arrived in front of a damaged part of the city everything is on fire and breathing becomes harder there all I can see is devastation.

I saw a car upside down, I thought there was someone there but I had no time to ponder on it as I heard something coming toward me, by instinct I jumped into a portal and when I reappeared I saw that a chain almost hit me and I had a good look at its owner.

He was an alien with pure white skin, his eyes were red and he was dressed as a biker. In all my life as a justice league fan I only know one character who matched him. The galactic bounty hunter, the hooligan, the savage from space, the main man :

Lobo.

He was smirking at me and one thing was in my mind :

I'm Fu*****

"There you are." His red eyes were scaring me. "Name's…"

"Lobo, the main man." I must stall him until Superman or Kara come. This guy can fight a kryptonian and Kalibak by himself so using his ego is the only way I have to gain time.

"So you know me." he laughed. "Guess I'm famous."

"What do you want? I can help you if you're after a bounty"

"A guy hired me to find the last eliatrope. So get over here or you will be pissing blood and missing teeth"

THERE'S ELIATROPES IN DC?!!!

I didn't have a long time to think about it as I had to dodge a blast from a gun he had.
"Time out TIME OUT."

To my surprise he listened to me.

"What do you mean by the last eliatrope? What do you know about them? why me?" Seriously, eliatropes are from ankama, they have as much chance to get a crossover with DC as RWBY.

Lobo just took a cigar from his jacket and lit it up. "I know no shit about them. I just know that a weirdo wants you in his Zoo and he pays well.

Is he talking about the preserver? How do they know about me?

I have no time to think about it because Lobo just took a gun and shot in my direction, I just used flood to switch place with him resulting with Lobo taking the blast.
I just saw him in perfect form except for the smoke coming from where he was hit.

"Okay pal, you asked for it." The bounty hunter cracked his neck, walking toward me.

By pure instinct I shoot a blast toward him. He didn't bother to dodge it. The laser from my two portals did nothing except sending him back to a building.

Then he started to keep walking despite the laser I was still shooting at him. But then I heard a motor coming right at me, It was his bike. Then again I used flood this time with his bike.

The bike impaled him, pushed him far as I was trying to stay focused even with the fire around me.

RRRRRRRRRRR

The motar just moved the bike while the big hole in his chest was slowly closing, His ride was intact but there was a lot of blood on it.

"Okay, now I'm pissed." He took he chain and without I had time to notice it, it was wrapped around my neck sending me toward him as he headbutted me and broke my nose.

healt : 1000/1500

Lobo Me punched me, I felt like my head was going to explode and the taste of blood filled my mouth. I tried to get out of his grip but between his strength and the pain it was quite ineffective.

Healt : 600/1500

"Good night" Just after that he punched me again and I became unconscious

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Note : sorry for the wait, I was busy with my life but here for you two chapters. This one involves Lobo. Maybe it was too short but considering who Zack was facing, he obviously stood no chance.

This Lobo is more like the one from the DCAU but with the gadget of 'the man of tomorrow'.

Why and how Zac got a bounty will be explained in the next chapter but it has a link with the previous chapters.
 
Hiring a bounty hunter to kidnap a teenager. Are you sure that Kilowog is a space cop?
 
Chapter 6 was all over the place. I seemed extremely contrived. The suicide talk came out of no where and there was no indication that the story was leading towards that until people started acting wildly out of character, even when we were privy to their inner thoughts.

I seemed forced, over-dramatic, and was an extremely jarring change in tone. no build up, no breaks between scenes. They suddenly appeared elsewhere without much narration to make the transition seem natural.
 
Chapter 6 was all over the place. I seemed extremely contrived. The suicide talk came out of no where and there was no indication that the story was leading towards that until people started acting wildly out of character, even when we were privy to their inner thoughts.

I seemed forced, over-dramatic, and was an extremely jarring change in tone. no build up, no breaks between scenes. They suddenly appeared elsewhere without much narration to make the transition seem natural.

It was no suicide, Supergirl just doesn't know about Zack's deal and just assumed the worst and yes I just wanted the 'breakdown' to be a surprise as it just come out of nowhere, Zack was putting a mask since the beginning and the out of chharacter...I'm just nor really good with it.

Also english isn't my first language so my errors come from it
 
When re-reading this, the WAKFU aesthetic and clothing just doesn't fit in this world at all. The powers are okay, but picturing it next to the others seems silly.
 
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