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[X] Kosmos

The fact of the mater is, I honestly think we should have found Sam. Would have probably given us deathbed dialog. Now what happened to Sam will be a dangling plot thread, we got our exposition in a more awkward and inappropriate spot while also having lots of character development and dialog in the middle of a fight. We are dropping below SAO writing quality and approaching Asterisk Wars territory. This is not a good place to be people.
 
[X] Kosmos

Cause with all that is going on we are probably going to scream, "What's going on!" Sooner or later. It's inevitable if we are sane. Life earlier was just ordinary after all.
 
I will update when I get back tonight in the mean time can someone roll a d100?

Vote is still open this is just a contigency.
 
Whiteeyes said:
[X] Kosmos

The fact of the mater is, I honestly think we should have found Sam. Would have probably given us deathbed dialog. Now what happened to Sam will be a dangling plot thread, we got our exposition in a more awkward and inappropriate spot while also having lots of character development and dialog in the middle of a fight. We are dropping below SAO writing quality and approaching Asterisk Wars territory. This is not a good place to be people.
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I think it says alot about our character that his first thought was rushing home to make sure his sister was okay rather than pursuing the shiny plot token. Keep in mind that our protagonist isn't unsatisfied with his life in the slightest; he was thrown into this situation after a series of unforeseeable circumstances. He has nothing to gain, and everything to lose.

The way I see it, this is going be what Orson Scott Card describes as an event story. An event story starts with a disruption of a harmonic and idyllic order -- the world the protagonist lives in starts to crumble. Over the main plot thread the main character ventures into the crumbling world and tries to restore order.

The event story ends when everything is returned to its natural order (e.g. RWBY (presumably), Legend of Zelda, Lord of the Rings, Star Wars Original Trilogy), a new order is imposed by the protagonist (e.g. Rebellion Story from Homura's perspective, OFF, Code Geass, Caesar's Commentaries on the Gallic War), or the story is a tragedy where everything dissolves into chaos no matter the efforts of the protagonist (e.g. Rebellion Story from Sayaka's perspective, Oedipus, Moby Dick, Spec-Ops the Line).

Jeboboid said:
Sure

Edit: I hope a high roll is good :p
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It's for how far we'll fly when Eris slaps us again when we start badgering her. :(
 
Kosmos said:
I think it says alot about our character that his first thought was rushing home to make sure his sister was okay rather than pursuing the shiny plot token. Keep in mind that our protagonist isn't unsatisfied with his life in the slightest; he was thrown into this situation after a series of unforeseeable circumstances. He has nothing to gain, and everything to lose.

The way I see it, this is going be what Orson Scott Card describes as an event story. An event story starts with a disruption of a harmonic and idyllic order -- the world the protagonist lives in starts to crumble. Over the main plot thread the main character ventures into the crumbling world and tries to restore order.

The event story ends when everything is returned to its natural order (e.g. RWBY (presumably), Legend of Zelda, Lord of the Rings, Star Wars Original Trilogy), a new order is imposed by the protagonist (e.g. Rebellion Story from Homura's perspective, OFF, Code Geass, Caesar's Commentaries on the Gallic War), or the story is a tragedy where everything dissolves into chaos no matter the efforts of the protagonist (e.g. Rebellion Story from Sayaka's perspective, Oedipus, Moby Dick, Spec-Ops the Line).


It's for how far we'll fly when Eris slaps us again when we start badgering her. :(
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Huh, this makes me feel exteremly flattered and unworthy at the same time.

TBH, there are some plot elements I had pre planned, and but mid-writing I realized that some of them were unsatisfactory so they were redone. For example, Sam originally was suppose to give you a bigger hint, but I could not think of a good place to insert it without making it feel tacked on.

Yes, let me drop exposition whole a giant doom snake is blowing up this place instead of straight ensuring you can survive. Even after that, I didn't really like dropping the exposition dump while a giant doom snake was flying around.

I suppose all writers have this problem, figuring out where to drop exposition. You could argue now is not the best time too.

But yes, a lot of this is going to be me figuring it out as we go along.

As the story continues along, I hope I can meet your expectations.
 
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    • ...Wow have I really been putting this off for more than 34 days. Sorry, guys. This part didn't come out as well as I liked or even on time.

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    "WAIT. I HAVE SO MANY QUESTIONS." You are freaking confused,"What the hell is going on? Why are two suns and a moon in the sky? Why are there winged serpents ripping up everything? What the hell are these powers?"

    "Eh, you don't know? Shouldn't the student council have explained everything?" Eris interjects

    "I never went to the student council," you reply

    Shiki's face darkened for just a moment as she withdraws her scythe for a moment. The blade sinks into her shadow and disappears. "Where did you get your powers from big brother?"

    "I met a guy named Sam today. He did something... Wait a minute, where did you guys get this power from? How long have you had this thing Shiki?"

    "I got it from Mom and Dad," Shiki continues, "I've had it for.... Actually, I don't remember. Mom and dad awoke my Share pretty early on. "

    "Eeeeeh, normally Fantasia monitors that sort of thing. Why don't you guys....."

    "We don't deal with the head magic organization, Fantasia, nor do we deal with their branch in the Student Council," Shiki cuts Eris off. Shiki withdraws her scythe from the shadow, "You're their dog aren't you? I knew...."

    "Wait. Wait. I still have questions," you are still so confused on what is going on, "What are these powers?"

    "Eh, the explanation is a bit long, so here are the basics. Think of this as a type of magic. Everyone has a set of magics related to their theme. As they age and get more comfortable with their theme, their theme expands to includes more powers. Eris has a fire theme, so all of her abilities relate to fire, but as she grows and develops as a person and with her powers, it may expand to be a heat theme allowing both cooling and fire. Mine is currently a nullification theme. It might grow to be an erasure theme depending on the decisions I make."

    "So what is my theme?" you ask.

    "Honda, you have to figure that out yourself," Eris interrupts, "Anyway only you can know yourself the best right, so only you can know what your theme is."

    "Fair enough, but is it that complicated? I would appreciate some explanations."

    "Ehhhhh, it's all a complex mess to me. My teachers tried explaining it, but it goes through one ear and comes out the other. Something about reality being another form of dream/fantasy or something," Eris nervously scratches the back of her head.

    "Ok, how about the winged serpents? What is up with that? I mean why are their two suns and a moon in the sky?"

    "Big brother, somebody angered a god. All gods exist in a way, but they can't really descend" She points straight at Eris. "Which is why I believe it is her. The same day that she comes back to this town, Quetzalcoatl decides to rampage around here. Coincidence, I think not?"

    "Ehhhhh, what are you going on about?"

    "Hmm, speaking of which, I felt this strange compulsion the both times I've met Eris today. First time, I wanted to hug her. Second time, suddenly without thinking I told her I loved her. Sis, is this what you meant by brainwashing? Is this one of her powers? Do you think my memory has been tampered with?" Eris has ..... lots of sides you didn't know about him...her. Maybe, there is some brainwashing involved?

    "Ehhhhhhhhh," Eris's face turns beat red. Shiki's face is ???. You actually aren't certain what that face means. Expressionless?

    "Yes" Your sister's face is... Twitching? You can't quite tell why, or what it is suppose to be doing.

    Eris is just rolling her own face in her hands talking in a very soft voice, "I ... don't have brainwashing powers. My theme is based on fire... If you are feeling that way.... ANYWAY, IT DOESN'T MATTER. MOVING ON"

    BRING BRING, it is Eris's phone this time. She pops it open.

    A voice burst straight out of the phone so loud even you can hear it, "WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU? WE ARE SERIOUSLY IN TROUBLE GUARDING THIS SCHOOL. WE NEED YOU HERE NOW."

    "Eh, sorry, I got sidetrack rescuing a few friends."

    "Well bring them over. The school is the best fortified place for now." the phone cuts off for a second. You can make out something hissing in the background, "God damn it, just get over here."

    Eris looks at you one last time, "I have to go. Please, I can assure you the school is the best place to wait out this disaster. You should come with me. I can answer any questions on the way. I ... I am sorry about this morning. It is just that you meant a lot to me, and when you didn't remember... I... I have a lot of trouble expressing myself, but... Just please. I don't want to see anything hurt you. "

    "Big brother, Don't believe her. This could be a trap. I know of another place we can wait it out."

    []Walk and talk with Eris.
    []Follow your sister.
     
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