Blake... maybe an enforcer for the local Triad equivalent, or possibly having already defected, becoming a cop or something.
Well, it looks like Blake's working as a informant for Qrow.
I wonder how much of canon is a thing here tho.
Cant see mentions of faunus, aura or Grimm...

Qrow said he and his photo team were in a school, and the city/neighbourhood is 'Beacon' instead of Vale. So that seems to rule out hunters and Grimm being a thing here...
 
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Five lien says they brought Pyrrha on board to bodyguard Jaune. And that Jaune is the male equivalent of a mafia princess here.

Which leaves me wondering where Blake and Weiss are. I can see Weiss as another mafia princess type, for the Schnee Syndicate. Or as something closer to canon, as the daughter of a corrupt businessman.

Blake... maybe an enforcer for the local Triad equivalent, or possibly having already defected, becoming a cop or something.
Phyrra was hired to guard Qrow. At this point in time, Jaune is unaffiliated with the Crew (This particular snippet is about 5 years after Qrow finds Yang and Ruby).

Well, it looks like Blake's working as a informant for Qrow.
I wonder how much of canon is a thing here tho.
Cant see mentions of faunus, aura or Grimm...

Qrow said he and his photo team were in a school, and the city/neighbourhood is 'Beacon' instead of Vale. So that seems to rule out hunters and Grimm being a thing here...
Aura, Grimm, and Hunters are not things, correct. Beacon is a major city within the greater Kingdom of Vale.
Blake is going to go through a bit of an arc before she's in a position for Operation Last Dance. Faunus do exist, and as for their situation? Well, let's just say that there was no Faunus War.
 
Chapter 3
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Blake Belladonna was getting nervous. This was a perfectly rational response, given that she had recently murdered a man and the client was overdue with the half on delivery. It was enough to make one's ears twitch, which really wasn't a good reaction when you kept them hidden under a beanie. She looked around the little hole-in-the-wall Mistralan place she'd been directed to. The message sent to her burner scroll had been clear, second booth from the back, away from the kitchens. Just as she started to make another sweep of the place, she felt a sharp pain in her seat.

[Dust! Stupid cheap seats. Where.. are th.. pretty colors..] Panicking, she got up and tried to run for the exit. She made it two steps before crashing to the ground, blissfully unconscious.



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The first thing she felt upon waking up was the cool air against her ears. [Oh, Dust. Alright, status check]. Self first. [Beanie gone, other clothes seem intact. Mixed news.] A slow, deliberate wriggle. [Securely bound to a chair, arms and legs. Not good. Nothing on my neck or ears, so I haven't been tagged or collared. Not bad. Something.. no, two somethings on my chest. Can't tell what they are.]Surroundings second. [A/C unit, must be inside. Can't hear any outside noise, so I'm either deep inside or high up. Or even outside of the city entirely. One other person, regular grunting, exercising? Not much to smell. Floor cleaner, sweat, some antiseptic, expensive per-]

"Oh would you stop faking it? I know you're awake." A voice rang through the room. Female, young. Strident, the voice of someone used to being obeyed. Reluctantly, Blake opened her eyes. The young woman glaring at her could best be summed up as _white_. White hair, white dress, white jacket. The only things not white were her eyes (a pale, frost blue) and the gunmetal gray rapier pointed between her eyes. Blake gulped. She'd seen that face before. The face of Weiss Schnee wasn't unavoidable in Beacon, but only just. The lounge-singing mascot of the Schnee Charitable Trust could be guaranteed to make the media rounds whenever unfavorable news broke about Schnee Industrial Consolidated. Oh, and the underground made it perfectly clear that she was at least Made in the Syndicate. All in all, not someone Blake wanted to be known by. While the Schnees did draw the line at keeping faunus pets, they were in close circles with some that did. And even with that exception, it was acknowledged that they were truly terrible to their faunus employees. And Blake had just taken 5 million lien to kill one of their board members while he slept.

It had been such a perfect job, too. Security hadn't been very tight, and it wasn't much trouble for her to sneak into his room. A lit cigar, some spilled brandy (with just a dash of pure grain alcohol) and a drained smoke detector made it look like an accident. Not to mention word in faunus circles was that he was shopping for a faunus pet. Getting paid to kill him had been a dream come true. A dream that was rapidly becoming a nightmare.

"How did you know I was awake?" Blake asked, stalling for time. Weiss flicked the rapier to Blake's left, then re-centered it. A look down revealed two wires coming out of Blake's sleeve, leading into a machine. As soon as she woke up, her heart rate must have spiked, triggering an alert. She turned her head back to meet the heiress's gaze. "How did you catch me?"

A smirk. "We trapped your seat. As soon as- Oh, hello Winter. She's awake" Weiss turned to greet the new arrival. Blake's heart fell even further. The woman in the white suit and pale blue blouse could only be Winter Schnee. The elder daughter of Wolfgang Schnee officially held the post of President of SIC, and was known to be underboss of the Syndicate. "As I was saying, our agent in the restaurant booby-trapped the booth we told you to sit at. As soon as the retrieval team was in position, he triggered it. Spring-loaded needle filled with a fast-acting sedative."

Blake silently processed this. That was some effort they had gone to. "Why me? Why... wait a minute, the booth you told me to sit at? YOU hired me to kill Nils Gul? Why?

Weiss looked at her sister. "Told you she'd figure it out. Might as well tell her about the plan she ruined."

Winter smiled. "It was a good plan, sister. Not her fault she didn't know her part. To be blunt, Belladonna, you were supposed to die." Blake was too shocked to even protest. "A faunus would attack and kill Nils Gul. Said faunus would be gunned down by his security force before she could make her escape. Any investigation would assume that this was merely a case of a faunus with nothing to lose taking out a sterling example of anti-faunus bigotry. The Syndicate would be in the clear, and some of our more vocal bigots would be encouraged to close their mouths from time to time.

"But you had to go and be sneaky. Burned to death in his sleep does not send a message. So as for why we brought you here, Belladonna, you're here to answer a question. What should we do with you?"

Blake thought fast. It was obvious that the wrong answer would lead to her death. Indeed, it was a wonder she'd been allowed to wake up at all, unless the Schnee sisters were closet sadists. But what to say? A thought occurred to her. [Sometimes, the only way out is through. And what's the worst that could happen?] "Well, to start you can give me the rest of my fee."

Weiss was the first to crack. Just a smile, but enough to give Blake hope. She continued "I mean, the contract was to kill Nils Gul. Like you said, it wasn't my fault I didn't know the real plan. I..." some pieces fell into place. "You said, convince the bigots to shut up. Why...?"

The smile turned pensive, analyzing. A half turn, an eyebrow raise, a nod from Winter. "Because it's bad for business. Every time one of them opens their mouth, that's millions of Lien out the door, just from the money the Trust has to throw into faunus programs to kill the news cycle. Do you know how much Nils cost the SCT during his tenure?" Blake shook her head. "Over a billion lien." Blake goggled at the thought "And guess where that money had to come from? Schnee Industrial and the Syndicate. He, and the others like him, have made the Trust the Single. Biggest. Contributor to faunus charities and programs, and then they complain why _billions_ are going out the door to subsidize those animals."

Blake frowned internally. Not the most promising attitude, but... "Then that's the other reason to keep me alive. I can be the message." Winter's eyes narrowed as she beckoned Blake to continue. "That type is more afraid of backing down than getting killed. If they think that their lives are in danger for what they're saying, they'll say it twice as loud and surround themselves with security. Any one of them who dies becomes a martyr to bigotry. So, you have to hit them from the flank. And keep up your PR campaign. I can help with both."

"How?" Winter asked.

Blake turned to Weiss. "By becoming your new best friend"

Both sisters stared flatly at the cat faunus. "Go on" Weiss said.

Blake took a deep breath. "Well, just to get the obvious out of the way, it'd make a splash. A daughter of Wolfgang Schnee spending time with a faunus? All people would talk about for weeks. Then, there are the loudmouths. It almost works better if they know it's a PR stunt. If that's the lengths that need to be gone to... well, money's money, but pride is pride. The faunus community will be wary at first. Probably be some parts of the slums I shouldn't walk through during all this. But give it a few months, and if we don't screw it up, they'll start believing it. Won't do much to improve their views of Wolfgang, but the next generation... It'll give us hope. And that's something we desperately need." A pause. "And unless you're constantly giving me jobs, I can promise you I'll cost less than a billion lien."

"Weiss. Outside." Winter commanded. The younger Schnee wasn't happy, but she complied. As the door closed, Winter spoke again. "You know what you're signing up for?"

"Having my people call me a race traitor? Putting myself in the line of fire of everyone who considers the Schnees to be the heroes of humanity, keeping the beasts in their place?" Blake shrugged. "You say that like I wasn't dead the minute I sat down in that restaurant. And it's not like I haven't been through worse. Try growing up on the streets as a faunus."

"Not what I was talking about, though it's good to hear. No, I meant you'll have to be civil to my father."

[Damn, she's right] "Then it's a good thing we haven't decided what my fee will be."

Winter gave a low chuckle. "Brazen one, you are." She pulled out her scroll, fiddling with it for a minute. "Alright. After we're done here, you'll make your way to the Wilhelm Schnee Shelter. Weiss will touring it in about a week with a small media crew. During the visit, she'll pull you aside for a personal conversation. During that conversation, you will reveal your ears. Try and look shy while you're doing it. From there, we'll see how it goes and adjust as needed. Sound like a plan?"

"Good for a start, at least."

"Excellent. Oh, and Blake?"

"Yes?"

"My sister has never had a real friend. So, if the act starts becoming real? Don't fight it."

Blake was stunned. Definitely not what she expected. But... "I won't. Fight it, that is. Or fake the real thing, for that matter."

Winter's face softened. "Excellent. And one more thing. If my sister comes to harm over any of this, physical or otherwise.."

"I'm a dead cat walking?"

Her face hardened again. "No, death will be too quick. Instead, I'll be showing off my new Broken cat. Are we understood?"

Blake paled. "Completely understood, ma'am." She'd carry through, was the scariest thing.

"Wonderful." The happy Winter was back. "I'll send Weiss in so you two can start working on your script. I look forward to a long and profitable relationship, Ms. Belladonna.
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A/N: Not a whole lot to say this time. Was able to get some serious work done over the weekend. Chapter 4 will be coming Soon®
 
He, and the others like him, have made the Trust the Single. Biggest. Contributor to faunus charities and programs, and then they complain why _billions_ are going out the door to subsidize those animals.

It's kinda sad that this is exactly the reason why I'd see RL corporations doing the same thing. Not because they thinking [Insert marginalized group here] deserve to be treated better but because dealing with the bad PR is unacceptably expense.

I do like how Blake instantly caught onto the reasoning the Schnees were using and turned it to her advantage in order to not only get out of this situation alive but secure herself a cushy paycheck and relatively comfortable, if isolated, life.
 
Damn, this is good.

Really like how Blake got out of a death threat, turned her situation to her advantage, got released, and got paid.
Step 1: make them laugh
Step 2: find out what they want
Step 3: find a way for you to give them what they want, that needs you to be not dead/imprisoned at the end of it
Step 4: get them to pay you for doing the way you found step 3
 
Only thing scarier than an amoral Syndicate boss is an amoral Syndicate boss with a little sister and a protective streak a mile long.

That Faunus can apparently be... pets here is... very disturbing.

Also, I'm amused at Blake being such a smooth talker. Normally don't peg her as much of a talker/negotiator type, but she's undeniably great at thinking on her feet, and this played to that full-tilt.
 
Only thing scarier than an amoral Syndicate boss is an amoral Syndicate boss with a little sister and a protective streak a mile long.
How about a gang boss who just refound his nieces? :)
That Faunus can apparently be... pets here is... very disturbing.
Eeyup. I'm planning a World of Remnant-style interlude chapter about it, largely because I can not think of a way to seamlessly exposit it.
Also, I'm amused at Blake being such a smooth talker. Normally don't peg her as much of a talker/negotiator type, but she's undeniably great at thinking on her feet, and this played to that full-tilt.
Blake's general use in high-stakes negotiations will be more along the lines of being an equipment bonus, a la "we can have you killed and no one will know it's murder". She only really gets talky when her life is on the line.
 
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There is just something about this story that has made me read it over and over again. Thank you very much for writing it.
 
WotG 1
World of the Ganglands

Faunus Pets

The (First) Faunus Intelligence Act in the Kingdom of Vale (and similar acts passed in other kingdoms) were once hailed as a great step towards faunus equality. While they did set into law the practice of treating faunus as little more than intelligent beasts of burden, these laws did restrict the practice to those faunus who were not able to prove their humanity. Follow-on acts throughout the coming decades would first codify, then continuously relax the tests to prove the humanity of a given faunus. In the modern day, these benchmarks are sufficiently low that the vast majority of the faunus population is above them; the institution itself remains frustratingly intact.

The first obstacle that the prospective faunus owner must clear, then, is finding a faunus who is sufficiently animalistic as to legally lose their humanity. This is easier than one might expect, if still rather difficult. While generally illegal, operations known as faunus ranches specialize in producing faunus who can be made pets. The majority of pet faunus fall into one of two categories: Feral, and Broken.

A Feral faunus is normally taken by a ranch at a very young age, rarely past 3-4 years old. Within the ranch, the entire environment, from diet on up, is shaped to encourage development to within the guidelines. Many established ranches use older Ferals to raise the product, thus minimizing human interaction outside of dedicated training. A Feral is generally considered to be ready for sale in their early-to-mid teens, where they can expected to fetch price tags in the millions of lien and up.

A Broken faunus, by contrast, grows up human. The target of choice is teenaged and living on the street. They are then captured, and a specialized ranch will retrain them for their new life. The re-training process is brutal, involving any number of methods, physical, psychological, emotional, even surgical to make the victims unlearn their human behaviors, . While training a Feral is considered to be legal grey area (with the right paperwork, a ranch just looks like a below-standards faunus orphanage), training a Broken is unquestionably illegal. Among connoisseurs, Breaking a faunus is like blackjack; the goal is to get right up to the point of erasing all humanity without going over. The true joy of owning a Broken, in their opinion, is watching the shame and rage in the faunus's eyes as they obey every command thrown at them. A typical Broken fetches a price tag in the hundreds of millions of lien, with particularly high-quality examples commanding whatever price the seller wants.

The last stage of the process for any faunus pet is evaluation, where their animal status is confirmed. The tests measure not intelligence, so much as general mental capability. The speech portion, for example, doesn't test knowledge of English so much as the ability to communicate complex thoughts verbally. A Feral will fail this section through a combination of not having much in the way of complex thoughts to begin with and never having been taught verbal communication beyond simple vocalizations. A Broken will fail this portion by dint of having been trained that speaking anything more complex than vocalizations will only end in pain (and occasionally some discreet surgery to the vocal cords). After having failed the tests, the (now legally an animal) faunus is fixed and microchipped, and will soon find their way onto the market.

Many faunus ranches and sellers operate in conjunction with, or even part of, a larger criminal enterprise. In Beacon, the majority of these find themselves sponsored by the Syndicate, with the rest picked up by various smaller groups. Those who find themselves operating in Corvus Crew territory are soon to go out of business, from crushing protection fees as much as anything else.

A/N: I figured this was as good a place as any to put this, given what the last chapter was. Basically, the kind of person who would own a faunus pet is the same kind of person who would go on safari to hunt endangered species, with Broken being the province of those who then have their kills stuffed and mounted. They're as much a status symbol as a tool for compensation. And if you're disgusted by this? Good. I'm a little disgusted I thought of it.
 
Basically, the kind of person who would own a faunus pet is the same kind of person who would go on safari to hunt endangered species, with Broken being the province of those who then have their kills stuffed and mounted.
... I think you are somewhat understating the severity of this. A more apt comparison would be the kind of people willing to run concentration camps and own and mutilate slaves (because, you know... that's exactly what they're doing). Hunting endangered species is bad and all, but it kinda falls short of "literally Hitler".
 
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... I think you are somewhat understating the severity of this. A more apt comparison would be the kind of people willing to run concentration camps and own and mutilate slaves (because, you know... that's exactly what they're doing). Hunting endangered species is bad and all, but it kinda falls short of "literally Hitler".
And depending on the species in question may have net positive results. After all it's why the elder rhinos are hunted because they are too old to mate but are still strong enough to kill and drive off young males who could breed new rhinos.
 
... I think you are somewhat understating the severity of this. A more apt comparison would be the kind of people willing to run concentration camps and own and mutilate slaves (because, you know... that's exactly what they're doing). Hunting endangered species is bad and all, but it kinda falls short of "literally Hitler".
Yes and no.
Yes, these people are monsters. Yes, on Earth these kinds of people got firing squads and life sentences. My note was not meant to be a statement of the relative objective morality of the practice.
Subjectively, that's about the level of evil it is viewed as. The culture is what it is. Go back not all that far in the grand scheme of things and you read about central Africa being full of savages who must be civilized via machine gun. Or to use a more related example, eugenics didn't get a bad name until it was used to justify a genocide. In this case, many of these individuals are raised against a cultural background that sees faunus as simply lesser. Except the ones who clear the bar, they're human, just different. Other. Yes, there's a horrible amount of doublethink involved in all of this, but that's they way it's seen.
And depending on the species in question may have net positive results. After all it's why the elder rhinos are hunted because they are too old to mate but are still strong enough to kill and drive off young males who could breed new rhinos.
That's wildlife management. Whole other kettle of fish.
 
Ah, misunderstood what you were saying, then. Didn't realize you meant it's how it's viewed in-story.
Probably could have it phrased it more clearly on my part. But yes, that is the in-story view of it; distasteful to many, but only really worth getting worked up for a few. Which among other things makes the White Fang a rough equivalent to PETA. Which I feel is offensive to the White Fang.
I'll file it under "constructive criticism" "discussion-provoking" and "are you sure you're alright in the head?" None of which need to be apologized for. I'll accept it in the spirit it was intended, however.
 
Sorry for the radio silence, all, but work has been kind of kicking my ass all week. And my roommate had to get me to start up Bloodborne again. I'll try to get something up by the end of the weekend, though. Something happier, hopefully.
 
Sorry for the radio silence, all, but work has been kind of kicking my ass all week. And my roommate had to get me to start up Bloodborne again. I'll try to get something up by the end of the weekend, though. Something happier, hopefully.

With Bloodborne as inspiration, I am almost afraid to see the results.

Almost.
 
Whelp, I'm watching the fuck outta this. When do the interludes take place in comparisson to the rest of the fic?
 
Whelp, I'm watching the fuck outta this. When do the interludes take place in comparisson to the rest of the fic?
Rough timeline(dates subject to change as needed)
-The majority of the prologue and Chapter 2 take place in the same couple of days.
-Chapter 3 and Interlude 1 take place around the same time, roughly 5 years after the prologue.
-Chapter 1 and the end of the prologue take place an additional 3 years after Chapter 3/Interlude 1.
 
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The girl seemed to wilt under his gaze. "T-talk about what, Uncle Qrow?"

Qrow snorted. "Your sister, Yang. What's wrong with her?" Seeing her start to panic, he gently raised his hand "I'm not saying it's your fault, kiddo. But I am saying that I need to know what's wrong with if I'm going to help her." That calmed her down, though she still had trouble meeting his gaze.

"How did you know?" Yang asked, her voice soft.

"Some little things. Little tics that shone through. Her relative silence. But mostly, those eyes. I've seen them before, and not on Summer. So spill. When did it start?"

Yang slumped down and let herself be guided back to the couch. "It.. it was about six months or so ago. Early spring, so the nights were still pretty cold. We had a nest, a really good one tucked back in some alley behind a coffee shop. A sturdy carton, a tarp, good thick sleeping bag, blankets. The shopkeeper even liked us. He'd set out a cocoa on his back porch in the mornings... Well, I'm sure it doesn't sound like much, but it meant the world to us. Then, one day we saw him arguing with some people we hadn't seen before, and one of them pulled a gun on him. We ran after that. Come back later, and find the nest was burned down. Nothing left but ash.

"Well, we got out of there as fast as we could. Spent a few very uncomfortable nights huddling close to each other for warmth under whatever shelter we could find. And Ruby.. just kind of shut down. I mean, I practically had to tell her when to go to the bathroom. At first, I wasn't too concerned. You didn't talk much if you didn't know where you were gonna spend the night. But even after we made a new nest, she still didn't talk. Oh, she'd answer you if you talked to her. She just... never started talking. Didn't talk, didn't smile, didn't anything. I even took a day's collection and got her a couple of really good cookies, and no reaction. She ate them, but... before, that would have had her chattering and beaming all night! When she got sick, I knew it was bad because she told me it hurt. Out of the blue."

[Hmm... sounds like the shop got turned into a front.] "Do you remember the name of the coffee shop?" Qrow asked. Her pause prompted an ugly thought. "Actually, while I'm thinking about it, can you and Ruby read?

Yang flushed. "Yeah, it was called Black Dust.. I'm sure there was more, but all I ever heard was Black Dust. We... weren't exactly welcome inside. And kinda? We learned back at the Home, but..."

Qrow nodded. "But there are too many children and not enough time to make a real job of it. Even when they actually care. And not a lot of books on the street."

Yang curled into herself. "I mean, I can put the words together and all, but it just takes a while. And Ruby's not too much worse than me..." She flushed again, tucking her head in.

Qrow put his hand on her back. "You know I'm not mad, right? Or even disappointed in you two."

A muffled "I know" came out of the ball, then Yang's head came out, looking thoroughly unconvinced.

"I'm serious, kiddo. So you're a few years behind in the books. You think I'm gonna throw you out on your ear?" A pause, then a slow shake of the head. "Good. So we've got some work to do, but I think it can wait until later. And as for Ruby?" She turns, meeting his eyes for the first time all conversation. "I think she's only a little broken. And I know that's a terrible thing to be good news, but there it is. I'm not saying she'll ever go fully back to who she was, but she'll come back. All I need from you, is to keep being her sister. She needs you, more than she ever has before. Can you do that?" A determined nod, with just a hint of a smile. "Good. I put her back in bed, and I don't think she should wake up alone. And you still look like you've got a few months of sleep debt to catch up on, so get." A smile softened the command.

Yang got up and started walking back, pausing at the doorway. "You really think we can fix her?"

"I know we're damn well gonna try, Yang."

As she walked back to her room, Qrow pulled out his scroll, hitting one of the speed-dial numbers. Two rings later it picked up. "Arc."

"Noire, it's Qrow. I need confirmation on a probable front. Coffee shop, name of Black Dust something-or-other."

There's silence on the line for a few seconds. Then, "Got it. Black Dust Beanery. Word on the street is Harvest shook the old man down, made him sign it over."

"Tell Adel, Azul and Gurin to get prepped. I want to send Harvest a message in 48 hours."

A longer, warier pause. "What kind of message, Q?"

"Payment, For Services Rendered."
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A/N: Well, here it is. I intended to have this chapter out in one go, but I also intended to hit my deadline. So you're getting this chapter in 3 parts. Hardest part of writing this? settling on a perspective. I have a draft (that will NEVER see the light of day) that switches PoV 4 times.
 
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"Stop twitching, Velv" Coco said. "Your nose is going a mile a minute." The rabbit faunus across from her snorted. "Besides, it was this or another evening 'taking dictation' at Humanis Policlub."

"At least I know what I'm doing there. I've never done this before." Velvet replied.

Coco frowned. "You've ridden along on these missions before."

Velvet gave her a look. "Never on a For Services Rendered, Coco. That's kind of a thing."

Coco rolled her eyes. "It's the same thing we always do, Vel. Lug my spares, and if anyone gets close just give them a good kick." The last line delivered with a smirk.

"Try and go easy on the racist jokes around my parents, okay? Mom might hear the affection, but Daddy will probably try to kill you."

"Yeah, yeah". Two thumps echoed through the forward wall of the van. Coco answered with one of her own, then keyed her radio. "This is Brown. Two mikes out."

Her radio squawked. "Blue, two mikes" That was Azul, no last name given.

"Green, two mikes" Midori Gurin reported in. The three teams would be arriving on schedule. Good.

A male voice came over the net. "Black copies all. Good hunting." Shit, Qrow was taking a personal interest in this one. Well, it was an FSR. Earning a For Services Rendered meant that you seriously pissed off the Crew and lived to tell about it, with the second half about to be corrected. The only mystery on this one was precisely what Harvest had done.

Coco turned her attention back to her team. Velvet really did look nervous, fiddling with her (cleared) SMG. Yatsuhashi shrugged, performing one last check of his automatic shotgun before closing his eyes and centering himself. Fox slid his hands into a pair of gloves covered in far too many blades and checked his knives, all the while clicking in the back of his throat. His echolocation didn't quite make up for his lack of eyesight, but it was still a valuable edge. Nodding, she looked over her LMG one more time. If everything went perfectly, no one on her squad would have to engage. More likely, she'd be the only one.

The van stopped, the engine quieting down to a barely audible murmur. With a nod, her team got up and out the back door. Quickly, they made their way to the destination; the roof of a low building across the street from the Harvest den. While Yatsuhashi and Fox covered the door and fire escape, Coco and Velvet set up, the belt-fed weapon ready to hit anybody who escaped the den. Below, she could see Green and Blue get to work.

Every way out was covered. Doors were chained and epoxied shut. Windows were booby-trapped with claymores and flash bangs. Intelligence suggested that about half of the serious members and most of their on-hand supplies were to be found in this building right now. Shame nothing would survive.

A series of double clicks came over the radio as the teams signaled their readiness. Then,
Then, "Burn" Qrow commanded.

Jacques wasn't stupid. When word had come through the grapevine that the Crew was gunning for Harvest, he'd holed up at The Barn. Him and half his buddies. With the amount of guns and ammo stocked here, they'd be able to fight off any assault. Or so the bosses kept repeating. When they weren't pacing back and forth.

The first sign that things had gone sideways was the fire alarms blaring. A noise followed shortly by the wave of smoke pouring out from downstairs. Jacques ran. Between the junk and the concrete, any jump from the second floor was gonna hurt, hard. Downstairs had to be safer.

It wasn't. The fires were burning hot, hotter than anything he'd felt before. The smoke was oddly thick, stinging his eyes and lungs as her lurched for the door. Stuck. He heard a great boom and saw the remains of the guy who tried to escape through the window fall back. Desperate, he dove through the open window. He was congratulating himself on his lucky escape, when the burst of gunfire cut him down.

Coco leaned off of the gun. With the fire having consumed the entire lower floor, nobody else was getting out. She triggered her radio again. "Blue and Green, set the tags. We'll call it in. Meet up back at the ranch." Below her, the neighbouring buildings were tagged with the bird-of-prey silouhette that was the Crew's sign and the letters "FSR". When the last sigil was placed, she nodded at Velvet, who pulled out a burner Scroll and hit the emergency button.

"Help! There's a fire at South 23rd and West 15th! Hurry!" She chucked the Scroll into the inferno, then the team packed up and retreated to the van. Message delivered.
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A/N: Not much to say. Turns out even probably shitty action scenes are harder to write than envision. Still, here it is. 4.3 ought to be up by the end of the weekend.

EDIT: Now with some (hopefully) better content!
 
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Turns out even probably shitty action scenes
It could use a bit of work. If you're interested in suggestions then I have one.

Action scenes are all about dynamism. It should feel, not rushed exactly, but quick. It often helps for there to be a clear moment when it starts. Something that forces the reader to "take a breath." A moment of silence before the explosion. This can be accomplished in a number of ways, pov change, setting change, etc. What this moment does is allow a bit of apprehension to build. It also makes the sudden burst of violence or action that much more poignant. After the scene is much the same as before. For almost all action scenes there should be a definite end to immediate conflict. This allows the reader to once again take a breath whilst emphasizing the short/lengthy and brutal nature of the scene or, depending on it's significance to the plot, the consequences of the actions just taken.

For this scene perhaps consider writing a section in the middle from the perspective of a Harvest member(inventing a disposable nobody for this is recommended) inside the building. Writ the attack from his perspective and have him get into a state of bleeding out or dying and have the last thing he hears be Coco's voice on the scroll even as the flames consume the building. Then have it switch back to Coco's Pov as the van pulls away. That way we get to see coco, the character we're actually interested in, during the most interesting moments of the snip whilst keeping the action important and providing some much needed variety.
 
GhanjRho, you put a lot of thought in worldbuilding (or at least i really looks so) has Qrow ever had communication issues related to mafiaspeak?

"Well deserved vacations"
"Sudden buisness trip"
"Friendly greeting"
"Little reminder"
"Deliver a package"
"Take to dinner"

Like "Boss when you say 'escort' do you mean as in 'bag in head, beatdown, and trunk'; or 'doorbel, greeting and backseat'?"

... I can se Ruby needing a partner to know if she has to use the good meaning or the bad meaning...

EDIT: Just thought... the have an acronym for the code of "Shoot a guy in revenge". They have a code for this stuff.

Do they have a little book or a brochure that says which slang means what?

"Welcome to the family, here's the code," hadles a folded pamphlet that reads 'Every phrase you need to know if you will carry a weapon' "please memorize it or carry it in your person for quick reference, you have no idea how many times we were this close... because of how ambiguous can a sentence be in this line of work".
 
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@ReadsByLamplight
Ooh, that has potential. Definitely worth thought. And I'm always open to suggestions.

@Don_taco
I'm glad to see my world-building effort is coming through; I've always believed that a good story needs a good world to take place in. As a rule, Qrow's questionable sobriety and general lack of fucks to give (though when he gives them, he gives all of them) mean that he rarely uses euphemisms while giving orders. That said, his lieutenants are given discretion to interpret his orders as they need to for the job; Coco was ordered to "escort" Phyrra to the club. She chose to offer the backseat option while keeping the trunk open, as it were.
As for Ruby, well...
It can almost be like flipping a coin. Her character motivations are complex, sufficiently so that I'm not sure I'll ever write a segment from her PoV. Yang can usually be counted on to know when taking someone to dinner involves a baseball bat, though.
 
Qrow: How are you feeling, kid?

Ruby: ...

Inner!Ruby: (I'm tired, hungry, suspicious that you're going to molest me, suspicious that you're going to molest Yang, your couch is ugly, you smell like booze, you kill people for a living but dress it up in euphemisms, your taste in apartment decoration is puerile, your taste in alcohol puts winos to shame, and your breath is enough to kill most Grimm.)

Qrow: I'm just... gonna leave this box of cookies over here. If you want some, that's fine.

Ruby: ... *tiniest nod*

Inner!Ruby: (I'm rethinking my plans to punch you in the dick every time you're in dick-punching range. You may live.)

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I'm happy to see this update, though I'll echo the comment on it being a bit one-sided. It makes the scene less interesting that it essentially all goes off without a hitch. It lacks conflict. I mean, not everything needs bugfuck, shit hitting fan conflict, but this was a bit too safe. It didn't feel as dangerous as a mass shooting where a bunch of gangsters gun down a bunch of other gangsters should.
 
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