At the same time, just blanket nodding does not seem like her style either. Shizue is not one to be struck dumb, especially with pur higher Socialize.

I'm not sure it's the best response either. Shizue needs to be surprised and confused, yet still say enough to help. Saying yes and going along with it is at least something, and I think confronting with questions has a large chance for things to go negative.

Still haven't voted yet.
 
Act 4, Scene 34 (Cont)

Cooking was something that she was used to. It was easy to imagine all the ways that she could go with it. She wanted to make a dinner, and she wondered what Emiko would advise. Certainly, Emiko had to know how to cook for herself, but at the same time, it was hard to imagine her in certain ways. She wasn't a Mother Hen, not in that way. Shizue herself had so much experience that to her it seemed natural.

Perhaps Rika wouldn't see it that way, of course. But Shizue was happy in the kitchen, working on trying to make a meal, and she was especially happy because it was her pipes that made it possible.

Because it took a lot of water for what she was going to be trying.

She bustled this way and that, splattering all over her apron, thinking about the work she'd done on some of the further pipes. They were traps, that far out. Through a special valve they were disconnected from the water at large. They were just pipes that looked like they connected… which meant that it was the perfect place to put bombs. Hopefully an attacker wouldn't even look at it.

The first step was a nice miso soup, with some tofu in it. She had beef, but she was planning to use it for the main meal. Taking a small page from local styles, she was going to make a heavily spiced and sauced beef and white rice dish, the rice mixed in with vegetables and yet more spices to give it some kick.

And then… dough balls filled with dates for dessert. It seemed to be a decent enough spread, and Shizue had thought about other things she could have added. It all felt very domestic, which she knew wasn't entirely… conducive to romance. But she liked the idea of feeling useful, and maybe it'd make him feel better. She knew he'd been busy with training, they'd all been working hard in the aftermath of the fight.

So she sweated and slaved, but she did so with a smile, though after she was almost done cooking she had to step away to quickly do her makeup up again, to cover the scars. It was a work in progress, and she could think of little else.

When she looked in the mirror, she saw scars and nothing else. When she thought about herself, she didn't know… would it hurt to hold him close? Would it hurt to kiss him? Her body felt new and strange, and she avoided it, as much as she could: she practiced fuinjutsu and puppetry because she couldn't quite stand to test herself, to push herself and see what happened. She'd have to do so with Yuichi. He was struggling, and she'd watched him train.

He wasn't even weak, the problem was that while he had a good set of moves, skill with taijutsu and considerable skill with genjutsu, he couldn't bring it all together well enough to beat, at the very least, someone like Akachi, who kept his distance and knew how to deal with genjutsu.

What she needed was to give him a trick, and also just more and more time to grow stronger. He'd been holding back, afraid. Maybe he needed to go on a mission soon, a safe one, to know that he wouldn't mess up again.

...it was especially odd because Yuichi's failures barely were failures. He didn't stand up against a Jonin, he didn't see what nobody else had seen. He hadn't been able to do much good, but if it wasn't for her sound jutsu, Shizue wouldn't have done much good either. Seiichiro meanwhile had been clumsy: outmatched, yes, but even with the skill he had he hadn't used it well.

So it was something deeper than that. She didn't know how she was going to help him, but she knew that she would.

So she touched herself up while thinking on other things, glad that she was becoming a better hand with a makeup. Eventually it'd all be second nature: that's the way things worked. Jutsu, tricks, puppetry… everything felt strange and new at first, but if it didn't become familiar and welcome, it at least became something you knew how to deal with.

*******

The table was laid out, the chopsticks there, the cloth on it, the food almost done, when there was a knock on the door. Everyone had cleared out of the kitchen and dining area as if they knew what was coming. Or who.

So when there was a knock on the door, she hurried forward and opened it, already smiling. Okiie was in a nice shirt, a dark green that suited his complexion rather well, she thought, and a dark pair of pants. It was remarkable how simple it was for a boy to look nice. To Shizue it seemed an odd sort of miracle, but she really did like the way he dressed, and yet for a girl to merit the same… or was that really so? Perhaps she should ask Rika, and of course she was biased by the fact that, well.

Okiie was cute. It didn't take much for him to look great. "Shizue-chan, thanks for having me."

"Of course," Shizue said. "You look well-trained." Tired was another word.

"I'm going to be going on another mission soon," Okiie said.

"Oh?" Shizue asked, not sure what to say as she led him towards his seat.

"That's a nice skirt, Shizue-chan."

It was a little cumbersome, and warm in this weather, though fine for desert nights. She smiled at the clumsy compliment and said, "Thank you. What are you doing?"

"Courier work. Something simpler… I hope."

"Anyone else going with you?" Shizue asked.

"I'm not sure yet. Probably," Okiie admitted, sinking down into the chair and groaning slightly as he settled in. "I've been working hard lately, but I think. You know I've been wondering. Imagine if we were somehow able to go to the chunin exam. You and me… and…"

"Rika-chan?"

"Well, but what about close-up? Ichiman-kun? Or Saya-chan. You like her a lot," Okiie said. "Though Rika definitely doesn't."

"No, she doesn't," Shizue said, smiling as if he'd figured something out, rather than just stating the obvious. "But… so, teams in the Chunin Exam? You know it'd never happen."

They were missing-nin, they faced trials far greater than just going up against a bunch of teenagers to prove that they were tough.

"I know, but it'd be so cool. I think I'm a lot stronger than most people my age. I'm already learning C-rank jutsu, and your puppets are amazing. And I've heard you have smoke bombs now."

"Yes, I do," Shizue said. "But, most of the people in the chunin exams are sixteen, right? They're probably a lot stronger than we are, even with all the training we've had."

"Are they? I don't know. Even the younger ones are far ahead of where a genin would be. I think?" Okiie shrugged. "Sorry, I didn't want to talk about nonsense, but Seiichiro-kun was speculating. So was Junko-chan."

Shizue snorted. "Would you like some soup?"

"Of course! I'll like anything you make," Okiie said.

Shizue hoped eventually everyone would like her food, and not just out of love.

*******

He slurped the soup, but that was okay. "And so I was saying, if I have an attack jutsu with wind, what I need now is something a little different. Perhaps an area attack, or something that lets me put up defenses. Emiko-sensei is an expert on earth jutsu, so perhaps I could make a wall? But then, I could also do the caltrops thing with the earth jutsu, and focus on, say. A fire jutsu to create a wall of flames? That'd be a lot cooler, wouldn't it?"

"But pretty chakra intensive, right?" Shizue asked, frowning.

"Usually, yeah. But I've been working on that too. My chakra reserves need to be way bigger if I'm going to be a real shinobi. I can't master all the things in the same field, at least not right now. But… I think I can figure something out. Emiko-sensei also mentioned the possibility of combination jutsu."

"Oh? Isn't that common?"

"With yourself. Which I think's a little harder. But if Chuichi-san taught me a few more clones, then bam, there you go!" Okiie paused for a moment, setting down his spoon. There was a drop of miso on his chin, and Shizue reached out to wipe it away with her hand. She could feel a little roughness there. Not the start of a beard, or anything so dramatic, but a slight growth of fuzz, a sign perhaps that she wasn't the only person changing.

She couldn't tell whether he'd gotten taller or not. There was of course perspective.

His face was red, but he added, "So, uh, yeah. That's what I'm working on."

"It's good that you're keeping busy," Shizue said. "I've had a lot to do."

"Everyone knows you do too much," Okiie said. "I mean. Akachi-kun complimented your coffee the other day."

Shizue blinked, "Really?"

"He said it wasn't as bad as poison!"

Shizue giggled. That sounded like Akachi. And that was definitely an Akachi comment. "So, the rice should be ready, soon."

"Ah, good. What are we having?"

"Beef," Shizue said.

"Huh. Akachi-kun's leaving too, so he's not going to join my on the courier thing. He said he's going to go herd cattle and practice his marksmanship. It seems like everyone's finding something to do."

"I have my… recovery to see to."

Okiie set down his bowl, after slurping another spoonful, and said, "Well, Rika-chan's optimistic, right?"

"She is," Shizue admitted, biting her lip. "But you never know if I'll actually look…"

"What?"

"Good again?"

Okiie frowned, and made a gesture as if he were trying to chop through a tree. "C'mon, Shizue-chan! Stop being so down. So the beef! How did you make it? I assume it's spiced? That's what everyone likes around here."

"Yes, and I added in some wasabi. Emiko-sensei really does spend a lot on the food budget. It was in one of the scrolls," Shizue said. "As well, some carrots, a little bit of yam…"

"Ah, yam. Do you think it'd be too strong?" Okiie asked.

"Strong?"

"Well, I suppose it depends on the sauce." Okiie shook his head, blushing. "Sorry, I shouldn't trouble you."

"No, no, actually. Come with me, and we'll see." Shizue gestured, already picturing the act in her head, and red-faced at the image. She was definitely teasing and toying around with him, now, but she liked doing that. She liked how he squeaked. She liked the power that she felt like it gave her.

There was the beef, and the sauce laden all on top of it. She reached a finger and ran it along the bowl she had it in, making sure that nothing was left on the gas burner. The dates were done too, though she'd need to heat them up. She pulled up the finger, filled with the reddish sauce, and said, "Here you go, Okiie-kun."

Okiie blinked, "What?"

"I mean, you wanted to try it, didn't you?" Shizue tried to sound playful and teasing, and he grinned broadly and stepped forward, before pausing, fidgeting his foot a little, and then grabbing her hand softly and suckling on her finger down to the knuckle.

She put a hand to her face. She'd almost expected he wouldn't do it, because it was pretty silly.

Okiie pulled away. "It's delicious, uh." Okiie coughed. "It tastes amazing. Would you… erm." Okiie was sweating now. "Like to taste it too?"

"Of course I would," Shizue said, reaching a finger over towards the sauce.

"Not like that," Okiie said. "Er, if this goes wrong, it's not my fault, but would you like to, uh, kiss and stuff?"

"...what does that have to do with tast--oh."

She closed her eyes slightly and leaned in to kiss him. He tasted of the spice, warm and inviting, and she could barely breathe as the kiss lengthened and multiplied. Two kisses, and then three. Her face didn't hurt, so clearly it was okay. She finally pulled back, but only long after her doubts had began to melt away.

Like ice in a desert.

She felt warm all over, sensitive and bursting with joy, and she fidgeted uncomfortably. Finally, she took a breath, "S-so, food."

"O… of course," Okiie said.

******

They didn't eat in silence, but they did eat one-handed, the other being busy as they held hands under the table and smiled. Something had broken, or perhaps the tension… it made Shizue feel weird that it was kisses that had done it. Surely she wasn't that shallow. But now when he talked about jutsu she was able to sing the same notes, talk to jutsu back at him, without thinking about how he might be looking at her.

The food was good, though it was spicy enough that she went up and came back for water three or four times. Her eyes poured forth their own water too at one point, when she dabbed some of the sauce on an eyelid while lifting the rice and yams and meat up in her chopsticks.

Okiie, the whole time, was watching her with a sort of amazement that made Shizue want to capture it, to take a photo of all of this so that she'd never miss it again.

"Saya-chan's been talking about you, Shizue-chan," Okiie said. "Apparently you're going to go and talk to Genta-kun?"

"Yes. I'll do that tomorrow," Shizue said. "I think he needs the help."

"Yeah, tell him I said hi, okay? I mean, he's pretty cool. And smart. He shouldn't feel sad, no matter what he did."

"Even if…" Shizue began, and then hesitated, feeling disloyal even to think about just what Genta had done not even two months ago. It wasn't that long ago that he broke down, that he almost died. "You're right. He shouldn't feel bad. I'll make sure to cheer him up."

"Yeah. And Shizue-chan, we really should hang out more. I mean, do you need any help with your puppets?"

"Actually… I might."

*******

It was a nice room, really, Shizue thought as she opened the door, though it was rather different than she expected. There were no windows, of course, but there was a plant on the corner, right next to the shelves of books that she'd expected. Had Genta made them himself, or bought them?

But the room as a whole, perhaps thanks to the lighting overhead, or perhaps thanks to the light, airy, and cheerful colors, felt different than expected. For one, there was a couch with a floral print in the far corner, though it was covered in what looked like clothing.

Then there was a quilt on a rocking chair in another corner, but her eyes were first drawn to the sparse futon, and the curtain over something in a corner, and then finally on small, elegant Saya, sitting in a wooden chair with a table in front of her. There were three chairs, and the tea seat was all laid out, complete with a lacy white tablecloth. Then there was Genta.

He looked different, and Shizue didn't know how. He was wearing pants, a shirt, though the shirt was white and slightly flowing. His eyes weren't glowing, so he wasn't using his powers, and his hands were tucked halfway under the table itself, as if he were holding Saya's hand. Was that it? But the table was too big for that.

"Ah, darling Shizue-chan. Finally joining us. Please sit down. The tea is going to go cold," Saya said.

Shizue frowned. His eyes seemed larger, his lips bigger, his whole self… expanded somehow? perhaps it was the slight smile on his face, nervous as it was? That was certainly something that she wasn't used to seeing. At least, not recently.

She sat down. "How are you doing, Genta-kun?"

"F...iiine," Gent said, his voice slightly quieter than usual. "Just fine. And how is your training going, Shizue-chan? I believe you are working on fuinjustu, an interesting topic indeed."

"Well, it does interest me, but I know you have other things you're focused on," Shizue said, as Saya began to carefully pour the tea.

"Piffle. Both of your areas of interest are boring trifles compared to taijutsu," Saya said.

Shizue didn't respond to the invitation to spar, instead raising her glass and carefully taking a quiet sip. It was very good tea, and she closed her eyes to savor some of the notes.

"So, together with Ichiman-kun and Okiie-kun, I believe you should be able to make good strides on your puppets. Don't let Emiko-sensei suggest genjutsu puppets, however. Her project currently in Genjutsu poison might lead to her trying to incorporate genjutsu into everything, even things that seemed previously… unfruitful?" Genta spoke casually, thoughtfully.

Saya chuckled, "But really, you had something else you wanted to tell Shizue-chan."

"Oh, yes," Genta said. "I've come to the conclusion that Ken has to be working for someone more than the Baron. His people show up too consistently, and the Baron has money, yes, but… that much money? He's gathered an army when even a single missing-nin can charge a premium. Logistically and economically, it only makes sense if he's an agent for someone else."

"Really?" Shizue asked, eyes opening wide to see that Genta was fidgeting a little bit.

"Yes. Emiko-sensei won't confirm it, but I've always seen things that she doesn't want me to. And it's clear to me that she knows that there's more to it. Think about the past year? Hidden Road has been everywhere, and everywhere they are, things have happened that could have caused a war, and--"

"Not that," Saya said. "The other thing."

Shizue glanced back and forth between them. "The other thing?"

"Well, Shizue, I was meaning to ask you…"

He stopped talking, and Shizue waited.

"Ask me?" Shizue asked.

"Could you…"

Saya sighed. "Come on, you're not a kid, just--"

"Call me Maki-chan, please," Genta said.

Maki? Maki… chan?!

Shizue is stunned, flabbergasted, and confused. But her reaction/what she says is:

[] Write-in. Anything too articulate and understanding will be vetoed. Feel free to ask questions or fluff the reaction or whatnot.

******

A/N:...surprise!
Can someone pick up the phone, because I called it!
 
Maybe some awkward commentary about how Shizue thought Genta and Saya were an item?
Or are they?
Does that mean Saya likes girls?
Or guys who are also girls?
I mean actually girls?
Or is that the other way around.
I'm sorry G- Maki-chan! I'm just really surprised!
...and confused.
 
Just because Shizue is stunned and flustered doesn't mean that we have to be an idiot about it. The "keep nodding" plan is already confirmed as fine.
 
Its been noticed Genta is better at playing a girl than well...a lot of the girls in the group. Shizue and Rika at least

One thing I noticed is that back in Tea, when we had two sisters and a guy for disguises, Maki went for one of the sisters, and got pretty into it. And it wasn't even really a question, just like of course she'd take that.

It is entirely possible that Shizue had enough hints to work it out by the brothel, I think, if she'd asked the right questions or read the right books. So we could totally go for a vibe of Shizue kind of having that realization now or very soon?
 
Alright, better question: Does Shizue know that transgenderism is even a thing? I thought it was obvious that she's never heard of it before, but it's never been clearly said as far as I know. @The Laurent I think we need some QM statement on this since multiple people are arguing that Shizue could have deduced things, which isn't possible if Shizue is not aware that people can even be transgender.
 
One thing I noticed is that back in Tea, when we had two sisters and a guy for disguises, Maki went for one of the sisters, and got pretty into it. And it wasn't even really a question, just like of course she'd take that.

It is entirely possible that Shizue had enough hints to work it out by the brothel, I think, if she'd asked the right questions or read the right books. So we could totally go for a vibe of Shizue kind of having that realization now or very soon?

I don't think it's super needed to do that, I just wanna aim for something that won't hurt or offend Maki, and throws a social softball back at them. So they can handle it and explain to a Shizue who is not actively pressing them on it and trying not to react negatively.
 
Reaction-y round up of evidence and quotes thing!

"Listen, guys can be idiots. Everyone can. Even smart guys," Shizue said, her voice a little low, comforting, "Look at how Genta acts sometimes."

"Yeah, though Genta's not a regular guy at all," Rika said, then without a handseal she transformed into the man she had appeared like before, in dark pants and a rather simple white shirt, dressed up to the extent that it looked like a clean pair of clothing, but no more than that.

This just amused me, considering. It's not really textually relevant.

"What the heck!" Rika said, a minute later, blushing and looking everywhere but at Moeko… Genta, ather.

"That was Kurokawa Moeko. I am seventeen, and I like strawberry ice-cream, adventure stories, children and dancing! And thanks to this ninja guy who bribed me," Genta said, not in any way, shape or form dropping any of Moeko's mannerisms, "I'm currently looking for someone willing to give me a tattoo for the ryou I got from him. He was a bit of a weirdo, but ninjas, eh?"

"I didn't even begin to guess," Shizue admitted, feeling rather embarrassed by the fact that she'd interacted with her teammate, pretending to be someone of the opposite gender, for what was almost an hour without noticing even the slightest thing wrong.

"I have a whole notebook filled with her memories and opinions and everything! It was super fun to do, a little like playing pretend, but you know I don't skimp on details, do I, Shizue-chan, Rika-chan?" Moeko, no, Genta asked, voice pitched a little high, head tilting in a way that Shizue identified as part and parcel to who Moeko was. And she bet that was because it was, that somewhere Genta had written down every little bit of body-language the girl had. Now, how he managed to so effortlessly, on the other hand. Well, maybe he was just that good.

'Genta' carefully describing a lot of personality details for a one off disguise of a girl, and getting pretty into the mindset. Which is just good acting and nothing more, surely.

"It isn't," Genta insisted. He glanced around and then walked into the bedroom and called out, "What could be a big deal: there are only two beds."

"We'll just sleep together," Shizue insisted, glancing over at Saya a little uncertainly when she said that.

Saya frowned and shrugged, "Perhaps. Genta would be unlikely to do anything with you either, if you would rather not."

There was a single note of this strange vulnerability in what she was saying, as if there were hidden meanings to it; but then, when she looked at Genta she saw the same thing.

This isn't really relevant, but Saya seems to have already been wondering about Genta in little ways?

"And here I am," Saya said, "More proof that I'm heartless?" Saya smirked and stood up, swaying slightly as if dancing, "Playing with your emotions, perhaps?"

"No," Genta said, "It was more frustrating than…" he trailed off, and then glanced over at Shizue, who stopped humming for a moment, allowing the instruments to slow from their frantic if low-key wail.

"Genta-kun, you should not have said what you did."

"Exactly," Saya said, "And yeah, I shouldn't have kissed you, especially considering it wasn't exactly pleasant for either of us."

"That was my first kiss," Genta said.

"Oh," Saya said, flushing. "Then I am doubly sorry. To steal the first kiss you ever had from someone your age…"

And they have history! I'd totally forgotten about this, actually. But it makes them becoming tea buddies interesting?

Koguchi Manzo, Isami, and Riko are a set of siblings whose own story is a common enough one. The children of a somewhat prosperous merchant who caters exclusively to the nobility, the youngest of the two daughters, Isami, is a tea addict." He stepped forward, "Flighty and bold as a child, someone who enjoyed dolls and racing on the back of horses equally… she changed as she grew."

He moved over to the makeup and opened it up, looking through it for a moment before disappearing in a puff of smoke. The girl standing where he was looked perhaps twenty, short and round-faced, with eyes that seemed to alternate as he shifted between this spark of intelligence and this dull, dreamy look. Genta turned, and the form, wearing shorts and a T-shirt, looked quite complete. She was a pleasant enough looking girl, but her torn fingernails and the tattoo that curled just out under the shirt all hinted at something more, as did her eyes, and her whole expression.

"Sister, brother, we should," Genta… no, Isami said, "Go out today. Our father's money is in, and it could be so pleasant to be together for once." That intensity flared up, before her eyes again became dreamy, "Like we used to be. We could find some tea and dream the world away. One dream...one, you know, is all you need, that's what dad said, isn't it?"

So, again, Isami gets a complete history, a lot of interests, and some things that surely aren't going to come up during the mission, and it's only recon anyway. But 'Genta' wanted to be complete.

"Yes, from one of those magazines you obtained," Genta said, "It's fashionable but not cutting-edge, perfect for Isami."

"You read them?" Shizue asked.

"Why wouldn't I have?" Genta said, "They provide good data." He seemed slightly annoyed, and shook his head, a gesture which seemed entirely out of character for Isami, certainly. "More importantly, Emiko-sensei asked me to for her own infiltration work."

And liked reading fashion magazines for completeness purposes, of course.

"Riko, on the other hand, is a year and a half older and something of a brat. Brash, opinionated, intelligent. If her father was less traditional she'd perhaps even be in a university," Genta said, and handed Saya an incredibly thick sheaf of notes. "She's taller than her sister, and I have her appearance described there as well as all relevant information."

"Her… favorite movie and why? Her… least favorite movie? Favorite color? Childhood experiences…?" Saya said, "This is a little bit…"

"She," Genta said, ignoring her, "Doesn't necessarily like the idea of 'tea' but thinks that her sister this way is better than she used to be, and has been convinced to try it. However, she's picky and is going to make a fuss and insult the prices and the people, though in a way that doesn't get her kicked out. Thus shall we learn their prices, the different types, and observe other details without any undue risk. They have to tell a potential customer the prices, and Isami…"

And okay, the real kicker! The other girl role gets about as fleshed out as Isami, with some good details.

Shizue's eyes were wide, stunned by the level of detail Genta had put in, "Looks and acts like a typical customer. What am I?"

"You are the brother, who disapproves of 'tea' though you smoke and have done the same drugs Isami has in the past. You had a bad reaction and didn't take them again, and so you think that makes you better than her, and being the oldest of the three, you are the most reluctant. You are also nursing a headache because you drink a lot," Genta said, and then handed Shizue… three pages of notes.

"Why so little?" Shizue asked.

"Because it's the least important role," Genta said, but Saya was narrowing her eyes when Genta continued with, "And I'm sure you'll do fine."

But the guy is the least relevant, totally not for any biased reasons, and barely gets any actual personality. In fact, most of the guys notes are about negative things.

I uh. Don't think Maki is very fond of masculine roles, at least? Which kinda ties into the "stupid boy" bitterness in an obvious way.
 
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How about this?

[] The next thing you're going to say is "Of course, Maki-chan."
-[] Not going to lie, you're confused, and a little worried about accidentally putting your foot in your mouth right now. Preferred pronouns, for one.
-[] But you support G-Maki-chan, and want them to be happy.
 
[] The next thing you're going to say is "Of course, Maki-chan."
-[] Not going to lie, you're confused, and a little worried about accidentally putting your foot in your mouth right now. Preferred pronouns, for one.
-[] But you support G-Maki-chan, and want them to be happy.
 
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I don't want Shizue to sound flippant or anything. Hope it doesn't come across that way.

While I'm pretty sure Maki would prefer female pronouns, we can't be completely sure until they confirm.

Shizue is confused right now, which is fine. Best to be clear about that so she can start to understand. But it's important to support Maki.
 
[X] The next thing you're going to say is "Of course, Maki-chan."
-[X] Not going to lie, you're confused, and a little worried about accidentally putting your foot in your mouth right now. Preferred pronouns, for one.
-[X] But you support G-Maki-chan, and want them to be happy.

The write in might be slight too understanding. It's very borderline, but maybe try moving the phrasing a little, or thinking more about the confusion, or Shizue's own... well, she's very socially competent, but social competence relies in part on knowing the forms, and, well.

This is pretty unprecedented for her. So just keep that in mind. And yes, I know that you didn't make the write-in, just commenting on it.

Basically, it's a little too much best-case scenario for coming out, IMO.
 
The write in might be slight too understanding. It's very borderline, but maybe try moving the phrasing a little, or thinking more about the confusion, or Shizue's own... well, she's very socially competent, but social competence relies in part on knowing the forms, and, well.

This is pretty unprecedented for her. So just keep that in mind. And yes, I know that you didn't make the write-in, just commenting on it.

Basically, it's a little too much best-case scenario for coming out, IMO.
But you didn't give any information on what Shizue actually knows about trans stuff.
 
But you didn't give any information on what Shizue actually knows about trans stuff.

We grew up in Tide. My personal read is that Maki didn't know anything about trans stuff until really recently, because that's why the brothel girl freaked her out.

We may have read a bit of Kunoichi Lit, but we're not really up to date and we never pushed to learn more about social issues that hard.
 
Estro adds more foot to mouth!

[X] "Um, uh, Of-of course, Maki. Maki-chan!"
-[X] You're confused, blindsided, and this entire thing is coming from left field so, your foot in probably going to end up in your mouth. But Genta - Maki - is your friend, so you will try your best
 
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[X] "Um, okay... I mean, what?"
-[X] Shizue doesn't understand.
-[X] Shizue has so many questions. (And she doesn't know where to start)
--[X] Is Genta-kun (or um... Maki-chan?) Wearing make-up?!?
--[X] Has Genta-kun been a girl this whole time?
--[X] How long has this been a thing?
--[X] How long has Saya known?
--[X] Who else knows about this? Does Erika?
--[X] Um... if Genta-kun wants to be a girl, why doesn't he use Transformation jutsu?
--[X] Does this mean Ge- Maki-chan likes boys?
--[X] Wait. I thought Genta and Saya were dating. Are the two of you?
--[X] Does this mean Saya likes girls?
--[X] Should I refer to ...past-Genta as Genta or Maki-chan?
--[X] Wait, is this related to the brothel incident? What happened there?
--[X] I guess this explains why Genta was so good at role-playing girls.
--[X] Should I, um, keep this secret?
--[X] oh, God. Am I a bad friend for not noticing this?!?
--[X] What does all this mean?!?
-[X] Shizue belatedly remembers to pass on Okiie's well-wishes as she tries to process everthing.
 
--[X] Wait. I thought Genta and Saya were dating. Are the two of you?

Wait, did we? There was the bad kiss but I don't think any other indications. Although Shizue could have assumed things from them hanging out?

[ ] buli-buli

I will regret this later, but like, 11/10 for portraying a realistically awful reaction to a coming out. You stopped just short of asking if "he'd" go ask Rika chan about The Surgery TM

And so I am so tempted just for that to vote for it
 
Here's an idea from reading NemoMarx's great analysis. Wouldn't have even thought of this otherwise.

[X] You want to be disguised as a girl, uh, all the time?
-[X] Sizue doesn't see anything wrong with living as a girl constantly, it's just very... unexpected! New!
-[X] Maki-chan has always been an excellent girl! She's charming and always has great backstory and is effortlessly flawless! Even a Kage would see you as female!

The understanding misunderstanding! It's so embarrasing and earnest it completely drains the tension out of the room. :D
 
[X] You want to be disguised as a girl, uh, all the time?
-[X] Sizue doesn't see anything wrong with living as a girl constantly, it's just very... unexpected! New!
-[X] Maki-chan has always been an excellent girl! She's charming and always has great backstory and is effortlessly flawless! Even a Kage wouldsee you as female!
 
Wait, did we? There was the bad kiss but I don't think any other indications. Although Shizue could have assumed things from them hanging out?

It's what I was assuming given Saya and Genta Mika's interest in each other and spending so much time together. Mika certainly spent her visit to Shizue basically waxing poetic about Saya's abilities as a therapist.

"I take tea in more civilized company, now."

A few things fell into place, "Genta-kun?"

And this line (emphasis mine) led me to believe that Shizue, in-character, had come to the same conclusion.

[ ] buli-buli

I will regret this later, but like, 11/10 for portraying a realistically awful reaction to a coming out. You stopped just short of asking if "he'd" go ask Rika-chan about The Surgery TM

And so I am so tempted just for that to vote for it
Yeah. I was trying to strike a balance. Per QM, Shizue literally has no idea that transsexualism is a thing. So, I went for creating a non-comprehensive list of questions I thought she might have depending on how the conversation goes. I'm hoping that Shizue's ignorance and confusion comes across through her questions as she attempts to try and parse through this revelation, which basically upturns all of her entire understanding of her friend, their relationship, and what is even possible in the world. Her questions may be cruel, especially at first, but she doesn't even have enough context to know there would be ...untactful questions.
 
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Yeah. I was trying to strike a balance. Per QM, Shizue literally has no idea that transsexualism is a thing. So, I went for creating a non-comprehensive list of questions I thought she might have depending on how the conversation goes. I'm hoping that Shizue's ignorance and confusion comes across through her questions as she attempts to try and parse through this revelation, which basically upturns all of her entire understanding of her friend, their relationship, and what is even possible in the world. Her questions may be cruel, especially at first, but she doesn't even have enough context to know there would be ...untactful questions.

Yeah, I love it? And hate it? It's realistic enough I can like, picture myself crying if it was the reaction I got when I came out, which is. Maybe a good thing, for realism purposes.
 
Yeah, I love it? And hate it? It's realistic enough I can like, picture myself crying if it was the reaction I got when I came out, which is. Maybe a good thing, for realism purposes.
Thank you? I mean, I'm glad that you got a better reaction when you came out. I'm just of mixed feelings about being complimented for writing such a realistic "revolting" response.
 
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