Embers in the Ashes of a Dying Race (Dragon Ball Z)

So yes, I hope the latest chapter does not seem rushed. I intended to read through it prior to posting, but, well, something came up and I probably won't be able to write properly for about a week. Decided to post it now rather than make you wait. If you're wondering what the problem is, it's not too serious, but I did do a number on my fingers when a modeling knife slipped while I was working on some 40K stuff. Quick trip to the hospital later, and I am mostly fine. I just can't use one of my hands for most of next week. Writing is therefore currently a challenge.
 
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Oozaru. That was the name of the monster that had brought low the Tuffles in a feat that had quickly spread throughout the universe for its brutal simplicity. The destruction of an entire race was not exactly an uncommon thing, but usually one as advanced as the Tuffles would have been a task of several days, not a single night. Everyone knew the old stories of how they had clashed with the Saiyans. How they had pitted their high technology against the Saiyan might. How they had even made gains, pushing their foes back in a grinding but inevitable victoty.

Then, the night came. The rare full moon which summoned forth the bestial forms of the Saiyan. The next day, there were no more Tuffles. Just burning cities and twisted bodies. He'd never thought to see it up close; he'd never imagined what it would be like to stand in the presence of one of the giants, one of the creatures that almost seemed to stand in for a god of war. The monstrous apes against whom no defence was a match, who waded through fire and worse, and never knew defeat.

He was feeling it now. The Arkosian would-be King floated in the void of space as the Oozaru let loose another primal howl, the sound seeming to worm its way past his armoured skin, and attack his insides with knives of fear. It was massive; a towering shape that threw the ship into its shadow. Though, perhaps that was simply for the fact that it currently wanted to tear his face off. Clothed in the broken armour of the Saiyan who had become it, there was no light of reason in its eyes. There was only anger and fury.

He was going to die.

The Oozaru charged, one giant hand clashing down to crush him like the bug he appeared to be, but the Arkosian leader pulled himself together and jolted to the side, barely avoiding that fate. Each move brought new pain lashing across his nerves. Shattered chitin, humiliated arm, and numerous other injuries each demanding treatment. He ignored them and pushed on, as he had done before. As any Arkosian could be expected to do; but the rock-hard faith in his own mission was wavering now in the face of the monster. Panic was swelling in his alien breast, and he had to force himself to remain calm. It was like facing down the very stuff of nightmares, a real-life monster coming just for him. What could he do but fall at its hands?

Still, he fought on. Some deep instinct driving him to defy defeat even now, bursting into a dash to evade a mighty strike, and then rising like a star, three hands filled with power as he blasted energy down at the beast. The Oozaru howled, but thick fur absorbed most of the punch, and the creature caught him with a wild backhand. He spun, frenzied pain ripping at his body. Managing to exert some control over his flight at the last second; a searing beam lashed out across the path of his fall, and he realised with cold logic that it would have killed him were he even a second slower.

The Arkosian was no stranger to the concept of death. He had faced it before, on Arkos during the war against Frieza. Even now, thoughts of that war – war? More like battle! A single day of fighting to end a history of glory! - thoughts of the war made him burn with fury. It gave him some extra speed and strength, letting him stay ahead of the beast as it advanced, swatting at him with its giant arms. The monkey-like face pulled into a snarl. He blasted a beam towards its eye, but it intercepted with one hand, then forced him to duck back as it swept a blast of its own towards his location.

Damn it, he was going to lose like this! The bald one had been tough enough… Nappa, he'd called himself, right? That had been a close fight, closer than the Arkosian would ever admit to anyone else. In the end, he'd seen his chance and moved in for the kill, but if Nappa hadn't slowed, the insectoid wasn't sure that he would have won in the end. Now, he was facing one of the legendary beasts of nightmare, on of the creatures he'd always been taught were unmatchable.

He had to think! He had to find some way out of this, that was why he had been chosen for the suicide mission, that was why he had been the one to go. Because he was trusted to adapt as new things happened that hadn't been planned for. The fate of his world rested on him, they expected him to come up with some brilliant way to turn this around.

All he felt was terror. Terror like he'd never felt before. Terror that no single foe had ever inspired. This monster wasn't mortal, wasn't flesh and blood. It was rage itself, bathed in the cool light of the moon. What could he do against such a thing? What could he possibly achieve except to die in a pointless duel in distant space that would one would ever seen again? His body crushed and mangled, his spirit shamed with the defeat. His cause lost, his world afire.

Everything was lost to him if he didn't act now.

He couldn't allow hesitation! He had to fight!

The Arkosian sprang forwards, rising higher as he summoned yet more Ki reserves, forcing past the pain and the fear and the desperation. He was a Hive-Prince, a would-be King who had given up his throne. The best of his world, the most elite. Even if he had to die here, he wouldn't do it trembling like some half-grown child. He would stand and fight, and battle to take his foe even if that was impossible, even if he had to die pointlessly, it would never be helplessly as well!

"For Arkos!" The beams lanced from his hands, playing across the great ape's form. Probing and testing for weakness, hoping to do damage, to open wounds and to draw blood. There was nothing. Attacks that would have killed that Saiyan outright failed to even get past the thick fur that covered the beast. His strongest and most powerful techniques could not even force it to wince. It bathed in his power, coming through without harm. Blasting at him with a screaming energy wave fired from the mouth. He dodged and wheeled, forcing a protesting body to move past its limits.

If energy won't do the trick, then maybe…

He dove in, picking up speed, and cupping two of his hands to form a hammer-like shape, which he brought crashing down against the creature's furred body. Up close, the fur felt more like metal, not giving an inch even in spite of his attack. He snarled and kicked away, but the ape clipped him, and an explosion of pain told him that he was probably bleeding. Again.

Pain washed through his body, threatening to dull his mind. Threatening to get him killed. The next two attacks, he only dodged barely. He felt himself flowing; the loss of blood finally starting to tell.

Damn it, he couldn't die here! Not after everything that had happened, not after all that he had sacrificed.

He thought of Arkos. The great spire-cities, raising like the biggest trees into the sky. Their armoured exteriors glittering as though they had captured the light of the stars themselves. The howling wind beating against them, but denied by their strength. Each one, a reflection of the people who had built them. Strong, proud and defiant.

At least, before Frieza had come. Before the dark times had set in. Before they stopped being warriors, and started to be slaves. The shame of it! Their ancestors surely had to be disgusted at their actions; at how far they had fallen. But submission was better than destruction. Submission offered a chance to strike back in the future, it offered the possibility of freedom. The loss of honour was striking and terrible, but honour and pride could be reclaimed. Life could not. Survival could not.

Frieza had taught them them much since those days. He had taught them of slavery, of shame, and of a people perverted into obedient soldiers. He knew of the fate that would await his species should he fail. Destruction, and then slavery of the survivors just as with the Saiyans. In a real way, he wasn't just fighting an enemy, he was fighting what his people might become.

Why? Why couldn't the Saiyans see the truth? Their species was gone! They had no chance for survival. Now or in the future, they would die out. Why wouldn't they sacrifice themselves to deal a striking blow against the monster who had decided their fate? It was no less than he was willing to do himself! The Saiyans should have understood! The Saiyans should have been his greatest ally…

''If we're going to die, we'll do it as the ones who killed Frieza!''

Foolishness! Didn't they see? Even this monster he now duelled was paltry compared to that beast. Was this really what they had become? Where the Arkosians had lost their pride, had the Saiyans gone the opposite way? Sacrificing until that pride was all that they had?

''You're just giving up. You've decided there's no way you can beat him, so you're getting him out of the way instead!''

No. It wasn't surrender to see that victory was impossible. A warrior who fought on in the face of oblivion was pointless. Battle was for glory, and to preserve the hive and clan. If it would serve none of those purposes, why would you want to fight?

For pride, of course, for warrior's pride.

That voice was not that of a Saiyan. It was his own, echoing to him from long ago. From before the chains and the slavery. The Arkosians had once been a warrior race, like the Saiyans. Pride had been important then, it had been everything.

Have we really fallen so far, that we've lost something as vital as that? The Saiyans can't be right, can they? Of course not, all they have is words. They'll never be strong enough on their own! This way is the right way.. the only way.

The Oozaru unleashed a roar, and struck forwards. He rolled, avoiding it by the narrowest of margins. Taking advantage, he dove upwards, hoping to crack a blow against the monster's sensitive snout, but the long tail swept out of nowhere, bashing into him with the strength of a falling building. A cry of pain tore free from his battered throat. He was hurled back into the void, the ship retreating; his goal getting further and further away.

In the end, he was helpless.

Just like with Frieza, just like with before. This was an enemy who was beyond his power. No matter what he did, he would die in the end. Why not just submit? Why not just make it fast and surrender…?

The same words. Those were the same words that he had heard once before. During the battle, during their greatest failure.

''My Queen, we cannot win this battle. Already, more than thirteen hives have been destroyed, surely ours will be next, as one of the biggest surviving targets. The enemy has already shown that they cannot be stopped. Why not surrender and spare ourselves? Our pride for our survival, the trade does not seem so bad...''

It had been a mistake. Even as his mother had given the order, he'd known it was a mistake. Pride was more than just a word, losing it had cost them and changed them. Made them into slaves. Worse than this, slaves who had willingly taken to the chains. Should they have fought to the death instead? He had no real answer, but he did know that his people had been so much lesser since that day.

This was their chance. Perhaps their only chance, their way to regain what they had cast aside. To become warriors again, to have purpose rather than empty existence. This was the way forward, his people were depending on his success, surrendering wasn't an option. He would accept death or victory, and nothing else.

Knowing that the former was far more likely than the latter, he attacked. Casting a wide net of energy which broke against the creature. The Oocaru slapped at him, and he dodged. A second blow came at him from the side, forcing another evasion. Then, he lashed a wave of power at the monster's eye. It blinked, but the attack landed and the creature howled in pain. He drove forwards, sending another half-dozen waves of energy into its upper body, but most were absorbed with little harm. Blinking furiously, it counter-attacked, entering a frenzied state of all-out attack. He dodged blow after blow, using his smaller size as the only advantage that he had. Then, the tail swept out again, trying to entrap his legs and slow him down. He jumped, watching it slide past below him.

Then two things hit him at once.

The first was a memory.

The second was a fist.

The fist belonged to the enraged ape, crushing down against his body was bone-pulping force. He felt armour splinter; felt a searing pain as what felt like several organs were ruptured. Felt his very life begin to ebb away.

But none of that mattered compared to the memory. As he had said, the Arkoaisns had always admired the Saiyans. Admired their history and their lore. This was how he knew of the Oozaru form in which he was being attacked, now, he recalled that legend in detail.

''A Saiyan standing under the full moon in possession of their tail undergoes a terrifying transformation. They become a giant ape, an Oozaru. A bringer of destruction and ruin. Woe to any foe who faces such a monster, for they do not stop for pain or weariness. They do not rest until the moon fades, or until there is nothing left to kill.''

Until the moon fades. That was probably impossible right now. The fight had carried them further from the ship, and the false moon orb was protected by shield, nestled inside the hanger. The other part, though…

A Saiyan has to have a tail to transform! But this one is already changed, will removing the tail do anything at all?

Honestly, he didn't know. But it was the best shot he had, and so, he would give it his all. For Arkos, and for what had been taken from them.

His body was floating. Still weak from the pounding he'd taken. He forced life back into his limbs, and flipped up right. The Oozaru, who had been watching to decide of its prey was still alive gave an angry growl. An energy beam began to charge in its maw, and he forced himself to action. Dashing forwards to avoid the detonation, shockwaves of which rolled over him and threatened to tip his balance. Closer to the creature he came, closer to the giant mass of fur and muscle. It ploughed one fist through space, forcing him to nimbly dodge – or at least, he hoped it was nimble. In truth, he was at the end of his reserves, and didn't have much left to use. At any rate, he avoided the hit. A follow up punch proved harder to dodge, and he was forced to try and block. Which, as you might expect when facing a giant monster whose fist alone is bigger than your entire body, is a somewhat fruitless endeavour. He took the hit as best he could, and as his wounds screamed, pushed forwards again.

The Oozaru next attacked with a wave of Ki from the mouth. Like some legendary monster spitting fire, the energy crackled and twisted as it came at him. He avoided, but the detonation was an area of effect, and he felt the energy slam into his back. He cried out, it felt like his legs were on fire! And they very well might have been, but he didn't have time to check. Again, he threw himself forwards. Desperation fuelling him. This creature used its tail as a weapon, he just had to bait it into doing so again!

Just one more time, just once more.

Please.

The Oozaru curled a massive fist around him, he felt the fingers close and lock about his body. He didn't have the power to stop it. Titanic muscles crawled beneath thickly furred skin, and the pressure started to build. Already in pain, he could only endure. Waiting for death and for release; but even as the pain mounted, and even as his body started to fail, desperation did not leave him, and he still waited for his chance. Even as it seemed more and more likely that it would never come.

Then, he had it. A single movement, probably not even conscious on the part of the ape. The tail flicked in annoyance at the resistance of its prey. Just for a moment, it was clear of the body.

He attacked. Throwing absolutely everything he had into one final blast of power. Ki screamed around his body, howling with the fury of his warrior race. Surging and building, the explosion burned the ape, and it howled, and released its grasp.

Then, he was moving. Fast. Faster than he'd ever gone before. He knew he was losing power already. This was his last opportunity. The tail was ahead of him, the Oozaru bearing down on him. Everything he was and everything he had done came down to this.

Kill or be killed.

He reached out, and fired the last dregs of his power. The energy beam caught the tail, and it was severed in a spray of blood. The Oozaru howled in agony, the sound so loud that it was painful. Then there was silence, quickly followed by darkness.

When he came to, he realised that the pain of his wounds had knocked him out. By the time he was aware again, there was no Oozaru. Just a floating Saiyan with long dark hair, wearing a by now spectacularly battered suit of armour. Alive still, despite the odds.

The Arkosian groaned. Every fibre of his being was in pain, he knew that to fall asleep again would mean that he would never wake again. He raised one hand to kill the Saiyan.

Then, he sighed.

"You can come out." The Arkosian said. "I know that you're here now."

"Is that so?" Said a new voice. A humanoid figure floating towards him from cover. The Arkosian turned, but really, it didn't matter who it was.

The figure was shorter than the other two, but clad in similar armour. He had spiky, up-swept hair, of a dark hue. If the Arkosian had any doubt as to his identify, the sight of the curled tail wrapped around his waist quickly killed them.

"Prince Vegeta." The Arkosian said. "Well met, I suppose. Are you here to kill me now?"

"Can you give me a reason why I shouldn't?" The Saiyan countered. "The damage you did to Nappa is going to set my plans back you know. That has to be paid for."

"You don't care for this one?"

"Not one bit. He's low class scum. But I suppose he's still a Saiyan. If anyone is going to kill him, it should be me."

"Hah. I suppose that's Saiyan loyalty."

"Are you not going to try and fight me?" Vegeta asked. "You fought against the others. Am I simply too much for you to take in?"

"Don't flatter yourself. If we met when I was in a better state, I would be quick to dissemble that pride of yours, prince. However, as it is, I'm spent. There's no point in fighting further. I don't even have the strength to throw a punch. Fighting two of Frieza's shock troops has left me understandably exhausted."

"Hmmp." Vegeta snorted. As though fighting two Saiyans and merely being exhausted was some great sign of weakness. "At any rate, I'm here to put a stop to your plans now. You don't have much of a chance. I'm fairly sure you're already dying."

"The wounds your fellows inflicted are telling, yes. But why, Vegeta? Grant me that, at least! We Arkosians looked up to you Saiyans, why is it that you choose to oppose us in this? Together, we could have done it! We could have banished Frieza. Instead, you've saved him. Why? Tell me that, Prince of the Saiyans, why have you doomed my people?!"

"Why? I'm sure the others could give you plenty of reasons. They could bring up pride. They could tell you that it comes down to a matter of honour. I know that Nappa would say that it was our duty to stop you, since revenge belongs solely to the Saiyans. We don't need help from a pathetic race like your own. However, that is not my answer."

"And what is? What is your answer?"

"Simply put?" Vegeta smirked. "You were too weak. I stopped you because I could. Because you weren't strong enough. A race so weak that it cannot succeed on its own deserves to be wiped out. As far as I'm concerned, I'm doing the universe a favour by letting Arkos burn."

"You bastard! I'll kill you for that!" He found power and strength he didn't know he had, righteous fury lending yet more determination. He threw himself forwards, one of his bladed hands cutting for the prince's throat.

Vegeta caught it. Easily. Quickly. The other hand was pointing at his face. Filling with power.

"Goodbye, Arkosian. When Frieza falls, it will be at my hands and no others."

Arkos, I'm sorry. I wasn't able to save-

There was a blast of light.

And then there was nothing.
 
Good news! I was able to write this typing mostly with one hand! It was a pain, but hey, at least the chapter is done.

Assuming the same holds true, expect the final chapter tomorrow.
 
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I would really love for this to be a full epic, I am really into this story. But I understand, you have projects already. But if you're ever in the mood, is love to see more than this.
 
I would really love for this to be a full epic, I am really into this story. But I understand, you have projects already. But if you're ever in the mood, is love to see more than this.

It's not impossible I'll do another story set in the same universe, or do a ton of one-shots in the same place. I just don't really feel the need to draw this particular story out when it has accomplished what it set out to do.
 
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"The last of the Arkosians has been dealt with, Lord Frieza."

"So it would seem, Zarbon. My little diversion is over, but I can't say I didn't derive enjoyment from it while it lasted. Do you have anything of interest to report?"

"Only this, my lord. It seems that the leader of their rebellion was hunted down by the Saiyans. What loyal lapdogs they prove to be."

Frieza laughed, a cruel and mocking sound that seemed to fill the compartment of his quarters. Zarbon stood patiently, one who was well used to things of this nature.

"Yes." The tyrant said, his tone still betraying great amusement. "How loyal they are. I'm surprised that Vegeta didn't take the chance to try and betray me there and then, but this way is much better. I'd hate for him to die so soon."

"You're so sure that he will betray you? I believe Vegeta has so far shown nothing but loyalty, my lord. And he did stop the Arkosians from detonating the ship. It would have been much easier to simply take a pod and go if he truly wanted you gone."

"Gone, but not dead. That's not enough for a Saiyan. They're a savage lot, Zarbon. Vegeta wants to kill me himself, I have absolutely no doubt about it. I can see it in his eyes when he looks to me at times. He thinks I don't, and I just don't have the heart to spoil his little act. Whether he's loyal for now or not, eventually he'll go against me."

"Then, shall I have him killed? With both his companions busy recovering, now would be a good time to do so. We could even arrange things so that it seemed he was killed by the Arkosians, if you didn't wish to be too obvious."

"Zarbon, you really are a fine servant, you know? To go from praising someone's loyalty to helping arrange their death in such a short time… I choose you well."

"I live to serve, my lord. Do you wish Vegeta to die?"

"Perhaps one day, but not yet. I want to see how far he will go. Little Vegeta, the last prince his kind will ever have, sworn to defeat the evil tyrant who destroyed his race. The irony is palpable, Zarbon. And besides that, while he remains loyal, he is a useful tool for us. Better to keep him that way for as long as possible before we're forced to kill the last Saiyans."

"I see, my lord." Zarbon said, though his tone indicated that he didn't. "So you want him to live?"

"For now, Zarbon, for now. Surely he deserves that much for hunting down the Arkosian? Thanks to him, I will not have a source of such mighty warriors. Well, after their re-education, that is. Once I have such soldiers again, well, I will have little use for the Saiyans, won't I?"

"Ah, Lord Frieza. It's another game, then? You have Vegeta secure the means of his own replacement?"

"More than just that. Vegeta has been a most amusing piece so far. He thinks I don't know he's plotting against me, but I encourage it with barbs and mockery. Anything to make him angry, to make him step out of line. It's a contest, you see. Whether he can keep his temper, whether he can keep his cool. He can't run, and we all know that he can't win. That Saiyan temper of his boils just below the surface. I want the last Saiyans to die because of it. I want their own flaws to doom them."

"What of the other two, lord? Nappa and the young one. I am given to understand both of them were hurt badly in the fight against the Arkosians."

"Those two don't matter. They're not even pieces. If they die on a mission, so be it. If they survive long enough, well, I'll simply kill them myself when the time is right."
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The green liquid of the regeneration fluid swirled and eddied around Raditz's sleeping form. Stained dark in places by bleeding wounds, and eddied by the motions of his body and the pumps which steadily injected yet more of it into the healing tank as it was needed. Beside the tank, there was a read out, showing the damage done to him and the progress towards recovery.

The read-out was currently displaying a long list of ailments. Broken bones, damaged organs, the loss of his tail… so much damage had been done to the kid that even with the healing tanks, he was looking at months of recovery. Nappa's own body ached in sympathy; the stump of his arm was particularly bothersome. Wrapped in a cloth bandage, soaked in the same type of healing formula that now surrounded Raditz. It pained him in a way that was beyond mere damage done. For a fighter like him, it was something that he could not escape. His balance was off, his weight was wrong. Many techniques now were harder to do, if possible at all. That was all before getting into the pain of it, combined with his other wounds…

Really though, the worst part was how he felt incomplete. For so long, Nappa had been untouchable, a Saiyan elite, far above the power of any but his own kind. The claws of the Arkosian had reminded him that the Saiyans were not the only warrior race in the universe. He'd gotten sloppy and slow, it wouldn't happen again.

Vegeta was standing with him in the medical bay. They'd cleared it out, even the doctors rushing to safety at the sight of two of them. With his remaining hand, Nappa had even waved nastily towards one particular doctor wearing a sling.

Now, the two of them were alone, gazing through the amber-like fluid at the sleeping form of the Saiyan who had come to them, and who had fought so hard to earn a place. Nappa glanced at Vegeat, feeling nervous tension cording his muscles. As ever, the Prince was hard to read. Silence became drawn out, until Nappa felt like he had to say something to fill it.

"He fought well, Vegeta."

"He lost his tail." The Prince scowled. "He's even less of a Saiyan now. Why should I allow such a disgrace to our world to live?"

"That's not fair, Vegeta! The Arkosian was very powerful. Even I lost to him, blaming Raditz for losing a tail against that sort of foe is totally out of line!"

"You say I'm out of line?"

Nappa felt a flash of honest fear as Vegeta turned to regard him; the cold realisation sweeping across him that Vegeta could easily end him as he was now, without even breaking a sweat. Crippled and tired and injured, he could put up no fight at all. Vegeta knew it too, and Nappa could see his cold gaze moving across his body. See the disapproval that Nappa had managed to get hurt like he had.

Prince Vegeta, when did you start to forget what it meant to be a Saiyan? The thought was unbidden, but he knew that it was right. Vegeta had become more and more distant, and only now did Nappa realise that he had let it happen. That he who should have anchored the young prince had become caught up in the pursuit of revenge. He'd been happy to be a tool, and forgot totally about what it was like to be a warrior. Only the arrival of Raditz had woken him up to it. Reminded him of the old ways, of the homeworld.

The thought emboldened him, making him speak again.

"Prine Vegeta, the power he displaying during the fight was far above what should be his maximum level. You know that a tail can regrow in time… do you really want to waste one of the few Saiyans we have left?"

"It can take years or even decades for a tail to regrow. In that time, he would be helpless. A burden, a weakness."

"But he's still a Saiyan, Vegeta! He's still one of us, and he has earned his place today! Are you really going to kill him after everything that he's done?"

"Perhaps. Just being a Saiyan isn't enough. He has to be strong, Nappa. Strong enough to do what you know must be done when the time is right."

"He can be, Vegeta. He will be. Look how strong he was during the battle. When he recovers, he'll be stronger than that by a large margin! I did some research on what little we have left, and do you know who his father was? Bardock. You know, that low-class warrior who's record of conquest was unmatched? The one who had victories rivalling even the elites? I'm telling you, this kid has the same potential. If Bardock were alive, you'd let him join us. You'd demand that he did."

"This fool isn't his father. He's young and brash, and all I have for evidence that he will one day be as strong as him is your word, Nappa."

"Vegeta, you know better than that. Before I served your father directly, I worked in the royal army as a general of troops. Before that, I was lower ranked, directly in charge of training those deemed to have potential. Most of the ones I worked with were elites, and before the fight, I would have pegged Raditz as far less than them. But he showed determination to keep going no matter how badly injured he was, and given his bloodline… he'll be strong one day. I swear it."

"Maybe he will." Vegeta allowed slowly. "But will it be fast enough? He's lost his tail, Nappa. The Oozaru transformation is beyond him. A Saiyan without a tail is absolutely worthless, what could he do in his base state ever to rival that power he lost?"

"He's still a Saiyan. He still deserves a chance. Vegeta, please."

Vegeta looked at him again, this time, his gaze was almost unreadable. "It's not like you to beg, Nappa."

"I'm not begging, but I am asking. Vegeta, I have served you and your father for a long time. I've never asked for anything before, but I would ask you for this. Let him join us, and I promise he'll prove to you that he's stronger than you think."

Silence descended one more. Vegeta looked at the healing pod, deep in contemplation for another few seconds.

"You're right, Nappa. You've never asked for anything before, and you've served us well. It's easy to forget that I am still a prince…I suppose something like this isn't too much. Just this once, I'll let him live. But he's your problem now, understand? If he becomes a weakness, or slows us down, you'll pay for it as well as he."

"I understand. You won't regret this, Vegeta."

"I think I already do. Nevertheless, I have made my choice. Ensure that when he is healed, he is informed of his new duties."

Vegeta turned, and swept out of the room, leaving Nappa alone, gazing at the stricken warrior in the pod. He released the breath he hadn't known that he had been holding. Raditz's eyes were pressed closed behind the glass, sleeping deeply.

"You don't know how close that was." Nappa said softly. "Vegeta was ready to kill you… and maybe me, if you do turn out to be weak. Don't let me down here. Raditz, I'm counting on you. But I don't think you're weak. You're going to be strong one day. I'll see to that."

Nappa laughed suddenly, and then gazed into the depthes of the pod.

"Considering the training I intend to put you through, maybe you'll wish in the end that I had let Vegeta kill you after all. Too late for that. Welcome to the Saiyan Elite, Raditz. Welcome to the end of the line."

End, for now.
 
Welp, that's the end of the tale for now. Hope you folks enjoyed it. Honestly, the whole point was to give myself a little practice at running a mostly original plot with some pre-set characters, and by and large it seems to have been successful. If anyone has any comments to make, I'll be happy to hear them. This story is done now, but I may set others in the same setting so if anyone has anything they'd like to see, now's the time to say it.
 
"Ah, Lord Frieza. It's another game, then? You have Vegeta secure the means of his own replacement?"

"More than just that. Vegeta has been a most amusing piece so far. He thinks I don't know he's plotting against me, but I encourage it with barbs and mockery. Anything to make him angry, to make him step out of line. It's a contest, you see. Whether he can keep his temper, whether he can keep his cool. He can't run, and we all know that he can't win. That Saiyan temper of his boils just below the surface. I want the last Saiyans to die because of it. I want their own flaws to doom them."
*whistles*

Wow... That is just diabolical. Not just playing with him but doing so in a way that turns his own personality against his cause and his followers. This is now my official headcanon for Vegeta. It makes so much sense.
Prince Vegeta, when did you start to forget what it meant to be a Saiyan? The thought was unbidden, but he knew that it was right. Vegeta had become more and more distant, and only now did Nappa realise that he had let it happen. That he who should have anchored the young prince had become caught up in the pursuit of revenge. He'd been happy to be a tool, and forgot totally about what it was like to be a warrior. Only the arrival of Raditz had woken him up to it. Reminded him of the old ways, of the homeworld.
Yep, that's so true about early DBZ Vegeta, absolutely no honor or even any kind of respect for his fellow warriors. It's only after his many, many, MANY defeats that he starts acting like a REAL Warrior Prince. The fact that Napa has realized this makes me very happy.
Welcome to the Saiyan Elite, Raditz.
*squeeee*
 
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Aww man, and here I was hoping we were going to get a continuation and a bigger divergence. :D I mean, Nappa without an arm, Raditz showing himself to have more potential than before... the story could change quite a bit!
 
Aww man, and here I was hoping we were going to get a continuation and a bigger divergence. :D I mean, Nappa without an arm, Raditz showing himself to have more potential than before... the story could change quite a bit!

You'll probably get a few more one shots focused on the setting before any major continuation, but a sequel of some sort is likely in the near to mid future.
 
Hey Talos look at this



From the creator of the one who draws the Super Dragon Ball Manga.


Yeah, I've heard of it. I also don't really like some of the things it's done though, so I will most likely be ignoring it for the sake of this. (Well, ignoring a lot of it. I'm not against mining for good stuff to turn around and do in my own way.) The reason I am ignoring it is not entirely because of my own dislike for some of the concepts it contains, but also because I already have a very solid grounding on just who Raditz is in this series, and how his past plays out. Frankly, this whole thing is very much an intentional reference to the early days of the DBZ fandom when very little was known about the Saiyans. My take on Raditz is directly inspired by other, much older fics. one of which is the one that inspired me to start writing dragon ball z fanfictions in the first place. I don't really want to spoil that by taking from a different source, even if that source is arguably canon. What you're getting from me in terms of Raditz is my own personal interpretation of the way the fandom saw him in the early days of the series.

Coincidentally, if you do like my take on Raditz, I'd suggest reading up on Dragoness Eclectic and her own take on him. Since that's the one that directly inspires mine, and while I do try to put my own spin on it, a lot of the concepts I play with come from her. (Raditz's relationship with Bardock, the budding sense of comradre between Nappa and Raditz, Vegeta basically playing the villain role, etc.) Every one of the DBZ stories hosted on her site is complete, and all of them are worth a read, even the old ones. She really goes all into world building too, creating a whole new take on the afterlife, which ironically basically predicated Super's use of gods by a long, loong time.

Frankly, I'm a little leery about linking to her site because I'm afraid it will cost me readership as we play with the same themes, and she does it better than me, but since all of her DBZ stories were completed years ago, you're going to be forced to come back to me for new stuff anyway, so I guess I can give you the link xD.

It's here for those curious. Fanfictional & Original Anime Characters fanfics should probably be read in order. They mostly involve Raditz, but Vegeta Goku and Gohan all play major roles at times. It's got some early fandom cliches, but the writing makes up for it. I particularly enjoyed her work on Mythic Descent which can be surmised as ''Vegeta decides that he doesn't want to wait for the dragon balls and that he's going to punch his way out of hell.'' while actually being really good, and going into the worldbuilding of what hell actually is and who works to maintain it. A lot of original world building in her fics, but if you enjoyed my work you'll probably feel the same for herss, since even at my best, I can only really tie with her better works. (Though, some of the early ones aren't quite that good.)

Worth noting as well for those sick of Saiyans, she has a 20+ chaptered work on that actually has Yamcha as a main character, and focuses on none of the other Z Fighters at all. The plot revolves around Yamcha taking a student to teach, which is pretty cool.

Anyway, I've talked enough about her. If you wanna check out her work, you can follow the link which should bring you to a full list of her DBZ stuff. She also does transformers for those interested, but most of that is slash so I can't vouch for it.

In regards to my own work. I have a continuation planned already, but I want to dedicate a one shot to each of the Saiyans first, so keep an eye out for them! I'll post a warning here when the first one goes live, but after that I'll probably let this thread sink.
 
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Yeah, I've heard of it. I also don't really like some of the things it's done though, so I will most likely be ignoring it for the sake of this. (Well, ignoring a lot of it. I'm not against mining for good stuff to turn around and do in my own way.) The reason I am ignoring it is not entirely because of my own dislike for some of the concepts it contains, but also because I already have a very solid grounding on just who Raditz is in this series, and how his past plays out. Frankly, this whole thing is very much an intentional reference to the early days of the DBZ fandom when very little was known about the Saiyans. My take on Raditz is directly inspired by other, much older fics. one of which is the one that inspired me to start writing dragon ball z fanfictions in the first place. I don't really want to spoil that by taking from a different source, even if that source is arguably canon. What you're getting from me in terms of Raditz is my own personal interpretation of the way the fandom saw him in the early days of the series.

Coincidentally, if you do like my take on Raditz, I'd suggest reading up on Dragoness Eclectic and her own take on him. Since that's the one that directly inspires mine, and while I do try to put my own spin on it, a lot of the concepts I play with come from her. (Raditz's relationship with Bardock, the budding sense of comradre between Nappa and Raditz, Vegeta basically playing the villain role, etc.) Every one of the DBZ stories hosted on her site is complete, and all of them are worth a read, even the old ones. She really goes all into world building too, creating a whole new take on the afterlife, which ironically basically predicated Super's use of gods by a long, loong time.

Frankly, I'm a little leery about linking to her site because I'm afraid it will cost me readership as we play with the same themes, and she does it better than me, but since all of her DBZ stories were completed years ago, you're going to be forced to come back to me for new stuff anyway, so I guess I can give you the link xD.

It's here for those curious. Fanfictional & Original Anime Characters fanfics should probably be read in order. They mostly involve Raditz, but Vegeta Goku and Gohan all play major roles at times. It's got some early fandom cliches, but the writing makes up for it. I particularly enjoyed her work on Mythic Descent which can be surmised as ''Vegeta decides that he doesn't want to wait for the dragon balls and that he's going to punch his way out of hell.'' while actually being really good, and going into the worldbuilding of what hell actually is and who works to maintain it. A lot of original world building in her fics, but if you enjoyed my work you'll probably feel the same for herss, since even at my best, I can only really tie with her better works. (Though, some of the early ones aren't quite that good.)

Worth noting as well for those sick of Saiyans, she has a 20+ chaptered work on that actually has Yamcha as a main character, and focuses on none of the other Z Fighters at all. The plot revolves around Yamcha taking a student to teach, which is pretty cool.

Anyway, I've talked enough about her. If you wanna check out her work, you can follow the link which should bring you to a full list of her DBZ stuff. She also does transformers for those interested, but most of that is slash so I can't vouch for it.

In regards to my own work. I have a continuation planned already, but I want to dedicate a one shot to each of the Saiyans first, so keep an eye out for them! I'll post a warning here when the first one goes live, but after that I'll probably let this thread sink.
Thank you so much i have been trying to find good fanfiction of Dragon Ball for a long time.
 
Okay, so I didn't intend to do this until tomorrow at the earliest, but I had a burst of energy and got the first one-shot done for you all. Hitting Shadows can be found here and it's a one-shot focusing on Raditz, mapping out some of his personality in the wake of the Arkosian attack. Hope you all enjoy it.
 
Was the name of the Arkosians a joke towards the fan-name 'Arcosians' for Frost Demons, by the way?
 
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