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Defence in Depth is dead.
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    • Hi, grommile here.

    Thank you for coming with me on this journey. Your comments have encouraged me, but sadly, I remain profoundly dissatisfied with how I have written this story. I have updated its Index Progress to "Dropped", and it will be left to stand as it is, flawed and unfinished, because I am too conscious of its foundations of sand to keep building on it in its current form.

    The first post of a new attempt at the core narrative, provisionally titled Defensive Design, should be up (in a new thread, of course) in the next few days.
     
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    • I know it may be painful, but if you're ever interested in writing more about your thought process in starting over, I'd be interested to read it.
     
    Compellor said:
    I know it may be painful, but if you're ever interested in writing more about your thought process in starting over, I'd be interested to read it.
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    The central point is that when I resorted to Chandler's Law, I added a "plot tumour" (the Charles Whitman copycat doesn't actually make sense)... then made it a load-bearing component of the narrative (it's the inciting incident of the chain of events that leads Rei to self-actualization, and it also facilitates Misato's reconnection with Kaji), without actually making it not a plot tumour.

    Fixing that would mean rewriting almost everything from "Connexion" onward i.e. about two-thirds of the material already written.
     
    grommile said:
    The first post of a new attempt at the core narrative, provisionally titled Defensive Design, should be up (in a new thread, of course) in the next few days.
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    Will you be dropping a link here to get to it when you do?
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    Fixing that would mean rewriting almost everything from "Connexion" onward i.e. about two-thirds of the material already written.
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    And at that point going back and fixing any other flaws you would have found in earlier parts due to becoming a better writer over time probably just seems the easier option.
     
    grommile said:
    I have updated its Index Progress to "Dropped", and it will be left to stand as it is, flawed and unfinished, because I am too conscious of its foundations of sand to keep building on it in its current form.

    The first post of a new attempt at the core narrative, provisionally titled Defensive Design, should be up (in a new thread, of course) in the next few days.
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    As sad as I am to hear this, I look forward to seeing the premise rise from the ashes.
     
    Well, it was serious fun while it lasted.
    Shame but thanks for letting us know, I can now archive the story for peace of mind and rereading.

    Not what you aspired too, obviously, but I could have lived with the incident being written off as a bunch of nutjobs off the reservation. But well, it is the cheap way out so I can see why the entire influence on the plot annoyed you.
     
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    Sounds like time to re-read! And then, to be hyped for the Second Try!
     
    I'm sad to see this one go, it's been a great ride.

    I hope the rebuild edition goes well. May your muse carry you far, strengthened by practice and unburdened by past mistakes.
     
    A shame things didn't work out this time, but I'm still hella excited for where this is gonna go in the Rebuild. Hope everything's aight with your everything.
     
    I read through this all in one sitting, and I'm with everyone above - I really enjoyed the read and am very much looking forward to what comes next.
     
    Defensive Design is live!
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    • Chapter 1 (fairly short, but it gets me going) is up!

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    Defensive Design [Evangelion] Sci-Fi

    After their dual synchronization with Unit 02 proves to have lingering physiological and psychological consequences, Ikari Shinji and Asuka Langley Sōryū find themselves drawn together despite the flaws they see in one another. (A reboot of the core concept of my previous, abandoned work...
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