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Crushing It [Young Justice/Earth-16 Insert]

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Just some things I found weird. Not from the story, I think that's logical from what I've understood so far.

So far we've seen that he has three main motivations.

1) He wants independence
2) He wants money
3) He wants to be entertained (the thing we discovered this chapter)

Obviously, this includes living, but that's every character's motivation. We already know from the beginning that he doesn't really have the best moral compass, so he doesn't mind doing illegal stuff, but like his adoptive father, being a bad guy doesn't mean you're a dick. (I really wanted to say being a bad guy doesn't mean you're a 'bad' guy, but that wouldn't explain what I meant exactly.)

Firstly from his point of view, he's only a bit more powerful than a normal person (compared to the difference between Superman and a normal person I mean), and he has a limited regenerative ability. Now I don't know if that's his limit since he is only half-alien (forgot Lobo's species) or since he's still growing. Either way, he's not powerful enough to blow a guys head off by accident.

The only weird thing I even found from the story so far is that he even hit the henchman. This lies with his motivations. People have been calling what he's doing stupid, but I think it's the opposite. If you've attracted a Coil(Worm) like villain's attention then obviously if you ignore them, they're going to cause bad things to happen to you. Like the henchman admitted in this chapter, the boss was planning multiple ways to blackmail the mc into joining him.

But why would the main character not agree to this? He doesn't mind doing illegal stuff, he wants money, wants independence, and wants to have a challenge. This deal meets everything he wants.

If he became a hero then yeah, he would have fun, but the problem is, this isn't like worm where you can steal the villain's money, or get paid by the government. You have to have a job to support yourself as well, and he isn't an adult, so he would get sent to the orphanage again since he isn't making money to be independent. This doesn't even take into account the sabotage that the boss guy could do to the main character.

He could make the populace think he's a villain by staging something, and then he'd be treated like a villain.

Plus, how would he even take down the boss guy? We don't even know if he's strong enough yet to take a bullet. His arm was bitten, and yeah that lizard guy's enhanced, but I don't think his bite is stronger than the piercing power of a bullet.

If he goes against this villain, he will most likely be killed, but why would he even do that? Cause the henchman was being an asshole? Yeah, that's totally the smart thing to do, and get an entire organization after your head. Sorry for both the long rant and the last line paragraph here, just annoyed at how many people think heroics is a smart move based on what we know about this guy so far.
 
Really good so far. Like others have said, his current course of action is consistent with what we've seen of his personality thus far and is reasonably logically sound as well. Sure, it might not be the smartest move possible but I think that would be unrealistic for this character. His upbringing will have given him a very different outlook on life to the point that saying "Yeah, I guess that sounds alright" and signing up with a shadowy villain is perfectly sensible.
Mostly I'm really looking forward to him fighting the junior heroes, and when they ask why he's sided with evil he just shrugs as says the benefits are pretty good.
Apathetic villains are very funny to me
 
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Really good so far. Like others have said, his current course of action is consistent with what we've seen of his personality thus far and is reasonably logically sound as well. Sure, it might not be the smartest move possible but I think that would be unrealistic for this character. His upbringing will have given him a very different outlook on life to the point that saying "Yeah, I guess that sounds alright" and signing up with a shadowy villain is perfectly sensible.
Mostly I'm really looking forward to him fighting the junior heroes, and when they ask why he's sided with the evil he just shrugs as says the benefits are pretty good.
Apathetic villains are very funny to me
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I mean the benefits aren't that good like you get teleporters and mountain bases when you become a hero and accolade. hell you could get a brand deal or work in construction to earn money, the benefits are not and should not be the reason he joins the dark side, I mean if you want money, go join the military and kill terrorists so you get the thrill of a fight.
I mean what benefits can the villains offer that Batman can't match. I mean he is richer then all of them combined except lex.
 
Now I'm not saying that he has to be perfect at everything straight away or ever in fact. It's just that this is such a huge idiot ball that it breaks immersion. He's making ridiculous decisions that can't be handwaved away with puberty. And even when he does make a mistake he doesn't learn from them.

Shady dude just admits that he manipulated the hell out of you and then you trust him and get in his nice van for some sweets? Seriously!?!
 
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I understand the complains people show and I do agree that it's a Idiot ball and maybe i did write myself into or didn't do a good enough execution to justify it but him not acting as he did in that part would have been equally immersion breaking should have he taken a more analytical approach all of a sudden compared to the previous parts. As for learning from his mistakes It's barely been a week and the mistake is just sinking in to be followed by a reflection period and reason for him to act smarter then at how he started.
 
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Dream It
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    • Dream It

    New York City
    November 16, 1:25 EDT

    The moment the window rolled down and the man opened his mouth I was already moving. My hand struck out at superhuman speeds hitting him pinpoint in a pressure point around his neck that would render him unconscious instantly. Before the driver could react and bolt, I had opened the door and moved myself in while pushing the unconscious man to the side.

    "You will drive to where I tell you to and you will live to see another day. Don't think that I can't take you down in a blink." to emphasize my point I pressed my fingers against his neck.

    The response I got was a gulp and the reeving of the engine as the driver saw the wisdom of following along.

    Queens
    November 16, 2:00 EDT

    This warehouse was long abounded so it had been easy to set up shop and thinker freely without disturbance. Of course, faking some deeds and some bribes insured that no one checked what was really happening or attempted to buy the land. Money to finance it was easy once I raided the gang that had offed my father and took everything they possessed.

    Of course, I couldn't let go the driver now that he had seen my hideout but that was easily corrected with a simple device that erased his memories of the last 24h, he still would wonder why he lost his pinky fingers but hey my inventions were not perfect and always had to have some deadliness built into them.

    Walking in I placed the man that had tried to approach me into the interrogation room and strapped him to Answer Chair. I didn't have to wait long after that for him to regain his senses after dosing him with some cold water.

    Spluttering and gasping he asked "Wha, where am I?"

    "That is not important instead I want you to tell me who exactly you are and who you work for?" was all I said.

    "Ha do you really think this will work. No matter what you do you won't make me talk. Look kid just untie me and we can forget this ever happened."

    Ah the typical response of seeing that I was just a kid made me just shake my head. It was always the same old act no matter the person. I really wished I didn't have to do this but I had to get my answers.

    "Let me tell you short story. You see I'm not from around here or well half of me isn't. My father is an alien a really vicious one that can stand up to superman in strength. That is not the worst part about him though for you see he may look brutish but he is quite ingenious when it comes to making something of the deadly variety."

    Circling the chair once I continued with my monologue "It was his genius that actually helped him wipe out the population of his planet. How is that relevant you ask? Well I inherited this ability to thinker and create things. The very chair you are sitting in is a complex machine that interfaces with every nerve of your body. Its goal is to cause extreme pain while keeping you lucid the entire time. There is a bit more of how it works but I'm afraid it would go over your head."

    "You won't make me talk."

    "That's what they all say at first and then they beg." With those final words I activated the chair and an instant later Mr. Ominous Recruiter was subjected to pain he could never even imagine till now.

    It took only fifteen minutes for him to break and tell him his name and his whole life story. The information I got was quite interesting and I could use to my advantage and accelerate my plans of acquiring assets.

    In a few days The League of Shadows was planning on raiding a facility named the Colony which had refused to work with them. It was the perfect opportunity and I even had few days to prepare.

    Luck proved to be on my side as Ra's had sent his daughter to lead the raid and well no matter how deadly of a combatant you are if you do not expect it, an air carried paralyzing agent will take you out. With her in my grasps I was able to implant a chip into her brain that slowly rewrote it until all she felt towards me was completely loyalty.

    Truly the galaxy was a safer place since Lobo didn't employ his penchant for invention of deadly contraptions if I was already able to do this at 14. The next few weeks were spent slowly converting the league or well Han and Talia doing that while I locked myself in a lab with the professor that had initially refused to work with the assassins. With him we were able to reproduce a serum that temporally suppressed the human portion of my DNA and gave me the full benefits of my alien origins even though my body hadn't fully developed.

    With it done I was comfortable in facing Ra's with a little cheating of course. He clearly was not ready to be ambushed by all of his assassin in his home. Still he did take out quite a lot of them before I joined in the fight. Practically unkillable at this point and the whole room being gassed with the same paralyzing toxin I had used before I didn't have too much of a hard time defeating him.

    Taking a look at his unconscious form I waved with a hand before saying "Give him the "Orientation" I still have use of him."

    The brainwashed assassins quickly obeyed my orders and dragged him away just as Talia and Han entered the room and kneeled before me. Looking at each other it was Han that spoke "With this the Shadows are yours. What comes next Supreme Leader?"

    Humming I crossed my hands behind my back before replying "We'll begin scouting and acquiring of assets that will prove useful to the cause and as for what will be doing, well that's simple. We will dismantle The Light and then……... The Justice League. Such is the will of Crushseid."
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    November 26, 03:35 EDT

    Eyes flying open I stumbled out of the bed and fell hard on the floor. I don't know what startled me awake but for some reason I felt like I had just had a really weird dream.
     
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    • You asshole! I actually thought you were shooting your own work in the head up until that last part. Well played.
     
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