FinalPyre
Ennui Engine
I enjoy her steady growth and acceptance of her power. Setting a "be nice to me" creature on the girl was a nifty trick, though full of fridge horror. She'd make a frightful monster if she sent out creatures like "kill people" or "do horrible things." It'd be almost impossible to trace it back to her, as well.
Huh, I hadn't realized that Taylor is basically a more stealthy Simurgh-lite, whispering into people's ears to get them to do what she wants on a micro scale. I'd guess that things like the screen trick have a minimal affect at best, and that saying something like "kill the person next to you" might get the thought to pass through their mind, but not act on it.
If she made some projection of Murderous Intent, however, and then did a screen trick like that...
Typo and other thingy:
find some humour what I saw
find some humour in what I saw
and then returned to reality just in time...
... and then dropped out of the Other Place.
She leaves (the Other Place), then is suddenly back in, then leaves again. Maybe change "just in time" to "just long enough"
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