All the Worlds: A Stage (Jumpchain SI)

Three Free Supplement (Replaces Body Mod):

Eternal Atoms
(Source: Bastard!!) -

Unlimited Growth (Source: Bastard!!)

Sha Nagba Imuru (Source: Fate/Legends: Oasis of Fantasy)
I think that's a bit too OP. One of the interesting things about a jumpchain is the growth. Maybe a weakened variant of this skills would be better (up to you though).

The unlimited growth is fine, hell there are a number of jumps that give exactly that.

As for the 3 states in one, some jumps give you an almost un-killable body (like the builder jumpchain), but the regeneration is to too broken. I think you should change it so the regen of all 3 aspects is equal to the highest one of the 3. Which will most likely be Spirit (mana), depending on your future build.

As for the omniscience skill, I think that should be nerfed big time (though I could be misinterpreting it). Maybe see what is truly there (to the limit of your understanding) would probably be better. Letting you see what is there but without the knowledge it won't make sense. As for the mental boost for planning I recommend interpreting it as, seeing the truth of the world allows you to see how events are connected (if you know what they are and are actively Looking for them), this helps you plan for things you usually had no right to know.

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With that out of the way, amazing first chapter. Too many jumpchain stories read like journal entries (lack genuine human interaction and character building). Your character feels alive in a real world, not just someone seeing the world as a story and doing what he wants as he subconsciously (the author) doesn't view the world as real. It's too early to tell if this will continue, but it is definitely a good start.
 
I think that's a bit too OP. One of the interesting things about a jumpchain is the growth. Maybe a weakened variant of this skills would be better (up to you though).

The unlimited growth is fine, hell there are a number of jumps that give exactly that.

As for the 3 states in one, some jumps give you an almost un-killable body (like the builder jumpchain), but the regeneration is to too broken. I think you should change it so the regen of all 3 aspects is equal to the highest one of the 3. Which will most likely be Spirit (mana), depending on your future build.

As for the omniscience skill, I think that should be nerfed big time (though I could be misinterpreting it). Maybe see what is truly there (to the limit of your understanding) would probably be better. Letting you see what is there but without the knowledge it won't make sense. As for the mental boost for planning I recommend interpreting it as, seeing the truth of the world allows you to see how events are connected (if you know what they are and are actively Looking for them), this helps you plan for things you usually had no right to know.

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With that out of the way, amazing first chapter. Too many jumpchain stories read like journal entries (lack genuine human interaction and character building). Your character feels alive in a real world, not just someone seeing the world as a story and doing what he wants as he subconsciously (the author) doesn't view the world as real. It's too early to tell if this will continue, but it is definitely a good start.
This fanfic is about potential and a design not based on villans but making story intresting since that type of stories never work good with too op mc's since villans would be too weak compared to it

No what focus is based on making story intresting and diverse since otherwise it would not work

Plus considerong even when living in a harsh enviorment like water tribe which's diet is heavily based on meat and protein food and still not putting decent muscle and even his fighting form being weak it seems like he will need that potential to make something decent of himself
 
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It won't happen. I have a personal rule: If I can't write even a single interesting chapter in a Jump, I'm not taking that Jump.





This is partially a result of Sha Nagba Imuru, and partially because my favorite character in ATLA is Iroh. (I'm looking forward to writing some interactions between Hakko and Iroh, to be honest.)

I do have some sage/mentor scenes in mind for this jump. I'm not sure if it'll carry forward into the next jumps or not, but you can expect a few here in ATLA.


I am getting heavy all according to my calculations vibes
 
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