Also, I'd rework the part in yellow so that it comes over as less us wanting to be Judge Dredd- aka: enforce the law, and more "there IS no higher authority". Just phrasing stuff.
When your sig says "It's currently Thursday, April 7, 2015.", is that the IC date for PMAS? Wiki says timeline was set at 2011, and it even has the matching moon phases and all.
as the current version seems a bit too keen on trying to get Sayaka to agree that we were RIGHT?