Trailer-Park Occultism
- Thread starter Donald Darf
- Start date
- Original Fantasy Modern
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- Tags
- original riot quest
I'll go with it anyway since I'd like to see how I'd handle it
- Location
- US
- Pronouns
- He/They
So far, I've really enjoyed your worldbuilding. It feels like a real community of people who've been dealt something of a poor hand. I'm looking forward to seeing what they all do.
Results 6
Mr Skeet brings Kaine and Zach along, all armed with blunt improvised weapons, they all go check out that foggy clearing and try to figure out whats going on there, Kaine is gonna write down what he sees cause he knows his kids will wanna know what happens
Together they wander into the woods, armed with some rolling pins, hockey sticks, some bas, and Zach brought a big ol wrench
Carefully through the woods they tiptoed, staying in a formation where they could look in all directions at once, slowly but surely reaching that clearing where Mr Skeet swears he almost got drowned at
The small sparkling river was still there, the clearing, and the ominous silhouettes of circus tents were in the distance once more
But no intelligent animals were sighted
They creeped towards the tents following the purple stream, carefully pulled apart the entrance curtains, and entered the dark beneath the shade, illuminating the empty chairs were holes torn in the big top, and the dirt circle in the centre where the magic should happen was lifeless as well
Except for a tophat floating in the middle of the room, leaking the purple sparkly water, the origin point of it
After-
Rock Paper Scissors roll is 1 = Skeet Lost And Has To poke The Hat With A Hockey Stick
-An intense rock paper scissors battle, Skeet sadly lost and stepped forward to poke the hat with a stick like the roll result described
It turned then spat out a bunch of sparkles in Skeet's face, then he felt something, a feeling like there was more to him than there was before
Like his soul grew more complex, something rooted itself within him and he rooted himself within it, becoming extensions of eachother
He took off his cowboy hat, reached in, and his arm went elboy deep, Zach and Kaine ran forward to congratulate him on the new.... pocket dimension hat? They guess?
Zach picked up the tophat and shook it too
"OPEN UP! AND GIVE ME SOMETHING COOL TOO!"
The magic tophat shook and then spewed out a tidal wave of intelligent forest critters and sparkly purple water, the critters got trapped inside somehow and were pretty pissed, unluckily for the trio they looked like good punching bags
So all 3 ran home immediately covered in scratches and bites, soaked in purple water
But at least Skeet got to say "Holy shit guys! Look! I've got a magic hat!"
And Arron would reply "That is not what I'm focused on!" As he tried to patch up the group of trailer-trash
Mr Skeet
- Can reach into any headwear that he is currently wearing to access a pocket dimension (There is even a sparkly effect), he can only fit things in there that could squeeze through a hat, and he can access the same pocket space from any hat as long as he wore it beforehand, it left little sparkles on his fingers as a side effect
X Foggy Clearing
Foggy Circus
- Clearing obscured by fog with small rivers of purple sparkly water coming from tents hidden in the mist
- The tents are large, abandoned, and have a floating top hat leaking the sparkly water
- Intelligent forest critters hang out here
Rory checks if he can predict the FUTURE with his cards
Such versatility is beyond the strength of his power it seems, not matter how hard he tried he never got a vision of what may come from anything other then his pieces of paper
He tried having incense burning
Sacrificing a small rat
Humming in pagan languages he found online
Even waving a stick at the deck
But nothing, he got so frustated he slammed the deck down in anger, and one of the cards flew towards a ceremonial candle and was destroyed faster then he could react thanks to his prediction abilities, then felt card disconnect from him
Then he began to panic, grabbed another card from a different deck, and prayed he could replace destroyed cards with replacements if necessary
He felt the connection reform, and it was confirmed, he sighed in relief, he at least learnt something new
Rory Mcclain
X - Has the ability to predict the future of his tarot card deck, specifically just the cards, no matter where they are he can tell what'll most likely happen to them, if they're likely to get lost, land in a specific place, get taken somewhere, all that jazz
- Has the ability to predict the future of his tarot card deck, specifically just the cards, no matter where they are he can tell what'll most likely happen to them, if they're likely to get lost, land in a specific place, get taken somewhere, all that jazz, he can also replace old cards as long as its necessary like if they were destroyed
Ellie-May accidentally cuts her right hand while chopping vegetables and a drop of golden blood falls onto her hawk necklace.
She was chopping up somes vegetables for a casserole and was thinking about.... stuff, like how all this magic stuff fit into the grand scheme of God's design, the angel encounter, the meeting with those strange folks at the community centre
There was a sting, ouch, she lost focus and cut herself by accident she raised the hand up to her face, it's so strange how her flesh was so easily altered, everywhere else could produce red
But this specific hand bled gold, a mark of an otherworldly meeting
A single drop of glistening blood slid off her palm and landed on the hawk necklace, she felt a stronger connection to the necklace now... she always did of course, her big bro gave it to her when she was younger....
This will require some testing
An older resident who knew the original landlord tells the story of the robotic elephant mascot.
Arata Tatsuya was an old and tired man, not exactly wise but he just saw a lot, folks mostly came to him to hear of the interesting stuff he saw and not much life advice, cause he said it before and he'll say it again "I honestly have no idea how I'm still alive, I fucking improvised all that"
As he sat there, surrounded by Ava and her many bunnies, Sally sitting cross legged, Zach with a cooler full of soda he was sharing, and Arron just napping after a long hard days work, he began his tale
"Okay, this was back when I was just some house cleaner, I cleaned up real estate for the guy that would get this place all set up, but! He needed a brand, well not exactly needed, but he wanted to catch peoples attention, and those who are paying attention are far more likely to be customers"
Ava asked "So the mascot has no deeper meaning?"
"Pretty much, how the owner got the rights to the mascot is the interesting part"
Ava nodded along, taking a sip of sprite offered by Zach
Arata continued "Okay, there was also this failing vacuum making company, going down the drain due to some bad luck and malfunctioning products, it was called Tin Elephants and one of their products had a faulty off switch that resulted in a man getting hospitalized when-"
He blocked Sally's ears
"-his penis got stuck in one and it didn't turn off for an hour, it was a battery powered one and he was too busy writhing in pain to pull the power source out, the battery panel was finnicky so the lack of focus didn't help"
Zach chuckled "I bet I'll die in a sillier way than that"
Sally pulled Arata's hands off her ears, he pocketed his fingers since he forgot he was doing that "Like getting eaten by a giraffe!"
"I bet you'll just get your hand stuck inside a claw machine, like last time but more permanently" Jokingly said Ava, to which Zach nodded unironically in agreement, he could see that happening
Arata continued "I'll decorate the funeral with stolen shit from the circus, it'll match how much of a clown you were in life, anyway after the Tin Elephant vacuums failed, the guy who made it divorced his wife and she took like half of everything he owns, including copyright of the mascot, her ex didn't really care at that point, then she married the guy who would found this trailer park, so as he was building it, thinking about what kinda eye catcher to put up, she remembered a copyright she had laying around in the back of the house, and thats the story of the mascot"
"... so what you're saying is-" Said Sally
"She took the elephant in the divorce" Arata finished
Arata Tatsuya
- An old retired janitor whose currently 69 (Nice) years old, he has tons of experience cleaning various houses, many morsels of hygiene knowledge, and knows the best places to buy cheap but effective cleaning supplies, he could make a love hotel feel cleaner given enough time
-Tons of knowledge on soap operas, old and new, loving the various melodramatic lives he gets to be the audience to, he could recite many lines from these shows almost perfectly, though with obvious differences since he can't really mimic tone well
- Has a fear of heights after seeing a man jump off a building and splatter infront of him when he was a kid, he always brings an umbrella when in town, he knows it's unlikely for him to witness another but it keeps him calm to be prepared
- Loves to bare witness to the stories of others lives, for people to share whatever moments in their existence come to mind with him, soap operas scratch a similar itch of seeing the stories of others but without actually spying on people
- Loathes when people are straight up slobs, not leaving a couple clothes on the floor or forgetting to take out the trash for awhile, but those who barely wash themselves, greasy nests of filth, horrific piles of random rotting organic and inorganic matter that are so warped they're unrecognizable as whatever they were before, THOSE kinds of slobs
- Taste tests Skeet's burger recipe ideas, he regrets it but doesn't wanna make Skeet feel bad, so he just powers through it, giving the best cooking tips he can to hopefully alleviate his suffering
Together they wander into the woods, armed with some rolling pins, hockey sticks, some bas, and Zach brought a big ol wrench
Carefully through the woods they tiptoed, staying in a formation where they could look in all directions at once, slowly but surely reaching that clearing where Mr Skeet swears he almost got drowned at
The small sparkling river was still there, the clearing, and the ominous silhouettes of circus tents were in the distance once more
But no intelligent animals were sighted
They creeped towards the tents following the purple stream, carefully pulled apart the entrance curtains, and entered the dark beneath the shade, illuminating the empty chairs were holes torn in the big top, and the dirt circle in the centre where the magic should happen was lifeless as well
Except for a tophat floating in the middle of the room, leaking the purple sparkly water, the origin point of it
After-
Rock Paper Scissors roll is 1 = Skeet Lost And Has To poke The Hat With A Hockey Stick
-An intense rock paper scissors battle, Skeet sadly lost and stepped forward to poke the hat with a stick like the roll result described
It turned then spat out a bunch of sparkles in Skeet's face, then he felt something, a feeling like there was more to him than there was before
Like his soul grew more complex, something rooted itself within him and he rooted himself within it, becoming extensions of eachother
He took off his cowboy hat, reached in, and his arm went elboy deep, Zach and Kaine ran forward to congratulate him on the new.... pocket dimension hat? They guess?
Zach picked up the tophat and shook it too
"OPEN UP! AND GIVE ME SOMETHING COOL TOO!"
The magic tophat shook and then spewed out a tidal wave of intelligent forest critters and sparkly purple water, the critters got trapped inside somehow and were pretty pissed, unluckily for the trio they looked like good punching bags
So all 3 ran home immediately covered in scratches and bites, soaked in purple water
But at least Skeet got to say "Holy shit guys! Look! I've got a magic hat!"
And Arron would reply "That is not what I'm focused on!" As he tried to patch up the group of trailer-trash
Mr Skeet
- Can reach into any headwear that he is currently wearing to access a pocket dimension (There is even a sparkly effect), he can only fit things in there that could squeeze through a hat, and he can access the same pocket space from any hat as long as he wore it beforehand, it left little sparkles on his fingers as a side effect
X Foggy Clearing
Foggy Circus
- Clearing obscured by fog with small rivers of purple sparkly water coming from tents hidden in the mist
- The tents are large, abandoned, and have a floating top hat leaking the sparkly water
- Intelligent forest critters hang out here
Rory checks if he can predict the FUTURE with his cards
Such versatility is beyond the strength of his power it seems, not matter how hard he tried he never got a vision of what may come from anything other then his pieces of paper
He tried having incense burning
Sacrificing a small rat
Humming in pagan languages he found online
Even waving a stick at the deck
But nothing, he got so frustated he slammed the deck down in anger, and one of the cards flew towards a ceremonial candle and was destroyed faster then he could react thanks to his prediction abilities, then felt card disconnect from him
Then he began to panic, grabbed another card from a different deck, and prayed he could replace destroyed cards with replacements if necessary
He felt the connection reform, and it was confirmed, he sighed in relief, he at least learnt something new
Rory Mcclain
X - Has the ability to predict the future of his tarot card deck, specifically just the cards, no matter where they are he can tell what'll most likely happen to them, if they're likely to get lost, land in a specific place, get taken somewhere, all that jazz
- Has the ability to predict the future of his tarot card deck, specifically just the cards, no matter where they are he can tell what'll most likely happen to them, if they're likely to get lost, land in a specific place, get taken somewhere, all that jazz, he can also replace old cards as long as its necessary like if they were destroyed
Ellie-May accidentally cuts her right hand while chopping vegetables and a drop of golden blood falls onto her hawk necklace.
She was chopping up somes vegetables for a casserole and was thinking about.... stuff, like how all this magic stuff fit into the grand scheme of God's design, the angel encounter, the meeting with those strange folks at the community centre
There was a sting, ouch, she lost focus and cut herself by accident she raised the hand up to her face, it's so strange how her flesh was so easily altered, everywhere else could produce red
But this specific hand bled gold, a mark of an otherworldly meeting
A single drop of glistening blood slid off her palm and landed on the hawk necklace, she felt a stronger connection to the necklace now... she always did of course, her big bro gave it to her when she was younger....
This will require some testing
An older resident who knew the original landlord tells the story of the robotic elephant mascot.
Arata Tatsuya was an old and tired man, not exactly wise but he just saw a lot, folks mostly came to him to hear of the interesting stuff he saw and not much life advice, cause he said it before and he'll say it again "I honestly have no idea how I'm still alive, I fucking improvised all that"
As he sat there, surrounded by Ava and her many bunnies, Sally sitting cross legged, Zach with a cooler full of soda he was sharing, and Arron just napping after a long hard days work, he began his tale
"Okay, this was back when I was just some house cleaner, I cleaned up real estate for the guy that would get this place all set up, but! He needed a brand, well not exactly needed, but he wanted to catch peoples attention, and those who are paying attention are far more likely to be customers"
Ava asked "So the mascot has no deeper meaning?"
"Pretty much, how the owner got the rights to the mascot is the interesting part"
Ava nodded along, taking a sip of sprite offered by Zach
Arata continued "Okay, there was also this failing vacuum making company, going down the drain due to some bad luck and malfunctioning products, it was called Tin Elephants and one of their products had a faulty off switch that resulted in a man getting hospitalized when-"
He blocked Sally's ears
"-his penis got stuck in one and it didn't turn off for an hour, it was a battery powered one and he was too busy writhing in pain to pull the power source out, the battery panel was finnicky so the lack of focus didn't help"
Zach chuckled "I bet I'll die in a sillier way than that"
Sally pulled Arata's hands off her ears, he pocketed his fingers since he forgot he was doing that "Like getting eaten by a giraffe!"
"I bet you'll just get your hand stuck inside a claw machine, like last time but more permanently" Jokingly said Ava, to which Zach nodded unironically in agreement, he could see that happening
Arata continued "I'll decorate the funeral with stolen shit from the circus, it'll match how much of a clown you were in life, anyway after the Tin Elephant vacuums failed, the guy who made it divorced his wife and she took like half of everything he owns, including copyright of the mascot, her ex didn't really care at that point, then she married the guy who would found this trailer park, so as he was building it, thinking about what kinda eye catcher to put up, she remembered a copyright she had laying around in the back of the house, and thats the story of the mascot"
"... so what you're saying is-" Said Sally
"She took the elephant in the divorce" Arata finished
Arata Tatsuya
- An old retired janitor whose currently 69 (Nice) years old, he has tons of experience cleaning various houses, many morsels of hygiene knowledge, and knows the best places to buy cheap but effective cleaning supplies, he could make a love hotel feel cleaner given enough time
-Tons of knowledge on soap operas, old and new, loving the various melodramatic lives he gets to be the audience to, he could recite many lines from these shows almost perfectly, though with obvious differences since he can't really mimic tone well
- Has a fear of heights after seeing a man jump off a building and splatter infront of him when he was a kid, he always brings an umbrella when in town, he knows it's unlikely for him to witness another but it keeps him calm to be prepared
- Loves to bare witness to the stories of others lives, for people to share whatever moments in their existence come to mind with him, soap operas scratch a similar itch of seeing the stories of others but without actually spying on people
- Loathes when people are straight up slobs, not leaving a couple clothes on the floor or forgetting to take out the trash for awhile, but those who barely wash themselves, greasy nests of filth, horrific piles of random rotting organic and inorganic matter that are so warped they're unrecognizable as whatever they were before, THOSE kinds of slobs
- Taste tests Skeet's burger recipe ideas, he regrets it but doesn't wanna make Skeet feel bad, so he just powers through it, giving the best cooking tips he can to hopefully alleviate his suffering
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Actions 7
Choose A Single Action Each
[] Have Arron ask at the community centre if anyone is willing to teach him and some of the residents, defensive, offensive, healing, whatever kinda magic that could help keep the Trailer Park safe
[] Kaine tries to bond with his children by bringing them somewhere to eat
[] Arata helps Ellie-May experiment with the golden blood on her hawk necklace
[] Write-In
[] Have Arron ask at the community centre if anyone is willing to teach him and some of the residents, defensive, offensive, healing, whatever kinda magic that could help keep the Trailer Park safe
[] Kaine tries to bond with his children by bringing them somewhere to eat
[] Arata helps Ellie-May experiment with the golden blood on her hawk necklace
[] Write-In
Results 7
Arata helps Ellie-May experiment with the golden blood on her hawk necklace
Rolled a 92 = 92
In Ellie-May's home they poured a couple more drops of golden blood on the car ornament, she had Tatsuya help since Arron would probably be against messing anything magic without good reason after what happened with Skeet, Kaine, and Zach, but Arata was less of the role model type then Arron and was on good terms so he was solid choice
Arata read through a couple hundred verses online to check any abrahamic stuff involving golden blood, Ellie-May decided to do one last test and whispered the final words her brother said to her into the necklace "Take this cool shiny shit"
And in a burst of heavenly light, it was no longer a simple ornament, it was an object of POWER
Apparently the golden blood from an angel's touch, the emotional significance of the item to the owner, and the fact it was put together was evocative enough to cause something magical to find it fitting
The hawk turned into some golden glowing sword, radiant with holy light
"AAAAAA!"
"AAAAAA!"
Ellie-May and Arata began screaming, she threw the blade away and it hit the wall aftering returning back to ornament mode, the both of them immediately kicked the door open and ran out of the trailer yelling like banshees
A minute later after the gas leak causing them to freak out like that was fixed, they went back inside, picked up the hawk ornament, and Ellie-May raised the blade into the air dramatically and named it "The HAWK-SABER!" After a weapon her son's character had on his dnd sheet
Ellie-May Farley
X - Wears a necklace her big brother gave her before he died from lung cancer, it used to be a hood ornament from his car, shaped like a hawk, he loved to street race
- Wears a necklace her big brother gave her before he died from lung cancer, it used to be a hood ornament from his car, shaped like a hawk, he loved to street race, after being blessed by her golden blood it became the HAWK-SABER
HAWK-SABER
- Hood ornament blessed by golden blood from Ellie-May after a angelic encounter, can transform into a badass angelic blade
Rory walks around town looking for interesting things.
Encounter roll is 2 = Bad Encounter
Rory was having a pleasant walk through town, and heard something from an old building, something like a baby crying, he turned to look around, checking if this was magic or not by the reactions of passers-by
No reaction to the cries, he got his cards out and held some close to his vitals so he could at least predict if something were to aim at them
He walked up the derelict stairs, beams of light illuminating the dust filled halls through broken shards of window glass
It smelled like dust and mold, a forgotten place, there was some recent graffiti on the wall, and as he got closer he heard crying alongside that of the baby
Then he saw it, an old wooden door where both sets of sobbing came from, Rory pressed his air against it, the wood was soft yet dry, white pain peeling off, the scent of lead in it
He grabbed the rusted handle, being careful to not cut himself on it, and slowly opened it, allowing both cries to become more clear
It was a playroom, it hasn't been used in a long time, the blue sky wallpaper fading from the years, a thin layer of dust covering a leftover toy just laying on the ground, a crib was in the centre of the room, that's where the crying of the baby came from
The other sound was coming from a graffiti artist, as proven by the paint on his hoodie, the bag full of spray paint, and a dropped spray can beside him as he lay on the floor, uncontrollably sobbing
Rory stepped towards the crib, leaned over, and looked within i-
Our trailer-trash walked home as well, when he went to sleep at night, no matter what kinda dream he had, there was always faint crying in the distance
Rory Mcclain
- Hears the crying of a baby in the distance of his dreams
Rolled a 92 = 92
In Ellie-May's home they poured a couple more drops of golden blood on the car ornament, she had Tatsuya help since Arron would probably be against messing anything magic without good reason after what happened with Skeet, Kaine, and Zach, but Arata was less of the role model type then Arron and was on good terms so he was solid choice
Arata read through a couple hundred verses online to check any abrahamic stuff involving golden blood, Ellie-May decided to do one last test and whispered the final words her brother said to her into the necklace "Take this cool shiny shit"
And in a burst of heavenly light, it was no longer a simple ornament, it was an object of POWER
Apparently the golden blood from an angel's touch, the emotional significance of the item to the owner, and the fact it was put together was evocative enough to cause something magical to find it fitting
The hawk turned into some golden glowing sword, radiant with holy light
"AAAAAA!"
"AAAAAA!"
Ellie-May and Arata began screaming, she threw the blade away and it hit the wall aftering returning back to ornament mode, the both of them immediately kicked the door open and ran out of the trailer yelling like banshees
A minute later after the gas leak causing them to freak out like that was fixed, they went back inside, picked up the hawk ornament, and Ellie-May raised the blade into the air dramatically and named it "The HAWK-SABER!" After a weapon her son's character had on his dnd sheet
Ellie-May Farley
X - Wears a necklace her big brother gave her before he died from lung cancer, it used to be a hood ornament from his car, shaped like a hawk, he loved to street race
- Wears a necklace her big brother gave her before he died from lung cancer, it used to be a hood ornament from his car, shaped like a hawk, he loved to street race, after being blessed by her golden blood it became the HAWK-SABER
HAWK-SABER
- Hood ornament blessed by golden blood from Ellie-May after a angelic encounter, can transform into a badass angelic blade
Rory walks around town looking for interesting things.
Encounter roll is 2 = Bad Encounter
Rory was having a pleasant walk through town, and heard something from an old building, something like a baby crying, he turned to look around, checking if this was magic or not by the reactions of passers-by
No reaction to the cries, he got his cards out and held some close to his vitals so he could at least predict if something were to aim at them
He walked up the derelict stairs, beams of light illuminating the dust filled halls through broken shards of window glass
It smelled like dust and mold, a forgotten place, there was some recent graffiti on the wall, and as he got closer he heard crying alongside that of the baby
Then he saw it, an old wooden door where both sets of sobbing came from, Rory pressed his air against it, the wood was soft yet dry, white pain peeling off, the scent of lead in it
He grabbed the rusted handle, being careful to not cut himself on it, and slowly opened it, allowing both cries to become more clear
It was a playroom, it hasn't been used in a long time, the blue sky wallpaper fading from the years, a thin layer of dust covering a leftover toy just laying on the ground, a crib was in the centre of the room, that's where the crying of the baby came from
The other sound was coming from a graffiti artist, as proven by the paint on his hoodie, the bag full of spray paint, and a dropped spray can beside him as he lay on the floor, uncontrollably sobbing
Rory stepped towards the crib, leaned over, and looked within i-
LOOK AT THEIR LITTLE FACE/HANDS/EYES LOOK AT THE LITTLE BUNDLE OF JOY AND POTENTIAL
WHY WAS I BORN IF I WAS TO BE TAKEN AWAY SO SOON?
LITTLE HUSK LITTLE HUSK LITTLE HUSK LITTLE HUSK LITTLE HUSK
THEY'RE HOLDING YOUR HAND AND GIGGLING SO SWEETLY, SO PRECIOUS
THE TOYS NEVER GOT TO BE PLAYED WITH
MOMMA'S LEANING ON THE EDGE, SHE IS SHEDDING ENOUGH TEARS TO FLOOD THE EARTH
THIS IS NO PLACE OF JOY
Rory was shaken awake by the graffiti artist who looked into his teary eyes knowingly, he sat there holding Rory's hand to comfort him for moments that felt like hours, which the young fortune teller was grateful for, then the graffiti artist let go, got his stuff, and silently walked awayWHY WAS I BORN IF I WAS TO BE TAKEN AWAY SO SOON?
LITTLE HUSK LITTLE HUSK LITTLE HUSK LITTLE HUSK LITTLE HUSK
THEY'RE HOLDING YOUR HAND AND GIGGLING SO SWEETLY, SO PRECIOUS
THE TOYS NEVER GOT TO BE PLAYED WITH
MOMMA'S LEANING ON THE EDGE, SHE IS SHEDDING ENOUGH TEARS TO FLOOD THE EARTH
THIS IS NO PLACE OF JOY
Our trailer-trash walked home as well, when he went to sleep at night, no matter what kinda dream he had, there was always faint crying in the distance
Rory Mcclain
- Hears the crying of a baby in the distance of his dreams
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Actions 8
Choose A Single Action Each
[] Arron tries to ask for magic lessons at the community centre meetings
- [] Ava tags along to get the info for that corrupt cop dude
[] Mr Skeet tries to do cool tricks with his new ability
[] Sally asks for lore of the Celestial Courts
[] Zach and Kaine go looking around town for stuff to do
[] Write-In
[] Arron tries to ask for magic lessons at the community centre meetings
- [] Ava tags along to get the info for that corrupt cop dude
[] Mr Skeet tries to do cool tricks with his new ability
[] Sally asks for lore of the Celestial Courts
[] Zach and Kaine go looking around town for stuff to do
[] Write-In
[X] Sally asks for lore of the Celestial Courts
Until this update and the " [] Ava tags along to get the info for that corrupt cop dude" option I had no clue what was even going on with that guy. Best guess was a sort of intervention a la "Stop making a scene and get up to date with the local community so you don't cause trouble", but that didn't really fit and wouldn't explain why he had such an extreme reaction. But I guess he was just looking for the first best person in the know to black mail?
intimidation tactics I guess
And considering Ava is a random obvious beginner who willingly decided to walk into a police station, horrible place to go when you're a wizard for various reasons, she would probably not know many spells to defend herself
Hell, she might not be the only one blackmailed by him
The problem isn't his reasoning in-character, it's that his behavior was incomprehensible as a reader.
My experience was "What? Why is he so mad? What is he even telling her to do?" and a bit later "Why do they think he's corrupt?".
If he actually ended with something like "Pay attention and report to me what you hear." rather than just that she should go to the meetings, then that would clear up a lot, because it would communicate the motive, what he gets out of it.
I actually have a surprise for why he didn't say anything about reporting
And thanks for the tip, I'll get back to the scene and make some changes
Edit: Made a couple small changes, thanks for the criticism, also I thought you'd think he was corrupt because he was literally threatening to abuse his position to harm someone if they didn't comply to his demands
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