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burnThe rat will make my hand numb and the rest of me surn with the cold.
them.""No, Gul'Dan. You must not do this. Your demon allies will betray you after you conquer this new world. They will not give you godlike powers, for then you would no longer have a need to serve them."
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Can you remove the [COLOR] tags in the BBcode editor? Mark the text in chapter 1 and press None in Text Color—you can remove the tags in BBcode editor if this doesn't work. The white text is somewhat distracting.
Seems pretty interesting.
Say, what's up with the prologue's formatting? Chapter 1 has it while the first doesn't.
Notes: I changed the parentheses to em dashes, but that's really just a matter of preference.The Warcraft franchise is Blizzard's property.
Author's note: feel free to give feedback, and I will edit accordingly.
Prologue:
He was an alchemist, specializing in healing salves and antidotes to various diseases. He would sell his potions and recipes for a modest price—enough to get by on, but not so much that the average citizen could not afford it.
She was a battlemage, specializing in frost magic. She worked for the Kirin Tor, guarding the city from attackers—typically the occasional gnoll tribe, easily repelled with a little hail—though she wanted to do more with her abilities. She did not wish for an enemy, but some part of her would have been more satisfied if there was one.
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"How about an Elvish name? Perhaps name him after councillor Kael'Thas?"
"The idea is good, though I would rather the name be something unique, that he will not judge himself in relation to the Councillor, but by his own merits alone."
"A similar name, then? Perhaps… Kel'Thuzad?"
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10 years later. 9 years before the portal opens.
His mother seemed calm enough now. Her sadness after the pox first claimed his father had mostly subsided, though she was still far more somber than before. Now seemed a reasonable time to ask.
"Mother, what is death?"
"Death is… simply the passage from our world to the next."
"Where is the next world? What is it like?"
She was silent for a moment.
"I—the Kirin Tor have discovered the most likely next world. They call it the Twisting Nether. They have seen into it, but they have not revealed what manner of a place it is."
"Why? Is it a bad place? Can they bring Father back?"
"To resurrect the dead is necromancy. It is a forbidden magic, and a dark one."
"Why? What's wrong with wanting Father back?"
Silence again.
"Many laws created by the Kirin Tor depend upon secrets that they have not revealed. Only by joining them can you learn what they and they alone know."
He decided now: when he grew up, he would become a member of the Kirin Tor, he would find out what sort of a place it was like, and if it was a bad place, he would do all he could to bring Father and everyone else who ever died back.
When his mother says " 'I—the Kirin Tor," it can be an ellipsis instead of an em dash. Seems more like she trailed off while talking rather than abruptly cutting herself off. Still a matter of how you prefer it.
Em dashes have either no space or space on both sides—definitely not on just one side.
You can change the "——————" to——because that formats a line across the entire screen on SV. Won't work if you host this elsewhere, but oh well.Code:[hr][/hr]
Watch:
Just make sure to not put any text between the two or everything below will disappear. I think. Been a while since I stumbled onto that.
Missed this one, btw.
This has a bunch of code:Chapter 1: To Walk The Lonely Path
9 years later. The year the portal opens.
Twenty-three. Twenty-four.
The rat in my right hand is as cold as salted ice. The rat is so cold it burns.
Twenty-five. Twenty-six. Twenty-seven.
The cluster of arcane energy at the center of the left-hand rat had disappeared. It had died.
The rat's blood will freeze.
Kel'Thuzad's hand wrote the number down. He scarcely noticed it now, as his thoughts were filled with cold.
The rat will make my hand numb and the rest of me burn with the cold. That rat is the incarnation of cold itself. The rat's presence will cover the room's walls and furniture with frost. The rat will freeze my sweat.
The other rat's mana had also disappeared now. The sand in the hourglass was at fifty-one. Kel'thuzad collapsed into the chair, exhausted, his own mana almost entirely spent. He looked over the numbers. The lowest lifespan difference between the two rats was three seconds (likely because that time he lost concentration and let the colder rat warm up). The idea itself still seemed sound, though. Hopefully, cooling a person's blood would stave off death as well as a rat's, giving time for a healer to arrive. But that was an experiment for another time, after the Kirin Tor had looked over this one. Satisfied with his result, Kel'Thuzad, exhausted but filled with anticipation, reached into his pouch and withdrew a bundle of scrolls.
Most people at the moment were probably discussing the year's newly released Kirin Tor scrolls with their friends, dissecting each Kirin Tor candidate's statement and advising one another in their rankings (sometimes without being asked). He had already collected the scrolls this morning. Now, he placed them onto his mentor's spare desk and began reading.
The year's scrolls were fairly standard: it was largely the same mages as last year running, and those candidates that had lost due to flawed reasoning had not changed their minds on their positions or the arguments by which they had arrived to their conclusions. Most had merely rewritten their previous arguments in a way to hide the flaws still present in them. The new candidates' positions, however, were more interesting…
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Interlude At The Portal:
"No, Gul'Dan. You must not do this. Your demon allies will betray you after you conquer this new world. They will not give you godlike powers, for then you would no longer have a need to serve them."
"I am no fool! You wish to keep this power from me and claim it for yourself, Ner'Zhul, but I will not be denied!"
"Judge my words, and not their speaker. Do you truly think that the demons can be trusted?"
"I have already proven useful to them. I have aided them in exterminating the Exiles on this world, and have given the demons almost total influence over the clans."
"And if you cease to be useful? What then?"
"Then the demons will have already won."
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Hopefully face tentacles aren't involved. Also imagining an army of undead moaning,"We just want to hug youuuu~"